Chapter Eleven
Chapter 11 of 36
sweetflagThe threat posed by the Ministry is eliminated when two abused wizards are released from a terrible curse.
ReviewedOn Apparating, Moody was struck by the brine-scented wind as it whipped around him; he staggered for a moment at the intensity of it and then glanced around. The furze seemed to go on forever, vibrating stiffly as the air rushed over it; only the occasional scrawny tree lancing upwards broke the monotony of the scene. Seagulls screeched and soared overheard, and he could hear the heavy, dull pounding of waves against rock.
The house he sought was perched on the very edge of the cliff, silhouetted against the heavy, bruised sky. Had it not belonged to a wizard, it would have surely succumbed to gravity and fallen. Tall and slender with numerous chimneys sprouting from the sharply angled roof, it suggested great melancholy; the very building seemed to lean over so that it could watch the waves bite and grind at the cliff, as if wishing that it could tumble into the ocean's uncaring maw. The shingles had been painted black, but over time, sea-spray and rain had bleached most of it. It now looked like a solitary, partially rotten tooth, jutting up from a gangrenous jaw. Moody shuddered and wound his way through the resisting furze: Smith was expecting him.
The door opened without so much as a creak, and Moody felt slightly disappointed at the anti-climax before the thin and pale face of Smith appeared in the thin gap between door and frame.
"Come in, Moody," he said quickly while stepping aside and pulling the door open further. With a sense of urgency, he helped Moody to remove his thick travelling cloak before hanging it up alongside his own coat.
Moody followed Smith along a narrow hallway, which was contradictorily light and cheering, and into a small kitchen. Smith ushered him into a chair, finished making his tea and then slid into the chair opposite.
"I went and saw Smethwyck today," Smith said curtly. "We had a nice chat about the good ol' days."
"Get much from him?"
Smith frowned and took a sip of tea. "He gave me the name of someone who may be able to help us further."
"This is turnin' into a right melodrama, Smith."
"Well, I think we're in the closing chapters, my friend."
"The suspense is killin' me," groused Moody.
Smith chuckled and told the Auror what Smethwyck had divulged, watching the grizzled face before him darken as the tale unfolded.
"Topliss!" Moody exclaimed. "I wouldn' have thought it."
"I tried to get in touch with him at the Ministry, but he hasn't been in work for months; apparently, he's been transferred to an isolation ward in St Mungo's." He took another deep gulp of tea and then sighed softly. "Could just be another dead end." Despite his careful and consoling tone, Smith thrummed deep inside; it was like he'd woken after a long sleep and was shaking with that raw power of sudden understanding and purpose. The challenge of the investigation had given him a new lease, a new joy and fervour that had been absent since the death of his wife. He knew that the search had to end soon, but some secret, deep-down part wanted it to last, wanted to savour it; knowing that this would be his last meal before he died, he wanted to glut.
"If it ain't, then that lad has some explainin' to do!" snarled Moody. Going back to those memories that the damned Pensieve had stirred up all those months ago, he tried to see how Topliss could have been involved...if the boy had done anything that in hindsight had been suspicious...and there was nothing! Topliss had been the model of proficiency and professionalism. His mood worsened as he tried to connect the cadet to the apparent death of the young witch. "Don't make sense though," he muttered. "What would he have to gain by makin' it look like she'd died?" Both his eyes fixed on Smith's carefully blank face. "What would have been the point?"
Smith shook his head slowly. His mind had been whirling and spinning with various ideas and theories, but none of them made much sense. He had even pondered that Ophelia had been abducted for ransom, but so many years and knowing that she had been released into the care of the Muggle emergency services rendered it unreasonable. Darker and more evil suggestions had crawled up from the blackest corner of his imaginings, but he doubted that Ophelia would have been allowed to live if she had suffered that nightmare. And if she had been taken for extra, less official questioning, then why not do it all under the guise of the Ministry acting in everyone's best interests? She would have been unaware if the questions were unnecessary or unethical.
"Nothin' else has been goin' on," said Smith dejectedly after his thoughts had spiralled back into doubts and confusion. "In fact, a remarkable amount of nothin' has been goin' on. It seems that what Dumbledore and young Potter have been sayin' has been put down to either high spirits, madness or scaremongerin'."
Moody snorted at the stupidity of it all, at the sheer bloody-mindedness of them all that they could have such warnings and yet ignore them. He shook his head and sighed loudly.
"'Spose we'd best check out Topliss, as he is our only lead," grumbled Moody.
--X--
She had walked this road many times before; some sign of her should be imprinted upon the pavement, some testament to her many footsteps, but all that existed were cracks, litter and other, less pleasant, adornments. She had, at one time, walked briskly and eagerly to St Mungo's where she worked as a Healer. With time, however, her enthusiasm had been dented and bruised by the constancy of it all, all the injuries and accidents, all the tears and fears. There had been a time, a terrible time, when her feet had pounded upon it after Death Eaters had attacked a Muggle school and her fiancé had been injured, caught between two vile hexes.
Now, her feet scuffed against the uneven, cracked slabs, as if of their own will, while she stared ahead with unfocused and sunken eyes. Rain pummelled the ground, and water rushed and gurgled along the gutters. The pavement was slick, and cars went past in a hiss of spray. She failed to notice the two men standing in the bus shelter and the silver tabby crouched under the hedgerow, but it was no matter as Evelyn Topliss had not noticed anything for quite some time.
Continuing past the bus stop and ambling along the pavement, unaware of her concerned and determined entourage, her feet took her to the end of the street and then turned her right. The wind was fierce, channelled between two tall rows of flats; her breath was snatched away, tears plucked from her eyes, and her hat blew from her head to roll on its rim, bouncing and darting up the road. But still her feet marched her forward.
Pushing open the gate, she strode on, not bothering that she did not hear the gate close behind her, and neither did she jerk or scream when a gentle hand caught her elbow.
--X--
Various emotions warred across her face; fear, confusion, despair, anger, sorrow, grief, disgust and disbelief. Her fingers mindlessly entwined and writhed in her lap, and her eyes flicked from one face to another, trying to see the cruel joke or some chance of error. But some part of her knew that what they said, what deceit and horror they had suggested, was indeed true; she could recall the moment he had fixed his wand upon her and how his eyes had burned with some strange zeal as he cast the curse.
"Why?"
It was such a small word, one that could be a mere exhalation rather than a question. She tried to answer it for herself, tried to see the reason for such a thing because there had to be, and when her shattered and exhausted mind had turned from the task, she had begged to know from those around her.
Moody sighed softly, such a gentle demonstration of grief and sorrow that Minerva had reached out to grip his shoulder on instinct.
"Can yer remember what he asked yer to do?" Moody asked gently.
Evelyn shook her head and stared at Moody as he knelt near her feet; her eyes scrutinised his face, and then she tentatively reached out a hand to gently catch a few strands of his wispy, grey hair between her fingers. Moody held his breath as she rolled the strands between thumb and forefinger; an idea began to crystallize in his skull, lancing through his brain and thundering down his spine.
"He asked me to get some of your hair," she whispered, her horrified expression belying the soft wonder of her voice. "He said that he was going to get you to go to St Mungo's for a health check with one of the healers." Her eyes lost their focus as she trawled through her memories.
Moody nodded and remembered how the team of Aurors investigating his ordeal had asked that he return to St Mungo's. He had baulked at the idea, but had finally agreed, constant nightmares and exhaustion giving him little recourse.
"A while back, Brian came home all flustered and bothered." She licked her lips and frowned. "He said something about an old scroll and how it mustn't be reopened. It seemed to weigh heavily on him, and he seemed to get even worse as time wore on; I was so worried." Her voice was getting softer and softer, as if she dared not vocalise her fears. "We'd just finished dinner, and he'd gone to do the dishes; I followed him to help." Her face twisted as a painful memory made itself known. "I saw him open up his arms, and I thought ... I thought that he'd found some peace with it all. I rushed to hold him, my husband." She held her head and trembled. "He whispered in my ear that he was sorry and that if there was another way, then he would take it." She sobbed into her thin hands. "He pulled his wand and cast that hideous curse." She collapsed in on herself, curling up on the chair; they could hear soft sobs and moans coming from the tight mass of misery.
Dumbledore stood by the mantelpiece; he had maintained a silent vigil on the empty, dark, wind-ravaged street while Moody had cast the counter-curse and started questioning the woman. He had sensed Minerva's eyes upon him several times, and he had felt an irrational anger and resentment bubbling up inside. Couldn't he be allowed to keep himself separate from one painful act? He was being gracious after all. This was no atrocity or necessary evil; this was the liberation of a woman from a terrible curse.
Closing his eyes and listening to the barely audible grief that still somehow managed to drown out the ticking of the clock, the fire crackling in the hearth and his blood rushing through his ears, he tried to keep his frustration from escalating. The search for Ophelia Black was unearthing skeletons in the closets of some very powerful wizards, and he feared that the more they searched, the greater the risk of Ophelia being discovered by Voldemort. It was a terrible dilemma, and as the weeks wore on, he found himself regretting his decision. A particularly violent surge of anger made him wince; he did not have that luxury, and he knew that whatever the outcome, the information that he suspected lurked in her addled brain was worth Ophelia's death.
He opened his eyes and turned to study the tableau before him...it was quite stunning. Evelyn was a tight bundle of grief wrapped up in a floral print chair with Moody on his knees, his hands on the ends of the chair arms. Minerva stood to the side, her body bent at the waist as she studied the poor creature with blatant sympathy, her hands clenched above her own breaking heart.
"Where is Brian now, Evelyn?" asked Dumbledore.
Minerva blinked and turned her head to glance at Dumbledore; his tone had been sharp and unsympathetic. Evelyn stopped and slowly lifted her head to peer at the man through her stick-thin fingers. An answer sprang to mind, but she knew that it was false; she felt compelled to answer nonetheless.
"He's at St. Mungo's." Her tremulous voice conveyed her forced dishonesty, and she whimpered as the last vestige of the curse worked its evil magic. She clutched her head as if in pain and then sagged back. "I don't know where he is." She moistened her lips nervously and fixed Dumbledore with a beseeching stare. "I believe him when he said that he had no choice; whatever made him do this, I have to believe that he had no choice. Please, when you find him, please remember that."
Dumbledore studied the pale woman, trembling and fearful, and he wished that he could think as she. However, he smiled and nodded; he could afford her this. She visibly sagged with relief.
"How did he pass on his instructions?" Moody enquired gently.
"He talked to me via the Floo," she admitted quietly.
"On a daily basis?" Moody asked.
"No, but I knew to sit by the fire at eleven every night in case he needed me." She would have thought that she would be feeling something: anger, hate, disgust, betrayal; and yet, she now felt eerily calm. Her thoughts were ordered and precise, they all focused upon one thing: why? Without the curse crushing her mind, she wondered why these people had been her rescuers and not the Ministry of Magic; why were these people not calling the Aurors? In those questions, she saw some benefit to her husband, and she clung to it. She recognised them all; McGonagall had been her teacher, Moody had been an important figure in her husband's early career, and Dumbledore was, obviously, just well known.
"I cannot impress upon you, my dear, how important it is that we speak with your husband," Dumbledore said firmly.
Evelyn felt a flash of irritation, her first unfettered and honest emotion in many months, and she pursed her lips. "I managed to deduce that for myself, sir! When I said the time, I was already thinking that you would wish to be here."
Dumbledore smiled and bowed...the woman had returned! The strength that had supported her husband, only to be stolen by him, was flooding back; her cheeks were flushed, and her eyes now blazed with a fierce determination.
"Very well," Dumbledore said decisively. "We shall, in a few hours, seek the truth in this matter."
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I'm so glad that the random story widget sent me to this story. I've barely put it down since I started reading yeaterday, forever wanting to see what little gem you'd reveal next. I love how you twisted things with varying viewpoints so that we never really know 'the truth' about the past until Ophelia/Veronica's memories are restored.I'd like to imagine that when Severus got up and walked out of the Shrieking shack, he Apparated straight to Whitehaven.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello. I am sorry about not replying sooner. Thank you for the review. This was my first fanfic, and I enjoyed writing it...and I'm glad you liked it.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello. I am sorry about not replying sooner. Thank you for the review. This was my first fanfic, and I enjoyed writing it...and I'm glad you liked it.
Beautiful ending, although I wish you'd left her relationship with Severus a little less open-ended! You imply plenty for me to assume what I want, though. ;) I'm glad you sort of split the difference. I think that was really her best option.I have to admit you've put me over a barrel, now. I'm working on a story where a potion called Lethe's Milk is going to be used. Perhaps I should rename it... or not, LOL. I could come up with another name that similar to something another author uses, too.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I am so thrilled that the ending was alright. I must admit to liking those scenes/stories that give you lots to think about... and I didn't want to set them up together cosy and secure... maybe in a sequel? Please don't rename the potion. I love creating new potions--my biochemistry heritage, methinks.I think the nail has been hit on the head there... I've come across names and places and things that are similar to what I've done or doing. My plan is to hope that no one notices... :P Thank you for staying with this to the bitter end... :)
Oh, what a choice! To face life on its terms or to go to a sterile environment where she wouldn't have any of the pain but would also miss some great joy as well. I don't envy her.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
What's better not knowing, eh? :DLast chapter coming up. I'm rather sad to be ending it, and I hope it doesn't do a disservice to your time and effort in reading it.
I had wondered how it was going to be possible to fool Sirius with Ophelia in the house. Now I understand. Poor everyone, dealing with so much pain. Hopefully, as Minerva noticed, now that everyone knows Voldemort is back, somthing better can happen.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I thought about writing some huge and inescapable series of events that meant Ophelia was out of the way and the house quiet, but, as I have experienced, one event can push us into being absent from our surroundings and those around us--we make it happen sometimes.Thank you for the review
Aw... Arthur and Molly can be so cute.Poor Dumbledore and Moody, though, forced to witness the unimaginable.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello :DThank you,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
.Three more chapters to go... and then the end.
Oh, poor Auror Smith. Somehow I think he got his pound of flesh, challenging Voldemort's very deepest-held phobias in front of his minions.And Ophelia finally finds herself in Severus's arms. Delicious.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Yes, I think Smith got more out of it than Voldemort.You liked that scene: Ophelia and Severus? I fretted and sweated about it. I don't generally write that kind of thing. I'm much happier writing about doom, gloom and angst.Thank you, and I hope you like how this ends.
I like watching her thoughts evolve. That Molly is pretty smart, but she's been through war, herself.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello. Thanks for the review... and still being here. Things are going terribly at the moment, and all I can offer is that this story will be finished; the when is open to debate. Molly, like so many of the women in the books, is a neglected character.
Finally, were are getting somewhere, somewhere where I want this story to be. I hope that Veronica will always be deep inside, gently guiding her thoughts and passions. Even more than Molly, I think that's what was the cayalyst in the kitchen that night that finally dropped the scales from their eyes.
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Hello
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
!I'm so thrilled you're still reading this; it has been an age since I was able to write anything. I'm so thankful. It has taken them a while... thank heavens for Molly!
A lot of things are coming together, here, between the canon and the story. If Sirius leaves the house to go to the Ministry battle, that will complicate matters with Ophelia, who wasn't supposed to be left in the house alone. Hmm... there are other complications there, too. I'm eager to see what you do with it all.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review and your thoughts. :)
I gather the the battle at the Ministry is imminent. I'll be glad to be rid of Sirius Black.I hope there will be lots more of Severus and Ophelia, it's about time time he has some joy and a sense of belonging to someone or something.You said this is HBP compliant, I can live with that. Is it DH compliant? I love it when someone rewrites JKR's ridiculous ending for Snape and has him survive. He deserved so much better than the end she gave him, the whole plot of the series ended up hinging on him and she wrote him as if he were a minor character who didn't deserve a future.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Your wish regarding Sirius shall be granted. It's all winding up for the end, yes.The story won't run right up to the end of HBP, so it's compliant to that point. DH is moot with regards to this tale.I agree, and no matter how many times I read the last three books, I can't shift the idea that JKR had to change pretty much most of what she had planned to pen.I've done three (I think :S) stories where he survives by various means, so I also find his death to be an annoyance. Thank you for the review and still being here :D It's much appreciated.
Severus was pretty evil there, but it was a calculated risk and it seems to have worked, at least somewhat. I can't believe Rookwood got the drop on Smith like that. Smith should have looked for whatever Rookwood was searching for and gotten it from him. Life is going to get harder for Moody, now, I bet.I could clobber Sirius, but it's too soon for Severus and Ophelia, anyway. They need to wait until they don't need her information so much any more.I love your descriptions of the action. I always feel like I am in a Pensieve with you.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review :) Even the best get caught out. Moody will suffer as a result of this.Yeah... I could clobber Sirius, but JKR got to him first. To be fair, he is trying to be fair and decent.Thank you for the lovely compliment... it's like the ultimate caffeine boost. If only it could get all my real life work done for me. Oh well.
Severus's method was harsh, but it was probably the only way to sucessfully help her. Ironically she had to be blind to find her way out. I'm glad he was able to get through to her.Where does an a-- h--- like Sirius get the right to tell Severus to take his hands off her? What a jerk! He can't get past his own problems to help her, but Severus could add helping her to all the other responsibilities on his shoulders. I hope that Severus and Ophelia can find more thanfriendly solace in one another. I also hope that you plan this to be canon compliant through the battle at the Ministry and non compliant at the end of the Battle at Hogwarts.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I just couldn't imagine Snape being anything else. I tried the sympathetic and caring approach, and I was grimacing as I wrote it. Snape is harsh, and to be honest, I think that Ophelia appreciated his method--she wouldn't have accepted kindness from him.Well... I guess that Sirius is losing so much that he's feeling more possessive and territorial than ever. This is HBP compliant--obviously with some additions--so you know some of the outcomes of this story already.Thanks again for reading my saga :)
I can't remember which was the last chapter you sent me and many of the things i had saved were lost when my computer was fried in a power outage power surgelast spring and didn't make it to the new computer, so I will pick up from here.Sirius is far to selfish and self centered to ever be of help to her, he always has been that way.Dumbledore is a control freak and his ego makes him feel that only he can save the wizarding world, even after death. He has gotten himself to the point where he's fooling himself if he thinks he even has the capacity to really care about anyone except for how they can be used by him to further his plan.He is right though, Severus is the only one who can really help Ophelia. As Moody said, she has no frame of reference and Severus can provide her with that and a lot more, I hope.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
:) I can't rememeber what I sent either; my computer met a nasty end too, and I'm reconstructing chapters and adding in new ones.Odd, isn't it? But Sirius and Dumbledore are set up as the good guys?! This story is going very slowly at the minute, and I'm hoping that in the new year things will be easier.Thanks for staying with the story and the review :)
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Oh, hurrah! So great to see this fic still going.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It's going slowly at the minute... but it will be finished. This story brought me here... lol... and taught me grammar :D
Thank you for the review and the boost.
Severus had to at least have guessed more than he's been letting on in the present day. Gruesome as it was, I'm sure all those order people probably approved of what she did.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I apologise for the lull in this story. This will be finished, but not until some things are resolved at this end.Thank you for reading the story and all the reviews :)
Well there goes my guess about who her father was. Interesting thoughts about what made Regulus go "bad".
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I'm sorry about the long gap between posts. My computer went 'technical', and I lost a significant amount of work. This chapter was constructed from various emails and handwritten notes.May I ask who you thought her father was?Thank you so much for staying with this story, and thanks for the review :)
Response from Rose of the West (Reviewer)
I had originally thought her father would turn out to be "Uncle Tom". since I couldn't think of a reason he would be so affectionate toward her.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Once I'd logged out, I had the idea that Uncle Tom would be the number one suspect.Tom has his reasons for his affection.Thanks for reading and staying with this story :)
She's thirteen at this point? Quite precocious. I take it these are memories that Ophelia is showing Veronica?
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thanks for the review. She's thirteen at this point, yes. These memories are those that are resurfacing as Ophelia is answering Dumbledore's questions. They're really to provide some background information, tie in some canon information, and bring everyone up to date with the present day.
I'm very confused now.Why does Dumbledore accuse her of being a Death Eater at the beginning of the chapter and why was he acting so contemptuously? She doesn't seem to me to be a Death Eater. She is now willing to tell him everything she knows about Horcruxes, that doesn't sound like a loyal Death Eater to me.When is Snape going to make another appearance?
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I'm sorry to confuse you.They really don't know anything about her; their investigations yielded a very vague and contradictory image of Ophelia/Veronica. In short, they have to think that she's a Death Eater while hoping that she's not.You know what Ophelia is like, but they have not seen or understood the battle that she's had while coming together. Also, it's a way to get the rest of the story out :D, and there is a lot yet to say about Ophelia. She did allow people to die to gain her freedom from everything--why?Dumbledore has been very keen to give Ophelia the benefit of the doubt, and he's just testing the waters, and I think that after so many years, he'd be better at seeing what was in front of him rather than relying solely upon Legilimency.In this instance, trust Dumbledore. Would she, after everything, trust the friendly, open hand? Or would the harsh and bitter reality of everything be more acceptable?I just thought, I never sent this chapter to you, did I? Eeek! I was so busy with the run-up to Christmas that it went right out of my head... my apologies for that.Snape will make another appearance. I'll send a summary of the remaining chapters.
That wasn't a direction I expected to go, but now it seems so obvious. Dealing with the Horcruxes is more important than anything else, really.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
The books suggest that the concept of Horcruxes had bothered Dumbledore since the end of 'Chamber of Secrets'. The idea prompted him to seek out Horcruxes in the six week holiday between years five and six, i.e. after this story which runs up to the end of OoTP.It's the most prominent starting point for them as far as Dumbledore is concerned.. the rest will be dealt with later.Thank you for reviewing :)
I see nososaintly felt the same as I did. That's why I told you I may have missed something when I read it through the second time. What was going on was too compelling to bother about grammar or anything else. You achieved exactly what you set out to do in that passage with Sirius. I'm glad I'm not prone to nightmares, if I were that would have given me a humdinger of a nightmare.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I never thought of that! I wonder... Write that well that I could pass myself of as being decent with grammar by bamboozling with a distracting plot.... hmmm. I feel so warm and fuzzy about the wonderful reviews; I feel all spurred on and encouraged--I can't thank people enough for their effort and kind thoughts. This fanfic was my very first, and for some reason, I worry and fret, panic and suffer with it.The whole site has been nurturing... *sniffles*Thanks for the review,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
... I'm off to conjure up chapter twenty!
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I never thought of that! I wonder... Write that well that I could pass myself of as being decent with grammar by bamboozling with a distracting plot.... hmmm. I feel so warm and fuzzy about the wonderful reviews; I feel all spurred on and encouraged--I can't thank people enough for their effort and kind thoughts. This fanfic was my very first, and for some reason, I worry and fret, panic and suffer with it.The whole site has been nurturing... *sniffles*Thanks for the review,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
... I'm off to conjure up chapter twenty!
You've already had all my comments and know what I think about this chapter, so I won't repear them except to tell you that I thought this chapter was excellently written and that I was happy to look it over for you before it was posted.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thanks for that,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
. Altering the story has been both thrilling and terrifying, and as such, I'm happy and relieved that it's been all for the good of the story. It's opened new avenues of thought and challenging concepts--I just hope that I can do the plot justice now! Thank you for your advice and guidance :)
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thanks for that,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
. Altering the story has been both thrilling and terrifying, and as such, I'm happy and relieved that it's been all for the good of the story. It's opened new avenues of thought and challenging concepts--I just hope that I can do the plot justice now! Thank you for your advice and guidance :)
I liked the conflict between her two sides. I showed that Veronica has a very controlling personality and that the unknown side of Ophelia may be the good side. She Imperiused Topliss and had himfake her death and hide her identity to get away from Voldemort so there must be some good in her.Oddly, I only just picked up on the name Veronica Speedwell. It never struck me while the earlier creeping speedwell was blooming, but now that my other types of veronica are blooming or about to come into bloom I finally caught on.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review :) It was difficult for me to try to formalise some logic behind the situation... Ophelia had been, for want of a better term, 'put on hold' while the new personality of Veronica was allowed to develop, so they sort of existed side by side. When Ophelia was summoned via the potion, it seemed reasonable that there would be two distinct minds left to squabble. I'm not a psychologist, the only thing I know is how to spell it, and the theory may be so off track as to be laughable, but I enjoyed the disparity and the scenes that it engendered... that's my reason and I'm sticking to it!It means a great deal that the name has been discovered... I had Veronica from the start, and it was when I was sipping coffee, just over a year ago, that 'speedwell' caught my eye--it was the flower decorating my mug. Odd how that happens, eh? I was left wondering just how much was down to coincidence... after that, I spent more time thinking about the other names... had so much fun on 'Babies' names' websites... lol.I am so glad that you're still with the story, thank you.I'm working on a Snape chapter, a new chapter eighteen, and it ain't 'arf givin' me grief... lol. When this was first written, I was so intent on finishing it, but now that the pressures have gone and I am more comfortable, I want to fill it out and add the little touches that will hopefully make it more appealing. There was a scene involving Onesiphorus that was removed to keep this from escalating into some huge beast, but I will write it now... ... ooops! I ramble, sorry. Thank you again :)
I was going to say that this reminded me of 'The Exorcist', but then I figured that this is an exocism in and of itself and Voldemort is the demon who must be cast out of her mind body and soul.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review. It's interesting how another viewpoint can make you just stop and stare... I hadn't seen it quite like that before. Thank you, again :)
There's not much that can be said about this chapter. The only thing I can do is just what they are doing, just wait and see how it all works out.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review. I hope that I'm not slipping... *looks worried* I do find writing certain scenes/genres to be quite tough at times... if you think that the chapter needs some more work, then I'd love any comments. Having the reviews helps me to improve, and as this was my first fanfic, I can appreciate that it may be quite rough. The next chapters are being beta read; I hope to upload pretty soon. Thank you for sticking with the story :)
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Sorry, but as an aside... your reviews seem to be duplicated... I'm not sure why they're being duplicated, some glitch, perhaps? :D
Response from Trickie Woo (Reviewer)
I tried to respond to you about an hour and a half ago and I see my response didn't make it through.First, there was no problem with the writing or the content of the chapter. I was expressing my emotional reaction to what Dumbledore had to do. Obviously it had to be done and there is nothing I, or any of your characters, can do about it, so I will just have to sit back and wait to see how things work themselves out.Second, I had problems posting reviews on TPP last night. The one I wrote after I wrote this one didn't show up at all, I had to go back this afternoon and rewrite it and it finally did show up. I have no idea what happened that caused my review to become duplicated. I figured that TPP was working on the system and they must still be since the first response I wrote didn't show up.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for that :D I guess that I'm still a very nervous writer.I had no idea the pains you were going to to review this; I am so humbled. I mentioned in an earlier response that I was thinking of writing more Snape-centric chapters... consider that a given, as a thanks for your efforts. Thank you :)
That's an intersting theory about the dark mark and how it keeps him in tune with all his death Eaters. It sounds quite logical to me.As for the rest of the chapter, the plot still has too many convolutions for me to figure anything out yet, but given time I'm sure I will.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for reviewing. Logical and rather nasty in my opinion *shudders* imgaine not even being allowed to keep your emotions and deepest thoughts private. I hope that you continue to enjoy it :)