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A Tale of Two Men
ancientgirl286 Reviews | 6.19/10 (286 Ratings, 0 Likes, 129 Favorites )
**COMPLETE** *Not HBP Compliant* Lucius Malfoy has been a Death Eater most of his adult life. A near tragic event involving his son causes him to rethink his beliefs, and he changes his status with the Order, including his friendship with a certain Potions master and a Weasley female. SS-HG LM-GW.
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Just another SS/HG shipper wanting to make the world a Snapey place.
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I love what you're doing with Rodolphus! And I also like the way Lucius is gradually winning over the Weasleys. Hmm, is it time for Lucius to tell Draco about his interest in Ginny? Nice to see Severus thinking about Hermione a lot; bet she jumps his bones when he gets back from being Higgenbottom. Cool chapter!
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Oh thanks! We know so little about him and see so few stories with him in there. I thought it would be a good chance to add a different character in the story, just to give the reader someone else to think about.I do want to have a scene with Draco and Lucius discussing his interest in Ginny. I'd like to do that in the next few chapters.
are we going to see some more hermione and severus lemons soon.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I can't really say when I'll have more lemons for Severus and Hermione. It depends on how the chapters work themselves out. I don't usually set out to write lemons but add them if I see it might work in the story or will add to it.I do though plan on another scene with Severus and Hermione and one with Lucius and Ginny, I just can't say right now when.
Nice story. Very intriguing
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thank you. I'm glad you find it interesting.
Wow, amazing he's showing some sense!
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I thought I'd go a different route with Ron this time, while still making him the butt of a few jokes.Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Loved it!! as you can obviously tell, I'm CRAZY for Slytherin/Gryff love matches . . . . !! I have a slight bias towards older men anyway, especially when it comes to stories featuring intelligent, strong-willed younger heroines. (think Jane Eyre, for example)
*rolls eyes at Ron's words to L.* younger men can be sooo boring and predictable. Immature.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Oh, I've always been attracted to older men. It's true what you say, young guys can be boring and predictable AND immature.I prefer the Slytherin/Gryffindor matches too. I started Lucius/Ginny to my stories because I thought it would just be nice to have a different couple around as well as two other people that Severus and Hermione could do things with.Jane Eyre is one of my favorites, as of course is Sense & Sensibility. Oh that I could have my own Col. Brandon.Thanks for keeping up with this. I'm hoping I can get another chapter or two done this long weekend.
that scene where ron bosses ginny around. to let you know right now that is one of mine reasons because he has a sister that bosses him and her and his mom made him break up with me. am glad he is gone who would want to live in a family where your bossed around all the time. my family and friends are right he was never going to grow up and tell people that he is adult. good chapter. and like i told you in the last review if people bitch about the flashback scene it is there fault for reading it when you gave them a warring.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
It sucks to be seeing someone like that. I know that in Latin cultures, some men are totally whipped by their mothers and sisters. LOL, I say that because I am Latin and I've seen it a lot!I'm just giving plenty of warning, I think that's fair for those who just don't want to read something like that. I don't mind doing it, because I was once asked to read something by an author after bowing out of a story. She emailed me and I politely told her why I didn't want to continue reading and let her know I'd wait for her next story. She asked me to continue reading and it turned out that I wound up reading what I didn't want to read. I felt sabotaged.I don't want to do that to people, its not fair to them.
Response from harrypotterfan2005 (Reviewer)
am not a fan of severus having a detail srex scene with others. but like i told you i would read this story. i cant wait to see what you do with my idea. DOWN WITH THE DOUBLE STANDER.
Response from harrypotterfan2005 (Reviewer)
i read in the last review before mine that you did this chapter work. that was very brave of you i would never try to do something like that at work.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
LOL, I write many of my chapters at work. I work at a very small office, just me and my boss. And My desk is against the back wall of my office, so I face the door. No one that comes into my office can see my computer screen unless they walk around, which of course gives me time to change screens.Besides, my boass is in and out some days.
I guess the reason I was surprised at the Lucius & Snape kiss, and anything else that may envolve those two, is that the categories listed were Malfoy Manor and Potions under Duress. Forbidden Forrest was not mentioned. You might want to include that category if you can.
I still am enjoying the story. It is well written and I am eagerly awaiting an update.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I didn't include that as a category because I don't plan on having it include any large amound of slash.There will really only be one scene very slash scene in the future and then one small mini-slash at the end, so I thought I'd just be better off putting the warning within the chapter and before you actually begin it.I'm very happy that you are enjoying this. I'm enjoying writing it very much. I've been wanting to write something for a while exploring the friendship between them.I hope you continue to enjoy this. But rest assured, I will give warning before anything disturbing and will not be offended if anybody chooses to skip that particular part. I understand that some things just aren't to everyone's liking and that's cool.
Oddness is nice...
And the last line was superb.
Hope you update soon!
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Yes, oddness makes for some interesting happenings.Thank you for your review.
Oh, I really liked how you had Severus and Lucius meet at Hogwarts. I could see something just like that happening.And I really like this quote: “The fates have nothing to do with death – that is the trade of man. And we are all devoted to a madman.” Can't wait till the next chapter!
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Hey, I never saw this review. LOL, I just got it.
I'm glad you liked that quote. I thought it was kind of profound.
Yay, past memories! Always fun, but then again not always... *sighs* Cant wait for upcoming chapters though!
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Yeah, past memories are cool and so very important. I wanted to get that memory so that people could begin to see how their relationship began and what kind of a relationship they have.Thanks for reading. I'll have more soon.
OK, I'm rooting for Ginny to hook up w/Lucius. . . . . (stupid, stupid Seamus--Never send a boy to do a MAN's job!!!) Hoping that Lucius can gradually persuade the Lestranges to turn against their Master. Please update soon!
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Oh yes, Lucius will certainly hook up with her, but they both have a long way to go. I think they need to heal and can probably help one another in that aspect.And as for the Lestranges, well you're on the right track. There will be a few more surprises within the ranks of the DE's.Thanks for your review and for taking the time to leave one.
No!! Not acting odd. Acting like a couple who find themselves in a dangerous situation. Often of making which is a human beings fault...whether magical or muggle.I loved that Lucius walked away from a free sexual incounter, and even had the guts to speak to Bela's husband. Absolutely well written, and perfectly worked out. You have a wonderful mind for stories, plus you are very lucky with your Beta...June. I wish she was mine. Unfortunately, with my problems she would run a mile, in all probability in world record time.Best wishes, I love your stories and look forward to reading more.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
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Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thank you. I thought the same thing. I figured they that Bella and Roldolphus are two people who are noticing that they have dug themselves into a hole and all they can do is survive as best they can.I don't know much about Rodolphus, but I'd like to think of him, at least here, as a man who is smart enough to keep his mouth shut and his eyes open. I have to say, I gave June a hell of a time when she first took me on. I've imporved a lot, thanks to her. I think its just a matter of you finding someone willing to work with you. You'll see that little by little you yourself will begin to realize what is correct and isn't.Thanks as always for your wonderfully well thought out review. It's always such a pleasure for me to read them.I'm hoping to have more soon.
Quite enjoyable. Please update soon.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thank you, I'm glad you liked the chapter.
A very interesting chapter. The keys to the house of Black are very worrying. Strange that Narcissa had not given her key to Draco, when she was so worried about him.I do not remember reading another story where Bella actually takes a pace back and begins to have worrying thoughts on where the war is going. I thought the interaction of her and Rodolphus' was very well done.Best wishes.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I didn't have the key in Draco's possession because during the time of his attack she had just left them, and was working on getting Voldy to think he was a waste of time. After the attack where he almost died Lucius sent him away so she never had a chance to see him again.She knew that he was safe because Lucius had aldready been working on getting Voldy to leave Draco alone, so I figured he really didn't need the key if the focus was being drawn away from him.I wanted to make Bella a little different here. While I believe her to still be loyal to the cause, she is certainly beginning to question the actions being taken to forward it. I just get tired sometimes reading characters in such a stereotypical way. I've written her here as a woman who begins to see things happening all around her and she's smart enough to know that their leader is much to be desired. I'm glad you liked the interaction with Bella and Rodolphus. I wasn't sure if that might be believable since we know so little of their relationship, and people do see her as some crazy bitch.Thank you so much for your well thought out review. I always enjoy reading them and I appreciate that you have always read what I have written.
Response from Donavon (Reviewer)
Once again your writers mind was way above me.Which of course means I keep coming back again to read what you write.You are also right, I still get readers annoyed at my wonderful Lucius, I just think, if Severus could make a mistake, so could Lucius...who had so much more to regret, due to his family.Best wishes, Eileen/
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
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Response from Donavon (Reviewer)
Once again your writers mind was way above me.Which of course means I keep coming back again to read what you write.You are also right, I still get readers annoyed at my wonderful Lucius, I just think, if Severus could make a mistake, so could Lucius...who had so much more to regret, due to his family.Best wishes, Eileen/
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
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Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
You know, I just think some people can't grasp the meaning of fanfiction. If we wrote every character the exact same way JKR did, then what would be the fun of writing and reading fanfiction?
Response from Donavon (Reviewer)
Oh! I love this story. I am so glad you wrote about both Lucius and Severus. Good plot also. Very interesting. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I'm glad you're enjoying this so far. I just had to give Lucius more attention. I'll have more soon.Thanks for taking the time to read and review this.
I enjoyed the chapter, but it was too short! More please as soon as the must cooperates ;)Thank you for writing
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I'm glad you liked the chapter.Yes, it was a bit shorter than the previous ones, but I'm probably going to be indoors all weekend because of the predicted rain, so I'll get writing and hopefully have something nice and long to post next week.Thanks for taking the time to read this and leave me a review.
That was very good. Now I'm worried about that other key. Let's hope Voldemort doesn't decide to use it!And I can't believe you were able to make me feel sympathetic for Bella. That was a very touching scene. I get the feeling that Bella really does care a lot about her younger sister.Can't wait to read the next chapter!
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thanks, I'm glad you liked this one. I did change a small bit and added some suggestions that June made. I wanted for the readers to feel some symphathy for Bella here. I do feel that deep down inside she does care for her sister.I'm thining I'll start the next chapter this weekend. I get the feeling we'll be getting a lot of rain.Hey, aren't you supposed to be writing?
Bravo Ancientgirl!!
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter. Thanks for reviewing!
Wow!! Ancientgirl what a brilliant start to a new story. Read all four chapters this morning, and enjoyed all the twists and turns. Will be watching for an update.I have been through hell recently. My hubby TREATED me to a rewire, new bathroom and new Kitchen. So was of line for the last few weeks. Still house looks much better and now all I have to do is decorate from top to bottom.So I want to thank you for making my first normal breakfast today so good. Best wishes,
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
You lucky girl! A new bathroom AND kitchen! I know you'll have fun decorating, that's the best part.I'm glad you are enjoying this so far. I wanted to make this fic different than the other's I've done so far. Adding more Lucius was part of it. I'll start writing the next chapter in a day or so and hopefully will have it ready to post over the weekend.Enjoy your new rooms!
Oh my. So sad but still strong. I am proud of this Narcissa
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thank you for saying that. I wanted my Narcissa someone the reader could be proud of.
was that Harry walking into the meeting with Draco? Always thought his hair was black, not brown.
Narcissa's sacrifice is just like Lily's. A mother's love.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I thought it was dark brown. I'll have to look that up and see, thanks for pointint it out.I believe Narcissa is like any other mother, willing to do anything to protect her child. We saw that in HBP. I didn't want to write her as a cold hearted person. Thanks for reading.
Very good chapter. I hope for more soon.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thanks! I'll start writing the new chapter soon. Hopefully it will be up within a week.Thanks for reviewing.
Narcissa died proudly and defiantly - and quickly. I think that, if it had to happen, that is a good way, and I like the way you handled it.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I wanted her be just like that in the end. I never even considered having her whimpering and crying. She accepted her fate.Thank you for taking the time to read this.
Bravo! You have made characters traditionally written off as one dimensional, evil-for-the-sake-of-being-evil very interesting. I am enjoying this story and the twists you are laying out along the way. Can't wait for more. Thanks -- JoAnne
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thank you, what a wonderful compliment.I've always thought there had to be more to Lucius and after HBP I felt the same about Narcissa. I wanted to portray Narcissa as more than just a selfish woman who only cared about when her next hair appointment was. Thank you once again.
Wow that was so moving. I'm so glad she's not as heartless as we were lead to believe. This was a really powerful chapter.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Oh thanks! I was trying to get people to think she was knowing that this chapter would reveal the truth. I think Narcissa gets a bad rap. I'm glad you liked this one. I've got the next chapter over to June. if I get it back tonight I'll post it.