At the Beach
chivalric530 Reviews | 7.18/10 (530 Ratings, 0 Likes, 378 Favorites )
Ten years after the war, a man takes a stroll along the beach and meets someone from his past.
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chivalric
Member Since 2007 | 65 Stories | Favorited by 776 | 213 Reviews Written | 4,182 Review Responses
Located in Germany. Female, around 40. The first chapters of my published novels/novellas can be found here on the archive.
Other than writing, I am reading, cycling, running, and singing in a choir.
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Reviews for At the Beach
oh ho ho! we'll see about that! thanks so much for the lovely update
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
It was my pleasure. The next chapter will go into queue in a day or two, after my beta had a last check. Promise: she won't leave the island in that chapter. Thanks a lot for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
It was my pleasure. The next chapter will go into queue in a day or two, after my beta had a last check. Promise: she won't leave the island in that chapter. Thanks a lot for reviewing!
It's a new way to use this prompt. And I'm very curious to see how you will continue this first chapter. So I'll keep looking for an update.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
The next chapter is already in queue, the story in itself completed. I will update regularly, once my betas had their go.And thanks for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
The next chapter is already in queue, the story in itself completed. I will update regularly, once my betas had their go.And thanks for reviewing!
Off to a good start. I'm hooked.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Good to know ;-)Next chapter is in queue. Hope you will like it!And thanks for reviewing, of course.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Good to know ;-)Next chapter is in queue. Hope you will like it!And thanks for reviewing, of course.
Brilliant first chapter. I look forward to reading more.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Thank you so very much! I promise to update regularly once my brilliant betas had their go ;-)
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Thank you so very much! I promise to update regularly once my brilliant betas had their go ;-)
Interesting start, I look forward to read some more.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Next chapter is in queue, and I will update regularly. Thanks so much for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Next chapter is in queue, and I will update regularly. Thanks so much for reviewing!
Good beginning. It flows nicely. You put in some backstory and leave some mystery. Well done!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
More backstory and more mystery to come - next chapter is in queue. Thanks a lot for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
More backstory and more mystery to come - next chapter is in queue. Thanks a lot for reviewing!
So he just walks away? Okay. I suppose he'll show up again tomorrow, this time with fresh homemade tortillas or something local.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
*snicker*No, actually she will go after him, taking the bait. Couldn't resist telling you that, sorry.Next chapter is in the queue. And many thanks for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
*snicker*No, actually she will go after him, taking the bait. Couldn't resist telling you that, sorry.Next chapter is in the queue. And many thanks for reviewing!
Hmm. That was interesting.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I hope you will continue reading to find out if it stays interesting ;-)Thanks for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I hope you will continue reading to find out if it stays interesting ;-)Thanks for reviewing!
oh, ChivalricThis is a heartbreaking chapter which you have written beautifully.Like everyone else, I wish Tessa and Carlos could raise Luca together, but for the moment Tessa needs to be back in England with Rose and Hugo. I also understand why Carlos can't move back to England, it would be far too dangerous for him to return.As a mum I can understand how hard the next few years are going to be for Hermione as Luca grows up with long periods without her, but I have faith that Carlos will be a fantastic father. I can just picture him tending the vines with Luca nearby and as she grows teaching her both about the vines as well as how to read and do magic...*happy sigh*I look forward to the next chapter.Sav
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Now how did you manage to get a peek view of the epilogue, dear? Thanks for reviewing. Hope you'll like the end of this!
Response from savine_snape (Reviewer)
I'm sure I will *grins*As for how did I get a sneaky peak, I must be distantly related to Sybil.
Wow, this is just soooo heartbreaking! Can she really see this through? I still have my doubts. Please update soon, I really want to see what happens next. GReat work!!gab
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
The epilogue is already in queue, so you won't have to wait long. I really hope you won't be disapointed by the end!
George is a very good friend (I think he might even understand if he knew the whole truth, but I do understand her reluctance to tell him everything, and at least it puts him in less of an awkward position with the rest of his family).
Carlos is an incredibly tender father, and I love that Luca senses this. My heart breaks for Tessa. Another beautifully written chapter!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Thank you, dear! I actually asked my betas about George and if she should tell him a bit or all and they all said, it would be unfair if she told him everything. Too much responsibility, and I had to agree. And now only the epilogue is left. Thanks for reviewing!
This chapter brought tears to my eyes. Poor Hermione having to pretend and hide her pregnancy, and then having to leave her baby behind. Heart wrenching... perhaps the next chapter could be a leap in time and Rose and Hugo will be at school???
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Now, as the next and last chapter will be the epilogue, there will definitely a leap in time ;-)Thanks for reviewing!
a fry cook in a diner in ArizonaROFLMAO!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
;-)) Go read the story - it's hot!
God! This is so sad! That they have no choice but to live this life, without each other, when in each other's arms is where they belong.I hope something happens. Soon!Excellent chapter, thank you!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Weeell, the epilogue is in queue, dear!Thanks for reviewing!
I honestly don't know how Hermione can do this! To leave Carlos and Luca and pretend that nothing's happened? My hat's off to her. And to you, by the way!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I couldn't do it - leave my boy - but I don't have a loving father for my child. She has. And she has responsibilities to Rose and Hugo.Epilogue is in queue. Thanks for reviewing!
Poor Tessa, how hard it would be to leave your new baby daughter behind. Thank goodness she'll be able to visit frequently till she can stay for good. Somebody should hex Molly (at least this version of her) for making Tessa's life so difficult. Still loving this story!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I agree, Molly is not nice in this story, and nor is Ron. Was necessary to pull it through this way.Epilogue should be up soon. Thanks for reviewing!
So sad. The thought of having to leave such a small child. Seeing Severus as a father is truly lovely to behold. The differences between Ron and him were quite interesting. I certainly hope that Ron and Molly get some sort of... something when Hermione leaves for good.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Hi, there, and thanks for reviewing! The epilogue will be up soon (no Ron or Molly, sorry), and I hope you'll like it!
Response from debjunk (Reviewer)
Epilogue?! Nooooooo! Don't stop!
That must be so hard to do, to leave them like that. But at least she knows he will cherish Luca. :)
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Oh, yes, very hard. I cannot imagine leaving my boy, but then. Luca has a dad who loves her. Thanks for reviewing!
Hermione's being so brave, and very in character, doing what needs to be done despite how difficult it is. This was a hard chapter to read in some respects -- as a mother, I can't begin to imagine how she would feel, leaving the island and her daughter behind. It will also be so interesting to see how Luca's life will intertwine with her half-siblings'.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Thanks so much for calling her in character - that was one of my biggest fears, that I protrayed her in a way that would make her unrecogniseable. I cannot imagine to leave my child behind, either. But the, I only have one, I don't have to chose. Luckily.More soon - epilogue should be up in a few days.
Oh, how sad :( I can't imagine leaving my baby like that. It's absolutely heartrending.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
She will see her regularly, Luca will be safe, and Carlos willl wait for her however long it takes. Still, I couldn't imagine doing it.I hope the epilogue will bring a smile to your face. Thanks for reviewing!
Carlos will be a wonderful father, I just know it. I am really hoping that these two, Luca (a beautiful name, by the way), and Rose and Hugo, get to be together in the end.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
How shall I put it best?They will ;-)Thanks for reviewing!P.S. I like the name!
Response from luvsev (Reviewer)
I definately look forward to seeing it, dear. This story is so addictive and I absolutely rejoice when I see a new chapter posted:) If you don't mind me asking, where did you come up with the name Luca? It is so very pretty and I have never heard anything like it.
How can this possibly work out? Her heart will break. And he won't be happy once the little girl starts to ask about her mom.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
As there is only the epilogue left, I don't say too much by telling you that it will work out ;-)Thanks for reviewing!
i caught that ref to the home fries nazi but i like the wine grower better, too. wonderful update. happy and a bit sad, too. thanks so much
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
So do I, but the fry cook was excellent in his own ways *smirk*Thanks for reviewing, and the epiloge should be up soon.
Wonderful sweet story with a bit of bitter.
It's a pitty they gave their little girl a boys name though. Although it ends in 'a', Luca not is a name for girls.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I like to lace sweet with bitter. Most of my stories (apart from the real bad and the real silly ones) work like that.Luca is a name for boys and girls, like Marion, Kim, or Sasha. I like names that don't tell at once which sex the owner is. I would have named my daughter Luca, if I had one, but then, I do have a boy ;-)Thanks for reviewing!
Response from Angenieta (Reviewer)
I have to disagree with you on that.
Maybe it's because I live in Italy and here Luca is absolutely not for girls. But I would have a 'problem' with a male Marion or a female Sasha too ;)
And ofcourse it's a little thing that doesn't take anything away from your story.
this was very sweet. i loved how you described his interactions with the baby; it made me teary and happy at the same time. and i like that she told george part of the truth - it's good to have friends one can talk to so she doesn't have to feel quite so alone. and i'm glad they seem to be figuring out how to have more time together in the meantime.a couple of things you might want to fix: 1) "[Not worth risking it. It wasn't worth the risk?]" i'm thinking maybe you did not quite finish editing this? 2) "Your secret is save with me." should be "safe." 3) "once Ron had been left the house to play Quidditch again" delete "been" 4) "Why, oh why did this man always find words that made her heart ache with love? - delete the opening quotation mark as it's not dialogue nor is it a thought.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Hi, hon!Thanks for reading and reviewing - and thanks for betaing whilst doing so ;-) Changes done, and hugs for you!