Something There That Wasn't There Before
Chapter 6 of 10
sshg316Having just announced her engagement to Ron Weasley, Hermione Granger is shocked when her friend, Luna Lovegood, gives a prophecy foretelling that she will fall madly in love with her soul mate - and it isn't Ron! One man knows for certain of whom the prophecy speaks, but he isn't telling. Who could it be, and will Hermione choose the right man? Winner for Best Fluff in Round Two of the Moste Potente Passions SS/HG Awards.
ReviewedDisclaimer: JKR owns it all. I'm just having fun.
Chapter Six
Something There That Wasn't There Before
Hermione stood in front of the full-length mirror, critically eyeing the blue sundress she was wearing. It was sleeveless, with a high waist and full skirt that were both adorned with lace inserts. Turning to the side, she noted how the deep V neckline showed off her cleavage to its best advantage. She twirled around, the full skirt swirling around her calves, and nodded. It was almost perfect but not quite.
Dissatisfied with the shade of blue, Hermione picked up her wand and, with a swish and flick, changed it from a medium blue to a pale blue. Her nose wrinkled; her fair skin now looked completely washed out. Sighing, she swished again ... and again. Perhaps blue was not her colour today. Thinking for a moment, she remembered a blouse she had almost purchased simply because the colour had suited her so well. It had been a bright shade of green called lemongrass, and although the blouse itself had not fit her properly, the colour had been perfect. Another swish and the blue sundress was now lemongrass green.
Satisfied with her charm work, Hermione turned her attention to her hair. It was quite long, flowing almost to the small of her back, and was still completely unmanageable. Cursing her ancestors and their bushy-haired genes, she had begun to pull her hair back into its usual ponytail when she reconsidered. Instead, she allowed the unruly curls to fall freely down her back, pulling only the sides away from her face and securing the locks with a few clips. It looked different, but in a good way.
She decided a little make-up would be nice some eye shadow, a sweep of mascara, a little blush. Hermione was carefully applying her lip gloss when she suddenly stopped what she was doing. Why was she so worried about her clothes, her hair, and her make-up? "It's not like it's a date or anything," she mumbled to herself. The twinge of disappointment she felt surprised her. Did she want this to be a date? A date with Severus? It was absurd wasn't it?
Hermione heard the front door close and knew he must have arrived. She grabbed the small handbag from the bed and quickly slipped on her favourite brown leather sandals. One more glance in the mirror and a self-chastisement for doing so and she left her room to meet her friend downstairs.
She was halfway down the staircase when she glanced up and saw him. Merlin on a mo-ped, she thought dazedly, unable to move from her position on the stairs.
Standing on the landing was Severus Snape, a man she had known for most of her life, and yet, a man she had obviously never truly seen before. He was wearing Muggle clothing, of course, but it wasn't just the clothing Hermione noticed it was him. The crisp white linen shirt fit him as if it were tailor-made which it probably was the cuffs fastened at the wrists by a pair of silver cufflinks. His shirt was tucked into a pair of charcoal grey trousers that seemed to hug him in all the right places. Her eyes lingered upon the breadth of his shoulders and chest, then slowly moved downward, taking note of his lean hips and marvelling at the length of his legs. Who knew he was hiding that body under those voluminous robes?
What surprised Hermione most, however, was that his hair was pulled away from his face, held back by some sort of elastic or ribbon. The style did accentuate his hawk-like features, but Hermione was more interested in his eyes. He often hid his gaze behind his curtain of hair, but now she had an unobstructed view of what must certainly be his best feature. His eyes were dark, almost black, with thick lashes and right now, they were fixed firmly on her.
Hermione flushed with embarrassment at being caught ogling the poor man. She quickly looked away, her cheeks flaming and her teeth worrying her bottom lip. "I'm so sorry! I've just I've never Oh!"
"I see," Severus replied, his lips twitching as he struggled not to laugh at her distress; he most likely had never seen her at a loss for words. "I don't believe you have seen me in Muggle attire before. I am aware I look somewhat different." He gave a long-suffering sigh, extended his arms to the side and slowly turned around. "Look your fill, then."
Rather than look, however, Hermione closed her eyes, her mortification complete. When she opened them, he had finished turning and was watching her, a look of smug satisfaction firmly planted on his face. Her eyes narrowed, and she lifted her chin. He would not get the best of her today. Lips curled in a small smirk, and with a little extra swing her in hips, she resumed her descent down the stairs.
***
Severus' eyes widened as Hermione's posture changed, and the embarrassed young woman transformed into a seductive siren. As she descended the stairs, he drank in her appearance. She was lovely, yes, and he was pleasantly surprised that she had obviously dressed with special care for their outing; however, he was mesmerised by the sight of her legs dear gods, she was not wearing stockings. He was instantly assaulted by the desire to run his hands up her bare calves to her undoubtedly silky thighs, and then continue up to palm her delectable derriere. He swallowed hard fighting back the impulse. It did not help matters in the slightest that she was wearing her hair down. He was used to seeing it pulled back, but now, it was natural and wild, and he wanted to bury his hands in it, to ...
"Have you looked your fill, then?" she asked, her voice filled with humour and a touch of triumph.
So she was playing his game, was she? Touché, my dear. He stepped toward her, then leant in to place a kiss upon her cheek.
"You look lovely, Hermione," he murmured, purposefully deepening his voice, his tone smooth as velvet.
He stepped back and noted with no small amount of satisfaction that she was obviously flustered. He was definitely starting to get under her skin.
Severus offered her his arm. "Shall we go?" She nodded, placing her hand on his arm, and they exited number twelve, Grimmauld Place together.
***
Severus and Hermione arrived at the Ministry-designated Apparition point near the Houses of Parliament with a loud crack, the sound masked by the noise of the city. It was a bit of a walk to Tate Britain, but it was nice day, so they set out in the direction of the gallery, discussing Hermione's upcoming exams as they strolled.
As always, conversation came easily between the pair, and it wasn't long before they had arrived at their destination. As they climbed the stairs to the portico, Hermione informed him that when the building had first opened, several architects had declared the edifice to be an artistic disappointment, but Severus found himself impressed by the Corinthian columns and dramatic central dome. Upon reaching the top of the stairs, they entered through one of the main doors.
They made their way through the small lobby, walking toward the middle of the room, where Severus admired the three-story circular space with its pale stone walls and polished stone floors. A glass dome flooded the room with sunshine, and despite all the stonework, the room felt light and airy. Severus watched as Hermione placed several pounds into the donation box; she motioned to him to follow her and led him into a barrel-vaulted space with an octagonal area at its centre. Leisurely walking across the stone floor, silently absorbing the atmosphere, they came to stand inside the eight-sided space.
"This is the Duveen Gallery," Hermione said quietly, "but most people refer to it as the octagon."
Severus turned to face her, knowing his expression was perhaps a bit more open than she was used to, but he had wished to visit this particular gallery for quite some time. That he was sharing the experience with Hermione had him feeling almost as giddy as a third-year in Honeydukes for the first time. Almost.
"Where shall we begin?" Hermione asked, her own enthusiasm evident in her voice as she turned in the direction of one of the galleries.
Severus watched as her smile faltered and pain filled her face, her gaze fixed at some point just behind him. Concerned, he followed her line of sight. Comprehension flooded him as he saw the small family a man and a woman holding hands with an enthusiastic little girl enter the octagon together.
"Hermione," he began, wishing to offer some comfort, but she shook her head.
"I'm all right. Please, excuse me. I'll meet you over there in a few moments," she said shakily, indicating an area down the hall.
Severus could do nothing but watch as she practically ran to descend the stairs to the lavatory, undoubtedly to compose herself.
***
Hermione had known that visiting Tate Britain would be an emotional experience for her; the last time she had come had been with her parents. She missed them terribly and, at times, had to struggle to rise above the guilt she felt regarding their deaths. After all, if she hadn't been born a witch, they would still be alive.
Shaking off the feeling, she walked to the sinks and turned on the tap. After a splash of cold water on her face and a few moments of staring at her reflection in the mirror, Hermione felt she had mastered her emotions enough that she could exude some semblance of normalcy. She quickly repaired her make-up and, with a deep breath, opened the heavy door and walked out of the lavatory.
Hermione had been able to sense Severus' growing excitement, and she found it particularly endearing. She was anxious to show him the gallery. She had loved coming here with her parents as a child, and there were many favourite pieces she wanted to share with him. Anxious to do just that, Hermione quickened her steps.
She had left Severus in the area of the gallery which held historic British art, so she walked past the shop to the stairs near the special exhibition room. Reaching the top of the staircase, she turned and entered a small narrow room filled with medieval alabaster carvings. Intent on finding her companion, she paid the artwork little heed as she turned to her left, walking through the massive marble-framed doorway, her soft-soled shoes making very little sound on the room's wooden floor. Hermione was tempted to stay and look at the portraits of the Tudors and Stuarts, but continued on when she caught a glimpse of Severus in one of the adjoining rooms.
Although he looked different in his Muggle clothing, she would recognise him anywhere. Severus stood, his hands clasped in front of him and one knee bent slightly as he studied the portrait in front of him with the same amount of concentration she had many times seen him give his Potions work. His back was to her, providing her the opportunity to study him unobserved. As if giving in to a guilty pleasure, Hermione perused him from head to toe, her eyes lingering of their own accord on his arse, a portion of his anatomy she had never had the pleasure of viewing before today. Idly, she wondered how it would feel to run her hands over the muscled flesh of his bum.
She started when she realised she was checking him out again. Feeling a little overwhelmed by her seemingly sudden interest in him in that way, Hermione shook her head to clear her mind and resolutely ignored the throb she had felt at the thought of sliding her hands across his skin.
Severus appeared to be enthralled with the portrait of a pretty young woman whose thick brown hair was piled upon her head. Her flawless skin glowed, and her cheeks appeared slightly flushed. Her full mouth was lush and red with her lips parted slightly, and a vast expanse of unblemished flesh was exposed by the low décolletage of her filmy cream-coloured gown. Her wide, dark eyes seemed to Hermione to be full of hidden knowledge. Lady Hamilton as Circe. How fitting, given that Circe was known for her knowledge of herbs. Thankfully, Hermione knew a bit about the painting, or at least the model, and so in an attempt to push aside all inappropriate thoughts concerning her friend and employer, she immediately launched herself into full lecture mode.
"Here you are," she said as she approached him, inwardly cringing at her overly cheerful tone. From the corner of one eye, Hermione noticed him glance at her for a moment, but she kept her own eyes firmly focussed on the portrait. Once Severus returned to studying Lady Hamilton as Circe, she began to speak. Unfortunately, Hermione's words spewed forth in a torrent of trivial information as she dredged up everything she could remember concerning Lady Hamilton, her life, her husband, and Lord Nelson, although she stumbled a bit after uttering the phrase ménage à trois. She could feel the heat of her blush on her cheeks, and she quickly fell silent, biting her lower lip in order to forcibly put an end to her inane babbling.
Severus turned his head to look at her Hermione could feel his eyes boring into the top of her head. In her peripheral vision, she saw him nod solemnly before turning back to the portrait, studying it a few moments longer before he bodily turned to face her, murmuring, "Yes, she is lovely." Slowly, he moved to walk past her in the direction of the next room, his warm masculine scent enveloping her once again. His body brushed hers, and then he halted, lowering his head to whisper in her ear, "She reminds me of you."
Shocked, Hermione finally lifted her eyes to his. There was humour there, yes, but there was something else, as well something Hermione had never seen before. No man had ever looked at her in that way. She found herself struggling to remember to breathe as her senses were overcome by the sheer maleness of him. Once again, a blush stained her cheeks, and she wrenched her gaze away from him.
Flustered, she began to walk past him into the next room. Gathering her courage now that she was no longer facing him, Hermione said, "I do hope you aren't referring to her love life, Severus."
Her quip was rewarded with a deep chuckle she had never heard him laugh before. She shuddered in pleasure as the velvety sound washed over her in waves. Still laughing softly, Severus gently grasped her elbow to guide her into the room, the feel of his fingers upon her skin sending tingles along her spine once more. Dear Merlin, she thought, what is happening to me?
***
Severus escorted Hermione into a room filled with British landscapes, praying she did not notice his rather stiff gait. By the gods, he should never have stood so close to her. When he had whispered in her ear, he had wanted nothing more than to bury his nose in her wild, fragrant curls and press his mouth to the delicate skin behind her ear.
Releasing Hermione's elbow, he allowed her to continue on ahead of him. As she gazed upon each painting, he gazed upon her. He could never tire of looking at her, studying her in the same manner in which she was currently studying the landscape in front of her. She was a living work of art, and he found himself entranced by the graceful way she moved, her delicate mannerisms, and the varied expressions of her face. Hermione Granger was slowly bewitching his mind and ensnaring his senses. The prophecy had said he would enrapture her heart, but in this moment he wondered if she was not the one enrapturing him. Dear Merlin, he thought, what is happening to me?
***
Hermione and Severus spent the rest of the afternoon exploring Tate Britain, only occasionally encountering other patrons as most people were spending the sunny afternoon out-of-doors. They both enjoyed the room referred to as the Victorian Spectacle, as well as paintings from the Romantic period. Neither was particularly fond of the more modern art, but both were thoroughly enamoured of the Pre-Raphaelite works, Hermione being especially fond of Millais' Ophelia. Her mother had once shared with her an interesting bit of information regarding the painting, and Hermione decided to share it with Severus.
"Did you know," she began, "that the model for this painting spent weeks lying in a bath of water and became quite ill?" He turned to look at her, cocking an eyebrow in a silent query. Hermione nodded earnestly. "It's true! Apparently the lamps that had been placed under the tub to keep the water warm went out, and Millais didn't notice. The model spent quite some time in a bath full of cold water the poor thing didn't want to break the pose."
Severus hummed in response, then asked, "This depicts the scene from Hamlet, does it not?" When Hermione nodded her agreement, he raised his hand, indicating the numerous flowers. "Look at the flowers Millais chose to surround her with. Some of these are mentioned in the play, whilst others are quite symbolic, befitting the scene. See here," he said, pointing at the flowers floating near the young woman, "are daisies, which represent innocence and are mentioned in the play. And see the weeping willow stretched above her head? That is a symbol of forsaken love."
Hermione was enchanted she had never paid attention to the symbolic nature of the flowers before, but now that she was aware, she began searching for more examples. "Oh! You're right! And look here, the buttercups represent childishness ... and, oh! The poppy that's an indicator of death! I've never noticed that before."
They spent the next few minutes analyzing Millais' use of symbolism with flowers and foliage in the work before Hermione saw Severus move away, his attention caught by a portrait of a small child.
***
As Severus approached the painting of the sleeping infant, he read the title, Study of a Dead Child. Instantly, he realised the baby was not asleep but had been painted posthumously.
"Sad isn't it?" he heard Hermione whisper from behind him. "He was the artist's son."
Severus stood, mesmerised by the painting, a strange feeling overcoming him as he considered the profound grief with which the piece must have been painted, each brush stroke a loving memorial. For all the sorrow Severus had experienced in his life, he imagined nothing could compare to the loss of a beloved child.
He was momentarily shaken from his melancholic thoughts when he felt Hermione tuck her hand in the crook of his arm. Together, they silently mourned the child whose father had so obviously loved him.
***
After another hour spent perusing the vast collection of art, they exited the gallery, walking down the entrance stairs to the pavement running alongside Millbank. It was a gorgeous late afternoon; the Thames was lovely this time of year, and there were several families walking about. Suddenly, Hermione nearly jumped in delight, startling Severus so badly that he stumbled. She grabbed his arm, all but squealing in excitement.
"Oh, Severus, look!" she exclaimed, her face alight with glee, her finger pointing in the direction of a white and blue van with pictures and words imprinted along its side. There were several people, mostly children, standing next to it, as if waiting for something.
"What is it?" he asked hesitantly, as if he were unsure if he truly wanted to know the answer.
"It's the ice cream van! Oh, I remember my parents bringing me here, and afterwards they would buy me an ice cream. It was always so lovely," she explained, her voice tapering to a whisper, and her eyes misting as she reminisced.
"It's a tradition, then?" Severus asked, rolling his eyes when she clung to his arm with both hands, her wide brown eyes instantly filled with hopeful anticipation. He motioned toward the van. "All right, fine," he acquiesced, shaking his head as she immediately dragged him toward the queue.
As they waited to purchase Hermione's ice cream, her mind was awhirl with questions. She had thoroughly enjoyed her day with Severus and had to admit she would love to do it again sometime in the near future. She was a tad worried about her newly discovered attraction to him, although her traitorous thoughts reminded her that she had been attracted to him for quite some time she simply had not been in a position to do anything about it before ...
***
Severus, meanwhile, was wishing the day would never end. He had stopped by Gringotts earlier in the day to exchange a few Galleons into Muggle currency with the intentions of inviting her to dinner. Now he was wondering if it might be too soon they had spent the entire afternoon together, after all or Hermione might wish to return home. He was still debating with himself when suddenly they reached the front of the line. Hermione ordered her treat, and Severus swiftly moved to pay the young man before she could open her handbag, pulling out a random note from his pocket.
It was obviously a mistake. The man inside the van eyed him curiously, and Severus looked at the note. Fifty pounds? Dunderheaded goblins! The man inside insisted he could not provide change for such a large amount. Thinking quickly, Severus looked at the line behind him and said, "Keep it. It should be enough to pay for the rest of the children in line, should it not?" The man assured him that yes, it would, and Severus nodded, leading Hermione away from the van. He saw the amused look Hermione was giving him, and with a slight sneer, informed her, "It was only to put a stop to the incessant whinging of all those children."
She did not appear to be convinced.
***
They continued walking side-by-side toward the Apparition point near the Houses of Parliament, Hermione eating her treat as she considered her feelings regarding Severus. Did she want to pursue a relationship with him? What if it ruined their friendship? Was it worth the risk? Her rapidly melting ice cream dripped onto her hand, and she mindlessly licked it away, completely absorbed in her thoughts.
***
Severus almost groaned aloud as he surreptitiously glanced at Hermione, only to see her delicate pink tongue emerge from between rose-coloured lips to lick a drop of the melting confection from the back of her hand. Good gods, she was going to be the death of him.
"Was this a date, Severus?" Hermione asked suddenly, surprising them both. He looked at her for a moment, but her eyes remained steadfastly on the ice cream she was holding. He had no idea how to respond to her. What did she want to hear?
"If you'd like," he finally answered, refusing to look in her direction.
Hermione was quiet as they continued walking. Suddenly, he felt her small hand slip into his, and she said, "I think I would like that, I mean."
He did look at her then; a small smile curved her lips as she continued to eat her treat. Severus' eyes dropped to their clasped hands. He interlaced their fingers and squeezed lightly. "As would I."
They strolled hand-in-hand along the Thames in companionable silence as Hermione continued to lick her ice cream, simply enjoying being together.
A/N: Links to the artwork mentioned in this chapter:
Lady Hamilton as Circe
http://www.tate.org.uk/britain/explore/large_img.jsp?workid=12742
Ophelia
http://www.tate.org.uk/britain/explore/large_img.jsp?workid=9506
Study of a Dead Child, the Artist's Son
http://www.tate.org.uk/britain/explore/large_img.jsp?workid=16264
*When I uploaded this chapter, the Tate Britain site was not working. Hopefully, they will have it up and running again, soon.
For more information on Lady Hamilton:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Emma,_Lady_Hamilton
Up next ... a party at the Burrow! Three people learn about the new relationship. How do they react?
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142 Reviews | 6.45/10 Average
Lovely & charming bit of fluff. Really good for the soul. The best part is the revelation of Luna - utterly briiliant! Very clever.
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Thank you so much!
Hehe, I loved the ending- I'd privately wondered if Luna was just making something up at first, since she didn't think they should marry, but I guess since there was a real prophesy, it still counts. ;)
Also, curious why you chose to talk about the paintings in Tate that you did. Any specific reason for each one?
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Thank you for reviewing!You know, there was a reason for each painting chosen, but I wrote the story so long ago, that I'm afraid I don't recall the specifics. I know the Lady Hamilton portrait reminded me of Hermione, and the story behind it intrigued me. The others I think caught my attention because of the stories attached, but I can't remember exactly. I know I spent hours looking through the Tate Britain website looking for just the right the ones. lolThanks again!
Severus is making a real effort to open up, and Hermione ts responding, on to the Tate.
Looks like Severus will be going,"a wooing" sooner than he thinks.
Severus is not the problem, Hermione is not one to let go of a dream easily, and that is what the reationship with Ron is , a dream of how she wants it to be.l
Oh Hermione, you touched a nerve.
Luna is a very wise person, but I don't think Hermione will listen to her.
I love this!!!! XD
What a lovely, well-written story!!
Delightful story, beautifully told. I love this Snape, I've always thought of his snarky nature as a guise to prevent anyone getting close enough to find out his long held secrets. I think it would have made him lonely, but I always thought he would be a kind lover, not a cruel one.
I have thoroughly enjoyed the story, many thanks for writing it.
Wonderful! Loved all the high-jinx, even though the 'adults' were rather rude, lol
Ruh-roh! Oh Ron...
I'm in the middle of the story, and I have to tell you, I really didn't like this chapter. Hermione was an idiot! I don't see how she couldn't believe in her prophecy. Stubbornness, I guess? I mean, she's saying Luna isn't a seer, well, what makes a person a seer if not a prophecy? Like, does she think someon'e supposed to get a license or an honorary membership card? Does it show up in their Xrays? "Authentic Seer". I don't know how she knows for certain Luna's not.
And crying like that? It was John Lennon who sang "Life is what happens when you're busy making other plans". Sorry Hermione, but you DO NOT control everything that happens to you in your own life just because you want things to happen a certain way. She's very narrow minded in her perspective and comes off childish because of it.
Great twist at the end! Lovely, lovely little story!!
Such a cute story!!!! Ver sweet!
:)
ooh I loved this chapter being from Luna's pov
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Thank you! I had a great time writing Luna in this fic. I enjoyed it so much, I wrote the epilogue from her POV, too, and then gave her her own story. LOL She's so much fun to write! I'm so glad you enjoyed her.
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Thank you! I had a great time writing Luna in this fic. I enjoyed it so much, I wrote the epilogue from her POV, too, and then gave her her own story. LOL She's so much fun to write! I'm so glad you enjoyed her.
Great chapter. I need to come read it again.
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Thank you! This story was my first multi-chaptered, and I remember agonizing over this chapter, wanting Snape to be just right. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. :)
What a delightful story! I like your take on Luna. Too often, she comes off as either just weird, or a goody-two-shoes. In this story, she's still has a warm, open heart, but a bit of a crafty mind :D
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked my Luna. I had such a great time writing her -- she's just so much fun, espeically when given a bit of a cunning streak. ;)Thanks, again!
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked my Luna. I had such a great time writing her -- she's just so much fun, espeically when given a bit of a cunning streak. ;)Thanks, again!
I love your depiction of Luna! Who would have thought there was so much to the lovely Loony Luna Lovegood? She is a very clever witch, she is.Severus and Hermione have found each other, and Luna and Draco have embarked on their own journey together. The perfect ending to a perfect story!I really enjoyed this tale of love found and brought to completion. Along the way, when I read some of the discussions among the other members of the Order, I remember wondering if Ginny had written the wrong word when she wrote "sun." Surely the word could have been "son." And that would have made a world of difference! You see, I am partial to our Potions Master, and I want only the very best for him. AND that is precisely what you have given me -- and Severus and Hermione!Thank you for a throughly enjoyable story!! Well done!!Beth
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Thank you so much for all the lovely reviews and comments throughout. Luna was just so much fun to write; so much, in fact, that I decided to write her story. I'm still in the midst of writing it, but the first four chapters are posted here at TPP. I'm truly glad you enjoyed reading the story! Thanks, again!
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Thank you so much for all the lovely reviews and comments throughout. Luna was just so much fun to write; so much, in fact, that I decided to write her story. I'm still in the midst of writing it, but the first four chapters are posted here at TPP. I'm truly glad you enjoyed reading the story! Thanks, again!
Charlie is gay? Well, I certainly didn't see that coming. You are just full of surprises!I got chills when I read this passage:“Take me home, Severus,” she whispered.He leant back to see her face. “Home?” he asked.Hermione nodded. “Yes, to your flat, to my room, to the cottage in Dorset …. It doesn’t matter; wherever you are is home to me.”The scene in the library was brilliant! It has it all -- fear followed by confusion, followed by hope, followed by realization, followed by certainty. Wore me out, I tell you!Nice, nice, NICE!Beth
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed the conclusion! :D
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed the conclusion! :D
The unhurried pace with which you have Severus minister to Hermione's needs is perfect. He is sincere in his want of her, but patient in his pursuit of her, mindful of her needs and wants. His delicate treatment of her, of being sure that he understands exactly want she wants, is so comforting. With unthreatening questions, Severus helps her to voice exactly what she wants, the better to meet her needs, not to merely service his own. He is such a patient lover -- considerate, kind, unhurried, and passionate. The following passage shows just how much he wants to please her, to meet her needs and wants, not just his own:Hermione’s nervous babbling broke him from his reverie. “It’s been a while since I’ve been here – last summer I believe. Sorry about the bit of dust. Erm … this is obviously the sitting room – it is my favourite room in the house – and the kitchen is through that door over there. There is a small study over this way, and up the stairs are two b-bedrooms.”Severus covered his amused smile with his hand as he listened to Hermione stumble over the word. Perhaps it was time to determine her expectations for this holiday.“It is already three o’clock,” he said. “Why don’t we unpack and settle in a bit. We can go exploring tomorrow.” He was careful to keep both his tone and expression completely neutral.“Oh, of course! Yes, an excellent idea, really,” she mumbled, fidgeting with her hands. She raised a slightly unsteady hand toward the staircase, her cheeks a lovely shade of pink, before she hastened up the steps and into the hallway, Severus following closely behind her.“This is my room,” Hermione said, indicating the door to his immediate right. “Across the hall is the guest room, and the other door is the loo.” Severus said nothing; instead he simply nodded, the ornery side of him wanting to see what she would say or do next. He was not to be disappointed.“You may put your things in whichever room you like.” His lips twitched as she steadfastly looked anywhere but at him, the pink in her cheeks deepening to a flaming red. He needed to know more, however.“Exactly what is it you want, Hermione?” he asked, intentionally deepening his voice to a devastating purr.She appeared as if she wished the floor would open up and swallow her whole. Her eyes were screwed tightly shut, and her blush spread down her neck to the exposed skin of her chest. She took a deep breath and straightened her spine; she then opened her eyes to resolutely meet his gaze. “I want us to share a bed.”Well, that was better, if not quite specific.Wishing to ease some of her discomfort, Severus pulled her into his arms, gratified at the ease with which she came to him. Stroking her back soothingly, Severus buried his nose in her hair and asked, “You wish to lie with me?”He felt Hermione nod against his chest. With a small smile, he threaded the fingers of one hand into her hair, and with a gentle tug, tilted back her head. Tenderly, he kissed her. “I believe that can be arranged.”The way you have written their joining is perfect in its depth of feeling and in showing how much Severus wants Hermione to know she is loved. No schoolboy rutting for release, he is gentle and reassuring in his love making, and she responds willingly.A very well written chapter! Thank you!Beth
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Thank you so much for the lovely review! I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter--I remember being so nervous while writing it, but really wanting the scenes to be meaningful, not just "insert tab A into slot B." It's so nice to hear that I was able to accomplish that. Thanks, again!
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Thank you so much for the lovely review! I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter--I remember being so nervous while writing it, but really wanting the scenes to be meaningful, not just "insert tab A into slot B." It's so nice to hear that I was able to accomplish that. Thanks, again!
Why oh why can't Ron contain himself? *Sigh*Well, I think Severus will be up to any challenge!Great story!!!Beth
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Isn't that always the question? LOL Thank you!!
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Isn't that always the question? LOL Thank you!!
Dear Merlin, she thought, what is happening to me?Dear Merlin, he thought, what is happening to me?See how much alike they are? This just feels right!Ice cream and a date -- who could ask for more?Lovely chapter!Beth
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter! :D
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter! :D
I enjoy the little details you include in your narrative, such as: "He saw his wall clock reflected in the glass and smiled inwardly." These seemingly small details flesh out a story wonderfully well, I think.And I am so happy that Severus and Hermione have begun "lunch dates," and now they are on their way to Tate Britain. Sweet Merlin! Nice.Beth
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
You have me grinning from ear to ear, I tell you! Thank you so much for noticing those small details! :DThe next chapter is my favorite, I think. I hope you enjoy it!
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
You have me grinning from ear to ear, I tell you! Thank you so much for noticing those small details! :DThe next chapter is my favorite, I think. I hope you enjoy it!
I like the way you have written Luna's character. I always liked her, and it is good to "see" this side of her.Hermione and Ron's decision to end their engagement was sad for both of them, but I know, just like they do, it was the only right thing to do.Now ..... it's time for SEVERUS !!! I just love Severus the bestest of all.And I love this story! Beth
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Thank you so much! I really grew to love Luna while writing this story, so I'm so glad you're enjoying her. I had a great time fleshing out her character.Yes, Ron and Hermione just weren't meant to be. And it's definitely time for Severus! Woo hoo!Thanks, again! :D
Response from sshg316 (Author of Enraptured)
Thank you so much! I really grew to love Luna while writing this story, so I'm so glad you're enjoying her. I had a great time fleshing out her character.Yes, Ron and Hermione just weren't meant to be. And it's definitely time for Severus! Woo hoo!Thanks, again! :D