Chapter Ten - Three's A Crowd
Chapter 11 of 23
AlisonSakaki is becoming increasingly obsessed with Aiko and Miyatsu's relationship, leading to envy and voyeurism on his part.
ReviewedChapter Ten -- Three's A Crowd
"Sakaki, this is nice of you, but Miyatsu and I would really rather just go home... "
"Nonsense! I went to a lot of trouble arranging this party at short notice." Sakaki gazed about the room with satisfaction. Despite Aiko and Miyatsu's protestations, the car that had picked them all up had gone from the airport straight to his townhouse, a large villa in one of the most affluent suburbs of the city. The huge room was packed with people, talking, laughing, sipping drinks and nibbling finger food supplied by suited waiters carrying silver trays. Music played over the noise of conversation.
"I decided to give Suzu a proper welcome home as my wife," Sakaki continued, and decided to play the "brotherly love" card that was so often used against him. "You two are family, you have to be here! And you can stop glowering at me, Aiko, just stay for the next hour, all right? Straight after dinner I'll have you both driven home. You won't even have to stay for dessert if you don't want to! Oh, there's Hideyuki! Hideyuki, wait a minute, I'd like a word. " And Sakaki plunged back into the crowd after his friend.
"Sakaki never considers anybody else," Aiko said resentfully. "You've been sick, you need to rest."
Miyatsu put one paw around Aiko's waist. "I rested enough on the plane."
"Well, it was still very high-handed of Sakaki to bring us here," Aiko grumbled. She looked about the room. "I don't know any of these people: they're all Sakaki's friends."
"At least they're giving us plenty of space," Miyatsu commented dryly. Nobody seemed to want to go near the tall cat and his human companion. For the most part they were being ignored. Now and then heads would glance in their direction warily, to make sure they were not coming too close. They wandered to a quieter, more dimly-lit corner of the room, where they could talk without the constant blare of music and other people's conversation swamping them.
"I wonder what would happen if I unsheathed my claws and yelled 'boo'?" Miyatsu said, gazing at the wall of human backs.
"General panic," Aiko assured him with a grin. "They'd all stampede to the door. You're the big bad Attack Cat from the circuit. Oh, well, I'm glad they're leaving us alone." She sighed. "What I'd give to be back home right now," she said longingly. "Just the two of us, in bed, under the blankets... "
Miyatsu gave a soft yearning growl. "I've been aching to make love to you ever since this morning," he said. "I'm pleased Sakaki wanted to spend time with me, but I wish he'd left it until later. We haven't had a minute alone together all day."
Aiko smiled, moving closer. "I thought you were supposed to be sick," she teased gently. "Are you sure you're up to it? With your sore leg and everything?"
Miyatsu grinned down at her. "If I could manage yesterday morning, trussed up like a roast turkey, I can certainly manage now! If we didn't have this audience, I'd show you."
Aiko smiled up at him; yesterday morning had been a wonderful, quick release. But they'd been apart for so long that now she really, really wanted a repeat performance.
His paw caressed the back of her neck, and their psychic connection made Aiko shiver with anticipation as she felt her mate's need matching and reinforcing her own. She brushed her hip against him playfully, feeling his erection under the fur, and giggled. "I believe you," she said, surreptitiously rubbing her hip against him.
Miyatsu drew in a sharp breath, closing his eyes for a second. "Don't keep doing that, or I'll have to take you right here on the floor."
"This is ridiculous!" Aiko said. "Why couldn't Sakaki have had his party tomorrow?"
"I stayed in this house for a week after leaving Shima. Would you like a tour of the rooms? Perhaps we might find somewhere -- more private?"
Aiko nodded eagerly. "Oh, yes, please! I have such an itch I need you to scratch."
"I know one place that's sure to be deserted. Sakaki has an indoor garden with a glass roof, he called it his con -- consy -- "
"Conservatory?"
"Yes. That word. It's full of trees and fountains and things. Sakaki doesn't like people going in there because the plants are expensive and people can be careless, so he keeps it locked when there's a party on. And it's kept warm all the time, for the plants."
"It sounds perfect," Aiko commented. "Except for that bit about the locked door!"
Miyatsu grinned at her wickedly. "There's a window high up in one wall. I can levitate up and open it. But I'll have to carry you, and it is very high. Do you still want to go?"
Aiko looked at him uncertainly. "Carry me? I don't know if that's a good idea. Do you feel strong enough?"
"I've recovered most of my telekinesis now. And you're only little, it's not like I'd be trying to lift an Orochi. But of course, if you're scared of heights... "
Aiko laughed softly. "Who's scared? Let's go."
"It'd be obvious if we left together. I'll light-shield so I'm not visible, then you slip out."
"All right. Where is this conservatory?"
"Go out that door over there. When we're out of this room I'll stop shielding. Then I can show you the way." Miyatsu gazed around the room quickly. "Nobody's watching."
His tall form seemed to flicker for a second and then vanished. Aiko could just make out an opaque shimmering effect in the air if she looked out of the corner of her eyes, but apart from that, it was if he had quite simply become invisible. Suddenly she felt his body behind her, his paws on her shoulders. His warm breath tickled her neck as he nuzzled and bit gently. Aiko closed her eyes and sighed as he thrust his hips against her.
"Oh, don't!" she implored. "People will see!"
"They can't see me," Miyatsu breathed.
He moved one paw down her body caressingly, lingering on her breast, grazing over the nipple gently and drawing a heated gasp from Aiko. His hand continued on down her stomach, further down...
Aiko hurriedly took a step away, glancing at the crowd apprehensively. "They'll think I'm having a fit," she whispered. "Let's get to that conservatory now!"
She felt Miyatsu's laughter in her head as he followed her out the door.
*
Sakaki wasn't listening to his guest. He made the right noises now and then as if interested but he didn't hear a word. He'd seen Aiko and Miyatsu's interlude in the corner when they thought nobody was watching, and it had driven everything else from his mind.
That look on Aiko's face, just after Miyatsu went invisible! The dress she was wearing had moved slightly as if a ghostly hand had run over it, and Aiko's cheeks instantly flushed and her eyes grew hot. At that moment, she had looked incredibly wanton, unbelievably desirable. And then she had slipped out the door, holding it open an instant longer than was needed so that Miyatsu could follow. Sakaki knew exactly what the pair were up to, and now he was burning with a strange mixture of envy and lust.
Cutting his chattering guest short he said, "Would you excuse me? I have to pop out for a moment. I need to go and check on something... "
And he made for the door Aiko had just left by.
The corridor outside was empty, but this section of the house did not lead to any bedrooms. Puzzled, Sakaki wandered what they meant to do. Surely they weren't intending to go at it like a pair of animals out here in the corridor? This hall only led to the conservatory; maybe Miyatsu didn't know Sakaki kept that locked...
Sakaki heard low voices and hurried to the end of the corridor. Cautiously, he peered around the corner. It was getting dark outside as the sun had just set, but there was still enough light coming in through the high windows to see by. Miyatsu was holding Aiko in his arms, and Aiko had both arms about his shoulders.
Miyatsu's feet left the ground, and glancing up, Sakaki saw that they were heading for one of the windows. Suddenly he understood. That window could be opened. The pair intended to enter the conservatory that way. He smiled grimly; Miyatsu had more cunning than Sakaki gave him credit for, obviously! But two could play that game, and a human could always outthink an animal, even an unnaturally clever one like Miyatsu.
Turning quickly, he hurried back the way he'd come. There was another room housed along this corridor, Sakaki's "security network". Hastily he unlocked the door with his thumbprint and entered. The room was small and dark, but a bank of television screens flickered on the far wall. Most of the screens reflected empty rooms, apart from the hall full of guests, and the kitchen, where concealed cameras in the roof showed staff busily preparing dinner. One or two of the bedrooms showed occupation; Sakaki screened out the frantic coupling going on within. The two in the conservatory were the only couple he was interested in.
This room had proved invaluable to Sakaki in the past when he had invited friends, and competitors pretending to friendship, to his house. It was very instructive what people would say to each other when they thought they were speaking privately. Shares bought and sold, legal loopholes found in tax laws, impending business transactions and wheeling and dealing of all sorts had been eavesdropped on by Sakaki from this room and acted upon. This was just another reason he was so wealthy he was forewarned of any deal, on the frontline of every new technology.
Sakaki had never thought of himself as a voyeur before, but he couldn't get Aiko's beautiful face, flushed with desire, out of his mind. Seating himself in the room's single chair, he switched all channels in the house to the conservatory camera. The entire bank of televisions flickered briefly, and then steadied, to show a single big view of the conservatory, with its ferns, logs, rocks and fountains dim and surreal in the dusky light.
He turned up the sound. Miyatsu and Aiko were already there, but they were not doing what Sakaki had expected. The couple wandered hand in hand about the huge room, pausing here and there to look with admiration at the many beautiful plants and fountains. As they walked along the paths, sensors turned on small garden lights so that they could see the various features clearly. The lights winked off again as they passed on by.
Sakaki frowned. He had thought from their previous actions that they would go about sex with the frenzied lust of cats in heat as soon as they got into the room; he hadn't expected this quiet appreciation of nature first.
Finally however, they stopped under one of the spreading evergreen trees that reared almost to the top of the glassy ceiling. The floor under the tree was thickly layered with soft leaf litter. The moon had risen by now, and its light bathed everything in a silvery glow.
Aiko turned to face Miyatsu, her lips curved in a little smile. Miyatsu let his erection emerge as Aiko languorously began peeling off her clothes.
Sakaki watched as Miyatsu enfolded her in his arms, bent his head and gently licked her neck with long swipes of his tongue as Aiko's hand slid downwards. Wrapping her fingers around her mate's engorged penis, she began to stroke the shaft lovingly, and Miyatsu gasped and closed his eyes, throwing his head back in pleasure. Aiko was murmuring endearments, and their breathing was loud over the speakers.
Sakaki's breathing had quickened as well. With a shaking hand, he unzipped his trousers...
*
Miyatsu stood with his back braced against the tree trunk, his tail lashing the ground in great sweeping curves. His front paws supported Aiko's buttocks as she clung to him, panting and whimpering in pleasure as she rode his body, moaning his name desperately.
A familiar low yowling sound began in Miyatsu's throat, a rolling counterpoint to his ragged breathing and Aiko's cries, growing steadily louder as the jerking of Aiko's hips became ever more frenzied.
Aiko could feel the awesome tsunami poised on the verge of crashing over them both, making every nerve in her body thrum in anticipation. Miyatsu's yowling filled the air as he thrust hard, his whole body shuddering with pleasure. She quivered, trying to hold it in, but it was too late. With a last desperate cry, she felt her orgasm wash out of control in hot rolling pulses that seemed to go on and on, her body jerking and thrashing uncontrollably as the intense pleasure surged through her. Vaguely, she heard Miyatsu's yowl rise to a harsh peak, choking off in an almost human cry as he let go deep inside her in a great spasm of release.
Still clinging to each other, they sank slowly down onto the thick layer of leaves and lay together, catching their breath. The physical echo of their shared pleasure washed around them like a wave ebbing and receding back into the ocean, leaving them spent on the shore.
Aiko cuddled close, smiling at the vibrations of Miyatsu's rumbling purr under her cheek. "I love you, my Miyu," she murmured contentedly.
Miyatsu's telepathic voice stroked her mind like warm fur. I know it, he said smugly. Aishiteru, my heart.
*
The party had gone on into the small hours of the morning, but Sakaki was in no mood to enjoy it.
He had cleaned up and slipped away from the security room while Aiko and Miyatsu were still cuddling, wrapped together in their afterglow, but Sakaki felt none of the blissful euphoria he usually enjoyed after orgasm.
Instead he felt bitter, angry that it was Miyatsu holding Aiko in his arms, envious that when Aiko murmured, "I love you" it had not been Sakaki she meant. That creature, the freakish doppelganger Sakaki's money and genes had spawned, now lay with her, sated and purring, while Sakaki burned for her still, his physical release no outlet for his emotional state.
Marrying Suzu had been a huge mistake, he thought bitterly. Aiko was the true gem, a precious stone whose real value did not need to proclaim itself vulgarly; while Suzu was all flashy glass and glitter, sharp-edged and brittle.
Aiko should have become Sakaki's fourth wife, he thought enviously. No, she should have been his first, his only, his to love forever. But Miyatsu had her. What sort of psychic spell had that monstrous cat cast over her, to make her believe she loved him? Life was truly unfair.
Miyatsu and Aiko slipped back into the guest hall perhaps ten minutes after Sakaki returned; he saw Aiko enter apparently on her own, and Sakaki's breath caught at the sight of her flushed cheeks, her tousled hair and the languorous look in her eyes. By the time she had crossed the room to the corner by the tables, Miyatsu had subtly reappeared beside her. He was again walking on all fours, limping slightly on his injured leg as if he had overstrained it, but the smugly satisfied look on his face made Sakaki clench his fists in impotent anger.
After dinner they approached Sakaki and insisted that they still wanted to go home.
"I can't tempt you to stay in any way?" Sakaki asked. "I've been wanting to introduce you to some of your fans among the guests, Miyatsu," he added. "I know they'd love to hear all about your fights on the circuit."
"No thank you, Sakaki," Miyatsu replied.
"But you can't drag Aiko away yet!" Sakaki said desperately. "She hasn't seen the rest of the house! Let me show her around at least, before you go... "
Aiko and Miyatsu exchanged amused glances, and Sakaki felt his heart lurch enviously.
"Thank you, Sakaki, but I think I've seen enough of it for one night," Aiko said with a little smile. She stepped forward and kissed Sakaki on the cheek impulsively. "And thank you for agreeing to let Miyatsu come home," she said softly. "I'm sorry I was so hard on you last night. I know you mean well."
Sakaki smiled sadly back at her. "I'll organize the car for you, then," he said resignedly. "If you're really sure you won't stay."
Miyatsu rose up onto his hind legs and enveloped Sakaki in a hug. "We love you, my brother," he said warmly. "But now we should go home. I need to rest this leg. I've done something to over-strain it."
And Sakaki had to clutch the rags of his temper as that secret, satisfied look passed between Aiko and Miyatsu again.
*
Dawn was breaking when the last of the guests had left or been put to bed in guest rooms. Sakaki entered his bedroom to find Suzu sitting by the window, admiring the play of the early morning light on the jewels she wore.
"All my friends are just green with envy," she said as Sakaki entered the room. She smirked. "Especially Takara. Her fiancé could never afford this engagement ring." She held up her hand, letting the light sparkle off the big chunky diamond set around with smaller emeralds.
Sakaki forced a smile. Suzu was his wife now, he might as well make the best of it. He began to undress. "You enjoyed yourself then, Suzu?"
Suzu turned to him in surprise. "What are you doing?"
"Going to bed. I'm dead... "
"But it's daybreak, or nearly. I wanted to go out."
Sakaki yawned. "You go. I need to get some sleep."
Suzu pouted. "You're no fun." Then a delighted smile lit her features. "I'll ring Takara! She can come with me. I love watching her seethe when I buy anything I like, while she's scraping away on a secretary's salary!"
"That's right. Off you go and enjoy yourself," Sakaki agreed, sitting down to take off his shoes.
"I will then. I'll just slip into something less formal."
She walked to the full-size dressing room which passed as a wardrobe in Sakaki's master bedroom. "I love being married to you!" she exclaimed, as she opened the door, revealing row upon row of clothes. "I have such a lot of stuff now, much more than I could afford before. I must have looked like such a pauper back then!"
She grinned suddenly. "Speaking of researchers and paupers, I thought Aiko looked dreadful at dinner. Did you see her hair? It looked like a hedge!" Suzu patted her own carefully-coiffed hair appreciatively.
"I really didn't notice," Sakaki said with a shrug, as a vivid mental image of how lovely Aiko had looked naked in the moonlight appeared in his mind's eye. Her hair had been like a silvered waterfall flowing down her back as she arched and shuddered in orgasm...
Suzu sniffed disparagingly. "Oh, well, I suppose she can't help looking like a street urchin. She still has to manage on her own wage. Miyatsu doesn't earn anything." Suddenly she sniggered. "He probably brings her a dead mouse now and then!"
Sakaki nodded. "I know what you mean. She'd do better with a human, not a monster of mixed genes. You should have seen her tonight, when she -- " He stopped, biting his lip, suddenly aware that he'd said too much.
"When she what?" Suzu asked alertly. She walked back to sit on the bed beside him. "What did you see?"
"It was nothing; nothing."
"No, come on." Suzu grinned. "They got up to hanky-panky, didn't they? Tell me!"
Sakaki considered. She didn't seem shocked. Indeed, she looked fascinated. "All right, yes. I... had to go check something in the conservatory, and I saw them fooling around in there."
"They left the door open?" Suzu said in mock horror.
Sakaki nodded. He decided against telling her about his security room, realizing his new wife would probably be less than enthusiastic knowing her every move could be seen on television wherever she went in the house.
"Oh, well, Miyatsu is just a big cat, he probably doesn't understand about doors and locks," Suzu said. "And Aiko is just the sort of exhibitionist that she'd enjoy the attention if someone walked in on them."
Sakaki was remembering Aiko's frenzied movements and lustful eyes. He imagined himself rather than Miyatsu, with his back against the tree, thrusting deeply into that sweet hot body, making her moan and cry out in pleasure, urging him to go faster. He felt himself growing hard again at the thought.
"They didn't know I was there," he said, his voice suddenly husky with arousal. "They were really enjoying themselves. You should have seen them, Suzu, Aiko was going nuts... "
Suzu had a fascinated voyeuristic look on her face, but she shook her head. "I don't want to hear about Aiko. She's kinky. Tell me about Miyatsu -- "
Sakaki chuckled. His hand traveled to his wife's breast and he squeezed gently, leaning forward. "You little hypocrite," he observed with a grin. "You love hearing about what they got up to, don't you?"
Suzu frowned. "Of course not," she protested weakly, allowing him to press her down onto the bed. Then she smiled. "But you have to admit, it is wickedly kinky, having sex with an animal. Was he... big?"
"Enormous. And he yowls when he's screwing," he hissed in Suzu's ear, hating Miyatsu as he said it. "He caterwauls like a tom-cat in heat."
Suzu shivered. "Ooh, yes!"
"He bites and claws," Sakaki continued heatedly, his imagination adding details that he hadn't seen. "And Aiko moans and cries out and gets off on it... "
He was on top of Suzu now, pulling her clothes aside frenziedly. She lifted her legs above his back to accommodate him as he entered her roughly.
"Oh, Sakaki!" She murmured in his ear as he began to thrust frantically. "Growl for me," she whispered. "Bite me. Bite me -- and caterwaul. "
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32 Reviews | 5.94/10 Average
OMG! I LOVED THIS! I COULDN'T STOP READING! this was SO AWESOME! MiyatsuxAiko 4ever! I was so glad to see that you are planning a sequel! It doesn't matter how long it takes, I will NEVER be separated from the Fujitaka family....Miyatsu doesn't have a last name, does he? whatever. :D I LOVED THIS! THANK YOU FOR A WONDERFUL TIME AWAY FROM REALITY! "Cheers!!!" 1000000000000000000000000/5 stars
Wow. I can't believe this is finally over. It was such a wonderful story, so romantic and full of adventure and mystery, I just loved it. It should definitely, definitely be published.I don't suppose there's hope for a sequel, is there? *pleading eyes*
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Thanks for those nice comments, I'm currently in the process of trying for publication. As to a sequel, well I've had a few ideas, but it will have to wait until I've got more time.I'm glad you liked the story!Alison
Very sweet reunion. They deserve that peace after all they've been through.
For some reason, I suspect Sakaki's easy acceptance of their relationship. That may have more to do with my cynical nature than anything you've written, though. I was surprised that Suzu reacted quite that strongly, but I think it works for that reason.
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Hi
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
, it's nice to hear from you again. Your comment re Suzu was spot on. I won't spoil the story by revealing too much, but she is something of a hypocrite. And as for Sakaki, well ... again, don't want to be a spoiler for my own story.Thanks for your review - I love getting feedback!Alison
This chapter is so awesome! Of course, the reunion was sweet--the high emotion brought me to tears--but I also loved how the youngsters' personalities all worked together, especially M&M, that this whole horrific experience of the last few chapters has bonded them more firmly, and now they truely are soul-mates.
I've already read this chapter four times; it is one of my favorites.
Beautiful chapter! I love the way you've shown all of the family interaction. From the moment Aiko's mom brought out her old little kitten, it's been neat to see them so supportive, and I love how both of her parents see their family with the same uncondtional love as if they were all 100% human.
I love M&M finishing each other's sentences. I love how Montaro is always so impulsive, leaving Mieko to explain things and then catch up. It shows how perfectly in tune they are with each other. Again, all of the interaction between the siblings and the older generations are so real. You've shown that though the children are 'clones,' they have different personalities.
You've dealt with some tough things in this chapter with just the right touches. Yutaka is the best dad ever!
Somehow I don't trust Sakaki...
The bonding is an interesting idea. :)
Poor Sakaki. It's interesting that he can't translate the loss he felt when Koneko died to the more deep feelings of feline mates. It also makes me wonder if maybe Suzu's sedative wasn't as safe as they'd thought, and that was when Koneko had died.
And yay for Mieko and Montaro. They'll never have to be lonely like Miyatsu was. That's awesome.
Oh, I love how the description of the kittens is just like how she imagined they would be all of those years ago. It looks like they are good parents.
I am still loving this story very much. It's great to see Miyatsu and Aiko having a family of their own. :-)Happy new year and good luck with getting this published!
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Hi
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
, it's great to see that you're still following the story! Chapter Twelve brings this story to it's halfway point, showing what Miyatsu and Aiko are doing re: creating his species. From the next chapter the action starts to pick up again. I hope you continue to enjoy it.Alison
I haven't heard that song in a long time, and it is very evokative of the peacefulness of spring. The first couple of sections are so beautiful with Miyatsu being reunited with some happy memories of his past and his sweet birthday gift to Aiko.
But Sakaki was scary! I wondered how Miyatsu kept Aiko from being hurt by all of that broken glass. I'm glad they're getting away from him.
Suzu really is a piece of work! Sakaki's right about her being a hypocrite. Of course Miyatsu is romantic. He is so much more than he seems, and Sakaki's intensity is unnerving.
Oh, how sad for them to be separated, but I like the way you did each of her parents' responses. I usually scoff when people use 'soul mates', but you've done a good job actually showing us that they are joined. I love that her mother brought her little kitten down for her. That Aiko made her own little Miyu as a child is an excellent reminder of the length of their connection.
Well, ouch. But at least Sakaki was cool about it.
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Hi
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
, I'm so glad you've read the last two chapters and let me know that you liked them! Glad I haven't squicked you yet, that's one of the things I worry about with this story, that people won't be able to get past the fact that Miyatsu is three-quarters animal, or as my daughter would say, three species rolled into one. I really liked your "alien" analogy, btw!I didn't realise you're one of the admins, I'll get to work tonight and make the corrections on the next chapter. Yes, Suzu was not happy, was she? And while Sakaki is fine with it *now*, wait until Chapter Ten (mwahahaha!)Thanks for your kind words.Alison
Sorry I haven't reviewed in weeks. Sooo busy.
Oh, the water shield is cool--I love the details, and I love how he admits that she made him feel special. I am such a sucker for stories with telepathic lovers, and this is so amazing! I guess I don't see the squick because I see it as strictly SciFi, as though he were a sentient alien. And since I've been watching Star Trek since before I could read and reading SciFi since I was old enough to be turned loose unchaperoned in a library, it seems normal to me, and (as I said before) telepathic is my favorite kind.
“Exactly like the wild Purshans,"
Way to build anticipation! And their first non-kiss was so sweet, the way he started purring.
The tone of their encounter was perfect, and the pillow talk was touching. It felt very genuine, like echoes of every couple that has problems with fertility.
I was so relieved when she finally said she loved him back. Now I get to read the next chapter.
Oh, he loves her!
Watching Aiko come to terms with her emotions and desires was interesting. I can kind of begin to see what the long story is going to be, freeing Miyatsu from Sakaki and doing the cloning.
I DO hope we'll get a new chapter soon. Now that she knows... and I'm very afraid concerning all the evilness you've probably still planned for them. :-/
*is speechless* *takes another moment* That was unexpected (only because by the third chapter, I forgot this was higher-rated) and hot. I'm so glad that the next chapter is in the queue because I'm really curious now about them. I'm so glad she decided to go out there and comfort him. This story is almost as fascinating for what it doesn't say as what it does.
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Hi
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
, and thanks for all the nice comments so far! I love receiving feedback. I hope you like the rest of the story once it's all posted, as well. The next chapter has just been sent to me for corrections, so I'll do them and get it posted up asap. Alison
Response from WriterMerrin (Reviewer)
From what I read in another review, is it actually complete, so we're just waiting for it to be posted?
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
That's right, it's actually 22 chapters long. But both my beta and I seem to have a blind spot where correct punctuation is concerned (particularly commas! I either put them in the wrong place or leave them out altogether) and typically each chapter needs a good edit before it's posted publicly.Please note: the next chapter has a higher rating than the previous ones. But only to advance the plotline!Alison
Oh, another clever twist. She's lucky that Sakaki feels that kindship with Miyatsu. This is so neat!
This is amazing, his mind reaching hers and his purring when they embraced. I love how she helped him to renew their friendship.
And I'm blinking back tears myself. I think I've just gotten hooked on your world.
THIS IS A WONDERFUL STORY. I WAS NOT SO SURE TO START WITH, BUT YOU HOOKED ME! GOOD CHARACTERS AND DRAMA GALORE. I LIKE FURRY FICTION AND TPP WAS THE LAST PLACE I EXPECTED TO FIND IT . BUT THIS IS GOOD. HOPE YOU PUT UP THE SEQUEL HERE TOO (HINT, HINT).READ SOME OF YOUR OTHERS TOO & LIKE THEM TOO. GOOD LUCK GETTING PUBLISHED & KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK! JIM
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Thanks, Jim! I appreciate your kind comments. I do have plans eventually for a sequel, but that is still a way off in the future, as Real Life leaves me with very little time to write: I'm beginning university in the New Year, and will be studying a lot! However, there will be holidays in which to write, so I'll see what I can do!You might like to go have a look at my DeviantArt gallery, I have the story up there under the title: "The Miyatsu Project" and various artists have done drawings of their interpretations of the characters. Just put Fayzbub DeviantArt into your search engine and it should bring it up - I'd love to see you there!Merry Christmas!Alison
I've enjoyed this story immensely so far - very intelligent SF. What's more, you've managed with the first chapter what many published books haven't managed this year: you've made me care about your heroes! I want to know what happens next and I want both of them to be all right.Great job. Keep writing and good luck for when you try to get published.
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Thanks very much for your nice comments,
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
, I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far! There will be lemons from chapter four onwards, but only where it's integral to the plot. I hope that doesn't squick you.As a matter of fact, I'm hoping to get a manga publisher interested in the story but wanted to try it out on the internet first to gauge the level of interest. Myatsu might be a bit difficult for a manga artist to draw though! Although I've got his general body shape fixed in my head, I have no idea what his face would look like, even though I invented him!Alison
Response from JunoMagic (Reviewer)
Not squicked, no. I feel for Myatsu, and I want him to find comfort and love in his lonely existence.And I'm also very curious about how people will react for professional reasons. I've got a manuscript for a fantasy novel in the works that has a race which are a kind of furry fay living at high altitudes in the mountains. And I have to admit that ever since I read about furry fandom, I've been unsure whether to continue or not... It's difficult enough to write not-quite-human in a plausible and poignant way...Won't publishers frown if they hear that the story was available on the internet? Or are manga publishers cool about that? Oh, and if Myatsu ever gets drawn, please let us know over here. (I'd LOVE to see him.)I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Hi
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
! Best of luck with your novel, BTW, fantasy seems to be the way to go nowadays, it's a big market. I usually write scifi, but there's often a large fantasy element within most of my works.The story is with a publisher at the moment and I've let them know that it's on the internet (I had it on my webpage in total until my site crashed, and I'm s-l-o-w-l-y rebuilding it now!) I'd had up to 20 000 hits on the story, and used that as a "selling point" to get the publisher interested, along with the fact that I've been professionally published for a number of years past. If the publisher decides to go ahead and publish the story, I will of course take the story down. But I'll leave up a note on the vacated story site so that people following the chapters can email me and I'll send them the story in it's entirety.Don't worry, if the story does make it into manga, *everybody* who has ever commented on my story will be told! (And the nice comments will get a free copy from me, hee hee!)It's nice to hear back from you, I only hope you continue to find the story a worthwhile read!Alison
I am so surprised that there aren't any reviews yet. The plot is very original and one I am enjoying so much. I cannot wait to see how it progresses.
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Thanks
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
, I'm glad you're enjoying the story. It's 22 chapters long, I hope you like the whole thing once you've read it all through!Alison
Um. Wow. *fans self * I can't say that I've ever had that reaction to a documentary, but I've never had a genetically modified hottie asleep on my couch, either! Beautifully done.
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
Hello
Response from Alison (Author of Love Inhuman)
, it's nice to meet you! I'm really glad you're enjoying the story so far, and I loved that you thought Miyatsu was a hottie! Thank you for the nice comments, and I hope you continue to like this.Alison
Response from Melenka (Reviewer)
A tall, strong, sensitive guy who purrs? Yeah, that's pretty hot. LOL