Chapter 6
Chapter 7 of 13
Clara MinutesA little more Occlumency followed by a meeting.
Reviewed"How's the Mudblood?" The drawling voice of Draco Malfoy floated up the stairs to Hermione's sleep-addled ears.
"Draco, I have asked you not to call her that. You don't have to put on a show for the Dark Lord, and you hardly have to call her that for my benefit," Snape replied in a reproving voice.
"Fine, but you didn't answer my question. How is she? She ready for some fun?"
Hermione had started to make her way out of the room, but stopped dead. She'd completely forgotten about the 'fun and games' aspect of her imprisonment.
"Why does it concern you? She'll survive. Since you need her to survive, you should be happy."
Hermione quickly made her way down the stairs, feigning ignorance to their conversation.
"Miss Granger." Snape nodded in greeting.
"Professor."
Draco simply watched her enter the room.
"Good morning, Malfoy."
"Granger."
"Tea is in the kettle. We have much to discuss this morning," Snape said.
"About what?"
"The rest of your duties."
Hermione felt the blood drain from her face. "What will I have to do?"
"That all depends, Miss Granger. What makes your more uncomfortable torture or rape?"
How he could speak like they were nothing was completely beyond her comprehension. "Er, I don't think I can honestly answer that."
"Well, you'll have to pick one before tonight. Whatever the Dark Lord sees will bring you the most discomfort will be your task."
Quickly she said, "Then I will project torture. I think rape would bother me more... Well, I know it would. But torture I can live with. I can hold myself up pretty well," she rambled.
"That's enough. We will practice projecting when you have finished."
"I think I'm finished. I've lost my appetite...."
He looked at her before replying, "Very well. This will be different than our normal session. I will still be trying to break through your barriers while you project what it is you want me to see, but you will have other distractions." Snape looked over at Malfoy.
Hermione really didn't like the look in the younger Malfoy's eyes.
"It's payback time, Granger."
She looked to Snape for help, but he simply shrugged.
Standing up, she started to walk to her normal chair for her Occlumency training. It was times like these that she started to regret agreeing to this.
"Not today. This will be as real as possible. You will kneel or stand before me because that is how you will be in front of the Dark Lord."
Hermione refused to kneel. Unless she was forced, she would never show deference to that snake!
"Legilimens."
Snape never gave her warning anymore. As soon as she felt his presence, she shoved all thoughts out of her conscious mind. Her field of flowers was second nature to her now. The hard part was allowing only certain memories and feelings to pass through her barrier. If she could just turn her mind into a blank slate, this whole mess would be easier.
"Draco."
At the word from Snape, Hermione felt a sharp pain in her left foot. She felt her field start to falter as pain invaded her calm façade. Trying to ignore her foot, she focused on letting everything go. Another sharp pain struck her right shoulder. She could feel blood starting to run down her arm.
"Hands."
This time there was no pain. Malfoy had walked up behind her and laid his hands on her shoulders. The sudden contact almost shattered her concentration. Getting used to the sensation, the flowers stayed strongly in their place. She was completely unprepared for what he did next. Malfoy started making small circles with his hands, almost like he was going to massage her back. The touches became more fleeting the more time that elapsed. When he reached the nape of her neck, Hermione's concentration finally broke.
Snape pulled away as soon as she faltered.
"Draco, that's enough."
The caresses were gone in an instant. Hermione felt strange at the sudden loss of contact.
"You were doing passably. You need to always show memories through your shield. When you faltered, the memories ceased. That small mistake could cost you your life tonight," Snape warned, toying with the wand in his hand.
"Yes, sir."
"Let's go again. Draco, this time, don't wait."
"My Lord, she and I are here to do your bidding," Snape said while kneeling before Voldemort.
"Very good, Severus."
Snape got up and walked to his spot in the circle that had formed around Hermione. She was kneeling in front of Voldemort with her head held high. Her body hurt, and her mind felt raw from the training earlier, but there was no way she would allow Voldemort to know anything.
"My faithful, you will have a chance to play tonight. But first, my pet," the name sounded like a curse from his mouth, "what information do you have for me?"
"I have no information of worth to you," she spat.
A small and dangerous smile appeared on Voldemort's lips. "We shall see."
That was all the warning Hermione received before Voldemort was tearing into her mind. Severus had been brutal, but nothing compared to this. She fought to keep her memories private. Only revealing what she thought would appease him. The pain tore at her mind. Knowing that she could die was the only thought keeping her from giving in and letting Voldemort have free reign.
She saw a memory of her and Harry in the common room. Next was the first task of the Triwizard Tournament. She let some of her fear for Harry show through. A memory of Snape stalking around his classroom came next. A feeling of hurt pride accompanied the memory. The following thought, a worry about being tortured. She showed Voldemort what she looked like after her training earlier today. There was blood on her clothes and bruises were forming along her face. Pure terror was the only emotion she allowed to show for these memories.
The pain was gone as abruptly as it started. She was left dizzy and swaying in the middle of the field.
"Ah, your Gryffindor courage seems to flounder when faced with suffering." An evil smile was on his face, making him look even uglier than normal.
"My faithful, take pride in torturing this Mudblood. Seek enjoyment, but do not kill her. She will still be useful to our cause." Voldemort stepped back and stood to watch his servants advance on her.
"Always a pleasure, you silly girl," drawled a voice from behind Hermione.
A small sense of panic invaded Hermione's thoughts, and a shudder ran through her body. She hadn't realized Lucius Malfoy was out of Azkaban.
As if sensing her thoughts, he said, "My Lord fetched me just for this."
A spell tore through her left bicep, leaving a gash. She swayed slightly but made no other indication she was affected.
"You'll wish you were dead once I'm done with you," he whispered in her ear as he circled back behind her.
Hermione heard a whip crack just as pain lashed through her back. She fell forward, trying to get away. Her arms collapsed under her weight; the strain of the day too much for them.
"Oh, no, my sweet. You will take this standing up."
Someone had grabbed her arm and yanked her upward. Looking at the person holding her arm, she was shocked to see Snape. His eyes gleamed for a moment, and she felt a welcomed pressure on her mind. A sense of calm filled her, and she snatched her arm away from his grasp to keep up appearances.
The whip slammed into her back again, tearing her robe. Lucius Malfoy chuckled and whispered a spell. Hermione was startled to feel the cool night air all over her body. Malfoy had removed her clothes. She started to cover herself, but Snape placed a hand on her arm and tightened his grip in warning.
"Well, Mudblood, show yourself. We've all been waiting for this." Lucius leered as he circled completely around her.
Hermione saw Malfoy flick his wand and the whip turned into a knife. "Too bad my son is such an utter failure. He would have enjoyed this immensely."
Malfoy threw the knife to a waiting Death Eater. He was tall and broad. 'Not as big as Crabbe and Goyle,' she thought.
"Hello, chit. Are you enjoying being our toy?" the man said, trailing the flat side of the knife along her ribs.
With a sudden movement, the knife cut a straight line across the lower part of her ribcage.
She clenched her teeth in pain but made no sound.
The man simply chuckled and said, "Oh, don't worry, I'll be sure to make you scream before this night is out."
Author's Notes: Thanks to my dearest beta readers, GinnyW and snarkyroxy. Any feedback and thoughts are welcomed.
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Latest 25 Reviews for Deception of the Night
47 Reviews | 7.45/10 Average
Loved It!! Wicked!! Amazing!! Fantastic!! Bloody Brilliant!!
awwww, good chapter lets hope Hermione's able to wrap her mind around the realities of the situation soon.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
She is making slow but steady progress, which is only to be expected after the horrors she went through. Thanks for reading and letting me know!
Awesome! Can't wait for the next chapter...I just hope that Hermione will be able to talk to Severus in the next chapter! I do hope so!
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thank you for reading and letting me know! I can guarantee that they'll talk, but things won't be very easy.
Ach! I've figured out the problem. [Yes, I'm a chronic complainer, but I write this with only the best of intentions.] It's a good story. I like the story. But it is my humble opinion that it lacks passion.
Not sexual passion, but intensity, fervor! It reads more like you are just tickling at the story rathering than shouting it out. Put some oomph in it! Crank up the emotions.
You can be passionate without all the gory details I wrote of in the last chapters review. These people need to express themselves more vividly.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
I appreciate your words. Occasionally a bit hard to swallow, but I do ask for any and all feedback! It helps me to know exactly what my readers are thinking. I do realize that my descriptions are a bit nonexistant, and I am working on that. If you've read any of my old stuff you'll notice that.
Again, thank you for your thoughts.
I understand where Hermione is coming from, and I know Snape is not really doing well with her not being able to deal with him, but I really like your Draco.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thank you so much! I've never really written Draco, but he seemed like a perfect 3rd party for this story.
Since you only wrote about what Severus did to Hermione, we don't know the extent of any other harm that may have been caused... but I have to feel sorry for her. Regardless of the fact that Severus didn't want to hurt her, he chose a permenant, extremely painful way to do what he didn't want.
I've recently seen the results of a hot metal burn on my sons hand and the scaring is deep and forever. Just what a pretty young woman wants to live with. My point is, I can't believe the memories will be that easily assuaged with visible deformities marring her hands and elsewhere to constantly remind her. And, I can understand why she wouldn't want to have Severus around regardless of how 'prepared' she was.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
I agree that what Severus chose was overkill for the fact that he didn't want to hurt her, but he also had to think about what the other 30+ people would think and say.
As for the physical scaring, there will be some, yes... but it is my belief that the wizarding world's potions are better at healing than the medicines we know. Keeping that in mind, I think that the scars will be better hidden.
Lovely tid-bits, but it just leaves one aching for more. I understand completely what Draco must be feeling because I am too (thanks to you) I just want to lock them in a room together. I know, I know, Hermione needs to go slow and think her way though all the emotional turmoil. I look forward to your next submission to see how far they can both come and how fast, because you know Voldemort won't wait for too long. Keep up the good work, JoAnne
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Isn't it infuriating? And they were moving along so nicely until Voldemort got in the way. Oh well, there will be progress, and not too far in the future.
Thank you very much for reading.
Wow!
His branding her did that block out the rest of her pain of the DE's play time?
Hopefully she will be able to forgive him of such acts. How is Draco taking all of this?
I can see why this would be a very hard chapter to write.
Waiting for more.
Thank you.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thanks for your thoughts. Having so much pain up front probably did block out most if not all of the pain.
As for Draco, he handles it in a slightly odd way, which you'll in the next chapter.
Thanks again!
Oh, I really hate reviewing.....I don't feel like we should have any affect on writers, positively or negatively. I'll just say I'm eager to see the rest of the story. It is very interesting and I look forward to your updates.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
I'm glad that you decided to review. I always love hearing that people are reading along. Thank you for letting me know....
I am not sure what to say. I have enjoyed your story and you are an exellent writer, but I am not sure I would like the turn I think this story is taking. I find the situation where Severus, no matter the need for continue spying, is taking a student and someone I think he is responsible for, into a situation where the outcome will be torture and rape. I also find it hard to belive that Hermione willingly, no matter how "necessary", will let her self be tortured and raped by several Death Eaters with no greater wish than to hurt, torture, humiliate and probably kill her. I think that when the next update is submitted, I will have to make a decission on weather or not I want to continue reading this story. I read fanfiction because I love the characters, I want to be entertained, and want the good guys winning at the end. No matter if your intention is to let the "good" side win at the end, the price migth be to high to pay. Rape is a serious situation with ramifications for the futuere way wider the actual time it happens. I can't find it belivable for Hermione to ever forgive Severus for letting this happen to her, even if she would know that he is more or less forced to do so, and I can't imagine Severus being able to forgive him self either (and I am nor sure he should be able to forgive him self). To be honest, for him to do this marks him as the coward he himself hate to be called in my eyes. Well, enough about me ranting, your story still deserves it's five stars, and if I don't like the next turn of the story I will stop reading it without flaming you.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
I'm sorry it's taken me so long to respond to this.... I agree with all the points you've made, and I value your opinion. All I can say is that my intentions are good. I know the road I take is not often an easy one, but in the end, "good" will prevail. I hope to see you reviewing again, if not this story, then something else.
I am at the edge of my seat with this story! I just can't help wondering what's next! Amazing as always!
A.M.B.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thank you for reading and reviewing! I will update soon...
Very intense story. Should Hermione Sleep with Severus or Draco first? It might cause less damage. Update soon!
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thanks for reading and letting me know. I'll say that things will be bad, but the events are pretty set.
Sorry but the entire story doesn't work. You have not shown a convincing reason for her to place herself in this position. Would be better to have kidnapped her to begin and have them save her. Your writting is excellant by the way. It kept me reading. Voldemort is coming across as a bit lame, I think he would revel in excess torture, you could also say Harry is more concerned with the thought the torture is ongoing and finds himself unable to concentrate while she is missing. That or in his arragance- Voldemort hopes to sway her loyalties. Anyway I would scrap or rewrite it cause it could be very good.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
I appreciate that you've taken the time to let me know what you think. I value any sort of feedback and do welcome it all. I am sorry to heard that you think this story doesn't work. Having her kidnapped outright would cause an uproar and negate everything that Severus and Draco are trying to accomplish. They need her willing so that she can give information. She is in peril, but trusts that she won't be taken complete advantage of.
wow. This is great I love the way this story is going... I'm a little aprehensive about the next meeting though!Don't wait too long to update please!
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thank you very much for letting me know what you think! The next update won't be nearly so far away, I promise.
Hello,
Happy for the update. It seems Severus will have to do some breaking in with her. Is that what the looks are about? He feels sad it will have to come to that? Or has the Dark Lord told him in advance that they will give a performance for all to see and she must maintain her innocence?
Or do I need to read this over again to recall what is what?
Well I have to get shower fresh off to a meeting tonight. Oh joy. Would rather stay at home and read your story.
Have a great week.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Severus is in a pretty harsh situation. He knows how Voldemort works, and that scares him. It would scare anyone.
Thank you for reading! I always love hearing from you... :)
I'm dreading Hermione's next meeting. I don't think I'll have the stomach if/when that scene comes to pass. I still can't wait for the next chapter though.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
I promise that none of my chapters are horribly graphic. I do thank you for taking the time to read and review. It means a lot to use poor authors! :D
A good story. I don't really like the fact that Hermione was tortured so badly. Great plot and characters!
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thank you. It was hard to write, so I'm sure it was even worse to read about Hermione's torture. Unfortunately, I think that is a very feasible course of events for the situation that she's facing.
Again, thanks for letting me know what you think.
Execellent fic!
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thanks! Glad you're enjoying it.
how many chapters left? *scared look* i want it to keep going on and on and on and yea. :)
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
There are a total of 19 chapters and an epilogue. Don't worry, there is still plenty of story left to go.
Response from togspled (Reviewer)
YAY!
An interesting story and you write well. However, I have some trouble understanding why Hermione would agree to put herself in this situation in the first place...
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Hermione knows what is required of members of the Order. So, the fact that Draco is there means that there must be some good in him. That's what helps her make the decision to help him. Hermione kind of goes out of the way to believe that there is good in people. That's the aspect of her character I was using.
Intriguing. I can't wait to see who the guy is. My gut says that it's Malfoy, a secret Order member, and he was party Disillusioned... or something. LOL Maybe it's Snape on Polyjuice? Teehee... Mah mind is wandering!
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thank you. I'm glad that people are taking guesses. It's a lot of fun that way.
Since you say the story is already written, I guess there isn't any point in begging for a happy ending (meaning Severus and Hermione, alive, happy, and together), is it? Oh well, I like it so far and will hope for the best! Thanks for your work.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
I'm not that cruel. There will be some rough spots, but this story does have a happy ending. :)
I see you've twisted canon a bit in your story, because I don't think Harry would ever tell anyone else than Ron and Hermione about the Horcruxes. Now I wonder what that unexpected place Hermione will find herself might be.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
I don't know if I'm necessarily twisting canon. Sooner or later, the Trio is going to get to a point where they just can't do it on their own. Though, I'm glad to see that you're back along for the ride. :)
I like the start and find it interesting that the trio will be at the Dursleys together. I wonder if they'll give Dudley a taste of magic... Muahahaha
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thank you. They don't use magic, but Hermione gets to bossy them around a bit. ;)
Great beginning! I loved the sassy Hermione..
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thanks so much for the review. The first chapter will be out next week.