This is a wonderfull story, I realy like where this is going. And also very realistic in my opinion.

But... I don't know if you can change the words in this story, even though it is already 'published'. But I think that if you can, you might like too change the sequence of this following sentence:

"One of her steps seemed like three of his."

it makes more sence if HIS steps were three times larger then HERS. ;). It just 'pulled' me out of the story a bit. But it puled me out, wich meas I was IN! And that was most definitely the case. Now I will dive right back in, THANKS FOR WRITING THIS!  KoenTje

Oh please do continue with this. I am enjoying it immensly :)

Please do continue your story! You have it set up so that so many interesting things could happen. I'd like to see Sev/Hermione develop more, I'd like to see some interaction with the Marauders, and I'd like to see something happening with Voldemort. Creative story so far~!

So funny . . . .The characters are a bit OOC, but it works. Really entertaining. I'm looking forward to the next update!

Hi Again there havn't been any updates in a while. And this is such a good story. When do you think there will anothere chapter?

Sence the title of this chapter is prologe does that mean the storie is almost over?...that would really bite...Ididn't notice its title the first time i read it that is why you are geting my review now...sorry it took so long.One more thing it is unrelated to the story.Are you planing on going into writing professionaly?

Thank you for the update.

Good chapter. 

Update!

yep enjoying.

waiting for more. 

Awwwww... That was really cute. Can't wait to read more.

hahahaha. such a slytherin. hair care potions my booty! lol. Love it babe! keep it up!

Researching behind the curtains.  Is that a new one?? lol.

great chapter. I was tickled to see an update.  Something to read while I eat my breakfast.

Thank you.

Patty 

looks like your off to a wonderful start with this story.  waiting for more.

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ps that dumbledore - sometimes i wonder if he should have his own matchmaking service. lol 

wonder why he left the other student stay?

good introduction. onto the story.

hee hee hee! wow. bloody brilliant.

Hello! I'm just reviewing to tell you that you have great potential with this story. It is very unorthodox, but extremely entertaining as well. :) I can't wait to read more. I would have posted reviews on all the chapters, but I'm feeling extremely lazy, hee! and I have to work on a banner for a fellow Ravenclaw ... long story. So, with that said ... let me get to it! :D

Prologue - ****

I like how you've explained the reason for Hermione's change. Background is always lovely.

I know you mentioned that this was OOC, but I'm hoping that you will explain the reason for Dr. Granger's decline ... besides the death of his wife. Because I have read further in your story, I know that Hermione suspects that her father killed his wife. I'm sure that there is something in this! :) Hermione wouldn't have said it if there weren't. I can't wait to find out what his reasoning was.

Also, I was wondering what type of abuse Hermione is suffering. Is it general? Or limited to hitting... etc. Just a thought... :)

Uh... a bit of critique. (One of my favorite things to do). You really don't need to change this, really, it's simply my own, personal preference. You really have a gift for writing though, make no mistake. Just trying to help, :).

"Her wit was fully in tact, however, giving her a sharp tongue and sarcasm that could make Severus Snape a very proud man."

Well, so I lied. This does need to be changed, hee! I believe the "in tact" should be changed to "intact," one word. I don't think you're talking about a state of mind or action (tact) you're saying that she was 'intact.' Hehe, very confusing, sorry...

The other bit of con. crit. I had for that sentence was that it "WOULD make Severus Snape a very proud man." The way you have it, "could," it almost seems to me ... that Hermione's sense of sarcasm, if it ever reached Snape's ears, has the potential of making him proud. However, if you change it to 'would,' it seems like Snape is doing the action instead of Hermione. Ah, but that's just me being picky. Hee! :) You don't necessarily have to change it.

The Time-Turner - ****/

This chapter was very entertaining. I wonder if Sam is, in actuality, Minerva? The heavy Scottish accent got me thinking, hee! This bit here really supports the idea that Sam is actually Minerva: "...she had only known a grip like that to belong to Professor McGonagall herself." Am I wrong? Although, I suppose that if Tom Riddle, who wouldn't be known as Voldemort although I understand that you are using creative license :), is now a crooked politician, Minerva would also be out of school. *sigh* I don't know. I'm overanalyzing when I needn't be. This really is a great story. I'm just so passionate about things. tsk, tsk, tsk... moving on.

The only bit of con. crit. I have for you, though, is that Hermione's transition from contemplating the time-turner shifts rather quickly to the girls' dormitory. Perhaps if you seamed it together with a transitory paragraph?

The Headmaster's Office ****

I truly enjoyed your characterization of Headmaster Dippet. :) Very fun! The only bit of crit. I had was that the Hat seemed to place Hermione very quickly. However, as you explained the Hat's reasoning, I think it's completely suitable if you just want to leave it that way. :) Again, I'm overanalyzing.

Oh, by the way, I absolutely adored Severus's comment, "Take a picture, it'll last longer." Hee! Ha! Funny! I laughed so hard. Great comment. Snarky but not jaded yet. I hope Hermione can change this Snape for the better.

I loved the way in which you wrote of Hermione's first encounter with the Slytherin Common Room. The password was fantastic. Thank you for the clarification of it. :)

Slytherin - *****

I can see why this is your favorite chapter so far, it's my favorite, too. Really nice job on the tender beginnings of Severus and Hermione's budding relationship. I hope they become best of friends! What a laugh that will be. :)

Also, I can't wait to see the reaction of Hermione when she meets the Marauders and Lily. I do so hope that you find time to continue the story.

Although I have commented (excessively) on your wonderful story and con. crit-ted it to death, :P, please know that I'm only trying to be constructive and I truly enjoyed this. Well done!

~Julia~

I really like this so far. Please update soon!~Sarah

interesting chapter. i look forward to hermione as a slytherin

Um quick question... about Dumbledore... didn't he become Headmaster of Hogwarts the year Lupin, James, Sirius, and Snape became students? I thought that was how Lupin was allowed to attend Hogwarts while being a werewolf, that and the willow. ~scampers off to hp-lexicon to see if she is insane~ Very interesting story by the way! I have a special interest in SS/ HG's that start in his time. I like that you have decided to put Hermione in Slytherin... that makes it EXTRA fun!!! I hope you get the time for an update soon!~*~Selene~*~

If you've lost motivation, what can I say who have not had the chance to guess where the story is going? Judging by the title, Hermione is meant to become evil at some point. Once you reach that point, I might know what to tell you and, maybe, boost your motivation (or not).

thank you for a new chapter.  seems things are progressing for sev. 

Interesting. I hope you find time to continue.

Oooh... this story is cooking up to be really good.  I'm bookmarking it so I don't miss what comes next.

Yes! At last they kiss! I'm really enjoying the story so far. I hope you update soon!