Chapter Eleven - Departure
Chapter 12 of 23
AlisonAiko and Miyatsu now have enough money and are ready to leave for Shima to begin their dream to breed more of the Miyatsu species. Sakaki does not take the news well, having convinced himself that he is in love with Aiko. His feelings towards Miyatsu begin to change to hatred.
ReviewedChapter Eleven Departure
Miyatsu's prediction concerning the Gigantos on the circuit proved correct. Sisyro and Miyatsu had been the two top contenders; with them both out of the running, the Gigantos powered through the rest of the circuit GMAs, winning every battle she fought.
The money Aiko and Miyatsu had amassed grew again, until by the end of that season's circuit they had enough to pay their entire projected requirements, plus an ample reserve besides to live on comfortably.
They had decided the best thing to do was to make all arrangements needed for the move before telling Sakaki. Then it would be a fait accompli, and whether he objected or not, they would leave. A comfortable house was being built for them on Shima, and the staff and laboratory was nearly ready to commence work. They had visited several times to oversee preparations, always one-day trips made on the weekends.
They had even found Miyatsu's foster mother still in residence on the island, now with an orphaned baby Coati in her care. The old Capuchin had been overjoyed to see Miyatsu again, chittering with delight when the big cat enveloped her in a hug. Aiko could feel his delight at seeing his "mother" again. The Capuchin had followed them about for the rest of the day, occasionally touching and patting her huge "son" fondly, and when the time had come to leave, Miyatsu had used his psychic ability to let her know that he would be back to visit her again, often.
And in the meantime, Miyatsu continued to refine his powers in the Raikatuji Stadium while Aiko worked on her various research projects.
*
Spring had arrived again, and the cherry trees of Kagoshima were covered with fluffy masses of flowers. Miyatsu and Aiko walked to the office one Friday morning, holding hands as they strolled beneath the fragrant cherry trees planted around the Raikatuji Centre, and a snatch of song from the Sakura Festival floated into Aiko's mind. She hummed for a second, and then began to sing it softly.
"Sakura, sakura. Noyamamo satomo.
Miwatasu kagiri.
Kasumi-ka, kumo-ka. Asahi-ni niou.
Sakura, sakura. Hanazakari."
("Cherry blossoms, cherry blossoms. On mountains, in villages.
As far as you can see.
Looking like fog or cloud. Fragrant in the morning sun.
Cherry blossoms, cherry blossoms. In full bloom.")
Miyatsu listened intently. On impulse he reached up to pick one of the flower-filled branches. As the closest was still slightly above even his impressive reach, he let his telekinesis levitate him into the air. His feet left the ground until he was hovering half a meter up. He extended one claw and carefully snicked the branch off the tree with the razor-sharp edge, then allowed himself to descend once more to the ground. He presented the branch to Aiko.
"Happy birthday, my mate."
Aiko accepted the gift with equal seriousness. "Thank you, Miyu. But you've already given me a gift our house on Shima is finished."
Miyatsu nodded. "The house is something for both of us. The flowers are from me to you."
"It's your birthday too," Aiko reminded him. "I should give you a gift."
Miyatsu shook his head. "A knot of cells being put into a glass jar isn't the same thing as being born."
"It doesn't matter how you started life. I'm just glad you're here." Aiko stood on tiptoe and rubbed her cheek against his. "Let this be from me."
Miyatsu put one arm around her waist as they resumed walking. "You are my gift, every day of my life."
In her office Aiko was putting the flower-filled branch in a vase of water when Sakaki arrived.
"Hello, Sakaki," Aiko greeted him. "This is my birthday present from Miyatsu. Aren't they lovely?"
"Happy birthday Aiko! I did remember, I've got your file." His eyes swept the flowers sardonically, remembering Suzu's comment about dead mice.
"We're going to have a party tomorrow," Miyatsu told Sakaki. He didn't mention that the pair had plans to visit Shima that evening to see how preparations were progressing. They intended to live in their new house for the first time over the weekend before returning on Sunday evening. Aiko's parents would be staying with them, too, to see how island life suited them. Aiko was positive once her father saw the lab, he wouldn't want to leave. And she was equally sure that the subtropical spring on Shima would be just the thing to bring the color back into her mother's face.
"Oh, a party? You know I love parties. I am invited, aren't I?"
"We... we're going to my parents," Aiko invented quickly. "Just a small family function, nothing fancy. You and Suzu wouldn't enjoy it."
"Oh," Sakaki said, suddenly remembering that he would be expected to bring Suzu along. And there was no way she'd agree to go to anything planned for Aiko. He gave in with as much good grace as he could muster. "Well, have fun. What are you doing today, Miyatsu?"
"I'm still trying to master that flame-shielding technique. It's difficult."
"Mm, I would be inclined to say impossible," Sakaki said. "I've never heard of it being done before."
"Nothing's impossible," Miyatsu answered. "I intend to keep trying until I can block fire." He pushed away from where he had been leaning against Aiko's desk. "I'd better go and get started. Do you want to come and watch, Sakaki?"
"No, you go ahead. I may come down later in the morning. I've got a few things to do first."
"All right." Miyatsu gathered Aiko in his arms, lifted her gently off the ground and nuzzled her nose to nose before rubbing cheeks lovingly. "I'll see you later, my little mate."
Sakaki watched Aiko who was watching Miyatsu as he padded from the office. Her eyes followed his tall form until he disappeared around the corner of the corridor.
She returned her attention to Sakaki, her eyes shining, a small smile playing about her lips.
"He's back to full health now," she commented. "He regained the weight and muscle tone he lost and is as strong as ever. Doesn't he look great?"
"He does. He looked like a scruffy feral cat towards the end of the circuit."
"He just needed to come home," Aiko answered smugly.
"Now, you and I both know that's not the reason," Sakaki said teasingly. "It was you he was pining for, not home. Typical cat GMA, missing his master." He gestured to the desktop where Miyatsu had been leaning. Long strands of orange and black-tipped hair had been left. "He's shedding?"
"Losing his winter coat," Aiko said. She swept the fur into her hand and dropped it in her wastepaper bin. "This morning before we came in, I brushed him, but I must have missed a bit." She grinned. "I've had to shake out our sheets every morning for a week before I can make the bed. Cat hair everywhere!"
Sakaki tried to chuckle with her, but his breath caught painfully in his throat at the thought of Aiko and Miyatsu sharing a bed, talking and snuggling intimately, making love....
The now-familiar envy grew painfully in his heart like a swelling bitter bubble.
"Speaking of cats, where's Koneko?" Aiko asked, suddenly realizing that Sakaki's loyal shadow wasn't with him.
"She's at the labs today. I waited with her while one of the staff put her under. They're taking a bone biopsy for a new GMA I'm thinking of creating."
Aiko frowned. "Pershans have a bad reaction to sedative."
"This is a drug Suzu and her team were working on before the we left for the circuit. They developed it especially for use on that breed. It will make her drowsy for a few hours, but apart from that there should be no side effects."
"What's the new GMA?"
"Just an idea I'm playing with. The researchers will let me know if it's feasible after they've studied the biopsy." He smiled at Aiko. "That's enough about work. It's your birthday, and I have a present for you too."
"You do? That's very kind of you, Sakaki."
"Not at all. It's in my office. Come on upstairs and I'll give it to you."
*
Sakaki's luxurious office was on the top floor of the Raikatuji Building, commanding an impressive panorama of Kagoshima city in the distance from one huge picture window, while from another the wide blue sweep of the sea disappeared into the hazy distance.
Sakaki took a flat velvet-covered box from a locked drawer in his desk. "Here you are, Aiko. Happy birthday from me."
Aiko opened the box. A beautiful diamond necklace and matching ring sparkled inside. She drew a quick breath and tentatively touched the gems, then looked back at Sakaki in awe. "Sakaki, are these... real?"
Sakaki grinned, pleased with her reaction. "Of course. Why would I give you fakes?"
Aiko stared at him. "Why would you give me the real thing?"
Sakaki's face fell. "You don't like them?"
"I love them, but -- Sakaki, they're diamonds! I can't accept..."
"Just try them on once before you refuse, Aiko. I'd love to see how they look on you. You're Miyatsu's mate; that makes you my -- my sister, you're family. I like to give my family nice things."
Aiko felt puzzled. The way he had said that sounded almost as if he felt distaste at his relationship to Miyatsu. Yet his face showed nothing but honest disappointment that she didn't want his gift. She looked back at the jewelry, then a little uncertainly she drew the necklace from its box. The pendant diamond sparkled on its gold chain.
Putting the box on the desk, she tried to put the necklace on, but the catch was stiff and difficult.
Sakaki smiled. "Here," he offered. "Let me."
He stepped behind her, lifted her hair with one hand and gently did the necklace up. It seemed to Aiko he stood for a moment longer than was needed. Her innate empathic sense began to prickle, as if trying to warn her of something. At any rate, it made her slightly uncomfortable to have Sakaki standing so close behind her. She stepped away and turned to face him. His face was very serious.
"You look lovely," he said. His voice was a little husky. "Put the ring on too. It would please me very much."
Aiko tried to ignore the sense of foreboding she felt. She told herself it was silly; what harm could it do to at least try the ring? She slipped it on, and then went to look at herself in the mirror hanging on one wall. She touched the diamond in fascination, then with a sigh, removed the necklace and ring and returned them carefully to the box.
Sakaki stared at her in confusion. "What...?"
Aiko shook her head. "I'm sorry, Sakaki, but this is too expensive a gift for me to feel comfortable accepting. You're very sweet to get it, but it's not for me."
Sakaki seemed to be having trouble understanding. "Suzu would jump through flaming hoops to get a set like that," he said in bewildered tones. "But you hand it back like it means nothing. Yet you were so happy with the cherry blossoms Miyatsu gave you earlier. How can flowers compete with diamonds?" He stopped, drawing a deep breath. "What do you want, Aiko?" he demanded. "Just tell me, and I'll get it for you. It doesn't matter how much it costs or how difficult it is to get, just name it and it's yours."
"Sakaki, money isn't the issue. I appreciate that you went to the effort of buying me a gift. But you need to realize it's not appropriate. I'm still your employee, even if I am your brother's wife. There's only one thing I want from you." She stopped, biting her lip uncertainly.
"What is it?" Sakaki urged. He went to stand beside her, and smiled down at her. "What's your heart's desire, Aiko? Please tell me, and I'll give it to you. Whatever it is, I swear you'll have it!"
Aiko gazed up at him for a second, and then making up her mind, nodded. "Miyatsu and I were going to tell you together on Monday, but this is probably a good opportunity. We want to go to Shima to create more of Miyatsu's species. I know this will come as a shock to you, Sakaki, and please believe me, we don't want to hurt you. We have enough money now to pay you back the original investment and costs from creating Miyatsu. We want to give you that, so that you don't lose the money. But we'd really like to leave with your blessing."
Sakaki was staring at Aiko wide-eyed. Aiko again felt that prickling sense of warning.
"You're leaving?" he whispered incredulously.
"Sakaki, please understand. You know Miyatsu and I both love you: we think of you as our brother. But Miyatsu can't go on being a slave. He has his own destiny, he needs to be able to make his future in the world... "
"What about me?" Sakaki yelled suddenly, making her jump. "Do you think I'm about to take some measly pay-off and just wave goodbye?" He grabbed Aiko's arms in a painful grip. "Did you imagine I would meekly watch you both fly off into the sunset? Did you?"
Aiko struggled, trying to break his grip. His fingers were digging in painfully through her light summer blouse, and she was frightened by his intensity. She hadn't imagined he'd react this badly to the news that Miyatsu wanted to leave.
"Sakaki, please!" she cried out. "That hurts!"
Sakaki shook her, his face twisted, his eyes burning fiercely. "Hurts? Good, I'm glad, because I'm hurt too, Aiko! You're not going anywhere. Do you hear me? I won't let you... "
And abruptly he jerked her against him and kissed her, a hard, hurting kiss.
Aiko froze for a second in shocked surprise, then she fought against him, but his arms were tightly around her and she couldn't break free. His eyes burned into hers, and she tried to scream as he continued that horrible kiss.
Her fear overwhelmed her, and instinctively her mind flew to Miyatsu. There was a moment's intense disorientation, exactly as there had been the night Miyatsu was injured; the world tilted, a sound like ripping velcro filled her ears, and then it seemed as if she were actually in the stadium, she could see her mate standing suddenly frozen as he felt her panic.
"Miyatsu!" It was a silent scream from her mind to his, bridging the gap between them like an arcing electric spark. "Help me!"
Just as suddenly her mind was again in her body, back in the office. Sakaki was forcing her to the floor, bearing her down with the weight of his body. He was breathing heavily, his hands all over her. Aiko fought with everything she had in her, but it was not enough...
The window imploded and Sakaki was sent flying. Aiko had a surreal second where he seemed to be hanging suspended in the air amongst the shattered glass before he hit the far wall and slumped to the floor.
Then Miyatsu was kneeling beside her. He gathered her in his arms, his face frantic, and Aiko let herself slump gratefully against him. She began to cry with relief, clinging to him, hiding her face in his warm fur. She was shaking, and her mate hugged her against himself, whispering soothing words. Finally Aiko was able to draw a shuddering breath and stop the quivering of her limbs.
"You're not hurt?" Miyatsu murmured, cupping her cheek with one hand as he searched her face.
Aiko shook her head. "I'm all right," she quavered. "I was just -- so scared!" She felt her eyes fill with tears again and brushed them away. She turned to look at Sakaki. He was still where Miyatsu's psychic storm had thrown him, but he was conscious and watching them warily.
Now he was reassured that Aiko was unharmed, Miyatsu turned his attention to Sakaki. On all fours he approached the man, menace implicit in every line of his body. The fur bristled up along his back, and a low rumble of anger sounded deep in his throat. The barely-contained psychic energy of his rage thrummed in the air. For the first time, Aiko saw a ripple of fear cross Sakaki's face as he realized just how dangerous his fighting GMA could be.
Aiko could feel a wretched sense of betrayal battling with the anger emanating from Miyatsu, a feeling that mirrored her own emotions towards Sakaki. He stopped a few paces away from Sakaki, still on all fours, his muscles bunched and tense, as if he was only barely able to keep himself from leaping and tearing. His long claws were extended, hooked and sharp as razors. Sakaki sat very still, his eyes wide, his back pressed tight against the wall behind him.
"Only the fact that you're my brother keeps you alive," Miyatsu snarled. The growling increased in pitch, and then his voice cracked out like a whip, making Sakaki flinch. "What were you thinking?"
Sakaki huddled in on himself, his fear of the big cat in front of him obvious. "I'm sorry, I'm sorry!" he cried out beseechingly. "Miyatsu -- Aiko -- please believe me!"
Aiko got to her feet and slowly moved to stand beside her mate. "Sakaki, why did you do that?" she asked. Her voice still quavered with reaction, and she crossed her arms defensively about herself, rubbing at the painful bruises his fingers had left there.
Sakaki stared at her. "You're going," he said shakily. "You're leaving me! I went crazy, I don't know, I just thought -- I had to convince you to stay, somehow... " His voice trailed off. "I know you can never forgive me," he whispered. "But I never meant to hurt you, Aiko." He hung his head dejectedly.
Aiko kneeled down, one arm around Miyatsu's shoulders. Miyatsu's fur was settling again; the snarl of rage had subsided. He settled onto his haunches, retracting his fearsome claws but still watchful.
"I don't understand," Miyatsu said slowly.
"Neither do I. How does scaring me half to death convince me to stay?" Aiko asked angrily.
Sakaki shook his head, not meeting their eyes. "I wasn't thinking straight, I felt hurt that you, both of you, would want to leave me. I didn't know what I was doing. All my life, I could get my own way by waving money under people's noses, and on the rare occasion that didn't work, I would bully them into doing what I wanted. I know, I'm a selfish bastard, I'm too used to getting my own way. That's why I didn't know how to react when you said you were going." Now Sakaki looked up at Aiko sadly. "I can't buy you. Clearly you're not interested in money or jewelry. So I -- I think, subconsciously, I decided to use the only other thing that usually works. But that only ended up scaring you. I feel like such an idiot. I love you both. You must know that."
"If you ever hurt my mate again," Miyatsu growled warningly, his tail lashing the floor in angry sweeps, "I won't be so restrained, brother or not. I can see you were hurt and angry when you found out we were leaving, but that doesn't excuse what you did. I felt Aiko's terror from the stadium. She will not be made to feel like that again. Do I make myself clear, Sakaki?"
Sakaki met Miyatsu's eyes. He nodded. "Yes," he answered huskily. "Aiko, I can only repeat how very sorry I am. I didn't mean to scare you. Can I hope you might find the generosity to forgive me? We've been such good friends; it would break my heart to think that my foolish actions had ruined our relationship."
Miyatsu glanced at Aiko.
"You scared me very much, Sakaki," she said slowly. "I -- I don't know how I feel about you at the moment."
Sakaki nodded. "I did say I'd give you anything in my power, Aiko. That still stands. You are both free to go to Shima with my best wishes. You -- said something about paying me back my investment in Miyatsu. Keep the money. Buy yourself something pretty with it." He smiled faintly. "I know you like flowers. Use it to buy some cherry saplings and plant a grove on Shima!"
Aiko truly didn't know yet how she felt; Sakaki's attack had been so alarming and sudden, so unexpected. She was very glad of her psychic connection with her mate, for what would have happened once Sakaki had forced her to the floor if Miyatsu had not come to her aid? She remembered Sakaki's wild eyes and his hot arousal through his clothes, pressing hard against her hip. It was fairly obvious what would have happened next.
But he had been a good friend over the past year, one of the couple's few supporters. Couldn't she forgive him one mistake, especially as there was no real harm done?
He betrayed my trust, she thought. Mine and Miyatsu's. Isn't that harm enough?
But then, as she looked at Sakaki's contrite and frightened face, she knew it did no good to hang onto it.
She nodded. "All right, Sakaki. I do forgive you. You are family, and it's true you've been a good friend." She stood, and Miyatsu rose up to a two-footed stance as well.
He stood for a moment looking down at Sakaki, then finally extended his paw. "Let me help you up," he offered. Aiko could feel that he still had not completely forgiven Sakaki, but was willing to go along with his mate's decision.
Sakaki hesitated briefly, but then took the paw and got to his feet painfully, wincing. His shoes crunched on the shattered pieces of glass all over the carpet. "I'm surprised no bones are broken," he commented. He stared at Miyatsu. "Would you really have -- killed me?"
Miyatsu met his eyes squarely. "If you had hurt my Aiko? Yes, I really would have."
Sakaki sighed, nodding. "When do you plan to leave?" he asked forlornly.
Miyatsu and Aiko glanced at each other. Finally Miyatsu spoke. "We were going to visit the island this evening. We had planned on coming back on Monday to tell you, but since you already know, perhaps we should just go now."
"Oh." Sakaki drew a deep breath. "Well, it sounds as if this is -- goodbye."
"Yes," Miyatsu answered softly. "Goodbye. Brother."
But he did not embrace Sakaki. Aiko could feel Miyatsu's pain, confusion and sadness at Sakaki's actions. She took his paw in silent comfort as they left the office.
*
Sakaki stood staring at the closed door long after the pair had exited, his hands balled into fists of anger at his sides.
That monstrosity, that creature that claimed relationship with him, had turned on him and totally humiliated him, and Sakaki's mind seethed with a dark hatred. Why had Miyatsu not died, like all the other misbegotten experiments? Then Aiko would have been Sakaki's. Instead, she probably hated him now. She had witnessed his weakness and fear in front of Miyatsu. She must despise him.
There had been a moment when Sakaki was kissing her, when it seemed he might have won her over. For she had gone limp and unresisting in his arms, eyes closed, as if submitting. For the briefest of seconds, Sakaki had felt triumph. But almost immediately she had opened her eyes again and started trying to fight him off.
Then Miyatsu had arrived like a vengeful typhoon. He claimed he'd felt Aiko's fear. Sakaki sneered. Aiko had no need to fear him, he was a human, like her. They were the same species and belonged together. But Miyatsu, he was a dangerous animal, and not even natural but a freakish man-made thing, a hopeless mishmash of genetic material with no right to exist.
That hybridized mongrel would always get in the way of any possible relationship Sakaki might have with Aiko. What was it Miyatsu had that Aiko found so attractive, what facet or trait Sakaki lacked?
Perhaps Suzu was right and Aiko was drawn to the exotic and the freakish. But he couldn't truly believe it of her. No, it must be that "psychic connection" Miyatsu boasted of. Something about it had bewitched the poor girl, brainwashing her into believing she was in love with that monster.
Sakaki took a step towards his desk and his shoe crunched on broken glass. He stopped, then lifted his foot and stamped downwards on the jagged shards, hearing them pop and snap under his shoe. Smiling savagely, he continued to grind the glass into the carpet, imagining it was Miyatsu's limp body he was stomping on, lying beneath him lacerated and bleeding.
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32 Reviews | 5.94/10 Average
OMG! I LOVED THIS! I COULDN'T STOP READING! this was SO AWESOME! MiyatsuxAiko 4ever! I was so glad to see that you are planning a sequel! It doesn't matter how long it takes, I will NEVER be separated from the Fujitaka family....Miyatsu doesn't have a last name, does he? whatever. :D I LOVED THIS! THANK YOU FOR A WONDERFUL TIME AWAY FROM REALITY! "Cheers!!!" 1000000000000000000000000/5 stars
Wow. I can't believe this is finally over. It was such a wonderful story, so romantic and full of adventure and mystery, I just loved it. It should definitely, definitely be published.I don't suppose there's hope for a sequel, is there? *pleading eyes*
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Thanks for those nice comments, I'm currently in the process of trying for publication. As to a sequel, well I've had a few ideas, but it will have to wait until I've got more time.I'm glad you liked the story!Alison
Very sweet reunion. They deserve that peace after all they've been through.
For some reason, I suspect Sakaki's easy acceptance of their relationship. That may have more to do with my cynical nature than anything you've written, though. I was surprised that Suzu reacted quite that strongly, but I think it works for that reason.
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Hi
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
, it's nice to hear from you again. Your comment re Suzu was spot on. I won't spoil the story by revealing too much, but she is something of a hypocrite. And as for Sakaki, well ... again, don't want to be a spoiler for my own story.Thanks for your review - I love getting feedback!Alison
This chapter is so awesome! Of course, the reunion was sweet--the high emotion brought me to tears--but I also loved how the youngsters' personalities all worked together, especially M&M, that this whole horrific experience of the last few chapters has bonded them more firmly, and now they truely are soul-mates.
I've already read this chapter four times; it is one of my favorites.
Beautiful chapter! I love the way you've shown all of the family interaction. From the moment Aiko's mom brought out her old little kitten, it's been neat to see them so supportive, and I love how both of her parents see their family with the same uncondtional love as if they were all 100% human.
I love M&M finishing each other's sentences. I love how Montaro is always so impulsive, leaving Mieko to explain things and then catch up. It shows how perfectly in tune they are with each other. Again, all of the interaction between the siblings and the older generations are so real. You've shown that though the children are 'clones,' they have different personalities.
You've dealt with some tough things in this chapter with just the right touches. Yutaka is the best dad ever!
Somehow I don't trust Sakaki...
The bonding is an interesting idea. :)
Poor Sakaki. It's interesting that he can't translate the loss he felt when Koneko died to the more deep feelings of feline mates. It also makes me wonder if maybe Suzu's sedative wasn't as safe as they'd thought, and that was when Koneko had died.
And yay for Mieko and Montaro. They'll never have to be lonely like Miyatsu was. That's awesome.
Oh, I love how the description of the kittens is just like how she imagined they would be all of those years ago. It looks like they are good parents.
I am still loving this story very much. It's great to see Miyatsu and Aiko having a family of their own. :-)Happy new year and good luck with getting this published!
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Hi
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
, it's great to see that you're still following the story! Chapter Twelve brings this story to it's halfway point, showing what Miyatsu and Aiko are doing re: creating his species. From the next chapter the action starts to pick up again. I hope you continue to enjoy it.Alison
I haven't heard that song in a long time, and it is very evokative of the peacefulness of spring. The first couple of sections are so beautiful with Miyatsu being reunited with some happy memories of his past and his sweet birthday gift to Aiko.
But Sakaki was scary! I wondered how Miyatsu kept Aiko from being hurt by all of that broken glass. I'm glad they're getting away from him.
Suzu really is a piece of work! Sakaki's right about her being a hypocrite. Of course Miyatsu is romantic. He is so much more than he seems, and Sakaki's intensity is unnerving.
Oh, how sad for them to be separated, but I like the way you did each of her parents' responses. I usually scoff when people use 'soul mates', but you've done a good job actually showing us that they are joined. I love that her mother brought her little kitten down for her. That Aiko made her own little Miyu as a child is an excellent reminder of the length of their connection.
Well, ouch. But at least Sakaki was cool about it.
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Hi
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
, I'm so glad you've read the last two chapters and let me know that you liked them! Glad I haven't squicked you yet, that's one of the things I worry about with this story, that people won't be able to get past the fact that Miyatsu is three-quarters animal, or as my daughter would say, three species rolled into one. I really liked your "alien" analogy, btw!I didn't realise you're one of the admins, I'll get to work tonight and make the corrections on the next chapter. Yes, Suzu was not happy, was she? And while Sakaki is fine with it *now*, wait until Chapter Ten (mwahahaha!)Thanks for your kind words.Alison
Sorry I haven't reviewed in weeks. Sooo busy.
Oh, the water shield is cool--I love the details, and I love how he admits that she made him feel special. I am such a sucker for stories with telepathic lovers, and this is so amazing! I guess I don't see the squick because I see it as strictly SciFi, as though he were a sentient alien. And since I've been watching Star Trek since before I could read and reading SciFi since I was old enough to be turned loose unchaperoned in a library, it seems normal to me, and (as I said before) telepathic is my favorite kind.
“Exactly like the wild Purshans,"
Way to build anticipation! And their first non-kiss was so sweet, the way he started purring.
The tone of their encounter was perfect, and the pillow talk was touching. It felt very genuine, like echoes of every couple that has problems with fertility.
I was so relieved when she finally said she loved him back. Now I get to read the next chapter.
Oh, he loves her!
Watching Aiko come to terms with her emotions and desires was interesting. I can kind of begin to see what the long story is going to be, freeing Miyatsu from Sakaki and doing the cloning.
I DO hope we'll get a new chapter soon. Now that she knows... and I'm very afraid concerning all the evilness you've probably still planned for them. :-/
*is speechless* *takes another moment* That was unexpected (only because by the third chapter, I forgot this was higher-rated) and hot. I'm so glad that the next chapter is in the queue because I'm really curious now about them. I'm so glad she decided to go out there and comfort him. This story is almost as fascinating for what it doesn't say as what it does.
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Hi
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
, and thanks for all the nice comments so far! I love receiving feedback. I hope you like the rest of the story once it's all posted, as well. The next chapter has just been sent to me for corrections, so I'll do them and get it posted up asap. Alison
Response from WriterMerrin (Reviewer)
From what I read in another review, is it actually complete, so we're just waiting for it to be posted?
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
That's right, it's actually 22 chapters long. But both my beta and I seem to have a blind spot where correct punctuation is concerned (particularly commas! I either put them in the wrong place or leave them out altogether) and typically each chapter needs a good edit before it's posted publicly.Please note: the next chapter has a higher rating than the previous ones. But only to advance the plotline!Alison
Oh, another clever twist. She's lucky that Sakaki feels that kindship with Miyatsu. This is so neat!
This is amazing, his mind reaching hers and his purring when they embraced. I love how she helped him to renew their friendship.
And I'm blinking back tears myself. I think I've just gotten hooked on your world.
THIS IS A WONDERFUL STORY. I WAS NOT SO SURE TO START WITH, BUT YOU HOOKED ME! GOOD CHARACTERS AND DRAMA GALORE. I LIKE FURRY FICTION AND TPP WAS THE LAST PLACE I EXPECTED TO FIND IT . BUT THIS IS GOOD. HOPE YOU PUT UP THE SEQUEL HERE TOO (HINT, HINT).READ SOME OF YOUR OTHERS TOO & LIKE THEM TOO. GOOD LUCK GETTING PUBLISHED & KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK! JIM
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Thanks, Jim! I appreciate your kind comments. I do have plans eventually for a sequel, but that is still a way off in the future, as Real Life leaves me with very little time to write: I'm beginning university in the New Year, and will be studying a lot! However, there will be holidays in which to write, so I'll see what I can do!You might like to go have a look at my DeviantArt gallery, I have the story up there under the title: "The Miyatsu Project" and various artists have done drawings of their interpretations of the characters. Just put Fayzbub DeviantArt into your search engine and it should bring it up - I'd love to see you there!Merry Christmas!Alison
I've enjoyed this story immensely so far - very intelligent SF. What's more, you've managed with the first chapter what many published books haven't managed this year: you've made me care about your heroes! I want to know what happens next and I want both of them to be all right.Great job. Keep writing and good luck for when you try to get published.
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Thanks very much for your nice comments,
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
, I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far! There will be lemons from chapter four onwards, but only where it's integral to the plot. I hope that doesn't squick you.As a matter of fact, I'm hoping to get a manga publisher interested in the story but wanted to try it out on the internet first to gauge the level of interest. Myatsu might be a bit difficult for a manga artist to draw though! Although I've got his general body shape fixed in my head, I have no idea what his face would look like, even though I invented him!Alison
Response from JunoMagic (Reviewer)
Not squicked, no. I feel for Myatsu, and I want him to find comfort and love in his lonely existence.And I'm also very curious about how people will react for professional reasons. I've got a manuscript for a fantasy novel in the works that has a race which are a kind of furry fay living at high altitudes in the mountains. And I have to admit that ever since I read about furry fandom, I've been unsure whether to continue or not... It's difficult enough to write not-quite-human in a plausible and poignant way...Won't publishers frown if they hear that the story was available on the internet? Or are manga publishers cool about that? Oh, and if Myatsu ever gets drawn, please let us know over here. (I'd LOVE to see him.)I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Hi
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
! Best of luck with your novel, BTW, fantasy seems to be the way to go nowadays, it's a big market. I usually write scifi, but there's often a large fantasy element within most of my works.The story is with a publisher at the moment and I've let them know that it's on the internet (I had it on my webpage in total until my site crashed, and I'm s-l-o-w-l-y rebuilding it now!) I'd had up to 20 000 hits on the story, and used that as a "selling point" to get the publisher interested, along with the fact that I've been professionally published for a number of years past. If the publisher decides to go ahead and publish the story, I will of course take the story down. But I'll leave up a note on the vacated story site so that people following the chapters can email me and I'll send them the story in it's entirety.Don't worry, if the story does make it into manga, *everybody* who has ever commented on my story will be told! (And the nice comments will get a free copy from me, hee hee!)It's nice to hear back from you, I only hope you continue to find the story a worthwhile read!Alison
I am so surprised that there aren't any reviews yet. The plot is very original and one I am enjoying so much. I cannot wait to see how it progresses.
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Thanks
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
, I'm glad you're enjoying the story. It's 22 chapters long, I hope you like the whole thing once you've read it all through!Alison
Um. Wow. *fans self * I can't say that I've ever had that reaction to a documentary, but I've never had a genetically modified hottie asleep on my couch, either! Beautifully done.
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Hello
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
, it's nice to meet you! I'm really glad you're enjoying the story so far, and I loved that you thought Miyatsu was a hottie! Thank you for the nice comments, and I hope you continue to like this.Alison
Response from Melenka (Reviewer)
A tall, strong, sensitive guy who purrs? Yeah, that's pretty hot. LOL