OMG!  I laughed out loud - in Starbucks- people gave me funny looks.  That was wonderfully funny.  I loved Parvati's pov, especially watching at typical SS/HG through the eyes of someone else.  A very well done story.

That was a really good story. I didn't understand what was going on 'till you started calling The Enemy Poudle. Then It got alot clearer. Wonderfull.

This was very neat! I didn't get who it was until near the end. It was cool to see glimpses of Severus and Hermione through someone elses eyes. Recc'd on WIKTT, thanks!

What a great story, poor Parvati or is that poor Seamus, having to live up to Severus' standards for evermore.  Thanks for the nod to this the WIKTT group.

Very well done. Your story was very well crafted. I wasn't sure who the diarist was until, I think, about the 2nd or 3rd chapter. You kept me guessing. You captured that quality of teen-aged crush very well. Good job.

What a brilliant story, I am very happy that someone was smart enough to give it high praise on the "potter-list". Truly brilliant writing!!!
(and that very last sentence really made the story even better:-))

Truly wonderful.  Thank you for such an amazing and original story.

Interesting approach. Although it makes me feel a bit of pity for poor Seamus, as he will be living in the shadow of her first love forevermore lest the young maiden get over the past and search for the future.


That was a very long sentence. LOL

Cute story.

One more beautiful story from you. Thanks!!

It's amazing how much your narrator notices without being able to understand the situation.  Kind of reminds me of myself when I was about eighteen, really,  though none of my journal entries from that time are quite that chirpy.  You're really showing this character's tendency to re-interpret everything according to her own obsessive beliefs; she even seems a bit scary sometimes with the depth of her desperation.  Keep up the good work.

Incidentally, I  must admit that before I read your end notes I wondered a bit about the effects of Ceilur; it reminded me of the Scottish Gaelic word ceilidh (or ceili in Irish Gaelic, I believe), which refers to a kind of party, usually involving live music--which is often provided by guests who happen to play musical instruments and/or sing--and a lot of dancing.  Imagine the look on Snape's face if one of the students had accidentally let that one fly!

I think it is hilarious how she is interpreting the looks of others as she walks into a room as looks of appreciation, when in fact, I imagine it to be looks of horror.  I mean, all those hairstyles ... I imagine her looking very much like a ... well, a poodle. 

Oh, I really wish I could see those hair styles   

I'm really enjoying this story, it's a very refreshing take on the ship! Looking forward to more.

Very interesting so far.  I suspected that it wasn't Hermione's voice from the start--when, after all, would she start sounding like a hyperactive ten-year-old with her first crush?  You've portrayed the narrator's desperation very well, and though you show us hints of what might actually be going on the narrator herself appears to be almost totally clueless (though I wonder exactly how clueless, considering her use of the term the Enemy).  All in all, good work; I look forward to seeing more of this story.

Puzzling at first until I quickly realized it couldn't possibly be Hermione.  Duh.  Although Harry and Ron taking the person to Madam Pomprey is what had me thrown.  I like the format, with the writer's desperation and obsession flowing through the entries. 

"The man (or woman) who knows not--and doesn't know that he knows not--is a fool: scorn him (or in this case, her)!"  Entertaining and yes, just a bit silly... but I will enjoy reading more nonetheless!

Wow!!  I like this!  I have an idea!  Why don't you do the next chapter with Severus writing in his journal!  It would be great!  Update soon!

Cheers,

This was a lot of fun to read, and I enjoyed the unique formatting.  I do not believe I have ever read a Potions Under Duress story from a different character's POV.  It's interesting to watch SS/HG from an outsider's (rather envious) view.  There will be more, right?

good beginning. waiting for more. p

Wonderfully done, and the perspective it was given from was funny and simply delicious. Thank you very much.

It seems that Parvati still has a lot of maturing to do. (If not, she's really SOL!).  Nice wrap up in the epilogue.  Thanks for sharing your sense of humor and perspective. 

I could agree with the other reviewers who said that they felt sorry for Parvati--but I won't, and I don't!  Hah! Your story was a great example of using humor to lampoon our worst faults.  It's ironic that people can be so blind to the truth when it confilicts with what they want.  I agree with the reviewer who said teens are so egocentric--I think most of us went through that phase.  It is amusing (now) to look back and be able to poke fun at the way we once were.  (Hopefully, we have/will all move past that self-centered stage of development into maturity!!)Thanks for the laughs.

A great ending of a great and very, very funny story!

A good ending for an interesting story.  Brava!

A lovely little story.