Chapter 13 Senor Raton
Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One)
Chapter 14 of 15
blackeyedlilySeverus takes Hermione to meet the elusive Senor Raton.
As Hermione and Snape approached the thatched-roof cottage, Hermione felt that it looked like something out of a fairytale, perhaps Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs. Snape rapped on the door, and it was opened by a dark-haired young woman. She stared at the unexpected strangers dressed in evening attire.
“Is Senor Raton home?” inquired Snape.
Before the young woman had a chance to answer, a jovial voice was heard from inside. “Maria, ask our guests to come in.”
Hermione and Snape entered the cottage to find that the interior continued to reinforce the fairytale image. The whitewashed walls, thatched roof and wooden floors were enhanced with simple Spanish furnishings. Hanging from the broad, wooden ceiling beams was an assortment of dried and drying plants. Their aromas filled the air.
Standing in the middle of a room was a man whose mere demeanour caused Hermione to smile. There was no mistaking the resemblance to Dumbledore. While Senor Raton’s hair and beard were considerably shorter than Dumbledore’s, the twinkle in his eyes was a dead ringer.
“Severus, I had a feeling I’d be seeing you tonight, and you’ve brought such lovely company. Come in, come in, let’s go into the study. Maria, could you bring our guests some tea, please?”
Their host acted as though there were nothing odd about two people in formal wear dropping in out of the blue at his cottage in the middle of the Amazon Rainforest.
“Who is your lovely companion, Severus?” twinkled Senor Raton.
Snape introduced Hermione as a former student and colleague. He explained how he had chanced to meet Hermione at Disney World and how he had recruited her to help him accomplish his mission.
“Then I take it that you have accomplished your mission?” their host inquired.
Snape reached into a pocket and withdrew some minuscule scraps of paper. “Engorgio!” he commanded while tapping the scraps with his wand. The scraps grew to reveal numerous contracts, written on parchment.
“As I expected, I found these, and many others that I did not remove, in Michael Eisner’s office. They are contracts with certain magical entities who are placing charms on Disney products and services. It works like this: after basic manufacturing, the products receive a Compulsion Charm. Muggles who pick up, or sometimes just look, at the product are compelled to buy it. Some Muggles can fight the compulsion, but if they had any inclination to buy the product at all, it would be almost impossible to overcome the urge. There is also evidence of enchantments throughout the various amusement parks that operate the same way. The basic goal is to get Muggles to spend more than they would naturally,” Snape reported.
“The complexity of it is that these charms and enchantments are designed to act neutrally on witches and wizards. They didn’t want to risk detection by the Wizarding community, and since the American Ministry of Magic has been very lax in monitoring the situation, the likelihood of detection was slim. I expect there has been some gold changing hands at the Ministry. It would certainly fit the modus operandi in the earlier Eisner family scandal,” Snape finished.
While Snape was speaking, Senor Raton had walked over to a window and stood with his back to Snape and Hermione. With a heavy sigh, he turned to face them. He now looked every bit the old man that he was and had lost his twinkle. Maria had entered the room to serve tea, so he waited for her to finish serving before he spoke.
“I can’t say that I’m surprised,” began Senor Raton, “but I am disappointed none the less. In my haste to leave behind the identity of Walt Disney, and pursue my new dreams, I’ve left my brother Roy without the support he needed to prevent things like this from happening. I can see now that I’ll need to come back, behind the scenes of course, to help Roy clean house and make sure he has the resources he needs to succeed, including me.”
“Severus, I don’t know how to thank you. I know this was not a job you would have chosen to take on. I know Minnie McGonagall called in a favour to get you involved. You can be assured that I am forever in your debt. Rest assured that you will never lack for any potion ingredient that I can supply,” Senor Raton promised.
At this statement, Hermione actually saw Snape’s eyes light up.
“Then my time was well spent,” Severus replied.
“What about you, Ms Hermione? How can I thank you for assisting young Severus in this matter?” Senor Raton asked.
“I want nothing, sir. It is a real honour to meet you, and other than a few uncertain moments,” at which Hermione shot Snape a grin, “it has been a pleasure. I think I needed to get involved in something like this at this time. Stir things up a bit, if you know what I mean.”
At this enigmatic statement, Senor Raton looked from Hermione to Snape and back. “I think I do, my dear,” he replied.
“Well, the time is late, and I must get Hermione back before her friends worry about her,” Snape interjected.
“Yes, yes, we don’t want anyone turning into a pumpkin now, do we?” Senor Raton added with the twinkle back in his eye again.
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Latest 25 Reviews for Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One)
75 Reviews | 4.97/10 Average
Well the ending should be the beginning.
I enjoyed it evry much.
Emjoying the littel looks and the occassional thoughts of Severus.
I like her last statement to Snape its nice :)
Very interesting. Love Disneyland and Walt Disney.
LOL look forward to more of this story
Interesting start to the story.
What a great theory of mis-use of magic!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thanks again. It would be nice to think we had an excuse for buying useless soveniers. LOL.
I loved the portkey idea, I wonder if Hermione's attendence will be traced back to the Potters? Will they be in danger too?
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thank you! I've had a lot of compliments on the idea of jewelry portkeys.
The dress sounds lovely and you did a good job of describing things in this chapter.
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thanks. I always notice when authors describe such details, so I wanted to do the same.
Interesting way to begin a relationship. I guess Severus hasn't stopped spying yet lol.
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Yes, Severus is up to a bit of spying. It's reluctantly though. Thanks again for your comments.
again a very interesting back story. You are doing a wonderful job giving this story a good bit of meat to bite into.
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thanks. My biggest self-critism of this story was that it lacked the depth I would have like it to have. So your comment means a lot.
I love the back story, how creative!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thanks again. I do think Walt Disney makes a perfect wizard. He certainly brought a lot of magic to life for us muggles.
I have a feeling the Potters will be quite surprised to find out Hermione being quite truthful about their old professor.
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Yes indeed!
Nice interaction between our favorite couple! Even better Hermione had the last word.
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thanks. Yes, Hermione was quite proud to get one up on Snape.
The magic definition was really good. You are doing a great job 'blending in' the two worlds.
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thank you yet again. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I like Ginny's idea. It's perfect!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thank you. I had another reader object to the idea as elitist, seeing as advance quidditch training would create yet another area muggle borns would not have the opportunity to experience. To me it seemed like a good nitch for Ginny. Plus in my reading it seemed like most pure-bloods, or other kids growing up in the wizarding world, were supposed to be home schooled. If so it seems that pre-Hogwarts education/activities outside the home were few and far between.
Good flow in the chapter, never a dull moment.
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thanks. Any positive input on my writing style/stucture thrills me as a very novice writer.
Response from sinbad (Reviewer)
I've been reading your comments as I go along and I noticed that your regret was this story wasn't as 'deep' as you wanted it to be. Not all stories have to be 'deep' to be enjoyable, in fact, sometime I pick stories that are light and fluffy because they are so. I take it this is your first story? You did a great job. My first was The Bridge, it was 513 agonizing words long. I am now working on my first multi chapter story. Just the fact that you wereconfident and skilled enough to do a long story first run out says a lot. Don't be hard on yourself, this is a fine accomlishment.
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Awww, you've made my day again! Thanks for your words of encouragement.
Nice start, a lighthearted chapter, too bad Hermione doesn't know what shw wants to do though. I alwasys thought she was the type with a 'plan'.
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thank you for this and all your lovely reviews. I do agree about Hermione. It probably wasn't true to character, but it helped me establish her being in a bit of a personal life crisis and needing a change.
Just o touch of sinister implications in this chapter. This story is quite well rounded and developed.
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
You are too kind with your compliments, but I'll take them anyway!
Awww how sweet. I love the beginings of a romance, so careful with their words and actions.....
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thanks again. I always think Snape would be pretty awkward in such situations, and I can't imagine Hermione being too brave around him at first.
This is a cute story
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thank you.
I knew those souvenir shops at Disneyland had a conspiracy going to make you buy! :)
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
LOL! That was one of my favorite ideas for the story. Makes sense doesn't it?
Haha... I still have to giggle when I think of Walt Disney alive and kicking as a wizard.
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Thanks! I did have fun with that and making Eisner an evil wizard. LOL.
Oh, Severus got to play the hero for Hermione, even if it was his fault she was in trouble. But she has such an adventurous soul that I am sure she didn't mind!
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
Yes, it was his fault. Good thing he had some tricks up his sleeve.
I've often wondered why they didn't have portkey jewelry in canon. Glad to see you had the same idea. How sensible of you! This is a charming story, a fresh look at SSHG.
Response from blackeyedlily (Author of Hermione's Cinderella Adventure (Or a Facsimile of One))
That's cool you thought jewelry would make good portkeys. I don't think I had really thought it out until I needed a way for them to escape. Then it just seemed to work. I'm glad you are enjoying the story.