Traitor
averygoodun307 Reviews | 7.44/10 (307 Ratings, 0 Likes, 156 Favorites )
The need to survive is ingrained within the human psyche, but where does self-preservation end and self-destruction begin? Hermione is captured by Death Eaters and is held hostage by Snape and Pettigrew, but she comes up with a plan to escape. Not a romance.
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Right. I would like to state, for the record, that I WILL finish "She Married Her Choice". I will. Assuming I am in control of my own destiny and accomplishments, that is. ;-)
Unfortunately, real life (mainly an attention craving three-year-old) and inspiration have been keeping me from creative endeavors for a while now. I do foresee a time when that shall pass, but until then, I ask for your patience.
Thank you!
Reviews for Traitor
Well done chapter. I haven't read a story where Peter is looked at in a realistic and (slightly) good light. Anyway though, are we going to get any Snape action soon? Keep the updates coming! ;)
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Thank you! I got inspiration for how to write Peter (and Wormtail) from one of my friend's stories over on Fiction Alley. Her piece is called, "Wormtail." It's very good. (She's very modest, soif you read it, let her know what you think! It'll make her happy. :-)
http://www.fictionalley.org/authors/ashfae/wormtail01a.html
Snape comes back next chapter (tomorrow), and, well, the next few chapters are Snape intensive, so if that's what you mean by 'Snape action,' then yes.
Hmmmm... I am interested to see what will happen next! GG
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Next up, Snape comes back. Again. ;-) Thanks!
Uh, oh...why does Snape's comment leave me with a deep sense of foreboding? Hermione is, after all, a Muggleborn -- is Voldemort planning to tortture her himself? Or does he perhaps consider her imprisonment with Snape and Wormtail to be torture enough in itself??
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Because it's full of foreshadowing? ;-) Voldie expects much from his servants, and I think he thinks that Snape and Wormtail are fully capable of torturing a simple muggle-born girl. We can hope.
Hmmmmmmm...ver-r-r-r-y interesting. For someone who makes such a show of being unmoved, it seems that what's going on underneath is a rather different thing. I feel sorry for Hermione -- especially since I unfortunately know a bit of what it's like to feel a strong physical attraction for someone who's rather cold and uncaring (although fortunately nowhere near as bad as Severus). Nevertheless, it does seem significant that Snape is warding his bedroom door at night all of a sudden -- and that the question has arisen concerning whether sleeping in the nude is habitual for him or a recent development...
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Snape is a complex character. He's not completely evil, but he sure as hell isn't nice either. And Hermione... poor Hermione's mental health is falling by the wayside.
Why does Snape ward her in every night? Is it to keep her from Wormtail or the other way around? Or is it something else entirely? Maybe having something to do with him sleeping in the nude, perhaps? All these questions that I can't answer (yet).
Still going strong. I wonder what's in store next? When will we know what Harry did to annoy the Dark Lord. God this story is great!
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Thank you! You'll find out soon. And... we won't. That's one of those things that will be left for you to imagine. Sorry, but it just doesn't fit into the style of the story.
OK, I've become confused. Why isn't Hermione trying to get away? She went through all this disgusting stuff with Peter to get away! Right now he wants to sleep, he's left his wand on the table... And she wants to play sex games with the Rat. Why not let him go to sleep, take his wand and break out of there??
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
She kinda still needs the password to escape. I suppose she could try to cast Imperius on Peter, but never having done that spell before... it might be kind of risky. If she failed, her game is up, along with her life, most likely.
She wants to comfort the Rat. She wants to prove her (supposed?) affection. After all, that's how he tries to comfort her. She needs his love to get out.
Cheers!
Damn, your Snape is even more stoic than mine! Either that or castrated...who knows what Voldy's done to keep him in line, eh?Hogsmeade oysters, anyone?
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Thanks! And risk magical salmonella? I think I'll pass, thanks. ;-)
Sometimes, ignorance is bliss, and Hermione would need some right now.Does SEverus really have no clue about the origin of Hermione's distress?
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Bliss or ignorance? ;-) I think he has a better idea of what's wrong than Hermione does. It's how deep her distress is that he doesn't know.
HAHA! it WILL be a romance after all! <3 yay! :)
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Erm............ I suppose you could say so... if you really, really want to. LOL.
Well, we are heading deeper in Stokholmes territory. I think it's kind of sad how she is questioning herself, but that is the nature of the progression of this illness. You put alot of hard work into this story. Thankyou.
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
That we are. While doing research for this story, I came across an article about Stockholm Syndrome and how it can be applied to abusive relationships, and went, 'Oh, wow. That makes so much sense!' It seems obvious, of course, but I hadn't quite thought of it that way. Not that it's terribly relevent to this story, either... except, of course, to show just how f****d up this situation is.
Thank you!
Never underestimate how badly a man/men can f*ck up a woman's psyche... This is one of those stories... the kind that displays the truth in stark relief... without the benefit of rose colored glasses. You have done an incredible job thus far on this story, and though it has been very hard to read, at times, it's still a great story!! GG
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Oh, I think women can f**k up a man's psyche pretty badly as well. I think men actually get the raw end of the deal because while women get treated for the damage with care and sympathy (how dare that man corrupt the poor defenseless woman), men often seem to get the attitude that they're wimps for 'letting' a woman mess with them. I'm generalizing very broadly, of course, but...
Take Wormtail. How badly would he be hurt if/when he finds out Hermione is just using him, that he's been hoodwinked by a mere girl? He'd be (has been) labelled pathetic, which would only be compounded if/when he lashed out at her violently. Granted he's not the prisoner, right? And their positions of power are so very different... right?
Thank you!
Response from Gardengrrl13 (Reviewer)
There's no doubt in my mind that women can be just as bad (if not worse sometimes) than men at playing mental games... I mean, if you can't throw a good right hook, what else is there? (oh, and a kick to the groin isn't always as effective as you'd want it to be... BTW)But in this instance, Hermione had to assert her power over Wormy as a way to survive and possibly escape this horrendous situation. I'm sorry if I don't feel even remotely sorry for Peter, I just can't. So in this instance, Hermione has my pity, and I think the men are doing the f*cking up, in more ways than one, and therefore, they shall receive the brunt of my feminazi male hate. (which actually doesn't manifest often, but can be called upon in a time of great duress.) Still, I think this is one of the most kick ass, realisting Death Eater Capture stories out there!! You Rock!!
GG
Yo, Snape--ever consider that she might be knocked up? Poor Herms. Gone swimming with the sharks. I'm glad she doesn't like the feel of being manipulative, but I hope she doesn't let guilt or sentimentality keep her from doing what she needs to do. These two jerks certainly wouldn't...
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Hehehe. She might be, but don't you think he would have classified morning sickness as more of a hindrance than not, and done something to prevent it?
And what does she need to do?
Response from Fawkes_07 (Reviewer)
IMHO, she needs to get the H-E-double toothpick out of there at first opportunity and talk, talk, talk about the past month until she recovers from being tortured. If that means getting Peter killed, or Snape, or both of them, so be it. She can resolve the guilt later.
Thanks for an update! I needed it. Oh but I can't wait to see what Hermoine uses Wormtail for exactly. And I can't wait to find out what Snape does with it all!
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
We're getting close to the end of the story, so you'll find out soon. Thanks!
It takes a truly great writer to install strong emotions in a reader. You are truly great.
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Thank you! *blushes*
I've heard a theory that young women who have sex regularly with a specific man are likely to begin having feelings of affection for that man even if they didn't in the beginning and even if they don't particularly want to have feelings for him because of a hormone called oxytocin. For Hermione's sake, I hope that's not happening to her -- Wormtail doesn't deserve her sympathy. He's nothing more than a duplicitous, back-stabbing, murderous, loathsome, toadying little sleazeball. Can you please get Hermione out of their clutches soon? You do have a way planned for her to escape, I trust? If she doesn't find a way to get out sometime soon, I fear she may be too far gone to ever recover completely or even get the sympathy she deserves from her friends once she does manage to get away.
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
I suspect that young women aren't the only ones affected by that hormone, or hormones similar to it. There are nine chapters in this last part, so it will be wrapping up one way or another quite soon.
Thanks!
Uh, oh! A suprise inspection. Now that could lend to some interesting observations. Is Snape going to catch on to her . . . Still yuck with her & Pettigrew!
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Yes, it could, couldn't it? Thanks!
I have never read a story quite like this one. I love waking up and seeing updates so frequently on a story I'm interested in. Thanks for that. I feel like you have exposed Hermione's biggest weakness with this chapter, her conscience and that very well could be the traitor to her. Kinda hard not to feel yuck after reading the Wormtail/Hermione scene. And NO ! I could nver think of him as Peter ! You are doing a wonderful job on this. 
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Hermione's conscience is one of the cornerstones of who she is as a person, so yes, it is one of her weaknesses, but also one of her strengths. I certainly don't mind if you can't see him as Peter, but I hope you can see why Hermione does. Thanks!
Ewwwwwww. Must remind self not to read these updates before breakfast. Hermione's inner steel is pretty impressive even as she's questioning what she plans to do. And Snape thinks she's depressed? I keep wondering who the "traitor" in the story's title is going to turn out to be.
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Mm. Next two chapters aren't so bad, so they might be breakfast compatible. ;-) Snape thinks something is wrong, anyway. Thank you! (Sorry, but I can't answer that last question.)
That's really sad. I actually feel bad for Wormtail. Is he going to turn out nice after all? Hermione doesn't seem like she would be able to go through with her plans if she felt bad for him. Oh well... Great chapter anyway. Update soon!
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
It is sad, I think. We'll find out whether Hermione's conscience gets the better of her or not quite soon. Thanks! I will.
Oh, you are such a tease! I will not berate you for the short chapter, instead I'll hope for a quick update!
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Next chapter is also quite short, so I'll try to upload the one after that the same day. Will that work?
Response from sinbad (Reviewer)
Lol of course it will. This story is fantastic!
OMG! She isn't going to go all soft and squishy about Peter now is she? Going to get a conscience?
Oooh, a surprise inspection! That sounds promising. Stir up some action for sure.
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
That conscience is a big part of who Hermione is... She's always had it, it's just been subverted until now.
;-)
Oh God Snape is keeping notes of his observations. I feel sick.
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Mwahaha. Yeah.
I'm lying in bed, sick of reading the same old mushy stuff while I have Cramps From Hades. What grabs my attention? This wonderful jewel of a story. Even through the darkness and the pain, it tells a very real, touching story. Thank you so much. Write some more soon!
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Thank you! I hope this has distracted you a bit!
Oooh, do I detect just a teeny hint of jealousy? Sounds like someone's been deluding himself about what's been going on under his very own roof lately. Can't wait for the next chapter, as always.
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Possibly. Maybe, maybe not. He could have suspected, just finally got confirmation. Thank you!
I'm glad the last sentence is back to Snape's inner dialogue. You have written a Snape that is complex and utterly believable in his cruelty, both inside and out. He plays her insecurities perfectly. I think it ironic that Hermione is upset because Snape seems indifferent, yet she would be horrified to know what he is really thinking.
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Thank you! Yes, it is rather ironic, isn't it? Perhaps a bit of bad luck, as well.