At the Beach
chivalric530 Reviews | 7.18/10 (530 Ratings, 0 Likes, 378 Favorites )
Ten years after the war, a man takes a stroll along the beach and meets someone from his past.
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chivalric
Member Since 2007 | 65 Stories | Favorited by 776 | 213 Reviews Written | 4,182 Review Responses
Located in Germany. Female, around 40. The first chapters of my published novels/novellas can be found here on the archive.
Other than writing, I am reading, cycling, running, and singing in a choir.
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Reviews for At the Beach
Well I am pleased they got over that little hurdle! :)
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
*snigger* Not that little, believe me. Took me a while to figure out how she might react.Thanks a lot for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
*snigger* Not that little, believe me. Took me a while to figure out how she might react.Thanks a lot for reviewing!
more please, excellant story
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Give it a few days, dear, I will post the next chapter soon. Thanks for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Give it a few days, dear, I will post the next chapter soon. Thanks for reviewing!
I am just heartbroken. I am hoping for a happy ending, but I just don't see how you can pull it off. This is a beautifully written chapter. Tension is tangible. I am eagerly awaiting more, well, maybe I'll a little frightened of what may happen, but happy to read it just the same.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Don't be frightened ;-)Thanks once more for reading and reviewing and the beautiful words you found for this chapter.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Don't be frightened ;-)Thanks once more for reading and reviewing and the beautiful words you found for this chapter.
awsome can't wiat for more.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
My wonderful betas have to check the next chapter; I hope to post it sometime this week. Thanks for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
My wonderful betas have to check the next chapter; I hope to post it sometime this week. Thanks for reviewing!
OMG, how I now wish for another chapter! Much more than with the previous cliffhanger. That one was a sure thing in my eyes - although you mastered the confrontation much better than I envisioned - but now, his excruciating wait begins and her heart-wrenching fight for her children commences. At least, that's what I would do with this story at this point.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
You didn't think he would kick her bum out of his bedroom, did you? He's not cruel in this fic, nor is he - in my world - as insecure of himself as in many other stories.You'll have to wait if she fights or runs or finds another way. With me, it's nearly always the latter. Thanks for reviewing!
Response from nata (Reviewer)
No. There was no hesitation in my mind that he would not kick her out in this fic. He has not been angsty at all. I expected a shouting match though. Or denial. His stewing his emotions in, containing it rather than coming out in the open.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
You didn't think he would kick her bum out of his bedroom, did you? He's not cruel in this fic, nor is he - in my world - as insecure of himself as in many other stories.You'll have to wait if she fights or runs or finds another way. With me, it's nearly always the latter. Thanks for reviewing!
Response from nata (Reviewer)
No. There was no hesitation in my mind that he would not kick her out in this fic. He has not been angsty at all. I expected a shouting match though. Or denial. His stewing his emotions in, containing it rather than coming out in the open.
I too needed to check to see if this was finished. The last line seemed so final. The bracelet turned out to be more than I expected. I just thought it was hiding his Dark Mark. Their revelations were very poignant and I'm glad they listened to each other. I would almost want him to go after her, but I think he's right, he'd ruin her life and whatever love she had for him might very well be destroyed with that.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I wanted to scare the life out of all my readers ;-) No, just kidding. I didn't realise it was that final until I read the reviews. After all, I know what will happen next!He wants to go after her as well. But he can't and he won't. Thanks for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I wanted to scare the life out of all my readers ;-) No, just kidding. I didn't realise it was that final until I read the reviews. After all, I know what will happen next!He wants to go after her as well. But he can't and he won't. Thanks for reviewing!
Please don't tell me this is it -- it's is too wonderful of a story to end it here. He has to go to her. After a few weeks without each other, surely they will come up with some kind of plan. Ron Weasley is so busy that he doesn't need custody. Have him hook up with a woman who dislikes the children so that Hermione and Severus can have them. Come on, please write more.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
It isn't! The next chapter will go into queue sometime this week, and I hope you'll like it. There certainly will be a plan *lol*Thanks for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
It isn't! The next chapter will go into queue sometime this week, and I hope you'll like it. There certainly will be a plan *lol*Thanks for reviewing!
I can understand why she has to be Tessa, for the purposesof the story, but how is she going to explain it later? ButI'm glad that while Severus is opportunistic, he's not abastard. I like the way the story is unfolding slowly - nice.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
This is a slow and lazy summer story, although it is winter right now (at least outside my window). And he is not a bastard, not in this story. Concerning Tessa - she'll have an explanation, although it is a very small and harmless one.Thanks for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
This is a slow and lazy summer story, although it is winter right now (at least outside my window). And he is not a bastard, not in this story. Concerning Tessa - she'll have an explanation, although it is a very small and harmless one.Thanks for reviewing!
I had to double check to make sure that the story wasn't marked as 'complete', because I'd be devasated if it was! I truly hope you can work something out for these two! Grrr... those lousy Weasleys...
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
*hugs you gently*No, no, this story is not yet over. There is a plan and another problem (a big one), and in the end... well, obviously I won't tell you what will happen in the end *g*Thanks for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
*hugs you gently*No, no, this story is not yet over. There is a plan and another problem (a big one), and in the end... well, obviously I won't tell you what will happen in the end *g*Thanks for reviewing!
This is a very different Severus (of course it's hime!), andwhy not, all things considered? And a blonde Hermione -don't tell me she's finding that life with Ron isn't quitewhat she thought it would be (sarcasm button). Wouldn'tshe recognise his voice though? (If he does sound likeAlan Rickman, that is).I'm going to get stuck into the next chapter right away.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
When I posted the first chapter, I didn't take into consideration that she might recognise his voice. Someone else - luckily - has pointed it out, and I added a sentence or two to solve that problem ;-)I like your sarcasm-button. And I am very grateful for your review.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
When I posted the first chapter, I didn't take into consideration that she might recognise his voice. Someone else - luckily - has pointed it out, and I added a sentence or two to solve that problem ;-)I like your sarcasm-button. And I am very grateful for your review.
That sounded like an ending... please tell me that the story's designation as a WIP is correct!I love how they accepted one another-it gave me such a feeling of rightness. Beautiful chapter.Why is Ron 'certain' to get custody? She is, and obviously always has been the primary caregiver for the children.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I'm still writing, dear. It is a WIP, and I will post the next chapter soon. I will explain about the custody problem in the next chapter. I made it up, obviously. I still hope it works.Thanks for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
I'm still writing, dear. It is a WIP, and I will post the next chapter soon. I will explain about the custody problem in the next chapter. I made it up, obviously. I still hope it works.Thanks for reviewing!
So when is the next update?? I haven't found such a great SS/HG story in a long time. I hope it continues with the same grace and passion. i love how they were exposed to each other.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
*snigger*OK, clear question, clear answer: Friday. Have to polish it up a bit, dear. Hope you'll like it. Many thanks for reading and reviewing and for the lovely words you found for this story!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
*snigger*OK, clear question, clear answer: Friday. Have to polish it up a bit, dear. Hope you'll like it. Many thanks for reading and reviewing and for the lovely words you found for this story!
What a lovely chapter! Am curious to see how this continues. Excellent!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Thank you so very much - for reading as well as for reviewing.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Thank you so very much - for reading as well as for reviewing.
What??? You've seperated them? Oh no. Why????? Okay, I trust you...you've got your reasons. Very interesting reveal.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
She really couldn't stay any longer - had she broken up with Ron right now, he would have found out about Snape. I didn't want that to happen. Thanks for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
She really couldn't stay any longer - had she broken up with Ron right now, he would have found out about Snape. I didn't want that to happen. Thanks for reviewing!
Give her a book and she opens up. Lovely.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
We are talking of Hermione here! Of course she opens up with a book. Especially because her life sort of cut her off from books and reading and goodness, I'd go mad without my books. Mad and sad and angry and even sadder. No wonder she has changed that much.Thanks so much for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
We are talking of Hermione here! Of course she opens up with a book. Especially because her life sort of cut her off from books and reading and goodness, I'd go mad without my books. Mad and sad and angry and even sadder. No wonder she has changed that much.Thanks so much for reviewing!
oh, yes...we know what we all hope is going to happen! lovely update, almost idylic. thanks so much
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
It was such a lovely summer over here when I wrote this story, and I tried to catch a bit of its flair. Thanks for letting me know you liked it!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
It was such a lovely summer over here when I wrote this story, and I tried to catch a bit of its flair. Thanks for letting me know you liked it!
This is so good. I can't wait for more. Is the blond hair her choice or her husband's?
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Hers. She doesn't talk to Ron that much, as he is out of the house most times. I guess she just wanted a change ;-)Next chapter will get posted sometime next week. Thanks a lot for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Hers. She doesn't talk to Ron that much, as he is out of the house most times. I guess she just wanted a change ;-)Next chapter will get posted sometime next week. Thanks a lot for reviewing!
Sounds like a lovely day was had by all. Just what they needed. :)
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Yep. The kids had fun, Carlos could contine to hope for more, and she found some books and made a decision. What else do we want?Thanks for reviewing, dear!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Yep. The kids had fun, Carlos could contine to hope for more, and she found some books and made a decision. What else do we want?Thanks for reviewing, dear!
Okay, so I'm a sucker for someone who's good with kids! Though at this point, given his attachment to the children, if he does throw her over at the end of her holiday, it'll make him look like a terrible brute! I admire the way you're able to move the plot along with subtle character interactions, and internal monologues! Great read.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
He has changed, dear, not only by his looks, but by his soul as well. He's no brute (and never was one, IMO), and he doesn't want to hurt her. What happens at the end of her holiday... well, you will have to wait another chapter or two.Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing. This was planned as a one-shot, but I realised that I couldn't develop the characters in a hurry. Glad you liked it!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
He has changed, dear, not only by his looks, but by his soul as well. He's no brute (and never was one, IMO), and he doesn't want to hurt her. What happens at the end of her holiday... well, you will have to wait another chapter or two.Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing. This was planned as a one-shot, but I realised that I couldn't develop the characters in a hurry. Glad you liked it!
She is so broken, so hurt in this story. I hold my fingers in a knot wishing she would find courage to stay when her time is up.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Maybe not broken, but definitely hurt. The worst thing is she didn't even realise it until now. Unhappy, unloved (by her husband), insecure concerning her looks - she needs every finger held for her. Another chapter or two and you will know if she will leave or stay.Thanks a lot for reviewing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Maybe not broken, but definitely hurt. The worst thing is she didn't even realise it until now. Unhappy, unloved (by her husband), insecure concerning her looks - she needs every finger held for her. Another chapter or two and you will know if she will leave or stay.Thanks a lot for reviewing!
This is a very enjoyable story and fast becoming one of those I most anticipate as well. I have a feeling "Tessa" may have found something -- a clue possibly -- to Carlos' former identity? Or maybe she really is now ready to take it further. I look forward to finding out next time. Thanks for sharing, JoAnne
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Whatever happens on the veranda, it will be her decision. I won't tell you if she recognised him or not. of course ;-) You will have to wait for the next chapter. I will post it sometime next week, promise.Thanks a lot for reviewing - that people are looking forward to updates is a huge motivation to continue writing!
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Whatever happens on the veranda, it will be her decision. I won't tell you if she recognised him or not. of course ;-) You will have to wait for the next chapter. I will post it sometime next week, promise.Thanks a lot for reviewing - that people are looking forward to updates is a huge motivation to continue writing!
It was so nice to see Hermione open up. What a change in Severus to see him take two small children out for the day and not be a bear. I think that his feelings are growing strong enough that when he does realize who she is, he won't be mortified! Ron and Molly are jerks.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Usually, I like Ron and Molly. But I realised that, had Hermione married him, they would be less nice simply because he's not the man for her and she not the woman for him. They just don't fit, and it would make the marriage unhappy and the mother-in-law nasty. Snape changed, too, but in a good way. No pain, no pressure, no fear. Instead, he found friends, a life, and a job he loves doing. He's not nasty anymore because he has no reason to act like the horrible man he used to be.He will be mortified. When he finds out, when he realises who she is, he will figure out that there is no way that they can ever be together. And because this is me and I am known to be a nasty author - don't believe the hints I give. They are not wrong, of course, but they are not the entire truth, either ;-))
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Usually, I like Ron and Molly. But I realised that, had Hermione married him, they would be less nice simply because he's not the man for her and she not the woman for him. They just don't fit, and it would make the marriage unhappy and the mother-in-law nasty. Snape changed, too, but in a good way. No pain, no pressure, no fear. Instead, he found friends, a life, and a job he loves doing. He's not nasty anymore because he has no reason to act like the horrible man he used to be.He will be mortified. When he finds out, when he realises who she is, he will figure out that there is no way that they can ever be together. And because this is me and I am known to be a nasty author - don't believe the hints I give. They are not wrong, of course, but they are not the entire truth, either ;-))
I was so thrilled to see another chapter of your wonderful story up again. It is wonderful that the layers of artifice that her marriage has put upon Hermione are being stripped away. It is horrid to think that Ron aided by Molly were so dismissive of her underlying nature. Snape's offer would have been like water to a woman parched beyond recognition. They really do fit together well as a couple. *sigh* Update soon - please. I really am enjoying this so.Cheers.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Although I like Snupin, too, I also think Snape and Hermione are the perfect couple. I will update on a regular basis, at least until chapter 9. As my beta, Dreamy_Dragon, had real life issues to take care of, she needs time to catch up ;-)Thanks a lot for reviewing, dear. I tried to keep this canon-compliant... we'll see where it ends.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Although I like Snupin, too, I also think Snape and Hermione are the perfect couple. I will update on a regular basis, at least until chapter 9. As my beta, Dreamy_Dragon, had real life issues to take care of, she needs time to catch up ;-)Thanks a lot for reviewing, dear. I tried to keep this canon-compliant... we'll see where it ends.
Just finished rereading your masterpiece. The end always leaves me crying. This is such a beautiful work of art, so profoundly moving and emotionally rich. Thank you for sharing this with us. At the Beach is one of my favorite fics that I've ever read.
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
*hugs* Thank you so much for your lovely review! Although I do not write fanfiction anymore, I still care a lot about the characters and just get goosebumps if someone reads my stuff and finds it enjoyable. You made my day!
Whilst the authors of the potter place challenge remained hidden, I could not help but to wonder if this was written by you. It looks like my silent ponderings were correct. Great job as always and I am greatly anticipating the continuation of this story.
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Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Hi, dear,correct indeed, all of your guesses! I'm amazed I gave away so many hints without even knowing it. Have to change a pattern or two :)Thanks for reviewing. The next chapter will gets posted after the voting.
Response from luvsev (Reviewer)
It is not so much that you have given hints, it is simply that I have read enough of your work to become familiar with your style, which continues to be lovely by the way. Keep up the good work as per usual. :)
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Response from chivalric (Author of At the Beach)
Hi, dear,correct indeed, all of your guesses! I'm amazed I gave away so many hints without even knowing it. Have to change a pattern or two :)Thanks for reviewing. The next chapter will gets posted after the voting.
Response from luvsev (Reviewer)
It is not so much that you have given hints, it is simply that I have read enough of your work to become familiar with your style, which continues to be lovely by the way. Keep up the good work as per usual. :)