Chapter Fourteen - Paradise Lost

OMG! I LOVED THIS! I COULDN'T STOP READING! this was SO AWESOME! MiyatsuxAiko 4ever! I was so glad to see that you are planning a sequel! It doesn't matter how long it takes, I will NEVER be separated from the Fujitaka family....Miyatsu doesn't have a last name, does he? whatever. :D I LOVED THIS! THANK YOU FOR A WONDERFUL TIME AWAY FROM REALITY! "Cheers!!!" 1000000000000000000000000/5 stars

Wow. I can't believe this is finally over. It was such a wonderful story, so romantic and full of adventure and mystery, I just loved it. It should definitely, definitely be published.I don't suppose there's hope for a sequel, is there? *pleading eyes*

Very sweet reunion.  They deserve that peace after all they've been through.

For some reason, I suspect Sakaki's easy acceptance of their relationship.  That may have more to do with my cynical nature than anything you've written, though.  I was surprised that Suzu reacted quite that strongly, but I think it works for that reason.

This chapter is so awesome!  Of course, the reunion was sweet--the high emotion brought me to tears--but I also loved how the youngsters' personalities all worked together, especially M&M, that this whole horrific experience of the last few chapters has bonded them more firmly, and now they truely are soul-mates.

I've already read this chapter four times; it is one of my favorites. 

Beautiful chapter!  I love the way you've shown all of the family interaction.  From the moment Aiko's mom brought out her old little kitten, it's been neat to see them so supportive, and I love how both of her parents see their family with the same uncondtional love as if they were all 100% human.

I love M&M finishing each other's sentences.  I love how Montaro is always so impulsive, leaving Mieko to explain things and then catch up.  It shows how perfectly in tune they are with each other.  Again, all of the interaction between the siblings and the older generations are so real.  You've shown that though the children are 'clones,' they have different personalities.

You've dealt with some tough things in this chapter with just the right touches.  Yutaka is the best dad ever!

Somehow I don't trust Sakaki...

The bonding is an interesting idea. :)

Poor Sakaki.  It's interesting that he can't translate the loss he felt when Koneko died to the more deep feelings of feline mates.  It also makes me wonder if maybe Suzu's sedative wasn't as safe as they'd thought, and that was when Koneko had died.

And yay for Mieko and Montaro.  They'll never have to be lonely like Miyatsu was.  That's awesome.

Oh, I love how the description of the kittens is just like how she imagined they would be all of those years ago.  It looks like they are good parents.

I am still loving this story very much. It's great to see Miyatsu and Aiko having a family of their own. :-)Happy new year and good luck with getting this published!

I haven't heard that song in a long time, and it is very evokative of the peacefulness of spring.  The first couple of sections are so beautiful with Miyatsu being reunited with some happy memories of his past and his sweet birthday gift to Aiko.

But Sakaki was scary!  I wondered how Miyatsu kept Aiko from being hurt by all of that broken glass.  I'm glad they're getting away from him.

Suzu really is a piece of work!  Sakaki's right about her being a hypocrite.  Of course Miyatsu is romantic.  He is so much more than he seems, and Sakaki's intensity is unnerving.

Oh, how sad for them to be separated, but I like the way you did each of her parents' responses.  I usually scoff when people use 'soul mates', but you've done a good job actually showing us that they are joined.  I love that her mother brought her little kitten down for her.  That Aiko made her own little Miyu as a child is an excellent reminder of the length of their connection.

Well, ouch.  But at least Sakaki was cool about it.

Sorry I haven't reviewed in weeks.  Sooo busy.

Oh, the water shield is cool--I love the details, and I love how he admits that she made him feel special.  I am such a sucker for stories with telepathic lovers, and this is so amazing!  I guess I don't see the squick because I see it as strictly SciFi, as though he were a sentient alien.  And since I've been watching Star Trek since before I could read and reading SciFi since I was old enough to be turned loose unchaperoned in a library, it seems normal to me, and (as I said before) telepathic is my favorite kind.

“Exactly like the wild Purshans,"

Way to build anticipation! And their first non-kiss was so sweet, the way he started purring.

The tone of their encounter was perfect, and the pillow talk was touching.  It felt very genuine, like echoes of every couple that has problems with fertility.

I was so relieved when she finally said she loved him back.  Now I get to read the next chapter.

Oh, he loves her!

Watching Aiko come to terms with her emotions and desires was interesting.  I can kind of begin to see what the long story is going to be, freeing Miyatsu from Sakaki and doing the cloning.

I DO hope we'll get a new chapter soon. Now that she knows... and I'm very afraid concerning all the evilness you've probably still planned for them. :-/

*is speechless* *takes another moment* That was unexpected (only because by the third chapter, I forgot this was higher-rated) and hot.  I'm so glad that the next chapter is in the queue because I'm really curious now about them. I'm so glad she decided to go out there and comfort him.  This story is almost as fascinating for what it doesn't say as what it does.

Oh, another clever twist.  She's lucky that Sakaki feels that kindship with Miyatsu.  This is so neat!

This is amazing, his mind reaching hers and his purring when they embraced.  I love how she helped him to renew their friendship. 

And I'm blinking back tears myself.  I think I've just gotten hooked on your world.

THIS IS A WONDERFUL STORY. I WAS NOT SO SURE TO START WITH, BUT YOU HOOKED ME! GOOD CHARACTERS AND DRAMA GALORE. I LIKE FURRY FICTION AND TPP WAS THE LAST PLACE I EXPECTED TO FIND IT . BUT THIS IS GOOD. HOPE YOU PUT UP THE SEQUEL HERE TOO (HINT, HINT).READ SOME OF YOUR OTHERS TOO & LIKE THEM TOO. GOOD LUCK GETTING PUBLISHED & KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK! JIM  

I've enjoyed this story immensely so far - very intelligent SF. What's more, you've managed with the first chapter what many published books haven't managed this year: you've made me care about your heroes! I want to know what happens next and I want both of them to be all right.Great job. Keep writing and good luck for when you try to get published.

I am so surprised that there aren't any reviews yet. The plot is very original and one I am enjoying so much. I cannot wait to see how it progresses.

Um.  Wow.  *fans self *  I can't say that I've ever had that reaction to a documentary, but I've never had a genetically modified hottie asleep on my couch, either!  Beautifully done.