Prologue
Chapter 1 of 8
muzicfan5Hermione has a Time Turner accident and ends up nearly 20 years in the past. Will she get stay on her Gryffindor path or be seduced by the dark arts?
ReviewedWarnings: AU, not HBP compliant, Out of Character, hints at abuse.
Beta'ed by hp4freek, thanks for all your help!
Prologue
The new term had started. Hermione Granger arrived at Hogwarts via the Hogwarts Express with her best friends, Ron Weasley and Harry Potter. Ron had continued to grow over the summer and seemed to be just over six feet tall. As she looked over her friends at dinner, she couldn’t decide who looked more gangly and awkward. Harry had been underfed while at Privet Drive for the summer again. He, too, had grown, but was still a little shorter than Ron. Harry was a little less than six feet tall. She wasn’t very tall, even by female standards; she seemed to have quit growing by her fourth year and only stood at about five feet, four inches.
Harry’s hair was just as messy as ever, though that wasn’t a surprise. It had been a long time since he had tried to make it lay flat. Hermione had changed a lot over the summer, too, though the boys didn’t seem to notice. Her hair wasn’t quite as bushy, but still rather unmanageable. She, too, had long since ceased her vain attempts at taming it, except for rare, special occasions. What had really changed was her clothing and style.
Hermione’s family had dissolved over the summer. Her mother had died, but the circumstances were rather curious. Hermione knew it was a Muggle death. There wasn’t a single magical thing about it.
Her father had become reclusive. He often didn’t go to work; he owned his own dental practice. Hermione had tried to get him to get up and to go about his day. Though, her efforts were always met with resistance and anger. Whenever she tried to get her father back into some semblance of the life he used to know, he always came home in a foul mood, a mood that made Severus Snape look like a playful kitten. On those nights, she would hide in her room, hoping he would just pass out from drink and leave her alone.
Her prayers were often left unanswered, though. Becoming abused had made Hermione drastically change her attitude. She was no longer the eager little know-it-all, waving her hand madly to get attention from her teachers. She began wearing dark and gloomy clothes. Black was her colour of choice lately, sometimes with red or purple accents. She had thought about dying her hair, but she knew that father would not be pleased. It would only lead to him taking out more anger and pain on her.
Trying desperately to disguise herself, even if it was only from herself, she continued to change. She cut her hair; it was far shorter than she’d had it in years. The longest parts stopped about half-way down her neck. She had the stylist put in lots of layers, and thin it out a bit. The style was rather flattering on her, though her hair was still quite bushy if she didn’t make an effort to style and manage it.
She had taken to wearing heavy amounts of makeup, mostly eye makeup, consisting of heavy eyeliner, and liberal amounts of dark shadows. She had also thought about getting pierced, but the threat of her father’s anger had kept that desire in check.
Her personality had become a bit reclusive. Her wit was fully intact, however, giving her a sharp tongue and sarcasm that would make Severus Snape a very proud man.
Hermione sat on her bed, in the girls’ dormitory, thinking. She hated how her life was panning out. It may have been different if her parents, or even just her mother, had been a casualty of the war with Voldemort. Hermione hated to think about it, but she had a suspicion that, if her father hadn’t actually killed her mother, he did play an instrumental role in the process leading to his wife’s demise.
While brooding, Hermione was struck with an idea. “I’m so stupid! How did I not think of this before?” Hermione leapt off her bed and dove at her trunk. Throwing things wildly over her head, which were landing with a variety of thuds and crashes behind her, she finally found the balled up pair of socks she was looking for.
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Notes: I don’t know what my deal with abusive parents in the past is currently. It’s, thankfully, nothing I ever experienced. This story is considerably darker than my last fic. It’s going to be really out of character and really alternate universe, so please bear with me. Thanks for reading!
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Latest 25 Reviews for Evil Hermione
27 Reviews | 6.41/10 Average
This is a wonderfull story, I realy like where this is going. And also very realistic in my opinion.
But... I don't know if you can change the words in this story, even though it is already 'published'. But I think that if you can, you might like too change the sequence of this following sentence:
"One of her steps seemed like three of his."
it makes more sence if HIS steps were three times larger then HERS. ;). It just 'pulled' me out of the story a bit. But it puled me out, wich meas I was IN! And that was most definitely the case. Now I will dive right back in, THANKS FOR WRITING THIS! KoenTje
Oh please do continue with this. I am enjoying it immensly :)
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
i've been trying to get back into this story and my muse doesn't seem to want to cooperate. i do intend to write more, but i'm really not sure when it will happen. sorry for the wait.
Please do continue your story! You have it set up so that so many interesting things could happen. I'd like to see Sev/Hermione develop more, I'd like to see some interaction with the Marauders, and I'd like to see something happening with Voldemort. Creative story so far~!
So funny . . . .The characters are a bit OOC, but it works. Really entertaining. I'm looking forward to the next update!
Hi Again there havn't been any updates in a while. And this is such a good story. When do you think there will anothere chapter?
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
i haven't thought about this story in ages. perhaps i'll re read it sometime soon and see if i get inspiration that goes along with what i was doing previously. thank you so much in your interest! ended up reading a bunch of reviews tonight and i'm pleased to see how many nice things people have written!
Sence the title of this chapter is prologe does that mean the storie is almost over?...that would really bite...Ididn't notice its title the first time i read it that is why you are geting my review now...sorry it took so long.One more thing it is unrelated to the story.Are you planing on going into writing professionaly?
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
the title defaulted to that and i forgot to change it oops. i think i can wrangle a few more chapters out of this and no i never thought about going into writing professionally. but i'll take it as a compliment anyway. thanks!
Update!
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
well, since there was an angry mob to be had, i guess i'm going to have to get myself into a writing frenzy. i'll have an empty home and 2 days off next week which means i can be a productive little one.
Response from pickles (Reviewer)
excellent.
we thought you would see it our way. lol
how was your Christmas?
Happy New Year.
Awwwww... That was really cute. Can't wait to read more.
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
I'm glad you liked it! thanks for reading!
hahahaha. such a slytherin. hair care potions my booty! lol. Love it babe! keep it up!
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
Thanks for reading! more should be posted soon 
Researching behind the curtains. Is that a new one?? lol.
great chapter. I was tickled to see an update. Something to read while I eat my breakfast.
Thank you.
Patty
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
I had legitimately meant studying behind the curtains, but that does make quite a nice innuendo. hehe. thanks for reading!
looks like your off to a wonderful start with this story. waiting for more.
p
ps that dumbledore - sometimes i wonder if he should have his own matchmaking service. lol
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
that man knows too much for his own good lol.
wonder why he left the other student stay?
good introduction. onto the story.
hee hee hee! wow. bloody brilliant.
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
Thanks! the writing process seems to be progressing well so more should be posted soon! thanks for reading!
Hello! I'm just reviewing to tell you that you have great potential with this story. It is very unorthodox, but extremely entertaining as well. :) I can't wait to read more. I would have posted reviews on all the chapters, but I'm feeling extremely lazy, hee! and I have to work on a banner for a fellow Ravenclaw ... long story. So, with that said ... let me get to it! :D
Prologue - ****
I like how you've explained the reason for Hermione's change. Background is always lovely.
I know you mentioned that this was OOC, but I'm hoping that you will explain the reason for Dr. Granger's decline ... besides the death of his wife. Because I have read further in your story, I know that Hermione suspects that her father killed his wife. I'm sure that there is something in this! :) Hermione wouldn't have said it if there weren't. I can't wait to find out what his reasoning was.
Also, I was wondering what type of abuse Hermione is suffering. Is it general? Or limited to hitting... etc. Just a thought... :)
Uh... a bit of critique. (One of my favorite things to do). You really don't need to change this, really, it's simply my own, personal preference. You really have a gift for writing though, make no mistake. Just trying to help, :).
"Her wit was fully in tact, however, giving her a sharp tongue and sarcasm that could make Severus Snape a very proud man."
Well, so I lied. This does need to be changed, hee! I believe the "in tact" should be changed to "intact," one word. I don't think you're talking about a state of mind or action (tact) you're saying that she was 'intact.' Hehe, very confusing, sorry...
The other bit of con. crit. I had for that sentence was that it "WOULD make Severus Snape a very proud man." The way you have it, "could," it almost seems to me ... that Hermione's sense of sarcasm, if it ever reached Snape's ears, has the potential of making him proud. However, if you change it to 'would,' it seems like Snape is doing the action instead of Hermione. Ah, but that's just me being picky. Hee! :) You don't necessarily have to change it.
The Time-Turner - ****/
This chapter was very entertaining. I wonder if Sam is, in actuality, Minerva? The heavy Scottish accent got me thinking, hee! This bit here really supports the idea that Sam is actually Minerva: "...she had only known a grip like that to belong to Professor McGonagall herself." Am I wrong? Although, I suppose that if Tom Riddle, who wouldn't be known as Voldemort although I understand that you are using creative license :), is now a crooked politician, Minerva would also be out of school. *sigh* I don't know. I'm overanalyzing when I needn't be. This really is a great story. I'm just so passionate about things. tsk, tsk, tsk... moving on.
The only bit of con. crit. I have for you, though, is that Hermione's transition from contemplating the time-turner shifts rather quickly to the girls' dormitory. Perhaps if you seamed it together with a transitory paragraph?
The Headmaster's Office ****
I truly enjoyed your characterization of Headmaster Dippet. :) Very fun! The only bit of crit. I had was that the Hat seemed to place Hermione very quickly. However, as you explained the Hat's reasoning, I think it's completely suitable if you just want to leave it that way. :) Again, I'm overanalyzing.
Oh, by the way, I absolutely adored Severus's comment, "Take a picture, it'll last longer." Hee! Ha! Funny! I laughed so hard. Great comment. Snarky but not jaded yet. I hope Hermione can change this Snape for the better.
I loved the way in which you wrote of Hermione's first encounter with the Slytherin Common Room. The password was fantastic. Thank you for the clarification of it. :)
Slytherin - *****
I can see why this is your favorite chapter so far, it's my favorite, too. Really nice job on the tender beginnings of Severus and Hermione's budding relationship. I hope they become best of friends! What a laugh that will be. :)
Also, I can't wait to see the reaction of Hermione when she meets the Marauders and Lily. I do so hope that you find time to continue the story.
Although I have commented (excessively) on your wonderful story and con. crit-ted it to death, :P, please know that I'm only trying to be constructive and I truly enjoyed this. Well done!
~Julia~
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
Thank you so much for reviewing and letting me know how i can improve! i really do apprecaite it. I edited slightly taking your advice. i added a paragraph to time turner and i fixed the sev thing in the prologue like you suggested. i'm hopeful that the sorting hat will explain itself in future chapters, and i really like the suggestion that you made in regards to dad's history. perhaps thats something to get into at a later date.
i'm trying my best to continue writing, i got in a bit of a slump and couldn't find anything i really liked to continue on. i have the next chapter written, but i didn't really want to post it until i was a chapter ahead of myself. I'm sure that the marauders will make an appearance in the story at some point, but fair warning, they won't be shown in a good light at all.
Thank you so much for the constructive critisium, it gave me a lot to think about and perhaps some inspiration. now all i need is time to actually write...good thing i'm starting a second job in a few days. LOL 
thanks for reading and reviewing!
Jen
I really like this so far. Please update soon!~Sarah
interesting chapter. i look forward to hermione as a slytherin
Um quick question... about Dumbledore... didn't he become Headmaster of Hogwarts the year Lupin, James, Sirius, and Snape became students? I thought that was how Lupin was allowed to attend Hogwarts while being a werewolf, that and the willow. ~scampers off to hp-lexicon to see if she is insane~ Very interesting story by the way! I have a special interest in SS/ HG's that start in his time. I like that you have decided to put Hermione in Slytherin... that makes it EXTRA fun!!! I hope you get the time for an update soon!~*~Selene~*~
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
true story about the timeline. i took my creative lisence and tweeked it to what i wanted it to be. that's the beauty of AU :)
thanks for reading/reviewing, i hope to write more soon.
If you've lost motivation, what can I say who have not had the chance to guess where the story is going? Judging by the title, Hermione is meant to become evil at some point. Once you reach that point, I might know what to tell you and, maybe, boost your motivation (or not).
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
Thanks for the kind words. It's currently more an issue of time than motivation. I work about 70 hours a week, and i don't think anyone really wants to write at one am, or even three am, knowing that they have to get up for 9 or 10 the next morning... I'm making it a goal to finish this story in a timely manner.
thank you for a new chapter. seems things are progressing for sev.
Interesting. I hope you find time to continue.
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
i've been a writing fiend when i've had time. hopefully more will be posted in about a week!
Oooh... this story is cooking up to be really good. I'm bookmarking it so I don't miss what comes next.
Response from muzicfan5 (Author of Evil Hermione)
that's so awesome! that means a lot coming from you, seeing as you have to at least browse everything that gets submited to the site. Thanks!
Yes! At last they kiss! I'm really enjoying the story so far. I hope you update soon!