Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P)
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When Professor Snape heals Hermione's injuries after the Battle of the Department of Mysteries, they are both surprised by what they learn. The two must work together to help Harry defeat Lord Voldemort.
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age : 34
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likes : HGSS, the holes in canon that make fanfiction fun, long walks on the beach
note regarding the phoenix trilogy : I am working on it! RL events are slowing me down, but I hope to be back posting sometime over summer (2010). Wish me luck . . .
Reviews for Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P)
I'm so excited to see more. The way you've written this just keeps me coming back for more every time. You do a very good job at keeping things full of suspense!
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Thank you very much! I'm glad to hear that I've been able to keep the story interesting even though everyone already knows (pretty much) how it will end!Thanks for the review! :)
A Ha! Dumbledore checkmated by Hermione's brilliance! Perfect!Yet now.---what a heavy burden. But at least, her knowing, lifts Severus' burden...a little.And now the stage is set--for her to be HIS Phoenix, perhaps, as he was hers?Can't wait--keep it coming!
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Logic is Hermione's forte! And i tried to make sure that she'd learned just enough as part of my story, that in addition with what she learned from Harry (and JKR) she'd be able to believably work it out by herself.Knowing will be hard, but I think ultimately easier--she might have felt awfully exposed and as if she'd betrayed Harry if she had believed Snape to have been Voldy's the entire time.Thanks for the review. :)
Response from countrymouse (Reviewer)
You've done a great job building a believeable Hermione---not too much the genius, but extremely intelligent and, as JKR pointed out in the very first book, a "wiz" with logic. By the way, could you clairify something for me? When Hermione is going through her "logical outline" of the situation, she ends each section with "NB"---what does that stand for / mean? (I know it's something I should probably instantly recognize, but can't seem to.)
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
NB is shorthand for "Nota bene" or, literally, "Note well." It is generally used to mark points in the argument that support something else but are important to remember.I'm really thrilled to hear that you find Hermione believable yet intelligent. I didn't want her to be know everything effortlessly, but nor did I want her to lose any of her edge. So, thanks!
Wow, that was one great chapter!!!
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Thank you very much!!
HAhahaha Harry noticed her running having a positive effect on her body - but Ron is completely clueless! It was fun seeing Hermione's change of attitude toward running and her father's reaction was cute. But why wouldn't her parents not know about the petrifired bit? Surely the school tells parents of accidents? Parents get notice of thins - Molly sure did.
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Well, we know that the Weasleys are always turning up at the school when their students are sick, but there was no mention of the Grangers turning up. Throughout the books, they remain happy and slightly bemused by the magical world. Surely if they'd had any hint of how much time Hermione spent in danger, they'd have whipped her out of that school as a twelve or thirteen-year-old. Just my take on things, I'm sure others would see it differently.
Oh nice to see this from Severus POV instead of Harry's through a Pensieve.
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
I'm glad you didn't think it redundant! I was worried about people thinking that at this point in the story.
Interesting conversation between Severus and Hermione. The idea of physical strenght having an effect on the spells strenght a intriguing one. O btw - I'm faily sure that Harry found out about the Time-Turner. The whole save Black/Buckbeak thing?
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Sure he found out about the Time-Turner eventually, but not because Hermione told him. Harry and Ron were asking her the whole year how she was managing to go to so many classes and she refused to tell them anything.
ooh, Dumbledore is as manipulative and cold as Voldemort - only with diferent goals. Cna't he see Hermione's importance? Severus can, I'm sure even Lupin did... but DD discounts the girl. Won't Voldemort be angy when he learns that DD saw the meeting? Perhaps, he planned it that way
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Are you re-reading? :) Dumbledore is *terribly* manipulative, no surprises there. I imagine Snape showed DD all of his meetings with Voldymouldy, and that he was just a good enough Occlumens that the V-mor never knew.
Response from beaweasley2 (Reviewer)
Well, just a few chapterss... OK yes. 
You caught me! I liked this and wanted to enjoy it all over as I caught up to the new posts.
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
I'm delighted :) (Who wouldn't be?)
OH. MY. GOD. That was a highly unusual turn of events. I began to suspect that she would arrive at her conclusion when she got to the part about Malfoy trying to kill Dumbledore. My heart is beating rather heavily. I am SO excited to see what follows!
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Hey thanks! I'm so thrilled to hear that I managed to create the sense of anticipation :) I'm very familiar with the heart-thudding sense of realisation/intellectual excitement, and I spent some time trying to convey the same kind of feeling to the reader.I think Hermione's plenty smart and more-than-logical enough to have figured things out from the information she had.Thanks for the review :)
I am glad to see that she figured it out with the information she had - now Snape can honestly say to Dumbledore that he never told her. Probably the same reason he never aurally confirmed or denied her hypothesis.So, now they start with the survival plans. I wonder how Hermione will react if and when her equations resolve and she discovers that Harry is a Horcrux?I know that I was suitably horrified when I thought back to the scene in Dumbledore's Office when he was muttering over his smoking instrument after Harry witnesses Arthur's attack in OotP. I started thinking about Harry possibly being a Horcrux part way through HBP.I can't see Hermione being happy with either Dumbledore or Snape when that fact comes to light.Another fine update. I continue to wish you happey writing!~
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Oh, man, Harry-the-Horcrux is such a fraught issue. You know which bit bothered me the most?? It was when I re-worked the Dumbledore-tells-Snape-that-Harry-has-to-die scene for this story, and I realised that Dumbledore closes his eyes in the middle--right at the point when he lies to Snape. Why? Clearly it's because Snape is a Legilimens and Dumbledore didn't want Snape to realise that he thought Harry would actually survive. It really upset me!!Anyway, thanks for such an awesome review. :)
Severous seems to be really feeling the pressure now. It won't be long before her turns to Hermione for comfort!
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
:) It does seem like the best solution, doesn't it? Thanks for the review! :)
Oh, Hermione is brilliant! And Severus didn't have to actually tell her a thing! Or is tacit agreement the same as telling? I suppose he could still tell her something else to meet the requirement of the altered Arithmantic equation, in addition to what she's already reasoned out for herself...Anyway, loved her use of lists and outlines to come up with her answers--very methodical, and very Hermione! 
Can't wait to see what "life on the run" training will entail. Should be fun!
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Logic is Hermione's forte--and I imagine any girl who would make her friends colour-coded homework timetables would also be a fan of lists.I'm pleased, too, that you have noted carefully that he didn't actually tell her anything . . . hmm, I wonder what that will mean? ;)Thanks for the review. :)
Every chapter has me jumping up and down in fangirl giddiness. I just adore how you are twisting canon just a touch to make it SS/HG friendly. ((pets Grangerous))
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Oh YAY! What a lovely review! (purrs happily). THANKS :)
Ahhh. So it's McLeggan who get's the broken nose. I'm glad for Hermione- he deserves it.It is very interesting the way Snape responded to the meeting with Vector and the information that he was made privy to. I get the impression he'd rather deal with Trelawney and her tea leaves, instead of Vector and her stark equations.Good on Hermione deciding to act like an adult and forego immediate satisfaction. It was very important that she resume training. I am very happy to see that not only did she speak up for herself, she managed to get across the fact that she is not a doormat.Severus may not have meant to give her that much power over him when he apologized, but the result was a further bonding of the two of them. He was safe in making that type of weighted atonement with her. I think the memory of it will serve Hermione well in the future.Great update.
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Thank you for such an awesome review: indeed it was McLaggen! :) I imagine that Severus would be so used to maintaining a front that being around someone like Vector would be disturbing for him.I wanted to write a scene where Hermione was strong and adult, and managed to make up with Severus without just shouting at him. And I wanted him to be astounded by her willingness to forgive him, anyway, it seems like that came across, and I'm delighted that you noticed!! Thanks again for the review.
So much for promised interaction, LOL! I grinned through the whole chapter thinking of that. BTW I agree with you completely: that's how I picture them interacting, unless - or up to the point when - the fecund imagination of fanfic authors introduces an appropriate deus ex machina more conductive to a different sort of interaction. Lead on, I'll follow! :)BTW, your Dumbledore looks a lot like I see him. Scheming and biased under all that twinkling benevolence ;)
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Now, I didn't say it would be entirely friendly interaction, did I? ;)As for Dumbledore . . . now he is really a person that I'm surprised the sorting hat didn't sort into Slytherin. He fits so many of the stereotypes of that particular house. :)
That's where my previous comment should go!I hope it's all right if I copy-paste it from previous chapter 
Interesting OC, this Jocelyn Smith. I'll have to draw a list of things to keep in mind. You are scattering clues all over the chapters :))) Of course I love the (possible, yet unsaid) parallels between this child and SS' own neglected childhood.And I'm totally appreciating Severus' interaction with Minerva. And the cat. Or the scotch-lapping she-cat ('scotch' because Firewhisky, in my mind, should definitely taste like my drink of choice) and Minerva!
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
I'm glad you find Jocelyn intriguing. I invented her for a couple of reasons, one being a desire for some exploration of what *other* types of Slytherins there might be, another being a desire to think a bit more about the childhoods of Muggle-borns. Hermione's parents seem thrilled and/or bemused about the whole thing the few times they're are seen in canon, ditto with Colin Creevy's parents. But if you think about the rather grim elements of Harry and Severus' upbringings, you have to wonder whether all parents would react so delightedly to their children doing weird and inexplicable things.Before my response becomes a dissertation, I'll just say that I, too, tend to assume that Firewhisky tastes like scotch (yum!).
Interesting OC, this Jocelyn Smith. I'll have to draw a list of things to keep in mind. You are scattering clues all over the chapters :))) Of course I love the (possible, yet unsaid) parallels between this child and SS' own neglected childhood.And I'm totally appreciating Severus' interaction with Minerva. And the cat. Or the scotch-lapping she-cat ('scotch' because Firewhisky, in my mind, should definitely taste like my drink of choice) and Minerva!
Response from ihke (Reviewer)
Yep... obviously, this comment was NOT meant for this chapter. I must have inadvertently clicked the "back" button 
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Truly, you can put them whereever you like--particularly if you make a habit of saying such lovely things :)
/melikes your Greek!Vector, with her precise and detailed physical description and her openness towards Hermione. The only doubt is about the fact that awareness of one's role in the experiment under observation should nearly fatally affect his/her behaviour, changing therefore the experimental conditions (a well known example in physics is particle tracking, but the same happens in other disciplines, anthropological field included) - I wonder if this is a calculated move on Vector's part.I also like how you put us in the head of a teen aged Hermione. Her uncertainties, the way she interacts with authority figures and typical characters such as McLaggen are all points I can easily recognize and make my own :)
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
I have such a fondness for my version of Prof. Vector and thus I'm always *thrilled* when anyone else likes her too :) I think that from Vector's perspective Hermione's involvement is part of why she's useful as a helper with the matrix.Thanks, once again, for such an awesome review.
/Sniffles at poor Severus alone on the playground.Blows nose. Takes breath.Great rendition of Head of House!Snape. I can well imagine him like that. I'm perplex, however, about his pointing out that no Slith had been part of what he calls "vigilante" group, i.e. DA. He's just lectured his elder students for supporting Umbridge. How he could expect DA to be open towards those whose leading students were clearly supporting the 'enemy' is beyond me. I'd have done the same the 'trio' did, out of simple caution. I understand, however, the point you are making; only, I can't see a way out (of course, Dumbledore could have changed things, but as it was all his doing somehow....)
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
I think of it as two sides of the same coin: since the Slytherins are pretty much assumed to be evil by the rest of the school, they end up amenable to joining the wrong team as a consequence. It's a chicken and egg thing, though I agree that by the time the trio came along, things were pretty well systematised. Thank you for such a thoughtful review :)
Oh no! Cliffe! But wow what a chapter!
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Thanks! The cliffie is pretty bad, I have to admit. At least you can take some comfort in the fact that the next chapter is not too far away!!Thanks for the review :)
I wanted to let you know I am so into this story. I just sent it as a Fic Rec to Potter Place. I borrowed your explanation as to why re-telling tales don't often work for me as you were spot on. Your story is not a re-telling. It has for me, what is the hallmark of good writing and story telling: I can't stop reading it because I am afraid something will happen when I am away. I feel a good story becomes like a living entity, with the story and characters embodying a real life within the pages of the book. I can't put it down as I don't want to risk missing anything, almost as if it will go on without me in my absence. Can you just send me all the chapters now? I can't wait!
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Oh, wow! Thank you! {giddy with delight}:)I just checked on the queue, the next chapter has moved to position no 19, so it shouldn't be too long ;)Again: thank you, thank you, thank you!
OK, I am up way too late reading this fic. It is very compelling. Damn, I have to be up in 4 hours curses....
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Wow! :) Knowing that you found it compelling all the way through 19 chapters, even though you're not such a fan of the do-over story is really excellent. YAY!
Thank you so much for the update! I am firmly on Hermiones side here; Severus overstepped the bondaries and insulted and hurt her in a way that he has to atone for. The "poor Severus have issues" crap is not a free pass to behaving in a way that makes baboons look like gentlemen. Hermione deserves a decent apology, in word or action, that makes it clear that he not only aknowlegde that he went to far, but that he is deeply sorry that he did. Hermione has enough on her plate, she shouldn't have to play doormat for Severus insecurity and/or jelousy. With regards to Ron, I don't want him anywhere near Hermione so it suits me fine if you'll have her never to forgive him....
So, I guess the one who attacked Hermione at the end here, is McLaggen? No matter who it is, the person have already harmed her, forced himself on her, and I want for once to see some actual punishment for such actions. To often the "we better keep quiet and let the culprit go unpunished so we don't make any fuzz" line is used and it annoys the hell out of me. I don't care about "for the greater good", it signals that if only the culprit is important enough, he (or she) should not be held responsible for their actions, not to mention that Hermione is a worthless piece of shit that no one needs to be punished for harming.Ranting done for this time, I am so looking forward for the next update:-))
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Oh, WOW! Thank you for such an awesome review.The next chapter is, as you can no doubt see from the queue, already written and I don't want to give too much away, but, at the same time, there is so much in what you've said here that I want to respond to. For now, let me just say that I'm very much convinced with your arguments about what Hermione deserves in both situations.Thanks again for this review -- after the next chapter posts, I might come back and talk about some of your points some more.
Note to author... cliffies are bad! Don't do that again.I'm glad Hermione didn't cave to Dumbledore. And her closeness to Vector is a nice addition. Will her intense involvement with the Arithmantic calculations help her to understand exactly what happens when Dumbly is killed? You can't answer that, right?
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Hmm . . . I will say this much: the Arithmancy is in the story for a reason. What the reason is, exactly, you'll have to wait for.I feel no guilt for the cliffhanger *grin* Everyone has to have one every now and then.Thanks for the review :)
evil cliff.
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
Aye, yes. Sorry! They're pretty rare for me, but this was an opportunity that was hard to miss. Thanks for the review! :)
Another great chapter. I love Jocelyn and how Severus watches over her and the other Slytherins.
Response from grangerous (Author of Phoenix Song (or, Hermione Granger and the H-B P))
I really enjoyed thinking about how the house dynamic would be different in Slytherin from what we see in Gryffindor through Harry's eyes.Thanks for the review!