Darkness Within
neelix326 Reviews | 5.89/10 (326 Ratings, 0 Likes, 172 Favorites )
Severus Snape bumps into his ex-student Hermione Granger, but she's not the Hermione he remembers. Unwittingly pulled into her seedy world, he uncovers a shocking secret.
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Reviews for Darkness Within
So much being said, and so much withheld. Severus falling apart and Hermione's miserable. They should have kissed, he should have bolted and warded the door.Very interesting using only letters to convey this chapter - brilliantly done.
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
Thanks so much! It was a bit of a gamble but I wanted time to pass and the fact that their apart seems all the more poignant when they only communicate by letter, and it's so hard to say what you want in just a letter, isn't it?
Response from beaweasley2 (Reviewer)
Especially for someone stoic, who is usd to being a long- suffering, self-sacrificing git. lol What's Hermione's excuse? lol Hugs~
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
lol... I think her excuse is her uncertainty, not knowing how Severus will respond, not knowing really where she stands. And yeh, he is a bit of a git!
yay the fireworks! nice interum chapter, tho. thanks so much
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
Glad you liked it. I really think the next few chapters will more than make up for your patience! Thanks for reading x
I've always loved correspondence in stories. Nice update. I love that their both miserable.
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
YES! I am very glad they're not happy, serves them both right for being so stubborn and pig headed!
Reading their letters made me want to cry. They should be together, in each other's arms, making mad passionate love. Instead Hermione is watching pigeons poop on the roof next door and teaching the Potions class she is taking, and Severus is pining away for the lack of her.The holidays can't come soon enough to suit me. And Hermione had better come home to Severus or I'll have apoplexy! Fabulous story, neelix.Beth
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
goodness honey, do die on me yet, we're just around the corner from the big reunion! lol... Glad you are loving it, I hope the rest lives up to your expectations!
I can't wait till she suprises him... may she not go back to France? Depends how good the lemons are haha.
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
I think you're right... and how much lemonade she needs!
Love the letters! Hermione the sneaky one this time, eh? hehe
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
She's not so sure of herself, I think... nervous about the reception she might get, his reaction, her own feelings... it's all very complicated!
I can't wait for the next chapter!! I hope it comes soon! 
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
Hi! It's in the queue. Thanks for reading and revieiwing!
Your letters were insightful, and a great long-distance story-telling aid... but I hate them! I want them to be togehter! Cuddly, hearts floating in the air, lemony together!!!!! *stamps foot*Tantrum over. Wonderful story, and I'm enjoying that you're making us wait for it!!! (The pouting is just the child in me acting out, she's rather Severus lemon addicted!!!) 
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
I know what you mean... I just want them to get on with it! lol.. thanks for reviewing and reading and being sooo enthusiatic!
I really like this letter format. It tells us what everyone's doing without having to come out and agonize over it. I can't wait for the fireworks! 0_0 Preeeeettyyyyy....
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
Ah, thank you! Glad you liked it... next chapter is in the q!
Lovely....you can almost see the angst :)
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
Phew! I was taking a bit of a risk with the letters, but I wanted the time to pass quickly without having to go into great detail! Thanks for responding.
stupid girl, she shouldn't have went!
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
Or stupid Severus shouldn't have let her go... it's complex!
Pleeeease let me knock their heads together? :P
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
Feel free once they're in the same room! You might actually feel like that in the next chapter! Apologising in advance....
beautifully done. i especially loved the chapter title. thanks so much
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
Thanks. Keep reading!
Somehow I think it will be good for them if Hermione sees she can manage to live on her own again without relapsing. It will somehow even out her standing. At the moment she feels much too dependent on Severus.The parting was painful, though.
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
Wasn't it though... ahh well!
As if kissing her was something foolish. *Sigh*I wonder for how long she will be alone in Paris.
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
Sadly it will just be Hermione and the pigeons!
Awe, parting is such sweet sorrow, and yet with only a word she wuld have stayed.
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
I know! *Slaps Severus about a bit....* sheesh!
Oh so close and yet yanked apart. Too bad.
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
hehe... it would have been too easy!
Well, he took that exactly how I thought he would. He should have kissed her.
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
Yes... yes he should.
Silly man, the signs are all there.
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
lol.. this is SEVERUS remeber... thick as two planks in the wooing stakes, sadly... but all the more fun for us!
Severus is so stupid for not telling Hermione how he feels about her. I think she would've stayed if he only asked her to. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next.
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
Are you?? Goodness, I hope you won't hate me... :)
*Sob!* The one good thing about this chapter is the fact that Hermione was sure to tell him how much she'd miss him and how hard it was that they were parting. And he agreed! Sorry to see them separated, but of course, absence makes the heart grow fonder and all that.
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
That's right... or not as the case may be....let's see shall we??
Ok....this is a love story. We can just wait you out. The longer you drag out the inevitable, the more work for you!!!!This chapter was sure easy on my scroll bar (lol)!I know, I know... the next one's in queue (sp?) line!
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
Well let me just say that when they get there, eventually... and they'd better do after all of this angst... it will definately be worth it!
He let her go without telling her? Wonder how long she/he will last? :)
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
Well.. I wish I had made Severus do the knicght in shining armour bit and fly off to Paris to get her. But I didn't...
Argh! You are stringing us along like fish on a hook. I have to fess up and tell you I peeked ahead on another site and finished it. 
Great tension between these two. You just want to hit them, they're being so obtuse!
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
lmao... I do that too when i just can't wait! And yes.. but I think it's necessary because Severus needs a short, sharp shock to come to his senses!
This is so hard for them - they never have an easy time of it do they? BTW, I like that its short like this - it really makes the point.
Response from neelix (Author of Darkness Within)
YES! Thank you so much, that was the idea... at the end of it, they have to part and it hurts... like a short chapter. So everyone is left wanting what they haven't got!