Chapter Twenty five
Chapter 25 of 36
sweetflagMoody and Smith tidy up a few loose ends. Ophelia continues to fill in the gaps, and Sirius finds himself damned by the emerging memories.
ReviewedAuthor's Notes: Many apologies for the long lull in posting; something nasty happened to my computer. I'm not technical, so I have no idea what the murder weapon was, but suffice to say that not much on my old computer survived.
Many thanks to my patient beta, Falconfalmorgan, and to Trickie Woo, who checked through and has offered so much advice.
The trolley plummeted down the steep rails, and Moody glanced over at Smith. A grim smile twisted his lips; Smith was clutching at the handrail and looking decidedly queasy. The Auror had never fared well on any form of transport. It had been a running joke during their training days that Smith had become a master marksman solely to avoid the need to pursue a suspect on broomstick.
Serves the old codger right, thought Moody, for keeping such a useful snippet to himself; many a skeleton could be found in abandoned closets. Letting out a chortle, which was smothered by the screech of wheels against track, Moody enjoyed the thrill of the ride and let the thrill of the hunt finally infuse him.
The goblin sitting in the front pulled on the brake, and the cart screamed to a halt by a dark and cold platform.
"Thank Merlin!" moaned Smith while clambering out and lurching over to the safety of the stationary wall. His shuffling footsteps echoed mournfully in the small cave-like hollow.
The goblin huffed and lumbered over to a door seemingly carved into the rock face. Pulling out a simple, golden key, the banker waved his long-fingered hands, and with a dull vibration, the door opened. He turned to the two wizards and studied them both with distaste. The amber light danced in his sharp, black eyes.
"As per the agreement between the Bank and the Ministry of Law Enforcement, you have one hour to search the vault for the items you seek." With that instruction and warning, the goblin turned on his heel and climbed into the trolley. With the sound of grinding metal, the trolley rolled along the track to be swallowed whole by the suffocating dark. The two wizards waited until the rumble of wheels faded.
"Charmin' fellow," mumbled Smith.
"Stop gripin' and come on," Moody said impatiently; his palms almost itched at the prospect of rifling through Elladora Black's vault. "We got a lot of vault to search, and I reckon that we 'ave about 'alf of that 'our before they realise we shouldn't be 'ere." Nodding, Smith quickly followed him in. "Yer go over there, and I'll look 'ere. You know what we're after."
"We duplicate the information and go from there," continued Smith, stepping past a pile of Galleons equating to his salary. "This is thrillin', ain't it?" he asked with a merry lilt to his voice. "Takes me back a few decades, it does."
"Well, if it takes ye back to the days when yer were a moody and quiet man, then that'll be 'elpful."
Smith straightened and snorted. "What happened to yer sense of humour?"
"Nothing," Moody answered bluntly. "I never 'ad one."
Dust, cobwebs and gathered treasures littered the small vault. This was the vault mentioned in the codicil: vault 759. This was what Elladora had bequeathed to Ophelia, and it was a fair inheritance. Ophelia would not struggle financially in the Wizarding world while she found her feet. But they weren't interested in that. They were after something that had been put in here after her mother's death. Or at least, what they hoped had been deposited in amongst the gold and glitter. Oddly, it was a treasure that Elladora may have scorned, and one that may have cost Capella her life.
Smith checked his timepiece: ten minutes had rushed past while they had waded through the useless dross. He could imagine the miserable goblin sitting at his desk and pondering the presence of two Aurors in the vault. If they couldn't find it soon, then they'd have to surrender the line of enquiry, but Smith was reluctant to let that happen. Smith was prepared to risk the rest of his life to prevent the mystery surrounding Capella and Ophelia being left to slowly decay in an abandoned vault.
But where were they?
"'Ere!" exclaimed Moody, lifting up a cardboard box.
Smith looked across and dropped the jewellery box that he had been going through; dull rubies and diamonds cascaded to the floor, crushed under his boot as he stepped over to the triumphant Moody. His greedy eyes feasted upon the small, innocuous but precious container. His heart hammered away...he hadn't felt this energised in half a century!
"Now we get out of 'ere?" he asked with a grin.
"Yep!" Moody confirmed with a quick nod.
oooXooo
Letters! Hundreds of them, spanning almost nine years; it was a heartbreaking account of love, loss and longing. The last letter slipped from Moody's fingers, and Smith sniffed, his own emotions trying to settle after the harsh reading. It had taken three days to go through the whole collection. Some had been impossible to read due to long-dried tearstains and others due to age. There was evidence to indicate that a few had been ripped and then repaired. And they all screamed out a record of something that had been both beautiful and cruel.
"So," said Moody after a thoughtful pause. "That's the reason why Capella left."
"And the cause of 'er death," Smith added sadly. "I know how that can get to ye," he continued in a strained whisper. Moody settled back carefully, not making any sound to disturb his friend. "It's like the world 'as gone, and ye wonder why yer keep goin'." Smith wiped a trembling hand over his face, and Moody knew that he wiped away the tears that he had never allowed to fall all those years ago. "I..." he started, only to pause while he winced. "The ache that never stops; the future full of it grindin' yer down and eatin' at what's left." He looked up, those green eyes full of something terrible: anguish, pain, self-loathing, despair, and longing. "I... I would 'ave done the same, if I'd 'ave found the strength... or perhaps been weak enough."
Moody blinked and inhaled unsteadily. He knew Smith had suffered following the murder of his wife, but the depth of it and the dark routes on which it had led him had remained hidden. It put everything in a different light. This house wasn't some kind of memorial to his dead wife; it was all that Smith really had. This was where Smith's life had ended, and the following decades had been him scrabbling around, waiting for his body to catch up with the awful event.
"Work gave me some purpose, and I think Amelia knew. She wouldn't let 'em retire me. I 'oped that through work, I'd find out who 'ad done it, but other than the Dark Mark above 'er office, declaring that it were the Death Eaters, I never did."
Moody inhaled to speak, but Smith raised his hand and glared at him. "I didn't tell ye to make ye feel bad; it just came out. A day ain't gone by where I don't miss her, but I learnt to live with it a long time ago." Moody's mouth snapped shut. "Capella couldn't. When she found out that 'er 'usband had been killed, she couldn't cope," he added solemnly. "In that one moment of weakness, she dealt the Killing curse upon 'erself." His head dropped to his chest, and he scratched his forehead. "If only she'd 'ad some distraction, some moment between knowin' and actin' to stay 'er 'and; she may never 'ave cast it."
"It explains why she left Ophelia," Moody finished, the last loose end tied up. "She were too immersed in that terrible grief. Her mind weren't workin' right. It must 'ave crippled 'er to know that it 'ad been Lucius Malfoy who 'ad cast the curse what killed 'im. If she 'ad lived," he added, bitterness and pain staining his voice, "she'd 'ave 'ad the 'eartbreak of knowin' that Narcissa lied in court to give 'im an alibi."
Smith snorted. "It's quite ironic, innit?" he asked cynically. "The family that made Ophelia an orphan were the ones to look after 'er the best."
"I figure that neither Lucius nor Narcissa know of Ophelia's 'eritage."
"I doubt it," murmured Smith. "I think the knowledge died with Capella. Despite the obvious pain expressed in them there letters, it seems that 'e never met up with 'is daughter."
"Trust me," said Moody darkly. "It would have 'urt 'im badly."
"You knew 'im?" Smith's eyebrows shot up in surprise, and he lowered his mug, the tea forgotten.
"'E was in the Order. One of the best." Sniffing, Moody sat back and folded his arms across his chest. "It makes sense, looking back," he continued thoughtfully. "Dumbledore 'ad asked 'im to keep an eye on the Blacks, and 'e struck up a good rapport with Capella. Dumbledore suggested that 'e use whatever 'e could. I guess that they became close and then lovers."
"Will you tell Ophelia who 'er father was?"
Moody sighed and sat forward. "I'll certainly tell Dumbledore. It'd be good for 'im to see the consequences of some of 'is decisions."
Smith eyed him warily, observing the taut features and the way Moody's eyes narrowed. All was not well within the Order, mused Smith. It took a lot to unsettle Moody this much. The sips from the hipflask were more frequent than Smith recalled, and the thoughtful silences that were common from old were somehow more potent and grim. There was something not right, and it was bothering him.
"What about the letters?"
"The letters..." Moody whispered hoarsely, his gaze lingering sadly over the gathered papers. "I'm not sure." He wanted to pass them on. He desperately wanted to pass the letters on to someone. They were all that was left of something beautiful in what had been a vile time, and they were all that Ophelia would ever have from her mother and father. "I think that it's time their tale was told," he suggested. "They can't suffer as a result of it."
"But what about Ophelia?" demanded Smith firmly. "She'd suffer if it got out."
"We'd only tell who needs to know, and they won't tell a soul." He knew he was right, and he started to gather them up, carefully straightening and stacking them in neat piles ready to be bound and delivered. Damn the consequences! These were the last accounts of a wizard who had died doing a duty, and his story deserved to be known. Ophelia had a right to know about her father. She needed to know what had reared up and torn her from her mother's side, depositing her in the clutches of a family intent on corrupting the Wizarding world. She needed to know that she had been loved and could still be part of a family.
Smith thought hard and fast, his mind stretching out over repercussions and ramifications, discerning pitfalls and problems, but he finally agreed that Ophelia would be as safe as ever.
"Ye're right, Moody," he said with a grin, and he began aiding his friend to sort the letters. "Let's take them to Molly; introduce 'er to Fabian's daughter."
oooXooo
In the small room at number twelve, Grimmauld Place, where secrets were tumbling thick and fast, Lupin reached out and gripped Sirius' trembling arm. As the devastating words slipped from Ophelia's lips, Sirius slid down the wall, lost in the pain and shame that was smothering his mind and sense.
It had been his fault! His mother hadn't pushed Regulus into their arms...he had! His perceived desertion had been the final push that Regulus had needed to join those corrupted ranks, and all the time, he could have saved his little brother with one word or glance. Sickened and dizzy, he closed his eyes and groaned softly; Lupin was at his side, supporting him again as his world tilted.
Sirius didn't want to believe what he was hearing. Her words portrayed Regulus as a hero as he worked to bring down the Dark Lord: how he had infiltrated the Death Eaters to protect them all and put himself in a position to kill Voldemort. Sirius had thought his little brother a sycophant, an ignorant waste of magic that had lived and died for the wrong cause. The boy had been the apple of his Mother's eye and the pride of his dark family, and yet, ironically, the one who had done the most and the best to destroy what the Order stood against.
He felt hot tears running down his cheeks, and his throat burned with suppressed emotion. He wanted to run. He had misjudged his brother. He wanted to scream. While Regulus had struggled, he had lived a life that was less than what it could have been and more than what it should have been, and all because he had thought himself so bloody marvellous. He wanted to be numb. This was the price of pride; the pound of flesh was being ripped from his heart.
Feeling the weight of his unsettled emotions, his feet carried him downstairs, as if they knew what would be the most effective way of nullifying the chaos in his head. The cabinet loomed before him, the glass in the doors, glittering like peevish eyes, and the decanters gleaming like teeth. He stood, his mind whirling, and reached out for the Firewhiskey, his fingers sliding over the cool, smooth surface. It was the simplest calmative... the easiest way to end his immediate agony. Yet he couldn't lift that blessed panacea. Weeping and moaning, he collapsed against the cabinet; if it couldn't ease him, then it would support him. Falling onto his knees, the warm wood pressing against his shoulder, he soon felt another warmer, softer pressure against his shoulder, and through his tears, he saw Lupin kneeling next to him.
Nothing was said; they just held each other quietly and desperately, both fighting to keep hold of some truths in the shifting sands of their memories. Both tried to subdue the rage that was burning and coursing through their veins and resolve the bitter irony twisting their insides. They had wasted so much effort in keeping secrets and hating when they could have worked together and defeated the Dark Lord once and for all ages ago...no need to wait for a young boy to grow to manhood under Voldemort's wrathful shadow.
They had directed their fate, wrought their own destiny and dictated their future. The trail of tears could be seen meandering though their past; each wrong decision and unjustified hatred a cairn, leading them forward to an inescapable destination. And now, as Sirius sobbed and Lupin consoled, the path ahead seemed set, the route selected by years of misunderstanding and prejudices: it was the only way forward.
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48 Reviews | 2.29/10 Average
I'm so glad that the random story widget sent me to this story. I've barely put it down since I started reading yeaterday, forever wanting to see what little gem you'd reveal next. I love how you twisted things with varying viewpoints so that we never really know 'the truth' about the past until Ophelia/Veronica's memories are restored.I'd like to imagine that when Severus got up and walked out of the Shrieking shack, he Apparated straight to Whitehaven.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello. I am sorry about not replying sooner. Thank you for the review. This was my first fanfic, and I enjoyed writing it...and I'm glad you liked it.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello. I am sorry about not replying sooner. Thank you for the review. This was my first fanfic, and I enjoyed writing it...and I'm glad you liked it.
Beautiful ending, although I wish you'd left her relationship with Severus a little less open-ended! You imply plenty for me to assume what I want, though. ;) I'm glad you sort of split the difference. I think that was really her best option.I have to admit you've put me over a barrel, now. I'm working on a story where a potion called Lethe's Milk is going to be used. Perhaps I should rename it... or not, LOL. I could come up with another name that similar to something another author uses, too.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I am so thrilled that the ending was alright. I must admit to liking those scenes/stories that give you lots to think about... and I didn't want to set them up together cosy and secure... maybe in a sequel? Please don't rename the potion. I love creating new potions--my biochemistry heritage, methinks.I think the nail has been hit on the head there... I've come across names and places and things that are similar to what I've done or doing. My plan is to hope that no one notices... :P Thank you for staying with this to the bitter end... :)
Oh, what a choice! To face life on its terms or to go to a sterile environment where she wouldn't have any of the pain but would also miss some great joy as well. I don't envy her.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
What's better not knowing, eh? :DLast chapter coming up. I'm rather sad to be ending it, and I hope it doesn't do a disservice to your time and effort in reading it.
I had wondered how it was going to be possible to fool Sirius with Ophelia in the house. Now I understand. Poor everyone, dealing with so much pain. Hopefully, as Minerva noticed, now that everyone knows Voldemort is back, somthing better can happen.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I thought about writing some huge and inescapable series of events that meant Ophelia was out of the way and the house quiet, but, as I have experienced, one event can push us into being absent from our surroundings and those around us--we make it happen sometimes.Thank you for the review
Aw... Arthur and Molly can be so cute.Poor Dumbledore and Moody, though, forced to witness the unimaginable.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello :DThank you,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
.Three more chapters to go... and then the end.
Oh, poor Auror Smith. Somehow I think he got his pound of flesh, challenging Voldemort's very deepest-held phobias in front of his minions.And Ophelia finally finds herself in Severus's arms. Delicious.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Yes, I think Smith got more out of it than Voldemort.You liked that scene: Ophelia and Severus? I fretted and sweated about it. I don't generally write that kind of thing. I'm much happier writing about doom, gloom and angst.Thank you, and I hope you like how this ends.
I like watching her thoughts evolve. That Molly is pretty smart, but she's been through war, herself.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello. Thanks for the review... and still being here. Things are going terribly at the moment, and all I can offer is that this story will be finished; the when is open to debate. Molly, like so many of the women in the books, is a neglected character.
Finally, were are getting somewhere, somewhere where I want this story to be. I hope that Veronica will always be deep inside, gently guiding her thoughts and passions. Even more than Molly, I think that's what was the cayalyst in the kitchen that night that finally dropped the scales from their eyes.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
!I'm so thrilled you're still reading this; it has been an age since I was able to write anything. I'm so thankful. It has taken them a while... thank heavens for Molly!
A lot of things are coming together, here, between the canon and the story. If Sirius leaves the house to go to the Ministry battle, that will complicate matters with Ophelia, who wasn't supposed to be left in the house alone. Hmm... there are other complications there, too. I'm eager to see what you do with it all.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review and your thoughts. :)
I gather the the battle at the Ministry is imminent. I'll be glad to be rid of Sirius Black.I hope there will be lots more of Severus and Ophelia, it's about time time he has some joy and a sense of belonging to someone or something.You said this is HBP compliant, I can live with that. Is it DH compliant? I love it when someone rewrites JKR's ridiculous ending for Snape and has him survive. He deserved so much better than the end she gave him, the whole plot of the series ended up hinging on him and she wrote him as if he were a minor character who didn't deserve a future.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Your wish regarding Sirius shall be granted. It's all winding up for the end, yes.The story won't run right up to the end of HBP, so it's compliant to that point. DH is moot with regards to this tale.I agree, and no matter how many times I read the last three books, I can't shift the idea that JKR had to change pretty much most of what she had planned to pen.I've done three (I think :S) stories where he survives by various means, so I also find his death to be an annoyance. Thank you for the review and still being here :D It's much appreciated.
Severus was pretty evil there, but it was a calculated risk and it seems to have worked, at least somewhat. I can't believe Rookwood got the drop on Smith like that. Smith should have looked for whatever Rookwood was searching for and gotten it from him. Life is going to get harder for Moody, now, I bet.I could clobber Sirius, but it's too soon for Severus and Ophelia, anyway. They need to wait until they don't need her information so much any more.I love your descriptions of the action. I always feel like I am in a Pensieve with you.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review :) Even the best get caught out. Moody will suffer as a result of this.Yeah... I could clobber Sirius, but JKR got to him first. To be fair, he is trying to be fair and decent.Thank you for the lovely compliment... it's like the ultimate caffeine boost. If only it could get all my real life work done for me. Oh well.
Severus's method was harsh, but it was probably the only way to sucessfully help her. Ironically she had to be blind to find her way out. I'm glad he was able to get through to her.Where does an a-- h--- like Sirius get the right to tell Severus to take his hands off her? What a jerk! He can't get past his own problems to help her, but Severus could add helping her to all the other responsibilities on his shoulders. I hope that Severus and Ophelia can find more thanfriendly solace in one another. I also hope that you plan this to be canon compliant through the battle at the Ministry and non compliant at the end of the Battle at Hogwarts.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I just couldn't imagine Snape being anything else. I tried the sympathetic and caring approach, and I was grimacing as I wrote it. Snape is harsh, and to be honest, I think that Ophelia appreciated his method--she wouldn't have accepted kindness from him.Well... I guess that Sirius is losing so much that he's feeling more possessive and territorial than ever. This is HBP compliant--obviously with some additions--so you know some of the outcomes of this story already.Thanks again for reading my saga :)
I can't remember which was the last chapter you sent me and many of the things i had saved were lost when my computer was fried in a power outage power surgelast spring and didn't make it to the new computer, so I will pick up from here.Sirius is far to selfish and self centered to ever be of help to her, he always has been that way.Dumbledore is a control freak and his ego makes him feel that only he can save the wizarding world, even after death. He has gotten himself to the point where he's fooling himself if he thinks he even has the capacity to really care about anyone except for how they can be used by him to further his plan.He is right though, Severus is the only one who can really help Ophelia. As Moody said, she has no frame of reference and Severus can provide her with that and a lot more, I hope.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
:) I can't rememeber what I sent either; my computer met a nasty end too, and I'm reconstructing chapters and adding in new ones.Odd, isn't it? But Sirius and Dumbledore are set up as the good guys?! This story is going very slowly at the minute, and I'm hoping that in the new year things will be easier.Thanks for staying with the story and the review :)
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Oh, hurrah! So great to see this fic still going.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It's going slowly at the minute... but it will be finished. This story brought me here... lol... and taught me grammar :D
Thank you for the review and the boost.
Severus had to at least have guessed more than he's been letting on in the present day. Gruesome as it was, I'm sure all those order people probably approved of what she did.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I apologise for the lull in this story. This will be finished, but not until some things are resolved at this end.Thank you for reading the story and all the reviews :)
Well there goes my guess about who her father was. Interesting thoughts about what made Regulus go "bad".
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I'm sorry about the long gap between posts. My computer went 'technical', and I lost a significant amount of work. This chapter was constructed from various emails and handwritten notes.May I ask who you thought her father was?Thank you so much for staying with this story, and thanks for the review :)
Response from Rose of the West (Reviewer)
I had originally thought her father would turn out to be "Uncle Tom". since I couldn't think of a reason he would be so affectionate toward her.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Once I'd logged out, I had the idea that Uncle Tom would be the number one suspect.Tom has his reasons for his affection.Thanks for reading and staying with this story :)
She's thirteen at this point? Quite precocious. I take it these are memories that Ophelia is showing Veronica?
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thanks for the review. She's thirteen at this point, yes. These memories are those that are resurfacing as Ophelia is answering Dumbledore's questions. They're really to provide some background information, tie in some canon information, and bring everyone up to date with the present day.
I'm very confused now.Why does Dumbledore accuse her of being a Death Eater at the beginning of the chapter and why was he acting so contemptuously? She doesn't seem to me to be a Death Eater. She is now willing to tell him everything she knows about Horcruxes, that doesn't sound like a loyal Death Eater to me.When is Snape going to make another appearance?
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I'm sorry to confuse you.They really don't know anything about her; their investigations yielded a very vague and contradictory image of Ophelia/Veronica. In short, they have to think that she's a Death Eater while hoping that she's not.You know what Ophelia is like, but they have not seen or understood the battle that she's had while coming together. Also, it's a way to get the rest of the story out :D, and there is a lot yet to say about Ophelia. She did allow people to die to gain her freedom from everything--why?Dumbledore has been very keen to give Ophelia the benefit of the doubt, and he's just testing the waters, and I think that after so many years, he'd be better at seeing what was in front of him rather than relying solely upon Legilimency.In this instance, trust Dumbledore. Would she, after everything, trust the friendly, open hand? Or would the harsh and bitter reality of everything be more acceptable?I just thought, I never sent this chapter to you, did I? Eeek! I was so busy with the run-up to Christmas that it went right out of my head... my apologies for that.Snape will make another appearance. I'll send a summary of the remaining chapters.
That wasn't a direction I expected to go, but now it seems so obvious. Dealing with the Horcruxes is more important than anything else, really.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
The books suggest that the concept of Horcruxes had bothered Dumbledore since the end of 'Chamber of Secrets'. The idea prompted him to seek out Horcruxes in the six week holiday between years five and six, i.e. after this story which runs up to the end of OoTP.It's the most prominent starting point for them as far as Dumbledore is concerned.. the rest will be dealt with later.Thank you for reviewing :)
I see nososaintly felt the same as I did. That's why I told you I may have missed something when I read it through the second time. What was going on was too compelling to bother about grammar or anything else. You achieved exactly what you set out to do in that passage with Sirius. I'm glad I'm not prone to nightmares, if I were that would have given me a humdinger of a nightmare.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I never thought of that! I wonder... Write that well that I could pass myself of as being decent with grammar by bamboozling with a distracting plot.... hmmm. I feel so warm and fuzzy about the wonderful reviews; I feel all spurred on and encouraged--I can't thank people enough for their effort and kind thoughts. This fanfic was my very first, and for some reason, I worry and fret, panic and suffer with it.The whole site has been nurturing... *sniffles*Thanks for the review,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
... I'm off to conjure up chapter twenty!
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I never thought of that! I wonder... Write that well that I could pass myself of as being decent with grammar by bamboozling with a distracting plot.... hmmm. I feel so warm and fuzzy about the wonderful reviews; I feel all spurred on and encouraged--I can't thank people enough for their effort and kind thoughts. This fanfic was my very first, and for some reason, I worry and fret, panic and suffer with it.The whole site has been nurturing... *sniffles*Thanks for the review,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
... I'm off to conjure up chapter twenty!
You've already had all my comments and know what I think about this chapter, so I won't repear them except to tell you that I thought this chapter was excellently written and that I was happy to look it over for you before it was posted.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thanks for that,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
. Altering the story has been both thrilling and terrifying, and as such, I'm happy and relieved that it's been all for the good of the story. It's opened new avenues of thought and challenging concepts--I just hope that I can do the plot justice now! Thank you for your advice and guidance :)
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thanks for that,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
. Altering the story has been both thrilling and terrifying, and as such, I'm happy and relieved that it's been all for the good of the story. It's opened new avenues of thought and challenging concepts--I just hope that I can do the plot justice now! Thank you for your advice and guidance :)
I liked the conflict between her two sides. I showed that Veronica has a very controlling personality and that the unknown side of Ophelia may be the good side. She Imperiused Topliss and had himfake her death and hide her identity to get away from Voldemort so there must be some good in her.Oddly, I only just picked up on the name Veronica Speedwell. It never struck me while the earlier creeping speedwell was blooming, but now that my other types of veronica are blooming or about to come into bloom I finally caught on.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review :) It was difficult for me to try to formalise some logic behind the situation... Ophelia had been, for want of a better term, 'put on hold' while the new personality of Veronica was allowed to develop, so they sort of existed side by side. When Ophelia was summoned via the potion, it seemed reasonable that there would be two distinct minds left to squabble. I'm not a psychologist, the only thing I know is how to spell it, and the theory may be so off track as to be laughable, but I enjoyed the disparity and the scenes that it engendered... that's my reason and I'm sticking to it!It means a great deal that the name has been discovered... I had Veronica from the start, and it was when I was sipping coffee, just over a year ago, that 'speedwell' caught my eye--it was the flower decorating my mug. Odd how that happens, eh? I was left wondering just how much was down to coincidence... after that, I spent more time thinking about the other names... had so much fun on 'Babies' names' websites... lol.I am so glad that you're still with the story, thank you.I'm working on a Snape chapter, a new chapter eighteen, and it ain't 'arf givin' me grief... lol. When this was first written, I was so intent on finishing it, but now that the pressures have gone and I am more comfortable, I want to fill it out and add the little touches that will hopefully make it more appealing. There was a scene involving Onesiphorus that was removed to keep this from escalating into some huge beast, but I will write it now... ... ooops! I ramble, sorry. Thank you again :)
I was going to say that this reminded me of 'The Exorcist', but then I figured that this is an exocism in and of itself and Voldemort is the demon who must be cast out of her mind body and soul.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review. It's interesting how another viewpoint can make you just stop and stare... I hadn't seen it quite like that before. Thank you, again :)
There's not much that can be said about this chapter. The only thing I can do is just what they are doing, just wait and see how it all works out.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review. I hope that I'm not slipping... *looks worried* I do find writing certain scenes/genres to be quite tough at times... if you think that the chapter needs some more work, then I'd love any comments. Having the reviews helps me to improve, and as this was my first fanfic, I can appreciate that it may be quite rough. The next chapters are being beta read; I hope to upload pretty soon. Thank you for sticking with the story :)
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Sorry, but as an aside... your reviews seem to be duplicated... I'm not sure why they're being duplicated, some glitch, perhaps? :D
Response from Trickie Woo (Reviewer)
I tried to respond to you about an hour and a half ago and I see my response didn't make it through.First, there was no problem with the writing or the content of the chapter. I was expressing my emotional reaction to what Dumbledore had to do. Obviously it had to be done and there is nothing I, or any of your characters, can do about it, so I will just have to sit back and wait to see how things work themselves out.Second, I had problems posting reviews on TPP last night. The one I wrote after I wrote this one didn't show up at all, I had to go back this afternoon and rewrite it and it finally did show up. I have no idea what happened that caused my review to become duplicated. I figured that TPP was working on the system and they must still be since the first response I wrote didn't show up.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for that :D I guess that I'm still a very nervous writer.I had no idea the pains you were going to to review this; I am so humbled. I mentioned in an earlier response that I was thinking of writing more Snape-centric chapters... consider that a given, as a thanks for your efforts. Thank you :)
That's an intersting theory about the dark mark and how it keeps him in tune with all his death Eaters. It sounds quite logical to me.As for the rest of the chapter, the plot still has too many convolutions for me to figure anything out yet, but given time I'm sure I will.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for reviewing. Logical and rather nasty in my opinion *shudders* imgaine not even being allowed to keep your emotions and deepest thoughts private. I hope that you continue to enjoy it :)