Yule Tides
Chapter 8 of 21
HogwartsHoneyDisclaimer: Jo owns them. Sad, really.
A/N: Thanks to Allison, my wonderful beta who reads even faster than I do! Anything recognisable comes from Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire!
~*~ Chapter 8 ~*~
Christmas morning dawned with little difference from most other days, save for the presents at the foot of every student's bed. Cedric could hear the howls of joy from his dorm-mates and wondered what Harry's reaction to his mystery gift would be. He was just able to shake the thought from his mind when Markus and Jamie landed on his bed simultaneously and proceeded to pummel him in a mock-fight. Cedric laughed and rolled out of bed as he threw them to the floor, engaging them both in a full-on mock battle.
Several minutes later, they all sat on the floor at the foot of their beds and opened their presents. Cedric's parents had been very generous this year, more so than usual. He admired the three new sweaters that his mother had sent, along with his father's elaborate promissory note from Gringotts, which would allow him to purchase anything he wanted up to the value of 50 Galleons.
'Certainly pays to be an only child doesn't it, Diggs,' Markus mused, as he examined his own gifts from Cedric. One was a deluxe potion-making kit that appeared to contain every ingredient needed for their sixth and seventh year spells. Markus' eyes widened at Cedric's extravagance, but then he laughed outrageously as he unwrapped the second, smaller present; a Screaming Yo-Yo. His eyes were alight with mischief, and Cedric was sure the yo-yo would be banned from the school almost immediately by Filch.
He smiled at Jamie's excited gasp as his friend opened his gift. Jamie had long been a fan of the Great Britain Lions Rugby team (a Muggle sport that Cedric didn't fully understand), and he had been chuffed when the team had an impressive winning streak against New Zealand and France the previous year. The team ultimately won the 1993 series against New Zealand, and Cedric had managed to procure both a World Series team pin and a red long-sleeved team jersey for his friend. Jamie's eyes reflected his awe at the collector's items as he ran his hand over the jersey's team crest, but the waves of happiness and satisfaction that emanated from Jamie told Cedric all he needed to know. His gift had been a resounding success.
'Cedric,' he began, 'I don't know what to say. It's wonderful.'
'Ah, yes, Bryers, it's simply wonderful,' Markus was quick to interject, 'but it's not THIS!'
They dived away from Markus as he slung the yo-yo into their midst and the shrieking began.
~*~
The rest of the day passed quickly, as everyone's attention turned to that night's Yule Ball. Quite by chance, Cedric had spied Harry out on the grounds, engaged in a snowball fight with the Weasleys, and he realized that he'd no more be able to speak with him today than any other day. Frustrated, he walked back to the Hufflepuff common room which was almost deserted. He stood near the roaring fire for several minutes, staring into the flickering flames, and shivered as he remembered how close he'd been to dragon fire. Interrupted by a bunch of giggling third-year girls, he muttered to himself and continued through to his room.
~*~
Cedric donned his dress robes and walked into the Entrance Hall. He looked around at the throng of students, and it was refreshing to see the changes in his schoolmates and their guests. The men from Durmstrang wore robes of a deep red which echoed the Christmas spirit, while the Beauxbatons men were smartly outfitted in light blue. Ordinarily clad in Hogwarts black, tonight the girls glittered in jewel-toned dresses, while the boys were elegant in their dark grey or black dress robes. He checked his reflection once more, and smiled as he saw Cho in the mirror as she approached.
'Cho, you look ... wonderful,' he said as he walked to meet her, and he meant every word. She looked resplendent and very elegant in a dress of shimmering silvery-blue, and for a moment she looked much older than she was. He gallantly offered her his arm and she blushed, looking demurely at the ground, and the image faded. She was once more the girl he knew.
'Thanks, and so do you!' she breathed, obviously as awestruck as he was at the splendour of the Castle.
They laughed a little nervously, and she took his arm as they lined up at the entrance to the Great Hall. Out of the corner of his eye, he spotted Harry a short distance away trying not to stare at them. Cedric was unable to discern the meaning of Harry's expression, but thought that he appeared conflicted and maybe a bit resentful. His own stomach churned alarmingly, and he was taken aback at how desperately handsome the younger boy looked in his dress robes. The elegant outline of his formal wear foreshadowed the man that he would soon become, and as Cedric briefly caught Harry's gaze, the green eyes flickered for a moment before he turned away, pulling viciously at his raven locks in a way that made Cedric shiver unconsciously.
Cedric mulled over the possibility that Harry cared a bit more for Cho than he'd originally thought and wondered if their triangle would ever have a happy outcome. Cho wanted him, he wanted Harry, and Harry obviously wanted Cho. It seemed as though nobody would win in this game.
He mentally shook himself as the music began, and turned to look down at Cho. She smiled nervously as the enormous oak doors opened, and the four Champions and their partners walked through into the Great Hall. Cedric followed Fleur and Krum to the large round table where the judges were already seated. He smoothly guided Cho to an empty chair and took his place beside her. He watched Harry steer his date around to the opposite side of the table and wondered how he was going to get through this dinner with Cho beside him and Harry in his full view. His heart beat a quivering tattoo which made him feel anxious and rather unable to eat. He noticed Harry in conversation with a young red-headed man who looked like a Weasley, so Cedric turned his attention to Dumbledore as the wizard spoke to his plate and food appeared. Cho giggled, and they both ordered their meals from the menu, chatting easily as they dined.
Cedric began to relax and enjoy the evening. He looked around the Great Hall, admiring once again the sparkling decorations and enchanted snow that fell from the ceiling. He heard snatches of Dumbledore's conversation with Karkaroff and noted that the Durmstrang headmaster seemed most anxious to preserve the air of mystery that surrounded his school. Cedric mused 'all these secrets that we feel so compelled to keep.'
As the meal wound to a close and the tables were moved to the sides of the room, Cedric led Cho to the dance floor. They took their places with the other Champions, and he stole a glance at Harry as the music swelled and the dance began. The boy looked nervous and out of his depth, but his date seemed more than capable of handling him. Cedric was a naturally good dancer, but this was his first official 'date' with Cho, and they had not danced together before. He guided her through their hesitant first steps, and they soon relaxed into each other. She seemed to float along in his arms, an image aided by her shimmering robes flowing around her like a cloud. He couldn't help but enjoy himself; the music and the dancing made him feel momentarily free.
He looked around the dance floor and saw the faces of his schoolmates, some nervously asking girls to dance, some sitting glumly on the sidelines. Jamie was laughing with some of his friends from Ravenclaw while his arm curled around Katie's waist, and Markus and Hannah spun past as they danced their way around the dance floor. Cedric smiled at them, and as he looked past them, he noticed Fred and George Weasley standing at the bar, trying to look innocuous. He suspected they were up to something. Fleur Delacour and her date were engaged in conversation, although it looked as though she was doing all the talking. Davies appeared to be so mesmerized by her every move and every word that he wasn't actually contributing to the conversation, but rather agreeing with everything she said. Cedric smiled. Fleur's Veela blood certainly had a way about it. Viktor Krum was dancing in elegantly elaborate circles with his date, who Cedric belatedly realized was Hermione Granger. How different she looked tonight! How different they all looked.
The teachers and staff were also in full attendance, and they were interspersed among the students. Madame Maxime was easy to spot dancing with Professor Dumbledore, and Karkaroff was doing a violent-looking waltz with Professor McGonagall, who barely managed to keep an expression of horror from settling on her face. He noticed that Professor Snape approached Karkaroff after that song, and they left together, as Dumbledore swooped in to rescue a slightly flustered Professor McGonagall.
He and Cho danced three songs in succession, then they stepped off the dance floor and Cedric went to get drinks. He had just left Cho in the giggling company of her friends and walked to the bar when he came face to face with Draco Malfoy and his two cronies. Malfoy quickly closed the distance between them, his trademark sneer being replaced with something akin to a smile.
'Hello there, Cedric, enjoying the festivities?'
Cedric hesitated, knowing full well that Draco Malfoy was never friendly to anyone but the Slytherins unless he was up to something.
'Yeah, it's okay. You?' he enquired politely, nodding to Malfoy's sidekicks.
'It's alright, I suppose. Dumbledore certainly has gone all out to impress our guests.' Malfoy's tone didn't convince Cedric that his words of praise were genuine.
'Oh, its fine, Malfoy,' Cedric replied.
Draco moved even closer to Cedric, lowering his voice in spite of the blaring music.
'Look, I wanted to wish you good luck, you know, in the next task. We want Hogwarts to win of course, but most of all, we want you to beat Potter.'
Ah, there it was: the real reason for Draco's sudden interest in his welfare. Cedric began to feel uncomfortable, as though Malfoy's malice was somehow pervasive. His feeling of disquiet was not easily dispelled when his every move was being shadowed by Harry's careful gaze. He suppressed a groan as he imagined Harry's thoughts at seeing him in discussion with the Slytherins.
'Well, um, thanks,' Cedric said, unable to come up with a clever retort. He noticed the bartender returning with his order, so he collected his drinks and bade the Slytherin trio farewell, relieved to turn his back on them.
He returned to Cho with their drinks, and they chatted amicably with members of their Quidditch teams. He noticed that Harry continued to ignore his own date while his eyes followed him and Cho for much of the night. He looked darkly beautiful and broodingly sexy, yet a little tortured at the same time. Cedric thought he understood at least some of what the young boy was feeling, as he too wanted someone who was both unreachable and unattainable.
~~
Much later in the evening, as the Weird Sisters performed on stage to the frenzied screams of the crowd, Cedric sought a quieter area. Cho was in the centre of a large group of girls that were pressed up against the stage, so Cedric excused himself from his group and walked out through the Entrance Hall and into the rose garden. He heard noises and noticed Professor Snape speaking in hushed tones with an agitated Karkaroff, but was unable to hear their words. He was about to go back inside when he noticed Harry and Ron being berated by Snape. He paused a while and hoped that they would walk back inside, but he saw them turn and continue down the path, a move which left him feeling oddly disappointed without knowing precisely why.
Much later that night, after the Yule Ball had wound to its close and the Great Hall was almost deserted, Cedric walked with Cho into the Entrance Hall. A few couples were saying goodnight to their partners from Durmstrang or Beauxbatons before heading back to their own dorms, and Jamie had left to escort Katie to her dorm. Cedric was walking with Cho and was distracted by Markus' laughter as he swept up to them with Hannah in tow.
'Rather enjoyable ball, that.' Markus' eyes were shining, and as Hannah met Cedric's eyes in a moment of shared amusement, Cedric smiled warmly and clapped his hand on Markus' shoulder. Yes, his friend appeared to be very taken with Hannah.
'Agreed, my boy. A most enjoyable dance.'
Cho and Hannah were busily discussing the Ball with excited and hushed whispers when Cedric spotted Harry and Ron ascending the stairs. He excused himself with a quick word to Cho and hastened up the steps, calling Harry's name in a voice that sounded foreign to his own ears. Harry and Ron turned, and Cedric was slightly taken aback at the blue and green-eyed versions of the same stony expression.
'Uh, hi guys,' he began nervously, not wanting to speak in front of the redhead. As he paused and wondered how to proceed, Ron got the hint and turned abruptly, muttering under his breath as he ascended the stairs.
Relieved, Cedric once again turned his full attention to Harry, whose flinty expression had not changed. He stepped closer to the younger boy and lowered his voice, while his heart threatened to drown out his very thoughts with the force of its cadence. He quickly suggested that Harry take a bath with his egg, gave him the location of the Prefects' bathroom on the fifth floor and the password, all the while checking over his shoulder for intruders.
'What... are you joking?' Harry's voice was cautious, but his expression had softened considerably. He looked up into Cedric's eyes earnestly as though searching for some falsehood and Cedric's stomach fluttered in a deliciously unnerving way. 'Get it together man,' he admonished himself, and wondered whether any of his internal reactions to Harry were outwardly noticeable. Merlin! He hoped not.
'But Cedric, what am I to do with the thing?' Harry's voice interrupted his musings.
'You'll see.'
A moment of silence.
'Cedric...'
The way that Harry's mouth moved as it spoke his name sent shivers up Cedric's spine, and the sound of his name spoken on those very lips echoed in his mind long after the actual sound had faded.
Eventually, Cedric's brain kicked in.
'Yeah?'
As the young Gryffindor leaned in closer, the movement was enough to make Cedric's breath catch in his lungs. Harry's green eyes shone in the flickering torchlight and seemed to dance from within as they held Cedric's gaze.
'D'you ever get the feeling that you and I are the only people who know how this feels?'
Cedric froze. Harry's breathy whisper caused a fiery rush of adrenaline to course through his body with the resulting familiar sensation of falling through the floor. Couldn't anybody else feel this energy? Weren't there sparks flying everywhere, and wasn't the electricity in the air as painfully obvious to everyone else as it was to him?
Rapidly, his mind cycled through every conversation, every interaction, and every look he'd given Harry since the year began. How could he know? And why could he sense nothing but confusion when this boy was near?
'What?' Now it was Cedric's turn to be speechless.
A slightly abashed look played across Harry's face and he hesitated.
'Um, well, being Champion. I mean, you know, you and me. We're sort of... it.'
You and me, you and me... The words whirled through Cedric's mind, and he wondered whether those bloody Weasleys had put something in the pumpkin juice after all. You and me... you and me... The words seemed to take on a life of their own as they pulsed and swirled in his mind, taking on all manner of double meanings.
'Oh, yeah, that. I suppose we are the only ones,' he said and tried not to groan at how vacuous his words sounded. He was thankful that at least his voice sounded steady, as his insides were still in total bedlam. He shifted from one foot to the other nervously, suddenly realizing that he and Harry were actually having a conversation.
'So, how's Christmas been for you then?' Harry asked. 'You know, not being home with your family.' Cedric wondered that Harry could think to ask something like that, especially as he'd lost his own parents so very young. How could Harry ever know the true love of family, this boy orphaned by the darkest power in the wizarding world?
Cedric must have looked as surprised as he felt because Harry looked a bit disconcerted.
'Um, fine. Great. Okay, thanks. How about you?' Cedric felt that he was struggling to link two intelligent words together, and he mentally kicked himself for appearing to be such a dolt.
'Fine really. Just about everybody's here this Christmas anyway.' He grinned, and Cedric unwound just a smidgen.
'Hey, funny thing, have you ever seen a miniature flying broom?'
Cedric Diggory was convinced that he would die. Right there on the stairs in front of Harry Potter and everyone.
His knees buckled slightly, and he shifted his weight to mask the movement. He blinked furiously and shook his head, more to clear his thoughts than to actually provide an answer.
'A miniature broom?' Certain that he'd been found out, he tried to buy time so that he could do... something.
'Yeah, a Firebolt actually, just like mine. I'd seen some at the Quidditch World Cup, and one appeared in my room this morning wrapped with my other presents, but it had no tag or note on it. It's a wonderful replica, perfect down to the last detail.' Harry's tone was nonchalant, and Cedric held his breath.
'I just wondered whether you'd seen them.' Harry continued, and to Cedric's nervous condition, the younger boy appeared almost relaxed. Cedric mentally gulped as he felt the heat rush to his face. Surely Harry would find him out tonight!
'Oh, yeah, that was from me. I got that for you at the World Cup because it reminded me of you, but I was too much of a coward to give it to you myself, so I had a house-elf deliver it to your room,' his mind betrayed.
He met Harry's eyes, and a long moment passed between them. Cedric could feel something inside him shift, something almost elemental, but he couldn't pinpoint its nature. Unsettled by Harry's proximity as they stood barely two feet apart, Cedric's mind tried to be rational. With difficulty, he remembered that Cho was probably still at the foot of the stairs waiting for him. He wrenched his eyes from Harry's face and felt the elemental twist again.
'Well ... um... gotta go, want to say goodnight'
His heart fluttered nervously as he saw Harry's gaze follow his own down the staircase to where Cho was standing before it returned to rest upon him. Harry's expression was inscrutable as he raised one eyebrow.
Cedric turned reluctantly, and hastened down the stairs to where Cho stood. She linked her arm in his and, as they walked off, Cedric chanced a look up the staircase. He was surprised to see Harry standing in the same spot, and not for the last time, he wondered just what the young Gryffindor was thinking.
~*~
Cedric bade Cho goodnight at the door to her common room and they embraced.
'Thank you for a wonderful evening, Cedric,' she said in her lilting voice. 'It was wonderful, and I really enjoyed the dancing.'
'It was a great time, wasn't it,' he agreed, hugging her again.
'Listen, Cedric, the next Hogsmeade trip is coming up soon. Do you suppose we could go together, and maybe have lunch or tea at Madam Puddifoot's? It's so lovely in there.'
Cedric shuddered mentally Madame Puddifoot's was a place for couples in love. He sighed and agreed, mainly to keep her happy, but also for the sake of peace. He kissed her hand gallantly and left.
TBC
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A/N2:Reading's nice, reviewing's nicer!
Outtake. In written fiction? Yes, beloved readers, even here. I wrote a scene that falls somewhere within this chapter but which, for many reasons, couldn't make it into this posting. I've posted it on my LiveJournal for anyone interested in the twisting of my mind. Enjoy.
http://hogwartshoney.livejournal.com/30215.html
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68 Reviews | 6.87/10 Average
Wonderful beginning. I can't wait to see where you take them.
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
Thanks! I hope you enjoy their journey.~HH
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
Thanks! I hope you enjoy their journey.~HH
Cedric's role in the books was always a tear-jerker, but developing a story like this makes it even more intense. Good plot idea, and well written!
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
Thanks, and I'm happy you actually read the last chapter. I always wondered what Cedric might have been like if JKR had expanded his character even a little bit, so that the readers would have an even greater sense of loss.
Just so you know, I cried like an ass every time I wrote a piece of the last chapter, every time I edited it, and every time I posted it at an archive. ~H
Yes! That was satisfying! I don't want to read the next chapter but I will anyway...
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
*grins*
Oh my god, I am already devastated for poor Cedric....nothing like knowing that the worst horrors imaginable are approaching....I'm hoping that Cedric and Harry at least get a special moment before going into the maze- that they at least kiss.
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
The muse was particularly horrible in these chapters, and although I kept screaming "Kiss" "sex" "more" she was adamant.
Bossy thing, the muse.Thanks for reading! ~H
Seems to have potential for a great story-I look forward to reading more =)
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
Thanks! I hope you enjoy it. ~H
Cedric's going to die in the next chapter, isn't he?
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
La la la la lalalalalalalalaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa.........
Thanks for the review!
Uh oh Cedders, you need to watch out! Something wicked this way comes!
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
*nods*
Oh yes, it does! Thanks for reading, and Chapter 19 is almost ready for the betas.
~H
Eau PIDGELING!The boys... I love them so.. .can't we just keep them? Can't we????We are so Mary-Sue'd... I'm breathless with anticipation for your further chapters.
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
LOL Mary-Sue'd and proud!
Thank yew, Midgeling!
wow.... he's figured out old dumbledore already! i hope you don't really kill him! i like cedders!
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
Dumbledore might have let himself slip a little too much, and everybody underestimates the Hufflepuffs! I love my Cedders too ;o) Thanks, HH
Another wonderful chapter! I loved their interaction when they were flying, and I'm getting a little weepy now because I know it will all end soon!Do you think you might change this into an AU fic where Cedric lives? I can bribe you! *begs*
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
Thanks! I loved the flying scene myself - I felt that it was a real bonding time for them.
*grins* One can never tell where the muse will take me and I'm always open to bribes! Chocolate-covered Harry *cough*Equus*cough*, or Cedric, or Severus, come to think of it. Yes, those are all good bribes
just read the whole thing! it's awesome! poor jealou cedders....
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
Woah, the whole thing? Hope you don't have a headache! Thanks for that and I hope you enjoy the rest of it!
"the Boy Who Mattered Most." - RRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRhhhrrrr!!!
"Merlin, he's a living, breathing wet dream!" - Merlin! He IS!
"...he felt the thrum as their magic met, clashed and, finally, harmonised." - SUCH a beautiful image, mouffling!
Heh! Harry's such a lil bad-ass!
Eau, MISTY!
"Your cousins Anne-Marie and Joan..." - *WETS self!!!!*
*laughter... laughter and more laughter!*
I think this is my favourite chapter, peaupette... I'm not shore of course... but it just FEELS thet way!
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
LOL. It's been SEAU long in the making, Midgen, eye kneau! and yes, here we have young Harry, all het up by that beautiful Hufflepuff and not being able to *do* anything about it because Cedric's getting all 'ethical' on his ass! I mean, REALLY!!! ;O)
I must say that this story is coming along nicely. I cant wait to read more about it! Love the way you stuck to the original story but add your on twists. Please up date soon!
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
Thanks for your review! I enjoyed the plot of The Goblet of Fire because I found that it was so involved, with so many new and different characters! Am working on the storyline and hope to have the next chapter up soon! HH
Yes! *pumps fist in air* You have no idea how eager I've been for the new chapter! And it's finally here! Yay! It was well worth the wait. The battle scene in the forest was so well written that I felt as if I was actually there.
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
Wow! What a review! Thanks for that, and I'm thrilled that the battle scene works! I caught my a** trying to get it to 'sound' like how it looked in my mind! HH
I just had an epiphany ... and it made me so sad. I realized (while I was hanging up clothing in my closet, of all places!) that Cedric was a 'real' person, which is what you've been getting at in this story all along. Cedric was real and he had friends who loved him and he had a life ... and he died. And it just struck me and made me really sad.
The "battle" scene was beautifully written. I loved it. So captivating; you've really done your research well (the jinxes, hexes, etc.) and made everything very believable. Well done. :)
So ... Wow, this story is really marvelous. Thank you for writing it! :)
~Julia~
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
Scary thing - I just realized that you're right about Cedric being a 'real' person! I always wondered what he was like, who his friends were and whether Rowling put much thought into his life.
I had the battle scene vividly in my mind, yet somehow it was particularly hard to write/coordinate! All snaps go to my fantabulous beta, JaneAverage! She made my mish-mash of jinxes,hexes,wrong incantations into something that really rocked!
Thanks for your review, I'm so happy that you enjoy the story and appreciate your taking the time to review!
HH
I have been waiting SO LONG for an update! When I saw it in the Newly Submitted list, I literally jumped up and down and squealed!I cannot tell you how much I ADORE this story! I hope the next chapter is just as satisfying as this one!
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
LOL. wow, I'm gratified to know that you're getting such a kick out of my ficlet.I'm working out some details with my beta on Chapter 12 and I hope to have it in her capable hands by the end of next week. Fingers & toes crossed, and thanks for reading! HH
AHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!
I LOVE your Patronus class! I can just see the rest of the class saying "CUDDERS MUNT, boy!"
Poor Diggs, having to be with the couples when all he wants is Harry... *sighs wistfully*
VERY clever that you put in the trip up the mountain with Snuffles, the exchange between him and the twins/Lee.
*DIES* - "Oh, do that again."
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
LOL. Cudders munt indeed, poppet!
You remember our days of 'do that again' don'tcha!? I agree that I've been unfair to our Cedders in Puddifoot's with all the couples... *bad muse* I caught my *arse* with that whole Snuffles/Ced waiting timeline thing... am happy that it's come off okay! Hugs, HH
The Patronus Charm was very effective, wasn't it? Marvelously written! Just what exactly is an African Oryx? Is it a buffalo or gazelle-like creature? I am too lazy to look it up on the internet and I can't quite recall what it is right now...
Oh, yes! I loved this line, "She had still been friendly, but she was distant, and he could see the hurt in her eyes; could feel her loss without even trying to sense it."
It reminds me of another story I read (can't remember what it was) in which the author had written, "No girl wants to be the one who turned her boyfriend gay." Hee! That's what I thought of when I read the above.
This is very well-written and I look forward to an update. I hope your move went well. And there's just one little bit of con. crit.
*Ahem!* You use a lot of "alrights" and I remarked on that in an earlier chapter. However, I see them here, too, hee! So... if you wanted to change them to 'all right', that's fine. If not, that's great, too, because a lot of writers use 'alright,' although--grammatically--it isn't quite correct.
Again, looking forward to reading more. Cheers!
~Julia~
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
African Oryx . I think they're beautiful creatures, even though this particular photo isn't the most graceful one I've ever seen.
http://i102.photobucket.com/albums/m89/HogwartsHoney/AfricanOryx-cedders.jpg
HH
Well, Cho's not a Ravenclaw for nothing! She's a smart cookie! :P
Great job on the Second Task. Harry showed up right on cue ... after all the others! I suppose he'd just been woken up by Dobby and given the Gillyweed.
Lovely job and I knew that Jamie would understand ... he's the understanding type.
Reading on!
~Julia~
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
Yep, that Cho sharp all right! I try to weave my story in and out of canon. I hope it makes it more plausible that way instead of being waaaaaaaay out, y'know? Jamie is my prince!!! I love that boy!! He IS the understanding type and very mellow, but , like all my Hufflepuffs, he's more than he seems.... ! *cough*
Response from Celestial Melody (Reviewer)
Ooh, really? I can't wait to find out about this unseen side of Jamie. :)
~Julia~
Wow. That was an intense chapter and I was shocked that Harry was in the bathroom with Cedric! I had to reread it to make sure that I'd read it correctly the first time.
This story is getting very complicated. The triangle is going to have a bit of an upset when Cho finds out. Reading on...
~Julia~
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
Poor boy - he certainly didn't expect to walk in on THAT kind of thing!! LOL HH
Ooooh, very nice. The conversation between Cedric and Harry was mesmerizing and I can't wait to read more, so just one itty-bitty bit of con crit.
"who Cedric belatedly realized was Hermione Granger."
Perhaps it should be "who, Cedric belatedly realized, was Hermione Granger." Offset that statement *points up* with commas.
I'm truly enjoying this story and reading on, leaving a short review, because I can't wait! :)
~Julia~
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
Yes, poor Cedric. The mention of the Firebolt was almost his undoing!! ;o) HH
Beautiful! This is my favorite chapter so far. I loved the capricious nature of the mermaid. Good job on the gifts at the end, too. :)
~Julia~
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
*grins* I enjoyed this chapter too, and the mermaid was fun to write. HH
Hee! Fantastic detail about Hannah; I applaud her for her intelligence! They do say that Hufflepuffs are well-rounded in everything.
Marvelous job on writing the First Task. We finally find out what happens to Cedric during that task! Great job; I'm truly enjoying this story.
~Julia~
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
'Puffers' are too often overlooked y'know! They may be the gentle souls of the bunch, but I think they have HUGE potential and a lot to offer the school!
Thanks for your reviews. That first task was a joy to write, although stressful in its own right!
HH
The first thing I thought of after I read the first few paragraphs was, in response to Amos' input, "Ooh, I bet he'll be sorry after the tournie is over!"
This story has really captured my attention and the only other slash I've read that I liked was one about Harry/Draco. Good job! :)
Hee! I laughed when I read this, "uncertain feelings." It's often 'certain' feelings, but of course Cedric doesn't understand his! :)
Great detail on the badges.
Um... should this be a question? "What could that… witch … have said or done that would have upset Harry this way."
"have said or done that would have upset Harry this way?"
And Cedric placed his hand on Harry's thigh! *gasp* This is getting very interesting! :)
~Julia~
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
Our poor Ced. Things are conspiring against him, not least of which his hormones and a determined author with an extremely naughty muse!! ;o) I'm happy that you're enjoying it.
Ced didn't mean his hand placement to be in a sexual way, more of in a supportive way, 'cause... let's face it, he's worked up also about the entire Tournament. He's a caring and sympathetic being...
HH
I enjoyed reading about Lee ... he has always been a favorite character of mine, :), and I appreciate that you've included him in the story.
A bit of a constru. crit. that I found in the... oh, I am NOT about to count the paragraphs, :P, but here it is anyway: "'Hey, listen, it’s not about that, alright?’ he growled."
Often, authors use 'alright' in their stories, however, the correct way to use this term is 'all ____ right", with a space in between the 'all' and the 'right.' This is because 'right' corresponds with 'wrong' and you wouldn't say 'alwrong,' would you?
Just a bit there... and "...scarlet-haired Gryffindors." I assume you're referring to the Weasley clan, although they don't really have "scarlett hair," do they? It's more of a carrot color, whereas robed Gryffindors would definitely be scarlet.
I am really enjoying your story, it's marvelously written and I can't wait to see how the "Cho Chang conflict" works out. *bounces up and down excitedly* :)
~Julia~
Response from HogwartsHoney (Author of Wizards and Champions)
*nods* Yep, I was in two minds about the 'alright' vs 'all right' thing, so have changed it. thx again, it's always good to have a fresh pair of eyes picking up what my beta and I have missed! Also changed the hair colour! LOL
I love Lee, he's a wonderful addition to the twins' lunacy and he's very important in his own right. Thanks for reading! HH