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Broken
potterbrat180 Reviews | 7.8/10 (180 Ratings, 0 Likes, 57 Favorites )
Draco Malfoy has changed sides. When he decides to leave Malfoy Manor, he needs help packing. While at the Manor, a surprise arrival changes everything. The warnings show abuse and violence, but I promise that nothing will be bad. It really is more of a romance, but the other stuff is necessary.
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Member Since 2007 | 7 Stories | Favorited by 28 | 176 Reviews Written | 444 Review Responses
I've been posting on here for a while and have decided to update my profile. I'm 30ish... I have a husband... I have two daughters... and other various creatures living at my house. My real life consists of work, fanfiction (which sometimes supercedes work), and chasing after my teen and tween.
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Reviews for Broken
Great story, very well thought out. i do love the grandchildren at the end!
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I guess the best thing I can say is this story is still good second time around.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
LOL!! I did make a promise in my bio that I would answer every review... no matter how many times you read. No, really, I had fun revisiting this story. It was my first baby and I will always cherish it.
You know, it wasn't till your author's note that I realised I read this before. Well, it looks like I'm enjoying it again. TFF
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
And, there it is!!! I knew you'd get there. That's okay. I promise that I don't mind the extra reviews.
I had to laugh at the end of the chapter, I almost feel sorry for Pansy.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
I love writing her. We don't get enough of her in canon, so that leaves room for playing with her character more.
I was certainly surprised with Lucius's method of demise. I never took him to be a person willing to commit suicide.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Lucious, to me, is the weakest link. I actually like Lucius. I believe that his love for his son was the strongest part about him aside from his hunger for power. But, Lucius was also quite mad here. I think that anyone who looks at the world through rose colored glasses has the chance to lose their marbles like he did. Besides, it's never the ones you expect, is it?
Not bad, I liked your version of Severus's feelings better than canon. He's less broken here.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Funny that you would use those exact words when the title of my story is Broken. Snape is the strongest character in HP. Sure, he was weak when he took the Dark Mark, but it took a lot of strength to turn from the Death Eaters and become a spy.
I really liked your version of Petunia. She seemed almost likable and very regretful.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
I honestly believe that I DH had a post script for Petunia, we would find that she is quite close to the woman that I wrote. I know she had to have regrets. I think that her love for her sister just turned into jealousy and she never had the chance to make things right with Lily. I also think that shew viewed Harry as all of the mistakes that she'd made and all the regrets that she had. That made her pain more palpable in my eyes.
I'm surprised she let a man do this kind of exam in this circumstance let alone have a second with her.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
I know. I've gone back and read this and cringe a little. It was necessary at the time, though. Nobody was to know what she'd been through. She didn't really know herself because Lucius took her memories and she knows that Draco is a pro and he's now a friend.
Interesting, I liked how Ron knew something that surprised Draco. Ron doesn't really strike me as a knowledgeable type.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Ron will always be one of my favorite characters. He reminds me so much of my older brother. He's a little hot-headed, but his heart is in the right place. I think he was very clever, even in canon. I just don't think he really ever got the chance. He's kind of the unassuming hero, you know.
I love Severus's sense of humor... it's so dry. Harry is right, no one would believe him.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
There are so many fanfic authors out there that have cleverer ways of writing Sev. But, again, he is so much like someone that I know... I just write what I know about my friend and voila... MY Snape is born.
Good chapter, Draco certainly broke the news gently.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
I love him. I need to write another hg/dm story.
I always liked the idea of Severus hanging out in the background, even better that Hermione notices and appreciates his help.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
I wrote this about the time that I was easing into my hg/ss stage, so I needed to take it slow and make him a friend in this fic before they got naked in another!!!
Looking grim. I just love Draco as a good guy. Must be a phase I'm going through.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
You're so crazy. I know you've read this. However, I appreciate your second glance. I hope you still like it after all this time. Remember that tis was my first one.
Not bad, Voldermort went down without much of a fuss. I'm more concerned with Lucius's statement about killing traitors.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
I'm a lover... not a fighter. I don't know how to write really great war scenes. It needed to be clean. But then again, this story was never about Harry and Voldy. It's always been Draco and Hermione. I just love Harry so much that I had to get him in there.
I liked Harry's confidence, in canon he didn't seem sure of anything.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
I think he finally got some nerve in DH. But, Harry had to grow up at some point. Right? Right?
This story was tantalizing, fun to read, emotional, well thought out and beautiful. It had so much humanity and you've really brought the characters to life. Though there were a lot of dark things that occurred; there was a reason for it. It wasn't horrible and horrifying for horror's sake. I think you executed this novel brilliantly and I am priveleged to be allowed to read it. I will recommend it to all my other Dramione friends. =)
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
I have gotten some fantastic reviews for this little fic. I believe this one is the nicest one yet. Thank you so very much!!~*potterbrat*~
Fantastic story! I know it's finished, so I'm lucky that I don't have to wait for the next chapter to be posted. I'm just curious though, why did Ginny ask Draco if he and Hermione had stayed in the room if they've been there for 3 weeks already?
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
First of all, thank you so much for the review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. As for your question: This was my first story, and as I was writing, I had the whole thing playing out in my head, but it got lost in translation somewhere between my brain and my fingertips. I wanted to convey that even though they'd been there for a little while, they haven't seen a whole lot of Ginny, because they were in another part of the house. I view it as being a rather large place. But, alas, it come out exactly as I'd hoped. Thanks again!~*potterbrat*~
Response from ladylynne9 (Reviewer)
Okay :) Makes sense. Great job for a first story!
Excellent story, everyone got to live happily ever after. Peacefully at that in all ways, with many, many children to love. Great job!
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Thank you so much. I'm a sucker for happy endings!
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That was amazing!!! I adored this story!!! I enjoyed everything about it! The epilogue was so very detailed!!! Super job!!!
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Oh, thank you very much. Being my first fan-fic, Broken has a very special place in my heart. I've become rather attached to it, so when I get reviews from people who love it as well, it makes me feel warm and fuzzy... LOL!~potterbrat~
Excellent story!
Loved the way you developed the characters through their years. Particularily enjoyed the banter between Draco and Severus in the epilogue - I could just imagine them both as doting grandfathers.
Well done on such a brilliant story. I have to say that I am loving Saving Grace.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Thank you!! I wanted Draco and Severus to keep their Slytherin ways even though they were surrounded by Gryffindors. Bless them. Sev is such a complicated character because there are so many facets to him. Even after DH, I feel like there's so much more to him that we don't know. I think JKR did that on purpose. It also makes him so much fun to write, because we can mould him into what we think he should be. I just love him. Thanks again!!~potterbrat~
Oh now I feel happier, even Pansy is turning out to be nicer and maturer.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
I just want everyone to live in harmony... la lala la la!!!
OMG! I get to chapter 23 (without reviewing - sorry) and discover that they are NOT bound!
Totally gripped by this story.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Oh, I'm so glad you're reading Broken. This was my first fanfic and it's my baby. I was pleased with the turnout and the reviews were so kind. I won't take away your cookies for waiting until ch. 23 to review.
Okay, I take back my insistence on a sequel--you gave such a great epilogue, you really don't have to!! Though you could always expand... wink, winkSuch a GREAT story. I feel content. Sigh.My favorite lines:"If someone had told him two years ago that he would be standing by the lake on the school grounds, with an audience full of Gryffindors, waiting to marry the most Gryffindor of all the Gryffindors, he would have hexed someone. However, here he was, the Slytherin Prince, waiting for his Gryffindor Princess.""“We do,” said Harry. At Ron’s silence, Harry raised his eyebrows at him. Ron shrugged. “Yeah, alright, we do.” Hermione giggled when Ron gave Draco an ‘I’m not really giving her to you’ look."
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Thank you so much. I love writing Ron. He's so goofy and so much fun to write. I wanted to relate his unrequited love for Hermione somehow without taking away from his love for Pansy. So I gave him a protective edge. There is no way he would ever GIVE her to anyone.
Response from mhaj78 (Reviewer)
I totally agree. And you did a great job of considering what "muggle" traditions wouldn't be a part of a wizarding ceremony--and how they would look at those, i.e., this example of Ron not "giving" her to anyone. And that is also why I HATE Ron and Hermione being together in JKR's books...he definitely is a great protector, but hard to see him as her equal or her lover. Ron and Pansy, though...I like that match the more I think about it!
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Thank you. Now, if you jot on over to my WIP which is called Saving Grace, you might see a different side of Ron. Get a tissue.