The Time-Turner
Chapter 2 of 8
muzicfan5Adjustments in the past.
ReviewedThank you to my lovely beta hp4freek!
Chapter One: The Time-Turner
She unrolled the socks, taking particular care with them. She still had the Time-Turner that was issued to her during her third year. She had never actually returned it to her Head of House, Minerva McGonagall. Hermione hadn't used it since Harry and she had gone back in time to save both Buckbeak from his execution and Sirius Black from the dementor's kiss. She held the precious piece of time in her hands, gently caressing the hourglass shape. She wanted to go back in time to prevent what happened to her mother.
Honestly, if she was going to start meddling with time, there are a lot of things she would change... However, one of the stipulations to being issued a Time-Turner was that you weren't to meddle with time lines intentionally.
Hermione stood at the foot of her bed thinking; an internal battle was raging within her. Part of her wanted to go back in time and prevent Lord Voldemort from ever coming into power, the other half of her, the more sensible half was telling her that she shouldn't meddle with time. It's against the rules!
Hermione was lost in her thoughts when she felt a familiar sensation. She felt time speeding up around her, though it wasn't going forward; it was going behind her. She must have been absentmindedly stroking the Time-Turner and set it to go backwards. Time kept spinning, though. It didn't stop after only going back an hour to two. Where the hell am I? Ignore that question; I'm in the girls' dormitory in Gryffindor Tower. The better question is; what time is it? What year is it, for that matter? I don't recognise a single girl here!
"Who are you?" a blonde girl with a heavy Scottish accent asked Hermione.
"I could ask you the same question." Hermione had let the snide comment out before she could so much as bite her tongue, let alone satisfy her curiosity.
"Don't give me any cheek, girl. I could call the Head of House in after you."
"Please do call Professor McGonagall in; she'll know exactly what to do!"
"McGonagall? Who the bloody hell is Professor McGonagall? Professor Dumbledore is the Gryffindor Head of House."
"No, Professor Dumbledore is the Headmaster." That's when it dawned on Hermione. It hit her harder than a ton of bricks. She quickly added to her previous statement, "What year is it?"
The blonde girl looked confused, but answered the strange girl anyway. "The year is 1977. It is September the first, and I am a sixth year. You can call me Sam."
Hermione thought rapidly. How in the name of Merlin had she ended up travelling back nineteen years? She had only been fiddling with her Time-Turner. Even if she had managed to accidentally turn it backwards, it should have only sent her back a few hours at best! Nineteen years? She needed to talk to someone, and quick!
Hermione decided that her best option was to be kind to this Sam girl, and ask to speak to someone straight away. "Sam. My name is Hermione. I'm not sure how I ended up here," she lied. She knew how she had gotten there; well, for the most part anyway. "If you could just take me to Professor Dumbledore's office..." She wasn't sure what else to say. Luckily, Sam decided not to put up a large fight.
Hermione felt a hand clench around her arm as she was pulled down the stairs to the common room and brought to the office; she had only known a grip like that to belong to Professor McGonagall herself. Sam knocked sharply on the door, hoping the owner was indeed sitting within. If Professor Dumbledore wasn't, Sam made a silent oath to herself to take Hermione to each Head of House, until they found someone home.
Just as Sam had been about to turn on her heels and drag Hermione with her, the door opened. Hermione examined Headmaster Dumbledore...no, in this time he's Professor...Professor Dumbledore looked younger. His hair was still a silver grey, but there were noticeably less wrinkles on his face. His brilliant blue eyes twinkled just as much as she remembered, if not more so. He stood proud and tall, but there was a smile on his face.
"Professor! Sir, I'm glad you were here!" Sam hadn't been able to say much else before she was cut off.
"And who is this, Miss Pikett?" Professor Dumbledore asked with genuine interest.
"This, sir," she nodded in the direction of her clenched hand, "is Miss Hermione..."
"Hermione Granger, sir," she answered for Sam.
"Miss Granger. To what do we owe the pleasure? I don't recall seeing your name in the book, which held all the names of the incoming students. I also don't recall seeing you being sorted at the feast this evening. Nor do you look the part of a first year; if I had to guess I'd say you were a sixth or seventh year."
"I was...am a sixth year, sir."
"Here? At Hogwarts?"
"Yes, sir. I... May I come in?"
"Certainly, dear." Albus moved aside and let the girls shuffle into his office. He gestured to the chairs facing the front of his desk. "Lemon drop?" He presented a bag towards the girls. Sam shook her head.
"No, thank you." Hermione sighed, trying to figure out the best way to phrase her 'accident,' though nothing was really coming to mind that didn't sound crazy. I guess I should start at the beginning. "Well, sir, when I was in my third year I was taking too many classes to make it to all of them at the same time. I wanted to learn everything! My Head of House, Professor Minerva McGonagall, went through the proper Ministry channels. She obtained for me a Time-Turner. I used it to get to all of my lessons on time. It came in handy at the end of the year, when Harry and I saved..." Hermione realised she was telling too much, and abruptly stopped herself. "Well, anyway, I never turned it back in, which is wrong, I know. Well, I came across it just after I had moved back into Hogwarts. I had brought it out and got lost in my thoughts. I can only guess that I must have been stroking it absentmindedly. I felt like I was being pulled through time quickly. Next thing I knew, I was being accosted by Sam here, for being in her dorm room."
"What year was this? It was September the first in 1996," Hermione answered the question before he had time to ask.
"Why, Miss Granger; that means you've travelled back nineteen years!"
"Of that I am aware, sir." Hermione couldn't help her statement from sounding so snide.
Ignoring her blatant rudeness he pressed on. "Tell me, what house were you in?"
"I was in Gryffindor, sir. Though with recent events that have happened in my life, I think it would be in my best interest to be resorted..."
"I hardly think unintentional time travel warrants a resorting." Despite his appearance of dissuading her, he couldn't help but note the similarities in personality to a certain Slytherin he knew.
"With all due respect, sir, there have been a lot of changes in my life over the past five years I've spent at Hogwarts. The most drastic of which have been in the past four months. I think the most recent changes are worth a chance at being resorted."
"What changes do you speak of, Miss Granger?"
Hermione couldn't help herself. This very thought had been nagging her for four months, with no one to tell. "I think my father killed my mother. It was a violent death; a terrible tragedy, and completely devoid of magic. It wasn't Voldemort's style, if you know what I mean."
"You're fighting Voldemort in the future? He's nothing more than a lousy politician right now."
"He's far worse than a politician, sir. He slowly gains power over the next ten years...maybe I shouldn't be telling you this; I've already said more than I should have."
Professor Dumbledore nodded solemnly at the girl in front of him. "Well, I can take you up to the Headmaster's office. You may speak with him and try to figure out why you were brought back so far. If we can't find a suitable solution, we'll see about getting you resorted."
"Thank you, sir."
"Miss Pikett, you are excused back to your common room. I daresay I'm capable of handling this situation from here." He smiled at his student and she murmured a 'Thank you, Professor.' She scampered back to the portrait of The Fat Lady to enter into her common room.
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Notes: Dates are based on the HP lexicon timeline. I know it's out of canon with Dumbledore as Head of House, but I wanted to write him in that role while leaving the previous Headmaster in that role as well.
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27 Reviews | 6.41/10 Average
This is a wonderfull story, I realy like where this is going. And also very realistic in my opinion.
But... I don't know if you can change the words in this story, even though it is already 'published'. But I think that if you can, you might like too change the sequence of this following sentence:
"One of her steps seemed like three of his."
it makes more sence if HIS steps were three times larger then HERS. ;). It just 'pulled' me out of the story a bit. But it puled me out, wich meas I was IN! And that was most definitely the case. Now I will dive right back in, THANKS FOR WRITING THIS! KoenTje
Oh please do continue with this. I am enjoying it immensly :)
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
i've been trying to get back into this story and my muse doesn't seem to want to cooperate. i do intend to write more, but i'm really not sure when it will happen. sorry for the wait.
Please do continue your story! You have it set up so that so many interesting things could happen. I'd like to see Sev/Hermione develop more, I'd like to see some interaction with the Marauders, and I'd like to see something happening with Voldemort. Creative story so far~!
So funny . . . .The characters are a bit OOC, but it works. Really entertaining. I'm looking forward to the next update!
Hi Again there havn't been any updates in a while. And this is such a good story. When do you think there will anothere chapter?
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
i haven't thought about this story in ages. perhaps i'll re read it sometime soon and see if i get inspiration that goes along with what i was doing previously. thank you so much in your interest! ended up reading a bunch of reviews tonight and i'm pleased to see how many nice things people have written!
Sence the title of this chapter is prologe does that mean the storie is almost over?...that would really bite...Ididn't notice its title the first time i read it that is why you are geting my review now...sorry it took so long.One more thing it is unrelated to the story.Are you planing on going into writing professionaly?
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
the title defaulted to that and i forgot to change it oops. i think i can wrangle a few more chapters out of this and no i never thought about going into writing professionally. but i'll take it as a compliment anyway. thanks!
Update!
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
well, since there was an angry mob to be had, i guess i'm going to have to get myself into a writing frenzy. i'll have an empty home and 2 days off next week which means i can be a productive little one.
Response from pickles (Reviewer)
excellent.
we thought you would see it our way. lol
how was your Christmas?
Happy New Year.
Awwwww... That was really cute. Can't wait to read more.
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
I'm glad you liked it! thanks for reading!
hahahaha. such a slytherin. hair care potions my booty! lol. Love it babe! keep it up!
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
Thanks for reading! more should be posted soon
Researching behind the curtains. Is that a new one?? lol.
great chapter. I was tickled to see an update. Something to read while I eat my breakfast.
Thank you.
Patty
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
I had legitimately meant studying behind the curtains, but that does make quite a nice innuendo. hehe. thanks for reading!
looks like your off to a wonderful start with this story. waiting for more.
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ps that dumbledore - sometimes i wonder if he should have his own matchmaking service. lol
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
that man knows too much for his own good lol.
wonder why he left the other student stay?
good introduction. onto the story.
hee hee hee! wow. bloody brilliant.
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
Thanks! the writing process seems to be progressing well so more should be posted soon! thanks for reading!
Hello! I'm just reviewing to tell you that you have great potential with this story. It is very unorthodox, but extremely entertaining as well. :) I can't wait to read more. I would have posted reviews on all the chapters, but I'm feeling extremely lazy, hee! and I have to work on a banner for a fellow Ravenclaw ... long story. So, with that said ... let me get to it! :D
Prologue - ****
I like how you've explained the reason for Hermione's change. Background is always lovely.
I know you mentioned that this was OOC, but I'm hoping that you will explain the reason for Dr. Granger's decline ... besides the death of his wife. Because I have read further in your story, I know that Hermione suspects that her father killed his wife. I'm sure that there is something in this! :) Hermione wouldn't have said it if there weren't. I can't wait to find out what his reasoning was.
Also, I was wondering what type of abuse Hermione is suffering. Is it general? Or limited to hitting... etc. Just a thought... :)
Uh... a bit of critique. (One of my favorite things to do). You really don't need to change this, really, it's simply my own, personal preference. You really have a gift for writing though, make no mistake. Just trying to help, :).
"Her wit was fully in tact, however, giving her a sharp tongue and sarcasm that could make Severus Snape a very proud man."
Well, so I lied. This does need to be changed, hee! I believe the "in tact" should be changed to "intact," one word. I don't think you're talking about a state of mind or action (tact) you're saying that she was 'intact.' Hehe, very confusing, sorry...
The other bit of con. crit. I had for that sentence was that it "WOULD make Severus Snape a very proud man." The way you have it, "could," it almost seems to me ... that Hermione's sense of sarcasm, if it ever reached Snape's ears, has the potential of making him proud. However, if you change it to 'would,' it seems like Snape is doing the action instead of Hermione. Ah, but that's just me being picky. Hee! :) You don't necessarily have to change it.
The Time-Turner - ****/
This chapter was very entertaining. I wonder if Sam is, in actuality, Minerva? The heavy Scottish accent got me thinking, hee! This bit here really supports the idea that Sam is actually Minerva: "...she had only known a grip like that to belong to Professor McGonagall herself." Am I wrong? Although, I suppose that if Tom Riddle, who wouldn't be known as Voldemort although I understand that you are using creative license :), is now a crooked politician, Minerva would also be out of school. *sigh* I don't know. I'm overanalyzing when I needn't be. This really is a great story. I'm just so passionate about things. tsk, tsk, tsk... moving on.
The only bit of con. crit. I have for you, though, is that Hermione's transition from contemplating the time-turner shifts rather quickly to the girls' dormitory. Perhaps if you seamed it together with a transitory paragraph?
The Headmaster's Office ****
I truly enjoyed your characterization of Headmaster Dippet. :) Very fun! The only bit of crit. I had was that the Hat seemed to place Hermione very quickly. However, as you explained the Hat's reasoning, I think it's completely suitable if you just want to leave it that way. :) Again, I'm overanalyzing.
Oh, by the way, I absolutely adored Severus's comment, "Take a picture, it'll last longer." Hee! Ha! Funny! I laughed so hard. Great comment. Snarky but not jaded yet. I hope Hermione can change this Snape for the better.
I loved the way in which you wrote of Hermione's first encounter with the Slytherin Common Room. The password was fantastic. Thank you for the clarification of it. :)
Slytherin - *****
I can see why this is your favorite chapter so far, it's my favorite, too. Really nice job on the tender beginnings of Severus and Hermione's budding relationship. I hope they become best of friends! What a laugh that will be. :)
Also, I can't wait to see the reaction of Hermione when she meets the Marauders and Lily. I do so hope that you find time to continue the story.
Although I have commented (excessively) on your wonderful story and con. crit-ted it to death, :P, please know that I'm only trying to be constructive and I truly enjoyed this. Well done!
~Julia~
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
Thank you so much for reviewing and letting me know how i can improve! i really do apprecaite it. I edited slightly taking your advice. i added a paragraph to time turner and i fixed the sev thing in the prologue like you suggested. i'm hopeful that the sorting hat will explain itself in future chapters, and i really like the suggestion that you made in regards to dad's history. perhaps thats something to get into at a later date.
i'm trying my best to continue writing, i got in a bit of a slump and couldn't find anything i really liked to continue on. i have the next chapter written, but i didn't really want to post it until i was a chapter ahead of myself. I'm sure that the marauders will make an appearance in the story at some point, but fair warning, they won't be shown in a good light at all.
Thank you so much for the constructive critisium, it gave me a lot to think about and perhaps some inspiration. now all i need is time to actually write...good thing i'm starting a second job in a few days. LOL
thanks for reading and reviewing!
Jen
I really like this so far. Please update soon!~Sarah
interesting chapter. i look forward to hermione as a slytherin
Um quick question... about Dumbledore... didn't he become Headmaster of Hogwarts the year Lupin, James, Sirius, and Snape became students? I thought that was how Lupin was allowed to attend Hogwarts while being a werewolf, that and the willow. ~scampers off to hp-lexicon to see if she is insane~ Very interesting story by the way! I have a special interest in SS/ HG's that start in his time. I like that you have decided to put Hermione in Slytherin... that makes it EXTRA fun!!! I hope you get the time for an update soon!~*~Selene~*~
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
true story about the timeline. i took my creative lisence and tweeked it to what i wanted it to be. that's the beauty of AU :)
thanks for reading/reviewing, i hope to write more soon.
If you've lost motivation, what can I say who have not had the chance to guess where the story is going? Judging by the title, Hermione is meant to become evil at some point. Once you reach that point, I might know what to tell you and, maybe, boost your motivation (or not).
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
Thanks for the kind words. It's currently more an issue of time than motivation. I work about 70 hours a week, and i don't think anyone really wants to write at one am, or even three am, knowing that they have to get up for 9 or 10 the next morning... I'm making it a goal to finish this story in a timely manner.
thank you for a new chapter. seems things are progressing for sev.
Interesting. I hope you find time to continue.
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
i've been a writing fiend when i've had time. hopefully more will be posted in about a week!
Oooh... this story is cooking up to be really good. I'm bookmarking it so I don't miss what comes next.
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
that's so awesome! that means a lot coming from you, seeing as you have to at least browse everything that gets submited to the site. Thanks!
Yes! At last they kiss! I'm really enjoying the story so far. I hope you update soon!