Punishment for a Malfoy
Chapter 1 of 27
potterbratDraco Malfoy has changed sides. When he decides to leave Malfoy Manor, he needs help packing. While at the Manor, a surprise arrival changes everything. The warnings show abuse and violence, but I promise that nothing will be bad. It really is more of a romance, but the other stuff is necessary.
Punishment for a Malfoy
Chapter 1
"Lucius, where is your prodigal son?" Lord Voldemort hissed at his most loyal follower. Lucius Malfoy crawled to Lord Voldemort and kissed the hem of his robes. He was terrified, to say the least.
"My Lord, Draco has chosen the side of the light. He left me a note. He will be punished," Lucius spat.
"Indeed. I believe a few bouts of the Cruciatis and then perhaps an Avada Kedavra?" Voldemort laughed manically.
"You want me to k-kill my only son?" Lucius was stunned. He knew that Voldemort was cruel, but he didn't think he could kill his only son. Draco was his flesh and blood. If he killed him, there would be no one to carry on the Malfoy name. Draco was the last born son of one of the oldest pureblood families in the wizarding world.
"You refuse? Oh, well... perhaps I should punish you instead." Voldemort raised his wand, and with a menacing smile, he hissed, "Castracio!"
Back at the Malfoy Manor, Draco was desperately trying to pack a few things before his father came home. He knew his father was with the Dark Lord and would be home in a couple of hours. That didn't leave him a lot of time to get everything he needed. His mother had left the manor a few weeks ago to go on holiday, but Draco knew she would not return. He had overheard his mother on the Floo with someone he didn't recognize, telling them that she was leaving Lucius.
That was when Draco had decided to leave. He'd wrestled with the decision to join Harry Potter for years. But when he put his mind to it, he weighed his options very carefully: a wizarding world without Muggles or Mudbloods, or a wizarding world without a freak who looked like a snake and would kill you on the spot if he didn't like your cologne. The choice became pretty clear at that point. That's when he decided to make it official and join Harry Potter. He pledged his loyalties to Dumbledore and, in doing so, put his life in the crazy old wizard's hands. Funny, Draco thought, he felt safer with the old coot than he did with his own father.
Draco was made a member of the Order of the Phoenix a week later and began training with Harry, Ron and Hermione. When the comment was made by Madam Pomfrey that there were more "soldiers" than healers, he, along with Ginny, decided that was where he was most needed. During his seventh year, Draco and Ginny both started training with Madam Pomfrey. When he graduated Hogwarts, he started an internship at St. Mungo's, and as soon as Ginny graduated, she joined him. However, now she was no longer Ginny Weasley. The day after graduation, she married Harry Potter.
Of all the members of the Order, Draco was closest to Professor Snape, but he had quickly befriended Ginny regardless of the fact that she now carried the surname "Potter." He had never had a sister, but he thought she made a good stand-in. She had a lot of practice in being a sister, after all.
Since he became a member of the Order, he stayed at Malfoy Manor simply because that was where his things were. He failed to inform his father that he had changed sides and thought nothing of it until the day Lucius came to him and told him it was time for him to get his Mark and take his place in the Dark Lord's inner circle. He thought it might be a good time to leave. But in order to leave quickly, he needed help packing. He wouldn't ask Wonder Boy or his Dynamic Sidekick for help, and Ginny was working a shift at St. Mungo's, so he asked the only person around, who was currently sipping tea and reading the Daily Prophet in the kitchen of number twelve, Grimmauld Place.
Now he was in his bedroom with Hermione Granger. It wasn't that he didn't like her. He spent most of his life being told to hate her kind and everything about her. It was more like he was indifferent. But he needed help, and she said yes, so there they were.
Hermione was helping him pack just the essentials and some childhood memorabilia. They were working together in companionable silence when they heard a noise. They both looked up and caught each other's eyes.
"What was that?" Hermione asked with terror in her voice. "You don't think your father is already home, do you?"
Draco started to tell her it was probably just one of the house-elves when he heard someone clear his throat. Turning slowly, he saw, to his horror, his father standing in the door frame. And even more disconcerting was the look of boredom on his face.
Instinctively, Draco stepped in front of Hermione. "What do you want, Father?"
Ignoring his question, Lucius asked, "Why are you packing, Draco? Are you and your little Mudblood going somewhere?"
Even though Lucius was using a bored tone, there was no denying the evil glint in his eyes. He was blocking the doorway now, and Draco knew they couldn't get passed him. He just prayed that he could talk his way out of there. He knew both his and Hermione's lives depended on him.
"Actually, Father, we were just packing up a few of my things. I didn't think you'd want me here anymore. We're finished now, so we'll be on our way." He knew he wouldn't get anywhere, but he thought he'd give it a try. He started toward the door, being careful to keep himself between Hermione and his father.
Lucius just smiled in a way that people who didn't know any better would think was charming. "Surely you don't think I'm going to just let the two of you leave. No, Draco, I have other plans for you and your Mudblood. You see, Draco, the Dark Lord was a little put off by the choice you made. As a matter of fact, he decided it was my fault. And can you believe that he wanted me to kill you? Imagine killing my own son. I was outraged by this, and the Dark Lord assumed that I was refusing, which of course, I wasn't. So, instead of giving me time to wrap my brain around it, he punished me instead."
Draco was feeling sick. He could hear a small whimper from the girl behind him. He ignored her. He didn't want anymore attention sent her way than there already was. He didn't fancy her, but he didn't want his father to do anything to her either. They were on the same side, after all. The Order knew she was there. He also knew that Weasley didn't really trust him yet. Hopefully he could stall his father long enough that Weasley would get worried about Granger and come looking for her.
"Draco, why are you trying to hide your little Mudblood? I must say, she is easy on the eyes even if she is filth." Draco didn't respond to his father's taunts. Draco stood his ground and looked his father in the eye. He liked to think that he wasn't the scared little boy anymore that needed the likes of Crabbe and Goyle to hide behind. But at that very moment, Draco was terrified. He was almost more terrified for Hermione than himself because his father believed there was more to her presence than simply helping him pack.
Draco was searching his mind for something to say when he heard the sound of a throat clearing behind him. "Er...hello Mr. Malfoy. We were just about to leave. I hope you have a good day." Damn Granger and her bloody Gryffindor bravery. Draco would have rolled his eyes if it wasn't such a dire situation.
"Ah, Miss Granger." Lucius put on his best fake smile that didn't reach his eyes. "You don't really believe that I'm just going to let you leave, do you? What sort of host would I be if I let you just walk out the door when I just got here? No. I have other plans for you my dear, after I deal with my son, of course."
It happened so fast that neither Draco nor Hermione knew what hit them. Lucius flung his wand at Draco, throwing him out of the way so he could have a clear shot at Hermione.
Advancing on her, he had a wicked grin spread across his face. "Well, now, it's just you and me, Mudblood."
Hermione was suddenly trembling with fear. She looked out of the corner of her eyes and noticed that Draco must have hit his head because he was out cold. Lucius picked Hermione up by her arms and threw her on the bed. The suitcases that contained Draco's clothes bounced onto the floor.
Lucius ripped Hermione's shirt off and whispered, "Now, I'm going to find out exactly what my son betrayed his family for."
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180 Reviews | 7.8/10 Average
Great story, very well thought out. i do love the grandchildren at the end!
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I guess the best thing I can say is this story is still good second time around.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
LOL!! I did make a promise in my bio that I would answer every review... no matter how many times you read. No, really, I had fun revisiting this story. It was my first baby and I will always cherish it.
You know, it wasn't till your author's note that I realised I read this before. Well, it looks like I'm enjoying it again. TFF
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
And, there it is!!! I knew you'd get there. That's okay. I promise that I don't mind the extra reviews.
I had to laugh at the end of the chapter, I almost feel sorry for Pansy.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
I love writing her. We don't get enough of her in canon, so that leaves room for playing with her character more.
I was certainly surprised with Lucius's method of demise. I never took him to be a person willing to commit suicide.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Lucious, to me, is the weakest link. I actually like Lucius. I believe that his love for his son was the strongest part about him aside from his hunger for power. But, Lucius was also quite mad here. I think that anyone who looks at the world through rose colored glasses has the chance to lose their marbles like he did. Besides, it's never the ones you expect, is it?
Not bad, I liked your version of Severus's feelings better than canon. He's less broken here.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Funny that you would use those exact words when the title of my story is Broken. Snape is the strongest character in HP. Sure, he was weak when he took the Dark Mark, but it took a lot of strength to turn from the Death Eaters and become a spy.
I really liked your version of Petunia. She seemed almost likable and very regretful.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
I honestly believe that I DH had a post script for Petunia, we would find that she is quite close to the woman that I wrote. I know she had to have regrets. I think that her love for her sister just turned into jealousy and she never had the chance to make things right with Lily. I also think that shew viewed Harry as all of the mistakes that she'd made and all the regrets that she had. That made her pain more palpable in my eyes.
I'm surprised she let a man do this kind of exam in this circumstance let alone have a second with her.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
I know. I've gone back and read this and cringe a little. It was necessary at the time, though. Nobody was to know what she'd been through. She didn't really know herself because Lucius took her memories and she knows that Draco is a pro and he's now a friend.
Interesting, I liked how Ron knew something that surprised Draco. Ron doesn't really strike me as a knowledgeable type.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Ron will always be one of my favorite characters. He reminds me so much of my older brother. He's a little hot-headed, but his heart is in the right place. I think he was very clever, even in canon. I just don't think he really ever got the chance. He's kind of the unassuming hero, you know.
I love Severus's sense of humor... it's so dry. Harry is right, no one would believe him.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
There are so many fanfic authors out there that have cleverer ways of writing Sev. But, again, he is so much like someone that I know... I just write what I know about my friend and voila... MY Snape is born.
Good chapter, Draco certainly broke the news gently.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
I love him. I need to write another hg/dm story.
I always liked the idea of Severus hanging out in the background, even better that Hermione notices and appreciates his help.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
I wrote this about the time that I was easing into my hg/ss stage, so I needed to take it slow and make him a friend in this fic before they got naked in another!!!
Looking grim. I just love Draco as a good guy. Must be a phase I'm going through.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
You're so crazy. I know you've read this. However, I appreciate your second glance. I hope you still like it after all this time. Remember that tis was my first one.
Not bad, Voldermort went down without much of a fuss. I'm more concerned with Lucius's statement about killing traitors.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
I'm a lover... not a fighter. I don't know how to write really great war scenes. It needed to be clean. But then again, this story was never about Harry and Voldy. It's always been Draco and Hermione. I just love Harry so much that I had to get him in there.
I liked Harry's confidence, in canon he didn't seem sure of anything.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
I think he finally got some nerve in DH. But, Harry had to grow up at some point. Right? Right?
This story was tantalizing, fun to read, emotional, well thought out and beautiful. It had so much humanity and you've really brought the characters to life. Though there were a lot of dark things that occurred; there was a reason for it. It wasn't horrible and horrifying for horror's sake. I think you executed this novel brilliantly and I am priveleged to be allowed to read it. I will recommend it to all my other Dramione friends. =)
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
I have gotten some fantastic reviews for this little fic. I believe this one is the nicest one yet. Thank you so very much!!~*potterbrat*~
Fantastic story! I know it's finished, so I'm lucky that I don't have to wait for the next chapter to be posted. I'm just curious though, why did Ginny ask Draco if he and Hermione had stayed in the room if they've been there for 3 weeks already?
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
First of all, thank you so much for the review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. As for your question: This was my first story, and as I was writing, I had the whole thing playing out in my head, but it got lost in translation somewhere between my brain and my fingertips. I wanted to convey that even though they'd been there for a little while, they haven't seen a whole lot of Ginny, because they were in another part of the house. I view it as being a rather large place. But, alas, it come out exactly as I'd hoped. Thanks again!~*potterbrat*~
Response from ladylynne9 (Reviewer)
Okay :) Makes sense. Great job for a first story!
Excellent story, everyone got to live happily ever after. Peacefully at that in all ways, with many, many children to love. Great job!
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Thank you so much. I'm a sucker for happy endings!
~*potterbrat*~
That was amazing!!! I adored this story!!! I enjoyed everything about it! The epilogue was so very detailed!!! Super job!!!
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Oh, thank you very much. Being my first fan-fic, Broken has a very special place in my heart. I've become rather attached to it, so when I get reviews from people who love it as well, it makes me feel warm and fuzzy... LOL!~potterbrat~
Excellent story!
Loved the way you developed the characters through their years. Particularily enjoyed the banter between Draco and Severus in the epilogue - I could just imagine them both as doting grandfathers.
Well done on such a brilliant story. I have to say that I am loving Saving Grace.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Thank you!! I wanted Draco and Severus to keep their Slytherin ways even though they were surrounded by Gryffindors. Bless them. Sev is such a complicated character because there are so many facets to him. Even after DH, I feel like there's so much more to him that we don't know. I think JKR did that on purpose. It also makes him so much fun to write, because we can mould him into what we think he should be. I just love him. Thanks again!!~potterbrat~
Oh now I feel happier, even Pansy is turning out to be nicer and maturer.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
I just want everyone to live in harmony... la lala la la!!!
OMG! I get to chapter 23 (without reviewing - sorry) and discover that they are NOT bound!
Totally gripped by this story.
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Oh, I'm so glad you're reading Broken. This was my first fanfic and it's my baby. I was pleased with the turnout and the reviews were so kind. I won't take away your cookies for waiting until ch. 23 to review.
Okay, I take back my insistence on a sequel--you gave such a great epilogue, you really don't have to!! Though you could always expand... wink, winkSuch a GREAT story. I feel content. Sigh.My favorite lines:"If someone had told him two years ago that he would be standing by the lake on the school grounds, with an audience full of Gryffindors, waiting to marry the most Gryffindor of all the Gryffindors, he would have hexed someone. However, here he was, the Slytherin Prince, waiting for his Gryffindor Princess.""“We do,” said Harry. At Ron’s silence, Harry raised his eyebrows at him. Ron shrugged. “Yeah, alright, we do.” Hermione giggled when Ron gave Draco an ‘I’m not really giving her to you’ look."
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Thank you so much. I love writing Ron. He's so goofy and so much fun to write. I wanted to relate his unrequited love for Hermione somehow without taking away from his love for Pansy. So I gave him a protective edge. There is no way he would ever GIVE her to anyone.
Response from mhaj78 (Reviewer)
I totally agree. And you did a great job of considering what "muggle" traditions wouldn't be a part of a wizarding ceremony--and how they would look at those, i.e., this example of Ron not "giving" her to anyone. And that is also why I HATE Ron and Hermione being together in JKR's books...he definitely is a great protector, but hard to see him as her equal or her lover. Ron and Pansy, though...I like that match the more I think about it!
Response from potterbrat (Author of Broken)
Thank you. Now, if you jot on over to my WIP which is called Saving Grace, you might see a different side of Ron. Get a tissue.