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For Him

1: For Him

2: Visions of Another Mind

3: When Needs Must...

4: ... The Devil Rides.

5: Confluence

6: Tea and Sympathy

7: Ouroboros

8: Meeting of Minds

9: Conspiracies

10: Epiphany

11: The Key

12: Mixed Blessings

13: Loose Lips

14: Silence

15: Release

16: Weeding

17: Friends and Feathers

18: Charges

19: Give and Take

20: Message Received

21: Change of Pace

22: Coming Together

23: Wrapping Gifts

24: House Hunting

25: Onto Greener Grass

26: When One Door Closes

For Him

sweetflag

267 Reviews   |   267 Ratings, 0 Likes, 92 Favorites )

Mystery/Suspense Drama Horror Potter Place Fun 57,895 Words 26 Chapters WIP
Hermione Granger Severus Snape Minerva McGonagall Original Character Lucius Malfoy Bellatrix Lestrange Draco Malfoy Harry Potter Narcissa Malfoy Ronald Weasley

When Hermione discovers that an incurable Snape has been left to waste in a secret hospital ward, she sets out to do what so many have failed to do before and cure him.

This is my response to the Dictionary Drabble Challenge. The chapters have to be less than one thousand words and contain the listed words.

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Chapters (26)

Chapter 1: For Him

Chapter 2: Visions of Another Mind

Chapter 3: When Needs Must...

Chapter 4: ... The Devil Rides.

Chapter 5: Confluence

Chapter 6: Tea and Sympathy

Chapter 7: Ouroboros

Chapter 8: Meeting of Minds

Chapter 9: Conspiracies

Chapter 10: Epiphany

Chapter 11: The Key

Chapter 12: Mixed Blessings

Chapter 13: Loose Lips

Chapter 14: Silence

Chapter 15: Release

Chapter 16: Weeding

Chapter 17: Friends and Feathers

Chapter 18: Charges

Chapter 19: Give and Take

Chapter 20: Message Received

Chapter 21: Change of Pace

Chapter 22: Coming Together

Chapter 23: Wrapping Gifts

Chapter 24: House Hunting

Chapter 25: Onto Greener Grass

Chapter 26: When One Door Closes


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sweetflag

Member Since 2007  |  27 Stories  |  Favorited by 35  |  180 Reviews Written  |  1,104 Review Responses

Hello.  I love reading and writing... what more can I say?

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10/10

Laikensmom020706

i hope you write more! That is such a beautiful story!

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review, the rating and the compliment :) I am tempted to...

0/10

FruGal

I hope you continue with this story.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  I don't know what to say; everyone has been really kind and so supportive.  I'm not sure where to go with it; my only thought was to keep with the dictionary challenge and use the words selected by Southern_witch as a base from which to work.  I shall have a think about it.

0/10

ChrissyJones

This was amazing. I hope that there's more to come!

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  I hadn't intended more to come (was just playing with the drabble dictionary challenge), but it seems be have been recieved well, so maybe I will... :)

0/10

rachow

Does this have to be over?  I suppose the plot would follow every other story where Hermione heals Severus of his snake bite and nurses him back to health.  Though it's interesting that the cure to his illness is having to forgive himself.  I wonder if you could take this plot somewhere untraversed.  If you want to, that is.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  The idea of forgiveness as a cure is taken from another story of mine.  I had intended this to be a one-off drabble, so extending it had never occured to me.  But... this site and the reviews are so uplifting, encouraging and inspiring... I've written more since becoming a member than in the decades before it!  So, a heartfelt thank you for taking the time to review; it does mean a great deal :)

10/10

kittylefish

a very compelling little scene, and nice use of the dictionary words.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating.  I wasn't sure about two of the words and if they had been used accurately, so your comment is most reassuring, thank you.  I couldn't resist using sub rosa in that manner, but admit that it happened by accident rather than intent. 

10/10

GryffKat

Wow! This is really good! I was looking for something to read and clicked on the newly submitted tab on the home page and saw this. I think you should continue it into a chaptered fic. I would be really interested in seeing what happens next. Very touching and true to Hermione's character. I also liked the bit with the old man at the end. Again, I hope to see more.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the stars :) Can drabbles be made into a chaptered fic? I was under the impression that they were one-offs.  I suppose that there's no reason that they can't be... a series of short chapters... ponders.  It was rather difficult trying to get a complete story in within the 1,000 word limit... I am in awe of those who can write one in about 100 words.  I was thrilled when I finally hit word count and it fell below the limit... lol.  I like wizened old men, they're so good at dishing-up pertinent information when it's needed.

Response from GryffKat (Reviewer)

Oh yeah, I forgot. Dictionary Drabble. Well, maybe after the "drabble" part is over you can carry on.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Hmmm... it's quite funny, but I really found the drabble challenge quite hard and was unsettled with the result.  I have an idea; the words change every Saturday... I could do a new chapter of this using the new set of words... blimey!  I must love hard work ... lol, but as Southern_witch says, it will improve vocabulary, and anything to keep my brain active is a good thing.  *Goes off to bite off more than I can chew* lol

0/10

kimjo2

superb!  never thot i'd feel sorry for a malfoy!  lovely use of the words.  thanks so much

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Hello

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

.  Thank you for the review.  Neither did I... lol.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Hello

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

.  Thank you for the review.  Neither did I... lol.

10/10

beaweasley2

I can almost feel sorry for the Malfoys except they brought this on themselves by choosing the wrong side,a nd following the wrong ideology. I hope they learn and rise back up though.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

They did indeed.  They're all on a steep learning curve, and you will recall that they had been punished... but is it fair to have ended their line?  The way I see it, the Ministry (or to be more precise, someone within it) is doing more than just punishing the Malfoys; they are attempting to end a way of thinking.  On the face of it, the death of the ideal of Pureblood as best should die a death, but through forced sterilisations?Ermm... sorry about that lecture :) I guess that I am still trying to sort out the idea of what is a fitting punishment for them. It's hard to explain, and I don't know if you experienced the same when writing your wonderful drabble, but the words that come up sort of draw out or modify the plot.  Sometimes, they draw out a lot of thoughts and ideas, and I guess that I dwell too much upon them.I hope that they see the light too... otherwise they're lost.    

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

They did indeed.  They're all on a steep learning curve, and you will recall that they had been punished... but is it fair to have ended their line?  The way I see it, the Ministry (or to be more precise, someone within it) is doing more than just punishing the Malfoys; they are attempting to end a way of thinking.  On the face of it, the death of the ideal of Pureblood as best should die a death, but through forced sterilisations?Ermm... sorry about that lecture :) I guess that I am still trying to sort out the idea of what is a fitting punishment for them. It's hard to explain, and I don't know if you experienced the same when writing your wonderful drabble, but the words that come up sort of draw out or modify the plot.  Sometimes, they draw out a lot of thoughts and ideas, and I guess that I dwell too much upon them.I hope that they see the light too... otherwise they're lost.    

10/10

ClayPotter

I hope that wasn't Draco's pet. Seems everything else has been taken from him.Intriguing, as always. I can hardly wait for more. I'm sure Lucius has something ingenius up his sleeve.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

No, it was the snake that had tried to throttle him, and although I had pet cat that tried to hurl me down the stairs by either sleeping or rubbing itself against my legs at the top of the stairs, I doubt that his pet would try to kill him. :DLucius had an idea.  Whether it's ingenius or just desperate you can decide.  I can just picture Narcissa's face when she finds out... we'll see just how accommodating and proud they can be. 

Response from ClayPotter (Reviewer)

Somehow I must have missed the chapter where Draco is attacked by the snake. I will go back and check it out.Sorry for the mix-up.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

No, it was the snake that had tried to throttle him, and although I had pet cat that tried to hurl me down the stairs by either sleeping or rubbing itself against my legs at the top of the stairs, I doubt that his pet would try to kill him. :DLucius had an idea.  Whether it's ingenius or just desperate you can decide.  I can just picture Narcissa's face when she finds out... we'll see just how accommodating and proud they can be. 

Response from ClayPotter (Reviewer)

Somehow I must have missed the chapter where Draco is attacked by the snake. I will go back and check it out.Sorry for the mix-up.

0/10

nata

Shall I or shall I not read this so late at night? What if the horrors here attach to my brain as parasites? Alas, my initial fear was so great I had to read twice what the Professor held. I was just so sure it was a finger!

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

No finger.  Bella will keep them very safe.  I loved your turn of phrase about the horrors... delightful (can you review a review?), and I feel that the review is better than the chapter :DThank you for reading and reviewing :)  Means a lot!

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

No finger.  Bella will keep them very safe.  I loved your turn of phrase about the horrors... delightful (can you review a review?), and I feel that the review is better than the chapter :DThank you for reading and reviewing :)  Means a lot!

10/10

morgaine_dulac

I was just on my way to bed when I saw that your story has been updated, and I just had to read the newest chapter.I enjoy what you are doing with the Malfoys, showing them as a family who has nothing left than each other. You're doing a great job with them.Cheers. /M

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for staying up to read it :)  I hope that it was worth the extra time up.I am enjoying writing the Malfoys; they're a nice contrast to Bella.Thank you for being here :)

Response from morgaine_dulac (Reviewer)

Yes, how is dear Bella, by the way? I do miss her. Um ... ;-)

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for staying up to read it :)  I hope that it was worth the extra time up.I am enjoying writing the Malfoys; they're a nice contrast to Bella.Thank you for being here :)

Response from morgaine_dulac (Reviewer)

Yes, how is dear Bella, by the way? I do miss her. Um ... ;-)

0/10

nata

Your Bellatrix is by far the scariest creature in TPP - including all incarnations of Voldemort I have read, Dementors, Inferi and what else. She surpasses them all. Scary, terrifying, dangerous, mad, driven, she is all I wish to see banished in this fic. For me, she has stolen the story. I do not care for Severus' fate, I only long for her demise. Scary. 

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  I'm incredibly flattered that the story has evoked such a response--I had no real idea that Bella was so strong a character... I'm not sure whether to be concerned that she has eclipsed Severus or not?  I'll make her demise a good one :D

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  I'm incredibly flattered that the story has evoked such a response--I had no real idea that Bella was so strong a character... I'm not sure whether to be concerned that she has eclipsed Severus or not?  I'll make her demise a good one :D

0/10

CharmedForce

Severus will be able to reverse the potion, I've no doubt. They just have to help him wake!

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  Severus is the key to it all... and as you say, all he has to do is wake up.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  Severus is the key to it all... and as you say, all he has to do is wake up.

0/10

CharmedForce

Unfortunately, she's right. It would take considerable time before they try to find Meadowes.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  And that is her advantage--in this instance and in all instances of her leaping from mind to mind.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  And that is her advantage--in this instance and in all instances of her leaping from mind to mind.

0/10

CharmedForce

Oh, Hermione. Those spells aren't meant for her.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks for the review.  She was desperate and thought that they were... poor Hermione.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks for the review.  She was desperate and thought that they were... poor Hermione.

0/10

CharmedForce

Oh, no! Poor Meadowes.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks again.  For all his wisdom and his cunning, he was baited with his love for his wife and blinkered to his error by his own perceived wisdom.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks again.  For all his wisdom and his cunning, he was baited with his love for his wife and blinkered to his error by his own perceived wisdom.

0/10

CharmedForce

She is really creepy.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks :)  She is!  More so than I had originally thought.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks :)  She is!  More so than I had originally thought.

0/10

CharmedForce

Bella has given herself away. I wonder if she realizes it...

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Hello again, and thank you.  She is aware... scary, ain't it? :D

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Hello again, and thank you.  She is aware... scary, ain't it? :D

0/10

CharmedForce

The ravens even give their life to help Severus... would that he could see how they did so.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks for the review.  Yes!  The ravens are important, but they didn't exactly give their lives for him.  They split into two groups... remember?  The two factions fought... I'll leave it there for you to ponder. :D

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks for the review.  Yes!  The ravens are important, but they didn't exactly give their lives for him.  They split into two groups... remember?  The two factions fought... I'll leave it there for you to ponder. :D

0/10

CharmedForce

Very very smart advice. Draco should definitely take heed.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks for the review.  He is in a bit of a bind.  He has nothing to tie him to anything... everything he had and knew has either gone or been taken from him.  But he is listening... in his own way.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks for the review.  He is in a bit of a bind.  He has nothing to tie him to anything... everything he had and knew has either gone or been taken from him.  But he is listening... in his own way.

0/10

CharmedForce

Bellatrix is a scary woman... Meadowes has hit the nail on the head. How can you trust anyone if Bella is free to jump from person to person?

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you again for the review and for reading.  She is a wee bit off her rocker, and sadly, she is now seemingly all-powerful... at least Voldemort had the horcruxes to destroy....

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you again for the review and for reading.  She is a wee bit off her rocker, and sadly, she is now seemingly all-powerful... at least Voldemort had the horcruxes to destroy....

0/10

CharmedForce

Poor Draco... he will always be cast as a villain.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  Carry on reading--I dislike typecasting. :D

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  Carry on reading--I dislike typecasting. :D

0/10

CharmedForce

There is the warning about the house elves!

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks again.  Yes.  The house-elves are doing what they deem to be for the good of the school and the students, but anything can be shifted to a darker purpose.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks again.  Yes.  The house-elves are doing what they deem to be for the good of the school and the students, but anything can be shifted to a darker purpose.

0/10

CharmedForce

Goodness! Why would a snake be after Draco?

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  Yes, the snake.  I think that I allude to the antipathy towards the Malfoys.  Someone, somewhere was not happy that the Malfoys got off so lightly.  The incident makes a bit of sense a bit later on.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  Yes, the snake.  I think that I allude to the antipathy towards the Malfoys.  Someone, somewhere was not happy that the Malfoys got off so lightly.  The incident makes a bit of sense a bit later on.

0/10

CharmedForce

He found drink, and companionship, so there is obviously some sort of breakthrough that is happening. Some progression...

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

A tentative tea party for all of them.  They realise that they need each other, and at this point that is enough to bind them together.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

A tentative tea party for all of them.  They realise that they need each other, and at this point that is enough to bind them together.

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