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Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One)
blackeyedlily75 Reviews | 4.97/10 (75 Ratings, 0 Likes, 58 Favorites )
Written for the SS/HG Summer 2007 Exchange, which was prior to Deathly Hallows. Hermione joins the Potters for a Disney family vacation. Little did she know what surprises she would find there.
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Portkey jewellery, now that's handy!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thanks! I've gotten some good feedback on this idea.
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thanks! I've gotten some good feedback on this idea.
I, too, really love this story! It's making me want to brave the heat and humidity and visit Disney! And I loved that Malfoy's jewels were Portkeys -- great thinking!
Response from RobisonRocket (Reviewer)
Okay, so I'm a dumbass. This review should be with chapter 12!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
You have no idea how much your comments mean. Thank you!
Okay, so I started reading this when you posted the first chapter, but it got lost in my crazy world and now I'm back and have read through all these chapters.I'm really, really enjoying this story, but I feel like you could make the chapters longer by combining a couple (or three) of them into one chapter. Almost every chapter has ended in a really awkward spot and I found myself extremely happy that I didn't have to wait for the next chapter.I liked where you left this chapter. It was at the end of a scene and has left me curious about how well their operation will go. Just what will Severus discover in Mr. Eisner's office... Will be checking back for the next chapter!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thank you for your comments and your feedback. I'm glad your enjoying the story. I definitely agree with you about the chapters. This is my first fic longer than a drabble and I wrote it for the SS/HG Summer Gift Exchange '07. Once I started writing I had to deal with a number of real life crisises. So I know I rushed it a bit and that there are areas that deserved to be told in more detail. Anyways, this is the first I've posted it outside of the exchange. I'm pleased by the reception and hope to be inspired to write another "so called" full-length fic. There is plenty of room for improvement from this first time!
very fun. Have you ever worked at disney? my friend is obsessed. She works there every summer. looking forward to what happens next!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thanks for your comments No, I've never worked at Disney. I just live in Florida, and between growing up here and raising kids here I've had my share of trips to Disney. The primary reason my story took this location was that my fic was in response to a prompt from someone who wanted Hermione to come across Snape at an amusement park. I went with what I knew best.
I didn't think it would be possible to have Snape in-league with Micky Mouse...Well we certainly live in interesting times! Then Minnie Mouse (He He) and the Bond allusion...Yep you've got me reading. I love all the characterisation,s especially the children, although Harry seems a bit heavy at times. I also love the fact that Molly has a pet rat called Nibbles...My daughter's pet rat is called Nibbles also. Thanks for your story and I will be waiting for...The next chapter...One day my Prince will come...Eh? Is that a Half-Blood Prince?(He he!) ;-)
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thank you for your comments. I'm glad your enjoying my craziness. This is my first fanfic, besides a few drabbles. So I know it is lacking in a number of ways. I'm glad your following along. Just three chapters left to go. We have four pet rats and I saw the name Nibbles on some rat website. I just had to use it. Plus I loved the Mickey Mouse/rat connection for little Molly.
Those two can never escape a good adventure, can they? I'm sure things will go absolutely pear-shaped at some point however. Hopefully it isn't when Harry realizes it really is Snape.
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
I appreciate your commenting and am so pleased your enjoying the story. You must have the gift of Seeing cause our couple will find themselves in a spot of trouble.
If there are any wizards around, won't they recognise Severus and Hermione's names, being war heroes 'n' all ?
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
I guess in my interpretation of this universe the European wizards don't associate much with the American ones. That is why the Eisner family could leave Europe and get a clean start in the U.S. Thanks again for your comments and your continued reading.
Oooo, it's getting good! I'm very much looking forward to the next chapter. Thank you for your writing!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
You are so kind. Thanks for your comments. It means a lot that your enjoying it.
mmmmm... severus in a tuxedo... lucky hermione!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
It does conjure a nice picture doesn't it!
LOL way to make him speechless, bet that doesn't happen often!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Well we all know the fellow hasn't had much experience with the fairer sex. Thanks as always for your comment!
Awwwwww. He's all flustered!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
A bit! Severus is not used to receiving or giving compliments, or having a beautiful escort for that matter. Thanks for your comments.
Hmmmmm... Very interesting. Very interesting indeed.
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thank you for taking the time to comment. I hope your enjoying the story.
Well, she is just gonna knock him dead. I wonder what Harry and Ginny will think if they do get a look at her escourt! LOL!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Hopefully the following chapters will answer your question. Thanks for reviewing.
She's going to look HOT!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Definitely a change from her normal attire. Thanks for taking the time to respond.
next step. the makeover LOL!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Always a fun part of any Cinderella story! And us Snape lovers all know that Severus can clean up quite good.
I can't wait for the ball!!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
I hope you do enjoy. I will forewarn you that these last few chapters should probably be expanded. When I wrote this, for last summer's SS/HG Exchange, family issues had me in a rush at the end to make the deadline. Plus being my first fic I'm super critical of it. I'm so pleased people are reading it and responding positively!
This may be silly and fluffy, but I am enjoying it far too much anyway. Thanks for sharing such a fun time. I lived for several years in Orlando some time ago.
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thank you. Feedback like yours makes it all worth while.
Haha.. it was Snape! I can't wait to find out what he has planned during the week.
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thanks for your feedback. I'm glad your enjoying it. My next two chapters have been submitted. Hopefully they will be up soon.
LOL they don't believe her at all!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
The idea is so comical to them that they think Hermione is just playing it up.
hehe... I can't wait!!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
So glad your enjoying it! This was my first fic and so far my only full length.
Interesting story. I'm looking forward to what happens. Molly reminds me of Luna. :) She's very eccentric. I love her character though, for a five year old. Can't wait for more. I'm a huge disney fan. -Sara
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thank you for your feedback. I enjoyed writing Molly. Young children just have that great way of saying whatever they are feeling or thinking about without any filtering.
Interesting, I wonder what Harry will think of all this. Oh well, who cares. As long as Severus and Hermione get together!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Harry just thinks Hermione is trying to get a rise out of him. I certainly don't blame the guy for thinking Severus Snape at Disney World is pretty improbable.
can sympathise with them over Small World , it's so kitsch
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
I so agree! Yet I'm not sure you can say you've really experienced the Magic Kingdom without riding the Small World at least once. I never can get over how much my kids like it. They insist we ride it every time. It boogles my mind!
great chapter, sets the scene there nicely
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thank you. I appreciate your chapter by chapter feedback.
Primary school flying lessons, now there's a thought
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
I thought so. If most wizarding children are taught at home prior to age eleven, you would think there would be a need for enrichment activities. This would help the kiddies prepare for Quidditch tryouts. Just look how young we start kids with soccer and such.