The Trap
Chapter 16 of 18
livvy6The Final battle rages. Alissa makes her true allegiance known. She follows Lucius Malfoy into the Shrieking Shack and witnesses the attack on Severus.
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Alissa dashed off further to the side as the Death Eaters and Aurors clashed in front of the gates. She wielded her wand to deflect Unforgiveables and shielded herself from harm. Wave after wave came with the giants and acromantulas in the distance. She found herself in an intense, heated battle with one of the Weasley boys. He was quite skilled and his eyes were full of fun. Then when the battle heated up and there was little chance to be found out, she sent out a Tripping jinx and threw herself on him. They scrambled to an alcove just inside the walls, and she pinned him down as she ripped off her mask. The boy tried to gain the upper hand, unimpressed or not caring that she wasn't a man. Finally, she got her wand to his throat.
"Listen!" she hissed. "Are you an Order member?"
"Liked I'd bloody tell you, you bitch!" he swore.
Flames of red, green, and purple soared past them. She pushed herself flatter on top of him and pulled his robes so they were face to face.
"Cor! If Molly could hear you now, she'd have your hide!" she whispered at him.
"What the...?" he began.
"Listen, I'm on your side. Your parents know all about me. Minerva, Remus, even Moody knew me. I'm no ruddy Death Eater!" She rolled them over to the wall and pushed them up. She flung the mask far from her and said, "You have to get more help! That snake bastard has giants and the acromantulas from the Forbidden Forest coming. He doesn't care. He'll raze this castle to the ground if he has to..."
Another blast came from the main gate. Rumblings could be heard from inside the school.
"Go! Go!" she screamed at him. She watched as he dashed inside and then made her way in as well. She screamed as a wall buckled and came crashing in. A giant was coming through and destroying everything in his path. She found a pocket of fierce fighting as the Death Eaters poured into the castle. She braced herself and made the leap into defection, finally letting her true loyalties finally be known. She saw Aberforth yell his praise to the young Weasley girl as she hexed the Death Eaters on the floor underneath her. Alissa fought as she climbed up the stairs, killing as many Death Eaters as she could. Her presence was quite disconcerting for the young girl. Yet, they fought side by side until Bellatrix Lestrange saw her.
"You fucking blood traitor!" she screamed. She took her wand and slashed it through the air.
A hundred arrows flew straight at Alissa. She shielded herself and screamed "Confrigo!"
The arrows blasted into fire and rained down on the Death Eaters below. They ran for their lives. When they got a substantial distance way, Ginny grabbed her and pointed her wand to her face.
"Who are you?" she demanded.
"An Order member!" the older woman shrieked.
"With Death Eater robes on?" the youngest Weasley challenged.
"What, you think Snape was the only spy in your camp?" she sounded back.
A blast blew them across the hall and into a stone wall.
"Oh, shite!" the red-head said.
"Are you okay?" Alissa asked as she crawled to her.
"Yeah, just got the wind knocked out of me, is all."
Alissa looked out at the dust and rubble and then went to make her escape.
"Where are you going?" the girl cried out after her as she grabbed her arm.
"I can't stay here all day," Alissa chuckled. "More to do, more to do! You are a worthy opponent, you know," she said as another blast shattered above them. "I told Snape you were a real spitfire on the Express that day!"
She saw a group of Death Eaters coming up the stairs. Ginny jumped up in front of Alissa and screamed, "REDUCTO!"
The staircase blew apart, sending the Death Eaters to their demises below. The two women dropped back to the floor as spells flew over their heads.
"It was you that took Luna?" she asked incredulously.
"Sorry," Alissa said with a smile and flew away in a blur of white to the ground. She saw acromantulas closing in as she fought and battled. She jumped around, so it would be difficult to be recognized. But Bellatrix knew, and that meant the Dark Lord had to know by now. She was standing in another alcove looking out for Remus Lupin when he recognized some of the spells blasting in front of him were not by his own hand. He turned and saw Alissa. He stopped, stunned with disbelief.
"Remus!" she screamed as a Death Eater sent a curse his way. She shielded him, and the two of them battled side by side.
"What the devil is going on here?" he yelled happily. "Haven't seen you in years!"
"Well, I figured it was about time I showed up to save your sorry arse!" she joked.
"Don't tell me you've been in the serpent's lair this whole time?" he gasped as he fought.
"Oh yes," she retorted. "And not alone, Remus. Snape is still on our side!"
Another huge blast erupted from nowhere and they were thrown back. Alissa slid under the main staircase, while Remus struggled on the stairs. A Death Eater closed in, and as he went to cast the Killing curse, Alissa cursed him. His insides exploded out of him and he fell over dead. Blood and tissue rained down over them. Alissa grabbed Remus and pulled him back under the staircase. He was wounded, but not mortally. He had a bad superficial gash on his forehead, but his legs were mangled, and he was having difficulty breathing.
"I think I've got some broken ribs," he gasped painfully. "That was a particularly nasty bit of dark magic, Alissa!" he tried to say light-heartedly.
Alissa got him cleaned off as much as she could, mopping off the blood and intestines with the bottom of her Death Eater weeds. "Well," she said wryly, "one does what one can. I suppose I could have been less dramatic, but I certainly scared off the others now, didn't I?"
"Too right you are," he replied as he winced, trying to get up again.
"Remus, stay here!" Alissa ordered. "Lie back down!" She stripped off her slip underneath her robes and used it to pillow his head. She softly caressed his cheek. "Just relax, stay here until it is safe to come out. I'll let someone know to come get you when it's safe." She turned to get up and back into the fighting, but Remus grabbed her arm.
"No! My wife, Dora! I have-have t-to find her!" he said deliriously.
"I'll find her!" Alissa said. "Just stay here. What does she look like?"
"A Metamorphmagus," he whispered. He struggled to say more but failed.
She shushed him. "Okay, okay, Remus. I'll find her. You stay here out of sight!"
"Please!" he begged, grabbing her arm. His hazel eyes were full of fear and pain. "We have a son, please!" he said with a rasping voice.
"I'll find her Remus, I promise!" she said firmly.
Then she dashed back out into the fray.
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She ran out of the gates to find the fighting was starting to retreat from the main castle entrance. Instead, the battle had shifted to the sides. Spiders, giants, dementors, Aurors, students, and professors were fighting with all their strength. Alissa ran her hand through her hair. How was she to find a Metamorphmagus named "Dora" in all this mess? She saw the Weasley girl again and made her way to her as she fought with a group of fellow students. They were trying to subdue an acromantula...and they were losing. Alissa pushed her way to the front and screamed for them to get back. She conjured a ball of fire and hurled it at the giant monster. The blaze was awesome as the overgrown spider screamed and writhed on the ground. She levitated the blazing animal and hurled it towards a fearsome giant that was hell-bent on destroying an entire side of the castle. Aurors and Death Eaters alike raced to the scene of the burning pyre of spider and giant.
Alissa turned and faced Ginny. "I need to find Dora, Remus' wife!" she screamed above the din.
Ginny shrieked as a wall of stone came crashing towards them. She grabbed Alissa and the others with her, and they dashed out of the way of the crash. They all fell to the ground coughing and sputtering as the cloud of dust settled around them.
"Tonks is dead!" Ginny coughed out as she recovered.
"Tonks?" Alissa asked, confused by the name.
"Remus calls her Dora, but to us, her name is 'Tonks,'" she yelled in reply.
"MOVE!" a boy screamed suddenly.
The entire face of the castle wall was crashing down. Alissa had to get back to Remus, she had to-to...what the hell?
She saw Lucius Malfoy enter the Whomping Willow. She had a bad feeling about it and was compelled to follow. She fought and struggled towards the entranceway and deftly followed the exhausted man. She knew better than to attempt a cloaking charm around the Dark Lord, so she remained back, hid, and waited.
After a while, Lucius had found a place for himself in a dark corner. Silence reigned as the Dark Lord sat immersed in his own thoughts as he twirled the Elder Wand between his scaly fingers.
"Please, my Lord," he spoke brokenly. "My son..." he began.
The Dark Lord cut him off impatiently. "If your son is dead, Lucius, it is not my fault. He did not come and join me like the rest of the Slytherins. Perhaps he has decided to befriend Harry Potter?"
"No! Never!" Lucius whispered hoarsely.
The Dark Lord murmured something softly in reply that Alissa could not hear or understand. She strained her ears to listen but could not make out the rest of the exchange. Finally, the Dark Lord spoke clearly.
"Go fetch Snape."
"Snape, m-my Lord?"
"Yes, there is a...service...I require from him. Go."
Alissa watched cautiously as the man retreated from the shack. She looked back at the Dark Lord. He was speaking to his snake, lovingly and softly. Nagini was encased in a magical box. Protected...but why? Alissa waited for what seemed like an eternity.
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Severus came into the Shack, filthy and dirt streaked from the battle.
"My Lord," he bowed gracefully.
"Snape, have you a report for me?"
"My Lord, their resistance is crumbling..."
"...and is doing so without your help. Skilled wizard though you are, Severus, I do not think you will make much difference now. We are almost there... almost!"
There was a hitch in Severus' breath. Alissa could feel it. She sensed danger. So did he.
"Let me bring Potter to you," he begged.
Severus! Get the hell out of there! Alissa screamed silently in her head.
"I know I can find him, my Lord," he added.
"I have a problem, Severus," the Dark Lord said softly.
Severus, get the bloody hell out!
"My Lord?"
"Why doesn't it work for me, Snape?"
Oh my God! It's a trap! It's a trap! she screamed internally, opening the connection between them.
Alissa could see his back stiffen. He could hear her!
"My...my Lord?" Severus asked ignorantly. He was obviously trying to buy time.
The Dark Lord was explaining his problem with the Elder Wand. He started pacing around the room as he spoke to his most trusted servant.
"I have thought long and hard, Severus... Do you know why I've called you back from the battle?"
Oh my God! Oh my God! Severus, he's going to kill you! Get the hell out of there! she screamed.
"No, my Lord, but I beg you will let me return. Let me find Potter." He voice was becoming desperate. Alissa's wand was itching in her hand. This was not happening!
Back and forth they spoke. Severus was becoming increasingly nervous while the Dark Lord became increasingly predatory. To Alissa, it was like watching a lion waiting to pounce on a gazelle.
Alissa wished she could see Severus' face. He was not responding to her as she screamed at him repeatedly to get the hell out of there.
"I sought this wand, Severus. The Elder Wand, the Wand of Destiny, the Deathstick..."
Why is he making a speech? Alissa thought nervously. What is he doing? What can this possibly achieve?
"You are a clever man, after all, Severus. You have been a good and faithful servant, and I regret what must happen."
No! Severus, run! Her thoughts drowned out everything else said. She wanted to jump out and save him, to kill the Dark Lord, to stop what was happening in front of her eyes. She couldn't stop it! She willed her feet to stay firm.
"I must master the wand, Severus. Master the wand, and I master Potter at last."
It was so simple. So cut and dry. Then a horrible rattle came out of the Dark Lord's mouth.
Alissa screamed. She couldn't hold in her terror anymore. Nagini broke free from her cage and attacked Severus' neck. The enormous snake's gruesome fangs sank into his alabaster skin. Alissa shrieked and screamed along with him. She grasped onto the rotting wood in front of her, swaddled in the weeds of a Death Eater as she cried and shook terribly.
"I regret it," the Dark Lord said coldly.
Nagini was placed back into her protective cage, and he swept out of the room. Alissa was petrified. He was going to see her, she knew it! Then she remembered what Severus had said to her, "One good thing about working for a megalomaniac, they are notoriously self-absorbed." And true enough, he slithered by her without ever knowing she had been so near the entire time.
She was about to jump out to help Severus when she saw Potter and the Granger girl hovering over him. She watched as the girl conjured up a bottle, and she heard the rasping whispers from her lover to the boy. They looked into each other's eyes and then Severus' hand slipped away.
The booming voice of the Dark Lord rang out.
"You have fought, valiantly. Lord Voldemort knows how to value bravery."
Sod off, you snake-snogging son-of-a-bitch! she thought.
"You have sustained heavy losses. If you continue to resist me, you will all die, one by one. I do not wish this to happen. Every drop of magical blood spilled is a loss and a waste."
Oh, but you didn't give a shite about spilling Severus' magical blood, did you?
Potter made haste, but the girl, she looked back, one last time, and then they disappeared.
Alissa scrambled from her hiding place.
"Severus! Severus! Don't leave me, you ruddy bastard! Impossible, insufferable..."
She had only the simplest understandings of mediwizardry. She put a Coagulating Spell on him to stop the flow of blood, and she took her wand and said "Ennervate!"
He woke gasping and choking. She rummaged through his pockets and found a small bottle of dittany and a phial of sorts. She poured the dittany on his wound, and he grabbed it out of her hands. He greedily drank it all down and fell back.
"You stupid, stupid, man!" she raged. "What the hell did you think you were doing? Why did you not talk to me? I love you, you insufferable bastard!"
His eyes were shining and she kissed his thin, chalky lips delicately. Then she grabbed his wand and stuck it in her pocket. She bunched up his cloak, pillowed his head with it, and jumped to her feet. He reached his shaking hand out to her, and she yelled at him to be still.
"You stay here! I'm going to get you help, and so help me God, if you try moving from that spot, I'll kick your arse, you ruddy jackass!"
She squeezed through and went to make her way back to the castle. The morning sun was just peaking through the trees of the forest, occasionally blinding her way as the battle continued to rage around her. She was going back to the castle. The blow-hard had droned on, trying to inflame Potter and rattle his supporters. Bastard! she thought. Then she remembered Severus telling her,
"If you ever find yourself in a crisis and need a solution, she would be the one to get. Insufferable, but she has the brains to back it up."
She headed inside the main gates amongst the wounded and dying. She scanned the room for the Granger girl. She saw her with Miss Weasley. She was comforting her. She discreetly walked up to them.
The Weasley girl was crying while the Granger girl was trying to calm her. They both looked up to her and she said, "You two, come with me," she ordered. The Granger girl was wide-eyed in terror.
"It's alright, Hermione," Ginny whispered. "She's an Order member."
They went out into the main hallway and Alissa took them to Remus. Amazingly, he was still holding on.
"Ginny, see to him," she ordered. Then she dropped her voice to a whisper. "Don't tell him about her yet."
Ginny nodded, and Alissa grabbed the other girl by the arm and quick-marched her out and back to the Willow. Once safely inside the entrance, she made her threat.
"You get your arse back in there and tend to the Headmaster!"
"B-but he's dead!" she sputtered.
"He is not, you fool girl! I placed a Coagulating Spell on him along with some dittany he had in his pocket. Now, move! If he dies, I'll kill you," she whispered viciously and then she threw the girl from her. "RUN!" she screamed.
The girl jumped on her feet and speed off.
Alissa squared her shoulders to get back to the great Hall. She would need a Mediwitch and supplies. She had her wand in one hand and Severus' in the other. She walked out into the battle, for it had not stopped, even though the Dark Lord had given an hours' reprieve. Vengeance was to be meted out. She knew that beyond a doubt when she was faced by two fellow Death Eaters.
"Lying bitch!"
"Traitorous whore!"
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A/N: We are now back at the the beginning. We are rapidly coming to the end. A couple more chapters are left. I do hope you enjoyed this. Please review! As always, much thanks to my beta, MadBrilliant. Also, large portions of this chapter were taken directly from J.K. Rowling's Deathly Hallows. Thanks to Ms. Rowling for her work!
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YAY! That rotten bastard is dead!!! Oh I hope Alissa and Snape can get together soon!!!!Yeah, I'm gettin' into this story big time. :)
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Thanks! I hope you enjoy the ending:)Livvy
I think you've done an amazing job of working Alissa into canon. I am amazed again and again by the details you've included. I'm enjoying the story immensely. I'm glad Sev and Alissa have each other.
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Thank you so much for reviewing! I really appreciate it when an older story gets a review. I am actually doing a sequel based on Hermione and Remus in this alternative universe of this story. It was talked about at the end, but not indetail about Hermione and Remus getting together. I don't know if you are a HG/RL shipper, but if you are, watch out for it!Thanks,Livvy
Okay, so I cheated and came over here to finish the story I started reading on Occlumency. I could say it is because I prefer reading on the blue background, but really it that I wanted to read the rest of the story. Instant gratification takes too long and all that. I've had the best time reading this fic. I even liked the battle scenes, and that almost never happens. I like Remus and Hermione, I never could see her making a go of things with Ron. Hell, I liked everything about this story. It also gives me hope that your current WIP might turn out okay for Hermione and Snape.
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Hey, thanks! I appreciate that. keep your mind open, and I hope you like the sharp turn I'm going to take the story in.Thanks for rviewing!Livvy
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Hey, thanks! I appreciate that. keep your mind open, and I hope you like the sharp turn I'm going to take the story in.Thanks for rviewing!Livvy
WOW, Alissa is undoubtedly suitable for Severus, but oh uh, I don't want to cross this woman -- not even if I was Severus Snape! Will he be grateful that she saved him at all?
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Well, you'll have to read the story ;)Yes, she's pretty scary when she needs to be!Thanks for reviewing!
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Well, you'll have to read the story ;)Yes, she's pretty scary when she needs to be!Thanks for reviewing!
Wonderful work.
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Thanks you very much!Livvy
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Thanks you very much!Livvy
Oh, wonderful! And I look forward to reading about the Hermione/Remus romance!
Well done!
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Thank you so much!Livvy
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Thank you so much!Livvy
Beautiful ending to a wonderful story. I especially like the Remus/Hermoine ending, it seemed fitting as she has always (in cannon) been very responsible and mature in her actions.Cant wait to read more of your stories.
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Thanks! I'll be starting the HG/RL story later this summer. I've got "Bookends" warming up in the queue now, and I'm working on another HG/SS fic right now. Thanks for reviewing!Livvy
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Thanks! I'll be starting the HG/RL story later this summer. I've got "Bookends" warming up in the queue now, and I'm working on another HG/SS fic right now. Thanks for reviewing!Livvy
lovely story...........it was so different and interesting!!!!! in fact it was one of your story's that i enjoyed the most!!!!!! alissa was such an arrestin character!!!!!!!! am really looking forward to remus and hermione's story!!!!
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Excellent! I know people mostly go for HG/SS and Lord knows, I do like them best, however, I can't resist doing a HG/RL ship!Thanks for reviewing!Livvy
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Excellent! I know people mostly go for HG/SS and Lord knows, I do like them best, however, I can't resist doing a HG/RL ship!Thanks for reviewing!Livvy
I love the end, it was everything I asked for. I never read the GWTWsequel, but I watched miniseries, that must be why the line is so familiar to me.I've always preferred that 'beautiful friendship' line Bogart says to Claude Rains to the 'We'll always have Paris' line he says to Ingrid Bergman.I hope you will continue with your OFC stories. You create such wonderful OFCs and I always find an OFC much more interesting than Hermione.
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Thanks so much! For a while I will be working on my HG/SS fics, I do have in the back of my mind to make a one-shot I did for the DH Prompt Challenge into a multi-chapter. That has an OC named Laura in it. If you read it, any ideas on how to build on the story would be much appreicated!Thanks so much for staying through and reviewing so consistantly. It really touches my heart.Thanks!Livvy
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Thanks so much! For a while I will be working on my HG/SS fics, I do have in the back of my mind to make a one-shot I did for the DH Prompt Challenge into a multi-chapter. That has an OC named Laura in it. If you read it, any ideas on how to build on the story would be much appreicated!Thanks so much for staying through and reviewing so consistantly. It really touches my heart.Thanks!Livvy
Nice wrap up Livvy! :)
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Thanks! Glad you liked it!
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Thanks! Glad you liked it!
Wow that was fast getting up ......... awesome and the story as expected a wonder pleasure. Thank You for sharing your talent with everyone who is fortunate enough to read your stories
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Thanks so much! I hope you continue to like my fics. I have two more that I'll be posting so far and one that is swimming in my head! :)Thanks for continuing to review!Livvy
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Thanks so much! I hope you continue to like my fics. I have two more that I'll be posting so far and one that is swimming in my head! :)Thanks for continuing to review!Livvy
I didn't get a chance to read until tonight, I had surgery on my left hand two days ago and I've finally recovered from the anesthetic. They told me it would be done with a local, but they used a general so I've really been out of it for the past two days. They had both better survive and have a happy ever after, I've invested too much in them emotionally for them to die. Harry could have died and I would have been indifferent, but she let Snape die with disrespect. I want him to live respected by all. This is short, but I can only use one hand for typing right now.
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Ouch! Hope you are feeling a little better. I hated the idsrespectful way she let Snape die. He deserved so much more.I do hope you like the ending! It will be posted as soon as it gets through the queue!Thanks,Livvy
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Ouch! Hope you are feeling a little better. I hated the idsrespectful way she let Snape die. He deserved so much more.I do hope you like the ending! It will be posted as soon as it gets through the queue!Thanks,Livvy
Zing! She got him at the end, didn't she?
Good girl, Alissa!
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
LOL! He'll be pondering that for a bitThanks,Livvy
anwser the danm question Severus!
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
LOL! He is the king of getting out of things, isn't he?Thanks,Livvy
I really like the point she made at the end, which was more difficult being the adorer or the adored. For Severus I think it's actually being the adored one. As she said, he was in control when he was the adorer but he has no control of her adoration of him.
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Yes, that is going to really bother him and cause a rift between them. He's going to have to deal with it.Thanks!Livvy
I have a corection for you to make. Bathilda's last name is Bagshot, not Babcock.
Things are moving slowly and I can see that it's putting a lot of stress on them both. Fortunately, you are giving me information about what happened at Hogwarts and what happened when Luna was abducted, that's a lot more than JKR did during that period in the book.
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Thanks for pointing out the mistake! I'm glad you're still liking the story!Livvy
I've been trying to place the time frame of this chapter so I went to HPL and looked at the timeline for DH but the date Gregorovitch was murdered wasn't there. I figure that it must be late Autumn in this chapter. I can really understand now why Alissafeels so impatient with the trio and their search. I've always thought they went way offtrack when they decided to search for the Deathly Hallows.If they had concentrated on the Horcruxes first and then looked for the Hallows the battle would probably have been fought sooner and 'He Who I Found Most Tiresome' have been permanently vanquished sooner. I've often wondered why Dumbledore never told Harry about the Elder wand, that was the most important thing he kept secret from Harry and i don't know why.
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Well, Dumbledore knew from experience that the Hallows could get a person bogged down in getting them and keeping them for one's own power. To think you could bring your loved one's from the dead with the resurrection stone alone! It's like the Mirror of Erised. The Hallows can suck the life out of you with it's promise of glory and all of what you desire most.I thought Dumbledore was really stupid in not preparing Harry for his quest. Either that or JKRowling really screwed the pooch (which I think she did anyway by killing off Snape) but anyway- I can see why it would be important for Harry to know of the Hallows existence, because that was what Voldemort was trying to get. Harry already possessed two out of three and the Elder Wand was supossed to go to Snape- he REALLY screwed the pooch on that one.DH was a huge disappointment for me. I literally thought someone was playing an evil joke when I started reading it. Halfway through I was like, "This is just stupid!" I want to know what's going on at Hogwarts!Anyway, I hope you keep liking the story!Livvy
Response from Trickie Woo (Reviewer)
I agree with you, DH was a big disappointment. I found most of the trio's adventures to be very secondary to what was going on at Hogwarts. Heck, I never cared much about those three anyway. Neville was the kid I cared most about, and then Luna. Snape was the crux of the whole series, the entire saga turned on whether he was good or bad and she not only killed him off, she did it in the most disrespectful and ridiculous way. She couldn't even be bothered to have 'HW' throw and Avade Kedavra at him. She has him killed by a giant snake in a bubble.BTW, am I right in my guess about the timeframe of the chapter?
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Yes, it was important to show how dragging the time was, the inactivity of the three of them in that damn forest! I was told it was to be compared to the wandering in the desert in the Old Testement by the Israelites. Now, I understand Jewish Numerology and there are many references to the 40 days and 40 nights, four days, also 40 years signifying a time of "probabtion" for the kinks in the personality of the person or persons involved to be worked out. I could see the point. I couldn't say if they were out in the Forest of Dean for 40 bleeding days or what-not, but I just thought it was a real waste of time. I agree totally on Snape being the crux of the books. He was the most important person next to Harry Potter. So, he got the shaft in life and he got the shaft in death. Pretty rubbish death!I would have LOVED to have seen Neville's metamorphasis from ne'er-do-well to a brave leader of a radical underground movement. Luna is always a riot! Anything with Luna is awesome and I LOVED the girl they got to play her in the movie.
Wow. That was intense!
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
I really wanted to show a side to thier relationship that wasn't just sweetness and light. Their encounters have been so tame thus far, and that is just not in character for Snape, at least not all the time. So, I wanted to show he had a partner that could indulge him in his darker side and not be put off by it.Thanks!Livvy
Response from mia madwyn (Reviewer)
Well, and she's pretty dark, too. I think it's a valid point and you did a great job.
nice on the Rowle twist......and having Draco do it under the imperius Curse ... just goes to show that Draco (pain that he may be at times) is not his father....again impressive and awaiting more.
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Thank you! I thought it was important to point that side of Draco out, that it was canon that he was forced to do things under the Imperius Curse.I also wanted to show how Alissa dealt with the carnage around her. She isn't a machine that is unfeeling. Unfortunately, dissociating isn't the healthiest thing either!Livvy
I appreciate that the chapter was so fast paced, I never like to read death, gore, and violence. I hope you keep the pace up and get past all of that much more quickly than JKR did so we get to the really important part and find out if Snape and Alissa survive and can make a future together..When I read DH last July I found that for me tha climax took place in the Shrieking Shack and the denouement was in 'The Prince's Tale'. After that I was indifferent to what happened to the other characters and only read the last few chapters out of habit.
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
The Prince's tale was really the chapter that made all the other books make sense. It was the glue to everything that was supporting Harry. THere will be a very dramatic and climactic later with the battle and what happens in the shack. I hope you like I do that.Thanks,Livvy
This was a well-written chapter. You really made me feel for Alissa. Very original premise! Looking forward to more!
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Thank you! BTW, I'm enjoying 'Anthem'!Livvy
Response from emmeline33 (Reviewer)
Thanks, Livvy! I'm glad you're enjoying it.
I tried to review this chapter after i read it last night but I couldn't get it posted. TPP must have been doing some more work on the system.This was such a sad chapter to read. I always wondered why Rowling had to put anything more in DH except that Charity Burbage was killed by Death Eaters.I do hope that things will be better for them by the end and that they survive to have a future together.
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
I thought it was important to see how it is on the flipside, where Snape thinks he can't be loved because of the horrible things he has had to do, so I wanted him to be the one to accept the insecurities of another instead of being the one accepted or rejected because of his own insecurities
It was an interesting insight on our characters.
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Thanks!
Even to this point, he still thought of Lily first, and Alissa still loved him. So powerful. And of course, at the end, he finally loves her.
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Yes, from now on it is a new story, major turning point. However, memories of Lily will still linger and cause difficulties.Livvy
I'm happy that he finally has accepted her love and allowed himself to love her. I've never followed the cult of St. Lily. If she had really been a good person she would have accepted his apology and remained his friend. Anybody would have realized that he would lash out at the first person who came near and said things he didn't mean at all. She didn't have to fall in love with him, but she ceratinly should have remained his friend.
Response from livvy6 (Author of I'll Be There)
Preach it sister! I agree. I'm glad you are liking how the story is turning out.Livvy