Capricornus Ascendant – Part Two
Chapter 15 of 22
nagandsevDallying about in Hogwarts corridors after hours leads to both dangerous and pleasurable events, illuminating the state of things between Severus and Nagini.
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Severus snapped out his wand, ready for attack.
Nagini instinctively drew hers out as well, her adrenaline coursing through her veins, numbing the pain in her hurt arm. She raised her other arm up higher, gripping her wand tightly, ready for the unexpected.
There was something about her decisive action, prepared to back him up instinctively, no questions asked, which spurred a burning excitement throughout Severus' body. I'll deal with these swine, and then, dear Nagini, we'll continue our endeavours...
His dark eyes glittering, he pressed his body close to hers and lifted one forefinger slowly and pressed it gently on her lips. "Shhh," he whispered, while flicking his wand, casting non-verbally Invisibility and Muffliato spells around them.
Severus and Nagini stood, meshed together, pressed against the cool stone walls, waiting as the noise neared. He noted her dilated pupils and flushed cheeks and how she couldn't hold his gaze, as if utterly embarrassed. Her eyes fluttered as his chin grazed against her soft cheeks, and his wisps of long, lank hair tickled her soft flesh.
Nagini shifted her weight and gasped softly as she felt his hardness now pressing against her lower abdomen. Immediately, Severus stepped an inch back, but their eyes met, and he whispered, "Yessss... That's what you do to me, Miss Malfoy."
The boisterous foursome interrupted their moment of revelation, as the distinct voices of each one of Severus' nemesis became distinct.
Snape froze. He was in a dilemma whether to instigate a surprise attack or let the unsuspecting four pass unprovoked. I could just wait here and let the bloody pillocks pass, and then continue with Miss Malfoy here... But the grating sound of Sirius Black's voice halted any further thoughts along this line, and Snape's black eyes glistened with malice at the approaching Gryffindors.
"Moony, you furry berk, what were you waiting for?" jibed Sirius as the cumbersome foursome jostled hurriedly down the castle's corridor. "I think I see your tail already."
Selene was shining bold and bright, drawing the Maurauders to harbour one of their own quickly to the Shrieking Shack; a race with time against her ill effects on Lupin as he leaned on James, who was laboriously half-supporting Remus. Sirius and Peter harboured around them, trying to make light of the situation whilst still nudging everyone along. But Remus had to stop, as if for breath, and leaned with one hand on the wall just a few feet past Nagini and Severus; he seemed unable to walk normally but rather like a sluggish drunk man. James retook and placed Remus' other arm around his shoulder again to urge him to continue on, but Lupin refused, stopped dead in his tracks.
"What is it, Remus?" asked James, growing truly anxious; the odd expression on Lupin's face instilled immediate concern for all. Is he going to transform right here? thought his mates unanimously, giving each other apprehensive glances.
Remus turned slowly, facing and staring at directly where Severus and Nagini stood, shielded behind the Invisibility Charm.
"Blimey, what is it, Moony? You're giving us the spooks," half-joked Sirius.
Remus sniffed deeply, and then he blinked, confused, staring at the seemingly blank stoned wall and alcove stairway before him. That's odd... thought Lupin as he took a few small steps closer to the hidden two.
Severus had clenched one of Nagini's arms so tightly she almost cried out, and he silently cursed, Damn Lupin's lycanthropic senses!
"Can't you smell it? Cinnamon, and..." Remus huffed. "Of course, you can't, but..." He raised his wand and, with a quick flick, commanded, "Revelio!"
In the seconds that followed, the blur of hexes ricocheting and overlapping each other ended with a whimpering, wandless Pettigrew thrown against and sagging down to the floor, cradling his right shoulder, as if it was snapped, and a disarmed Potter scrambling up between Lupin and Black as they faced Severus and Nagini. All came to a standstill, pausing for breath, but with wands raised for further attack.
The only sound in the air for several seconds was the huffs and pants of exertion as the Gryffindors eyed the odd couple, waiting to see who would make the next move.
"What have we here? Looks like Snivellus has a bird," taunted Black, biting his lower lip, trying to contain his excitement.
Remus suddenly blanched and appeared more visibly ill. "Later, Padfoot, let's leave them. We've got to be going," he urged, his thoughts racing to getting to the Shrieking Shack.
"And let this golden opportunity pass us by?" jeered Black. "We're not leaving until Snivellus has wet his pants in front of Miss Malfoy!"
Remus was in anguish. "I can't hold out much longer. I feel it..." His facial muscles clenched, straining against a hidden pain.
Severus snarled viciously, "You bloody pillocks, get the beast to the Shack..."
"Shut it!" roared Sirius, sending a Stinging hex at Severus who swatted it away like a fly.
A surge of pain sparked through Remus again, and his fingers trembled so that his wand fell from his hand.
James assessed the situation quicker than catching a Snitch and growled, "Padfoot, Moony needs us now! We'll deal with Snivellus later!" He grabbed Lupin around the waist to support him and growled at his Slytherin opponent, "Give me back my wand, Snape!"
"No. I don't think so, Potter." Severus sneered. "Maybe if you kneel down and," he leered mockingly, "kiss my toes."
"We'll leave the kneeling down and kissing your lower parts for the Malfoy slag there," flouted Sirius, giving Nagini a dirty look, but his derisive expression quickly turned to one of excruciating pain as Severus swiped his wand sharply across Black's body.
The air chilled several degrees as all watched Sirius collapse in slow motion and a stripe of blood seeped forth through his clothing.
All hell broke loose again with Potter grabbing Sirius' fallen wand, and Snape and him dueling like bats out of hell.
Remus had feigned collapsing only to make an animalistic, spastic lunge, tackling Nagini down to the floor; her scream rang out as her injured elbow popped again against the stone floor.
In the midst of the chaotic scene, a sudden bolt of light burst forth, stunning all of them in place as they heard clearly Professor McGonagall's fierce command, "Enough!" The Head of Gryffindor was quick to exclaim, "Remus, get off of Malfoy immediately!"
Lupin released and scrambled off her, only to press his back against the wall in strained tension; his hands starting to tremble again as McGonagall, accompanied by Professor Sprout, bustled over to the middle of the sprawled group to take stock of what damage was done to whom.
Potter and Snape had been hexing each other simultaneously when the impact of McGongall's spell, hitting and dispersing theirs, knocked them both backwards by the force. But whereas Severus had toppled back, his head hitting against stone, Potter remained unscathed and was able to quickly point out, "Sirius, Professor McGonagall! Snape's used Dark Magic on him; he's..."
"Mr Black seems perfectly fine," reported the quiet voice of Professor Sprout, who stood beside a dazed but fully conscious and sitting-up Sirius, who was anxiously feeling his chest and legs. All signs of a slashing curse had disappeared internally as well as externally.
"I...I don't understand. Snape slashed and cut Sirus up; we all saw it with our own eyes!" insisted Potter adamantly.
McGonagall gave a wary look at Snape and then Black. "Sirius, are you hurt?"
Perplexed, Sirius stood up shakily, touching over his chest again, trying to find a wound. "No... no..." He quietly muttered, "I'm fine... I don't understand."
Severus had crossed over to help Nagini stand up, giving Lupin a glowering glare. Then, the Slytherin sneered and commented, "Perhaps just a change of knickers is needed, Black? You seemed to have wet yourself." Indeed, there appeared to be a large wet spot spread across Sirius' crotch area.
Before either Professor could reprimand Severus, Pettigrew squeaked out, "Professor McGonagall, look it's Remus, he's..."
All turned to Lupin who was clutching the wall, as internal pains were causing him to spasm. "Good heavens!" Minerva whispered fiercely, "Pomona, go get Poppy! Tell her to meet me you-know-where." McGonagall gave Nagini a curious look, not wanting to disclose more than necessary in front of her. "James, Sirius, Peter, help me with Remus!"
Not waiting a moment more, James and Sirius scooped Remus under the shoulders, guiding him away as Pettigrew grabbed Lupin's wand and scurried after them.
McGonagall arched an eyebrow at Severus and proffered her hand out, saying, "Potter's wand, Mr Snape."
He frowned, but handed over his spoils 'won' from Potter, steadily looking Minerva in the eye.
The elder witch sighed wearily. "Oh, Severus, when will you boys ever learn...?"
Turning to follow where her Gryffindors had gone, Minerva only paused to inform, "Don't think this is over yet, Mr Snape and Miss Malfoy...and don't think there won't be detention for all of you! But first thing's first!" And with that, she hurried out of sight to run to the Shrieking Shack.
"Yes, you hurry on to your own Houses! I must get Poppy," instructed Pomona, shooing them away, and headed off to the Hospital Ward. They heard the bustling Hufflepuff Head called back, "Don't dally about; get along now!"
Nagini's eyes followed Professor Sprout, not knowing whether to press on to the Hospital Ward or not.
As if reading her thoughts, Severus caustically commented, "You might have to wait a while for Madam Pomfrey to be available. She'll be busy with furry problems..."
Nagini gave Severus a perplexed look. Furry problems? What is he talking about? "Where does Pomfrey have to go?" she asked, unconsciously cradling her arm again.
"Nowhere of real importance, just assisting in a hopeless case, in vain." His fiercely glittering eyes turned their attention to Nagini. "Are you all right? Did that beast...did Lupin harm you further? Your arm?"
"I'm fine," she lied, delicately lowering her left arm, trying to ignore the twinging smarts pulsing through it. "I...I just want to go back to Ravenclaw."
Severus raised an eyebrow, going neutral, studying her for a second or two, and then commented, "Very well." He became taciturn and motioned that they proceed onwards, and once again they began to stroll as before...before they were interrupted by the Marauders.
Nagini didn't know which question to ask first. So much had happened, and her head was in a whirlwind of thoughts about why those four Gryffindors and Severus were at each other's throats, Severus' slashing curse which disappeared after minutes of being used, and what kind of detention would they receive? Durmstrang's punishments had been mostly corporeal in nature, and Nagini flinched at the reminder of them.
Moreover, she felt overwhelmed, remembering Severus and hers' first kiss...it was lingering in the forefront of her consciousness more profoundly than the incident with the four berks that they had just had to deal with. Kissing him had opened a part of herself she'd never allowed. Her world had changed; she felt different. Nagini gave a fleeting glance up towards Severus, hoping to see any ardent signs on his impressive disposition, but the tall dark Slytherin seemed to have already forgotten, already returned to his usual reserved self. Nagini sighed, embarrassed at her whimsical notions, and went back to pondering Severus' Dark Arts skills, the Marauders, and worrying about detention.
And so, they walked silently, both deep in thoughts. Arriving at the base of the Ravenclaw house stairway, they stood and looked at each other. Severus' onyx orbs glittered keenly as he secretly enjoyed the mercurial witch's hair producing vibrant burgundy streaks. Because of me! She fancies me! He relished her uncontrollable Metamorphmagus' response to him, silently.
Before Severus knew it, he felt the brush of her lips on his cheek and heard Nagini whisper softly, "Thank you... Thank you for everything..." She had held onto him, balancing herself on her toes to whisper in his ears, and in the seconds it took to register her words and touch, he instinctively responded to the intimate moment and asked again, "Your arm?"
"It's...It's fine... I...I just need to rest it." The tall dark wizard's thin lips quirked in amusement, and Nagini felt her cheeks flush. He knows I'm lying!
"Do you trust me?" he asked unexpectedly, instead of calling her on her little white lie.
"Trust you?"
He gently took her injured arm in one hand, and just as gently, Severus guided her into the alcove underneath the Ravenclaw stairway, the perfect nook for some privacy, half-hidden and sunken in. Sitting her down on a carved-out ledge in the stone, he sat beside her and raised his wand, slowly chanting soft Healing spells; his baritone voice murmured them like lullabies over her delicate limb.
Nagini gasped as she felt spurts of burning, followed by dull tingling, sporadically here and there, and then nothing. The pain had ceased and she looked up at him, beaming, and asked, "You're a Healer?"
"No." There was sadness in his eyes which quickly changed to neutral as he added, "Just know a few spells well."
"Well, I'm also not one either, but you hit your head pretty hard, let me..." She impulsively stood up, placing one knee on the ledge to balance and lean forward.
Severus felt soft fingers gently touching the back of his head through his sleek, oily hair.
"There's a little bump. Does it hurt much?"
The unexpected contact on her part, her touch, their close proximity, utterly distracted him. Her breasts were at his eye-level and his nostrils flared as her scents fragranced forth. That damn, dangerous cinnamon fragrance she wears... blended with, he inhaled slowly, her... He had a mad impulse to bury his head in her breasts or pull her down to straddle him so he could taste her lips once again; he inhaled sharply, aware that his hard-on had reared up as well and become painfully acute.
Suddenly, Nagini felt Severus' hands gently touch her waist; instinctively, her focus went from the bump on his head to gazing into his fathomless black eyes.
Severus held her gaze and something unspoken was communicated. Ever so slowly, he pressed his head between her breasts, spreading her globes of flesh through the cloth as he nuzzled in. Tilting his head back to check her response, he was pleased that her mouth had opened to a lovely surprised 'O' and that her gentle golden-honey eyes were invitingly curious. Slowly, he placed kisses across one breast until he reached her nipple, and once there he increased his suction pressure, eliciting a soft gasp, which encouraged him to continue. Giving attention to her other breast, he lingered longer on that nipple while tugging and raising her blouse up and out of her skirt. His fingertips felt the silky softness of her flesh underneath, and he hesitated for only a second before he began to peel her blouse upwards, curling the cloth back until he reached her undergarment. Nagini stood as if Petrified with only her shallow breathing and her fingers clenching his shoulders in and out to let Severus know that she wasn't.
Severus swallowed hard, his Adam's apple bobbing, and hoarsely whispered, "I want to kiss you, taste you all over, Nagini."
He twirled his tongue on one, now fully exposed, nipple. Hearing her moan, his hands firmly felt up the curve of her back to her shoulder blades and then slowly stroked down her center to firmly hold her on her hips. "Straddle me," he whispered. She wasn't a Bellatrix, but he yearned to feel her weight on him and wanted to see her every expression as he explored her body.
She lowered herself to sit, opened-legged, on his lap, her skirt hoisted up by the action to just below her knickers, unsure of what the next moments would bring.
Severus whipped his wand out, casting another Cloaking Charm and Invisibility spell around them and their secret little nook. Placing his wand down, he firmly pressed against Nagini's bottom to nudge her forward until his erection was felt underneath her. Severus ran his hands up her back keeping eye contact with her all the time, but then he let one hand explore her lush mane and pull her down to meet his lips.
Once met, he knew she was as desirous for him as he her, and Severus lunged to taste and explore her deeply.
Nagini moaned as Severus slipped his sharp tongue between her lips and enveloped her tighter in his embrace. She pressed her body into his, allowing him to explore her warm, soft curvatures. He groaned as she, unwittingly or not, arched her pelvis against him, meeting his rhythmic slow thrusts. As they undulated lazily together, his hands instinctively went down and under her skirt, touching the contours of her spread thighs and roundness of her arse.
He kissed her in demanding circular movements, and Nagini felt him lift and shift both of their body angles enough so she was able to lean forward on him more. Severus broke away from her lips to nip and kiss her neck; he felt her shivers and trembling, and it roused a feral heat inside him as he placed his fingers on her Venus mound, savouring her heat and wetness. Ever so slowly, he slid one finger and then another under her thin knickers to gently probe her folds. Nagini froze again, but in an intense sensation as she felt his fingers explore her. Severus sucked her bottom lip while he inserted the first and then the second finger inside her heat. As she groaned, he captured her mouth again making his tongue repeat what his fingers were doing to her other orifice. He had to hold her tight around the waist, clasped in one spot as she had begun to writhe and rock so, and as his thumb was strategically placed and pressed on her swollen nub, he relished her moaning out his name as she clenched her eyes tight and her frame shook in orgasm.
As she came, Severus knew the imprint of her exquisite expression would be forever burned inside his memory; he slowly gathered her in his arms so that she lay her head on his shoulder. Nagini was breathing hard, still trembling. He knew not how long they stayed that way and savoured having a lapful of witch in his arms. But when he felt Nagini's finger strum over his waist to his painful erection, he couldn't help hiss, inhaling sharply.
She didn't raise her head but kept her attention on the crotch of his pants; she twisted around a bit, half sitting by his side, allowing her access to slowly stroke the outline of his now tented erection. Neither spoke as she slowly unbuttoned his trousers. But as she found and released his cock from his underpants, she slowly began stroking his staff up and down and asked in a quiet voice, "How does that feel?"
Severus could only nod and answer with a guttural, "Brilliant..."
She smiled and continued to explore stroking him, luxuriating in his length and texture. After several seconds, Severus raised an eyebrow and huskily suggested, "You can, um, squeeze it a bit harder or add more pressure... It won't break."
Nagini gave him an incredulous look and then shyly smiled; Severus found the moment irresistible and swooped forward kissing her deeply again as he placed one hand over hers, gripping his cock, and guided her on how to stroke him harder, tighter. Together they stroked, pumping him in a growing frenzy until he came, his seed jutting out from their joint efforts. Breathing heavily, Nagini leaned back on his chest again still stroking his sticky member, outlining its curious form. Severus luxuriated in the feel of her touching him and the incongruous situation. If Lucius only knew...
He smirked and felt afire, burning to have Nagini, but 'properly', in a bed where he could take his time and teach her slowly how to enjoy everything his pubescent heart and mind could think of...
Severus swallowed hard and kissed her forehead gently, his black eyes glittering as he proposed, "There's a place in Hogsmeade, the Hog's Head Inn... It's quite seedy-looking on one hand, but..." He swallowed again but was determined to get to the point. "It has rooms... rooms with beds... for rent. I...you...would you come with me there?"
Nagini's eyes were wide with elation, and her heart felt as if it would burst...for now, only Severus existed. "Yes..."
Exalted, Severus gave a triumphant smile and set about leaving a trail of passion marks on her neck and breasts so that she would remember him until they touched again.
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A while later, having been thoroughly snogged and marked with lovebites by Severus Snape, Nagini returned to her dormitory room half-dazed and was met by her worried roommates as they exclaimed,"Nagini! What happened...we were just about to go..."
"I'm fine," she quickly explained, beelining to her bed and playing down any sense of just having had the most incredible experience of her life. "I fell from the library ladder...but I'm all right. Just got delayed going to the Hospital Ward, and then Madam Pomfrey wasn't available, some furry problem," her roommates listened agog while she babbled on, "but that was after, no, before...oh, it doesn't matter...these berks, four Gryffindors, came and then, Professor McGonagall...well, everything's all right, really!"
She bustled about, preparing things for bed, and turned away from them, carefully changing clothing.
Getting back into bed, Mildred Bagnold yawned and sleepily commented over to Charity, "I told you she was fine; she's a Malfoy."
Burbage nodded, pulling her covers over her, and replied, "Yup, they always land on their feet."
And with that, the girls were soon back to sleep. Only Trelawney and Hope slowly sauntered over to Nagini's side of the room and waited as the mercurial witch finished her toiletries.
Hibiscus leaned against the curved wall and dreamily gazed upward at the Ravenclaw ceiling of changing constellations. "Horologium has crossed paths with Capricornus," said the dreamy-eyed blonde witch.
Nagini followed her gaze and smiled. Horologium shone above, taking centre as Capricornus moved to the side, twinkling above her. Feeling titillated, full of life and passion, she remembered Severus' hot mouth all over her and glibly observed, "I guess time has caught up with the old sea-goat!"
"A Capricorn," came the solemn voice of Trelawney. "A Capricorn has entered your life, changing all that shall follow."
Nagini smiled and thought fondly, I wonder when Severus was born?
"Who do you know born under the sky of Capricornus?" enquired Sybill, peering curiously at her.
"No one that I know of," replied Nagini, not really caring. She shrugged. "I...I don't know off hand; it's not really something I ask people."
"Your world will be changed," warned the frizzy-haired witch, worried.
Nagini huffed slightly on the verge of laughing, craving only to be under her covers and recount every kiss and touch of Severus'. "I'll ask around," she offered, getting under her blankets and hoping that that comment would satisfy her roommates.
Hope and Trelawney slowly sauntered back to their own beds.
"Her world already has changed, Sybill," commented Hibiscus with her all-seeing, all-knowing eyes, smiling serenely into the constellations once again. "Nagini's universe has already been changed."
And with that, the room became quiet and dark, each young witch lost in her own dreams or thoughts.
And so it was that none saw, again, Ophiucus, the serpent holder, force his way between Horologium and Capricornus, holding center stage in the constellated heavens.
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WOW. You just left me speechless.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you so much for reading and for your feedback, truly appreciate it!
Phew... I got so engrossed reading the chapters one after the other that I just forgot to review! This chapter was amazing... I particularly liked (I know that's not an appropriate word here) the interaction between Lily and Sev... it seemed like a missing page from the JKR books... thanks for rediscovering it for us! Also enjoyed the really adorable first kiss:)... Looking forward to a beautiful relationship that would heal two scarred hearts!
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Dearest
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, thank you for continuing to read this, and so happy that you are enjoying it--had to explore some interaction between him and Lily as she was so influential on him... Needed to explore what a first kiss would be like between these two at this point, so I'm happy that it came across as intended. Again, thank you for reading and your feedback, truly appreciate it!
It's such an amazingly original idea to portray Nagini as a Malfoy girl who is so different from the rest of her family! I wonder where the Malfoys got that name from, though! Nagini is the Sanskrit word for a female serpent and I have been traditionally intrigued by Jo's choice of name for Voldie's serpent! :P
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you so much for reading, truly appreciate it! This was my first attempt into the wonderful universe of HP fanfiction💕Hmm... I'm trying to finish off the last chapters, so since meeting you, maybe I can write in some justification for the name... At this point, I can't change her biological origin for this tale... but maybe her mother traveled to India when in hiding from Voldy, before becoming impregnated, and became inspired/enlightened by some Sanskrit parchments she came across... hmmm, I'll reflect on it--and dedication to you!:-)Thank you again!
Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Reviewer)
Lol! That's again an amazing idea. And that would explain a lot of things too, considering that a Nagini (in the Hindu mythology context) is often capable of changing into a beautiful (and often potentially dangerous) human female. Could our Nagini be like that? Well, we have to find out!:)
PS: I think I NOW know the reason for your unique penname!:)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
In gratitude for assistance offered, namaste,
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Ah, namaste dear!
A chapter of action and revelations.For this chapter, the snake bearer arises and the snake in two parts is a symbol of duplicity.Damphna and Lucretia betray Grindewald.Severus demonstrates himself worthy of the Dark Lord who he now hates and will soon plan to betray.Nagini accepts becoming a hit witch, joining those who killed her caretaker, but possiby planning revenge against their leader.Nagini compartmentalizing her life, fooling herself.One might make a wild guess on first reading canon that Severus's cruelty is a mask and reaction against his caring nature, betraying himself.The perspicacious Narcissa is shocked at her own fate.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Dearest
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, thank you for continuing to read this and for your generous feedback in the review--it means so very much to me, truly deeply value and appreciate you taking the time to let me know what is coming across in this long-winded tale! The next chapter will continue to push the action and further revelations, I hope to answer most if not all of the back/side story of Lucretia, Dymphna, Grindewald, Abraxas, etc. , as well (if I can get it 'right') as moving on with the Nag, Sev, Narcissa, et alia in the present/main storyline. I'm realising that instead of one more chapter, I'll need at least three... Yes, canon Severus seems to have worn many masks, hiding (and yes, absolutely, betraying) his caring nature and yet wishing for something elusive and/or embittered/consumed by the lack of it, or 'a man hagridden by the future' (interpreted by me as 'tormented by his life') as the singular C.S. Lewis described some, etc. Yes, Nagini is in a fluctuating state--her decision(s) to be made in the next chapter. And Narcissa... as revealed by the end of the HP canon, she (along with Severus) had the power to deceive and conceal her thoughts and feelings from Voldemort himself, let alone Severus, Lucius, Bellatrix... She is one of the many underwritten characters in fanfic imho, and I'll try not to get too derailed from the main plot with her--lol!--she just preoccupies me sometimes, and I wanted to give a nod to her and her predicament/fate. Again, thank you so very much for your thoughts and observations, can't quite find the proper words to thank you enough... Wishing you all the best, now and for the New Year!
The impression is that of a bridging chapter, but one where emotions are gathering below the surface and getting ready to explode.Deprived of nurturing when young, Severus clings to any sign of friendship and romance. Does that explain his continued attachment to Lily even though he has found Nagini? He could sneer and say Lily got the prat she deserved.Finally get a hint at what Nagini's mother did - excessive ambition and pride, a Frankenstein scenario.Would a memory loss obliterate her attraction to Severus? It appears to be returning at the end.Bit of irony having Pandora warn Xenophilius about being cautious with spells.Dumbledore takes Nagini away from people who would be her friends and who can even admire her mother although they would say her mother did transgress if they learned what she had done. He dumps her among her tormentors.As always, clear elucidation of complex plot and characters.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, truly, deeply appreciate it! Yes, things are about to explode, in the next chapter, exactly, on several levels. It seems that Severus has a deep unreasonable fixation attachment to Lily, truly obssessed with her from early in his life--an obsession that carved a deep groove within that he blindly associates with a kind of 'goodness' he had never known, being deprived so as he was... He seems to have had very limited exposure--his persistent preoccupations with people will be explored and highlighted in the remaining chapters--but I agree and perhaps he will put Lily and her prat in a box, label it, and throw it away on an old shelf to rot.:-)Yes, more explicit information and details of Nagini's mother's actions (and others) in the next chapter, her and her cronies' endless sub-plot laid out fully and put to rest. Nagini's memory loss will be shown to have been selective, obliterated selectively, and the question of can an emotion 'record' be stronger than a mental record, either exist without the other, or will one enhance and strengthen the other to full retainment? Yes, perhaps bad taste about the Pandora and Xeno comment about dubious, untested spells--but I couldn't resist... I meant it as more bitter irony, as Luna's mother could only have been quite a unique persona, such a shame she died the way she did.Keenly seen by you, Dumbledore's plans for Nagini will be to prove a point of his, one of several actually, without leniency, an 'all or nothing' scenario... All the loose ends will be tied together--currently working on the last three chapters, simultaneously--lol! (will ty to get them down to maybe two if I can compact the narrative and dialogues and tie together everything... We'll see). Thank you again for your incredible feedback and inspiring observations--nourishment for the Muse, and always deeply grateful,
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Response from MHaydn (Reviewer)
The irony about Pandora is not in bad taste at all. It says she is more concerned about Xenopilius thqn about herself. It is a rich chapter with more than mentioned in the review: Narcissa steps forward, the contrast of the schoolboy bullying of Sirius with the adult evil of Lucius, the portrait of Slughorn eager not to ruffle powerful feathers.
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Thank you so much for contnuing to read and for the generous feedback,
Thank you for another wonderful chapter!
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Dearest
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, thank you so much for reading this and the review--truly appreciate your kind feedback!
A seemingly straight-forward chapter but numerous undercurrents are playing themselves out.
How did the Dark Lord and company know they would be gathering horklumps? The runespoor is replaying the Garden of Eden. What is Rodophus's interest in Nagini? Anything besides lust? (It's been a long time since I read the previous chapters.) Dumbledores's reason for keeping Nagini away from the Malfoys may be to keep her away from their evil influence when the intent should be to protect her.
There does seem to be a belief running through magic fiction that once touched by the Dark, a person is not redeemable. (I am reminded of the oath required of all US Civil Servants: "I am not now nor have I ever been a member of the Communist Party.")
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you so much for reading and for the feedback! Yes, it's a turning point; a certain Slytherin Head Boy let it slip out about the nature of their detention (in next chapter), to the convenience of the Dark Lord & Rodolphus/company. For Rodolphus, having possessed Nagini sexually represents several things to him (more later on that), but mostly a warped game between him and Lucius of sorts. Dumbledore will have an overall reason for wishing to keep her away from the Malfoys and their support of the Dark Lord and accompanying agendas; he'll attempt to protect as long as its needed for his purposes as well.Hmmm... the matter of redeemablility... will be explored. Love the quote! Immediately thought of it applying to Dumbledore somehow first--lol!Thank you again, truly appreciate your commentary and insight!
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you so much for reading and for the feedback! Yes, it's a turning point; a certain Slytherin Head Boy let it slip out about the nature of their detention (in next chapter), to the convenience of the Dark Lord & Rodolphus/company. For Rodolphus, having possessed Nagini sexually represents several things to him (more later on that), but mostly a warped game between him and Lucius of sorts. Dumbledore will have an overall reason for wishing to keep her away from the Malfoys and their support of the Dark Lord and accompanying agendas; he'll attempt to protect as long as its needed for his purposes as well.Hmmm... the matter of redeemablility... will be explored. Love the quote! Immediately thought of it applying to Dumbledore somehow first--lol!Thank you again, truly appreciate your commentary and insight!
McNair, Nott, Goyle, and Regulus are acting like adolesents, which they are. Narcissa and Bellatrix are coquetes, each in her own way. Lucius is acting mature, partly because he has been trained to do so and partly because in is in the throes of romance, which everyone knows and accepts. Nagini is flustered. Severus is acting mature, but no one takes exception to this, which is odd because adults do not take kindly to an adolescent not acting his age.Severus wants to oomfort Nagini, but he only plans to ease her hurt after Abraxas has finished with her. He does not plan to protect her by confronting or eliminating Abraxas. Similarly, Lucius wants Narcissa to acknowledge the Dark Lord. Power and the social order are dominant. Are the men correct? Would they be able to neither have nor help Nagini and Narcissa if they did not first secure their place in the social order?
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback--truly appreciate it! Yes, in the world of this story, power and social order are dominant; without securing one's place in the present social order, Severus' power, his lacking social order power, at this point in his life, leaves him helpless to act effectively--how his impulses or wishes would otherwise act... thus, perhaps, motivating him to attain social power at any cost (blindly, being still a youth) in order to be more effective, and have the so-called freedom to take matters into his own hands...At this point, the futility of confronting or attempting to eliminate Abraxas would not be wise... It's one thing to see the signs of domestic abuse and another to act upon it immediately on the behalf of someone he has just become acquainted with in the rigid perimeters of his world. Lucius is his father's son... and all the cliches that go with 'the apple not falling far from the tree', etc. Again, thank you!
Response from MHaydn (Reviewer)
You are correct. The review was too focused on the similarities of Nagina and Narcissa, and it sounded too harsh. Even in more normal circumstances, a well-intentioned intervention can cause more harm than good.
The chapter presents the Malfoys as cold, calculating, and treacherous, but they are not caricatures. Their motivation is power: personal, family, class. Abraxas is one who is too extreme or too inflexible - in some ways a tragic figure. Nagini's mother suggests he is goaded by fear. Perhaps his behavior can be explained by the absence of the Midas stone, which would bring part of the story full circle. Lucius suggests using a display of understanding out of a mix of compassion and strategy. He is so eager to please his father, however, that he presses Nagini too hard and she becomes suspicious and demands a trade of information instead of freely giving it - a price for his mistake.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
More will come out a bit later about Abraxas and the crux of the matter, way back when, between him, his sister and Riddle. And yes, power is meant to be their driving force; I still wanted Lucius to be 'in process' of becoming 'a slippery' agent, not yet as polished as the adult canon, yet, but he learns/he'll learn quickly from his mistakes... Thank you for continuing to read this and the insightful feedback, affirming what is coming across--truly appreciate it!
This chapter brings out the cruelty of the young who are still finding their way and the friendship-rivalry between Severus and Regulus And, of course, the ambivalent feelings of Severus, Regulus, Lucius, and Nagini. This is contrasted with the attitude of Abraxas who could have had a powerful ally in Nagini if he had been more flexible. Perhaps ambivalence isn't all bad. It was quite a bit to pack into one chapter.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you for continuing to read and the feedback! Yes, I wanted to touch upon the seeds of cruelty manifested in earlier forms in them, and try to convey the different kinds of ambivalence they are each feeling at this time in their lives, now being forced to respond to people/things they haven't before. Abraxas is quite rigid and decisive, hardened by the past and resolute on how he wants/demands his world to be for the future. Thank you again!
An impressive chapter. Good portraits done in a subtle manner - both characters and relationships. Nagini still immature and impulsive.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you for the read and the feedback! I was trying to set up the Slytherins and their very 'mature', polished and ordered world that Nagini has been plunged into versus her disordered, unpolished and impulsive nature and background... Thank you again for the specific feedback, truly appreciate it!
Continued, unrelenting portrait of the Malfoys.
There is some inner core of Nagini that that affects even Abraxas.
Not certain about Hagrid's comment on Nagini just being let out since I though she had already spent the autumn at school.
The Malfoys gaining their wealth by a special, magical device fits canon where special, magical devices are important. It also portrays the Malfoys to not be strategic planners since an ancient house of long-lived individuals could gradually accumulate enormous wealth.
There could be more discussion of the accusations against Nagini since it might have been self defense, but self defense not tempered by the self control that the Malfoys appear to lack.
(Still not my type of story, but I can rate it on the basis of imagination and unfolding narrative.)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you so much for reading and the specific feedback! You've given me a lot to think about, and how I can clean up or connect more of the narrative logically in Hagrid's comments and other parts; some points I had purposefully left convoluted--lol!--such as more about Nagini's defense, etc., but other points are just sloppy narrative. More clarity will come in the next few chapters about her schooling, about her being in Durmstrang in the autumn-- sorry that the scarceness of this narrative has been left out here, but it'll be detailed in a later chapter... Thank you again for your precious time and patience, and generous rating--it's wonderful to get constructive feedback about such a roughly constructed storyline--I deeply appreciate your input!
Severus does not believe that living well is the best revenge, but for some reason, when confronted with retribution against Nagini for her past wrongs (according to the Malfoys), he is uncomfortable. Perhaps he likes revenge in the abstract, but the reality of it repels him. This is canon Severus where he offers insults and injustice, but protects the students from any real danger. Neither Severus or Regulus approve of the Malfoys. Good portrayal of Malfoy arrogance.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Yes, I wanted to capture some level of insecurity and confusion in Severus at this earlier point in his life... before he becomes the full, specific resolved character we experience in adult canon... I felt the need of retribution is playing an influence in him on some levels, abstractly, and the notion of revenge is what has been and will be an influence on him, but yes, the reality is always something different... Severus' duality on so-many levels is something I wanted to explore... I was always profoundly struck by the inherent ethical choices within Severus and Regulus that differed (revealed finally in DH) from the others in Voldemort's followers, etc. Thank you again for your generous feedback.
The narrative begins in-the-middle with a dramatic scene and proceeds to offer some explanation of current events and to suggest underlying motives. (This is not my type of story, but I must rate it as a literary effort.)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Oh goodness,
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, thank you for your kindness of giving this a read and leaving feedback! I truly appreciate it. However, as if you can't already tell--lol!-- this was my very first, ever, fledgling attempt at writing fanfiction--I had just discovered the wild wayward goings-on and wonderful Potter verse and fandom universe, and it was started and written at an unusually strange time of my life, etc., etc. (further excuses elaborating on exploratory pulp fiction thingys, etc.) It took a very long time to discover one-shots and drabbles in this universe, which I so much enjoy now. So please, especially knowing that it is not your type of story, and it will only get worse in this and other aspects, please don't feel the need to read on--of course, I'm gobsmacked to have a writer of your calibre read and make time to constructively leave feedback, but it may be too painful an experience for you--and I'd much rather your energy go to your own writing and more posting as soon as possible!Again, regardless, thank you for your kindness & consideration with this newbie's noodling(s).
So instead of a lovely outing to Hogsmeade, it's detention with the Gryffindorks for Sev and Nagini? Those Slytherins are a tough bunch to be around, especially when the crazy one is among them. You have Bellatrix spot on- just the right amount of madness combined with malevolence, and her dialogue is perfect - "Miss hoity-toity Malfoy" made me laugh out loud. Poor Nagini just can't find her place -not quite a Ravenclaw and uneasy amongst the Slytherins (well most of them ;)) Looking forward to reading how detention works out.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Gryffindorks? ROFL--Brilliant! May I use it? So happy that the mad one is coming across as intended and tickled that the words I'm forcing her to say work for you--only Bella can get away with some of this stuff--lol! Yes, I think Nag and Sev need a House of their own, preferably far, far away from it all, although an evening at the ol' Hog's Head would have been a nice outing, even temporarily--damn Gryffindorks Thank you so much for continuing to read this and your incredible support... It helps me push on and try to finish this--to get to the crux of it all and then the denouement--your generous feedback is so very much appreciated, dearest
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
! Can't wait for your latest SS/HG--still squeeing!xx
Response from hexgirl (Reviewer)
Of course you can use it - I'd l;ike to claim it for my very own, but alas, I stole it from someone with wit :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Gryffindorks? ROFL--Brilliant! May I use it? So happy that the mad one is coming across as intended and tickled that the words I'm forcing her to say work for you--only Bella can get away with some of this stuff--lol! Yes, I think Nag and Sev need a House of their own, preferably far, far away from it all, although an evening at the ol' Hog's Head would have been a nice outing, even temporarily--damn Gryffindorks Thank you so much for continuing to read this and your incredible support... It helps me push on and try to finish this--to get to the crux of it all and then the denouement--your generous feedback is so very much appreciated, dearest
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
! Can't wait for your latest SS/HG--still squeeing!xx
Response from hexgirl (Reviewer)
Of course you can use it - I'd l;ike to claim it for my very own, but alas, I stole it from someone with wit :)
Great characterisation of the Marauders in this chapter, and I loved Snape's impudent request that Potter kneel down and kiss his toes. I'd happily kiss any body part he offered me... Ahem... You conveyed blistering, crackling tension between Snape and his enemies - well done! The scene in the Ravenclaw Tower stairwell provided a wonderful contrast, and Snape's "Brilliant..." declaration was a lovely intimate and adolescent moment which made me smile. No doubt that Nagini's universe has been forever changed by this encounter. Lovely work!
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you so much--so glad you liked Snape's impudent request and that the Marauder's scene came across as intended:-) About the 'Brilliant' reply moment - LOL! - just wanted a second of Severus being 'human' and like any other adolescent before things change further for them; Yup! Nagini's universe has definitely changed--thank you again for continuing to support my slow and sporadic Muse *hugs*
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you so much--so glad you liked Snape's impudent request and that the Marauder's scene came across as intended:-) About the 'Brilliant' reply moment - LOL! - just wanted a second of Severus being 'human' and like any other adolescent before things change further for them; Yup! Nagini's universe has definitely changed--thank you again for continuing to support my slow and sporadic Muse *hugs*
Oh, I love this chapter. Nagini and Severus' seductive hidey-hole was such a tease Lol! I was ready to scream at those damn Marauders for interupting. But it only added to the tension and made their eventual getting together all the more sensual, and oh was it worth the wait.I loved it all... oh but his baritone voice healing her arm *swoon*- now that's an image I'll remember for a while. I will be waiting with baited breath for the next chapter.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
I know it's on Wendy's top 25 things not-to-do list, but... again, what's a spurned Severus to do when sweet solace is offered in the nooks and crannies of Hogwarts? - LOL! I'm so glad you liked it--had to put in his voice:-) and wanted the image of another kind of intimacy between them, with the healing of her arm by him, before it progressed to something else Hexgirl, thank you so much for your continued support for my slow and sporadic Muse *hugs*
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
I know it's on Wendy's top 25 things not-to-do list, but... again, what's a spurned Severus to do when sweet solace is offered in the nooks and crannies of Hogwarts? - LOL! I'm so glad you liked it--had to put in his voice:-) and wanted the image of another kind of intimacy between them, with the healing of her arm by him, before it progressed to something else Hexgirl, thank you so much for your continued support for my slow and sporadic Muse *hugs*
More sweet solace please. Pretty please with a cherry on top!That was so sensual. I love the way you took us into Snape's mind and made us privy to all that he was aware of: Nagini's physical response to him, her embarasment and obvious feelings of attraction. I've said it before and I'll say it again, 'What is a spurned wizard to do?'And about that spurning: Ms Evans is more than a little insensitive here, yet I truly believe that canon Lily did not think him capable of love or devotion... well HE showed HER. Pity it was too late.The scene with Snape and Lily sems like a very likely encounter; it could almost be a missing scene. Of course Snape, being Snape focuses his hatred onto James not Lily as if SHE has been Imperiused by the big bad toe-rag. And trust the Marauders to be the instigators of snoggus interutptus. GET EM, SEV!!
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Dearest
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, thank you so much for the lovely, provoking feedback-- I agree with you regarding canon Lily; she had her perceptions and needs and chose Potter to fulfil them, leaving Severus to his fate; both quite flawed characters and so very human:-) I just wanted to touch on another rejection scenario; however, my pov is that Sev always picked himself up, he'd learned early on to be his own man regardless of pain and rejection, a man of steel will and determination rather than an utter basket case, however, again, very human with needs and baggage of his own and yes, *deeply sentimental* underneath the layered facade;-)I could go on and on about what Lily meant and represented to Sev, like the rest of fandom - haha! - but JKR did it best, of course,--poor Snape... no mercy for him... but thankfully we are allowed to play and write fandom about him!So, 'what is a spurned wizard to do?''snoggus interutptus' - ROFL! Yea, Sev, GET EM!!! I realise I'm doing all of the 'don't dos' (I think it was on Wendy's no-no list, but I'm having too much fun, couldn't resist having my OC snog Sev in Hogwarts corridors: thanks for forgiving me!xxx)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Dearest
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, thank you so much for the lovely, provoking feedback-- I agree with you regarding canon Lily; she had her perceptions and needs and chose Potter to fulfil them, leaving Severus to his fate; both quite flawed characters and so very human:-) I just wanted to touch on another rejection scenario; however, my pov is that Sev always picked himself up, he'd learned early on to be his own man regardless of pain and rejection, a man of steel will and determination rather than an utter basket case, however, again, very human with needs and baggage of his own and yes, *deeply sentimental* underneath the layered facade;-)I could go on and on about what Lily meant and represented to Sev, like the rest of fandom - haha! - but JKR did it best, of course,--poor Snape... no mercy for him... but thankfully we are allowed to play and write fandom about him!So, 'what is a spurned wizard to do?''snoggus interutptus' - ROFL! Yea, Sev, GET EM!!! I realise I'm doing all of the 'don't dos' (I think it was on Wendy's no-no list, but I'm having too much fun, couldn't resist having my OC snog Sev in Hogwarts corridors: thanks for forgiving me!xxx)
*click* *Click* *CLICK* What? No more? *taps fingers* Pot, meet kettle. :P
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
'Pot, meet kettle.'--Hey, sweetie, I tagged you first - lol! Seriously, I'm in the middle of my dental problems/saga in RL, but will try to get the next chapter shaped up enough for a beta soon-- thank you so much for the clicks and finger tapping-- the best nudging there is!
Response from sunny33 (Reviewer)
OK, mine's done, just needs a final tweak and the beta. And yours...?
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
um... in a jumbled process of being-- the tweak and beta is the light at the end of the tunnel, far, far away-ish... *hiding and distracted by Xenophilius*--will get back to Sev asap... thanks for the double-whammy nudge xxx
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
'Pot, meet kettle.'--Hey, sweetie, I tagged you first - lol! Seriously, I'm in the middle of my dental problems/saga in RL, but will try to get the next chapter shaped up enough for a beta soon-- thank you so much for the clicks and finger tapping-- the best nudging there is!
Response from sunny33 (Reviewer)
OK, mine's done, just needs a final tweak and the beta. And yours...?
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
um... in a jumbled process of being-- the tweak and beta is the light at the end of the tunnel, far, far away-ish... *hiding and distracted by Xenophilius*--will get back to Sev asap... thanks for the double-whammy nudge xxx
I hope Sev really can cope with whatever Bella has up her sleeve. :0
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Me too!:O Bella never does anything without ulterior motives, and Severus may have experienced a lot of things, but this might be more than he could possibly imagine at this point in his life... Thank you so much for the read & feedback!:-)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Me too!:O Bella never does anything without ulterior motives, and Severus may have experienced a lot of things, but this might be more than he could possibly imagine at this point in his life... Thank you so much for the read & feedback!:-)
Sybill is flaky but hilarious. :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Gotta' give Sybill a little love, don't we? She just can't help herself sometimes it seems - lol! Thank you for reading and the feedback -- realy appreciate it! :-)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Gotta' give Sybill a little love, don't we? She just can't help herself sometimes it seems - lol! Thank you for reading and the feedback -- realy appreciate it! :-)
Marcus is pretty creepy, but in his own way may serve to protect Nagini. :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Yeah, the pompous prat might be good for something... hmmm... Thank you so much for the read and the feedback, sunny! Really appreciate it!
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Yeah, the pompous prat might be good for something... hmmm... Thank you so much for the read and the feedback, sunny! Really appreciate it!
Lovely to see an update on this story The scene between Severus and Lily in the library was beautifully choreographed and utterly heartbreaking. I can just imagine such a conversation taking place as a result of his bereavement, but of course Lily managed to pour salt in the wound and give it a rub for good measure. Poor Severus, so blind to the consequences of his decisions and unable to comprehend the error of his ways.I also enjoyed the moments outside the hospital wing with Nagini, despite the rude interruption. Looking forward to finding out who throws the first hex!
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, thank you for reading and the lovely, detailed feedback--really appreciate it! As time goes on, it just seems to me that, regardless, Lily would've kept to her decisions of rejecting him, and yet, Severus would've also kept his projected wish of Lily, how he wished/wishes her to be, and the excuses he'd make for her behaviour/rejection in his mind, regardless of how she treated him or what she told him... same old story, so sad... They were rudely interrupted, weren't they? Something will have to be done about that! Yes, I also am looking forward to the first hexes beng thrown-hehe! Thank you so much, again!
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, thank you for reading and the lovely, detailed feedback--really appreciate it! As time goes on, it just seems to me that, regardless, Lily would've kept to her decisions of rejecting him, and yet, Severus would've also kept his projected wish of Lily, how he wished/wishes her to be, and the excuses he'd make for her behaviour/rejection in his mind, regardless of how she treated him or what she told him... same old story, so sad... They were rudely interrupted, weren't they? Something will have to be done about that! Yes, I also am looking forward to the first hexes beng thrown-hehe! Thank you so much, again!
OOOh! nag! VERY hot chapter. Absolutely brilliantly written, full of evocative imagery. Snapes, disappointment and bitterness over Lily and his carnal lust and inability to resist Bella was tangible. I loved this line:"But, like a sinister dream of dark yearning, Bellatrix stood before him." WOW!Then the close with the description of Nagini's sexual fantasies was equally well done because of the contrast between the darkness of Snape and Bella's act and the almost innocence of Nagini's because it was the realisation of genuine feelings of affection towards our hero. Wonderful chapter my dear!
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Hexgirl, thank you so much for the lovely, specific feedback - truly appreciate it! Sorry Sev's Slytherin, human side was depicted - he just wasn't in the mood to back down from the wench - and definitely man enough to take her on - LOL! Thank you for the feedback regarding Nagini's sexual awakenings mixed with her awakening feelings for Sev - had to start somewhere - lol! Again, thank you for your support on all levels! xxx
I hope it won't be detrimental to Nagini that she's been put in Ravenclaw instead of Slytherin
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, thank you so much for the read and review! Really appreciate the feedback! The Slytherin family members will definitely be irked by this, as well as a few of their cohorts, but there's one Slytherin that's discreetly 'got her back' ;-) Thanks, again!