Part III, chapter 1
Chapter 20 of 28
averygoodunThe need to survive is ingrained within the human psyche, but where does self-preservation end and self-destruction begin? Hermione is captured by Death Eaters and is held hostage by Snape and Pettigrew, but she comes up with a plan to escape. Not a romance.
ReviewedAN: Thank you, Southern!
As she gradually woke up, she became aware that something was pressing down on her chest and her hips. It was much heavier than Crookshanks and not as furry. Trying to take a deep breath, she opened her eyes and was momentarily disoriented until she remembered the events of the night before.
Lifting her head, she found she was pinned down by Wormtail's arm and leg. Looking over to see if Wormtail could be prodded to roll over, she found her eye drawn to a tall, black column standing in the doorway.
Snape was leaning against the doorframe, watching her. His face was completely impassive, which made her flush with embarrassment. When he raised an eyebrow in response, she blushed even harder.
He raised his wand and sent a Stinging Hex at Wormtail, forcing him awake with a squeak.
“S-Severus! W-w-what brings you by?”
Snape smirked nastily. “I just came by to see if the girl was still here, but I see you managed to get up the wherewithal to keep her occupied.” Hermione cringed. “I have a potion to make. Do you expect a summons this morning, or should I leave you to...” he paused and curled his lip up nastily, “occupy the girl?”
“I don't expect the Master will need me till this afternoon as planned, but if you need her—”
Snape cut him off with a raised hand and a sneer. “Wormtail, I have never even wanted the girl, let alone needed her.”
And then he left. Hermione didn't know why she felt so completely embarrassed or humiliated, but angry tears were sliding down her face. She turned away from Wormtail and the door, curling up on herself. She knew what she was doing was dirty and wrong, and she hadn't expected Snape to respond so... indifferently. She had thought he would be upset.
She felt Wormtail place his hand on her shoulder. “Hey, what's the matter? At least now we know he doesn't care. We don't have to sneak around anymore.”
She shook her head, trying not cry. “He thinks you're forcing me,” she said thickly.
She didn't care that Snape was indifferent. She didn't.
The hand rubbed her shoulder soothingly. “It's better that way, Hermione,” he said, and she turned to look at him in horror. He smiled at her expression.
“If he knew you were here by choice, then he would take it away from you. That's how he is.”
Comprehension was her outward expression, but inside his words just twisted the knife.
Snape had been almost kind to her the last couple of weeks. Although he still watched her shower every morning, he let her relieve herself in quasi-private. He hadn't been too deliberately cruel to her and he'd even let her eat with them one night instead of feeding her their deliberately meager leftovers.
She thought he... what, had started to care for her? She nearly laughed at herself, even as despair threatened to choke her. She closed her eyes to hide her inner torment from Wormtail. She couldn't let him know how much Snape's words and actions affected her.
“Hey, don't cry. It'll be okay. Maybe he'll leave you alone now. Wouldn't that be good?”
She nodded her head, wondering why she was wanting Snape's attention anyway. Was she going mad, or had she turned into a masochist? Why else would she be developing such feelings for Snape?
She was so distracted by her thoughts that she barely noticed Wormtail trailing kisses over her shoulder until he reached her jaw and licked her. Caught unawares, she shuddered with revulsion, but fortunately, he had turned his attention to her earlobe and didn't notice her expression. He simply felt her shudder and mistook it for pleasure.
He shifted himself on top of her and looked down at her with a mix of lust and fondness.
“Let me make you feel better,” he said and then put his attention elsewhere.
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So he is fucking her then. I imagine he has the Dark Lord's blessing in this matter as well. Potter could hardly be more annoyed if I was fucking the girl.
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this is such a brave and daring story! i had read it before but i couldn't remember where it was posted so i searched through various sites and finally got lucky. this time i will add it to favourites without delay. thanks again for that jewell!
This was GRIPPING.
Wow! I am utterly and deeply moved. It took me quite a while to figure out what you were aiming at and that was a pleasant surprise in itself. There are not many stories out, where the end is not obvious from the beginning.I also liked to have Wormtail described as a human being and actually getting more than a few crucios out of his actions.Thank you for the wonderful story!
Holy mother of gods. That was just the best story I have read in a long time. I have stayed up till 2am reading this because I could NOT put it down... Your torture of her. The food. The sadistic/masochist tones... my god. Just brilliant. BRILLIANT.I have never read a story with wormtail in this character. I was almost sympathitic toward him.And when Snape finally had her! Why was that sOOOO hot to me? Shell
Wow. Brilliant I would rate this much more than 5...
Like a punch in the guts. Wow. I am breathless, horrified, amazed, marveled, disgusted, touched, numb, exhilarated. Thank you for believing in yourself and sharing your story with us!
How hard for Hermione, to feel that she is using Wormtail. You really depicted that so well. Sigh.
*melted to a puddle on the floor"*GASP!*Oh, Severus, you naughty boy!
Catching up with the story after a loooooong time (RL sucks!). Nice "intermission' chapter!
I don't know if I like thinking of Hermione being genuinely upset about Wormtail or Snape's letter acting like he tried to save Wormtail for her.... I jsut don't know what to think of it all... but regardless, the writing was good :)
It really is quite squicky to think of Peter and Hermione. I keep reminding myself that it is to ensure her escape but she seems to actually have concern for Peter at this point. Not caring but concern. And the fact that Snape doesn't seem to care is icky as well. Peter is so gross I'm surprised Snape didn't rip her off of him jsut out of disgust LOL
ugh... wormtail is soooo creepy. And knowing that HErmione is doing him often is just sickening. I hope she either gains what she's after or comes to her senses and ... I don't even know... jsut stops sleeping with Wormtail LOL
I was recced this... I like dark fics.. but that's a brutal way to start out. Well written and I can't say I'm looking forward to what's to come but I'm... interested??
I ended up reading this whole story in one piece, I just couldn't stop reading! :P I just love the way you writes Snape, he is completely believable in this story and so is the other characters. I think you should be very proud of this story, it was a joy reading it (except from the icky wormtail/hermione parts)!
Wow. I thought I wouldn't be able to go past the squicky parts, but... you got me reading for one hour non-stop. Excellent writing.
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I'm wondering if she's pregnant . . .
Wonderful story. I read it in about two hours. Just gobbled it up, really. I especially loved your portrayal of Pettigrew, and the way you ended the whole piece.
Long story short: this is amazing. Short story long: anything by Dickens.
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Thank you!
This was a wonderful story - but I might be just dim here when I ask you this question, but my Snape-fangirl-love wants to know who sent the letter? Did Snape truly defect from the Order, or was he happy that she escaped, wanting her to get away all along? Sorry if my Snape-love kept me blinded from any obvious hints you might have left in the story...
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Thank you. Snape sent the letter. For answers to the rest, I suggest you read "Closure." It's a little less vague. ;-)
It was the only way what? He wanted her to use Wormtail to escape?
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
That is the question. What was the only way? How? Why? And, most of all, who?
Response from KarenDetroit (Reviewer)
ARRRGGG!Don't you repect the Geneva Convetions on Torture????
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
*giggle* Is there such a thing in fiction?
That said, there will be a companion piece called, very appropriately, "Closure" coming up pretty soon. A lot of questions will be answered in there (though it's still vague-ish on that one).
Yowza. The sex with Peter/Wormtail was just so icky. And you got the ick factor just right - along with the reality that it wasn't, of all the things Hermione had to endure, really so awful in the grand scheme of things. And then when Snape watched -well, that was wrong and right and actually quite hot. And through it all you never lost the complexity of the emotions involved, the grey-ness of all the protagonists. Thanks so much for a thought-provoking and entertaining read.
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Thank you!!! I... Thank you.
Very well written story the whole way through. I really enjoyed it and was thankfull for the quick updates. The way you ended it was very exciting. Well done job all the way around.
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Thank you!
Hi Avery. Now that I have completed Shades (at least on SH and FF), I finally got the courage to read this story from start to finish. Actually, I started reading when you first began posting chapters, but I only got to chapter 5 before I stopped. To be honest, I found it extremely difficult reading. The words painful and profoundly distrubing come to mind. But I suppose that was the effect you were looking for. Don't get me wrong--your writing itself is excellent. Very descriptive, good characterization and not too wordy (unlike me...). I also applaud your emphasis on a strong theme as I think too many fanfiction writers just want to write something fluffy that will be 'popular'. It takes courage to do something like this. What I found most amazing is that my story could inspire such a piece. It is ironic that your Hermione essentilly makes the polar opposite choice from mine. She compromises nearly all her morals and principles in order to survive, making her a traitor not to Harry or the Light, but to herself. It was a weighty piece of work. Good job.Cheers and best wishes,
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Hey. Well, thank you for reading it! You're right, I was attempting to write something very painful and disturbing. I've read Stockholm Syndrome stories that really, really romanticize the situation and don't take into account that it is a disorder; the victim is ILL, and it is not a healthy, romantic situation.
What I wanted to explore as much as that, though, is that survival really can outweigh morals when it comes right down to it, and Hermione has not proven herself to be as strong as Harry is under pressure. Hermione will have a hard time of it because she knows she did betray herself, even if the trip to the betrayal was almost invisible.
Thank you both for the inspiration (amazing story, btw!), and for your thoughts!