Chapter Eight
Chapter 8 of 36
sweetflagSnape takes the time to dwell upon his recollections of Ophelia, and to his growing discontentment, he wonders whether he really knew her at all... the girl who sat at the Dark Lord's right hand.
ReviewedHe was surprised that Granger and Weasley had not scurried off after their departed friend; instead, they shared a dark look and muttered together. Granger looked distressed, and Weasley flashed him a bitter look before they left the classroom. A few Slytherins loitered, chatting, before a scowl prompted them to also pack away their things and leave for lunch. Snape heard Draco Malfoy's voice from the hallway, muttering something about Potter's Invigoration Draught; his milling followers laughed obligingly, and then those sounds drifted away, and Snape was left in the silence. Flicking his wand, the gathered phials on his desk smartly lined themselves up, tinkling merrily and glinting in the meagre sunlight, and with the merest huff of despair at the prospect of examining the dubious offerings before him, he settled down to marking the class work.
A large ledger rested upon his desk, and he pulled it carefully into its customary place before him. Thoughtfully drumming his fingers on its abused spine and running his other hand over the rough, leather cover, he stared at the cracked and pitted book. His mind was pulled back twenty years to another time when he had banished a worthless potion, and although he had been generous and sympathetic with the unsuccessful brewer, he had still been on the receiving end of a venomous glare equal to that of Potter's.
--X--
He had been perturbed to see a young girl in Malfoy's basement and equally annoyed that she was messing with what he had grown to consider his potion equipment and supplies. Intending to interpose and end her little game, he hesitated when something about her movements caught his eye: the gentle and precise motions as she chopped, diced and measured the ingredients and the graceful way she added them to the cauldron. She had dispensed with the chandelier, instead placing three lamps on the table, one to each side and one across from her, a perfect arrangement to prevent her shadow falling across her workspace. The cauldron was slightly to her left so she could easily and efficiently drop ingredients into it without fear of knocking it, and his lips quirked at the sight of a single-burner camping stove underneath it.
Gathering up his cloak, so as the hem would not drag against the stone floor, he descended the last few steps, utilising the shadows to sneak closer to the girl and the table where she worked so diligently. A variety of ingredients lay neatly ordered on the desk, each within easy reach, and he noted with some interest that she had no book to follow. Her thin, pale face was a picture of contentment as her fingers danced assuredly over the prepared materials and her cauldron.
Recognising her immediately as Narcissa Black's younger cousin from his earlier visits to Malfoy Manor as his friend's guest, he took the opportunity to study her at his leisure. She was young, not yet at Hogwarts, and yet she managed herself with a grace and skill that many of his fellow fourth-year students had failed to acquire.
Impressed, but still annoyed at the intrusion into what he considered to be his domain, he scowled...Lucius had not told him that his father allowed the girl down here...but in spite of that irritation, intrigue found his mind working with her, trying to deduce the nature of the potion. His eyebrows twitched in surprise when a possibility blossomed, and he idly wondered if the potion was for herself, although she seemed too young to have problems with her menses, or merely as a personal challenge. Despite his efforts, he could not fault her attempts to brew the Balancing Potion until she added a handful of finely chopped sweetflag leaves. The method required that the leaves be coarsely chopped and rinsed in pure water before being added to the cauldron. The potion had few ingredients, but they had to be prepared in a specific and detailed way, as the potion was incredibly fragile at every stage, and a slight error would result in total failure.
"The sweetflag must be roughly chopped and added after the cauldron has been sufficiently stirred; otherwise, it will react with the yarrow and the potion will thicken."
Jolting at his voice, she whipped around sharply to see him step from the shadows. She glared at him, her dark eyes flashing dangerously and her cheeks reddening with anger and embarrassment. He moved closer to the table and peered into the cauldron; sure enough, a honey-coloured mixture speckled with green slivers of sweetflag rapidly acquired the viscosity of egg custard. He prodded the congealing mass with the tip of his wand, huffed in disappointment, and then cast Evanesco; her eyes narrowed, and her expression became quite poisonous as she watched him.
"The potion was worthless; I suggest that next time, you refer to a book before making such elementary mistakes."
"Who are you?" she demanded hotly.
"I'm Severus Snape."
"Really?" Her fierce expression dissolved into one of interest, and he found himself growing anxious in the unaccustomed attention.
"Up to the point where you added the sweetflag, the potion was flawless," he said quickly, trying to draw her focused attention from himself and back to the potion. She blushed violently and nervously tucked a strand of loose hair behind her ear. "Out of curiosity, did you know about the proper way to prepare the sweetflag?"
"Yes," she said softly, gently tugging on the ends of her long hair and watching him intently.
"So," he asked with some confusion. "Why add it?"
Her face split into a delighted grin, and she launched into a fascinating and breathless explanation. Thrumming in sympathetic resonance as they discussed a shared passion, he sloughed off his anger and forgot his wounds. The child's knowledge of potions was impressive, but she adamantly refused to share anything else with him, although she asked frequently about him and seemed quite affronted when he reciprocated her reticence. He did discover that she was visiting with her Aunt Elladora Black and would be staying with the Malfoys over Christmas. As time wore on and his level of respect increased, he asked her if she would like to brew some potions with him, but before she could respond, a noise distracted her, and she turned to look at the stairs; he followed her gaze and saw Lucius Malfoy standing on the bottom step, peering distastefully into the gloom.
"I thought I'd find you here, Severus," he drawled while fastidiously lifting his elegant verdant robes so as not to dirty them. "Father wants all the guests upstairs." He looked over at Ophelia, and his grimace deepened. "I suggest that you wash for dinner and change into the robes Narcissa brought for you." The blond-haired youth strode over to the table and glanced at the gathered ingredients and the empty cauldron.
"Five more minutes please, Lucius; we were discussing Pemberton-Smythe's second law and how it ..." She saw his expression and ground to a disappointed halt. "I'll go and wash." She turned off the gas to the stove and used a damp cloth to wipe the table clean; her attention to detail meant that there was very little in the way of wasted ingredients. Once everything was neatly cleaned and stowed, she trudged up the stairs and exited the basement.
"Father allows her down here," Lucius said dismissively. "He likes that she's out from underfoot."
Severus watched him poke his wand at the camping stove with an expression of intense dislike twisting his features. "She may as well be a Muggle," he spat venomously. "Still, she does brew excellent potions." His mouth quirked as he spoke in a conspiratorial tone, and his eyes glittered merrily. "Her sleeping potions have allowed Narcissa and I some leisurely quality time together while she's been here." His smile widened, and he winked at his friend. Snape smiled back politely, and then his grin expanded when the implication struck home. Lucius chuckled and draped his arm over the younger boy's shoulders.
"Father was telling Madam Black that he has never felt so rested; the child, Muggle brat that she is, has her... charms." He laughed blithely and took a deep sip of champagne.
"Who is she?"
Lucius sighed and let his hand fall from Snape's shoulder. "She is Aunt Capella's daughter, a bastard child rescued by Aunt Elladora from a pack of Muggles." His lip curled back in disgust, and he shook his head slowly. "She is spoiled...damaged goods. She can barely hold a wand much less cast spells; it's a wonder that she is so adept at potion-making." Lucius drained his glass and placed the flute on the workbench; turning to his friend, he gripped the dark man's shoulders. "I will tell you this though," he murmured before he licked his lips and swallowed...nervously, Snape thought. "Tread carefully around her, my friend."
Snape thought to laugh at the idea that he should be wary of an eight-year-old who seemed more Squib than witch, but something in the fixed expression and the flash of worry in his friend's eyes stopped him.
--X--
The meal had been exquisite, although neither Snape nor Ophelia had tasted much. They had surreptitiously chatted about potions and their more interesting effects around mouthfuls of duchess potatoes and tender goose with vegetables of julienne. Ophelia may have been distracted by her slice of luxury Yule log with whipped cream, but over coffee and petit-fours, she came back with a vengeance.
He listened to her and found himself pondering the girl's status: who was she that a Malfoy should feel deferential to her? She was inquisitive, perceptive and possessed a sometimes vicious wit that appealed to his own dark humour. Nothing about her suggested anything disturbing; despite her awesome knowledge of potions and her keen wit, even at such a young age, she was a normal, awkward child. The dollop of cream on the tip of her nose hastily wiped away had evidenced that, and she had seemed to take no offence at his chortle, even if she had blushed.
Aunt Elladora had sequestered Ophelia's attentions in the early evening, and Snape had sought out Lucius, concerned that his lack of attention had offended him. He was waylaid in his task by a stay in the Malfoy family library and then later by Bellatrix, who seemed to be talking to him out of politeness rather than necessity or interest. After an hour, he finally found his friend on the terrace, chatting intimately with Narcissa. Their fur coats and hats were speckled with fine snow, and their hair shone like silver in the brief moonlight. The clouds shifted, and the terrace was plunged into shadow; only their outlines were visible against the crisp, snowy backdrop. He had the impression of the shadows merging together and then caught the sound of a sigh. Knowing that he was not missed and uncomfortable with the scene before him, Snape moved back into the house and returned to the drawing room.
A late guest had arrived and had seated himself in one of the large, brown, leather chairs by the hearth. The household had gathered around him, listening with rapt attention to his tales. Abraxus Malfoy was smiling with an odd mix of apprehension and pleasure, and the Blacks...Elladora, Alphard and Bellatrix...were sitting and drinking him in, lapping up every word. It wasn't until Snape moved further into the room that he saw Ophelia sitting at the man's feet with her back resting against the visitor's shins, playing with a snake. The stranger caught sight of him and smiled warmly.
"This must be the young man you were telling me about, Opella." His voice was pleasant and cultured, and his eyes were almost greedy as they looked upon him.
Ophelia grinned up at Snape. The snake coiled around her arms and hissed playfully in her ear. The others looked at him strangely, Bellatrix looked positively jealous and Abraxus' worried smile became more pronounced. Snape sensed a power shift...no longer was he merely the guest of a school friend. Now he was the focus of a formidable wizard. Snape, however, felt more like a butterfly frantically fluttering its wings as a pin poised over its body, ready to fix it to a display. He was sure that this moment was one of those that Slughorn kept referring to as life-defining. Snape swallowed nervously; he was well aware who this guest was and wondered what he could say when Ophelia rendered him speechless.
"Yes, Uncle Tom."
--X--
Coming back to himself with a shudder and breathing heavily, he could still remember the appalled dread that had crept over him when the realisation struck home that the girl he had spent the best part of the day with...and probably offended at least once...was close to the Dark Lord. He had stifled a nervous laugh at her words, his heart racing as he had then found himself the sole recipient of the Dark Lord's attentions for the rest of the evening, all the while wondering when the hammer would fall. Even now, twenty years on, the memory still had the power to leave him with a dry mouth and clammy palms. And he had been right, he thought bitterly; it had been a life-defining moment.
Dragging his attention back from his dreadful daydreaming to the ledger and the grading of the potions, a sudden thought sparked, scattering his morbid musings; frowning, he went further back into the book than necessary, back twenty years in fact. He looked down the list of names until he found, in the neat handwriting of Professor Slughorn, the name 'Ophelia Black'. The first term of her first year had been exemplary: Outstandings for every potion and every piece of homework. The whole of her first year had been the same; the second year followed suit with only a few marks for absenteeism and a few Exceeds Expectations. He continued until part way through her third year where her average grade dropped. No longer were there a series of perfect 'O's, but 'EE's, and then that dropped to Acceptable; throughout her latter years at school, her grade in Potions had been pitiful. His frown deepened, and he thought back on Sirius' revelation in the kitchen at Grimmauld Place. Was there some connection? Regulus' death may have caused a sudden drop in results and attentiveness, but not the sustained decline that he saw in the neat columns before him. What had precipitated such a catastrophic slip in a subject that she had an intuitive grasp of and a natural talent for?
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48 Reviews | 2.29/10 Average
I'm so glad that the random story widget sent me to this story. I've barely put it down since I started reading yeaterday, forever wanting to see what little gem you'd reveal next. I love how you twisted things with varying viewpoints so that we never really know 'the truth' about the past until Ophelia/Veronica's memories are restored.I'd like to imagine that when Severus got up and walked out of the Shrieking shack, he Apparated straight to Whitehaven.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello. I am sorry about not replying sooner. Thank you for the review. This was my first fanfic, and I enjoyed writing it...and I'm glad you liked it.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello. I am sorry about not replying sooner. Thank you for the review. This was my first fanfic, and I enjoyed writing it...and I'm glad you liked it.
Beautiful ending, although I wish you'd left her relationship with Severus a little less open-ended! You imply plenty for me to assume what I want, though. ;) I'm glad you sort of split the difference. I think that was really her best option.I have to admit you've put me over a barrel, now. I'm working on a story where a potion called Lethe's Milk is going to be used. Perhaps I should rename it... or not, LOL. I could come up with another name that similar to something another author uses, too.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I am so thrilled that the ending was alright. I must admit to liking those scenes/stories that give you lots to think about... and I didn't want to set them up together cosy and secure... maybe in a sequel? Please don't rename the potion. I love creating new potions--my biochemistry heritage, methinks.I think the nail has been hit on the head there... I've come across names and places and things that are similar to what I've done or doing. My plan is to hope that no one notices... :P Thank you for staying with this to the bitter end... :)
Oh, what a choice! To face life on its terms or to go to a sterile environment where she wouldn't have any of the pain but would also miss some great joy as well. I don't envy her.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
What's better not knowing, eh? :DLast chapter coming up. I'm rather sad to be ending it, and I hope it doesn't do a disservice to your time and effort in reading it.
I had wondered how it was going to be possible to fool Sirius with Ophelia in the house. Now I understand. Poor everyone, dealing with so much pain. Hopefully, as Minerva noticed, now that everyone knows Voldemort is back, somthing better can happen.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I thought about writing some huge and inescapable series of events that meant Ophelia was out of the way and the house quiet, but, as I have experienced, one event can push us into being absent from our surroundings and those around us--we make it happen sometimes.Thank you for the review
Aw... Arthur and Molly can be so cute.Poor Dumbledore and Moody, though, forced to witness the unimaginable.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello :DThank you,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
.Three more chapters to go... and then the end.
Oh, poor Auror Smith. Somehow I think he got his pound of flesh, challenging Voldemort's very deepest-held phobias in front of his minions.And Ophelia finally finds herself in Severus's arms. Delicious.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Yes, I think Smith got more out of it than Voldemort.You liked that scene: Ophelia and Severus? I fretted and sweated about it. I don't generally write that kind of thing. I'm much happier writing about doom, gloom and angst.Thank you, and I hope you like how this ends.
I like watching her thoughts evolve. That Molly is pretty smart, but she's been through war, herself.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello. Thanks for the review... and still being here. Things are going terribly at the moment, and all I can offer is that this story will be finished; the when is open to debate. Molly, like so many of the women in the books, is a neglected character.
Finally, were are getting somewhere, somewhere where I want this story to be. I hope that Veronica will always be deep inside, gently guiding her thoughts and passions. Even more than Molly, I think that's what was the cayalyst in the kitchen that night that finally dropped the scales from their eyes.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
!I'm so thrilled you're still reading this; it has been an age since I was able to write anything. I'm so thankful. It has taken them a while... thank heavens for Molly!
A lot of things are coming together, here, between the canon and the story. If Sirius leaves the house to go to the Ministry battle, that will complicate matters with Ophelia, who wasn't supposed to be left in the house alone. Hmm... there are other complications there, too. I'm eager to see what you do with it all.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review and your thoughts. :)
I gather the the battle at the Ministry is imminent. I'll be glad to be rid of Sirius Black.I hope there will be lots more of Severus and Ophelia, it's about time time he has some joy and a sense of belonging to someone or something.You said this is HBP compliant, I can live with that. Is it DH compliant? I love it when someone rewrites JKR's ridiculous ending for Snape and has him survive. He deserved so much better than the end she gave him, the whole plot of the series ended up hinging on him and she wrote him as if he were a minor character who didn't deserve a future.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Your wish regarding Sirius shall be granted. It's all winding up for the end, yes.The story won't run right up to the end of HBP, so it's compliant to that point. DH is moot with regards to this tale.I agree, and no matter how many times I read the last three books, I can't shift the idea that JKR had to change pretty much most of what she had planned to pen.I've done three (I think :S) stories where he survives by various means, so I also find his death to be an annoyance. Thank you for the review and still being here :D It's much appreciated.
Severus was pretty evil there, but it was a calculated risk and it seems to have worked, at least somewhat. I can't believe Rookwood got the drop on Smith like that. Smith should have looked for whatever Rookwood was searching for and gotten it from him. Life is going to get harder for Moody, now, I bet.I could clobber Sirius, but it's too soon for Severus and Ophelia, anyway. They need to wait until they don't need her information so much any more.I love your descriptions of the action. I always feel like I am in a Pensieve with you.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review :) Even the best get caught out. Moody will suffer as a result of this.Yeah... I could clobber Sirius, but JKR got to him first. To be fair, he is trying to be fair and decent.Thank you for the lovely compliment... it's like the ultimate caffeine boost. If only it could get all my real life work done for me. Oh well.
Severus's method was harsh, but it was probably the only way to sucessfully help her. Ironically she had to be blind to find her way out. I'm glad he was able to get through to her.Where does an a-- h--- like Sirius get the right to tell Severus to take his hands off her? What a jerk! He can't get past his own problems to help her, but Severus could add helping her to all the other responsibilities on his shoulders. I hope that Severus and Ophelia can find more thanfriendly solace in one another. I also hope that you plan this to be canon compliant through the battle at the Ministry and non compliant at the end of the Battle at Hogwarts.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I just couldn't imagine Snape being anything else. I tried the sympathetic and caring approach, and I was grimacing as I wrote it. Snape is harsh, and to be honest, I think that Ophelia appreciated his method--she wouldn't have accepted kindness from him.Well... I guess that Sirius is losing so much that he's feeling more possessive and territorial than ever. This is HBP compliant--obviously with some additions--so you know some of the outcomes of this story already.Thanks again for reading my saga :)
I can't remember which was the last chapter you sent me and many of the things i had saved were lost when my computer was fried in a power outage power surgelast spring and didn't make it to the new computer, so I will pick up from here.Sirius is far to selfish and self centered to ever be of help to her, he always has been that way.Dumbledore is a control freak and his ego makes him feel that only he can save the wizarding world, even after death. He has gotten himself to the point where he's fooling himself if he thinks he even has the capacity to really care about anyone except for how they can be used by him to further his plan.He is right though, Severus is the only one who can really help Ophelia. As Moody said, she has no frame of reference and Severus can provide her with that and a lot more, I hope.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Hello
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
:) I can't rememeber what I sent either; my computer met a nasty end too, and I'm reconstructing chapters and adding in new ones.Odd, isn't it? But Sirius and Dumbledore are set up as the good guys?! This story is going very slowly at the minute, and I'm hoping that in the new year things will be easier.Thanks for staying with the story and the review :)
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Oh, hurrah! So great to see this fic still going.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It's going slowly at the minute... but it will be finished. This story brought me here... lol... and taught me grammar :D
Thank you for the review and the boost.
Severus had to at least have guessed more than he's been letting on in the present day. Gruesome as it was, I'm sure all those order people probably approved of what she did.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I apologise for the lull in this story. This will be finished, but not until some things are resolved at this end.Thank you for reading the story and all the reviews :)
Well there goes my guess about who her father was. Interesting thoughts about what made Regulus go "bad".
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I'm sorry about the long gap between posts. My computer went 'technical', and I lost a significant amount of work. This chapter was constructed from various emails and handwritten notes.May I ask who you thought her father was?Thank you so much for staying with this story, and thanks for the review :)
Response from Rose of the West (Reviewer)
I had originally thought her father would turn out to be "Uncle Tom". since I couldn't think of a reason he would be so affectionate toward her.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Once I'd logged out, I had the idea that Uncle Tom would be the number one suspect.Tom has his reasons for his affection.Thanks for reading and staying with this story :)
She's thirteen at this point? Quite precocious. I take it these are memories that Ophelia is showing Veronica?
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thanks for the review. She's thirteen at this point, yes. These memories are those that are resurfacing as Ophelia is answering Dumbledore's questions. They're really to provide some background information, tie in some canon information, and bring everyone up to date with the present day.
I'm very confused now.Why does Dumbledore accuse her of being a Death Eater at the beginning of the chapter and why was he acting so contemptuously? She doesn't seem to me to be a Death Eater. She is now willing to tell him everything she knows about Horcruxes, that doesn't sound like a loyal Death Eater to me.When is Snape going to make another appearance?
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I'm sorry to confuse you.They really don't know anything about her; their investigations yielded a very vague and contradictory image of Ophelia/Veronica. In short, they have to think that she's a Death Eater while hoping that she's not.You know what Ophelia is like, but they have not seen or understood the battle that she's had while coming together. Also, it's a way to get the rest of the story out :D, and there is a lot yet to say about Ophelia. She did allow people to die to gain her freedom from everything--why?Dumbledore has been very keen to give Ophelia the benefit of the doubt, and he's just testing the waters, and I think that after so many years, he'd be better at seeing what was in front of him rather than relying solely upon Legilimency.In this instance, trust Dumbledore. Would she, after everything, trust the friendly, open hand? Or would the harsh and bitter reality of everything be more acceptable?I just thought, I never sent this chapter to you, did I? Eeek! I was so busy with the run-up to Christmas that it went right out of my head... my apologies for that.Snape will make another appearance. I'll send a summary of the remaining chapters.
That wasn't a direction I expected to go, but now it seems so obvious. Dealing with the Horcruxes is more important than anything else, really.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
The books suggest that the concept of Horcruxes had bothered Dumbledore since the end of 'Chamber of Secrets'. The idea prompted him to seek out Horcruxes in the six week holiday between years five and six, i.e. after this story which runs up to the end of OoTP.It's the most prominent starting point for them as far as Dumbledore is concerned.. the rest will be dealt with later.Thank you for reviewing :)
I see nososaintly felt the same as I did. That's why I told you I may have missed something when I read it through the second time. What was going on was too compelling to bother about grammar or anything else. You achieved exactly what you set out to do in that passage with Sirius. I'm glad I'm not prone to nightmares, if I were that would have given me a humdinger of a nightmare.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I never thought of that! I wonder... Write that well that I could pass myself of as being decent with grammar by bamboozling with a distracting plot.... hmmm. I feel so warm and fuzzy about the wonderful reviews; I feel all spurred on and encouraged--I can't thank people enough for their effort and kind thoughts. This fanfic was my very first, and for some reason, I worry and fret, panic and suffer with it.The whole site has been nurturing... *sniffles*Thanks for the review,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
... I'm off to conjure up chapter twenty!
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
I never thought of that! I wonder... Write that well that I could pass myself of as being decent with grammar by bamboozling with a distracting plot.... hmmm. I feel so warm and fuzzy about the wonderful reviews; I feel all spurred on and encouraged--I can't thank people enough for their effort and kind thoughts. This fanfic was my very first, and for some reason, I worry and fret, panic and suffer with it.The whole site has been nurturing... *sniffles*Thanks for the review,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
... I'm off to conjure up chapter twenty!
You've already had all my comments and know what I think about this chapter, so I won't repear them except to tell you that I thought this chapter was excellently written and that I was happy to look it over for you before it was posted.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thanks for that,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
. Altering the story has been both thrilling and terrifying, and as such, I'm happy and relieved that it's been all for the good of the story. It's opened new avenues of thought and challenging concepts--I just hope that I can do the plot justice now! Thank you for your advice and guidance :)
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thanks for that,
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
. Altering the story has been both thrilling and terrifying, and as such, I'm happy and relieved that it's been all for the good of the story. It's opened new avenues of thought and challenging concepts--I just hope that I can do the plot justice now! Thank you for your advice and guidance :)
I liked the conflict between her two sides. I showed that Veronica has a very controlling personality and that the unknown side of Ophelia may be the good side. She Imperiused Topliss and had himfake her death and hide her identity to get away from Voldemort so there must be some good in her.Oddly, I only just picked up on the name Veronica Speedwell. It never struck me while the earlier creeping speedwell was blooming, but now that my other types of veronica are blooming or about to come into bloom I finally caught on.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review :) It was difficult for me to try to formalise some logic behind the situation... Ophelia had been, for want of a better term, 'put on hold' while the new personality of Veronica was allowed to develop, so they sort of existed side by side. When Ophelia was summoned via the potion, it seemed reasonable that there would be two distinct minds left to squabble. I'm not a psychologist, the only thing I know is how to spell it, and the theory may be so off track as to be laughable, but I enjoyed the disparity and the scenes that it engendered... that's my reason and I'm sticking to it!It means a great deal that the name has been discovered... I had Veronica from the start, and it was when I was sipping coffee, just over a year ago, that 'speedwell' caught my eye--it was the flower decorating my mug. Odd how that happens, eh? I was left wondering just how much was down to coincidence... after that, I spent more time thinking about the other names... had so much fun on 'Babies' names' websites... lol.I am so glad that you're still with the story, thank you.I'm working on a Snape chapter, a new chapter eighteen, and it ain't 'arf givin' me grief... lol. When this was first written, I was so intent on finishing it, but now that the pressures have gone and I am more comfortable, I want to fill it out and add the little touches that will hopefully make it more appealing. There was a scene involving Onesiphorus that was removed to keep this from escalating into some huge beast, but I will write it now... ... ooops! I ramble, sorry. Thank you again :)
I was going to say that this reminded me of 'The Exorcist', but then I figured that this is an exocism in and of itself and Voldemort is the demon who must be cast out of her mind body and soul.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review. It's interesting how another viewpoint can make you just stop and stare... I hadn't seen it quite like that before. Thank you, again :)
There's not much that can be said about this chapter. The only thing I can do is just what they are doing, just wait and see how it all works out.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for the review. I hope that I'm not slipping... *looks worried* I do find writing certain scenes/genres to be quite tough at times... if you think that the chapter needs some more work, then I'd love any comments. Having the reviews helps me to improve, and as this was my first fanfic, I can appreciate that it may be quite rough. The next chapters are being beta read; I hope to upload pretty soon. Thank you for sticking with the story :)
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Sorry, but as an aside... your reviews seem to be duplicated... I'm not sure why they're being duplicated, some glitch, perhaps? :D
Response from Trickie Woo (Reviewer)
I tried to respond to you about an hour and a half ago and I see my response didn't make it through.First, there was no problem with the writing or the content of the chapter. I was expressing my emotional reaction to what Dumbledore had to do. Obviously it had to be done and there is nothing I, or any of your characters, can do about it, so I will just have to sit back and wait to see how things work themselves out.Second, I had problems posting reviews on TPP last night. The one I wrote after I wrote this one didn't show up at all, I had to go back this afternoon and rewrite it and it finally did show up. I have no idea what happened that caused my review to become duplicated. I figured that TPP was working on the system and they must still be since the first response I wrote didn't show up.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for that :D I guess that I'm still a very nervous writer.I had no idea the pains you were going to to review this; I am so humbled. I mentioned in an earlier response that I was thinking of writing more Snape-centric chapters... consider that a given, as a thanks for your efforts. Thank you :)
That's an intersting theory about the dark mark and how it keeps him in tune with all his death Eaters. It sounds quite logical to me.As for the rest of the chapter, the plot still has too many convolutions for me to figure anything out yet, but given time I'm sure I will.
Response from sweetflag (Author of Better Not Knowing)
Thank you for reviewing. Logical and rather nasty in my opinion *shudders* imgaine not even being allowed to keep your emotions and deepest thoughts private. I hope that you continue to enjoy it :)