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Just a Little Bit
Melenka214 Reviews | 6.9/10 (214 Ratings, 0 Likes, 179 Favorites )
Hermione is stuck in a house with two difficult men, one bored cat, a hapless mouse - and a physics problem.
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Interesting chapter. I liked Severus's protective side.I did find a small typo, Bella was spelled with 3 l's in the paragraph where Sirius is telling Hermione that she has a conscience.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Thanks for the heads up on the typo. I've fixed it.Severus is protective but not possessive, which is a difficult combination to pull off.
Response from sinbad (Reviewer)
I agree, but you are pulling it off well!
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Thanks for the heads up on the typo. I've fixed it.Severus is protective but not possessive, which is a difficult combination to pull off.
Response from sinbad (Reviewer)
I agree, but you are pulling it off well!
I love the way you've introduced a thoughtful discourse between Hermione and Sirius on the topic of free will and manipulation of thoughts. I also like your portrayal of Hermione as someone whose intelligence and thirst for knowledge has swept her onto a path where perhaps she failed to fully consider the consequences of what she was trying to accomplish. (Eeek - way too long a sentence!) The concept of "could" versus "should" has always fascinated me, and I imagine it would be just as relevant in magic as science (and life, for that matter). Another great chapter - this is currently one of my favorite WIPs!!
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Wow. Thanks for that! The ramifications of magic (science, politics, religion, art....) intrigue me, so I tend to include them in my stories whenever I feel it's relevant. Your assessment of Hermione is spot on.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Wow. Thanks for that! The ramifications of magic (science, politics, religion, art....) intrigue me, so I tend to include them in my stories whenever I feel it's relevant. Your assessment of Hermione is spot on.
Woooo that was good. *fans self* I'm afraid I don't have anything more contructive to add, hahaha. Well done.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Fantastic lemons here. Quite a release for the two.Adoringly written, all this tension, between the three of them, fueled for me also by Hermione's secret research. What's she up to? What're they all up to?
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Oh, they're up to all sorts of things! I hope you continue to enjoy the story. Thanks for reading.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Oh, they're up to all sorts of things! I hope you continue to enjoy the story. Thanks for reading.
Goodness... that was intense. I'm waiting for Severus to get manly and possessive of Hermione. I can't imagine he'll relish sharing something so precious with Sirius. And I bet he'll be furious with Hermione.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
I don't know about his being furious with her. I think he's got a plan and, as uncomfortable as it is, he's waiting to see how it plays out. He's a man with his eye on the big picture, as usual.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
I don't know about his being furious with her. I think he's got a plan and, as uncomfortable as it is, he's waiting to see how it plays out. He's a man with his eye on the big picture, as usual.
This is scary. Sirius could be the next Messiah or Devil - just as he likes...
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
And in either case, they would hunt him down and try to kill him. He's a bit scared, too. He's also fairly sure it won't last.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
And in either case, they would hunt him down and try to kill him. He's a bit scared, too. He's also fairly sure it won't last.
That appeared to be more than "Just a little bit", Melenka! :)
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Well, yes. Yes it was. That's what I get for adding plot to a request for a fluffy smut piece.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Well, yes. Yes it was. That's what I get for adding plot to a request for a fluffy smut piece.
The way she is explaining it is brilliant. I just don't see why they are not getting it. Its so simple. I love that Sirius is getting closer to the earth. Maybe he could use his magic to make Severus accept him and Hermione and Severus in a relationship or something. It's almost like one anyway but without all the anger. Severus is slowing coming around. And damn girl that was way hot. I want some of that. I do believe I was holding my breathe. This chapter was breathe taking. Now I have to go take a cold no very cold shower. Until next time. Be will.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
The introduction of chaos as a mitigating factor isn't something they'd be all that familiar with (nor are most people), though Severus is obviously better read on the idea. If Sirius used his magic to "make" Severus accept him, he'd be on the path his family walked for so long. Mrs. Black would be proud, I'm sure... but I think he'd rather take his own life than become what his mum wished him to be.I hope you are breathing again - and clean, however chilly. ;)
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
The introduction of chaos as a mitigating factor isn't something they'd be all that familiar with (nor are most people), though Severus is obviously better read on the idea. If Sirius used his magic to "make" Severus accept him, he'd be on the path his family walked for so long. Mrs. Black would be proud, I'm sure... but I think he'd rather take his own life than become what his mum wished him to be.I hope you are breathing again - and clean, however chilly. ;)
Can I just say 'WOW" now?!
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Of course you can, and then I can say thank you very much. Glad you enjoyed that encounter. :)
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Of course you can, and then I can say thank you very much. Glad you enjoyed that encounter. :)
Couldn't you add just a little more?? Please please!
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
More is on the way! Soon, even. :)
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
More is on the way! Soon, even. :)
warning, indeed! thanks so much for this excellent update and i look forward to the next chapter.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Thank you! I appreciate you reading. There's another chapter in queue. :)
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Thank you! I appreciate you reading. There's another chapter in queue. :)
Curiouser and curiouser. I'm itching to find out what she's up to, and very interested to see how the dynamics among these three play out!
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
It will all come out eventually, though probably not the way they expect. More is on the way. :)
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
It will all come out eventually, though probably not the way they expect. More is on the way. :)
I'm concerned about Sirius's ability (or lack there of) to keep his magic under control. I think it will be an issue causing grief later. As for the warning 'Do not work' I have a feeling that Hermione will have to learn it the hard way.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Oh, Sirius is concerned about it, too. I think they all have some things to learn the hard way. At least there should be a pleasant diversion or two along the way. ;)
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Oh, Sirius is concerned about it, too. I think they all have some things to learn the hard way. At least there should be a pleasant diversion or two along the way. ;)
Thanks for another excellent chapter!
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
My pleasure! There's more story on the way soon. :)
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
My pleasure! There's more story on the way soon. :)
She is such a lucky girl. Man, to be her. sighs. Very well written. Okay fellows play nice what happened to manners. lol Hermione, you might not get it to work because you have two men against you and not in the pleasant way either. Though that would be all the better.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
She is quite lucky in some ways, though I would argue that they are, too. The bit with the spell does become dicey. Stay tuned!
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
She is quite lucky in some ways, though I would argue that they are, too. The bit with the spell does become dicey. Stay tuned!
Oh man, that kiss!!I love the wording change.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
I guess there's a new definition for "hot kiss." ;)
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
I guess there's a new definition for "hot kiss." ;)
I wish they would just have a threesome and get it all out in the open... then she can get on with her research without distraction LOL :)
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
I think they're all pretty clear on what's happening, but I doubt the men could overcome their mutual dislike enoiugh to do anything like that. Even for her. Maybe especially because it's her. Hmmm. Have to think about that.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
I think they're all pretty clear on what's happening, but I doubt the men could overcome their mutual dislike enoiugh to do anything like that. Even for her. Maybe especially because it's her. Hmmm. Have to think about that.
What a naughty girl... shagging Severus one night and snogging Sirius the next day... and in the same room, no less! DAMN IT, I wish it was me!!!!!Seriously, girl - that was an awesome chapter. I'm loving this story... it's rare to find a tale where the plot is as intriguing as the relationship/UST, but you've got me hooked on all levels. Beautiful!!!
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Oh, I think most of us wouldn't mind being in her situation. ;)I'm glad you find it interesting. I'll try to keep it that way!
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Oh, I think most of us wouldn't mind being in her situation. ;)I'm glad you find it interesting. I'll try to keep it that way!
Hmm... the plot certainly thickens for Sirius, doesn't it. I'll admit I'm a bit worried about him, and his "condition". Good thing everyone's so intelligent... An excellent chapter, as always. You are truly a gifted writer!
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Thank you. Sirius is definitely in the thick of it. Finding a way out could be interesting.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Thank you. Sirius is definitely in the thick of it. Finding a way out could be interesting.
That was fabulous... very sexy dialogue and wonderfully hot sex. You certainly know how to write it!!
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
*blush* Thank you. Glad it worked for you. :)
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
*blush* Thank you. Glad it worked for you. :)
Whoops. Bite off a bit more than you can chew, Hermione? Love this story! Just one thing--I feel like Sirius' speech and voice in this are very formal, almost Snape-ish in pattern and diction. It's not bad, but it doesn't seem quite Sirius.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Thanks. I'm glad you like it!Re: Sirius' voice - He rediscovered his voice in a place where he always had to be careful and has never been comfortable. If someone pointed out how very much like the rest of his family he was speaking, he would be horrified. It probably doesn't help that he's sharing a house with Snape, whom he cannot trust due to the cruelties Sirius perpetrated in his youth. Well, his first youth. Formality is a familiar shield, but he does drop his guard from time to time.
Response from tonksinger (Reviewer)
That makes a lot of sense. Thank you!
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Thanks. I'm glad you like it!Re: Sirius' voice - He rediscovered his voice in a place where he always had to be careful and has never been comfortable. If someone pointed out how very much like the rest of his family he was speaking, he would be horrified. It probably doesn't help that he's sharing a house with Snape, whom he cannot trust due to the cruelties Sirius perpetrated in his youth. Well, his first youth. Formality is a familiar shield, but he does drop his guard from time to time.
Response from tonksinger (Reviewer)
That makes a lot of sense. Thank you!
as if this summer wasn't hot enough...you make it hotter! thanks so much
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
The heat wave will continue for a bit. ;) Glad you're enjoying the story!
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
The heat wave will continue for a bit. ;) Glad you're enjoying the story!
Beautiful chapter, some passages almost poetic... Can't they find a place where they can all live together in peace?
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Would that such a world might exist, but with their tangled pasts and prickly natures, how long could peace last, even in such an idylic place? Perhaps if they had lots and lots of books - and a motorcycle. ;) Thank you for your kind words.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Would that such a world might exist, but with their tangled pasts and prickly natures, how long could peace last, even in such an idylic place? Perhaps if they had lots and lots of books - and a motorcycle. ;) Thank you for your kind words.
I think maybe she likes Sirius, but lusts after Snape. Hmm?
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Oh, her feelings for Severus run deeper than lust, but he's not the sort to give into love without some sort of fight. I think she loves them both, just not in the same way, as befitting two very different and complex men.
Response from Melenka (Author of Just a Little Bit)
Oh, her feelings for Severus run deeper than lust, but he's not the sort to give into love without some sort of fight. I think she loves them both, just not in the same way, as befitting two very different and complex men.