Ravenclaws Ascending, Slytherins Descending
Chapter 11 of 22
nagandsevThere are many kinds of Ravenclaws, as Nagini quickly discovers, some of good will and others not; Severus’ ideas of his and Lily’s future is challenged, not only by Potter’s presence, but by Lucius’ attempted deterrence.
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From the delectable meal and warm camaraderie of her newly found Ravenclaw housemates, Nagini had slowly relaxed. Xenophilius and Hibiscus' continued chatter of all things related to their House, as well as their engaging banter, had lulled her into a calm repose. Until now, she had struggled to sit up straight against an overwhelming tiredness creeping through her sore body and limbs. The accumulation of the day's events hit her hard, and she was curious to what refuge Ravenclaw Tower would hold for her, eager to settle down in her room. In a nice, warm bed! Finally, safe and away from them!
Nagini glanced down at the ring on her left hand. The Dark Lord's gift via Rodolphus rested benignly on her finger; she turned and looked over her shoulder, giving a fleeting glance towards the Slytherin table. Nagini caught sight of Severus Snape, but his attention was focused on the red-headed witch he had so intently watched earlier upon arriving at the Hogsmeade station.
The green-eyed witch, who Severus stoically gazed at, was seated at the table between them: Gryffindor.
Nagini turned back around, wondering why she even cared at all that the tall, raven-haired Slytherin was fixated on the Gryffindor witch. It's odd, but I've only seen him in Slytherin company, as I have only been... but who is the red-headed witch to him? Snape being interested in anyone outside of the Slytherin circle struck her as odd, as well as risky, given that it was so dangerously esoteric. There's so much more to him than the little I know... why does it even matter to me? My future is here with the Ravenclaw house; I needn't concern myself with anyone in Slytherin again... just focus on the here and now...
Her thoughts wandered back to when she and Severus had danced together; the mere memory of it lit her senses. Nagini could feel him holding her, guiding her, touching her... Just then, her back muscles darted with pain, reminding her of how much had changed in so short a time. Her aching exhaustion flared, and she couldn't suppress a long, heavy sigh.
"Have some more pumpkin juice," offered Hibiscus dreamily, refilling Nagini's cup. "It's nourishing as well as good for the nerves, especially before sleeping."
"Gurdyroot would invigorate her more," chimed in Xenophilius, waggling his eyebrows. "The benefits of it are endless." Xenophilius was pleasantly sucking on something, smiling rascally at Hibiscus and Nagini.
The mercurial Malfoy couldn't help but smile in response to the candyfloss-haired Lovegood; his quirky good nature had a light-hearted sweetness which was irresistible.
"Which benefits?" replied Nagini, taking a sip, grinning.
Hibiscus giggled softly. "Xeno, she's just met us; Miss Malfoy must have..."
"The mark..." The droned comment came from a witch with frizzy brown hair and large rimmed glasses directly seated across from Nagini; the infelicitous Ravenclaw had been peering solemnly at Nagini throughout the meal, but she had not once spoken until now.
Nagini looked at her, curious.
Xenophilius raised an eyebrow, and Hibiscus' lips formed a knowing smile.
"Ah, a divination, Sybill?" asked Xeno, impressed.
"An aura. Her aura. I divine a dark..." Sybill gazed above Nagini's head, "augury."
Before Nagini could question what exactly the portentous girl was implying, she heard a cry, "Malfoy!"
Nagini looked up. It was the Ravenclaw Prefect who had stared at her so nastily as she had walked to the House table after her Sorting.
"I'm Marcus Belby, Ravenclaw's Head Boy. You are to go to your quarters immediately, unpack and wait to be briefed by me on all our rules and regulations within Ravenclaw. You'll find our House is quite different to others." The dark-haired Prefect gave Hibiscus a lofty look. "Hope, as you're one of her roommates, escort her at once!"
"A bit bumptious tonight, more than usual, aren't we?" butted in Xeno. "Vis absoluta, Belby," he tilted his head back slightly to give his fellow seventh-year Ravenclaw a judgemental look, "absolute corrumpit!"
"Lovegood, not now!" pointed out Marcus, defensive.
"Nagini!" All turned to see Lucius Malfoy standing near, coldly staring at his cousin. "We must talk. Come with me."
Upon seeing Lucius, an irrational refusal sparked through her. Before Nagini could decline, Belby took a step towards Lucius and exerted his power, Head Boy to Head Boy. "She's not going anywhere with you. She's going directly to Ravenclaw Tower!"
Lucius' facial muscles flinched in tension. "No. You're mistaken, Belby. I'm going to talk to her privately. Right. Now."
Marcus turned back to Nagini and spoke sharply. "Unless you wish to be sent to the Headmaster immediately, go to your room!" Then, Belby gave a challenging, but amused look, slowly, to both Nagini and Lucius. "Is this really what you want? Would you like me to make a scene, to demand that Professor Flitwick that Dumbledore be immediately involved? Does the Malfoy name really need more scandal? You know I'll do it, Lucius, just for the mere whim of it!" Belby took a step closer to Lucius, almost brushing against him. "If you want trouble, you'll get it tenfold!"
Irked, Lucius' eyelashes fluttered in thought, but before he could reply, Nagini rose and informed them, "I'll go directly."
Turning to Hibiscus, she asked, "Could you please take me there?" Besides appeasing Belby, she wished to show that she didn't associate herself with her blond cousin and respected the Ravenclaw Head Boy's authority. Nagini couldn't tell if Belby's threat to call upon the Headmaster for something so seemingly trivial was real or not, but something about his nasty countenance and unflinching arrogance, equalling Lucius', told her he would. I want to avoid Lucius on any level, especially privately!
The realization that she was free of Lucius and his cronies, Lestrange in particular, inspired her to cooperate to the fullest. However, she saw Belby's already prejudged dislike of her by the nasty sneer plastered on his face, which only deepened whenever he made any direct eye-contact with her. She stared at the floor, disheartened. His look implied that, regardless of her cooperation, he would be prejudiced to anything she did. It's not going to be easy. He despises Lucius, and me as well!
"Absolutely, it'll be my pleasure," replied the effervescent Hibiscus. "Just follow me, Nagini. Xeno?"
"Of course, my dear. With all of the Wrackspurts floating around, siphoning people's thoughts and causing all of these muzzy notions abounding this evening, I wouldn't think of letting you ladies venture about unescorted." The tall, golden wizard stood up to his full height, his long unruly hair flowing down. Debonairly, Xenophilius proffered both arms for each witch to respectively take. Suave and carefree, Lovegood guided them to the doors of the Great Hall.
Watching them, Marcus and Lucius heard faintly, "The haunted bed..." They turned and stared at the frizzy-haired, wide-eyed girl.
Sybill raised her hand slowly pointing at Nagini. "Tormented dreams, troubled sleep, the haunted bed awaits her curses await her!"
"For your information, the Malfoys are already cursed, Trelawney, so no need for embellishments..." remarked Belby snidely.
"That will do, Belby!" cut off Lucius, coolly incensed.
"Touched a raw nerve have I, Malfoy?"
"You've touched nothing, as always."
Marcus smirked, relishing Lucius' cold fury. "At first, I was simply outraged by her being Sorted into Ravenclaw." Then, the Head Boy sneered. "But, on second thought, I shall enjoy having a Malfoy to keep under my thumb." Belby leaned in and softly whispered, "Even if she is a bastard; a half-blood will do just as well, won't one, cousin? Even if she is half a filthy Mudblood, yes?"
Smug and assured of winning a point in some hostile, private game between the two, Marcus turned and started to confidently jaunt away.
"You forget who my father is!" lashed out Lucius.
Whipping back around, Marcus snarled, "And you forget who my father is the Chief Warlock of the Wizengamot! You Malfoys think yourselves above the law, so just a reminder: my father oversees every single court procedure. Guess whose case was quite recent?"
The Ravenclaw Head Boy gave a dark look to the end of the Great Hall where Nagini was just exiting with Hibiscus and Xenophilius. Smugly, Marcus pointed out, "You also forget that I have privy access to everything... I know all of the dark and dirty secrets regarding Miss Malfoy."
Relishing his triumph, Belby rubbed it in. "Mmm... cat got your tongue, has it? Good!" Satisfied, Marcus intentionally butted Lucius' shoulder hard as he brushed away, leaving the Slytherin Head Boy stewing in his own juices.
Amid the hubbub of excited, chatting noises of the Great Hall, Lucius heard, "Oi, Malfoy! Your cousin," it was Sirius Black, grinning ear to ear, jeering him, "nice looking bird! Where've you and your father been hiding her in your dungeons?"
Boring into the back of Marcus Belby, Lucius only gazed piercingly at the blood traitor, Black, for a second before deciding to ignore Sirius, and headed back to the Slytherin table.
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"I'll deliver them immediately!" eeked out the young Ravenclaw, Terry Boot, staring at the small package he held in his hands.
Severus watched as the frightened second-year scurried away, having sworn to the intimidating Slytherin to deliver three small tins of healing balms to the newest Ravenclaw house member, Nagini Malfoy. Severus waited until the younger student disappeared up the stairs of the Ravenclaw Tower; satisfied, he turned and headed back down the corridor to return to the Slytherin dungeon, only to halt and quickly spring into the dark shadows upon hearing a familiar voice.
"James Potter, no!"
Severus' heart stopped. It was Lily, making her nightly Prefect patrol, but not alone.
"Come on, Evans... One kiss! Just one..."
"And then one more, and then another..."
Her playful protests were stopped by James decisively nuzzling her up against the wall and silencing her with his mouth. Only the soft moans and impatient grunts of the two embracing and exploring each other were heard echoing sporadically.
Severus watched in horror, frozen, a wave of nausea coming over him. Several seconds passed before he could muster his wits enough to think. That vile swine snogging you? Lily, no! You said you would meet with me! This Thursday... at our table in the library... Lily, no!
Severus' hope had soared as he read the Owl post he had received from Lily only an hour ago during the welcome-back feast. His heartbeat had continued racing rapidly, even as the note disintegrated in front of his eyes once read.
Scenarios of their secret meeting, leading to further amorous meetings for this time Severus would take no chances; he would give Lily no time to doubt his true feelings for her. He'd rehearsed in his mind over and over again what he would say from the second he'd have her intimate attention: he'd bare his soul. He would prove to her that there was so much more to him than she assumed she knew, more than the childhood friend, the poor boy from Spinner's End, more than her schoolmate confidante. Bitterly, he reflected, We were best friends, more than best friends...
That was until last spring when, through one heated moment in dire humiliation, he had lashed out calling her the fateful word 'Mudblood'. Thinking of his last pitiful attempt to make amends for offending her, how he had risked waiting outside of Gryffindor, pleading with Mary Macdonald to go and send Lily to him, only to say the wrong things when she appeared, Severus winced.
The memory of Lily's fiery temper and resolute decision to distance herself from him, once and for all, Severus pushed aside. He would risk again her rejection in an attempt to gain her back. I won't make the mistake and keep hidden exactly what she means to me... what Lily has always meant to me. This time, she'll hear me out. This time, she'll understand. This time, she'll reciprocate my feeling!
Severus had faith in Lily; she would understand him fully... Forgive me, accept me! Accept us!
Believing himself to be clever and cunning enough to procure a way for them to be together, he needed only for Lily to reciprocate; the slightest sign was all that he wished. But first, they must meet. This Thursday in the library. The first step for me to truly make amends!
However, at that very moment, with the sight and sound of James Potter touching and kissing his Lily blatantly in front of him, he was blinded with vitriolic hatred. Uncontrollably incensed, his wanded hand rose to hex his nemesis, James Potter, when several things happened at once.
A furious Marcus Belby appeared from the Ravenclaw stairway.
"Hey, you two!" shouted the furious Ravenclaw Head Boy. "Stop that! Stop that now!" The priggish Belby strode nearer to the disconcerted couple. "Evans? What is this? A Prefect behaving in such a way! Oh, it's you, Potter... McGonagall will know of this at once! Gryffindor will be missing its prize Seeker for the upcoming match!"
Before Lily could defend James, Severus heard another all too familiar voice.
"What does one expect? A Mudblood given the rights of a Prefect of course they're going to be defiled in such a way... only Gryffindors stoop so low..."
"Malfoy, shut it! Or I'll..."
"You'll what, Potter?"
"I'll make you shut it!"
"Is that a promise?" Lucius leered at the outraged James.
Wand in hand, Belby broke in. "Enough! Evans and Potter you will return immediately to Gryffindor I'll report your conduct to Professor McGonagall promptly. Go straight there; I'm right behind you!"
"You just wait, Malfoy! You'll get yours soon!" called out Potter, unable to restrain himself.
"James, don't make things worse. Come along!" Abashed, Lily tugged the hotheaded James to leave with her, and quickly, with heated whispers, they were soon out of sight.
Thoroughly disgusted, Lucius' hawk-like gaze had followed them, glaring at Lily in particular. What is it about Mudbloods that could entice a Pureblood away from his own?
The Ravenclaw Head Boy interrupted the blond wizard's malicious thoughts.
"What are you doing here?"
Lucius gazed coolly at Marcus. "Nagini. I need to speak with her."
Delighted he could deny Lucius what he wanted, yet again, Marcus sneered. "She is not available."
"Belby, don't play games with me. I want to see her. Now."
"Are you deaf? No!"
Having avidly locked eyes with Marcus, in a flash, Lucius raised his wand. "Imperio!"
Against an invisible counter-shield, there was a split second of a brief light ricocheting, striking Lucius down on the hard stone floor, stunned.
Belby burst out with laughter and glee. "The Belbys learn from their mistakes, unlike you Malfoys, unlike that wretched father of yours!" Suddenly, Marcus' demeanour became eerily sombre. "Unlike my dear Aunt Lapontia... It was too late for her...Where would the rest of our family be, not learning to defend ourselves from your father's filthy, underhanded tactics? Hmm?" Belby kicked Lucius hard in his ribcage. "You dare to try to Imperio me, dear cousin? You are rather thick, aren't you? Everyone knows it's your father's calling card, and you're just like him, aren't you? You stupid, shallow toff!"
Marcus paced, working himself up into a tizzy. The chance to vent long seeded frustrations between their families, between the two of them personally, overtook him. "Try to use an Unforgiveable on me, will you? Well, let me reciprocate with a little surprise for you!" Belby raised his wand and in the split second intent to use the Cruciatus on Lucius, he suddenly fell over, hitting the floor hard from a Petrificus Totalus, having been hexed from behind.
Wand raised, Severus walked slowly out of the shadows and stood between the two sprawled seventh years. After a second's thought, he quickly counter-cursed Lucius and helped him to his feet.
Malfoy grasped to balance himself against Snape and catch his breath from the residue of the stunning spell of Belby's. Just as Severus initiated to guide him away, Lucius threw out his booted foot, kicking Belby full in the face. Riled beyond measure, he would've had at him again, but Severus whispered, "Leave him for others to find; it won't help if you're seen here; otherwise, it'll be his word against yours. We need to return to Slytherin, at once, before anyone can place you here with him."
"Always the voice of reason, aren't you?" concurred Lucius, bitterly, for he would've loved to have beaten Marcus' face in Muggle-style. "Very well."
It wasn't until they were both crossing through the Slytherin common room that Lucius inquired, "Besides my gratitude, Snape, you have my curiosity. What were you doing in that part of the castle in the first place?"
"Nothing." Severus was still morosely playing the mental film of Potter kissing Lily in his mind, torturing himself.
Lucius raised an eyebrow, skeptical, knowing Severus' different silent moods well from over the years. "Snape, have a seat." Beckoning the brooding young wizard over to two corner chairs, Lucius flicked his wand, placing a Muffliato spell around them as they both sat near the fireplace. The blond wizard was determined to get to the bottom of what Severus was reluctant to reveal. "You just happened to be near Ravenclaw at curfew time?"
Severus flicked at a spot on his sleeve. "Healing balms... for Nagini; I'd promised myself to bring her some." He looked up at Lucius, poker-faced. "For the lash wounds on her back... in case she needs them. I noticed her gait was quite stiff, which indicates the wounds are still... painful." Severus knew full well what this felt like from his own father's thrashings.
Lucius sniffed and stared into the burning embers. He refused to comment on his father's punishment on his cousin. Instead, he pursued his own curiosity regarding another matter. "Why then were you hiding? From that shite of a nob, Belby?"
Severus remained silent.
"You saw the Mudblood and that filthy blood traitor, Potter, going at it, didn't you?" Smugly, Lucius purred, "Didn't I tell you about Mudbloods, Severus? Muggles and Mudbloods they are only good for a few things... torture, other forms of entertainment, but for serving our intimate needs? Besides being distasteful, it is, nonetheless, unacceptable. Need I point that out again?" Malfoy gave an exasperated sigh. "I thought you had rid yourself of this obsession. Especially in light of Evans having ensnared Potter in her web; they are obviously rutting around"
"Enough!" snapped Severus, standing up abruptly; he then turned and strode two steps away, only to halt. Unable to go further, his shoulders sagged in defeat. The pain of Lily having chosen James Potter overwhelmed him. He felt Lucius guide him back to his seat and flopped down in it, weakened in body and spirit.
"What is it about Evans that lures you and Potter to her?" Lucius winced at some sordid thought. "Severus, can you tell me one significant thing to help me understand this mad infatuation? Just one small glimpse into that peculiar mind of yours and why you are so ensnared by her, um, charms?"
"I was her first..."
Lucius' eyes narrowed in disbelief. "Her first?"
"No, no, not that..." sputtered Severus, feeling a wave of nausea roll over him. He swallowed back down the rising bile in his throat; his will to hold everything in clashed with an unforeseen need to unburden the insane jealousy of Potter and possessive feeling about Lily. Is Lucius capable of understanding the merest ounce of what I feel?
"I was her first; the first to know her for what she was..."
"And what, pray tell, was that?" asked Lucius, deadpanned and clueless.
"A witch!" revealed Severus in agony. He repeated, "I was the first to know her for what she was, even before she fully understood it herself..." For the briefest moment, Severus smiled at the wonderful miracle of what had been shared between Lily and him. The purity of what only one person can share once and once only with another.
He looked at Lucius for affirmation of this providential event in his life, but only saw the blond wizard peering at him with a distasteful and quizzical expression.
"Well, whether Mudbloods are innately born with magical powers, or whether the power has been stolen from pure Magic-kind is, indeed, the question. I advise you not to put much weight into this insipid childhood memory." It was difficult for the privileged, Pureblood wizard to be tactful in dealing with Snape; however, the Dark Lord had shown more than once a certain softness for Snape, which Lucius interpreted as a sign for others to do so as well. It had briefly perplexed Lucius, but he hadn't dared to question Voldemort's reason for this. Eventually, with time, it became a mute and disinterested point, and the young Malfoy focused rather on how to use Voldemort's favouring of the underprivileged, exceptional Snape to his advantage.
Mentoring Severus had been just the first step of further endearing Voldemort's perception of him. I'm more than just my father's son... reminded Lucius slyly to himself. The Dark Lord shall see that I'm a natural leader for others as well, entrust me even more when he takes full power, but I must put myself forward...
The underprivileged, unusual lad had responded eagerly to Lucius' guidance; it had been easier than the blond imagined, for Severus was truly, exceptionally gifted; Voldemort himself had pointed this out in front of all the other followers, and when Snape took the Dark Lord's Mark, it had sealed the deal. Lucius now needed only to give continued guidance and advice to his Slytherin brother and fellow Death Eater. On Lucius' part, there would be no breaking asunder their bonds, no questioning of loyalty to the Dark Lord or to each other. But he needs my help to rid him of this... Mudblood filth...
Lucius carefully continued, "Severus, I would advise you never to even imply that Mudbloods are our equals; furthermore, I wish to instill in you to trust me, as an older brother, Severus, an experienced brother." Lucius changed tactics. "I wish you to know that I understand your attraction for the weaker sex. However, your choice is what is in question, in need of correcting."
Seeing the incongruous look on Snape's face, Lucius paused.
Severus was now numb from his momentary folly of having entertained that Malfoy could for one second understand what Lily meant to him. Impatient to return to his room for some mental privacy, he couldn't suppress a slight sigh.
Seeing the remorseful young wizard suffering, Lucius scoffed. "Really, Snape, put the pathetic dribble aside, and let's discuss this man to man." Lucius rose and crossed to the fireplace. Turning back to the angst-ridden housemate, Lucius firmly instructed, "You must rip any sentimental dribble from your heart for this Mud...Evans! What you need... and again, I'm speaking to you man to man is a distraction..."
Spurred on by a sudden inspiration, Lucius touched the shoulder of the hunched over figure in pain. "Bellatrix..."
Severus jerked his shoulder away from Lucius' hold.
"Snape...Severus, listen to me! You know Bella fancies you... Why else is she so hostile towards you? A woman scorned... and you have more than once declined her advances..."
Severus huffed, sickened by the mention of the vulgar, voracious Black sister, and swiped again at a fleck on his jacket sleeve.
"You needn't be so cruel to her, Severus. One kind word, one small gesture of affection, and she will do," his voice lowered into a throaty whisper, "anything you want... your utmost fantasy..."
Severus had frozen, breathing slowly.
Lucius had sat again and leaned closer. "Your darkest wishes, Severus. She's incredible. Indescribable."
Severus felt ill. He needed to be alone with his thoughts and feelings, but knew the only way to escape Lucius' savvy attempts to lure him into encouraging and accepting Bellatrix's favours was to appear to be in accord.
Slowly rising, Severus offered, "Very well. I shall think on it."
"Don't think, act! She's yours for the taking," insisted Lucius smugly. "I promise you, Bella will wipe away any schmaltzy childhood fluff and replace it with a very fulfilling, tangible reality." Lucius chuckled softly. "If you're going to be ensnared, Severus, you might as well be ensnared by the best. Trust me on this; she is the best... and the fact that she, a Black, desires you you are honoured. Truly." Lucius was now in a sporting mood, feeling generous by his libidinous reflections of his own experiences with his future sister-in-law. "You won't regret it!"
Attempting to mask his disgust, Severus placidly repeated, "I shall think on it."
Suddenly, Lucius caught sight of another figure who had entered the Slytherin common room. Reminded of his own interests by this challenging presence, the blond wizard urged, "Think on it, and when you're ready to act, let me know. I'll aid you in whichever way you need."
Then, Lucius flicked his wand, dispelling the Muffliato spell, and called out, "Rodolphus! I've been waiting for you time we discussed the gifts from the Dark Lord, the lovely rings for all of our girls?"
Disgruntled, Lestrange gave a cool glare at Severus as they crossed paths with each other and proceeded to fill the chair which Severus had just vacated.
Severus glanced back at Lucius and Rodolphus, who had immediately encircled themselves with Silencing charms, vivaciously in discussion.
He quickly focused on Lily's radiant face, the image of her hair and emerald eyes; immediately, a feeling of calm and solace came over him.
Severus continued onward to his room to lose himself in visions of Lily's and his future.
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A/N: The greatest gratitude to emdramaqueen for her beta work and support!
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WOW. You just left me speechless.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you so much for reading and for your feedback, truly appreciate it!
Phew... I got so engrossed reading the chapters one after the other that I just forgot to review! This chapter was amazing... I particularly liked (I know that's not an appropriate word here) the interaction between Lily and Sev... it seemed like a missing page from the JKR books... thanks for rediscovering it for us! Also enjoyed the really adorable first kiss:)... Looking forward to a beautiful relationship that would heal two scarred hearts!
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Dearest
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, thank you for continuing to read this, and so happy that you are enjoying it--had to explore some interaction between him and Lily as she was so influential on him... Needed to explore what a first kiss would be like between these two at this point, so I'm happy that it came across as intended. Again, thank you for reading and your feedback, truly appreciate it!
It's such an amazingly original idea to portray Nagini as a Malfoy girl who is so different from the rest of her family! I wonder where the Malfoys got that name from, though! Nagini is the Sanskrit word for a female serpent and I have been traditionally intrigued by Jo's choice of name for Voldie's serpent! :P
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you so much for reading, truly appreciate it! This was my first attempt into the wonderful universe of HP fanfiction💕Hmm... I'm trying to finish off the last chapters, so since meeting you, maybe I can write in some justification for the name... At this point, I can't change her biological origin for this tale... but maybe her mother traveled to India when in hiding from Voldy, before becoming impregnated, and became inspired/enlightened by some Sanskrit parchments she came across... hmmm, I'll reflect on it--and dedication to you!:-)Thank you again!
Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Reviewer)
Lol! That's again an amazing idea. And that would explain a lot of things too, considering that a Nagini (in the Hindu mythology context) is often capable of changing into a beautiful (and often potentially dangerous) human female. Could our Nagini be like that? Well, we have to find out!:)
PS: I think I NOW know the reason for your unique penname!:)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
In gratitude for assistance offered, namaste,
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Response from MayavanavihariniHarini (Reviewer)
Ah, namaste dear!
A chapter of action and revelations.For this chapter, the snake bearer arises and the snake in two parts is a symbol of duplicity.Damphna and Lucretia betray Grindewald.Severus demonstrates himself worthy of the Dark Lord who he now hates and will soon plan to betray.Nagini accepts becoming a hit witch, joining those who killed her caretaker, but possiby planning revenge against their leader.Nagini compartmentalizing her life, fooling herself.One might make a wild guess on first reading canon that Severus's cruelty is a mask and reaction against his caring nature, betraying himself.The perspicacious Narcissa is shocked at her own fate.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Dearest
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, thank you for continuing to read this and for your generous feedback in the review--it means so very much to me, truly deeply value and appreciate you taking the time to let me know what is coming across in this long-winded tale! The next chapter will continue to push the action and further revelations, I hope to answer most if not all of the back/side story of Lucretia, Dymphna, Grindewald, Abraxas, etc. , as well (if I can get it 'right') as moving on with the Nag, Sev, Narcissa, et alia in the present/main storyline. I'm realising that instead of one more chapter, I'll need at least three... Yes, canon Severus seems to have worn many masks, hiding (and yes, absolutely, betraying) his caring nature and yet wishing for something elusive and/or embittered/consumed by the lack of it, or 'a man hagridden by the future' (interpreted by me as 'tormented by his life') as the singular C.S. Lewis described some, etc. Yes, Nagini is in a fluctuating state--her decision(s) to be made in the next chapter. And Narcissa... as revealed by the end of the HP canon, she (along with Severus) had the power to deceive and conceal her thoughts and feelings from Voldemort himself, let alone Severus, Lucius, Bellatrix... She is one of the many underwritten characters in fanfic imho, and I'll try not to get too derailed from the main plot with her--lol!--she just preoccupies me sometimes, and I wanted to give a nod to her and her predicament/fate. Again, thank you so very much for your thoughts and observations, can't quite find the proper words to thank you enough... Wishing you all the best, now and for the New Year!
The impression is that of a bridging chapter, but one where emotions are gathering below the surface and getting ready to explode.Deprived of nurturing when young, Severus clings to any sign of friendship and romance. Does that explain his continued attachment to Lily even though he has found Nagini? He could sneer and say Lily got the prat she deserved.Finally get a hint at what Nagini's mother did - excessive ambition and pride, a Frankenstein scenario.Would a memory loss obliterate her attraction to Severus? It appears to be returning at the end.Bit of irony having Pandora warn Xenophilius about being cautious with spells.Dumbledore takes Nagini away from people who would be her friends and who can even admire her mother although they would say her mother did transgress if they learned what she had done. He dumps her among her tormentors.As always, clear elucidation of complex plot and characters.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, truly, deeply appreciate it! Yes, things are about to explode, in the next chapter, exactly, on several levels. It seems that Severus has a deep unreasonable fixation attachment to Lily, truly obssessed with her from early in his life--an obsession that carved a deep groove within that he blindly associates with a kind of 'goodness' he had never known, being deprived so as he was... He seems to have had very limited exposure--his persistent preoccupations with people will be explored and highlighted in the remaining chapters--but I agree and perhaps he will put Lily and her prat in a box, label it, and throw it away on an old shelf to rot.:-)Yes, more explicit information and details of Nagini's mother's actions (and others) in the next chapter, her and her cronies' endless sub-plot laid out fully and put to rest. Nagini's memory loss will be shown to have been selective, obliterated selectively, and the question of can an emotion 'record' be stronger than a mental record, either exist without the other, or will one enhance and strengthen the other to full retainment? Yes, perhaps bad taste about the Pandora and Xeno comment about dubious, untested spells--but I couldn't resist... I meant it as more bitter irony, as Luna's mother could only have been quite a unique persona, such a shame she died the way she did.Keenly seen by you, Dumbledore's plans for Nagini will be to prove a point of his, one of several actually, without leniency, an 'all or nothing' scenario... All the loose ends will be tied together--currently working on the last three chapters, simultaneously--lol! (will ty to get them down to maybe two if I can compact the narrative and dialogues and tie together everything... We'll see). Thank you again for your incredible feedback and inspiring observations--nourishment for the Muse, and always deeply grateful,
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Response from MHaydn (Reviewer)
The irony about Pandora is not in bad taste at all. It says she is more concerned about Xenopilius thqn about herself. It is a rich chapter with more than mentioned in the review: Narcissa steps forward, the contrast of the schoolboy bullying of Sirius with the adult evil of Lucius, the portrait of Slughorn eager not to ruffle powerful feathers.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you so much for contnuing to read and for the generous feedback,
Thank you for another wonderful chapter!
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Dearest
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, thank you so much for reading this and the review--truly appreciate your kind feedback!
A seemingly straight-forward chapter but numerous undercurrents are playing themselves out.
How did the Dark Lord and company know they would be gathering horklumps? The runespoor is replaying the Garden of Eden. What is Rodophus's interest in Nagini? Anything besides lust? (It's been a long time since I read the previous chapters.) Dumbledores's reason for keeping Nagini away from the Malfoys may be to keep her away from their evil influence when the intent should be to protect her.
There does seem to be a belief running through magic fiction that once touched by the Dark, a person is not redeemable. (I am reminded of the oath required of all US Civil Servants: "I am not now nor have I ever been a member of the Communist Party.")
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you so much for reading and for the feedback! Yes, it's a turning point; a certain Slytherin Head Boy let it slip out about the nature of their detention (in next chapter), to the convenience of the Dark Lord & Rodolphus/company. For Rodolphus, having possessed Nagini sexually represents several things to him (more later on that), but mostly a warped game between him and Lucius of sorts. Dumbledore will have an overall reason for wishing to keep her away from the Malfoys and their support of the Dark Lord and accompanying agendas; he'll attempt to protect as long as its needed for his purposes as well.Hmmm... the matter of redeemablility... will be explored. Love the quote! Immediately thought of it applying to Dumbledore somehow first--lol!Thank you again, truly appreciate your commentary and insight!
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you so much for reading and for the feedback! Yes, it's a turning point; a certain Slytherin Head Boy let it slip out about the nature of their detention (in next chapter), to the convenience of the Dark Lord & Rodolphus/company. For Rodolphus, having possessed Nagini sexually represents several things to him (more later on that), but mostly a warped game between him and Lucius of sorts. Dumbledore will have an overall reason for wishing to keep her away from the Malfoys and their support of the Dark Lord and accompanying agendas; he'll attempt to protect as long as its needed for his purposes as well.Hmmm... the matter of redeemablility... will be explored. Love the quote! Immediately thought of it applying to Dumbledore somehow first--lol!Thank you again, truly appreciate your commentary and insight!
McNair, Nott, Goyle, and Regulus are acting like adolesents, which they are. Narcissa and Bellatrix are coquetes, each in her own way. Lucius is acting mature, partly because he has been trained to do so and partly because in is in the throes of romance, which everyone knows and accepts. Nagini is flustered. Severus is acting mature, but no one takes exception to this, which is odd because adults do not take kindly to an adolescent not acting his age.Severus wants to oomfort Nagini, but he only plans to ease her hurt after Abraxas has finished with her. He does not plan to protect her by confronting or eliminating Abraxas. Similarly, Lucius wants Narcissa to acknowledge the Dark Lord. Power and the social order are dominant. Are the men correct? Would they be able to neither have nor help Nagini and Narcissa if they did not first secure their place in the social order?
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback--truly appreciate it! Yes, in the world of this story, power and social order are dominant; without securing one's place in the present social order, Severus' power, his lacking social order power, at this point in his life, leaves him helpless to act effectively--how his impulses or wishes would otherwise act... thus, perhaps, motivating him to attain social power at any cost (blindly, being still a youth) in order to be more effective, and have the so-called freedom to take matters into his own hands...At this point, the futility of confronting or attempting to eliminate Abraxas would not be wise... It's one thing to see the signs of domestic abuse and another to act upon it immediately on the behalf of someone he has just become acquainted with in the rigid perimeters of his world. Lucius is his father's son... and all the cliches that go with 'the apple not falling far from the tree', etc. Again, thank you!
Response from MHaydn (Reviewer)
You are correct. The review was too focused on the similarities of Nagina and Narcissa, and it sounded too harsh. Even in more normal circumstances, a well-intentioned intervention can cause more harm than good.
The chapter presents the Malfoys as cold, calculating, and treacherous, but they are not caricatures. Their motivation is power: personal, family, class. Abraxas is one who is too extreme or too inflexible - in some ways a tragic figure. Nagini's mother suggests he is goaded by fear. Perhaps his behavior can be explained by the absence of the Midas stone, which would bring part of the story full circle. Lucius suggests using a display of understanding out of a mix of compassion and strategy. He is so eager to please his father, however, that he presses Nagini too hard and she becomes suspicious and demands a trade of information instead of freely giving it - a price for his mistake.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
More will come out a bit later about Abraxas and the crux of the matter, way back when, between him, his sister and Riddle. And yes, power is meant to be their driving force; I still wanted Lucius to be 'in process' of becoming 'a slippery' agent, not yet as polished as the adult canon, yet, but he learns/he'll learn quickly from his mistakes... Thank you for continuing to read this and the insightful feedback, affirming what is coming across--truly appreciate it!
This chapter brings out the cruelty of the young who are still finding their way and the friendship-rivalry between Severus and Regulus And, of course, the ambivalent feelings of Severus, Regulus, Lucius, and Nagini. This is contrasted with the attitude of Abraxas who could have had a powerful ally in Nagini if he had been more flexible. Perhaps ambivalence isn't all bad. It was quite a bit to pack into one chapter.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you for continuing to read and the feedback! Yes, I wanted to touch upon the seeds of cruelty manifested in earlier forms in them, and try to convey the different kinds of ambivalence they are each feeling at this time in their lives, now being forced to respond to people/things they haven't before. Abraxas is quite rigid and decisive, hardened by the past and resolute on how he wants/demands his world to be for the future. Thank you again!
An impressive chapter. Good portraits done in a subtle manner - both characters and relationships. Nagini still immature and impulsive.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you for the read and the feedback! I was trying to set up the Slytherins and their very 'mature', polished and ordered world that Nagini has been plunged into versus her disordered, unpolished and impulsive nature and background... Thank you again for the specific feedback, truly appreciate it!
Continued, unrelenting portrait of the Malfoys.
There is some inner core of Nagini that that affects even Abraxas.
Not certain about Hagrid's comment on Nagini just being let out since I though she had already spent the autumn at school.
The Malfoys gaining their wealth by a special, magical device fits canon where special, magical devices are important. It also portrays the Malfoys to not be strategic planners since an ancient house of long-lived individuals could gradually accumulate enormous wealth.
There could be more discussion of the accusations against Nagini since it might have been self defense, but self defense not tempered by the self control that the Malfoys appear to lack.
(Still not my type of story, but I can rate it on the basis of imagination and unfolding narrative.)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you so much for reading and the specific feedback! You've given me a lot to think about, and how I can clean up or connect more of the narrative logically in Hagrid's comments and other parts; some points I had purposefully left convoluted--lol!--such as more about Nagini's defense, etc., but other points are just sloppy narrative. More clarity will come in the next few chapters about her schooling, about her being in Durmstrang in the autumn-- sorry that the scarceness of this narrative has been left out here, but it'll be detailed in a later chapter... Thank you again for your precious time and patience, and generous rating--it's wonderful to get constructive feedback about such a roughly constructed storyline--I deeply appreciate your input!
Severus does not believe that living well is the best revenge, but for some reason, when confronted with retribution against Nagini for her past wrongs (according to the Malfoys), he is uncomfortable. Perhaps he likes revenge in the abstract, but the reality of it repels him. This is canon Severus where he offers insults and injustice, but protects the students from any real danger. Neither Severus or Regulus approve of the Malfoys. Good portrayal of Malfoy arrogance.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Yes, I wanted to capture some level of insecurity and confusion in Severus at this earlier point in his life... before he becomes the full, specific resolved character we experience in adult canon... I felt the need of retribution is playing an influence in him on some levels, abstractly, and the notion of revenge is what has been and will be an influence on him, but yes, the reality is always something different... Severus' duality on so-many levels is something I wanted to explore... I was always profoundly struck by the inherent ethical choices within Severus and Regulus that differed (revealed finally in DH) from the others in Voldemort's followers, etc. Thank you again for your generous feedback.
The narrative begins in-the-middle with a dramatic scene and proceeds to offer some explanation of current events and to suggest underlying motives. (This is not my type of story, but I must rate it as a literary effort.)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Oh goodness,
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, thank you for your kindness of giving this a read and leaving feedback! I truly appreciate it. However, as if you can't already tell--lol!-- this was my very first, ever, fledgling attempt at writing fanfiction--I had just discovered the wild wayward goings-on and wonderful Potter verse and fandom universe, and it was started and written at an unusually strange time of my life, etc., etc. (further excuses elaborating on exploratory pulp fiction thingys, etc.) It took a very long time to discover one-shots and drabbles in this universe, which I so much enjoy now. So please, especially knowing that it is not your type of story, and it will only get worse in this and other aspects, please don't feel the need to read on--of course, I'm gobsmacked to have a writer of your calibre read and make time to constructively leave feedback, but it may be too painful an experience for you--and I'd much rather your energy go to your own writing and more posting as soon as possible!Again, regardless, thank you for your kindness & consideration with this newbie's noodling(s).
So instead of a lovely outing to Hogsmeade, it's detention with the Gryffindorks for Sev and Nagini? Those Slytherins are a tough bunch to be around, especially when the crazy one is among them. You have Bellatrix spot on- just the right amount of madness combined with malevolence, and her dialogue is perfect - "Miss hoity-toity Malfoy" made me laugh out loud. Poor Nagini just can't find her place -not quite a Ravenclaw and uneasy amongst the Slytherins (well most of them ;)) Looking forward to reading how detention works out.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Gryffindorks? ROFL--Brilliant! May I use it? So happy that the mad one is coming across as intended and tickled that the words I'm forcing her to say work for you--only Bella can get away with some of this stuff--lol! Yes, I think Nag and Sev need a House of their own, preferably far, far away from it all, although an evening at the ol' Hog's Head would have been a nice outing, even temporarily--damn Gryffindorks Thank you so much for continuing to read this and your incredible support... It helps me push on and try to finish this--to get to the crux of it all and then the denouement--your generous feedback is so very much appreciated, dearest
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
! Can't wait for your latest SS/HG--still squeeing!xx
Response from hexgirl (Reviewer)
Of course you can use it - I'd l;ike to claim it for my very own, but alas, I stole it from someone with wit :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Gryffindorks? ROFL--Brilliant! May I use it? So happy that the mad one is coming across as intended and tickled that the words I'm forcing her to say work for you--only Bella can get away with some of this stuff--lol! Yes, I think Nag and Sev need a House of their own, preferably far, far away from it all, although an evening at the ol' Hog's Head would have been a nice outing, even temporarily--damn Gryffindorks Thank you so much for continuing to read this and your incredible support... It helps me push on and try to finish this--to get to the crux of it all and then the denouement--your generous feedback is so very much appreciated, dearest
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
! Can't wait for your latest SS/HG--still squeeing!xx
Response from hexgirl (Reviewer)
Of course you can use it - I'd l;ike to claim it for my very own, but alas, I stole it from someone with wit :)
Great characterisation of the Marauders in this chapter, and I loved Snape's impudent request that Potter kneel down and kiss his toes. I'd happily kiss any body part he offered me... Ahem... You conveyed blistering, crackling tension between Snape and his enemies - well done! The scene in the Ravenclaw Tower stairwell provided a wonderful contrast, and Snape's "Brilliant..." declaration was a lovely intimate and adolescent moment which made me smile. No doubt that Nagini's universe has been forever changed by this encounter. Lovely work!
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you so much--so glad you liked Snape's impudent request and that the Marauder's scene came across as intended:-) About the 'Brilliant' reply moment - LOL! - just wanted a second of Severus being 'human' and like any other adolescent before things change further for them; Yup! Nagini's universe has definitely changed--thank you again for continuing to support my slow and sporadic Muse *hugs*
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Thank you so much--so glad you liked Snape's impudent request and that the Marauder's scene came across as intended:-) About the 'Brilliant' reply moment - LOL! - just wanted a second of Severus being 'human' and like any other adolescent before things change further for them; Yup! Nagini's universe has definitely changed--thank you again for continuing to support my slow and sporadic Muse *hugs*
Oh, I love this chapter. Nagini and Severus' seductive hidey-hole was such a tease Lol! I was ready to scream at those damn Marauders for interupting. But it only added to the tension and made their eventual getting together all the more sensual, and oh was it worth the wait.I loved it all... oh but his baritone voice healing her arm *swoon*- now that's an image I'll remember for a while. I will be waiting with baited breath for the next chapter.
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
I know it's on Wendy's top 25 things not-to-do list, but... again, what's a spurned Severus to do when sweet solace is offered in the nooks and crannies of Hogwarts? - LOL! I'm so glad you liked it--had to put in his voice:-) and wanted the image of another kind of intimacy between them, with the healing of her arm by him, before it progressed to something else Hexgirl, thank you so much for your continued support for my slow and sporadic Muse *hugs*
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
I know it's on Wendy's top 25 things not-to-do list, but... again, what's a spurned Severus to do when sweet solace is offered in the nooks and crannies of Hogwarts? - LOL! I'm so glad you liked it--had to put in his voice:-) and wanted the image of another kind of intimacy between them, with the healing of her arm by him, before it progressed to something else Hexgirl, thank you so much for your continued support for my slow and sporadic Muse *hugs*
More sweet solace please. Pretty please with a cherry on top!That was so sensual. I love the way you took us into Snape's mind and made us privy to all that he was aware of: Nagini's physical response to him, her embarasment and obvious feelings of attraction. I've said it before and I'll say it again, 'What is a spurned wizard to do?'And about that spurning: Ms Evans is more than a little insensitive here, yet I truly believe that canon Lily did not think him capable of love or devotion... well HE showed HER. Pity it was too late.The scene with Snape and Lily sems like a very likely encounter; it could almost be a missing scene. Of course Snape, being Snape focuses his hatred onto James not Lily as if SHE has been Imperiused by the big bad toe-rag. And trust the Marauders to be the instigators of snoggus interutptus. GET EM, SEV!!
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Dearest
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, thank you so much for the lovely, provoking feedback-- I agree with you regarding canon Lily; she had her perceptions and needs and chose Potter to fulfil them, leaving Severus to his fate; both quite flawed characters and so very human:-) I just wanted to touch on another rejection scenario; however, my pov is that Sev always picked himself up, he'd learned early on to be his own man regardless of pain and rejection, a man of steel will and determination rather than an utter basket case, however, again, very human with needs and baggage of his own and yes, *deeply sentimental* underneath the layered facade;-)I could go on and on about what Lily meant and represented to Sev, like the rest of fandom - haha! - but JKR did it best, of course,--poor Snape... no mercy for him... but thankfully we are allowed to play and write fandom about him!So, 'what is a spurned wizard to do?''snoggus interutptus' - ROFL! Yea, Sev, GET EM!!! I realise I'm doing all of the 'don't dos' (I think it was on Wendy's no-no list, but I'm having too much fun, couldn't resist having my OC snog Sev in Hogwarts corridors: thanks for forgiving me!xxx)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Dearest
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, thank you so much for the lovely, provoking feedback-- I agree with you regarding canon Lily; she had her perceptions and needs and chose Potter to fulfil them, leaving Severus to his fate; both quite flawed characters and so very human:-) I just wanted to touch on another rejection scenario; however, my pov is that Sev always picked himself up, he'd learned early on to be his own man regardless of pain and rejection, a man of steel will and determination rather than an utter basket case, however, again, very human with needs and baggage of his own and yes, *deeply sentimental* underneath the layered facade;-)I could go on and on about what Lily meant and represented to Sev, like the rest of fandom - haha! - but JKR did it best, of course,--poor Snape... no mercy for him... but thankfully we are allowed to play and write fandom about him!So, 'what is a spurned wizard to do?''snoggus interutptus' - ROFL! Yea, Sev, GET EM!!! I realise I'm doing all of the 'don't dos' (I think it was on Wendy's no-no list, but I'm having too much fun, couldn't resist having my OC snog Sev in Hogwarts corridors: thanks for forgiving me!xxx)
*click* *Click* *CLICK* What? No more? *taps fingers* Pot, meet kettle. :P
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
'Pot, meet kettle.'--Hey, sweetie, I tagged you first - lol! Seriously, I'm in the middle of my dental problems/saga in RL, but will try to get the next chapter shaped up enough for a beta soon-- thank you so much for the clicks and finger tapping-- the best nudging there is!
Response from sunny33 (Reviewer)
OK, mine's done, just needs a final tweak and the beta. And yours...?
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
um... in a jumbled process of being-- the tweak and beta is the light at the end of the tunnel, far, far away-ish... *hiding and distracted by Xenophilius*--will get back to Sev asap... thanks for the double-whammy nudge xxx
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
'Pot, meet kettle.'--Hey, sweetie, I tagged you first - lol! Seriously, I'm in the middle of my dental problems/saga in RL, but will try to get the next chapter shaped up enough for a beta soon-- thank you so much for the clicks and finger tapping-- the best nudging there is!
Response from sunny33 (Reviewer)
OK, mine's done, just needs a final tweak and the beta. And yours...?
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
um... in a jumbled process of being-- the tweak and beta is the light at the end of the tunnel, far, far away-ish... *hiding and distracted by Xenophilius*--will get back to Sev asap... thanks for the double-whammy nudge xxx
I hope Sev really can cope with whatever Bella has up her sleeve. :0
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Me too!:O Bella never does anything without ulterior motives, and Severus may have experienced a lot of things, but this might be more than he could possibly imagine at this point in his life... Thank you so much for the read & feedback!:-)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Me too!:O Bella never does anything without ulterior motives, and Severus may have experienced a lot of things, but this might be more than he could possibly imagine at this point in his life... Thank you so much for the read & feedback!:-)
Sybill is flaky but hilarious. :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Gotta' give Sybill a little love, don't we? She just can't help herself sometimes it seems - lol! Thank you for reading and the feedback -- realy appreciate it! :-)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Gotta' give Sybill a little love, don't we? She just can't help herself sometimes it seems - lol! Thank you for reading and the feedback -- realy appreciate it! :-)
Marcus is pretty creepy, but in his own way may serve to protect Nagini. :)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Yeah, the pompous prat might be good for something... hmmm... Thank you so much for the read and the feedback, sunny! Really appreciate it!
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Yeah, the pompous prat might be good for something... hmmm... Thank you so much for the read and the feedback, sunny! Really appreciate it!
Lovely to see an update on this story The scene between Severus and Lily in the library was beautifully choreographed and utterly heartbreaking. I can just imagine such a conversation taking place as a result of his bereavement, but of course Lily managed to pour salt in the wound and give it a rub for good measure. Poor Severus, so blind to the consequences of his decisions and unable to comprehend the error of his ways.I also enjoyed the moments outside the hospital wing with Nagini, despite the rude interruption. Looking forward to finding out who throws the first hex!
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, thank you for reading and the lovely, detailed feedback--really appreciate it! As time goes on, it just seems to me that, regardless, Lily would've kept to her decisions of rejecting him, and yet, Severus would've also kept his projected wish of Lily, how he wished/wishes her to be, and the excuses he'd make for her behaviour/rejection in his mind, regardless of how she treated him or what she told him... same old story, so sad... They were rudely interrupted, weren't they? Something will have to be done about that! Yes, I also am looking forward to the first hexes beng thrown-hehe! Thank you so much, again!
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Oh,
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, thank you for reading and the lovely, detailed feedback--really appreciate it! As time goes on, it just seems to me that, regardless, Lily would've kept to her decisions of rejecting him, and yet, Severus would've also kept his projected wish of Lily, how he wished/wishes her to be, and the excuses he'd make for her behaviour/rejection in his mind, regardless of how she treated him or what she told him... same old story, so sad... They were rudely interrupted, weren't they? Something will have to be done about that! Yes, I also am looking forward to the first hexes beng thrown-hehe! Thank you so much, again!
OOOh! nag! VERY hot chapter. Absolutely brilliantly written, full of evocative imagery. Snapes, disappointment and bitterness over Lily and his carnal lust and inability to resist Bella was tangible. I loved this line:"But, like a sinister dream of dark yearning, Bellatrix stood before him." WOW!Then the close with the description of Nagini's sexual fantasies was equally well done because of the contrast between the darkness of Snape and Bella's act and the almost innocence of Nagini's because it was the realisation of genuine feelings of affection towards our hero. Wonderful chapter my dear!
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Hexgirl, thank you so much for the lovely, specific feedback - truly appreciate it! Sorry Sev's Slytherin, human side was depicted - he just wasn't in the mood to back down from the wench - and definitely man enough to take her on - LOL! Thank you for the feedback regarding Nagini's sexual awakenings mixed with her awakening feelings for Sev - had to start somewhere - lol! Again, thank you for your support on all levels! xxx
I hope it won't be detrimental to Nagini that she's been put in Ravenclaw instead of Slytherin
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
Response from nagandsev (Author of A Nagini and Severus Tale)
, thank you so much for the read and review! Really appreciate the feedback! The Slytherin family members will definitely be irked by this, as well as a few of their cohorts, but there's one Slytherin that's discreetly 'got her back' ;-) Thanks, again!