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Potter Place's Summer 2007 Prompt Challenge Becoming Whole
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Becoming Whole

1: Chapter 1

2: Chapter 2

3: Chapter 3

4: Chapter 4

5: Chapter 5

6: Chapter 6

7: Chapter 7

8: Chapter 8

9: Chapter 9

10: Chapter 10

11: Epilogue

Becoming Whole

Southern_Witch_69

377 Reviews   |   377 Ratings, 0 Likes, 294 Favorites )

Romance Alternate Universe post-HBP/HBP compliant Potter Place's Summer 2007 Prompt Challenge 34,832 Words 11 Chapters Complete
Arthur Weasley Harry Potter Hermione Granger Ronald Weasley Severus Snape Augustus Rookwood Kingsley Shacklebolt Rufus Scrimgeour Daphne Greengrass Pansy Parkinson

Hermione requests to sponsor Snape after the war when the Ministry feels most Death Eaters should be given the chance to integrate into soceity again, depending on their crimes. He moves in with Hermione, and life as they know it forever changes. DH not recognized.

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Chapters (11)

Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Chapter 6: Chapter 6

Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Chapter 9: Chapter 9

Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Chapter 11: Epilogue


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Southern_Witch_69

Member Since 2005  |  144 Stories  |  Favorited by 1,103  |  2,209 Reviews Written  |  5,450 Review Responses

I adore the world of HP.



Thanks for stopping by. I'm off to stir my cauldron.

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Reviews for Becoming Whole

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9/10

Sampdoria

Thank you so much for the update, I was so happy to see it! I love that they are getting friendlier and showing each other more care and respect. I am not sure if I like the idea of Severus having Hermione helping him to visit a prostitute thogh. I can accept that he may have needs, and it is not like he and Hermione is in a romantic relationship, yet, but even so. I am so "old fashion" and egoistic that I don't want my heroes to have others during a story where (at least I think) they are supposed ot end up together. To be honest, I think you migth as well just let them stay friends, that way it wont hurt or ruin anything when Hermione discovers just what kind of visit Severus have her taking him to. I would find it quite disrespectful for Severus in any way making advances on Hermione after using her to see his whore, and I would hate for Hermione to accept such actions. It might be kind of backwards since they are not in a romantic relationship, but I know the I would have found it hard, if not to say impossible and really bad taste, to forgive or accept anyone making a pass at me after having me help them visit whores (or mistresses or previous lovers). I don't think I could have accepted that. Feelings, at least for me, would also be based on respect, I can't love someone I can't respect, and I would not respect a person who made a pass at me after using me to visit other lovers,  no matter what status our relationship was at the moment, I just can't. update again soon!!!

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

I'm right there with you. I much prefer the male / female main characters to only be with each other and nobody else. I have something great planned for the next chapter, so forgive me if I don't elaborate here. I hope you will enjoy it. I will update soon. :)Cheers!

10/10

amsev

What a sweet chapter!  Severus is finally relaxing around Hermione to where they're becoming friends instead of, as you said, captor and captive.  Very nicely done!

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

Thanks, doll. I'm happy you liked it. And what are you doing on here reading? Aren't you supposed to be writing? ~grin~

10/10

Prospera

yay yay huzzah hurray...thanks for a lovely story. I hope more is coming soon!

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

Definitely soon. T hank you very much.

10/10

sinbad

Hmmm am I detecting a hint of lemon for the future?

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

You are indeed. :)

10/10

blue artemis

You know, I understand his motives, but still, asking a woman he is interested in to escort him to a prostitute is a bit much.  Although I'm really enjoying the story. 

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

Very tacky indeed. :) There's a method to my madness. More up soon. Promise! And thank you.

9/10

Persevero

Apparating your fella straight out of a brothel - that's chutzpah!

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

too right! :)

0/10

oyasumikaze

I'm looking forward to see how Snape will like the new nighty :D And how you'll get him to seing it, of course. :) 

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

He will indeed get to see it... eventually. Hehe

9/10

kimjo2

just a pleasent dinner in muggle london to discuss matters, eh?  he he he.  loving this story thanks and many virtual truffle kisses.

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

~grin~ Thanks for reading. Hope you like the next bit.

8/10

sempra

I am really enjoying this fic. Harry and Hermione are spot on and Ron trying to be mature and reign in his emotions makes him a much more likable character. His ranting can be a bit much at times.

I felt so sorry for Severus during the hearing, it seemed so unfair that despite admitting that he was helping the light, following Dumbledore’s orders and doing more good than bad, he should still have to be ‘rehabilitated’. I was so glad when you made that exact point in Chapter 4. Having Severus switch between trying to be reasonable and civil to Hermione and acting upon his anger and frustration is great. We don’t quite know how he’s going to react and it shows his ambiguous, often volatile, nature. And who can blame him, though perhaps he’s directing at the wrong person. I cannot wait for the next instalment.

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

Thank you very much for the comments (and for th email). :) I hope to continue the same way with Ron. We HG/SS authors tend to beat him up some, don't we? :)

8/10

serket

I'm loving the story and your way of writing. Great work with the characters to, Snape and Hermione are both very much in character and still going in the right direction (towards each other). I'd really like to see Snape's thoughts on that shower scene, lol.

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

Thank you very much. Snape does have a pov section in the next chapter, so we get to see what he thought about that. Teehee

0/10

serket

Of to a good start. I've read several stories were somehow Hermione ends up as Snape "keeper" but a lot of them weren't feasible or well thought and had week plots. Yours is original and feasible and I can foresee a lot of possible situations for our favorite couple. keep up with the good work.

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

Thank you for that. I appreciate it. I hope you continue to enjoy the story! :)

9/10

beaweasley2

Very lovely. Poor Ron, always so clueless...

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

He sure is! Hahaha

0/10

WriterMerrin

Well, dinner in Muggle London does sound quite promising. It seems Sev has had some time to think, too.

*is trying to be patient*

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

He did. The little dinner is quite nice for them. :) Hope you like it.

10/10

laperchette

I loved the shower-scene. Maybe I should take one, too. But a cold one, without Snape in my bath :(.Lovely chapter! I think I've never read the Pancy/Ron-pairing and I really like her, actually I think they are a good ship! I'm looking forward to read glimpses of their relationship.I would love to have a nightshirt like yours, that you could transform from romantic to erotic. And the colour-changing - how cool is that!

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

Glad you like the ron/pansy part. :) They'll make an appearance again.Yes, I wish I had one of these nightshirts. LOL Thanks for reading! :) :)

0/10

Guinnevere

Ron and Pansy.  Erk.  Well, love never has made sense, since people have been talking/writing about it.

Hermione's shower certainly "showed" Snape!  And he actually sorta-kinda apologized.  They are making progress, of the three steps forward and two steps back variety.  But it's progress!  Good chapter. 

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

Too right. Can't exactly plan out love sometimes :) More up now. Hope you enjoy it. Thank you very much.

0/10

Cissy_n_Snape

Leave it to Potter. Where is Draco in this story?

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

Who's Draco? Hahaha... Just kidding. He'll show up.

10/10

SS Lupin

So glad there's another update! The Ron/Pansy in here is so fun to read.

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

thanks! glad you like that more to come with them

10/10

hogwartsgirl007

GUHHH!! ya that was amazing hun! *says a bunch of praise for you to the computer* cant type it all out!! lol keep up the good work!!

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

LOL  Thanks! Hope you continue to enjoy the story. :)

0/10

purelush

Seduction and plotting over dinner next, right? Right?  This is such a lovely story. And the Pansy/Ron bits are so lovely and awkward.

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

Thank you so much! More up soon

10/10

Sampdoria

Thank you so much for the update. I am glad you solved some of the misunderstandings so fast, and by the looks of things will solve even more in the next chapter. I find it boring and at times annoying when some stories tends to hold on to misunderstandings, making them a big part of the plot for x number of chapters before solving them in the next to the last chapter. I like that you have Ron paired with Pancy, he will never be my favourite caracter, but as long as he is not paired with Hermione (I absolutely hate that pairing) I can find him likable enough. I also liked Hermione's talk with Daphnee, letting us see that not only Severus is being treated unjust and unfair by the ministry. And, I seriously hope that you will let Hermione apologise to Harry asap, and that Ginny wakes up to make Harry happe too:-)) Update again soon, I love this story!!!

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

Thank you. I also hate when misunderstandings drag on and on. While some people enjoy those types, I'm too impatient as a reader and even a writer to carry on with it long. LOL I'll have more on Harry in the next chapter and an update on Ginny. :) I'm happy you are enjoying this. I appreciate the comments.I also think Daphne's comments will make Hermione and the others investigate things further.

10/10

Sniv

It was a bit risky when Hermione ...eh did what she did - then again I think it was a good thing. No matter what Snape says or do or...he is not made of stone and Hermione might just have reminded him of that when she did...you know...that. (Btw he description of Snape was just...*melts*) The scene in Nanyc's with Ron was great - I really enjoyed the scene between him and Hermione. And let's hope Ron will eventually tell Pansy that her arse is not *that* big ;-) I hope nothing bad will happen at dinner. Snape control your temper and Hermione think before you speak...No matter what I'm happy they are getting along. Great chapter - it just keeps getting better and better! I hope the next will come sooner rather than later :-D

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

I think that all thoughts of "girl" went out of his mind for good. He can't deny she's a woman at all (and we both know he peeked at her through the mirror). LOL I'm pleased you liked the scene with Ron. When I finished it, I was like, "Yeah... friendly parting." That's always a good thing. More up soon! :)

Response from Sniv (Reviewer)

(Sorry about the spelling mistakes I made - my excuse is the mental picture of Snape I can't get out of my head, thanks to you...) Friendly parting is always better both in RL and on here - though a lot of times it don't always work out that way...Hehe can't stop thinking about that scene in the bathroom - I would give Hadgrid a foot-massage just to see Snape's face when Hermione took her clothes of!

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

~grin~ maybe I'll have him reflect on it. Teehee. And don't worry about typos. We're in a friendly setting here. :) I don't even blink at them (or my own).

Response from Sniv (Reviewer)

Ohhh reflecting sounds goooody! *evil grin*

0/10

Mint Stick

What would one have to do to have a Snape like that in one's bathroom? :-D

I'm enjoying the way they're getting more used to each other. In all sorts of ways. ;-) And I'm glad they've made up again!

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

Thanks. I'll try to have more up sooner this time. And yeah, gimme a Snape in my bathroom too. :)

9/10

Merlinsbeard

Brilliant chapter.

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

Thanks. :)

10/10

ylang_two

Funny how the Trio's got *ahem,* chemistry going on with their "charges."  I'd like one of Nancy's magickal nightgowns!! 

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

I wish I had one, too. :) And, yep, but Harry doesn't seem very interested. I wonder if that will change. hmmm.... lol

10/10

ylang_two

BEst intentions, etc.  But I thought they knew better than to trust that Skeeter.  She's burned them before. . .  1 step forward, 2 steps wayy back.

Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Author of Becoming Whole)

Yeah, the wench has a way of twisting things around, doesn't she? :(

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