Sycamore and Heartstring of Dragon
Chapter 12 of 20
Celestial MelodyRiana buys her wand.
ReviewedSycamore and Heartstring of Dragon
The following morning, Riana woke up and knew exactly where she was. She felt her mind and body acclimatizing itself to the dusty hospitality of the Leaky Cauldron, and, though her belly felt uncomfortably heavy on this dewy morning of August the twenty-eighth, she was enjoying her stay there. At least, that's what she thought at first. Then again, she hadn't tried to truly rouse herself either.
Rolling out of bed, Riana leaned over and stretched her thin arms toward her toes. Her muscles felt taut and sore from the walking she'd done in Diagon Alley the previous day. She was mentally chastising herself for neglecting to stretch...which she'd read was a preventative for sore muscles...when the first pangs of pain began. Initially, Riana thought that perhaps she needed to pee, but the pain intensified quickly, spreading through her stomach, burning to the ends of her cold, blue fingertips. She felt as if hundreds of tiny daggers were stabbing into her abdomen as she dashed quickly to the antique washbasin, her hands grasped together over her stomach. Leaning over the cracked bowl in agony, Riana vomited every bit of croissant from the previous evening's dinner. So long had her body been without nutrient, it was rejecting the unknown food with the feverish fervor of an attacked immune system. Every shred of decomposing bread, every globule of butter was emptied into the basin as Riana's thin body racked with horrifying spasms.
Finally, minutes later, when no more food was left in her tiny stomach, Riana straightened slowly, wiping her mouth with the back of her thin hand as her throat burned. Sighing, she closed her eyes and slouched so that her back arched, causing her newly emptied stomach to pooch out.
Her forehead creased in pain as she swallowed. A shuddering sigh raced through her body as she steadied herself against the dresser upon which the bowl lay. It was at moments like these that Riana hated herself the most. The loss of control, the feeling that she couldn't stop ... Yes, she hated herself at these moments.
And then, as if remembering a schedule long followed, Riana's steely eyes snapped open. She slinked over to the mirror, whipping the soiled peasant shirt over her head and mussing her straight, raven black hair. At the exact moment her gaze fell upon the reflection in the mirror, she gasped in shock and agony...her ribs were only slightly protruding. She felt the tears pool in her grey eyes and sprang lightly to the bed, flinging herself onto it and sobbing bitterly. This unhappy display continued for several minutes, while Riana wretchedly decided that she would never eat again ... even if it killed her!
As the grey rain shower gradually abated in Riana's own eyes, a thunderclap boomed deafeningly from outside, and the heavens opened up, their enormous eyes weeping in sympathy with Riana's miserable plight. Riana sat up slowly, hugging her thin arms around her emaciated body. She closed her swollen eyes, but still the thick, salty tears spilled out from under the eyelids. Riana sat there, listening to the patter of raindrops hitting the roof only a few meters above her head. The tears fell less and less frequently as she mentally composed herself, drawing deep, calming breaths.
At last, Riana's tears stopped and she opened her eyes, which shone with a red-veined, watery glimmer that could only be attributed to one cause. She edged to the corner of her mattress and, still hugging her arms tightly to her chilled body, slid off and tiptoed to her open suitcase. Releasing her hold, Riana plunged both hands deep into the slippery pile of clothing, and sought around for attire absently, her mind traveling back to the unsatisfactory image of herself in the mirror that morning.
Feeling her eyes start to mist over again, Riana shook her head violently, her straight hair swinging around her ears, trying to clear the image. By angrily turning her attention to the case-full of clothing, she succeeded.
After choosing her ensemble, Riana stood, the articles of clothing in her hands, and proceeded to dress herself, carefully paying attention to the detail of the silvery-grey faux velvet top and black corduroy cargo trousers. This infinitesimal inspection of her otherwise ordinary clothing was the only way she could keep the image of her inadequate body at bay. Only when she had placed the Converse sneakers on her bony feet and folded her weathered piece of parchment dictating school supplies into a pocket-size square did Riana feel controlled enough to descend to the first floor and pay another visit to Diagon Alley.
She avoided looking at herself in the dated mirror as she rushed headlong from the room. Riana felt sure that one glance would send her straight into another river of weak tears, and so she continued her plunging stride through the hallway shadowed in rivulets by the rain-spattered windows lighting it.
Because of her self-hatred and anger toward her supposed "weakness," Riana did not notice the bright yellow eyes of the tawny tomcat that stared with a slightly amused and curious expression from the now open doorway of room number three.
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Lightning splintered from the roiling sky as Riana waited in the rainy backyard of the Leaky Cauldron, drizzle pelting onto her shiny black head, and running in glistening trails down her chattering, slender body. Her rapt gaze was fixed on the brick wall in front of her, her ears deaf to the slamming of a door behind her. She felt, rather than saw, the aged presence of the shabby innkeeper, Tom, and turned to watch him shambling out of the Leaky Cauldron clutching an enormous, tattered, magenta umbrella at which she stared enviously.
As Tom approached her, she heard him muttering something about the "Blasted weather" as he extracted his plain, thick wand with difficulty from his apron pocket, trying to keep the umbrella in place over his own bald head.
Three up, two across, Riana recalled as Tom tapped his wand against the bricks. Oh, yes, she remembered ... she would never forget. The proud Riana never forgot anything once she had determined to remember it; the entrance into the magical world of Diagon Alley was not ever going to be forgotten. She would remember this rainy backyard as the entrance to her birthplace of independence. The portal opened, causing Riana to gasp again with astonishment...she would never fail to be amazed by magic!
Without so much as a glance in Tom's direction, she lifted her proud chin and prepared to step over the threshold and enter Diagon Alley, when she felt a slight tap on her shoulder. She pivoted in annoyance, and saw a soaking wet Tom holding the umbrella out to her, a slightly begrudging expression on his wrinkled countenance. Riana sucked in her cheeks and pushed out her lips, tilting her small head upward and staring down her nose at the offering with a fair amount of disdain. She'd never carry anything that was magenta and old and tattered and ... borrowed.
However, when a particularly vindictive rain cloud opened a pouring drain of pelting raindrops directly on her head, Riana darted forward and pulled the umbrella out of Tom's outstretched hand, opening it over her head and turning her back on the old man. As usual, the small, respectable voice struggled to make itself be heard in her brain, Thank him, thank him, thank him ... but she smashed her unwelcome conscience by darting quickly through the doorway into a soggy Diagon Alley.
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Riana was pleased to note that not many people had decided to brave the weather...which wasn't affecting her in the least...and that those who did were all wearing dark colors and turning their secretive faces away from their fellow patrons, rushing to collect whatever purchases they needed, then darting, specter-like, away into one of the dark alleys squeezed between shops.
Holding the umbrella firmly in one hand, Riana walked along the muddy lane and, ducking under the overhang of the cauldron shop, pulled her supplies page out of her pocket, running her eyes up and down the list.
First, she decided, I will get ... my wand. Her grey eyes lit up in anticipation and more than a little satisfaction as she remembered that she would not have to rely on the rather odious Tom anymore to open the passageway to Diagon Alley. With this thought to cheer her, Riana grinned wryly and set off in the general direction of Gringotts, hoping to spot a wand shop on her way.
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The rain was now falling faster in drenching sheets that raced with the wind, each element trying to outstrip the other, as Riana sloshed, slanted eyes squinting, knee-deep in mud past Gringotts. She paused slightly past the grand threshold of Gringotts and stood, looking around for a wand shop. My toes are wet, she thought numbly. There's mud down my socks... And why isn't there a wand shop around here? Riana gazed desperately into the distance, searching for the wand shop she just knew had to be there. But apparently, she was wrong. Seeing no wand shop in sight, she sighed in reluctant acceptance, her thin shoulders sagging under the weight of doubt. A hard look crossed her sharp features and, narrowing her eyes, Riana again bent her head against the gale and surged forward, frail body desperately trying to overcome the great forces of nature that fought to drive her back.
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Ugh! Finally. Riana sighed, wavering tiredly in the flowing street and staring up at Ollivander's, a dingy and narrow shop with a motto stating that Ollivander's was a "Maker of Fine Wands since 382 BC," a fact that Riana sincerely doubted. She had passed several shops on her sojourn and found herself standing at the far end of Diagon Alley. Riana knew that she had reached the end of the magical shopping district for she noticed another wall, clearly marking the end of the Alley, a few shops past the left side of Ollivander's.
Breathing deeply and consequently receiving a nose full of precipitation, Riana snorted derisively, spraying invisible raindrops into the saturated air, and marched through the shabby, smudged door of the shop.
Once inside, she shook her umbrella carefully, propped it beside the door and gazed with interest at the dimly lit interior of the wand shop. Piled in towering stacks, crammed on every chair and table, were long, slender boxes. Boxes of wands, Riana thought excitedly. She was slinking closer to a heap stacked atop a chair to her left, when a rattling noise caused her to whip around, eyes wide. There she found herself gazing directly into a pair of very large silvery eyes that mimicked the watery world outside. She drew back involuntarily, something about those eyes glowing like twin moons disconcerted her; when the man spoke, however, she lost her fear and drew closer, interested.
"Good morning. I don't know you, but that chin is familiar ... and your eyes ... Ah, yes, those grey eyes. I know them well. Come for a wand, have you? Well..." The man's voice was soft and silky. Riana felt hypnotized and leaned dreamily in ... hoping against hope that he would explain not only what was so distinctive about her eyes, but why he knew them so well. Instead, however, the old man spun around and hobbled back into the depths of his store, leaving a very confused...and admittedly disappointed...Riana standing conspicuously in the middle of the cluttered room.
She peered nervously after Mr. Ollivander and was steeling herself to follow him into the maze of wands when he suddenly appeared from an aisle to her left, pulling a measuring tape with silver markings out of his deep pocket.
"Hold out your wand arm, Miss...?" Here he faltered, his soft voice trailing off as he turned his glowing gaze on Riana. She lifted her chin and announced "Carrington," defiantly. Mr. Ollivander's thick eyebrows shot up; his expression looked puzzled, but he nodded and asked her to hold out her wand arm.
A frown creasing her brow, Riana looked down at her hands and then held out her left, which she favored in composition class and therefore decided that it would do very well as a wand arm.
Mr. Ollivander's withered yet graceful hands measured Riana's arm and other extremities as he murmured, "Miss Carrington, every Ollivander wand contains a core drawn from a potent magical source." He paused, placing the measuring tape in his pocket and folding his hands placidly together in front of him.
Riana leaned closer, her slanted eyes glaring out from the depths of her gaunt face.
Mr. Ollivander looked back at her calmly and, standing solidly on two feet, gazed at Riana with his enormous eyes. "We traditionally use unicorn hairs, phoenix tail feathers, and the heartstrings of dragons."
Heartstrings? Riana thought confusedly. What are those?
Mr. Ollivander, however, continued, clearly oblivious to Riana's confusion.
"Although there are other makers who use different ingredients, we have always found those three to be sufficient. I say we have found, but it's the wand that does the finding, doesn't it?" He nodded sagely at this and turned abruptly to his left, retreating into the bowels of the wand shop.
Riana stared after him curiously. The wand does the finding? This revelation did not help to assuage her fears. What if no wand chose her? What if no wands fit her personality, characteristics, whatever it was a wand searches for in a person? What if...?
But her fearful musings were cut short as Mr. Ollivander reappeared, clasping a stack of thin boxes in his arms. He dumped them onto a nearby table and opened the first, sliding the top off of the thin box and handing Riana the wand inside.
"Hawthorn and phoenix feather. Eleven and a half inches, delicately springy, responds well to the proper touch. Now, Miss Carrington, give it a swish."
Riana looked at him blankly.
"Give it a wave. There's a good girl."
Riana obliged, her eyebrows lifting, mouth twisting to the side. Here goes nothing. She swished the wand skeptically and waited for a few moments. But, she was right. Nothing happened.
Mr. Ollivander snatched the wand out of her hands, and replaced it in the box, tossing the offending article carelessly to one side. He rummaged in the stack on the table and pulled out another box.
"Sycamore and dragon heartstring. Nine and a half inches, stiff. Wave it about, Miss Carrington." She did so. A burst of green, snake-like sparkles curled out the end of the wand, and Mr. Ollivander nodded, eyes wide, pleased and knowing.
Riana gazed at the wand in her hand. She felt the power of magic the wand contained and reveled in the feeling of control that each nine and a half inches gave her. She grinned suddenly and then looked up at Mr. Ollivander, who was watching her with an unidentifiable expression in his huge eyes that, as he felt her gaze upon him, was quickly replaced by a guarded stare.
Riana jerked her chin up and asked the price. Mr. Ollivander looked slightly affronted and murmured that it was seven Galleons. Digging deep into her purse, Riana extracted the proper sum and slipped the slender wand box into her purple cloth bag.
Walking to the front of the shop, followed closely by a bowing Mr. Ollivander, Riana allowed herself one small smile, a genuine, true smile, as she picked up her damp umbrella and stepped into the rain. She opened the magenta monstrosity, for which she was immensely grateful though she didn't like to admit it ... even to herself, and set out along the muddy Alley.
The purple bag bounced against her pencil-thin thigh, and she felt the magical power of the wand emanating from the bag and entering her body like a warming sip of butterbeer. She sighed, letting the glow of magic flow through her until a sudden thought imposed itself upon her silent revelry.
She stopped, rain showering down on her umbrella, her mouth shaping a silent "O" as she recalled the expression in Mr. Ollivander's eyes as he gave her the wand. She desperately fished through her memories until she had pulled up a clear picture of his ancient face. She concentrated deeper into the memory and, eyes narrowed in concentration, poked and prodded it until she had conjured up an exact representation of Mr. Ollivander's shining, twin eyes. The gaze hung, suspended, in her mind. What was that expression? She knew she'd seen it, but where ... And suddenly she gasped, for now she knew. It was fear.
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Latest 25 Reviews for Serpent in the Moonlight
33 Reviews | 7.45/10 Average
It was all incredibly well-written. So does Riana get help to deal with her anorexia? Did you adopt the plot in another more well-read FF because we readers here aren't doing your authoring justice in reviewing? I think it's just that the traffic isn't high, but it will come! Is the completed FF posted in another HP portal?
Love your pace. And the OCs. Too bad I wouldn't have come across this story if not for the random FF spinner.
I have been reading your story avidly since the beginning. Good work, though I wish the girl would eat!
Wow ... a much longer chapter! I have about thirty seconds to review, so I'll just say that that was great, and I can't wait till they get to Hogwarts. I'm glad Fabian will be looking out for her!
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Oh, I know ... it was very long. I'm not too fond of it, actually, so I'm going to rewrite it and then resubmit it. I'm glad you enjoyed it though. Your reviews, as always, truly encourage me! :-)I, too, cannot WAIT until they get to Hogwarts ... it's been too long. :-PThanks again!~Julia~
Ooh ... what an unusual idea! I'm looking forward to finding out exactly what happened in that chapter. Does Leanne know that Riana is at the Leaky Cauldron now?I thoroughly enjoyed your writing in that chapter, particularly this : "Carefully ignoring the prone figure frozen on the bed, Riana’s evading gaze hurriedly glanced at the floor where the broken glass from the photograph mixed with the fibers of pink carpet, creating a sparkling mélange of color as it was touched by the pinpricks of moonlight from the room’s open windows."Really lovely. Well done! :)
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Thanks for your complimentary review, :). I'm so pleased that you are still enjoying the story.
I'm so glad, too, that you liked the idea for this chapter--it has been the one that most people have complaints against. Some feel it's too vague, others don't understand the point. However, rest assured that there is, indeed, significance in that blue book with the bronze writing. Hee!
I believe that the way in which I wrote it explains why most people find a hard time enjoying it, :-S. This chapter was very similar to my one-shot, "The Ultimate Trust" in that it was very image-oriented and had less of a storyline. Most people don't like that. But I'm thrilled that you tapped into that. Kudos to you for being observant! :P
And about Leanne, yes, she knows that Riana is alive, anyway. But she doesn't know--and I believe I can tell you this without ruining anything--that Riana is at the Leaky Cauldron. There are other things, though, that she does know...Hee! But I won't say what they are.
My utmost thanks, again, for your endlessly wonderful reviews. They truly encourage me. :)
~Julia~
how strange...very interesting...
more. :)
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Thanks for R&R-ing. I hope you enjoyed it. :) More should be around soon... but no rushing, eh? We want the next chapter to be good, too. :P Hee!
~Julia~
Response from togspled (Reviewer)
i want to say rush, but i know you're right. take it slow. make it good. (as i know you will.)thank u!
Really nice chapter. I love the way Fabian is having a positive effect on her ... he's good for her.Your writing is getting more and more fluid ... keep it up!And ... can't wait to find out who her parents are! More ... and SOON!
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Thank you, as always, for your lovely comments. This was one of my more ... eloquent chapters, I suppose you could say, hee! Just kidding... but, really, I'm grateful to you for your kind words.
I, too, am glad that Riana now has Fabian. He's not perfect, but I love him to death. :)
And... I'm afraid you'll have to wait a bit longer to truly know who Riana's parents are. *pulls face* There are aspects of her history that I wouldn't want an eleven-year-old to know. So, years must pass until she finds out the Truth. *giggles and points at the capital T*
Anyway, thanks so much for your comment and I'm going to go and read/review the newest chapter in "Where My Future Lies." :)
~Julia~
Response from little beloved (Reviewer)
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Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
swoons and faints*. YEARS??? We have to wait for YEARS until we find out the Truth (capital T!)???Cruel! Intriguing, though! :) Gosh ... and I thought I was cruel for stringing things along!Gotta go read your new chappie now!BTW: I was slightly incorrect about the inventor of the entrail-expelling curse. It was Urquhart Rackharrow, chapter 22 of OotP.
riana and fabian are so cute together! this mystery about her parents is fascinating. (and i can't wait to see what fabian thinks is 'real fun')
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Thank you so much for your review. :) I'm so glad that you are enjoying Riana and Fabian's time together.
The mystery, yes... that will all be revealed in good time. I'm so glad you're intrigued; your enthusiasm truly encourages me.
Fabian... well, not this next chapter, but the one after that... that will show a bit of Fabian's definition of 'real' fun. :P Not all... but then, Riana's not a werecat either. Thus, she wouldn't be able to accompany him on his nighttime jaunts, more's the pity. :(
Thank you again, though, for your lovely review. I love getting them.
~Julia~
Wonderful! Well written, as always, and Padma Patil is a most welcome addition!There is only one thing I would like to point out, and it is not something you could be exptected to know if you haven't been to Britain. I live in Ireland, lived in England for two years, and make many trips to London/Scotland. Biscuits with gravy (especially the white kind) are an entirely American phenomenon, and would never be found in any pubs/restaurants/diners in Europe. They simply don't exist here. Gravy here is runny and brown, made from meat stock, and biscuits here are what you refer to as cookies.I went to the U.S for the first time in January, and came across 'biscuits with gravy' ... and was very puzzled indeed! There are so many differences between our cultures and U.K/U.S English ... it's quite mind-boggling!Okay ... rambling finished now! Anyway, as I said, I thoroughly enjoyed that chapter, and look forward to the next! Well done! :)
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Thank you for your lovely comments and also for your con. crit. Those comments really help me, I wish I could get more of them, hee! But I will change it right away!
I had no idea that "biscuits" weren't available with (American) gravy. *gasp* It seems to be a main staple on restaurant/cafe' menus here in America.
Again, thank you ever so much for R&R-ing as well as for the correction. :)
~Julia~
Response from little beloved (Reviewer)
You're very welcome! If I had to write a fic set in the U.S, I would be completely lost as regards many things, such as food.I see so many Americanisms creeping into HP fics. A very common one is 'pinkie' ... a word never used here. We simply call it a 'little finger'.Having said that, my beta (who is American) is forever finding Irishisms in my work. Even between England and Ireland there are so many differences in phrases and sayings.Can't what for chapter 12!
Response from little beloved (Reviewer)
Can't what for chapter 12!!!???Can't wait for chapter 12, obviously! ;)
i love your descriptions of the books! ~~Or so she thought…~~ that has me interested indeed...
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Thanks very much,
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
! :) It really encourages me that you like the story and find it intriguing. I enjoyed writing the descriptions of the books very much.
And you shall see ... what "~~Or so she thought...~~" meant. Oh, yes ... you shall certainly see. :)
~Julia~
Well done, well written and you obviously have done your homework with all those books ... lots from Fantastic Beasts and Where To Find Them etc ... I'm looking forward to her meeting students and getting some dialogue going!
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Why thank you, :). Yes, if there's one thing I can do ... it's my homework. *grimaces slightly* Although homework for HP is much better than homework for ... anything else. :)
There will be plenty of dialogue in the following chapters, however there is so much background to cover that the first chapters are rather limited in dialogue. Never fear! There are great things to come.
Thanks so much for R&R-ing.
~Julia~
great intro to diagon alley!
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Thank you very much. I love writing about Gringotts because it is such an amazing place! Me and my "dusty balustrades," *sigh*
Hee! Thanks again for R&R-ing.
~Julia~
Another good chapter :) Am getting imaptient for her to meet some witches/wizards now, though!Keep up the good work!
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Thank you for your review. I assume you've just started reading the story? :)
And there will soon be contact with witches and wizards, hee! :) Chapter after next, I believe...
Again, thanks so much for your review--it was very encouraging!
~Julia~
riana's anorexia seems to be getting worse, poor girl. it'll be interesting to see how that affects her at Hogwarts.
I never would have thought old Tom could make a smoothie! haha...
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Well, thank you, :). Personally, that wasn't my favorite chappie, however, I'm glad that you are still sensing Riana's conflict.
Tom is very talented, hee! The only problem is that he doesn't want anybody to see that, *shiftily looks left and right*
Thank you so much for R&Ring.
~Julia~
This is such an interesting story. I'm so glad to have discovered it! Looking forward to your next update!
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Thank you so much! :) I'm thrilled that you are enjoying the story. I didn't want it to be run-of-the-mill, which has caused a smidge of trouble when getting it validated on other sites! Hee! (Something about 'delicate issues...') :P
However, I'm very glad that you have found my story and the next chapter is in queue, so it should be up soon.
~Julia~
What a very different and interesting story! I'm so glad you reviewed mine, or I might not have discovered this!Well written and intriguing ... reading on now!
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Oh, thank you so much! I'm so glad I reviewed yours, too, or I might not have ever found it! (That's slightly confusing, but you get the picture, hee!)
Thank you, again, for your kind comments.
~Julia~
Nice start, i like it, please continue soon!
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Thank you very much for your review! It encourages me ever so much that you like my story! :)
The next chapter is in queue, so it should be up soon.
~Julia~
And ... I'm so looking forward to her upcoming journey to Hogwarts!!
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Oh, thank you very much! I'm sorry that it was such a short chapter, but I'm very glad that you enjoyed it! :)
~Julia~
Response from notsosaintly (Reviewer)
Short chapters are nice ... and sometimes they are essential. As in this case; it was a pivotal point. Now, I'm really looking forward to the next chapter!
omg...parseltongue. riana is a very complex character! (and definitely a true slytherin?) great job
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Thank you very much! I'm so glad you find her interesting. The last thing in the world that I wanted to do was create a "Mary Sue." :) Considering, however, that she's her own person, that wasn't too difficult at all! Thanks for R & R - ing ... I really appreciate it!
~Julia~
Yes, Riana will definitely be sorted into Slytherin. You captured Leanne's feelings very well. Being a mom myself I could feel her desperation. You really have a way of capturing feelings in your writing. I am enjoying this story and looking forward to more!
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Hehe, how'd you guess? I'm kidding... yes, I did want her to be in Slytherin. We always hear such bad things about the Slytherins and I wanted to look at the whole "magic" situation from a 'Snake's' position. :)
Thank you very much for your kind review!
~Julia~
Yes, I should be assigned detention with Professor Snape for not reviewing until now. You really have created suspense with this chapter. I loved the detail, her search for the key. It reminded me of similar personal pursuits. But the end, with her mom coming into the kitchen and her trying to look normal, like she wasn't up to anything... well, I could feel my heart thumping in my chest as if I were a teenager again and was definitely up to something. Well done!
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Wow. What great praise! :) Thanks very much for your kindness. I'm glad you're enjoying the story. And it's fine that you haven't reviewed 'till now... you've read them, at least. :)
Again, thanks very, very much!
~Julia~
oh i just love it when u post another chapter!
the story is coming along so very nicely. keep it up!
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Thanks very much for R&R-ing. *smiles*
I'm so glad you like the story. :) Also, Riana will soon get to Hogwarts, just stick with her, please. The story is taking its own precious time, but I think it will turn out all right ... at least I hope so, hee! :)
~Julia~
Ooooh! Urquhart! Wasn't he that entrail-expelling curse chappie?And yay! His Mum's Irish. Gosh, it looks like this is going to be a seriously long story! Any idea how many chapters?Enjoying ... as always!
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Hmm.. not sure about the "entrail-expelling" but he was the captain of Slytherin Quidditch team at one point. :)
I love Favel (plus her name is so fun!) She was a pleasure to write, even though she is a very minor character ... at this point. Hee!
About the length, hmm, well... I really don't know how long it's going to be. *laughs uneasily* I was going to try and make it 30 chapters, however, the length of some of the chapters is so short. I simply ended where I felt a cliffhanger would do well. They just happened. I'm sure you know what I mean. :)
Now, though, I'm thinking that I may do volumes of Riana's life. You know, Serpent in the Moonlight: Volume One. This one details her first year. Serpent in the Moonlight: Volume Two... and so on and so forth. A bit like the HP books, but not. There's just so much information about her that I want to share and she can't discover everything in her first year ... that much knowledge would kill her, poor thing. :( Honestly, I have some ghastly stuff planned for her in the future. I'm so mean. Hee! *snickers evilly*
Anyway, that was a really long post. *sigh* I should have just said "Thank You," except that I love getting your reviews and your feedback. Talking to much again... must go. Thanks so much!
~Julia~
so there's still pureblood-mania so long after the HP events? that's intriguing. i'm eager to learn the missing history there. fabian's character is getting more and more complex...
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Oh, as long as there are purebloods, there will be pureblood mania. :) I'm glad you are intrigued by Fabian's character ... the last thing in the world I wanted to do was make him "flat." *cough Ron & Hermione cough cough* Hee! Just kidding... only in canon, not in fanon. :D
I love getting your reviews! :) Thanks so very, very much.
~Julia~
great byplay between riana and fabian. he seems like he'll be good for her with his friendly nature and everything. if only he could convince her to eat a licorice wand...
Response from Celestial Melody (Author of Serpent in the Moonlight)
Thank you so much for your lovely compliments. I do plan to continue Fabian as a foil to Riana ... if only he could get her to eat that Licorice Wand, hee! :)
~Julia~