Meeting of Minds
Chapter 8 of 26
sweetflagWhen Hermione discovers that an incurable Snape has been left to waste in a secret hospital ward, she sets out to do what so many have failed to do before and cure him.
This is my response to the Dictionary Drabble Challenge. The chapters have to be less than one thousand words and contain the listed words.
ReviewedAuthor's Notes: As in a previous instance, I have combined two drabbles into one chapter. The dates and words of the Dictionary Drabble challenge are included at the start of each chapter. I hope that you enjoy.
June 28th
1. capacious
2. glutinous
3. forlorn
4. Cockaigne
5. harbinger
6. mazy
7. interpolate
Dancing through thoughts, dreams, desires, fears and instincts, she paused, almost breathless with delight, as she surveyed the end of the mazy travels through the Healer's mind. Here was her home away from home! She laughed out and gloried in the same sound bursting from the man's lungs.
So much time had been wasted in trying to take control when all she had needed was to interpolate herself within his thinking and skew it. Once he began to think in a similar way, he had welcomed her in as some newer and better aspect of himself. It was delicious!
She spoke for him, drawing upon his own knowledge and completely revelling in the freedom. She tested her control through a variety of strategies, and when she was confident that she had autonomy, she had visited Snape.
She had hoped to see some sign of suffering on his pale, thin features, but they were smooth and expressionless; all she had to assuage her disappointment was her own faith in Nagini's venom. Climbing up onto the cot, she straddled his thin form and crossed her arms upon his barely moving chest. Her eyes caught sight of the red scarring on his skin: four gashes across his throat from where the snake had sunk in her fangs. Overwhelmed, she slid up him, pressed her lips against the healed wound and flicked out her tongue. The flesh within the scar was smooth, edged by a firm ridge of tissue before becoming supple and coarser skin; no doubt the fine hairs and short stubble added the texture.
Easing back, she saw her spittle glistening on his neck, and she shivered at the sight...had Nagini felt the same flicker of pleasure? Tasted him just as she had done? Scowling, she turned her thoughts away from another who had been favoured more than she.
Staring down at his supine form, she contemplated opening up that wound, letting the blood flow freely, but that would be a gentle death. It would also be the harbinger of her own failure. Her ambitions had grown since she had set her purpose, and now, she sought to escape this prison of a hospital, and hidden within the not-so Cockaigne haven of the Healer's head, she could do what she wanted...and if she was caught... well, no matter! All she needed was another host for her wandering mind.
Staring down at Snape while her mind drifted over the possibilities, she felt something shift deep down. Disorientated and confused, she fell against his body and gripped his bed-linen for support. Closing her eyes and panting as her head swam and her guts trembled, she had the image of a barren landscape explode inside her mind. Image after image bombarded her, and she was left reeling at the sense of intense loneliness, longing and despair.
On instinct, she resorted to Occlumency, and the mental storm ceased almost immediately. Lifting herself up, she felt light-headed with the realisation...she had entered Snape's mind!
~X~
"You're not stopping me, Miss Granger," he said softly. "I would say that you actually enjoy having me rummaging around in your capacious mind."
She gritted her teeth and stifled the mounting anger. She could do this... She had to do this. Through the scenes of her past terrors and errors, she could see his face as he witnessed the worst of her life. The forehead was furrowed and beaded with sweat, and his own jaw was tightly clenched with the effort of performing Legilimency with a wand that wasn't his own. A wave of despair crashed down upon her; he was weakened, and yet she still couldn't oust him from her mind!
With a pained howl, she collapsed, and Lucius surged forward at the sudden lack of resistance. Momentarily dazed by the speed through which he rifled her brain, he struggled to withdraw from her suddenly glutinous mind, and just as she curled up and silently wept, so he sat there, head spinning and stomach churning.
Breathing hard due to wielding an uncooperative wand, he settled back into the plush chair generously provided by the Room of Requirement and studied her. It still bemused him that she had agreed to work with him, and not for the first time, he tried to deduce why she would put herself through all this for Severus Snape. What compelled her? The memories that he had called up had been as vague as he could make them...some sense of propriety had held him from delving too deeply into her troubled psyche...and from them, he could hazard a guess that she somehow needed to cure Severus, but what motivated that need, he had no idea.
The forlorn witch slumped in the chair before him seemed so disparate to the one who had suffered the Cruciatus so magnificently and still had the wherewithal to actually lie. But the war had done so much to so many; so long as she managed to bring Severus back to him, then he would do what he could for her... for him.
~X~
The tapping of claws against stone woke him, and while brushing sleep from his eyes, he slid out from under the covers and moved over to unlatch the shutter. In the weak light from the full moon, he saw the dark outline of an owl on the windowsill. It hooted petulantly at him...maybe for his tardiness...and then extended its leg. Shivering from the bitter cold, Draco quickly took the proffered note and thanked the owl which promptly clicked its beak and silently glided away.
Hastily closing the shutters, he rushed back to the warmth of his bed and in the candlelight read the letter.
Draco,
My son.
I may have found a way to help you.
Your mother sends her love.
Father
Rereading the short missive, he felt a mix of comfort and frustration: comfort because his father had risked his freedom to contact him, and frustration because that risk had been so obviously pointless.
July 5th
1. indigent
2. condign
3. laconic
4. tutelage
5. dapple
6. meticulous
7. palaver
A portion of the heavens had darkened and gathered itself together into the promise of a terrible storm. Being indigent in this already foreboding realm, he felt flutterings of panic in his guts at the sight of it. It seemed that the onset of such potential rampage had also affected the ravens; his travelling companions had squabbled raucously for some time before parting into two separate and vicious groups.
It seemed that now, he had a direction, and that was 'away'. With the hope that the slender river would lead him both away from the storm and to a more favourable location, he stood and started to make his way along the thin gravel strip between river and resistant gorse. After a few steps, the ravens, with a surprisingly laconic cawing, took to flight to dapple the portentous sky before forming two disturbing conspiracies: one to shadow him, and the other to seek the storm.
~X~
Some noise must have penetrated her slumber because she sat bolt upright with a terrible sense of being watched. Quickly brushing aside errant strands of hair that had slipped over her face during her short and fitful doze, she peered down the aisle, but it was empty. Still feeling uneasy, she sighed and packed away her parchments and books; she shouldn't have fallen asleep in the library, and the crick in her neck was a condign result of pushing herself too hard.
With chagrin, Hermione stood and sauntered out of the library. At the door, however, she glanced back, but the library was as empty as it had been when she had arrived. Shivering at the bizarre discomfort in her haven, she let the door whisper shut behind her and headed for her room.
Within the soft confines of her bed, her mind drifted through the strange sequence of events that had caused her to be under Lucius Malfoy's tutelage as she strived to learn Occlumency. It seemed years ago that she had demanded to see Snape and wept beside him, pouring out her words of solace and forgiveness and begging him to wake up. Inhaling deeply, she turned onto her side and gazed unseeingly at the wall and the shifting shadows created by the flame from the candle which danced in the welcomed draft. A stronger gust rattled the shutter, and her eyes darted up at the sudden, harsh noise; satisfied that it was just the wind, she relaxed, but with her mind sharper, she caught sight of something resting on her desk... Something that shouldn't be there!
Slipping out of bed, she stepped over and sat down on the cushioned chair, her eyes and fingers drawn to the square piece of paper that she knew had been locked in her trunk. Her fingers plucked it from the table, and she opened up the well-worn creases, her breathing short and shallow as the implications of the misplaced note rattled through her mind...someone had been messing with her personal belongings!
The essential note had been painstakingly constructed in the days following her first visit to Sub Rosa, and it was a list of the things that she would need in readiness to perform what was described in Visions in Another Mind. Chewing her lip, she thought back on the odd warning in Meadowes' letter. Other things suddenly clamoured for attention; the feeling of being watched, the palaver about things being lost, and the surprise at the fact that certain areas of the castle were looking far more neglected than usual.
Nausea welled-up at the thought of the house-elves being employed to keep a closer eye on the students; being such meticulous creatures, they would be the perfect gatherers of information. Crushing the paper in her fist, she wondered how much 'they' knew and if her most precious plan was at risk.
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Latest 25 Reviews for For Him
267 Reviews | 5.69/10 Average
Gosh... Can't you authors make things less complicated and angsty for once? ;))
Magnificent first chapter! Why isn't this fanfic completed yet?
This is very nice. (At least the last part, not Bella, of course.) Hermione's conflicts are very clear and believable, and I love the way you've shown young Sev. I'm a bit worried about older Severus--I'd like to see him a bit stronger, since it looks as if Bella will find him soon. But I wonder where Lucius has got to, now? Sorry to hear about your hands--that can be really painful. Have you tried a dictation program? They're amazing, once you learn them and get them used to your voice.
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Thank you again. It's reassuring for me that the characters and their interactions are believable. I've never really considered the dictation program--partly because I had no idea that such a thing existed, and partly because I find it very difficult to talk when I'm writing. That probably makes no sense, but everything seems to go straight from brain to fingers. Thank you... I'm hoping the fingers will start to behave soon, as most of my hobbies and work involves them. On the other hand, I do have a good excuse now as to why my granny squares look like some temporal distortion as seen on Star Trek.
You write so much better when you aren't trying to fit it around the vocabulary words! You clearly have a wonderful, convoluted plot in mind (assuming that all the threads eventually come together), and yet I have frequently been tempted to abandon your story, reading it through, because of the awkwardness of the language. It's never wise to try to use arcane words based only on their definitions, since the words you were given all have hooks and connotations and if you aren't fully familiar with the universe of the words you use, you can make errors that are really jarring--especially in writing that is otherwise smooth and competent. . I'm so glad the challenge is over, and I look forward to the rest of the story. (Except Bella, who is simply disgusting--those fingers!)
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Thank you so much for your review and kind words. The drabble challenge was thrilling and... challenging. Trying to get it all done in less than 1,000 words was also very trying. I'm so glad that you managed to get past the vocabulary. My ignorance must have shone through quite a lot in the chapters, but I did enjoy the challenge of learning new words and trying to do them justice; I think it helped me quite a lot. It was great fun. Thank you again for the review.
"Armed with his wit—a wit that had kept him dancing just one step ahead of death for decades—and a fierce determination to discover if he could finally call himself free, Snape rode his anger like a devil and stepped into the storm."That? Is one of the most glorious sentences I've read in a long time. It made me *shiver* with pleasure and anticipation.
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Thank you so much for the review, and I'm sorry for the delay in response. I'm so thrilled that the line was a good one. Thank you for reading.
VERY INTERESTING READING. WHAT SUSPENSE! I FOUND THIS STORY AGAIN, I READ IT LAST YEAR AND ITS STILL WHERE IT WAS, I HOPE YOU ARE WORKING ON AN UPDATE. I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS TO EVERYONE. YOU HAVE ME HOOKED! ;D
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Hello. It's lovely to read your review. I am working, very slowly; I have had to put writing on hold for quite a while now. I hope to get back to everything 'fanfiction' in the next few weeks.
wow...just wow. this is so well written and interestingly plotted. thanks so much
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Hello again :) Thanks for reading!Thank you for those kind words. Hope you enjoy the rest of this tale.
This reality is terrifying. Will Snape be able to hold on to his sanity? Who is this voice he hears?
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Hello :) It's lovely to see you again.Thank you for the review and the stars.I know this is mean, but you'll find out :D
OK, I got lost on this chapter. I'm going to re-read it tomorrow. So far the story is pretty good though.
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Thank you so much for that :) I hope that the next chapters make more sense.
I think Hermione should let someone else know what is going on. She is taking risks that don't need to be taken.
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
True, but don't you find that logical people tend to be the last to see the logic of a situation, especially when it's personal.Thanks for the review and the stars :)
It's getting interesting. Poor Ron feels threatened by Hermione's distance I think.
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Thank you :)Ron always strikes me as being rather insecure; JKR makes him work hard for eveything.
Not bad, I'm wondering why Lucius isn't the ring leader.
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Does he feel that he could be?Thanks again :)
The old man in this chapter, is he the same old man from the hospital?
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Yes, he is. :)Thanks for the stars :)
Well, there is certainly some hidden agenda here.Not bad, although I'd like more description of thoughts, feelings etc. However, that may have been planned for this chapter.
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Thank you for the review. This was in response to a Dictionary Drabble challenge, and as result, quite a few of the chapters are constrained by length and specific words to use. I didn't delve as much as I would have liked. Hopefully, the chapters will become more satisfying as they go on.I will say that I have changed the rating, as the story does darken in places; this may not yet be apparent, so I thought I'd warn you about the rating change--just in case it's now not quite your cup of tea. Thanks for reading and reviewing :)
Good start, I liked how you had Hermione as compassionate 'healing the soul, instead of the body'.
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Thank you for the review :)
I as a little confused about Bella's plan as well, but then I read your reply to ClayPotter and and went all "ah!".The parts about Snape are about the best I have read in a long time! Wow! As for “I’m not crabby; I’m complicated.” I am so going to print that on a t-shirt!/M
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Thanks for the review :) Some aspects of this were written so long ago, that I think some pieces aren't connecting as well as they should. I will fix that!I really enjoyed going back to Snape--the poor dear has been neglected.Shucks! I should have thought of the t-shirt thing first! I will--promise!--get to your wonderful story as soon as some annoying other stuff has disappeared :)
I hate to admit this but, I am totally confused now. I can only assume that Bella put a finger inside each of Hermione and Draco, then wiped their memories clean of the horrible incident. So now she can take over either one of them at any moment as she wishes? But since she can only inhabit one person at a time, she is still inside Meadows during the house hunting incident?Please help me understand what is going on. That previous chapter was so horrifying, and this one makes no mention of their torture, or how they got out of it, or anything.
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Yes, she has put a finger inside them and wiped their memories. Bella is still in Meadowes. I will do another chapter with her as the main character; she can have a chat with Meadowes about what she's planning. That should clarify things. Her idea to use Hermione and Draco was very spur of the moment, but she needed somewhere safe to keep those fingers. The fingers are her anchor points, if you like. She can site one and travel to and from it at will, or use it to fall back on if one is destroyed. Think of inns dotted along long roads: resting places for travellers heading towards their destination. She has yet to place all of them--eight remaining. She herself cannot move more than a set distance from her current anchor, so she needs the anchor to be carried--Draco and Hermione have the anchors with them at all times and carry them around--Bella doesn't have to possess either of them, but she can use them as a base to possess someone else. Bella knows that Hermione wants to help Snape and that she has access to all those who worked against Voldemort (the Order members, including Harry); all those who Bella wishes to take vengeance upon. It makes no mention, because no one knows--there are hints ... Hermione rubbing her belly, thinking that she ate something funny, but nothing else, because if they knew, they'd remove what they were carrying. Bella didn't want to torture them as such; granted, she enjoyed doing it (she IS a nutcase, remember :D), but she didn't want to create any lasting problems. I hope that clarified something... anything....
Response from ClayPotter (Reviewer)
Yes, I understand now. Thanks so much for the clarification.
Sorry. Can't read any more. Your rating is too low. The gratuitous violence of Wrapping Gifts bumps it into MA, and I'm not interested in Bella enough to continue reading this.
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Fair enough. Thanks for reading thus far. I will, of course, ask one of the admins to seek their opinion on the rating and change it accordingly, and I will use their advice to rate future chapters.
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Thank you for pointing out the inappropriate rating. I have upped it to M(R)--for mature teens.
ooooooo!
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Given the stars, I'm edging my bets that that was a good 'ooooooo!' :DGlad you're liking it!Thank you.
Response from keske (Reviewer)
yeah! a very good OOOOOO!
So, how are they going to get out of that?!
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
It's a bit tricky, isnt it? :DThanks for staying with this story and for reviewing :)
wow! i'm speachless! thanks so much
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Glad you liked it :)Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Hanibal Lector meets The Exorcist. I'm impressed!And as horrible Bella is, I must tell you how much I love the way you depict Lucius and Narcissa. Truly lovely./M
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Thank you for the review :)They just want their happy-ever-after. Thanks for reading... makes me all giddy with happiness :)
So far our heroes are always being out flanked by Bella. Are they ever going to win and cure Severus?
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Thank you for the review :)In truth, they're not actually fighting against Bella--they have no idea that Bella is even up and around and a problem. What is happening here is taking place over a few days. I guess that posting at rather irregular intervals may be seemingly stretching this out--sorry :(The ingredients arrived on Friday, they saw 'Meadowes' on Saturday and by Wednesday, the Malfoys will be... possiby... your neighbours :DBella is following her own little agenda, and Hermione and Draco are now a huge part of that... whether they want to be or not.I can sense your possible frustration, so I'll try and get some very long chapters done to help speed this along. Many thanks for reading this story and taking the time to review :)
That was dark. How is this going to work out?
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Thanks for the review.This is the darkest chapter in this story. I won't be delving into such shadows again. Err... are you asking if this is going to have a 'happy-ending'? Or are you just querying if the story will descend into a pure horror tale?
Response from makaem (Reviewer)
It was more of a general whine on my part. I like to guess where I think a story is headed-- in this case I'm drawing a blank, at least for anything that will bode well for Hermione. So I'll just have to wait. As for the question, I don't really expect to get an answer (although one would be nice), I stick those in a lot of my reviews. It means I like a story enough to do the equivalent of thinking outloud. But, as a general rule, do you do horror stories?
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
So... you like the story *grins* but feel that it could do with some more clues.... okay. I've just responded to another email about doing some longer chapters to help speed things up... I'll see if I can also make them more satisfying for you.Regarding horror, I do enjoy reading horrror and some of my stories do incorporate the genre. Maybe I will write one dedicated to it s some point.Thank you for reviewing and reading the story :)
Response from makaem (Reviewer)
Crap, now I feel awkward. I didn't do a very good job of answering your question. I started to say that I was usually pretty good at figuring out plot line, but that your story was keeping me guessing. Then I decided that sounded too arrogant on my part... You don't need to drop more clues. Your story is great just the way you've written it. I meant that as a complement, but I didn't say it very well. MA
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
I didn't mean to make you feel awkward--sorry.My concern was that I was being far too vague and not providing enough information, resulting in a confusing and inaccesible plot. I can breathe easy now... you're enjoying the story.Thank you for the lovely compliment :)
Oh, okay, Poor Severus hope from a patch of blue sky, and then lost it. Meadows - he's so trapped. I hope Hermione sees rigth through him.
Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)
Thanks for the review :)I'm sure that he'll have his patch of blue again.Next chapter is in the queue... and well... er... :D