Love's Battle Revisited
jmlane5731 Reviews | 8.45/10 (31 Ratings, 0 Likes, 6 Favorites )
A married, albeit estranged, Harry and Hermione return to England after ten years in America, unsure of the reception they will receive because of the way they originally left.
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Member Since 2006 | 30 Stories | Favorited by 14 | 6 Reviews Written | 33 Review Responses
I have been a Potter fan from day one but just recently started writing fic for it. I presently have roughly thirty stories completed, at least four of them novel-length, and about eleven (yes, eleven) WIPs. I'm most into the canon pairings of Harry/Ginny and Ron/Hermione, but if a story is written well enough, I'll check out Harry/Draco, Draco/Hermione and even a threesome with Harry, Draco and Ginny.
Reviews for Love's Battle Revisited
Good chapter, but Ginny set Harry up for some intense questions from his kids, depending on where the story goes.
I'm a bit pissed of with Ginny right now.
Where does she get the okay from Harry/Hermione to tell "their" girls about what's happening and they have another sibling.
Personally she didn't have the right to say a word. I would love it if someone would throw a monkey wrench into that relationship. Things seem to be going along to smoothly.
If Hermione had decided to pop in and overhear what was being said I think there would have been an explosion and poor harry (yeah right-would deserve it) would be without poo gin again.
Sorry about the rant it just burned me up that Ginny had the audicity to say things that aren't even her place.
Thanks a bunch.
good story.
Another great chapter, too bad Ron went on a binge but I kind of expected it since it was quite a blow. Sad situation all around, but its starting to look up!
What right does Harry have to "stare green daggers" at Ginny? If he wants her back, he should be repentant, even in the face of her anger, which she is totally justified in feeling. I also think Ginny lets Hermione off the hook too easily at the end of this chapter; Hermione was hardly an innocent party in this deception.The dialogue is flowing better by this chapter. A few of your descriptions are a bit long and tedious, and they don't need to be repeated so many times in the exact same words. Of course, it's easier to say this, since I'm not the writer, than it might be to do it.Overall this is a good premise, and I'm interested to see where you take it.
An interesting premise, a little different than any I've read before. I'm interested to see how the story develops, so I'll keep reading, though I feel that your writing is not flowing very smoothly, especially the dialogue. It feels stilted and jerky when I read it. Of course, writing smooth dialogue is easier said than done, I'm sure.
Oh my this is shaping up as a very sad story. I can understand Harry wanting to get away, but he didn't do it right. I hope things will get happier. Will Snaoe make an appearance?