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Unkissed
chivalric325 Reviews | 6.76/10 (325 Ratings, 0 Likes, 464 Favorites )
*2008 Winner for best PWP at the New Library*
Harry and Ron play a prank on Snape, but have no idea what actions and reactions it might cause, and who will get entangled in the magic.
This is a sequel to "Valentine Mischief."
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chivalric
Member Since 2007 | 65 Stories | Favorited by 776 | 213 Reviews Written | 4,182 Review Responses
Located in Germany. Female, around 40. The first chapters of my published novels/novellas can be found here on the archive.
Other than writing, I am reading, cycling, running, and singing in a choir.
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Reviews for Unkissed
What a wonderful, hot, sad, touching story. I know it's not the kind of story that gets a sequel. But ... I'd SO love to read it. What Ron and Harry will say. And a few more scenes of happiness between Severus and Hermione. *sigh*But really, great story! Very, very hawt, but plausible - and heartbreaking, where you show Hermione's despair and how she nearly raped Severus. :-(I'm glad for the happy ending. And I just wish there was more yet to come!
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
I'm really glad you liked it. And there will be a sequel - although I don't know if you will like that one as well. I try to finish it asap, as several readers have asked for it.Maybe - maybe! - I will write an epilogue. Whichever, I will do it soon. In the next two months, I'd say.And thanks for reviewing!
That was very satisfying! I liked your entire story, but I think my favorite part, well aside from Remus and Albus thinking Severus was an imposter (what a hoot), was when Severus told Hermione she would never be allowed to hide upstairs from anyone. Such possessiveness, such pride -- way to go! It was a hot and intense story all the way through. Thanks for sharing. I look forward to your next outing, JoAnne
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Hi!Thanks for your review - I added the bit about Herminone hiding out of impulse right before posting. So I'm really glad you liked it!
Not what I expected, a bit mushy, but I can live with it. I generate waves of angst around me like a force-shield, so I can withstand the occasional bout of fluff, and it was really cute. I also loved the unexpected arrival of Remus and Albus. Nice work. Cheers.
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Mushy... urgh, sounds nasty. Just looked it up at Leo. so the ending is too soft for your tast? Too nice? Too fluffy? Not angsty enough? You would have liked them to part again for good? Well, I have a thing for happy endings, but I can promise you, my next story will be really bad and not fluffy at all.Thanks for reviewing!
Response from helshez (Reviewer)
The reconcilliation was a bit too easy IMO. I don't believe that damaged hearts heal that quickly, but I'm not the author, this is your party, I'm just the misery hanging round the punch bowl depressing everyone else. ;)
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
No, not depressing at all :-)I considered a longer come-together-part and decided against it as it would have been just delaying the obvious - they coming together again (no double entendre here!) And as they both were hurt, but both really, really wanted each other I thought "Give them what they want".And the healing... well, they have a livetime for that. BTW - an epilogue is on the way.Have a nice evening!
A brilliant ending, my dear. It's so good to see them together. Hurrah!
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Hi! Good to see you - and thanks so much for reviewing! Couldn't resist a happy ending ;-)Hugs from Germany,chivalric
I've enjoyed this story tremendously. Thank you.
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
My pleasure to write it and to read all the reviews. Thanks!
LOL, I love this ending! Beautiful! I love that your Snape also wears muggle clothes when not at Hogwarts – it seems almost taboo but I agree that I think he would be more comfortable in them. Great job!
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
I was a bit tired of all the black. And I like jeans and shirt on a lean man ;-)Thanks for reviewing, it means a lot to me!
Wow, I didn't expect that - I expected them to have sex, sure, but for him to rape her... eek! And I understand his need, and I understand that she came there of her own free will, but it's hard not to see this as very very bad - he took her against her will, and even though it would have sounded inane after-the-fact, he mad no attempt to soothe her after doing so. I assume she was a virgin? A terrible potion indeed.
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Precisely my intention - the potion to be horrible if overdosed. And how could he have soothed her? He knows he had done terribly wrong. There is no way to soothe a rape-victim... although things are a bit different here.Hope you like how it continues - and ends. Promise, she will find a way to pay him back.
Oh, so what did the boys do to Snape? Sounds like a lust potion to me - or maybe, more specifically, an... arousal potion?? Poor guy, I'm sure Hemrione will find a way to help him out ~snicker~
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Thanks for reviewing!
loved the story - the last chapter was sweet and leaves the reader to fill in her own happy ending.Thank you for the entertaining story!!
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Thanks for liking and reviewing!
Wonderful story, great writing...the rose in the crystal vase a perfect touch.
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
I must admit, I am fond of that rose ;-)Thanks for reviewing!
The ending makes perfect sense to me. Although Albus and Remus thinking he was Imperiused or Polyjuiced was very amusing. And Hermione's entrance came at the perfect time.
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Wow! I hadn't anticipated that! I though Albus was going to be far moe of a problem, and I don't know what I expected from the tortured couple. However I loved Hermione's idea of justice! Excellent chapter. Thanks!
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Details, please! You really thought he would not throw her out? You believed Dumbledore would fire him? You wanted them to kiss or kill each other???
Oh! How sad! Both Severus and Hermione deserve so much more than having to be separated from each other. I can't wait for Friday to read the next chapter, but I have to say that you have given me such a fear that the ending might not be to my liking. Whatever the ending turns out to be, you must know that this little tale of love and intrigue is a bit of a "masterwork," after all is said and done. You are very good at your craft.Beth
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Hi, Beth,and thank you so much for your review! I have so much fun writing in this universe, but I must admit, the reviews are the icing for the cake (if this is the right expression - I'm not a native speaker.)Two more chapters, and you'll know the ending. Let me know if your fears turned out to be correct!
Poor Hermione!Severus doesn't need to push her awaythat will just cause more pain.I was wondering did thay use a spell for pergancy?Now that would be a twist.Love the story.
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Actually, I didn't think of that. But she is not stupid - she wouldn't sleep with anyone without contraception of some sort. And yes, it causes her a lot of pain. But she will deal with it ;-)
This story is quite amazing...it's turned into something rather epic, don't you think?I love the realism and the earnestness found in Hermione, it seems very appropriate...
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Not that epic, as there are only two chapters to go :-) Still, I hope you will like what I come up with!
wow didnt see this comming wonderful chapter as usual dear
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!
Whew! What a story!!! I really, really, really enjoy this tale -- just as I enjoyed Valentine Mischief. When I decided to read Unkissed, and saw that it was a sequal, I decided to read Valentine Mischief first. And all that started at about 3:30 AM today -- just couldn't get back to sleep, so I decided to do a little light reading on TPP. I read some other stuff, and then Valentine Mischief and got about half way through Unkissed, when I had to tear myself away to get ready for work. Well, let me tell you, I didn't waste any time getting home from work this afternoon, to read the rest of Unkissed, and I just have to tell you that you gotta get the rest of the story posted because I'm going outta my mind to find out what happens to Hermione and Severus!Well done! You really know how to hold the reader's interest. And I think I'll go read some more of your writings while I wait for the rest of Unkissed.Sincerely, Beth
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Hi, Beth,well, I'm immensely glad that I've managed to hook you *beams*Promise, the next chapter will go into the queue on Friday, the last one in about a week. So you won't have to suffer too long for finding out what will happen and if I am evil enough to probide a nasty ending...
Response from braye27 (Reviewer)
Well .... you are certainly evil enough to have hinted that you might be "evil enough to provide a nasty ending....." Break my heart, why don't cha! Truely, I can't wait to find out what happens. You're a great story teller.Beth
Wow......just Wow! Sooooo intense! I really think this could surprize a lot of HGSS shippers, it's certainly had me glued to my screen. Am enjoying this immensely, by all means keep up with your amazing talent.
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Your review gave me goose bumps all over!*shivers and grins excitetly*Thank you for your lovely words, hope you will enjoy the rest of the story!
Love it! Just desserts for Harry and Ron. :) I'm looking forward to reading the rest.
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Oh, that last bit was so cruel
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
:-) Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Oooooh! A taste of thier own medicine (hehe!). But Hermione really was a dear giving them the lubrication charm - nicer than I would be! The boys actions (no thoughts really now was there?)reminded me of a saying "A little knowledge is a dangerous thing", which I looked up on http://www.phrases.org.uk/meanings/10400.html
First used by Alexander Pope (1688 - 1744) in An Essay on Criticism, 1709:"A little learning is a dangerous thing; drink deep, or taste not the Pierian spring: there shallow draughts intoxicate the brain, and drinking largely sobers us again." So drink up boys! It certainly will be sobering!Also nice little twist to add the binding properties of virgin's blood - Adds to the magnitude of the boy's crimes and returns us to the emotional angst of SS/HG relationship after a smiling Snape.Thanks for another great chapter.Cheers,Reets
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
I hereby confess that I added the sentence "a taste of their own medicine" after I'd read your review :-) Thanks for that!And Hermione is a nice person. Plus, they are her friends - and I suppose it would hurt a lot without lubrication...Thanks for your review - I am looking forward to your opinion on the next chaper!
Response from reets67 (Reviewer)
Oh wow! I have never had that happen before! - Eeek! :-) Thankyou so much!Hmmm re. the extra charm... Yes she is nice. In real-life I most likely would be nice...but it's amazing the persona you can develop when writing! (Mwwahaha!) By the way your reply has jogged the memory of the little devil on my shoulder who is reminding me of AR's dialog in Robin Hood:Prince of Thieves (Oh the cross-over!)-Guy of Gisborne: Why a spoon, cousin? Why not an axe? Sheriff of Nottingham: Because it's DULL, you twit. It'll hurt more. http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0102798/quotesOK. Better go. :-) This is getting silly!Cheers,Rita.
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Tell me about it! I have written a real dark and bitter One-shot about Snape, will post it after Unkissed is completed. I was most surprised that I could come up with something like that!And I tend to take my reader's opinions seriously. So if you comment again, your words might even trigger a plot bunny ;-)Hugs from Germany, chivalric
What a truly sad chapter - how could he show her out with her crying - Severus is so foolish. I cannot wait to see what you write next.
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Foolish, insecure, and her teacher. I really think he didn't have another choice.Thanks for reviewing!
aarrrgghh. of course severus had to get all noble and self-sacrificing, or he wouldn't be the severus we know and love. i liked how you described the scene where he wakes up and gradually remembers what the heck happened to him. very well done. and of course hermione's revenge was perfect. as always i am looking forward eagerly to the next. : )
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
:-) Thank you so much. Next chapter will be in queue around Friday.And I really had great fun writing the wake-up scene!
Interesting twist-- that he is still under a compulsion of a different kind while she is not. Hermione's revenge is brilliant, of course. Dumbledore's reaction is a little confusing to me, but it may be that you're reflecting the pov of the observers, who are misreading his true motives in different ways.One correction: Here: "his skin wouldn't react so bitterly aggressive anymore" both bitterly and aggressive are modifying the verb react-- so they both have to be adverbs (end in -ly) to be correct. You'll either have to pick one, or stick an "and" between them. I like them both though-- aggressive is an interesting and unusual choice there.Again, well done and thanks for sharing this. Look forward to more soon.
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Wasn't sure if the revenge wasn't too obvious, but it seems most readers liked it. Too harmless, maybe, but then - no Quidditch for days *smirk*Will add an "and" asap! Thanks for pointing that out to me.And are you sure she isn't under a compulsion of some sort? Really, really sure? *looks innocently towards the ceiling*Now, Dumbledore's reaction - how is it confusing you? Let me know, sometimes it's the reader who point out things to me I have overseen.
Response from hobgoblinn (Reviewer)
I'll have to go back and reread, but briefly, Dumbledore obviously knows what went on here. Snape seems to be reading him as disapproving/ playing don't ask don't tell, but there's this interesting thing he says when he notices Hermione's note and tea and sandwiches-- she cares for him. He accedes to Snape's demand to send her to Beauxbatons, but he also says he isn't sure that's the right decision. So many fics have Dumbledore as matchmaker and Mr. Obvious, but it's a lot more subtle here, and for once if he's in their corner, neither partner seems to get that yet. They think he's willing to cover up an indiscretion that reflects badly on them and the school. Dumbledore is not wholeheartedly approving of how this relationship came about, and both partners have enough guilt about that on their own that it's blocking out any other signals Dumbledore might be sending, at least just now. I guess I was trying to say some mixed signals are there, just more subtle than in a lot of fics, and well done for that. I didn't mean confusing so much as subtle. Blame it on post camping trip fatigue.And Hermione's compulsion is easily explained by basic human psychology-- she's had her first through 50th? sexual experience in a small space of time with a guy she was already fond of and attracted to, and she's had her modesty and her personal boundaries torn down in the process, at least with him. Shared trauma also bonds people. If there's a magical mystical component to it, I haven't seen the evidence yet, but I kind of hope there's not, because it's already going to be a mess trying to build anything from the mess that's here now. Having skipped all the steps that lead people from attraction to friendship to lovers to partners in a lasting sense, how are they going to go back and pick up the missing elements and give themselves to each other freely? Some separation, painful as it is, might be the only thing that will save them.And blame freebasing of cold medicines for the excessively long response.
Response from chivalric (Author of Unkissed)
Wow, what a detailed review - I love it!And as I tend to give hints in my responses - no one should read this who isn't up to some minor spoilers :-)1. Dumbledore doesn't know anything, but he's suspicious. He knows Hermione, he knows Snape very well - and he has no chance to confirm his supspicions without forcing either of them into a confession. Thus the mixed signals. He doesn't want to do that, and he won't play matchmaker either - I think a headmster couldn't do that under the circumstances, no matter what he thinks about it personally. Teacher-student-relationship is an absolute No for anyone with morals. Still, he cares for Snape (in my world, at least, we won't talk about the official version where he gives a damn). And he sees some hard times coming up for Snape, knowing that he sends the girl away.2. Hermione's compulsion... now you have a basic idea there, but I won't say you are completely right. It certainly is psychologically (although there could be a magical component *grin*)Your second to last sentence is intersting... I could tell you the title of the next chapter, of course, but I won't do it. You will have to wait until next week, sorry.Hope your cold is better :-)Hugs,chivalric