Birthday Wishes
Chapter 6 of 8
muzicfan5It?s Hermione?s birthday!
ReviewedChapter Five: Birthday Wishes
Warnings: Abuse
Thanks to my beta! (hp4freek) go read her stuff! I love that girl! And thanks to RobisonRocket for the once over!
Hermione walked down the stairs from her dormitory to the Slytherin common room. She saw that Severus was at the base of the stairs, waiting for her. He pulled her into a mildly awkward hug and whispered a, "Happy birthday" to her.
Hermione blushed slightly and murmured, "Thank you," in return. Severus began rifling through his bag and pulled out a wrapped package. Nervously, he thrust the box towards her.
Hermione tore at the wrapping and smiled when she saw the still partially covered book. "And what do we have here?" she asked, her voice full of genuine curiosity.
Hermione turned the book over in her hands so she could read the title: 300 Facts about the Dark Arts written by Cyn Ester. Hermione contemplated the book for a minute. The logical part of her was screaming, That is a Dark book! Don't read it! You don't know what sort of evil is inside! Remember who this is. This is Severus Snape, Death Eater turned spy, possibly turned spy again. This man has some serious loyalty issues. Just as she had herself convinced not to read the book, to just tuck it away somewhere and be done with it, another voice spoke up. That was the future Severus. This one is still young and innocent... Well, he's not a Death Eater at any rate.
She had never read up on the Dark Arts before. It had always been such a taboo subject in her time. Severus noticed her hesitation. "It's not a bad book, you know. It's not very detailed; just some information on the Dark Arts. I thought you'd find it interesting..." Severus seemed a bit embarrassed, but he looked Hermione in the eye as a slow blush crept up to his cheeks.
Severus had imagined this scene far differently. He had pictured Hermione being excited about the book and opening it for a good read immediately. As it stands, I don't think she's even going to read it! He was mentally kicking and berating himself for being stupid enough to think she'd be interested in the Dark Arts. She has displayed, thus far, nothing but innocence. She's good with a wand, of course. Pretty quick with her spells and jinxes from what I've seen. However, she's still innocent to me.
Hermione could feel Severus' mood darkening. She put her hand on his arm and murmured, "Thank you, Sev. I'll give it a proper reading the next chance I get." I guess there's no harm in starting the book. If it's that bad, I'll just stop reading it. She smiled at him; it was a warm smile. Severus felt the butterflies in his stomach go into overdrive. They had been a constant presence since she had made herself known at Hogwarts. Severus would never intentionally let on that he was socially awkward and hadn't the foggiest idea how to speak to a girl properly. Well, speak to pretty much anyone properly for that matter. He wanted nothing more than to pull her close and to experiment with her. Unfortunately, she didn't really exude an air of interest where he was concerned. She was nice to him, friendly, and they got along well, but he didn't think she liked him, at least not as anything other than a friend.
Oh, cruel irony, why do you taunt me so?
~~~
True to her word, later that night, Hermione opened up the Dark Arts book after she had finished with her homework.
Chapter One: Getting to Know Your Dark Arts
Many spells and potions that fall into the category of "dark" are only dark because of how they are generally used. For example, the Amortentia Potion, which is a strong Love Potion, was often given to the bride and groom of arranged marriages on their wedding day. By putting both parties into a state of lust and infatuation, it insured that the wedding went smoothly and the effects didn't wear off until after the honeymoon was over. This insured that the wedding was consummated.
That is a truly barbaric use of power! Hermione thought indignantly. Forcing marriages, and then deceiving the couple into thinking that they really loved each other!
However, as that train of thought was leaving the station, her proverbial devil appeared on her shoulder, giving her a different point of view. That was quite ingenious of them to do it, though. Nobody wants to have a big, public scene because someone doesn't want to get married to someone they don't know, or don't love.
While that is true, that doesn't make it any less barbaric. Smart, yes. Something I would expect from modern civilization? Never, countered the Angel Hermione.
Are you still viewing the world through rose-coloured glasses? Don't you remember your father, and what he did to your mother? Is murder no longer barbaric?
I don't know that Dad killed Mum. Just because I suspect it, that doesn't mean it's true. I've been wrong before... Hermione sounded like she was trying to convince herself. She hated to believe that her dad was not only capable of, but had committed murder. It was a terrifying thought. One that made her not feel safe while home alone with the man in question.
Hermione couldn't focus on her reading just now, not with her mind waging war on itself. Snapping the book shut with far more force than was needed, she pushed the offending tome off to the side, leaving it on her nightstand. She picked up her cloak and decided a nice walk would do nicely to clear her mind.
Scampering down the stairs, Hermione briskly walked through the common room at a pace so fast, she barely registered who was even hanging out in there. Pushing her way out of the concealed door, she turned up the hallway making her way to the front doors. A nice stroll around the lake would be quite nice.
Once the cool night air was on Hermione's face, she felt considerably calmer. The light breeze ruffled her hair, picking up tendrils and making it fly and twist in the wind. She bore an eerie resemblance to Medusa. She was so caught up in her own thoughts that she didn't hear the unmistakable sound of footsteps following behind her. They were trying to catch up, whilst staying at a safe enough distance to properly spy.
Hermione slowed down as she was walking. She was deep in thought. So many strange things had happened since the beginning of summer holidays. Well, really, things had always been a bit odd for her, but they'd been especially odd over the past nearly six months.
First, there was her father. He had been slowly getting more moody and reclusive. He always seemed to be angry nowadays. Her mother, in an effort to calm his anger, tried getting her husband to start drinking. Truth be told, he had never been a big drinker. He had the occasional pint at the pub, but everyone did. Maybe he'd have a glass of wine with dinner.
~~~
(Flashback)
Jessica Granger was sorely mistaken when she took the drown-your-sorrows approach with her husband. Mathew was an angry and violent drunk. He lost his self-control (the little he seemed to have left) one night, in a drunken rage, when he found that the kitchen was not immaculate. Mathew stormed off to find his wife, Jessica.
He started berating and belittling her. Calling her a stupid, lazy cow. Telling her, Jessica, how worthless she was. Feeling brave, she started yelling back. Well, as it turns out, Mathew Granger didn't take kindly to having a freethinking wife. He took a few steps forward to try to scare Jessica into submission, but she didn't want to scare, not tonight. When she didn't cower and start cleaning like a good housewife would, Mathew cornered her. He had a hand on either side of her head, and the meagre height difference between the two of them seemed like a foot. Mathew's breath smelled strongly of gin and whisky, and his eyes were glazed over and empty looking. This was not her husband.
Too afraid to move, Jessica just stood there, looking up at the angry form of her husband. She had become temporarily deaf with fear and couldn't hear a word Mathew was yelling. She didn't realise that he wanted her to clean the kitchen; she didn't realise that he wanted her to do his bidding without question. She wanted him to stop being angry, but had no idea how to make that happen. She didn't know what he wanted until the beating began and her hearing came back better than when it had left her. Jessica could hear each painful slap, each painful punch, her bones snapping beneath his forceful hands. She cried out in pain and anguish, her mind flooded with "ifs." If only I hadn't been so stupid. If only I hadn't meddled. If only I had cleaned the kitchen properly. If only I kept him a little happier. If only I hadn't married him...
(End flashback)
If that wasn't weird enough to contend with, there was the whole Time-Turner fiasco. I didn't turn the flipping thing, so how did I end up nearly 20 years in the past? I'm not really buying the I-willed-myself-here story, but I have yet to find anything more believable in my research.
Hermione had long since stopped walking and had sat down on a smooth rock on the side on the lake. The lake was to her right as she sat, glaring at the ground as if it had severely offended her. She continued to mull over her thoughts, trying to make sense of the jumble in her head. Trying to figure out what happened to her family, why her dad had turned so evil. This started a whole other train of thoughts. If Dad is evil, will I turn into a baddie too? That's how those silly Muggle comic books seem to work. Like father like son. A sudden movement in her peripherals interrupted Hermione's musings. Hermione, having been training hard with Harry while in her own time and still being a bit jumpy after the Ministry of Magic battle, shot a curse off in the direction of the movement. A scream came from the area where the curse was aimed.
Severus staggered out from behind the tree he had dodged behind, in an effort to move closer to Hermione. He was trying to see if he could hear anything in the event that she was speaking her problems out to herself. Hermione scurried over to him. "I'm so sorry, Severus! But you really should know better than to sneak up on an unsuspecting witch in the dark!"
"You seem in fine shape to me, but will you get these things off of my face!"
"Right. Sorry..." Hermione muttered the counter curse for the Bat-Bogey Hex, then a Cleansing Charm, to rid Severus' face of snot, now that his own mucus was no longer attacking his face.
"What kind of curse was that? I'm sure it's quite brilliant when you're not on the receiving end of it."
"It's called a Bat-Bogey. One of my friends came up with it. It makes... Well, I'm sure you figured that one out."
"Indeed. So, how should I announce my presence so I won't be subjected to that... enlightening experience again?"
"A simple 'Oi, Hermione' will do the trick quite nicely." Hermione smirked. "So, I have to ask; why were you following me anyway?"
"I was... worried about you. You seemed a bit... off when you left the common room. I guess I wanted to make sure you didn't do anything rash." Severus revealed a small smile as he waited for her response.
"Thanks. It's nice to know someone cares." Hermione smiled in return, and a comfortable silence fell between the two of them. It was only interrupted a few minutes later when a violent shiver wracked through Hermione's body.
"You must be freezing. Let's head back." Severus offered her the crook of his arm, which Hermione gratefully accepted, and they walked back to the castle together.
Muzic says: I'm not entirely sure what's coming next, well, I know the ending point, but I'm still working on the in between stuff. I hope you're enjoying this! I should have some more up soon.
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27 Reviews | 6.41/10 Average
This is a wonderfull story, I realy like where this is going. And also very realistic in my opinion.
But... I don't know if you can change the words in this story, even though it is already 'published'. But I think that if you can, you might like too change the sequence of this following sentence:
"One of her steps seemed like three of his."
it makes more sence if HIS steps were three times larger then HERS. ;). It just 'pulled' me out of the story a bit. But it puled me out, wich meas I was IN! And that was most definitely the case. Now I will dive right back in, THANKS FOR WRITING THIS! KoenTje
Oh please do continue with this. I am enjoying it immensly :)
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
i've been trying to get back into this story and my muse doesn't seem to want to cooperate. i do intend to write more, but i'm really not sure when it will happen. sorry for the wait.
Please do continue your story! You have it set up so that so many interesting things could happen. I'd like to see Sev/Hermione develop more, I'd like to see some interaction with the Marauders, and I'd like to see something happening with Voldemort. Creative story so far~!
So funny . . . .The characters are a bit OOC, but it works. Really entertaining. I'm looking forward to the next update!
Hi Again there havn't been any updates in a while. And this is such a good story. When do you think there will anothere chapter?
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
i haven't thought about this story in ages. perhaps i'll re read it sometime soon and see if i get inspiration that goes along with what i was doing previously. thank you so much in your interest! ended up reading a bunch of reviews tonight and i'm pleased to see how many nice things people have written!
Sence the title of this chapter is prologe does that mean the storie is almost over?...that would really bite...Ididn't notice its title the first time i read it that is why you are geting my review now...sorry it took so long.One more thing it is unrelated to the story.Are you planing on going into writing professionaly?
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
the title defaulted to that and i forgot to change it oops. i think i can wrangle a few more chapters out of this and no i never thought about going into writing professionally. but i'll take it as a compliment anyway. thanks!
Update!
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
well, since there was an angry mob to be had, i guess i'm going to have to get myself into a writing frenzy. i'll have an empty home and 2 days off next week which means i can be a productive little one.
Response from pickles (Reviewer)
excellent.
we thought you would see it our way. lol
how was your Christmas?
Happy New Year.
Awwwww... That was really cute. Can't wait to read more.
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
I'm glad you liked it! thanks for reading!
hahahaha. such a slytherin. hair care potions my booty! lol. Love it babe! keep it up!
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
Thanks for reading! more should be posted soon
Researching behind the curtains. Is that a new one?? lol.
great chapter. I was tickled to see an update. Something to read while I eat my breakfast.
Thank you.
Patty
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
I had legitimately meant studying behind the curtains, but that does make quite a nice innuendo. hehe. thanks for reading!
looks like your off to a wonderful start with this story. waiting for more.
p
ps that dumbledore - sometimes i wonder if he should have his own matchmaking service. lol
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
that man knows too much for his own good lol.
wonder why he left the other student stay?
good introduction. onto the story.
hee hee hee! wow. bloody brilliant.
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
Thanks! the writing process seems to be progressing well so more should be posted soon! thanks for reading!
Hello! I'm just reviewing to tell you that you have great potential with this story. It is very unorthodox, but extremely entertaining as well. :) I can't wait to read more. I would have posted reviews on all the chapters, but I'm feeling extremely lazy, hee! and I have to work on a banner for a fellow Ravenclaw ... long story. So, with that said ... let me get to it! :D
Prologue - ****
I like how you've explained the reason for Hermione's change. Background is always lovely.
I know you mentioned that this was OOC, but I'm hoping that you will explain the reason for Dr. Granger's decline ... besides the death of his wife. Because I have read further in your story, I know that Hermione suspects that her father killed his wife. I'm sure that there is something in this! :) Hermione wouldn't have said it if there weren't. I can't wait to find out what his reasoning was.
Also, I was wondering what type of abuse Hermione is suffering. Is it general? Or limited to hitting... etc. Just a thought... :)
Uh... a bit of critique. (One of my favorite things to do). You really don't need to change this, really, it's simply my own, personal preference. You really have a gift for writing though, make no mistake. Just trying to help, :).
"Her wit was fully in tact, however, giving her a sharp tongue and sarcasm that could make Severus Snape a very proud man."
Well, so I lied. This does need to be changed, hee! I believe the "in tact" should be changed to "intact," one word. I don't think you're talking about a state of mind or action (tact) you're saying that she was 'intact.' Hehe, very confusing, sorry...
The other bit of con. crit. I had for that sentence was that it "WOULD make Severus Snape a very proud man." The way you have it, "could," it almost seems to me ... that Hermione's sense of sarcasm, if it ever reached Snape's ears, has the potential of making him proud. However, if you change it to 'would,' it seems like Snape is doing the action instead of Hermione. Ah, but that's just me being picky. Hee! :) You don't necessarily have to change it.
The Time-Turner - ****/
This chapter was very entertaining. I wonder if Sam is, in actuality, Minerva? The heavy Scottish accent got me thinking, hee! This bit here really supports the idea that Sam is actually Minerva: "...she had only known a grip like that to belong to Professor McGonagall herself." Am I wrong? Although, I suppose that if Tom Riddle, who wouldn't be known as Voldemort although I understand that you are using creative license :), is now a crooked politician, Minerva would also be out of school. *sigh* I don't know. I'm overanalyzing when I needn't be. This really is a great story. I'm just so passionate about things. tsk, tsk, tsk... moving on.
The only bit of con. crit. I have for you, though, is that Hermione's transition from contemplating the time-turner shifts rather quickly to the girls' dormitory. Perhaps if you seamed it together with a transitory paragraph?
The Headmaster's Office ****
I truly enjoyed your characterization of Headmaster Dippet. :) Very fun! The only bit of crit. I had was that the Hat seemed to place Hermione very quickly. However, as you explained the Hat's reasoning, I think it's completely suitable if you just want to leave it that way. :) Again, I'm overanalyzing.
Oh, by the way, I absolutely adored Severus's comment, "Take a picture, it'll last longer." Hee! Ha! Funny! I laughed so hard. Great comment. Snarky but not jaded yet. I hope Hermione can change this Snape for the better.
I loved the way in which you wrote of Hermione's first encounter with the Slytherin Common Room. The password was fantastic. Thank you for the clarification of it. :)
Slytherin - *****
I can see why this is your favorite chapter so far, it's my favorite, too. Really nice job on the tender beginnings of Severus and Hermione's budding relationship. I hope they become best of friends! What a laugh that will be. :)
Also, I can't wait to see the reaction of Hermione when she meets the Marauders and Lily. I do so hope that you find time to continue the story.
Although I have commented (excessively) on your wonderful story and con. crit-ted it to death, :P, please know that I'm only trying to be constructive and I truly enjoyed this. Well done!
~Julia~
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
Thank you so much for reviewing and letting me know how i can improve! i really do apprecaite it. I edited slightly taking your advice. i added a paragraph to time turner and i fixed the sev thing in the prologue like you suggested. i'm hopeful that the sorting hat will explain itself in future chapters, and i really like the suggestion that you made in regards to dad's history. perhaps thats something to get into at a later date.
i'm trying my best to continue writing, i got in a bit of a slump and couldn't find anything i really liked to continue on. i have the next chapter written, but i didn't really want to post it until i was a chapter ahead of myself. I'm sure that the marauders will make an appearance in the story at some point, but fair warning, they won't be shown in a good light at all.
Thank you so much for the constructive critisium, it gave me a lot to think about and perhaps some inspiration. now all i need is time to actually write...good thing i'm starting a second job in a few days. LOL
thanks for reading and reviewing!
Jen
I really like this so far. Please update soon!~Sarah
interesting chapter. i look forward to hermione as a slytherin
Um quick question... about Dumbledore... didn't he become Headmaster of Hogwarts the year Lupin, James, Sirius, and Snape became students? I thought that was how Lupin was allowed to attend Hogwarts while being a werewolf, that and the willow. ~scampers off to hp-lexicon to see if she is insane~ Very interesting story by the way! I have a special interest in SS/ HG's that start in his time. I like that you have decided to put Hermione in Slytherin... that makes it EXTRA fun!!! I hope you get the time for an update soon!~*~Selene~*~
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
true story about the timeline. i took my creative lisence and tweeked it to what i wanted it to be. that's the beauty of AU :)
thanks for reading/reviewing, i hope to write more soon.
If you've lost motivation, what can I say who have not had the chance to guess where the story is going? Judging by the title, Hermione is meant to become evil at some point. Once you reach that point, I might know what to tell you and, maybe, boost your motivation (or not).
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
Thanks for the kind words. It's currently more an issue of time than motivation. I work about 70 hours a week, and i don't think anyone really wants to write at one am, or even three am, knowing that they have to get up for 9 or 10 the next morning... I'm making it a goal to finish this story in a timely manner.
thank you for a new chapter. seems things are progressing for sev.
Interesting. I hope you find time to continue.
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
i've been a writing fiend when i've had time. hopefully more will be posted in about a week!
Oooh... this story is cooking up to be really good. I'm bookmarking it so I don't miss what comes next.
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
that's so awesome! that means a lot coming from you, seeing as you have to at least browse everything that gets submited to the site. Thanks!
Yes! At last they kiss! I'm really enjoying the story so far. I hope you update soon!