I love the fact that you have gone back to the basics on this one.  It was getting a little dark for both Severus and Hermione.  I like the lighter mood and I can't wait to see how Hermione plans on keeping Snape in a cold shower!

I like both directions you have taken with this story.  I kind of liked the forgetful Hermione because you could have done a take on 50 first dates, but this is much less dark.

I read the chapter on AFF and wanted to write a review, but not there... so I waited. Here it is!

Mistake... You wrote: '... It wasn’t like should could Rennervate herself and come after him.' You left the word "she" out of the line.

Question - Just out of curiousity, in reference to the reason for the rewrite, if forced sex while under the influence of a potion that was slipped to her without her knowledge is a no-no, then why is he aloud to just kiss her while she's in a body bind? That too is taking advantage. Were she not incapacitated, she definitely wouldn't have allowed it at this point without causing some damage to him. Why did he kiss her? Seems a bit out of character at the moment. There's no relationship between them yet. No more rewrites, I'm just curious. 

  Best wishes on your surgery. Hope you will be up and about and feeling better soon. 

I'm still undecided about what I think of the new direction for your story. However, I do think that it's fairly well-written, and I'm curious about how it's going to work out.

*hugs* Good luck with your surgery on Friday. Hope everything goes well and you heal quick. As for the rewrite of your story, I applaud you. It must have been difficult to take constructive criticism so gracefully and turn around and rewrite your fic. Many authors would have been offended and not continued on. I had enjoyed the first version but felt a little queasy during the last few chapters and found myself just skimming through. I do like this version much better, though I hope Hermione stops beating on him soon. Again I applaud you for the rewrite and I thank you for entertaining me.

I read and revied this on AFF still love it! Hope you are feeling well!

This might be interesting, I have nothing against this development. I am, however, sorry not to see how you planned to get out of the very complicated situation which you created before. Both versions have Snape breaking laws and he could be made to suffer for it. Keeping both of them might be the best, either as alternative universes or dreaming (story writing) or whatever. I do enjoy Hermione conscious and in possession of all her memories, though. I will read on for sure.

Ah, this plot is much more of a romantic comedy. The last plot had me thinking that Hermione should really never forgive Snape for doing that to her. This is much more believable and I’m really enjoying it. Your writing is a joy to read and the premise of this story is a great idea. Thank you for rewriting instead of just abandoning it. As for the punch...if you take away a witch’s wand, what do you expect she’ll do?

I for one enjoy the plotline, go for sweetie. I hope Ms Granger get her revenge, and a little more to boot.

hey this is really kool... i love the new track of the stroy.... but please don't elave out the harry n ginny portions from this version.. those were really good

Thank you for sharing both the revised story and the thinking that went into the change of direction. I love the premise of Author! Hermione landing in hot water with Snape. But ultimately the original scenario left me uncomfortable and I wasn't sure what to say, especially afterwards when Hermione's memory was impaired. I actually thought that aspect of the plot was intriguing -- the idea of Hermione struggling against memory loss and trying to solve a mystery. But overall it did seem as if the story was in a troubling bind. So I really admire your decision to rebuild the story in a new direction. This version definitely works more as comedy,because Snape's scheme, while a really dirty trick, doesn't fundamentally mess with Hermione's ability to think and reason for herself. Hope this review didn't go on too long. Oh, I see it has. Sorry... Anyway, I like the new version.

I liked the other version, however, I find that this version is even better.  Love the story and cannot wait to see what happens.

"Rouge Death Eaters" means that they are cherry red."Rogue Death Eaters" however, would be ones still on the loose."Adjourn" means the Wizengamot goes home. "Convene" means they get together to work.Can't wait for the next installment!

I think you were right in changing the direction of the story. There is nothing humorous in drugging someone nor romance in date rape. I enjoyed seeing Hermione use physical force - sometime men just need a good punch in the nose!

She broke his node! His beautiful, glorious node. Ow, dat hur's! I hope by the next chapter or two that Granger stops smacking, shoving, biting, kneeing and flat out slugging poor Severus! He'll be too bruised and broken to enjoy his 'revenge'!

That punch certainly came out of nowhere, but Draco would have told Snape to watch out for that- when properly provoked Hermione does resort to physical violence

I like how one minute Snape is feeling smug and the next he's not too sure what to make of things. 

I think it's very exciting, but Severus needs to extract a bit of revenge for his broken nose.  Hermione after all did hit first. Perhaps an intense tickeling session?

Bravo! I like it so much better now!

Of course, the question is, when's the rest coming???

 Write On!

I really applaud you for having the bravery and patience to actually rewrite the story. Also applause to Cocoachristy for gently prodding you to change course. Now it'll be more realistic and easier to believe that Hermione will still end up with Snape in the end.

Do take care of your hands, they're precious.  Besides, your audience will still be holding their collective breath for each update of this intriguingly unrepentant ... sort of ... Severus Snape.

I've tried to get rid of my first AND second born that way for years now. Times being what they are, probably can't even lose them to marriage....This is another fine mess you've gotten yourself into, Dear Author. I eagerly await the revelation of your Houdini-like escape.

wonderful chapter

what's harry secret mission?  will hermione do a sequel to his story??

waiting for more. 

Hi! I love what you've written and I can't wait to read more!

Well I want to say that I appreciate you working through the pain and continuing to update the story.  It is really good.  I look forward to the next update whenever it maybe.  No rush.  :)

I noticed one error in your story that I thought you should be aware of.  When Hermione is writing the Harry/Ginny novel she calls Harry's character James, then at the end of your story it is changed to Henry.  Not a big deal, and it certainly doesn't take away from the plot, which by the way is great.  Can't wait to read the next chapter, which is already up.