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Redemption
phoenix160 Reviews | 7.05/10 (160 Ratings, 0 Likes, 109 Favorites )
Lucius Malfoy has finally realized the Dark Lord has been spinning nothing but lies. Unfortunately, it took him losing his family to realize this. Now, he is trying to atone for his sins. Will anyone trust him? Will anyone help him regain his place in society? He has a plan. Set after HBP. Rating is for later chapters. Additionally, there are two chapters that have some torture, but nothing overly graphic. Nominated for Feb 2006 Multifaceted Awards in Best Dramatic and Best Het (Adult) Fics
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phoenix
Member Since 2006 | 54 Stories | Favorited by 136 | 1,108 Reviews Written | 1,209 Review Responses
I picked up the Harry Potter fandom around the time the first movie came out and began writing fanfic early 2005 after discovering the adult online community. I identify most closely with the Slytherins and you will see my taste in writing lends me to writing about Slytherins more often than not. In addition to fanfiction, I also make fanvids on the Harry Potter fandom. I'm a Perfect Imagination acredited beta and am willing to help authors. My main 'ship interests are Snape/OC (never really got into the SS/HG pairing) and LM/any female (with HG as a new favorite). I have dabbled in RL/OC and RL/NT and am okay with those pairings. I generally shy away from slash, just not my thing. For updates on my writing, check out my Live Journal
Reviews for Redemption
Okay, I'm finding it hard, but I'm waiting patiently for Lucius to be able to smack both Harry and Ron upside the head. Please, tell me you have this planned in some future chapter, pretty please with chocolate brownies on top smothered with hot fudge. Okay I'll get up off my knees now.I'm loving that Remus has extended the olive branch towards Lucius and they are working together.
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
Lucius would like nothing more than to smack those two around, but he has to take care about upsetting Harry too much as the boy who lived will surely have a lot of pull. You'll see if he can hold his patience.
I like Remus and Lucius together. I think these are the circumstances needed to foster that friendship. I'm glad you like it, too.
Response from ancientgirl (Reviewer)
LOL, I think Lucius will have more patience than me, but I can certainly understand that he's got to be patient.And yes, I'm loving the Remus and Lucius thing. I hope that they will be very good friends when this is all over with
Wow! Normally I am a SS/HG shipper, but I do enjoy a good LM/HG story, too. This is a wonderful story. That was just pure evil of you to end the chapter the way you did. But, I can't say anything because cliffes are a favorite of mine when I write. Yours has definately left me wanting more! I look forward to the next update.
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
Thanks, Jen. It's nice to see people willing to expand into an obscure ship. I know it wasn't initially enamoured of it, but it really grew on me, more so now.
As for pure evil, I am very fond of cliffhangers. Now that I'm home from a mini-vacation, I need to post new chapters.
Oh wow. Doesn't leave much rooom for concealment regarding their relationship now does it? Can't WAIT for the next installment!!!!
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
Thanks, Satai. Yup, Lucius is really in it now. LOL I should have the next chapter up tomorrow. I have some time tomorrow and even with the intention to get some writing done, I should be able to get the next chapter up. :)
Response from Satai Delenn (Reviewer)
Very cool! I am looking forward to it!!!!
He still gives me the creeps, but I'll keep reading.
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
Thanks,
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
. I can imagine this is not a pairing that appeals to everyone. I know that the Severus/Hermione pairing kind of creeps me out. Good on you for sticking it out this far. :)
Ah very cool. I'm glad Lucius was the one to rescue her, AND I'm glad it was Severus who helped her a bit while she was there too.Of course I expected Harry to be a prat, and unfortunately you wrote him just the way I think he would act. Harry is very emotional and not willing to trust anyone, even though the truth may lie at the bottom of it all.
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
Thanks,
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
. Poor Lucius, having to hide his emotions and find a different reason why he should be allowed to help. Thankfully there were people there to let logic prevail.
Harry, what is there to say, he's very emotional and prone to irrationality. I've enjoyed working with that.
Very good chapter, and I waited the final battle but perhaps it will happen soon. Will Voldemort notice that someone of his followers helped Hermione away?Hermione is pregnant! Holy shit! Do they realize that Lucius is a father? If they do will they nail him down?I hope that he can get an opportunity to see her.I also hope that Severus will be okay when Voldy is dead.
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
Well, the final battle is actually coming in this story. I initially wasn't going to do it, but this fic evolved into something so much more than I had anticipated. It will take a while to get there, though.
With Hermione pregnant, that is pretty much going to blow Lucius' cover, wouldn't you say? Just keep reading to see how that unfolds.
Glad you are enjoying the story so far.
Finally Lucius have some feelings for Hermione even he tries to deny them.I assumed that something bad will happen when I read how deserted was that place when they went. My heart pounded so fast that I afraid I would faint.Amazing chapter once again.In the next chapter the DE will torture and brutalize her, won't they? I hope that won't happen but there isn't so much hope for it.
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
Poor Lucius, his plan has sort of backfired on him, hasn't it? He wasn't actually supposed to feel anything for her.
I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. Unfortunately, good things never happen when Death Eaters are involved. I'm glad to have kept the suspense level up.
Aah, Lucius writing some love letters to Hermione, very smooth. He's really is sneaky Slytherin!Does there come confrontation between Hermione and Ron soon?And does the others know about Hermioe and Lucius before the Final Battle?
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
I'm glad you like Lucius' sneakiness. What better way to win a woman's heart than to write her love letters?
As for a confrontation and if/when the others find out, keep reading.
Huh, Severus is in the Light side!! I would have hated you if you had make him puer evil! I hope that you're not swicth Light!Severus to DarkEvil!Snape, please pretty please?I waited when someone would notice someting different in Hermione, and anticipated that there's happen something horrible.
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
Well, Severus says he's still Dumbledore's man, but is he? Is he out for himself? Is he still Evil? So many questions.
As for poor Hermione, she's stuck in the middle of everything, isn't she.
Ha, I was right that Severus is in the picture!!! Hermione is too naive and love in her first love and deflowerment that she's not carefull. Come on, 'Mione, Lucius is Slytherin!I wonder what Severus wants from Lucius?Again a great chapter!!
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
Young love can be dangerous, can't it? And as you said, Lucius is Slytherin, so that's what he' shoping for.
And Severus could be there to cause some trouble.
Damn, its Severus!!! Hurray!!! But is he pure evil?Yes, it has to be ex-Potions Master from Hogwarts!Hermione seems impatient, Lucius won't know what hit him.
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
Thanks, Alexa, I love reading your questions. It's great that this gets you thinking. As for Lucius, he knows exactly what he's doing.
I would have hexed Ron straight away and portkeyed him back to the Headquarters! How dare he come and put stop for Lucius smooth seduce!Hmmm, what more will Ron to do? Does he still love Hermione more than a friend?
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
LOL I'll add you to the list of people against Ron. As for how he feels about Hermione, yup, he still loves her. And he could definitely cause problems.
Yes, I liked indeed much about Hermione's inner voice which seems to be working together with Lucius. Damn Slytherins, they allways surprise you even you think that your extremely cautios.And about Hermione's dream I think that the Black night was Severus. I could be wrong but I think that I'll see him somewhere near future. I hope that he isn't 100% evil.
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
Thanks, Alexa. I'm glad you like hte inner voice. That's been a fun part of the story. And it does seem to be working with Lucius, doesn't it? LOL
The black knight is just some nameless, faceless evil, at least as originally conceived. Interesting idea that it might be Severus. :)
Well, I have to say that he's very patient man and know very well what methods to use in the each situation.Poor Hermione, she doesn't have any clue what Lucius doing. I wonder does your warnings about abuse and etc means what Hermione will suffer?
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
Oh, yes, Lucius can be a very patient man. Of course, having spent a year in prison will teach you that. He does need to make sure she doesn't know what he's doing.
As for the warning, I really don't want to give anything away quite yet.
Finally I'm able to read some Lucius and Hermione pairing's story! And this is so far so good!Lucius seems acting pretty much himself, but I have to wonder that when he managed to seduce Hermione, will he be keep her or toss her away when she prooved her usable (I don't have around dictionary so I just assume that this is an existing word)?
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
Glad you like the beginning. Yup, Lucius is looking out for himself. As for Hermione, well, that's something to be seen.
Oh, man, Ron bites. LOL... I can understand his mistrust, but I want to tell him to get his arse outta there! hehe
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
You, Hermione and Lucius are in the same club then. Neither of them want him around either. Nothing quite like teenage male immaturity, is there?
Muahahha... Hell, yes! I'm pulling for the sneaky man. This is a great story, dear.
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
Thanks, SW. I'm glad you are enjoying this. It is a lot of fun to get to write some sublte sneakiness. Hopefully there will be no further upload problems on my part.
Prat!Ron ... you stick to canon very well. I can only hope that Hermione finds a way to take every opportunity to sneak around with Lucius beneath Ron's nose. You know, the dangers of being caught are very... stimulating.
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
Thanks. I have portrayed Ron in a thoroughly unlikeable light, haven't I? This is my commentary on the JKR canon of R/Hr. I just don't see it.
As for sneaking around being stimulating, wait and see. Poor Lucius is like a caged lion right now.
Daydream? Daydream??!! Oh, you torture me... or rather poor Lucius. I know I read this a little out of order. I was wondering about the kiss. And then, it was just a daydream! LOL
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
I think I've mentioned it before, but I'm Yes, poor, poor Lucius, his goal is tantalizingly close, yet he knows he can't move too quickly. Nothing like a good Slytherin scheme is there? Well, he's got part one done, she's isolated from the others and will be forced to spend time with him. Now he can move on to part two of his plan.
OMG, I want to kick Ron in the balls so hard that they come flying out of his mouth. UGH! Great chatper. LOL, you succeded in pissing my off, but in a good way. I thouroughly detest Ron here.I can't wait for another chapter.
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
I pissed you off? I never would have guessed. You hid it so well.
Yup, my Ron is a complete pain in the ass. Though, I really think Ron would be incredibly jealous now that he admitted he likes Hermione. And hey, he's red-headed, he has a stereotype to live up to.
I hope you enjoy the rest and may it elicit similarly strong reactions from you. :)
Response from ancientgirl (Reviewer)
LOL, as you can see I get very passionate when I read something I like. I'm really looking forward to seeing where you take this.GO LUCIUS!
The inner voice is great. It shows her conflicting emotions well and gives us an insight as to what she's feeling. I'm really enjoying this. I find myself pulling for Lucius. Yes, I adore the non-canon Lucius that we who write have created. I want him to be pardoned and I want him and Hermione to be together.I'm a sap.I'm looking forward to your next chapter.
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
Thanks
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
. I'm glad you like hte inner voice. I thought it would be a good way to inject some humor into the story.
As for this Lucius, well, he's been in prison a year and lost everything. That's bound to change people. At least that's my story, and I'm sticking with it. And don't worry, I can be a bit of a sap at times, too.
Next chapter is coming soon.
Response from ancientgirl (Reviewer)
Oh for sure he's changed. I think its a logical thing to happen. Lucius is a smart guy. He will have been in prison and thought about what a wrong path he took.Yay for you being a sap. By all means I hope you feel free to show your sappiness in this story.I'll wait patiently for more.
hahaha! I really thought Lucius was making his move. I love the pace he's setting himself, and I can see that she's slowly being lured in. Great stuff. What does the Order think of her night away with him? I'm surprised Ron didn't show up yet! hahaha
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
Is it wrong that I take so much pride in having fooled people? LOL It was kind of mean, but I'm glad people see the point of him moving slowly. As for the Order reaction...well, you'll see what happens there.
LOL, okay you got me. For a minute there I thought Lucius had pounced, but that wouldn't be good right now. He's still trying to win her trust and doing that too soon might make her push away.Wonderful chapter.
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
LOL I'm sorry, I really couldn't resist on that little sneaky scene. I figured that guys have sex on the brain a lot, and Lucius, having been in prison for a year and gone without it for another half year, would definitely not be any different. Plus, I like to tease people.
I'm glad you liked the chapter,
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
. I'll be submitting the next one soon.
very good so far. I can't wait to see how the visit to the manor goes... muahahah great lucius
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
Thanks, SW. Rest assured, Lucius has his plan. The only problem is whether or not he gets to carry out his plan...I hope you continue to enjoy this story.
Yay! I'm always happy to read another Lucius/Hermione fic. I'm really liking this story so far. What's happening with Severus though? Is he alive? Was he found out and killed?I'm looking forward to seeing Lucius progress with his woeing of Hermione.
Response from phoenix (Author of Redemption)
I'm glad you like this. It will be interesting watching Hermione and Lucius. As for Severus, I can't give you the answers to everything in the beginning, can I? What would be the point of continuing the story.