Chapter 4
Chapter 5 of 13
Clara MinutesHermione is kidnapped.
ReviewedHermione was seated in the kitchen when the boys arrived. She had already turned a spoon into a back-up Portkey. This was her safety precaution in case Malfoy and Snape really did mean to harm her.
"Good morning," she said as the boys sat down on either side of her. Their "plan" was to cast Disillusionment Charms on themselves and Portkey to Wiltshire. They had found a map in the attic that showed where Malfoy Manor was located. With that information, she could cast the Portus Charm and get them close to their destination.
In the entrance hall, Hermione felt as if they were being watched. Looking over her shoulder, she thought she saw someone duck behind a doorway. Harry and Ron turned to see what she was looking at.
"I thought I saw something," she whispered to them. She was fairly sure it was Malfoy, but for the boys' sake, she pretended to know nothing.
Harry nodded and tiptoed toward the door. He held up his hand, indicating for the others to stay put. Ron and Hermione moved their wands to a ready position and waited for a signal.
Harry spun toward the door very quickly, wand aimed to cast a spell. Hermione saw him take a step into the room. After a moment, he turned back to them and shrugged.
"There's no one," he said, walking back to where they were.
"Thanks for checking, Harry. It must have been Crookshanks or something."
"Well, let's go before someone finds us."
Hermione pulled out a piece of parchment. She held it out to the others, who each grabbed onto a corner. With a mutter and a tap of her wand, the world dissolved around them.
They landed hard in a copse of trees. Ron stepped back and landed on her foot, causing her to cry out.
"Sorry, Hermione," he mumbled.
Hermione noticed that Harry was the only one who hadn't stumbled.
"How do we know which way to go?" Ron asked once he was steady.
"Point Me." Harry's wand spun until it faced north.
"We go that way," Hermione said, pointing in the same direction.
The trees were incredibly dense. They had to change their course a couple of times due to the thick undergrowth. Hermione kept asking Harry if they were still going in the right direction. Miraculously, every time she asked, they were still headed north.
There was a sense of anxiety that was getting more intense the closer they got to Malfoy Manor. She hoped that she hadn't got in over her head.
Twenty minutes after they started walking, the trio finally emerged into an open field. Off to the left, they could see a large manor.
"We're here," Harry said quietly.
"Let's rest in the trees before we go off to the manor," Hermione suggested, heading back into the trees.
"We don't want to be gone long, Hermione. The others will get suspicious and come after us before too long."
She ignored them and sat on a tree stump. Harry and Ron looked at each other, but thought it better to appease her.
"I just want to take five minutes to regroup. Who knows what will be waiting in and around the manor?" she tried to explain.
"Yeah, I guess it's a good idea."
Harry and Ron sat on a log a few feet behind Hermione. She heard a rustling off to her right. Turning quickly, she saw her "kidnapper" approaching her. Just as she was alerting the others, a spell hit her, and her world went black.
Hermione woke slowly. She could hear voices, but couldn't distinguish what was being said. Trying to sit up, and feeling a soft surface under her, she realized her wrists were bound to the headboard. Panic flooded her mind before she could control it. Her heart was racing and her breathing was shallow. 'Get a grip!' she thought fiercely.
The change in her heart rate must have alerted her captors, for she heard people coming into the room.
"Ah, she's awake," said a voice to her far right.
Turning her head to the side, she was startled to see Malfoy talking to Severus Snape. The professor looked a little worse for wear, but healthy, considering he was on the run.
"Well, hello, Miss Granger," Snape said, advancing slowly.
"Severus, why not call her what she really is? A filthy Mudblood," said the boy.
"Now, Draco, where are your manners?"
"Hmph." Malfoy folded his arms in response.
"You weren't so rude yesterday, Malfoy," Hermione said, glaring in his direction. Although, she was starting to doubt her decision to come here.
"You didn't know it was me, yesterday."
"Please, spare me," Snape said, moving closer to her. "You will learn to like each other, or at least tolerate each other. I will not tolerate constant bickering."
"I don't like anything about him." Hermione turned away and looked at the wall.
"Oh, but you should. We have more stake on your life than even you can fathom, Miss Granger."
"Where am I?" she asked, hoping to change the subject.
"Patience. We are at my residence. You are to be taken to the Dark Lord shortly."
"So soon?" She turned back to face the two men in the room. Her panic was threatening to take over.
"The Dark Lord wants to meet his new pet," Draco sneered, moving closer.
"Draco, be quiet." Snape turned to Hermione and said, "Though he is essentially correct, there is more to it than that. I am going to warn you, Miss Granger. The Dark Lord wants information just as much as he wants a toy for his Death Eaters. You have been placed in my care as a show of faith in me." Hermione noticed that his face clouded over with some unidentifiable emotion.
"Why does he," she glanced at Draco, "look different?" she asked after Snape finished talking. She figured that since he was giving information freely, she would take advantage of it.
"A permanent glamour. Even Mad-Eye Moody can't see through it."
"I thought I had gone mad when I could see you but no one else noticed you."
"Yes, I was afraid you would blow my cover. You certainly did stare last night," drawled Malfoy.
"How come no one else could see you?" Hermione asked, clearly confused.
"It's part of the glamour. I can only be seen by the people I want to see me. I'm wanted by the Dark Lord. I'm not going to be parading around like an idiot."
"Miss Granger, it is time. The Dark Lord wishes to meet his new pet."
*****
"Miss Hermione Granger, a pleasure to finally come face to face." Voldemort gave a sarcastic bow as she was led into the room.
She held her head high. She would not give him the satisfaction of knowing how scared she was.
"Tales of your intellect have been reaching my ears for some time. It will do us well to have you on our side."
Hermione scoffed. "I will never be on your side."
Voldemort smiled. The gesture was one of the most terrifying experiences of her life. His smile told of pure malice and horrors to come. Hermione shivered.
Snape, who had been holding her wrists behind her back, squeezed her hand. She didn't know if it was an act of reassurance or a signal for her to control herself. Either way, it didn't work.
She turned her head to look at Snape.
"Look at me, girl! I am the only person on this earth you need to concern yourself with," Voldemort hissed with great arrogance.
Snape gave her a small shove, and she landed sprawled on the floor by Voldemort's feet.
His cruel laugh filled the room. "This is exactly how I want you: crawling at my feet. You are only alive because I want you that way. Your purpose here is two-fold. My Death Eaters are growing restless; you will provide excellent sport for them. I also require information about Harry Potter. My faithful have been dismal at bringing me information." He was sneering rather nastily by the end of his little speech.
"I have no information of any value," Hermione said boldly.
"I beg to differ. You are one of the people closest to young Harry. I know what he and Dumbledore were doing last year. I want to know how far they've gotten. You are perfect for that."
Hermione slowly stood up. Since she received no reprimand, she rose to her full height. Lifting her head, she looked directly at Voldemort.
Instantly, he was inside her mind, rifling through her memories and thoughts. The pain was nothing like Hermione had ever felt. She thought she would faint from the sudden onslaught. Just as soon as it started, the pain stopped. Voldemort stood there with a smug expression on his face.
"My Lord, what have you seen?" Snape asked from behind her.
"Nothing of any consequence to you, Snape."
"Yes, my Lord. I beg your forgiveness," he said while dropping to one knee, his head bowed.
"Rise and take this silly girl out of my sight."
Author's Notes: Thanks to GinnyW and Snarkyroxy for their wonderful work as betas.
Reviews and words of wisdom are always welcomed and appreciated. Thanks for reading!
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Latest 25 Reviews for Deception of the Night
47 Reviews | 7.45/10 Average
Loved It!! Wicked!! Amazing!! Fantastic!! Bloody Brilliant!!
awwww, good chapter lets hope Hermione's able to wrap her mind around the realities of the situation soon.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
She is making slow but steady progress, which is only to be expected after the horrors she went through. Thanks for reading and letting me know!
Awesome! Can't wait for the next chapter...I just hope that Hermione will be able to talk to Severus in the next chapter! I do hope so!
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thank you for reading and letting me know! I can guarantee that they'll talk, but things won't be very easy.
Ach! I've figured out the problem. [Yes, I'm a chronic complainer, but I write this with only the best of intentions.] It's a good story. I like the story. But it is my humble opinion that it lacks passion.
Not sexual passion, but intensity, fervor! It reads more like you are just tickling at the story rathering than shouting it out. Put some oomph in it! Crank up the emotions.
You can be passionate without all the gory details I wrote of in the last chapters review. These people need to express themselves more vividly.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
I appreciate your words. Occasionally a bit hard to swallow, but I do ask for any and all feedback! It helps me to know exactly what my readers are thinking. I do realize that my descriptions are a bit nonexistant, and I am working on that. If you've read any of my old stuff you'll notice that.
Again, thank you for your thoughts.
I understand where Hermione is coming from, and I know Snape is not really doing well with her not being able to deal with him, but I really like your Draco.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thank you so much! I've never really written Draco, but he seemed like a perfect 3rd party for this story.
Since you only wrote about what Severus did to Hermione, we don't know the extent of any other harm that may have been caused... but I have to feel sorry for her. Regardless of the fact that Severus didn't want to hurt her, he chose a permenant, extremely painful way to do what he didn't want.
I've recently seen the results of a hot metal burn on my sons hand and the scaring is deep and forever. Just what a pretty young woman wants to live with. My point is, I can't believe the memories will be that easily assuaged with visible deformities marring her hands and elsewhere to constantly remind her. And, I can understand why she wouldn't want to have Severus around regardless of how 'prepared' she was.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
I agree that what Severus chose was overkill for the fact that he didn't want to hurt her, but he also had to think about what the other 30+ people would think and say.
As for the physical scaring, there will be some, yes... but it is my belief that the wizarding world's potions are better at healing than the medicines we know. Keeping that in mind, I think that the scars will be better hidden.
Lovely tid-bits, but it just leaves one aching for more. I understand completely what Draco must be feeling because I am too (thanks to you) I just want to lock them in a room together. I know, I know, Hermione needs to go slow and think her way though all the emotional turmoil. I look forward to your next submission to see how far they can both come and how fast, because you know Voldemort won't wait for too long. Keep up the good work, JoAnne
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Isn't it infuriating? And they were moving along so nicely until Voldemort got in the way. Oh well, there will be progress, and not too far in the future.
Thank you very much for reading.
Wow!
His branding her did that block out the rest of her pain of the DE's play time?
Hopefully she will be able to forgive him of such acts. How is Draco taking all of this?
I can see why this would be a very hard chapter to write.
Waiting for more.
Thank you.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thanks for your thoughts. Having so much pain up front probably did block out most if not all of the pain.
As for Draco, he handles it in a slightly odd way, which you'll in the next chapter.
Thanks again!
Oh, I really hate reviewing.....I don't feel like we should have any affect on writers, positively or negatively. I'll just say I'm eager to see the rest of the story. It is very interesting and I look forward to your updates.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
I'm glad that you decided to review. I always love hearing that people are reading along. Thank you for letting me know....
I am not sure what to say. I have enjoyed your story and you are an exellent writer, but I am not sure I would like the turn I think this story is taking. I find the situation where Severus, no matter the need for continue spying, is taking a student and someone I think he is responsible for, into a situation where the outcome will be torture and rape. I also find it hard to belive that Hermione willingly, no matter how "necessary", will let her self be tortured and raped by several Death Eaters with no greater wish than to hurt, torture, humiliate and probably kill her. I think that when the next update is submitted, I will have to make a decission on weather or not I want to continue reading this story. I read fanfiction because I love the characters, I want to be entertained, and want the good guys winning at the end. No matter if your intention is to let the "good" side win at the end, the price migth be to high to pay. Rape is a serious situation with ramifications for the futuere way wider the actual time it happens. I can't find it belivable for Hermione to ever forgive Severus for letting this happen to her, even if she would know that he is more or less forced to do so, and I can't imagine Severus being able to forgive him self either (and I am nor sure he should be able to forgive him self). To be honest, for him to do this marks him as the coward he himself hate to be called in my eyes. Well, enough about me ranting, your story still deserves it's five stars, and if I don't like the next turn of the story I will stop reading it without flaming you.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
I'm sorry it's taken me so long to respond to this.... I agree with all the points you've made, and I value your opinion. All I can say is that my intentions are good. I know the road I take is not often an easy one, but in the end, "good" will prevail. I hope to see you reviewing again, if not this story, then something else.
I am at the edge of my seat with this story! I just can't help wondering what's next! Amazing as always!
A.M.B.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thank you for reading and reviewing! I will update soon...
Very intense story. Should Hermione Sleep with Severus or Draco first? It might cause less damage. Update soon!
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thanks for reading and letting me know. I'll say that things will be bad, but the events are pretty set.
Sorry but the entire story doesn't work. You have not shown a convincing reason for her to place herself in this position. Would be better to have kidnapped her to begin and have them save her. Your writting is excellant by the way. It kept me reading. Voldemort is coming across as a bit lame, I think he would revel in excess torture, you could also say Harry is more concerned with the thought the torture is ongoing and finds himself unable to concentrate while she is missing. That or in his arragance- Voldemort hopes to sway her loyalties. Anyway I would scrap or rewrite it cause it could be very good.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
I appreciate that you've taken the time to let me know what you think. I value any sort of feedback and do welcome it all. I am sorry to heard that you think this story doesn't work. Having her kidnapped outright would cause an uproar and negate everything that Severus and Draco are trying to accomplish. They need her willing so that she can give information. She is in peril, but trusts that she won't be taken complete advantage of.
wow. This is great I love the way this story is going... I'm a little aprehensive about the next meeting though!Don't wait too long to update please!
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thank you very much for letting me know what you think! The next update won't be nearly so far away, I promise.
Hello,
Happy for the update. It seems Severus will have to do some breaking in with her. Is that what the looks are about? He feels sad it will have to come to that? Or has the Dark Lord told him in advance that they will give a performance for all to see and she must maintain her innocence?
Or do I need to read this over again to recall what is what?
Well I have to get shower fresh off to a meeting tonight. Oh joy. Would rather stay at home and read your story.
Have a great week.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Severus is in a pretty harsh situation. He knows how Voldemort works, and that scares him. It would scare anyone.
Thank you for reading! I always love hearing from you... :)
I'm dreading Hermione's next meeting. I don't think I'll have the stomach if/when that scene comes to pass. I still can't wait for the next chapter though.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
I promise that none of my chapters are horribly graphic. I do thank you for taking the time to read and review. It means a lot to use poor authors! :D
A good story. I don't really like the fact that Hermione was tortured so badly. Great plot and characters!
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thank you. It was hard to write, so I'm sure it was even worse to read about Hermione's torture. Unfortunately, I think that is a very feasible course of events for the situation that she's facing.
Again, thanks for letting me know what you think.
Execellent fic!
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thanks! Glad you're enjoying it.
how many chapters left? *scared look* i want it to keep going on and on and on and yea. :)
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
There are a total of 19 chapters and an epilogue. Don't worry, there is still plenty of story left to go.
Response from togspled (Reviewer)
YAY!
An interesting story and you write well. However, I have some trouble understanding why Hermione would agree to put herself in this situation in the first place...
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Hermione knows what is required of members of the Order. So, the fact that Draco is there means that there must be some good in him. That's what helps her make the decision to help him. Hermione kind of goes out of the way to believe that there is good in people. That's the aspect of her character I was using.
Intriguing. I can't wait to see who the guy is. My gut says that it's Malfoy, a secret Order member, and he was party Disillusioned... or something. LOL Maybe it's Snape on Polyjuice? Teehee... Mah mind is wandering!
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thank you. I'm glad that people are taking guesses. It's a lot of fun that way.
Since you say the story is already written, I guess there isn't any point in begging for a happy ending (meaning Severus and Hermione, alive, happy, and together), is it? Oh well, I like it so far and will hope for the best! Thanks for your work.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
I'm not that cruel. There will be some rough spots, but this story does have a happy ending. :)
I see you've twisted canon a bit in your story, because I don't think Harry would ever tell anyone else than Ron and Hermione about the Horcruxes. Now I wonder what that unexpected place Hermione will find herself might be.
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
I don't know if I'm necessarily twisting canon. Sooner or later, the Trio is going to get to a point where they just can't do it on their own. Though, I'm glad to see that you're back along for the ride. :)
I like the start and find it interesting that the trio will be at the Dursleys together. I wonder if they'll give Dudley a taste of magic... Muahahaha
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thank you. They don't use magic, but Hermione gets to bossy them around a bit. ;)
Great beginning! I loved the sassy Hermione..
Response from Clara Minutes (Author of Deception of the Night)
Thanks so much for the review. The first chapter will be out next week.