Part III, chapter 5
Chapter 24 of 28
averygoodunThe need to survive is ingrained within the human psyche, but where does self-preservation end and self-destruction begin? Hermione is captured by Death Eaters and is held hostage by Snape and Pettigrew, but she comes up with a plan to escape. Not a romance.
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Hermione woke up gradually, not wanting to let go of her dream – no matter how wrong it was. Snape was nuzzling her neck and playing with her breasts, and she didn't want him to stop.
She moaned quietly, and he started kissing her neck, mumbling to her how beautiful she was, how young, how nice, how much he loved her.
That woke her up.
The kissing continued, however, and she found Peter fondling her and leaving a wet trail up her neck. It was almost enough to turn her off, but the dream was still fresh in her mind, and her body was thrumming with the energy.
Deciding she wanted something out of the encounter, she took over. Letting him know she was awake, she kissed him forcefully, nudging him over onto his back while she did so. He rolled over very happily, looking more than pleased when she straddled him.
She smiled right back before closing her eyes and started to tease him. She struggled for a few moments to get herself into an acceptable fantasy before giving up and imagining it was Snape she was straddling, then mounting. She felt him shudder beneath her and felt powerful, knowing she could bring him to his knees at this moment. He wasn't indifferent any more, and his twitching hips proved he was less than impassive. He was hers for the taking.
“Oh, God, that feels so good, Hermione!”
And just like that, her fantasy died. She looked down at the man below her, not sure if she was jealous or disgusted by his obvious enjoyment. His face was open, and his eyes were closed as he relaxed into ecstasy. Disheartened, she looked up only to find herself looking at the indifferent visage of Severus Snape.
He was leaning against the doorframe, his arms and legs crossed casually with his face devoid of any emotion. He might have been staring at a wall for all the expressiveness he was showing. But his eyes were on her.
Excitement surged through her, and she felt the thrum return. She changed her position just slightly so as to give Snape a better view and then rocked her hips. Her eyes took in Snape's form and face; she knew it was wrong, but she could feel her nerves awakening as she watched his cold, dispassionate face.
She watched as his eyes moved over her body without betraying any thoughts or feelings. She watched as his gaze stopped on the point where she joined with Peter, and noticed his nostrils flare just slightly.
She watched as his eyes flicked back to meet hers. He held her gaze for what seemed to be forever, but she broke it when she noticed his tongue darting out to lick his lips.
A surge of energy raced up her spine, and she opened her mouth to pant, knowing she was almost there. She looked entreatingly at Snape, though what she wanted from him, she didn't know. What she didn't expect was for his mouth to open just slightly and for his breathing to quicken. He was still leaning against the doorframe, but he was now tense, and she could see his hands twitching as if he wanted to be the one touching her.
That thought sent her over the edge, and she threw her chest backwards and screamed.
Hard hands grabbed her hips, and she became aware of Peter yelling her name as he, too, came. Out of breath, she looked to the door, but Snape was gone. Exhausted, she collapsed onto Peter's chest, barely listening as he went on about love, devotion and the best sex ever.
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What was I thinking watching something like that? What was she thinking?
I don't think that was just post-coital bliss talking; I think he actually loves her. Is that why she's been out of sorts? Her look wasn't one of simple defiance... Does she—no, best not think about that.
Damn that girl. What am I going to do with her?
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this is such a brave and daring story! i had read it before but i couldn't remember where it was posted so i searched through various sites and finally got lucky. this time i will add it to favourites without delay. thanks again for that jewell!
This was GRIPPING.
Wow! I am utterly and deeply moved. It took me quite a while to figure out what you were aiming at and that was a pleasant surprise in itself. There are not many stories out, where the end is not obvious from the beginning.I also liked to have Wormtail described as a human being and actually getting more than a few crucios out of his actions.Thank you for the wonderful story!
Holy mother of gods. That was just the best story I have read in a long time. I have stayed up till 2am reading this because I could NOT put it down... Your torture of her. The food. The sadistic/masochist tones... my god. Just brilliant. BRILLIANT.I have never read a story with wormtail in this character. I was almost sympathitic toward him.And when Snape finally had her! Why was that sOOOO hot to me? Shell
Wow. Brilliant I would rate this much more than 5...
Like a punch in the guts. Wow. I am breathless, horrified, amazed, marveled, disgusted, touched, numb, exhilarated. Thank you for believing in yourself and sharing your story with us!
How hard for Hermione, to feel that she is using Wormtail. You really depicted that so well. Sigh.
*melted to a puddle on the floor"*GASP!*Oh, Severus, you naughty boy!
Catching up with the story after a loooooong time (RL sucks!). Nice "intermission' chapter!
I don't know if I like thinking of Hermione being genuinely upset about Wormtail or Snape's letter acting like he tried to save Wormtail for her.... I jsut don't know what to think of it all... but regardless, the writing was good :)
It really is quite squicky to think of Peter and Hermione. I keep reminding myself that it is to ensure her escape but she seems to actually have concern for Peter at this point. Not caring but concern. And the fact that Snape doesn't seem to care is icky as well. Peter is so gross I'm surprised Snape didn't rip her off of him jsut out of disgust LOL
ugh... wormtail is soooo creepy. And knowing that HErmione is doing him often is just sickening. I hope she either gains what she's after or comes to her senses and ... I don't even know... jsut stops sleeping with Wormtail LOL
I was recced this... I like dark fics.. but that's a brutal way to start out. Well written and I can't say I'm looking forward to what's to come but I'm... interested??
I ended up reading this whole story in one piece, I just couldn't stop reading! :P I just love the way you writes Snape, he is completely believable in this story and so is the other characters. I think you should be very proud of this story, it was a joy reading it (except from the icky wormtail/hermione parts)!
Wow. I thought I wouldn't be able to go past the squicky parts, but... you got me reading for one hour non-stop. Excellent writing.
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I'm wondering if she's pregnant . . .
Wonderful story. I read it in about two hours. Just gobbled it up, really. I especially loved your portrayal of Pettigrew, and the way you ended the whole piece.
Long story short: this is amazing. Short story long: anything by Dickens.
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Thank you!
This was a wonderful story - but I might be just dim here when I ask you this question, but my Snape-fangirl-love wants to know who sent the letter? Did Snape truly defect from the Order, or was he happy that she escaped, wanting her to get away all along? Sorry if my Snape-love kept me blinded from any obvious hints you might have left in the story...
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Thank you. Snape sent the letter. For answers to the rest, I suggest you read "Closure." It's a little less vague. ;-)
It was the only way what? He wanted her to use Wormtail to escape?
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
That is the question. What was the only way? How? Why? And, most of all, who?
Response from KarenDetroit (Reviewer)
ARRRGGG!Don't you repect the Geneva Convetions on Torture????
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
*giggle* Is there such a thing in fiction?
That said, there will be a companion piece called, very appropriately, "Closure" coming up pretty soon. A lot of questions will be answered in there (though it's still vague-ish on that one).
Yowza. The sex with Peter/Wormtail was just so icky. And you got the ick factor just right - along with the reality that it wasn't, of all the things Hermione had to endure, really so awful in the grand scheme of things. And then when Snape watched -well, that was wrong and right and actually quite hot. And through it all you never lost the complexity of the emotions involved, the grey-ness of all the protagonists. Thanks so much for a thought-provoking and entertaining read.
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Thank you!!! I... Thank you.
Very well written story the whole way through. I really enjoyed it and was thankfull for the quick updates. The way you ended it was very exciting. Well done job all the way around.
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Thank you!
Hi Avery. Now that I have completed Shades (at least on SH and FF), I finally got the courage to read this story from start to finish. Actually, I started reading when you first began posting chapters, but I only got to chapter 5 before I stopped. To be honest, I found it extremely difficult reading. The words painful and profoundly distrubing come to mind. But I suppose that was the effect you were looking for. Don't get me wrong--your writing itself is excellent. Very descriptive, good characterization and not too wordy (unlike me...). I also applaud your emphasis on a strong theme as I think too many fanfiction writers just want to write something fluffy that will be 'popular'. It takes courage to do something like this. What I found most amazing is that my story could inspire such a piece. It is ironic that your Hermione essentilly makes the polar opposite choice from mine. She compromises nearly all her morals and principles in order to survive, making her a traitor not to Harry or the Light, but to herself. It was a weighty piece of work. Good job.Cheers and best wishes,
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Response from averygoodun (Author of Traitor)
Hey. Well, thank you for reading it! You're right, I was attempting to write something very painful and disturbing. I've read Stockholm Syndrome stories that really, really romanticize the situation and don't take into account that it is a disorder; the victim is ILL, and it is not a healthy, romantic situation.
What I wanted to explore as much as that, though, is that survival really can outweigh morals when it comes right down to it, and Hermione has not proven herself to be as strong as Harry is under pressure. Hermione will have a hard time of it because she knows she did betray herself, even if the trip to the betrayal was almost invisible.
Thank you both for the inspiration (amazing story, btw!), and for your thoughts!