Part II, chapter 4
Chapter 17 of 28
averygoodunThe need to survive is ingrained within the human psyche, but where does self-preservation end and self-destruction begin? Hermione is captured by Death Eaters and is held hostage by Snape and Pettigrew, but she comes up with a plan to escape. Not a romance.
ReviewedAN: Thanks as always to Southern!
“Hermione?”
She hastily stood up and wiped her eyes before turning around to smile shakily at Wormtail.
“Peter?” she tried to joke, but his look of genuine concern made her think of the boys, and her facade shattered into tears.
She slumped against the washtub and slowly sank to the floor, only to be stopped by his arms. She instinctively turned to his shoulder, clutching at his robes as she tucked her chin down and sobbed. She cried until there weren't any tears left and took shuddering breaths as Peter rocked her back and forth soothingly.
Hermione marveled that Peter was being so caring and compassionate. He hadn't ever seemed to be the sort to care about anyone other than himself, but his holding her while she vented all her rage and frustration and humiliation seemed quite decent.
And then she realized his hand was starting to roam.
Not even remotely ready to go there yet, she pulled away as far as his embrace would allow and gave him a smile of gratitude.
“Thank you, Peter.”
He smiled back at her, although his small eyes were somehow beadier than usual. When he pulled her toward him, she knew she'd underestimated his lust.
She didn't try to resist, but she did evade. She let herself be pulled in, but when his face was near hers, she shifted to the side and hugged him.
“You've been so kind to me, Peter,” she said, hoping that praise might deter him for a little while.
She'd misjudged, however. He pulled back and leaned in for a kiss, moving fast enough that she couldn't avoid him again. His wet mouth found hers, and he proceeded to move his lips against hers in a sloppy imitation of a kiss.
She waited until she had schooled her face into something other than disgust before pulling away slowly.
“Peter, I... This... I—” She had no problem sounding flustered, but before she could find the right words, he put his pudgy finger to her lips and shushed her.
“I'll show you how good it can be.”
She smiled at him, but shook her head. “I'm not ready for this... yet.”
“You're just scared. I won't hurt you. I want to make you feel good.”
Her stomach clenched in fear and disgust, but he seemed to mistake her expression for insecure reluctance as he drew her back toward him for another wet kiss before lowering her to the floor.
“Don't be afraid, Hermione,” he said, stroking her arm with one finger and giving her what was meant to be a reassuring smile, though it just looked lecherous to her. He leaned forward to kiss her again, shifting his weight to allow his real hand to fondle her breasts.
Hermione quickly weighed her options. It was possible that fucking him now would sate him, and she wouldn't be able to move forward with her plan. The thought of allowing him to touch her like this for no purpose was almost enough to make her gag. However, there was the possibility that he did feel the beginnings of fondness for her and rebuffing him now would kill any chance she had. It was also very possible that rebuffing him now would lead to him taking her forcibly.
Her options weighed, she forced herself to relax into his kiss. It was all the encouragement he needed. His hand worked its way down her side until he'd reached her hip, and then he gripped her robe. He continued to kiss her distractedly, but he focused most of his attention on pulling her robes up.
After a minute of fumbling, he finally disengaged his mouth from hers and used both his hands to pull her robe up over her hips. He didn't seem disconcerted in the least to find her knickerless as his real hand went to play clumsily with her crotch while raising his own robes up with his other hand.
She held her breath as he positioned himself between her legs and then lowered his weight onto her, coming in for another kiss. He was too short, though, to reach her mouth from where he was, so he grabbed her hips with both hands and shoved himself in and up her body. She bit her cheek to keep herself from crying out.
The only good thing about the coupling, in Hermione's opinion, was that it was over very quickly. As soon as he was inside her, he let out a whimper and started thrusting rapidly. It was only seconds before he tensed up and let out a strangled yell, and then collapsed onto her.
She struggled for breath until he raised himself up onto his elbows and looked at her almost fondly. He kissed her forcefully and enthusiastically before raising himself off of her completely, muttering, “That's a good girl,” as he looked her over and tucked himself back in.
The most difficult thing Hermione ever had to do was to force herself to smile up at him in false gratitude.
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Maybe I shouldn't have gone so quickly; I don't want to remind her of Snape. Still, she didn't seem to mind.
And, oh! She feels even better than I thought she would! Next time, I'll do things more proper like. I want to feel her bare beneath me.
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this is such a brave and daring story! i had read it before but i couldn't remember where it was posted so i searched through various sites and finally got lucky. this time i will add it to favourites without delay. thanks again for that jewell!
This was GRIPPING.
Wow! I am utterly and deeply moved. It took me quite a while to figure out what you were aiming at and that was a pleasant surprise in itself. There are not many stories out, where the end is not obvious from the beginning.I also liked to have Wormtail described as a human being and actually getting more than a few crucios out of his actions.Thank you for the wonderful story!
Holy mother of gods. That was just the best story I have read in a long time. I have stayed up till 2am reading this because I could NOT put it down... Your torture of her. The food. The sadistic/masochist tones... my god. Just brilliant. BRILLIANT.I have never read a story with wormtail in this character. I was almost sympathitic toward him.And when Snape finally had her! Why was that sOOOO hot to me? Shell
Wow. Brilliant I would rate this much more than 5...
Like a punch in the guts. Wow. I am breathless, horrified, amazed, marveled, disgusted, touched, numb, exhilarated. Thank you for believing in yourself and sharing your story with us!
How hard for Hermione, to feel that she is using Wormtail. You really depicted that so well. Sigh.
*melted to a puddle on the floor"*GASP!*Oh, Severus, you naughty boy!
Catching up with the story after a loooooong time (RL sucks!). Nice "intermission' chapter!
I don't know if I like thinking of Hermione being genuinely upset about Wormtail or Snape's letter acting like he tried to save Wormtail for her.... I jsut don't know what to think of it all... but regardless, the writing was good :)
It really is quite squicky to think of Peter and Hermione. I keep reminding myself that it is to ensure her escape but she seems to actually have concern for Peter at this point. Not caring but concern. And the fact that Snape doesn't seem to care is icky as well. Peter is so gross I'm surprised Snape didn't rip her off of him jsut out of disgust LOL
ugh... wormtail is soooo creepy. And knowing that HErmione is doing him often is just sickening. I hope she either gains what she's after or comes to her senses and ... I don't even know... jsut stops sleeping with Wormtail LOL
I was recced this... I like dark fics.. but that's a brutal way to start out. Well written and I can't say I'm looking forward to what's to come but I'm... interested??
I ended up reading this whole story in one piece, I just couldn't stop reading! :P I just love the way you writes Snape, he is completely believable in this story and so is the other characters. I think you should be very proud of this story, it was a joy reading it (except from the icky wormtail/hermione parts)!
Wow. I thought I wouldn't be able to go past the squicky parts, but... you got me reading for one hour non-stop. Excellent writing.
:x
I'm wondering if she's pregnant . . .
Wonderful story. I read it in about two hours. Just gobbled it up, really. I especially loved your portrayal of Pettigrew, and the way you ended the whole piece.
Long story short: this is amazing. Short story long: anything by Dickens.
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Thank you!
This was a wonderful story - but I might be just dim here when I ask you this question, but my Snape-fangirl-love wants to know who sent the letter? Did Snape truly defect from the Order, or was he happy that she escaped, wanting her to get away all along? Sorry if my Snape-love kept me blinded from any obvious hints you might have left in the story...
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Thank you. Snape sent the letter. For answers to the rest, I suggest you read "Closure." It's a little less vague. ;-)
It was the only way what? He wanted her to use Wormtail to escape?
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
That is the question. What was the only way? How? Why? And, most of all, who?
Response from KarenDetroit (Reviewer)
ARRRGGG!Don't you repect the Geneva Convetions on Torture????
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
*giggle* Is there such a thing in fiction?
That said, there will be a companion piece called, very appropriately, "Closure" coming up pretty soon. A lot of questions will be answered in there (though it's still vague-ish on that one).
Yowza. The sex with Peter/Wormtail was just so icky. And you got the ick factor just right - along with the reality that it wasn't, of all the things Hermione had to endure, really so awful in the grand scheme of things. And then when Snape watched -well, that was wrong and right and actually quite hot. And through it all you never lost the complexity of the emotions involved, the grey-ness of all the protagonists. Thanks so much for a thought-provoking and entertaining read.
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Thank you!!! I... Thank you.
Very well written story the whole way through. I really enjoyed it and was thankfull for the quick updates. The way you ended it was very exciting. Well done job all the way around.
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Thank you!
Hi Avery. Now that I have completed Shades (at least on SH and FF), I finally got the courage to read this story from start to finish. Actually, I started reading when you first began posting chapters, but I only got to chapter 5 before I stopped. To be honest, I found it extremely difficult reading. The words painful and profoundly distrubing come to mind. But I suppose that was the effect you were looking for. Don't get me wrong--your writing itself is excellent. Very descriptive, good characterization and not too wordy (unlike me...). I also applaud your emphasis on a strong theme as I think too many fanfiction writers just want to write something fluffy that will be 'popular'. It takes courage to do something like this. What I found most amazing is that my story could inspire such a piece. It is ironic that your Hermione essentilly makes the polar opposite choice from mine. She compromises nearly all her morals and principles in order to survive, making her a traitor not to Harry or the Light, but to herself. It was a weighty piece of work. Good job.Cheers and best wishes,
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Hey. Well, thank you for reading it! You're right, I was attempting to write something very painful and disturbing. I've read Stockholm Syndrome stories that really, really romanticize the situation and don't take into account that it is a disorder; the victim is ILL, and it is not a healthy, romantic situation.
What I wanted to explore as much as that, though, is that survival really can outweigh morals when it comes right down to it, and Hermione has not proven herself to be as strong as Harry is under pressure. Hermione will have a hard time of it because she knows she did betray herself, even if the trip to the betrayal was almost invisible.
Thank you both for the inspiration (amazing story, btw!), and for your thoughts!