Chapter Thirty two
Chapter 32 of 36
sweetflagStanding tall, Smith meets death on his own terms, and Molly pushes Ophelia to make a move.
ReviewedHe knew he was dead. He knew the moment he’d opened his eyes and saw what they’d done. Oh, for a few minutes, his brain had tried to hide it from him, but Smith had never been one for denying the truth. Unfortunately, facing death with his eyes wide open wasn’t as important or as soothing as he hoped it would be. He still felt a pillock—but at least his demise would be interesting.
He wished he could lash out to expel some of the burning frustration, but the drug was still oozing around his body, sapping his strength. It wouldn’t have helped, anyway; the chain around his ankle looked suitably heavy. All he could do was let his gaze drift around his cell.
It was small, only just long enough to let him lie flat, and if he could extend his arms, then his hands would touch both walls. It was a broom cupboard. There were wooden notches in the wall where the upright brooms would be nestled so the bristles were kept clear of the floor—no flier worth his salt would tolerate his bristles getting bent out of shape from resting on the floor. There was a small, slatted window up above to allow for proper ventilation, and the door was solid—half a foot thick wooden panels inlaid with iron—to prevent unruly brooms breaking free. Unfortunately, that also meant it was sound-proof.
Not that he’d be calling for help. Only the cream of society could afford broom cupboards, and that meant he was most likely the guest of a pure-blood, which all in all suggested he would be getting no help. A conclusion further enforced by the fact that the chain around his ankle was attached to the end of one the brooms—a Nimbus 2000 by the looks of it: devilishly fast and nimble. So, he knew he was dead; he just hadn’t physically caught up, yet.
That isn’t to say he hadn’t tried to escape or send some message to his comrades… to Moody. Whatever Rookwood had stuck in him had also affected his magic, and although he was adept at wandless non-verbal magic, he could barely summon the magic to disturb the dust motes in the air. His Patronus—despite his recollections of his beloved wife—failed to even glow reassuringly, and his efforts at untangling the chain had just resulted in a headache.
Moody would have to find out the hard way.
oXoShe felt something soft mould around her back and shoulders and the hard weight of Severus above her, pressing her deeper. Puffs of dust assaulted her nose, but they were lost in the smell of his musk and excitement. Apparition always left her breathless, and the heady combination of travel and Snape were pushing her beyond what she could control: it was terrifying and liberating. The spell deserted them, and their limbs wrapped around each other, gravity crushing them together.
Her hands slid up his back, as if to ground her, and up into his hair which fell in soft, slick strands between her fingers. His face was in shadow, but she could see the glint in his eyes, and she couldn’t stop the shiver his gaze elicited.
Just as she felt herself begin to burn in that stare, he turned his head and flicked his tongue over the soft flesh on her inner wrist. The move surprised her, not only for its seeming uniqueness but also for the response it inspired in her belly. When he dragged his tongue languidly over the spot he had just tasted, she groaned and twisted beneath him. But then he stopped; save for his chest heaving with deep breaths, he was frozen.
Was he waiting for something? Had she done something to cause him concern? He was watching her intently. Those black eyes, those chips of onyx, were scrutinising her face as though searching for something specific. A frown marred her sweat-beaded forehead, and she brought her hands round to cup his stern face.
Her thumb slid down in a gentle arc to brush the corner of his lips. He jolted at the contact, jarred out of the fugue that had gripped him. His pale lips parted, and the tip of his tongue caressed the pad of her thumb. It was gentle; it was slow. It was erotic beyond words.
Her breath snatched and her guts rolled. She had no idea what to do, yet urgently needed to do something. Her last experience had been Regulus; then, it had seemed so straightforward, but now…. She pushed her thumb into his mouth, earning a groan and the exquisite pleasure of seeing his eyes flutter closed. Warm lips closed, trapping her digit, and Severus’ tongue curled around it.
His own hands brushed along hers until he could grip her wrists. While sucking and gently dragging his teeth over her thumb, he pulled her other hand down towards the pillow, holding it fast beside her head. He could hear her breaths… feel her breasts brush against his chest. When her thighs shifted, he was overwhelmed with lust. He’d waited, longed for this for twenty years… agonising over and relishing images of her plucked from another’s mind. He wanted to eradicate the memories of Regulus; he wanted, needed, her mind to be full of him.
“Severus…”
He was selfish and greedy. He’d waited, he’d longed… he’d grieved, and then he’d denied. Now he had what he wanted and needed. She was here, trembling beneath him… sighing his name.
His name!
It came as a whisper, as a sigh, as silk against skin. His name had never seemed so evocative and passionate… so promising and sensual. He shuddered at the sound. Beneath his palms, he could feel her pulse fluttering wildly. From her trembling lips, he could hear breathy moans, and his gaze was drawn to the shadows playing across her pale skin. He let her thumb slip from his mouth, nipping it before her hand fell to the pillow, where her fingers desperately plunged into her hair, gripping it.
“Ophelia…” he muttered, lingering over the ‘o’ so her name was like a gasp.
Those dark eyes closed and her mouth fell open; Severus smirked and wondered if her name from his lips had affected her as profoundly as his from hers. He repeated her name, drawing it out, teasing her with it. She squirmed and pressed her head back into the grey pillow. The hollow at the base of her throat demanded attention, so he delicately traced the edge of a collar bone from her shoulder to that delicious shadow. Beneath his fingers, he felt her shiver, goosebumps blossoming across her skin.
She mewled like a cat, arching her back and grimacing as if in pain. He knew that pain. He knew the ache and the throb and the burning heat that a single touch could engender. It was hell, and it was divine.
He took advantage of her agony and dipped his head to taste the flesh on her neck. She eagerly obliged, tilting her head, allowing him access to ease her suffering. Her skin was smooth and warm beneath his questing lips. Tendons stood taut as she strained, and he bit and licked his way from throat to ear. The soft, rounded lobe slipped between his teeth, and he gently suckled, relishing the weight of it against his tongue.
A hand suddenly gripped his hair, twisting painfully, and he let slip a snarl of appreciation. A nail raked across his scalp, and a moan burst from his chest. He bit down on the tasty morsel, earning a squeal and a harsh tug on his hair. Severus released his treat and lifted his head, seeking her eyes. In the gloom, they looked as dark as his own, and in their depths, he searched for approval… permission… desire.
She was confused… confused and frustrated beyond reason. He kept stopping! His face was carefully bland, which she knew meant his mind was awhirl. She could see the mania of his thoughts in his eyes. It was difficult to focus on them without drowning, but she bullied her mind until it stopped thinking how nice he smelt, and how his hands burned her skin, and how she could still feel his trail of kisses and nips along her neck. She’d seen something similar a long time ago. In a crystal cavern…
It was impossible to examine the memory, and constructing a stratagem to deal with Severus Snape was even more ludicrous, given that her body ached and her brain was slowly melting. Not that she was sure she could do it when not inebriated on lust and longing. But through the need and the urgency, a long-fettered instinct reared its head and broke its chains.
oXo
Smith heard the footsteps. They were coming for him. As a romantic young Auror, he’d seen his death in battle, curses and spells exploding around him as he fought to the last, dying bravely and with honour. As a jaded old man, he just wanted to die with as much dignity as he could muster. It was all he had. The door swung open smoothly and silently. Life was rarely as dramatic as one imagined. But when he saw the masks, he knew life was as nasty and as pain-filled as one feared.
“Come on, old man,” sneered the farthest of the two Death Eaters. “You’re needed outside.”
To his surprise, he was helped to his feet by the other wizard, who used his shorter stature to drape Smith’s arm comfortably across his shoulders. The other masked man grabbed the Nimbus and walked out, the chain clattering unnervingly against the stone floor as it slithered out.
He was led out to a tiled courtyard. Torches cast their warm, flickering, golden light, and the gathered Death Eaters cast their long shadows. They formed a semicircle before him, and in the centre stood Voldemort. The chain was placed carefully at Voldemort’s feet, then the two escorts slipped to the edges, their duty done.
“Auror Smith… Onesiphorus,” Voldemort whispered smoothly, as though greeting a comrade.
The sound of his name caused a stir in the standing wizards. Smith let his gaze drift slowly over them, taking in as many details as possible. It was all he could do, really. That and die like an old Auror. Merlin! He’d make them dread killing an old Auror.
His gaze returned slowly to the Dark Lord: He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named. Smith would be damned if he was going to be cowed by a former classmate—one who had failed to beat him in Defence against the Dark Arts! It may have been easy to beguile these… children, but it was harder when someone remembered all those things you did as a boy at school.
“Mr Riddle… Tom!”
Outrage unfurled, and he felt his lips twitch in triumph. He’d make his murder hard for them. One wry laugh from Voldemort quelled his followers.
“Very good, Smith,” he sighed. “I knew you wouldn’t disappoint me. Just as I know that you’ll play your part in this… drama with exceptional skill.”
At this, another broom was presented. Smith watched as one of the masked men stepped forward and magicked an equally thick and heavy chain into being. He wasn’t shocked when it was attached to his free ankle. He had been right: his death would be interesting… and also messy.
“You may not be aware,” Voldemort continued conversationally, “but there was once a man—your namesake—who made a pilgrimage for the sake of his faith—much as you have done, if faith and duty were synonymous.”
Again, the gathered wizards stirred… eagerly and with predatory interest.
“I know of St Onesiphorus,” Smith muttered disdainfully—he’d allow them no fun at his expense.
Voldemort blinked slowly and then sneered as he realised he had very little power over the Auror standing before him. The man knew what was coming, and yet he stood tall.
Smith attacked him with the only weapon he had left. “I don’t know what’s after this, “ he growled, “but I go there with grace and peace, and there ain’t nothin’ that ye can do to make me fear ye or cause me to bow one inch to ye.” He leant forward and pulled back his lips, the scar twisting his face into a fearsome expression. “Ye fear it, dread it… ye fret to stop what must ‘appen to all men at the end of their span.”
The curse arced through the air, hitting him squarely in the chest, snatching his breath and sending him crashing to the floor. His scream lodged behind his firmly clenched teeth. He wouldn’t give them anything: not his life, not his dignity, and not his screams.
“I do not fear Death,” Voldemort hissed into his ringing ears. “I will be its master. You will not fear Death; you will fear me.”
Smith spat out bile and turned his aching head towards the Dark Lord. “No one can escape Death,” he croaked. “’E’s a canny ‘unter, and ‘e’ll find ye as sure as ye will be brought down.”
Voldemort inched closer, so that his lips were against Smith’s temple. “Death could walk at my side and not do so much as caress my shoulder.”
Unseen, Smith grinned triumphantly. Tom would never change: he had been proud then, and he was proud now. Smith used it.
“Ye arrogant toe-rag,” he gasped. “There ain’t no power to stop ‘im.”
In his ear, Voldemort laughed softly. “There is. Every child knows of it. But even without it, I cannot be touched by Death. I have no need for whatever is ‘after this’, for there never will be anything other than this for me… for you.”
“Ye will die, and ye’ll die incomplete.”
Voldemort pulled away to look Smith in the eye. There was the smallest flicker of doubt in the scarlet depths, but it was quickly snuffed out. “You are a clever Auror. How many others know, I wonder?” The smug smile fell back into place. “No matter; not even my Death Eaters know what or where they are. The destruction of one has done me no harm—as you can plainly see!—and I have more important things to occupy my time. I will not concern myself, and you will die: alone, useless and unknown.”
Voldemort stood, turning to his Death Eaters, who, sensing their time had come, darted forwards. Harsh hands grabbed at Smith, hauling him to his feet where his eyes latched onto the two riders mounting the brooms. Despite it all, Smith grinned. He would die an Auror. With a wave of Voldemort’s pale hand, the riders lowered on their brooms and hurtled into the night.
oXo
He traced the outline of the wound. Ophelia had healed the others when they’d returned to Grimmauld Place, but he’d hidden this one beneath his cuff. Watching her face as she had applied the salve had been a delight—the way it flickered between sympathy and pleasure. He knew—and rumours would be circulating Hogsmeade in the morning of just how severely the shack was haunted—that she’d taken pleasure from what they’d shared, just as he knew that she would have the same thoughts and questions that had plagued him as a young man. Whereas, he had had no one, she had him to reassure her, make her know that despite how it looked, he had found a deep release through what she had done. He couldn’t quite explain why he desired, needed, it to be this way… he just did.
His fingernail grazed over the sore crescent on his inner left wrist, and he inhaled sharply. The red curve reminded him of what they’d shared, of the relief and connection she offered… and the joy she inspired. The sharp sting reminded him she had provided him with everything he had needed. Her parting kiss—sweet and gentle against his chapped lips—had assured that all was well between them. They had become lovers. The thought warmed him as he extinguished the candle and slid under the duvet.
Miles away, Ophelia felt herself ache in delicious places. Even in the kitchen, she could still smell him… them. She wondered if the scent was haunting her, or if she actually carried it with her. Her lips curved up into a wicked smile at the thought of Sirius sniffing around her; would he figure out who had claimed her? The thought, for some reason, delighted her. Maybe that was it? Severus had marked her, claimed her: made it clear where she belonged. And in his way, he had assured her that he belonged to her.
Despite the thrum of her nerves and the tingle across her skin, she was exhausted. The kitchen was as she had left it. Her eyes lingered over the portents of her evening—the askew chairs and the empty mugs on the drainer. Her angst at Molly’s words seemed so long ago, and her own fears and dread had reduced to the echoes of a bad dream: she felt foolish for being so terrified. She straightened the chairs and moved to rinse out the mugs. When she looked up, she caught her reflection in the window. She didn’t question who looked back at her, nor did she turn away. She knew who she was, and she found that she was content with the knowledge.
Author's notes: At last! I can only hope I am forgiven for the delay. Pending beta approval on the last chapter, this is now complete. For those who have stayed with this: thank you. I hope you enjoy it.
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48 Reviews | 2.29/10 Average
I'm so glad that the random story widget sent me to this story. I've barely put it down since I started reading yeaterday, forever wanting to see what little gem you'd reveal next. I love how you twisted things with varying viewpoints so that we never really know 'the truth' about the past until Ophelia/Veronica's memories are restored.I'd like to imagine that when Severus got up and walked out of the Shrieking shack, he Apparated straight to Whitehaven.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello. I am sorry about not replying sooner. Thank you for the review. This was my first fanfic, and I enjoyed writing it...and I'm glad you liked it.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello. I am sorry about not replying sooner. Thank you for the review. This was my first fanfic, and I enjoyed writing it...and I'm glad you liked it.
Beautiful ending, although I wish you'd left her relationship with Severus a little less open-ended! You imply plenty for me to assume what I want, though. ;) I'm glad you sort of split the difference. I think that was really her best option.I have to admit you've put me over a barrel, now. I'm working on a story where a potion called Lethe's Milk is going to be used. Perhaps I should rename it... or not, LOL. I could come up with another name that similar to something another author uses, too.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I am so thrilled that the ending was alright. I must admit to liking those scenes/stories that give you lots to think about... and I didn't want to set them up together cosy and secure... maybe in a sequel? Please don't rename the potion. I love creating new potions--my biochemistry heritage, methinks.I think the nail has been hit on the head there... I've come across names and places and things that are similar to what I've done or doing. My plan is to hope that no one notices... :P Thank you for staying with this to the bitter end... :)
Oh, what a choice! To face life on its terms or to go to a sterile environment where she wouldn't have any of the pain but would also miss some great joy as well. I don't envy her.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
What's better not knowing, eh? :DLast chapter coming up. I'm rather sad to be ending it, and I hope it doesn't do a disservice to your time and effort in reading it.
I had wondered how it was going to be possible to fool Sirius with Ophelia in the house. Now I understand. Poor everyone, dealing with so much pain. Hopefully, as Minerva noticed, now that everyone knows Voldemort is back, somthing better can happen.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I thought about writing some huge and inescapable series of events that meant Ophelia was out of the way and the house quiet, but, as I have experienced, one event can push us into being absent from our surroundings and those around us--we make it happen sometimes.Thank you for the review
Aw... Arthur and Molly can be so cute.Poor Dumbledore and Moody, though, forced to witness the unimaginable.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello :DThank you,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
.Three more chapters to go... and then the end.
Oh, poor Auror Smith. Somehow I think he got his pound of flesh, challenging Voldemort's very deepest-held phobias in front of his minions.And Ophelia finally finds herself in Severus's arms. Delicious.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Yes, I think Smith got more out of it than Voldemort.You liked that scene: Ophelia and Severus? I fretted and sweated about it. I don't generally write that kind of thing. I'm much happier writing about doom, gloom and angst.Thank you, and I hope you like how this ends.
I like watching her thoughts evolve. That Molly is pretty smart, but she's been through war, herself.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello. Thanks for the review... and still being here. Things are going terribly at the moment, and all I can offer is that this story will be finished; the when is open to debate. Molly, like so many of the women in the books, is a neglected character.
Finally, were are getting somewhere, somewhere where I want this story to be. I hope that Veronica will always be deep inside, gently guiding her thoughts and passions. Even more than Molly, I think that's what was the cayalyst in the kitchen that night that finally dropped the scales from their eyes.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
!I'm so thrilled you're still reading this; it has been an age since I was able to write anything. I'm so thankful. It has taken them a while... thank heavens for Molly!
A lot of things are coming together, here, between the canon and the story. If Sirius leaves the house to go to the Ministry battle, that will complicate matters with Ophelia, who wasn't supposed to be left in the house alone. Hmm... there are other complications there, too. I'm eager to see what you do with it all.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review and your thoughts. :)
I gather the the battle at the Ministry is imminent. I'll be glad to be rid of Sirius Black.I hope there will be lots more of Severus and Ophelia, it's about time time he has some joy and a sense of belonging to someone or something.You said this is HBP compliant, I can live with that. Is it DH compliant? I love it when someone rewrites JKR's ridiculous ending for Snape and has him survive. He deserved so much better than the end she gave him, the whole plot of the series ended up hinging on him and she wrote him as if he were a minor character who didn't deserve a future.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Your wish regarding Sirius shall be granted. It's all winding up for the end, yes.The story won't run right up to the end of HBP, so it's compliant to that point. DH is moot with regards to this tale.I agree, and no matter how many times I read the last three books, I can't shift the idea that JKR had to change pretty much most of what she had planned to pen.I've done three (I think :S) stories where he survives by various means, so I also find his death to be an annoyance. Thank you for the review and still being here :D It's much appreciated.
Severus was pretty evil there, but it was a calculated risk and it seems to have worked, at least somewhat. I can't believe Rookwood got the drop on Smith like that. Smith should have looked for whatever Rookwood was searching for and gotten it from him. Life is going to get harder for Moody, now, I bet.I could clobber Sirius, but it's too soon for Severus and Ophelia, anyway. They need to wait until they don't need her information so much any more.I love your descriptions of the action. I always feel like I am in a Pensieve with you.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review :) Even the best get caught out. Moody will suffer as a result of this.Yeah... I could clobber Sirius, but JKR got to him first. To be fair, he is trying to be fair and decent.Thank you for the lovely compliment... it's like the ultimate caffeine boost. If only it could get all my real life work done for me. Oh well.
Severus's method was harsh, but it was probably the only way to sucessfully help her. Ironically she had to be blind to find her way out. I'm glad he was able to get through to her.Where does an a-- h--- like Sirius get the right to tell Severus to take his hands off her? What a jerk! He can't get past his own problems to help her, but Severus could add helping her to all the other responsibilities on his shoulders. I hope that Severus and Ophelia can find more thanfriendly solace in one another. I also hope that you plan this to be canon compliant through the battle at the Ministry and non compliant at the end of the Battle at Hogwarts.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I just couldn't imagine Snape being anything else. I tried the sympathetic and caring approach, and I was grimacing as I wrote it. Snape is harsh, and to be honest, I think that Ophelia appreciated his method--she wouldn't have accepted kindness from him.Well... I guess that Sirius is losing so much that he's feeling more possessive and territorial than ever. This is HBP compliant--obviously with some additions--so you know some of the outcomes of this story already.Thanks again for reading my saga :)
I can't remember which was the last chapter you sent me and many of the things i had saved were lost when my computer was fried in a power outage power surgelast spring and didn't make it to the new computer, so I will pick up from here.Sirius is far to selfish and self centered to ever be of help to her, he always has been that way.Dumbledore is a control freak and his ego makes him feel that only he can save the wizarding world, even after death. He has gotten himself to the point where he's fooling himself if he thinks he even has the capacity to really care about anyone except for how they can be used by him to further his plan.He is right though, Severus is the only one who can really help Ophelia. As Moody said, she has no frame of reference and Severus can provide her with that and a lot more, I hope.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
:) I can't rememeber what I sent either; my computer met a nasty end too, and I'm reconstructing chapters and adding in new ones.Odd, isn't it? But Sirius and Dumbledore are set up as the good guys?! This story is going very slowly at the minute, and I'm hoping that in the new year things will be easier.Thanks for staying with the story and the review :)
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Oh, hurrah! So great to see this fic still going.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It's going slowly at the minute... but it will be finished. This story brought me here... lol... and taught me grammar :D
Thank you for the review and the boost.
Severus had to at least have guessed more than he's been letting on in the present day. Gruesome as it was, I'm sure all those order people probably approved of what she did.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I apologise for the lull in this story. This will be finished, but not until some things are resolved at this end.Thank you for reading the story and all the reviews :)
Well there goes my guess about who her father was. Interesting thoughts about what made Regulus go "bad".
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I'm sorry about the long gap between posts. My computer went 'technical', and I lost a significant amount of work. This chapter was constructed from various emails and handwritten notes.May I ask who you thought her father was?Thank you so much for staying with this story, and thanks for the review :)
Response from Rose of the West (Reviewer)
I had originally thought her father would turn out to be "Uncle Tom". since I couldn't think of a reason he would be so affectionate toward her.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Once I'd logged out, I had the idea that Uncle Tom would be the number one suspect.Tom has his reasons for his affection.Thanks for reading and staying with this story :)
She's thirteen at this point? Quite precocious. I take it these are memories that Ophelia is showing Veronica?
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thanks for the review. She's thirteen at this point, yes. These memories are those that are resurfacing as Ophelia is answering Dumbledore's questions. They're really to provide some background information, tie in some canon information, and bring everyone up to date with the present day.
I'm very confused now.Why does Dumbledore accuse her of being a Death Eater at the beginning of the chapter and why was he acting so contemptuously? She doesn't seem to me to be a Death Eater. She is now willing to tell him everything she knows about Horcruxes, that doesn't sound like a loyal Death Eater to me.When is Snape going to make another appearance?
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I'm sorry to confuse you.They really don't know anything about her; their investigations yielded a very vague and contradictory image of Ophelia/Veronica. In short, they have to think that she's a Death Eater while hoping that she's not.You know what Ophelia is like, but they have not seen or understood the battle that she's had while coming together. Also, it's a way to get the rest of the story out :D, and there is a lot yet to say about Ophelia. She did allow people to die to gain her freedom from everything--why?Dumbledore has been very keen to give Ophelia the benefit of the doubt, and he's just testing the waters, and I think that after so many years, he'd be better at seeing what was in front of him rather than relying solely upon Legilimency.In this instance, trust Dumbledore. Would she, after everything, trust the friendly, open hand? Or would the harsh and bitter reality of everything be more acceptable?I just thought, I never sent this chapter to you, did I? Eeek! I was so busy with the run-up to Christmas that it went right out of my head... my apologies for that.Snape will make another appearance. I'll send a summary of the remaining chapters.
That wasn't a direction I expected to go, but now it seems so obvious. Dealing with the Horcruxes is more important than anything else, really.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
The books suggest that the concept of Horcruxes had bothered Dumbledore since the end of 'Chamber of Secrets'. The idea prompted him to seek out Horcruxes in the six week holiday between years five and six, i.e. after this story which runs up to the end of OoTP.It's the most prominent starting point for them as far as Dumbledore is concerned.. the rest will be dealt with later.Thank you for reviewing :)
I see nososaintly felt the same as I did. That's why I told you I may have missed something when I read it through the second time. What was going on was too compelling to bother about grammar or anything else. You achieved exactly what you set out to do in that passage with Sirius. I'm glad I'm not prone to nightmares, if I were that would have given me a humdinger of a nightmare.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I never thought of that! I wonder... Write that well that I could pass myself of as being decent with grammar by bamboozling with a distracting plot.... hmmm. I feel so warm and fuzzy about the wonderful reviews; I feel all spurred on and encouraged--I can't thank people enough for their effort and kind thoughts. This fanfic was my very first, and for some reason, I worry and fret, panic and suffer with it.The whole site has been nurturing... *sniffles*Thanks for the review,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
... I'm off to conjure up chapter twenty!
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I never thought of that! I wonder... Write that well that I could pass myself of as being decent with grammar by bamboozling with a distracting plot.... hmmm. I feel so warm and fuzzy about the wonderful reviews; I feel all spurred on and encouraged--I can't thank people enough for their effort and kind thoughts. This fanfic was my very first, and for some reason, I worry and fret, panic and suffer with it.The whole site has been nurturing... *sniffles*Thanks for the review,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
... I'm off to conjure up chapter twenty!
You've already had all my comments and know what I think about this chapter, so I won't repear them except to tell you that I thought this chapter was excellently written and that I was happy to look it over for you before it was posted.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thanks for that,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
. Altering the story has been both thrilling and terrifying, and as such, I'm happy and relieved that it's been all for the good of the story. It's opened new avenues of thought and challenging concepts--I just hope that I can do the plot justice now! Thank you for your advice and guidance :)
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thanks for that,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
. Altering the story has been both thrilling and terrifying, and as such, I'm happy and relieved that it's been all for the good of the story. It's opened new avenues of thought and challenging concepts--I just hope that I can do the plot justice now! Thank you for your advice and guidance :)
I liked the conflict between her two sides. I showed that Veronica has a very controlling personality and that the unknown side of Ophelia may be the good side. She Imperiused Topliss and had himfake her death and hide her identity to get away from Voldemort so there must be some good in her.Oddly, I only just picked up on the name Veronica Speedwell. It never struck me while the earlier creeping speedwell was blooming, but now that my other types of veronica are blooming or about to come into bloom I finally caught on.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review :) It was difficult for me to try to formalise some logic behind the situation... Ophelia had been, for want of a better term, 'put on hold' while the new personality of Veronica was allowed to develop, so they sort of existed side by side. When Ophelia was summoned via the potion, it seemed reasonable that there would be two distinct minds left to squabble. I'm not a psychologist, the only thing I know is how to spell it, and the theory may be so off track as to be laughable, but I enjoyed the disparity and the scenes that it engendered... that's my reason and I'm sticking to it!It means a great deal that the name has been discovered... I had Veronica from the start, and it was when I was sipping coffee, just over a year ago, that 'speedwell' caught my eye--it was the flower decorating my mug. Odd how that happens, eh? I was left wondering just how much was down to coincidence... after that, I spent more time thinking about the other names... had so much fun on 'Babies' names' websites... lol.I am so glad that you're still with the story, thank you.I'm working on a Snape chapter, a new chapter eighteen, and it ain't 'arf givin' me grief... lol. When this was first written, I was so intent on finishing it, but now that the pressures have gone and I am more comfortable, I want to fill it out and add the little touches that will hopefully make it more appealing. There was a scene involving Onesiphorus that was removed to keep this from escalating into some huge beast, but I will write it now... ... ooops! I ramble, sorry. Thank you again :)
I was going to say that this reminded me of 'The Exorcist', but then I figured that this is an exocism in and of itself and Voldemort is the demon who must be cast out of her mind body and soul.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review. It's interesting how another viewpoint can make you just stop and stare... I hadn't seen it quite like that before. Thank you, again :)
There's not much that can be said about this chapter. The only thing I can do is just what they are doing, just wait and see how it all works out.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review. I hope that I'm not slipping... *looks worried* I do find writing certain scenes/genres to be quite tough at times... if you think that the chapter needs some more work, then I'd love any comments. Having the reviews helps me to improve, and as this was my first fanfic, I can appreciate that it may be quite rough. The next chapters are being beta read; I hope to upload pretty soon. Thank you for sticking with the story :)
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Sorry, but as an aside... your reviews seem to be duplicated... I'm not sure why they're being duplicated, some glitch, perhaps? :D
Response from Trickie Woo (Reviewer)
I tried to respond to you about an hour and a half ago and I see my response didn't make it through.First, there was no problem with the writing or the content of the chapter. I was expressing my emotional reaction to what Dumbledore had to do. Obviously it had to be done and there is nothing I, or any of your characters, can do about it, so I will just have to sit back and wait to see how things work themselves out.Second, I had problems posting reviews on TPP last night. The one I wrote after I wrote this one didn't show up at all, I had to go back this afternoon and rewrite it and it finally did show up. I have no idea what happened that caused my review to become duplicated. I figured that TPP was working on the system and they must still be since the first response I wrote didn't show up.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for that :D I guess that I'm still a very nervous writer.I had no idea the pains you were going to to review this; I am so humbled. I mentioned in an earlier response that I was thinking of writing more Snape-centric chapters... consider that a given, as a thanks for your efforts. Thank you :)
That's an intersting theory about the dark mark and how it keeps him in tune with all his death Eaters. It sounds quite logical to me.As for the rest of the chapter, the plot still has too many convolutions for me to figure anything out yet, but given time I'm sure I will.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for reviewing. Logical and rather nasty in my opinion *shudders* imgaine not even being allowed to keep your emotions and deepest thoughts private. I hope that you continue to enjoy it :)