Nightmares
Chapter 7 of 8
muzicfan5Hermione has a Time Turner accident and ends up nearly 20 years in the past. Will she get stay on her Gryffindor path or be seduced by the dark arts?
ReviewedChapter Six: Nightmares
Hermione awoke with a start. She was breathing heavily and found herself entangled in her bedding. She glanced around her nervously, orienting herself and making sure that the nightmare had passed. She was ensuring that it truly was a nightmare, and that an attacker wasn’t lurking in the corners of her four-poster bed. This wasn’t the first time she had awoken in a cold sweat, fearing for her life. The scary part was that the dreams always felt so real, even after she was awake. Hermione could never fall back to sleep after one of these dreams. She was always terrified that she would drift back off and pick up the dream where it had left off. It was at these times that she would get up and get ready for class or take a walk.
Hermione looked at her watch and saw that it was only three in the morning. It was far too early to get up and ready for class, but the last place she wanted to be was in her bed. She decided to go read in the common room. She reached for the book on her bedside table. She didn’t care what it was; she just wanted to get out of her room as soon as possible.
Hermione pulled on a robe and shuffled out of the dormitory, walking as quietly as possible. She didn’t exactly get along with her roommates, or most of her housemates for that matter; everyone tried to stay away from her. Regardless, she did her best to be polite and courteous to them all, to a point at least. Entering the common room, Hermione selected a chair right in front of the fireplace and pointed her wand at the hearth. The embers in the grate roared to life with fresh gusto. The fire transfixed Hermione for a few minutes. There was a far away look in her eyes as the nightmare played over in her head. It was always dark, too dark to be able to make out faces and some of the finer details. There was a man. She knew it was a man because he had a broad build and his voice was deep and gruff. There was an edge of craziness and desperation in it whenever he spoke.
Hermione shook her head, trying to clear away the thoughts. It was scary enough when it happened; she didn’t need to replay it to herself throughout the day, too.
Hermione opened the book to a random page and began reading again.
Chapter Twelve: The Unforgivable Curses
The Unforgivable Curses were not always unforgivable. In the early 19th century, the curses were widely used by rulers and kingdom officials. The Imperius Curse was used to control townsfolk who refused to do the ruler’s bidding. There was also the Cruciatus Curse, which was used to torture the townsfolk into submission, or to serve as a reminder that one should always do as their master desires. When subjects became out of control, or had ceased to serve their purpose, they were often disposed of with the Killing Curse. The biggest known user of the curses was Mizer Damian, sometimes called Mizer Damian the Brutal.
A widely rumoured, never confirmed, piece of information is that Mizer Damian had been shopping in a Muggle area when he came across several books, including the Fascist Doctrine, as well as several other books that were typically considered Communist or Socialist propaganda. Well, whether it was fact or rumour, something got a bug into Mizer Damian’s ear, and there was an uprising. The government, as it had been known, was overthrown in a coup.
Things were going well initially, but the more confident Mizer Damian became that there wouldn’t be an uprising to destroy him, the more far-fetched his ruling became. He became obsessed with blood purity. He began rounding up all the Squibs and other magical outcasts and torturing them or using them for experiments. The magical world was collapsing and everyone was scared. In an effort to produce stronger, more magical offspring, witches and wizards began only marrying the most pure in blood.
The rationale being that the more magic the parents have, the more magic the children should have. Unfortunately, magical bloodlines aren’t the only reason Squibs are born. Being born a Squib is also a form of birth defect. When genetic make up is too similar, there are more likely to be problems, like deformities and lack of magic.
Disturbed by her reading and yet so comfortable in the peace of the common room, curled up on the chair, Hermione’s head drooped to one side. The warmth from the fire, and the comforting feeling of the bathrobe nestled against her, was luring her back to sleep. She drifted off smoothly with her nightmares a distant memory. She slept peacefully initially.
Her peace didn’t last long. Less than an hour after she had dozed off in the chair, she found herself running through her childhood home. She was trying to hide from that lunatic. He was chasing after her. He held the butcher’s knife as he ran. Her heart beat faster as she ran up the stairs. Turning around, glancing behind her, she saw he was closing in on her. His legs were so much longer than hers were. One of her steps seemed like three of his. She stumbled as she glanced behind her again. She was falling down the stairs now, closer to her predator. She had to be falling in real life too, because she could feel her body shaking.
Terrified and rather disoriented, Hermione drew her legs closer to her chest and attempted to wrap her arms around herself, into the foetus position. Her preventative measures didn’t work; she was still shaking, but her dream was dwindling into the back of her mind. She was no longer asleep, and she was sure that the man with the butcher’s knife was not the one with his hands on her shoulders. Hermione opened her eyes and saw Severus looking down at her. His face showed his concern, and Hermione thought she saw a bit of a protective streak somewhere in his eyes.
“Sev. Hey.”
“Hermione, is everything alright? You were sleeping in the common room, and you were thrashing about in your sleep. Were you having a bad dream?”
“Like you wouldn’t believe.”
Severus opened his mouth slightly as if to ask something, but he wasn’t sure if he had a right to pry and ask what the dream was about.
“Well, if you ever want to talk about anything, I’m here.”
Hermione smiled at him. She figured he wanted to know what the dream was about, but she didn’t want to tell him. She would figure this out for herself. She would figure out how to make these dreams stop.
Authors Notes :I know it’s been forever and I do apologize. I lost my motivation and then had no time ever. I hope to have updates that are more frequent soon. Thanks for hanging in there!
revision I completly forgot to thank my wonderful beta (hp4freek) who did a fabulous job editing this chapter! I also forgot to thank Liz (The Queen of Squick) for kicking my tail and feeding me ideas when needed.
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27 Reviews | 6.41/10 Average
This is a wonderfull story, I realy like where this is going. And also very realistic in my opinion.
But... I don't know if you can change the words in this story, even though it is already 'published'. But I think that if you can, you might like too change the sequence of this following sentence:
"One of her steps seemed like three of his."
it makes more sence if HIS steps were three times larger then HERS. ;). It just 'pulled' me out of the story a bit. But it puled me out, wich meas I was IN! And that was most definitely the case. Now I will dive right back in, THANKS FOR WRITING THIS! KoenTje
Oh please do continue with this. I am enjoying it immensly :)
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
i've been trying to get back into this story and my muse doesn't seem to want to cooperate. i do intend to write more, but i'm really not sure when it will happen. sorry for the wait.
Please do continue your story! You have it set up so that so many interesting things could happen. I'd like to see Sev/Hermione develop more, I'd like to see some interaction with the Marauders, and I'd like to see something happening with Voldemort. Creative story so far~!
So funny . . . .The characters are a bit OOC, but it works. Really entertaining. I'm looking forward to the next update!
Hi Again there havn't been any updates in a while. And this is such a good story. When do you think there will anothere chapter?
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
i haven't thought about this story in ages. perhaps i'll re read it sometime soon and see if i get inspiration that goes along with what i was doing previously. thank you so much in your interest! ended up reading a bunch of reviews tonight and i'm pleased to see how many nice things people have written!
Sence the title of this chapter is prologe does that mean the storie is almost over?...that would really bite...Ididn't notice its title the first time i read it that is why you are geting my review now...sorry it took so long.One more thing it is unrelated to the story.Are you planing on going into writing professionaly?
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
the title defaulted to that and i forgot to change it oops. i think i can wrangle a few more chapters out of this and no i never thought about going into writing professionally. but i'll take it as a compliment anyway. thanks!
Update!
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
well, since there was an angry mob to be had, i guess i'm going to have to get myself into a writing frenzy. i'll have an empty home and 2 days off next week which means i can be a productive little one.
Response from pickles (Reviewer)
excellent.
we thought you would see it our way. lol
how was your Christmas?
Happy New Year.
Awwwww... That was really cute. Can't wait to read more.
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
I'm glad you liked it! thanks for reading!
hahahaha. such a slytherin. hair care potions my booty! lol. Love it babe! keep it up!
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
Thanks for reading! more should be posted soon 
Researching behind the curtains. Is that a new one?? lol.
great chapter. I was tickled to see an update. Something to read while I eat my breakfast.
Thank you.
Patty
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
I had legitimately meant studying behind the curtains, but that does make quite a nice innuendo. hehe. thanks for reading!
looks like your off to a wonderful start with this story. waiting for more.
p
ps that dumbledore - sometimes i wonder if he should have his own matchmaking service. lol
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
that man knows too much for his own good lol.
wonder why he left the other student stay?
good introduction. onto the story.
hee hee hee! wow. bloody brilliant.
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
Thanks! the writing process seems to be progressing well so more should be posted soon! thanks for reading!
Hello! I'm just reviewing to tell you that you have great potential with this story. It is very unorthodox, but extremely entertaining as well. :) I can't wait to read more. I would have posted reviews on all the chapters, but I'm feeling extremely lazy, hee! and I have to work on a banner for a fellow Ravenclaw ... long story. So, with that said ... let me get to it! :D
Prologue - ****
I like how you've explained the reason for Hermione's change. Background is always lovely.
I know you mentioned that this was OOC, but I'm hoping that you will explain the reason for Dr. Granger's decline ... besides the death of his wife. Because I have read further in your story, I know that Hermione suspects that her father killed his wife. I'm sure that there is something in this! :) Hermione wouldn't have said it if there weren't. I can't wait to find out what his reasoning was.
Also, I was wondering what type of abuse Hermione is suffering. Is it general? Or limited to hitting... etc. Just a thought... :)
Uh... a bit of critique. (One of my favorite things to do). You really don't need to change this, really, it's simply my own, personal preference. You really have a gift for writing though, make no mistake. Just trying to help, :).
"Her wit was fully in tact, however, giving her a sharp tongue and sarcasm that could make Severus Snape a very proud man."
Well, so I lied. This does need to be changed, hee! I believe the "in tact" should be changed to "intact," one word. I don't think you're talking about a state of mind or action (tact) you're saying that she was 'intact.' Hehe, very confusing, sorry...
The other bit of con. crit. I had for that sentence was that it "WOULD make Severus Snape a very proud man." The way you have it, "could," it almost seems to me ... that Hermione's sense of sarcasm, if it ever reached Snape's ears, has the potential of making him proud. However, if you change it to 'would,' it seems like Snape is doing the action instead of Hermione. Ah, but that's just me being picky. Hee! :) You don't necessarily have to change it.
The Time-Turner - ****/
This chapter was very entertaining. I wonder if Sam is, in actuality, Minerva? The heavy Scottish accent got me thinking, hee! This bit here really supports the idea that Sam is actually Minerva: "...she had only known a grip like that to belong to Professor McGonagall herself." Am I wrong? Although, I suppose that if Tom Riddle, who wouldn't be known as Voldemort although I understand that you are using creative license :), is now a crooked politician, Minerva would also be out of school. *sigh* I don't know. I'm overanalyzing when I needn't be. This really is a great story. I'm just so passionate about things. tsk, tsk, tsk... moving on.
The only bit of con. crit. I have for you, though, is that Hermione's transition from contemplating the time-turner shifts rather quickly to the girls' dormitory. Perhaps if you seamed it together with a transitory paragraph?
The Headmaster's Office ****
I truly enjoyed your characterization of Headmaster Dippet. :) Very fun! The only bit of crit. I had was that the Hat seemed to place Hermione very quickly. However, as you explained the Hat's reasoning, I think it's completely suitable if you just want to leave it that way. :) Again, I'm overanalyzing.
Oh, by the way, I absolutely adored Severus's comment, "Take a picture, it'll last longer." Hee! Ha! Funny! I laughed so hard. Great comment. Snarky but not jaded yet. I hope Hermione can change this Snape for the better.
I loved the way in which you wrote of Hermione's first encounter with the Slytherin Common Room. The password was fantastic. Thank you for the clarification of it. :)
Slytherin - *****
I can see why this is your favorite chapter so far, it's my favorite, too. Really nice job on the tender beginnings of Severus and Hermione's budding relationship. I hope they become best of friends! What a laugh that will be. :)
Also, I can't wait to see the reaction of Hermione when she meets the Marauders and Lily. I do so hope that you find time to continue the story.
Although I have commented (excessively) on your wonderful story and con. crit-ted it to death, :P, please know that I'm only trying to be constructive and I truly enjoyed this. Well done!
~Julia~
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
Thank you so much for reviewing and letting me know how i can improve! i really do apprecaite it. I edited slightly taking your advice. i added a paragraph to time turner and i fixed the sev thing in the prologue like you suggested. i'm hopeful that the sorting hat will explain itself in future chapters, and i really like the suggestion that you made in regards to dad's history. perhaps thats something to get into at a later date.
i'm trying my best to continue writing, i got in a bit of a slump and couldn't find anything i really liked to continue on. i have the next chapter written, but i didn't really want to post it until i was a chapter ahead of myself. I'm sure that the marauders will make an appearance in the story at some point, but fair warning, they won't be shown in a good light at all.
Thank you so much for the constructive critisium, it gave me a lot to think about and perhaps some inspiration. now all i need is time to actually write...good thing i'm starting a second job in a few days. LOL 
thanks for reading and reviewing!
Jen
I really like this so far. Please update soon!~Sarah
interesting chapter. i look forward to hermione as a slytherin
Um quick question... about Dumbledore... didn't he become Headmaster of Hogwarts the year Lupin, James, Sirius, and Snape became students? I thought that was how Lupin was allowed to attend Hogwarts while being a werewolf, that and the willow. ~scampers off to hp-lexicon to see if she is insane~ Very interesting story by the way! I have a special interest in SS/ HG's that start in his time. I like that you have decided to put Hermione in Slytherin... that makes it EXTRA fun!!! I hope you get the time for an update soon!~*~Selene~*~
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
true story about the timeline. i took my creative lisence and tweeked it to what i wanted it to be. that's the beauty of AU :)
thanks for reading/reviewing, i hope to write more soon.
If you've lost motivation, what can I say who have not had the chance to guess where the story is going? Judging by the title, Hermione is meant to become evil at some point. Once you reach that point, I might know what to tell you and, maybe, boost your motivation (or not).
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
Thanks for the kind words. It's currently more an issue of time than motivation. I work about 70 hours a week, and i don't think anyone really wants to write at one am, or even three am, knowing that they have to get up for 9 or 10 the next morning... I'm making it a goal to finish this story in a timely manner.
thank you for a new chapter. seems things are progressing for sev.
Interesting. I hope you find time to continue.
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
i've been a writing fiend when i've had time. hopefully more will be posted in about a week!
Oooh... this story is cooking up to be really good. I'm bookmarking it so I don't miss what comes next.
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
that's so awesome! that means a lot coming from you, seeing as you have to at least browse everything that gets submited to the site. Thanks!
Yes! At last they kiss! I'm really enjoying the story so far. I hope you update soon!