At the Beach
chivalric530 Reviews | 7.18/10 (530 Ratings, 0 Likes, 378 Favorites )
Ten years after the war, a man takes a stroll along the beach and meets someone from his past.
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chivalric
Member Since 2007 | 65 Stories | Favorited by 776 | 213 Reviews Written | 4,182 Review Responses
Located in Germany. Female, around 40. The first chapters of my published novels/novellas can be found here on the archive.
Other than writing, I am reading, cycling, running, and singing in a choir.
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Reviews for At the Beach
What a lovely chapter, but oh how it ends.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I truly hope you'll like how it continues! Thanks so much for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I truly hope you'll like how it continues! Thanks so much for reviewing!
So realistic!I love it!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Thanks so much! I feared they would be both too much OOC, so I am glad you liked it.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Thanks so much! I feared they would be both too much OOC, so I am glad you liked it.
Ah, now the wait begins, and I do wait with bated breath for that glass of wine on the veranda....
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
The glass of wine, the ocean, the talk, the candles... Hmmm, I hope you will like the next chapter. It is in there solely because you wished for a story rated MA(NC17) *g*
Response from notsosaintly (Reviewer)
Yes, and I get the pleasure of adminning it too. 
It is waiting for me now, as matter of fact. Just waiting for my coffee to finish brewing....
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
The glass of wine, the ocean, the talk, the candles... Hmmm, I hope you will like the next chapter. It is in there solely because you wished for a story rated MA(NC17) *g*
Response from notsosaintly (Reviewer)
Yes, and I get the pleasure of adminning it too. It is waiting for me now, as matter of fact. Just waiting for my coffee to finish brewing....
Oh-ho-ho, wait until he realizes who she really is!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Will take another two chapters, dear!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Will take another two chapters, dear!
Nope. Her husband is no good. Carlos all the way!! 
Give me a C-A-R-L-O-S — oops, sorry, got a bit carried away there.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Ron is not nasty to her (as I will spell out in a later chapter), but he is definitely not good for her. I truly think, if Ron really married Ron, it would end like that. A marriage without love simply because those two are good as friends, but not as lovers. Hugs, dear, and thanks for reviewing!(BTW, I love the cheerleading smiley!)
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Ron is not nasty to her (as I will spell out in a later chapter), but he is definitely not good for her. I truly think, if Ron really married Ron, it would end like that. A marriage without love simply because those two are good as friends, but not as lovers. Hugs, dear, and thanks for reviewing!(BTW, I love the cheerleading smiley!)
Hmm ... you know, they called me Tessa in high school? She resembles me a bit, without the children of course at that age. She needs a Carlos.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I did not know that! For a little while she was actually called a different name, but then I thought it would be too personal ;-) Chosing that specific name was shere coincidence.She gets him, btw. Somehow *grins*
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I did not know that! For a little while she was actually called a different name, but then I thought it would be too personal ;-) Chosing that specific name was shere coincidence.She gets him, btw. Somehow *grins*
Ah—! There's that Spanish line! Funny, I actually understood what it meant ... I wonder why. :D Nice beginning, and sorry I didn't have a chance to sit down and enjoy it until now.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Hi, dear! Glad you liked the beginning, and yes, I, too, wonder how come you remembered the line :-))
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Hi, dear! Glad you liked the beginning, and yes, I, too, wonder how come you remembered the line :-))
A romantic night is to take place and I already long to read it. You're such a magical writer. Thanks a lot for all the wonderful reading you're providing.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Do you really think so? She might have decided not to cheat on her husband, you know ;-)No, I'm not that cruel. I will post the next chapter sometime next week, and I hope you will let me know if it is satisfying. Thanks for your lovely review, dear!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Do you really think so? She might have decided not to cheat on her husband, you know ;-)No, I'm not that cruel. I will post the next chapter sometime next week, and I hope you will let me know if it is satisfying. Thanks for your lovely review, dear!
This is getting interesting, I hope more is coming soon:)
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Definitely ;-) I will post the next chapter sometime next week.Thanks for reviewing!
Response from Merlina Thalia (Reviewer)
Yay:)
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Definitely ;-) I will post the next chapter sometime next week.Thanks for reviewing!
Response from Merlina Thalia (Reviewer)
Yay:)
This is gorgeous. The delicacy with which you are exploring this relationship is perfect.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Thank you so very much! I wanted this story to unfold slow and tender; it seems I have managed it ;-)
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Thank you so very much! I wanted this story to unfold slow and tender; it seems I have managed it ;-)
okay, now i'm all caught up. i really love the atmosphere in this story, the quiet, kind of serene but slightly moody feeling. and i am so in love with "carlos" it isn't even funny. somewhat healed from all that pain, maybe not completely, but enough so that he is able to be considerate and giving, even if he's still a little bit scared of love and all that. it's sad to see her so subdued, but at least she's starting to come alive again. i am really looking forward to everything - whatever happens next, when they realize who the other one is, whatever happens after that. it's a lovely world you've created here.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Thank you so much, dear*hugs you* I wanted Snape to be the man he could have been if life had been kinder to him. Self-conscious, happy, gentle and friendly, but still himself so you would recognise him as the snarky Potions master. I know he's OOC; ten good years changed him as much as her ten bad ones.Next chapter will be up soon.
Response from kittylefish (Reviewer)
i don't really feel like he's ooc. the years changed him; people change, given time. that is the nature of life. you have put him in a setting where he has mellowed along with his wine. ;)
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Thank you so much, dear*hugs you* I wanted Snape to be the man he could have been if life had been kinder to him. Self-conscious, happy, gentle and friendly, but still himself so you would recognise him as the snarky Potions master. I know he's OOC; ten good years changed him as much as her ten bad ones.Next chapter will be up soon.
Response from kittylefish (Reviewer)
i don't really feel like he's ooc. the years changed him; people change, given time. that is the nature of life. you have put him in a setting where he has mellowed along with his wine. ;)
Ooohhh can't wait to see how their night together pans out. I agree with Snape that she does seem much more forward all of a sudden. What changed? Did she maybe have a conversation with Ron? could she have possibly ended things with him?? I guess I don't really think so as that would be a bit strange, to end your marriage while on holiday - no matter if he was a total git or not. Still, I'm looking forward to this conversation and to see what has changed so much in Hermione's mind that she has decided (or seems to have decided) to make Severus HER prey. :) Oh! Does she know it's him?? Okay, I know you can't answer that. :)
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Oh, dear, so many questions ;-) Something changed, and it so very simple you maybe even consider it not enough to have changed her so much. Let me know.No, she didn't talk to Ron. Not yet. And she won't end her marriage. I guess you didn't expect quite that much information, but I am well known to answer my reviewers' questions. At least some of them. You should know, though, that I never give all the information needed to figure out how the story will continue *lol*She doesn't know it's him. Not yet, again. You will have to wait for chapter 6 and 7, dear. Thanks so much for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Oh, dear, so many questions ;-) Something changed, and it so very simple you maybe even consider it not enough to have changed her so much. Let me know.No, she didn't talk to Ron. Not yet. And she won't end her marriage. I guess you didn't expect quite that much information, but I am well known to answer my reviewers' questions. At least some of them. You should know, though, that I never give all the information needed to figure out how the story will continue *lol*She doesn't know it's him. Not yet, again. You will have to wait for chapter 6 and 7, dear. Thanks so much for reviewing!
Molly is SUCH a cow!I'm glad she got a day to read, too. But I wonder... where is HER mother all this time?
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Her mum will come into the picture in a few chapters. Not for long, but long enough to make her daughter feel better for having left Carlos...Hope that help. And let me tell you that my hints might be correct, but don't show the complete truth ;-)Thanks a lot for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Her mum will come into the picture in a few chapters. Not for long, but long enough to make her daughter feel better for having left Carlos...Hope that help. And let me tell you that my hints might be correct, but don't show the complete truth ;-)Thanks a lot for reviewing!
I think Hermone saying she doesn't want to do this is more to try to convince herself at this point than anything else. I'm surprised Snape didn't pick up at all on the description of the man she onc knew - misjudged, in the end: brave, and long since dead. Didn't it even sound a little familiar to him? lol
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
The past is the one thing he doesn't like to think about. Maybe it stirred some memories, but then, he does not know who she is, believes her to be a Muggle... He will find out in the end, though.And yes, she tries to convince herself. Unsuccessfully.Thanks for reviewing, btw!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
The past is the one thing he doesn't like to think about. Maybe it stirred some memories, but then, he does not know who she is, believes her to be a Muggle... He will find out in the end, though.And yes, she tries to convince herself. Unsuccessfully.Thanks for reviewing, btw!
I am surprised that Hermione didn't turn Snape away when he became so forward. I would say a married woman quite obviously wants something from another man when said man tells her that he wants her in his bed and she decides not to send him away. Apparently things are relaly pretty awful in the Weasley home. I am wondering now that I write this: what do Rose and ugo think of their mother calling herself Tessa? I guess I never paid enough attention to see if the name was spoken in front of the children though so maybe it hasn't been. But it seems like, if "Carlos" did call her "Tessa" in front of the kids, that they would correct him, telling him her real name. Unless maybe she explained that she had to be under a false name because there were still bad people in the world who may harm her?? hmmm...
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
1. Things are bad. Not that Ron mistreats her or is nasty in the obvious way, but he is never home, their love turned cold, and she is sad and lonely. She didn't come to the island to have an affair - after all, she wanted Ron to be with her in the first place - but she is simply overwhelmed by Carlos's clear words, his admiration, and his honesty. It's been a long time since anyone called her beautiful, and besides, she likes him.2. Didn't really think of it, I must admit. They are very small, and at least Hugo wouldn't know his mum as "Hermione". My boy is six and it strikes him odd if someone calls me by my first name. So even Rose wouldn't possibly think of it, but you are right, he calls her Tessa when they are not around. Will give an explanation why she uses Tessa in chapter 7 ;-)
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
1. Things are bad. Not that Ron mistreats her or is nasty in the obvious way, but he is never home, their love turned cold, and she is sad and lonely. She didn't come to the island to have an affair - after all, she wanted Ron to be with her in the first place - but she is simply overwhelmed by Carlos's clear words, his admiration, and his honesty. It's been a long time since anyone called her beautiful, and besides, she likes him.2. Didn't really think of it, I must admit. They are very small, and at least Hugo wouldn't know his mum as "Hermione". My boy is six and it strikes him odd if someone calls me by my first name. So even Rose wouldn't possibly think of it, but you are right, he calls her Tessa when they are not around. Will give an explanation why she uses Tessa in chapter 7 ;-)
This is a peculiar Snape. So laid back and yet "on the prowl". I like how he has given himself a new life. "Carlos" - for some reason that just cracks me up. :) I think because it reminds me of some suave casanova and even though I can totally get on board with 'hotty Snape' I just don't see him as seeing himself that way. I really like this easy-going, 'leave the past in the past' guy though and of course I am excited to see when this "familiar" woman becomes "Granger". LOL
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I agree, he is OOC in a way. Ten years and a totally different life changed him tremendously. I believe he learned how to love life - it was either that or kill himself. He chose life, as he is, IMO, not the man who would earnestly consider suicede. (Althoug, come to think of it, I did write a story where he does exactly that ;-)Carlos... well, I wanted a Spanish name, and that one jumped at me. Obviously, he doesn't look like a native, but he is not English anymore, either. He definitely is not a casanove sort of type ;-)She will become Granger in chapter 6, in case you might be interested.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I agree, he is OOC in a way. Ten years and a totally different life changed him tremendously. I believe he learned how to love life - it was either that or kill himself. He chose life, as he is, IMO, not the man who would earnestly consider suicede. (Althoug, come to think of it, I did write a story where he does exactly that ;-)Carlos... well, I wanted a Spanish name, and that one jumped at me. Obviously, he doesn't look like a native, but he is not English anymore, either. He definitely is not a casanove sort of type ;-)She will become Granger in chapter 6, in case you might be interested.
i just started reading this - am loving it so far - and i had to rush here to say - you've named him carlos! that's my boyfriend's name! what a happy coincidence that just that adds even more to the appeal! :D
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I did NOT know that! I needed a Spanish name and it sounded good to me ;-) Thanks for reviewing, dear. I do hope you will like the rest as well!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I did NOT know that! I needed a Spanish name and it sounded good to me ;-) Thanks for reviewing, dear. I do hope you will like the rest as well!
An intriguing start. I'm just now catching up on the challenge fics and I"m glad I came across this one. I'll be sure to follow it now that I've found it. :)So Hermione is blond? Wonder who she's hiding from?? Or is she hiding at all? Hmmm...
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
She is hiding, sort of, but more from herself than from anyone else. She didn't run away from her husband or something like this. And I like blond ;-)Thanks for reviewing.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
She is hiding, sort of, but more from herself than from anyone else. She didn't run away from her husband or something like this. And I like blond ;-)Thanks for reviewing.
Can't believe I missed this before. I'm another who is curious at how they are not recognizing each other - have they both had glasses on the enitre time, or are there glamours at work? Completely intriguing - you stopped at an evil place, hope the next chapter is coming son!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Two minor glamours, but nothing big. They will look nearly the same without them. And yes, I tried to have the glasses in the picture wherever possible. I feared that if they looked at each other, they would recognise who the other one is before I was ready to write about it ;-)The next chapter will go into queue sometime next week. I do hope you like it. Thanks a lot for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Two minor glamours, but nothing big. They will look nearly the same without them. And yes, I tried to have the glasses in the picture wherever possible. I feared that if they looked at each other, they would recognise who the other one is before I was ready to write about it ;-)The next chapter will go into queue sometime next week. I do hope you like it. Thanks a lot for reviewing!
Can't believe I missed this before. I'm another who is curious at how they are not recognizing each other - have they both had glasses on the enitre time, or are there glamours at work? Completely intriguing - you stopped at an evil place, hope the next chapter is coming son!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
forgot to say - I gave a more detailed explanation concerning recognition a few answers down. If you care to check them out, that is ;-)
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
forgot to say - I gave a more detailed explanation concerning recognition a few answers down. If you care to check them out, that is ;-)
Whoa...you stopped there! Are you kidding me!!!! Next chapter, please
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
But of course I stopped here. The children needed to go to bed, and they are always first. Even I stop writing when my son demands his good night story *lol*I will update soon (within the next two weeks) and regularly, promise. Thanks a lot for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
But of course I stopped here. The children needed to go to bed, and they are always first. Even I stop writing when my son demands his good night story *lol*I will update soon (within the next two weeks) and regularly, promise. Thanks a lot for reviewing!
I just caught up with this story and it's completely wonderful. I too have a lot of questions about how it is that they don't recognize each other -- glamours of some sort? Also, at some point will he get a good look at her eyes, and will that give everything away? Anyway, those aren't criticisms;the questions are part of what's ratcheting up the suspense and plot tension for me. Tessa/Hermione is done so vividly here, too -- a very subtle but effective portrayal of frustration and depression.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Thanks *beams* I was a bit worried about reactions to their changed look, but of course I needed to do that or they would have indeed recognised each other. Lanky, long black hair and pale skin, long, curly brown locks and her neverending talk - No, no, they needed to look different and they needed to be different. If you care to read responses I have given to other reviews with the same question, you will know what I mean. Frustration and depression in her case, happyness and self-consciousness in his has a lot to do with it. It will be her husband's name that will give her away, btw. And thanks a lot for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Thanks *beams* I was a bit worried about reactions to their changed look, but of course I needed to do that or they would have indeed recognised each other. Lanky, long black hair and pale skin, long, curly brown locks and her neverending talk - No, no, they needed to look different and they needed to be different. If you care to read responses I have given to other reviews with the same question, you will know what I mean. Frustration and depression in her case, happyness and self-consciousness in his has a lot to do with it. It will be her husband's name that will give her away, btw. And thanks a lot for reviewing!
Aw, this gets better and better! And now I know who wrote it! Good on you! I am happy to see another chapter of this, with poor Carlos longing for love and so nice to the children and HER.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
He changed quite a bit, didn't he? He wants her, and maybe, he will even get her... for a while.Hope that helps, dear *grins evilly* Thanks a lot for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
He changed quite a bit, didn't he? He wants her, and maybe, he will even get her... for a while.Hope that helps, dear *grins evilly* Thanks a lot for reviewing!
Oh this is so beautiful. I hope it's not a disaster when they realise who they really are!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I don't want to give anything away, but although there are ups and downs in this story, it is not made for disasters. Everything bitter or bad will get resolved ;-)Who said they will recognise each other at all, btw??Thanks a lot for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I don't want to give anything away, but although there are ups and downs in this story, it is not made for disasters. Everything bitter or bad will get resolved ;-)Who said they will recognise each other at all, btw??Thanks a lot for reviewing!
...and of course you had to stop it there... Evil author!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
*grins* Tja, that's me. But I will update soon, promise.Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
*grins* Tja, that's me. But I will update soon, promise.Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing!