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A Tale of Two Men
ancientgirl286 Reviews | 6.19/10 (286 Ratings, 0 Likes, 129 Favorites )
**COMPLETE** *Not HBP Compliant* Lucius Malfoy has been a Death Eater most of his adult life. A near tragic event involving his son causes him to rethink his beliefs, and he changes his status with the Order, including his friendship with a certain Potions master and a Weasley female. SS-HG LM-GW.
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Just another SS/HG shipper wanting to make the world a Snapey place.
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Wow! Thank you for this story. I did not think it possible for the Lestranges to redeem them but you made a very plausible argument. I only hope he calls his wife Isa or Isabel and not Bella ...
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thanks for reading it through. I thought it would be a nice change, to give these horrible people a way to redeem themselves. And in my world, yes, he would have called her Isabel. :)
Your story is amazing. I really like the way you portray the relationship between Lucius and Severus. What amazes me is that this chapter made me wish for sort-of happy end for the Lestranges ...
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Hi! Thanks so much for reading this. I wrote it so long ago, but this is actually my favorite story I wrote. I thought it would be nice to give it a little bit of a twist. I hope you continue to enjoy it!
Methinks these deep waters need further exploration. Perhaps in a PWP oneshot, I should believe. Yes? Yesssssss... Oh and if you want to include Hermione, I assure you I wouldn't be disappointed.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
LOL, I would love to, if it wasn't so hard for me to write sex scenes. Love reading them, but just can never feel like I can do them justice with my own writing.
Response from Ljpjcg (Reviewer)
I think you would do a fantastic job! The scenes you wrote of their intimacy (SS/LM & SS/HG) were very romantic and intense. I just realized I read this story two years ago and reviewed back then. I was happy to read this like it was new!
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Well thank you! It's always encouraging to hear that you did a good job, especially when you weren't sure about it to begin with! I appreciate you reading it again!
a w0ndeful fic!!!
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thank you so very much for reading it all! I appreciate your kind words and reviews!
i laugh at seveus's last cmment t0 hemi0ne.. t00 funny!!
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Severus had some good lines here.
that m0lly's s0n died fighting....
like eading lucius fics
I was spontaneously thinking Severus should add a magical variant of what we call Sechuan pepper (in German. I'm not sure of the English name). Already the Muggle variant is fizzing so oddly on the toungue--surely the magical spice gives a great sensation?!The title of the book is perfect, btw. The grammatical structure is just a bit off in the right direction to make it appear genuinely 500y old ,-)
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thanks so much for reading this. Of all my fictions, this is by far one of my favorites.
I just read your story. It was wonderful. I couldn't stop reading it I lost sleep to finish it. You are very talented.Stacy
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thank you! I'm so happy you enjoyed it. This was my last SS/HG Potter universe fic and it's my favorite story I've written.
I just finished your story. It was so wonderful. I was enthralled the whole way through. You are very talented. Thank you for sharing this story with us.Shelly
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thank you Shelly! This was my favorite story that I've written.
I read this story some time ago, I remember I liked it very much, so here I come again
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I'm glad you liked it so much. Thank you for reading it again.
It was a very good story, thank you for writing. my only comment is on the spanished used here in the last chapter.Mi esposa me va a matar, is the very simlpe way or personal translation done by a novice, but a traditional spain spanish person woul say Mi esposa me matará, which is the future tense of the werb. other then that, it was a wonderful story and i was glad i found it on Wed. thanks for writing, Huanita
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thank you. No not novice, the Spanish is Cuban Spanish, which is not spoken in the same "traditional" way. Im not from Spain and could not find anyone to do a translation were it done by a Spanish person. I used the correct translation based on what I speak and how it would be said in conversation or personally. My entire life I've heard it spoken that way. I guess we don't speak as traditionally as people would in Spain.
Response from huanita (Reviewer)
sorry, it was not a critic of how you speak, it is that i just finished up a degree in spanish where the last class i took was from a spain spanish instuctor. also i find the web site, freetranslation.com works wonders when you question how things need to appear. loved the story and will be reading more of yours soon. thanks for writing,
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I think it was just the word "novice" that threw me. I have spoken Spanish my entire life, and i live in Miami. Hearing and speaking to most latin people in Miami, you very rarely hear anything other than every day speak. Not much proper language going on most of the time.
Response from huanita (Reviewer)
that is what is wrong with most persons who only go to school and not to a country for a time to learn how the gerneral public speak. i spent 2 1/2 months in mexico for a study abroad. and am going again in three weeks, so i can practice my ability to speak and translate. i truely wish that i lived closer to a hispanic community to be able to speak to others on a daily basis. i understand what a spanish teacher thinks is proper and what the public actually speaks. thank you for your understanding and not thinking that i am attacking you. i was just trying to be helpful, nothing more. i love your stories and am looking into continuing through all that you have written. thanks for writing Huanita
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I've had people tell me the same thing before and insist they were right. To a degree, they were, however as I pointed out to you, people don't really talk like that on an every day basis. English isn't spoken in that way either. Hell, I can't remember the last time I heard anyone actually pronounce "comfortable" how it should be, instead I hear "comftrable." There are so many variations of the Spanish language depending on where you go. You can go to any Latin American country and hear different words that mean the same thing. It really is good to spend time in the physical place to get a better feel of how people actually talk. Like I said, I live in Miami and I know people who have lived here for 40 or 50 years and never had to speak a word of English. I don't know where you live, but if you want to live near a hispanic community, your best bet is Miami, parts of California and New York even.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thank you. No not novice, the Spanish is Cuban Spanish, which is not spoken in the same "traditional" way. Im not from Spain and could not find anyone to do a translation were it done by a Spanish person. I used the correct translation based on what I speak and how it would be said in conversation or personally. My entire life I've heard it spoken that way. I guess we don't speak as traditionally as people would in Spain.
Response from huanita (Reviewer)
sorry, it was not a critic of how you speak, it is that i just finished up a degree in spanish where the last class i took was from a spain spanish instuctor. also i find the web site, freetranslation.com works wonders when you question how things need to appear. loved the story and will be reading more of yours soon. thanks for writing,
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I think it was just the word "novice" that threw me. I have spoken Spanish my entire life, and i live in Miami. Hearing and speaking to most latin people in Miami, you very rarely hear anything other than every day speak. Not much proper language going on most of the time.
Response from huanita (Reviewer)
that is what is wrong with most persons who only go to school and not to a country for a time to learn how the gerneral public speak. i spent 2 1/2 months in mexico for a study abroad. and am going again in three weeks, so i can practice my ability to speak and translate. i truely wish that i lived closer to a hispanic community to be able to speak to others on a daily basis. i understand what a spanish teacher thinks is proper and what the public actually speaks. thank you for your understanding and not thinking that i am attacking you. i was just trying to be helpful, nothing more. i love your stories and am looking into continuing through all that you have written. thanks for writing Huanita
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I've had people tell me the same thing before and insist they were right. To a degree, they were, however as I pointed out to you, people don't really talk like that on an every day basis. English isn't spoken in that way either. Hell, I can't remember the last time I heard anyone actually pronounce "comfortable" how it should be, instead I hear "comftrable." There are so many variations of the Spanish language depending on where you go. You can go to any Latin American country and hear different words that mean the same thing. It really is good to spend time in the physical place to get a better feel of how people actually talk. Like I said, I live in Miami and I know people who have lived here for 40 or 50 years and never had to speak a word of English. I don't know where you live, but if you want to live near a hispanic community, your best bet is Miami, parts of California and New York even.
I really enjoyed this story. I don't think I've ever seen Rodolphus or Bellatrix LeStrange written in this way.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I'm glad you enjoyed it. I wanted to give some of the Death Eaters a different take. I thought it would be interesting to make them the heroes.
*gasp* Not good... *hurries onto next chapter*Great beginning!
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Luckily, you won't have to wait for chapters, since this is all finished. I hope you enjoy it.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Luckily, you won't have to wait for chapters, since this is all finished. I hope you enjoy it.
I enjoyed it so much it kept me up until 3:00am! :-) Thank you for sharing your talent with all of us. Keep up the good work!
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thank you for taking the time to read it. I appreicate that you read it all the way through.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thank you for taking the time to read it. I appreicate that you read it all the way through.
Well thats it everything tied up nicely. Thank you for an excellent read.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I hate leaving things in the air or leaving things for the reader to make up their own ending.
I thank you for taking the time to read this story and leaving me such lovely reviews.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I hate leaving things in the air or leaving things for the reader to make up their own ending.
I thank you for taking the time to read this story and leaving me such lovely reviews.
its great that most everything is a happy ending
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I've always thought all of my stories should have happy endings. Why not right?
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I've always thought all of my stories should have happy endings. Why not right?
that was so cool you write wonderfully very gifted
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thank you for the wonderful compliment. I really appreciate it!
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thank you for the wonderful compliment. I really appreciate it!
wow what an action packed chapter it was really good
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Yeah, there had to be a lot in this chapter.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Yeah, there had to be a lot in this chapter.
Oh wow what drama. And powerful. The emotions. Just wow.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thank you for your continueing interest in this story. I'm glad you have enjoyed it so far.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
Thank you for your continueing interest in this story. I'm glad you have enjoyed it so far.
Yay, I've reached the end. The last couple of chapters were a little too sweet in places, but it is wonderful to imagine a happy ending for everyone and all of the next generation of the Wizarding world. You did a neat job making Rudolphus a sympathetic character.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I did know it would get a bit sappy in a few places, but if I wanted a happy ending for everyone it was bound to happen.
I'm very pleased with what I eventually did with Rodolphus. I wanted to give the usual baddies a different twist.
Thanks for taking time out of your weekend to read this. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I'm still enjoying this story. I like the way you temper the drama with the funny stuff like Wizardopoly with poor Lucius always ending up in Azkaban.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
I'm glad you're still liking it. I usually like to add a little bit of humor in dramatic stories. After all, life isn't always so serious.
This is an interesting story so far. I was thinking of skipping it because of the slash warning, but decided to give it a try. Although the writing is stilted in places such as the beginning of this chapter, there are some beautiful moments such as the one between Severus and Hermione. The Latin password is profoundly appropriate. I'm looking forward to clicking the "next" button.
Response from ancientgirl (Author of A Tale of Two Men)
It isn't completely slash. It's basically a warning of a miniscule bit referring to Severus and Lucius' past.
Thanks for giving it a chance.
Response from WriterMerrin (Reviewer)
I think I can handle slash-lite ;) Now I just need time to keep reading. Weekends are soo busy.