At the Motel
The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore
Chapter 13 of 29
spiderwortThere's still one small snag....
Reviewed13. At the Motel
They arrived at the Kings Inn—a cheap motel with a pebbled, almost empty parking lot, but with deadbolts and chains and steel-clad doors. While Darla unpacked and Stacy tested the beds for jumpability in their ground-floor suite, Hermione walked down the road to the local Chickin-Lickin to get them some food.
She thought back to their ride to the motel. Darla, bristling with suppressed fear and suspicion, drove with her eyes darting every few seconds to the rear-view mirror. Stacy, between them, clasped Hermione’s hand complacently and patted her mother’s leg.
“My-mee?" she addressed her new friend, "Know wha’ I wan’be when I gwow up?" She beamed a perfect baby toothed grin. "A jim-niss.”
“She means gymnast,” put in Darla unexpectedly. It was surprising--the mother was not too distracted by fear of being followed to keep track of her daughter’s attempts at conversation with this interloper.
“That’s nice,” said Hermione. She remembered the awe of seeing Olympic gymnasts on the telly, defying gravity almost magically with their leaps and cartwheels and backflips. Stacy was small for her age and would probably remain so. Her tiny hands and bird-like bone structure were a miniature of her mother’s. She would be a tumbler or balance beam artist—when she wasn’t busy studying Transfiguration and Ancient Runes at Hogwarts.
When Hermione came back from buying dinner—two Chickin-Chunks’n’Chips and a Jolly Meal--she noticed a yellow G & E truck in the parking lot. There's a funny coincidence, she thought. It made her think back to the first one of those she had seen. Not the ones that had arrived in the wake of her warning, but coasting down the road away from the cul-de-sac when she and Sirius had arrived earlier in the day. A young woman had been driving--a buff young woman with flowing gold hair, much the same color and curliness as--Stacy's. Another coincidence. And Sirius had remarked on the woman's dimples. Stacy has a dimple too--Hermione’s heart skipped a beat. Had it even been a woman in the cab of the truck? She'd thought the dark outline on the lower part of the face had just been a shadow caused by the woman's hand—that strong, slender, brown hand--shading her eyes from the morning sunshine. But what if it had been not shadow but--beard stubble?
She walked carefully into the motel foyer and eased her parcels into a chair, then tiptoed down the hallway to their room, which was at the far end. She edged up to the door, placing her hands on the steel surface, willing herself to hear that everything was all right. But through the metal sheathing, she made out a soft, high-pitched keening and then a deeper voice that chilled her.
"That's right, Stacy," it crooned. "Good baby, letting me in while Mummy was on the toilet. You've always been clever with opening locks, darling. Now, we can all have a cozy little talk..." The voice became a murmur, punctuated by sobs and suppressed whimpers of pain.
Hermione had the key at the ready. It was the card kind that you slipped into a slot, being careful not to turn the doorknob until you saw the green light: nice and quiet except for a faint click that hopefully the boyfriend would not hear over his gloating. She pulled her wand out of her bag. A Stun Spell should take him out, but… what if he has a weapon--a gun--or a knife pressed to Darla's throat? Hermione shuddered. She had to take the chance.
At this moment, Minister Scrimgour's words came back to her. By performing this spell, she could be banished from the Magicosm and her wand confiscated. Harry had gotten away with stuff like this before, but, well, that was Harry. She, Muggleborn Hermione Granger, had been expressly warned by the Minister of Magic himself about the change in the law and had already been found at a place where there had been a suspicious use of magic. And this time the Aurors would appear and find that she had done magic. They would ask what she was doing there.
She couldn't tell them about Dumbledore's list. Scrimgeour might try to use the information to keep Harry from his fated duty.
No, her path was clear. She would use magic and risk the ban. She had promised Darla and Stacy that they would be safe, and it was her fault that they were not. She blocked out of her mind unrelenting images of her friends—Ron especially--going on to fulfill their magical destinies without her.
Rhythmic slapping sounds were coming from beyond the door now, and the whimpers increased in volume. She slipped the card quickly in and out of the slot. She thought she heard Stacy crying for her mother. She squeezed her wand, squared her shoulders, turned the handle, and pushed.
At that instant there came an explosion, a splintering crash, and some kind of shock wave that slammed against the door and almost forced it shut again. But Hermione countered it, thrusting her whole body against it, praying: No--dear heaven--he doesn't—he couldn’t have--not a gun— please--
Swinging the door wide, she took in an incredible tableau. There was a haze of smoke, as from cigarettes--or a recently discharged firearm.
Darla was splayed out on the far bed, her face puffy and mottled, blood snaking down her cheek, but alive—coughing and crying. Against the wall under the window curtain lay the golden-haired monster—sprawled crazily over a chair, his head twisted and lolling on his shoulder at an impossible angle to the rest of his body. One leg was stretched out in front of him, the other dangling over the chair arm. A cigarette was burning a hole in the carpet, just beneath a too-still hand. His eyes stared at her in an expression of disbelief. His work shirt was spattered with some dark liquid. And there was a fast ebbing halo of blue flame receding from his body.
But as she glided past the entryway into the room proper, not daring to make a sound, Hermione realized it wasn’t really her at whom his sightless gaze was directed. He was looking at something just off to her right, a slight figure balancing athwart the pillows on the other bed. It was little Stacey--her back arched and her arms stretched out towards him, like a tiny gymnast posing in triumph after a flawless tumbling run, her fingers glowing with that same bright blue aura of energy that surrounded her father.
Now Stacy turned and smiled that angelic, dimpled smile as if she sensed that her new friend My-mee would see that everything was made right. Then she sighed and collapsed on the pillows in a small exhausted heap.
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50 Reviews | 9.52/10 Average
Hopefully, the goblins will give Hermione a chance to prove she has, in her possession, the rat who intended to rob their bank? Talk about out of the fire and into the frying pan!
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
You're so right! I should have called the story "The Perils of Hermione" a la the old movie serial "Perils of Pauline," with a cliffhanger at the end of every installment.
Oh, poor Hermione, that must be horrid. But good job using the electrified rail on Voldie.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
I'm an old chem-major, so the idea of a scientific solution to H's problem appealed mightily.
I thought this couldn't get any better, and then I read that magic word, RATNIP! I love you.You do keep coming up with wild situations and wilder original cahracters. Such an original and clever tale! ab fab.-Wahoo
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
**blushes** aw shucks...
Hooray, more chapters! You are so clever and inventive. Your wonderful ideas keep this story so fresh and alive! (unlike some of its characters) Thanks for sharing this with us!
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Thanks, guys. Unfortunately the story's almost over, but might I interest you in my next, about Minerva's childhood?
Response from Wahoo and Wesleyanne (Reviewer)
"dying" to see it! -Wahoo
Hermione is a bit naive, isn't she?
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Hmmmm... maybe, or maybe she had little choice but to cooperate... and of course, she still does like Viktor... a little.
Oh that is sweet! This chapter is a wonderful mix of humor and emotion. Poor Grawp! That was very sad. It was thoughtful of Percy to give him the poster. I'm glad he went home to his mom! I hope Hermione goes back ino the woods and gets the wand and briefcase! They might come in handy. -Wahoo
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Good point! But--oh, she's going to be busy for a while.
Golly this one had me laughing! My favourite line was that Helga Hufflepuff wanted to participate, but only in a small role. My hubby and daughter are 'theatre folk' and that just rang hysterically true to me.Well done,Pookah
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
I was 'theatre folk' once myself, and the party they threw afterward came out of memories of some first-night celebrations I've attended.
This is a very sweet chapter. I am glad Hermione was able to overcome her jealousy. I know how that is, my best friend from college was the prettiest girl at University of ---, and I was a bit jelaous of her when we first met. But her sweet nature and many sterling qualities won me over, in spite of my own bad nature and jealousy. Maybe this will be the start of a beautiful friendship between the two?-Wahoo
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Sounds like a great idea for a one-shot--or a challenge, n'est-ce pas?
Response from Wahoo and Wesleyanne (Reviewer)
yes, it does sound like a good challenge. We don't get enough stories of the lesser-known characters, and not enough friendship tales. thanks for your friendship tale, and you have given us delightful OCs as well.
-Wahoo
That was an interesting chapter. The verse was really quite amusing.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Thanks. The story comes from a series of one-shots I wrote for a challenge called "Hermione's Inferno". I felt I had try to do one in the poetic form Dante used in The Divine Comedy. I think it's called "terza rima".
Wow, a Ron I can like. That doesn't often happen in fanfiction. Well, at least the stuff I read, anyway.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
I've met some icky Rons too, blue, (and written some as well). But, of all the Rons I've created, I like this version the best.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
I've met some icky Rons too, blue, (and written some as well). But, of all the Rons I've created, I like this version the best.
I love this chapter! Thank you for the update, and for house elves! Love those house elves!
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Yes! And it's so much fun to write dialogue for them. JKR gave us such a wealth of characters and ideas to elaborate on.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Yes! And it's so much fun to write dialogue for them. JKR gave us such a wealth of characters and ideas to elaborate on.
I really love the idea of Hermione as a house elf.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Yay! Me too. Gives her a chance to see the other side of things.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Yay! Me too. Gives her a chance to see the other side of things.
another great chapter! Thanks for the update! I am really enjoying this unusual tale. I'd love to see what happens when the snidget-catcher goes to Hogwarts!
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Thanks, Double-W, so would I. (Plot bunnies abound in this fic.)
They are judging Hermione based on upset dead Weasley Prewitt ancestors? yeesh. Although the concept is funny as all get out.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
I know. Sorry, couldn't come up with anything better.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
I know. Sorry, couldn't come up with anything better.
spontaneous magic is great! Thanks for another chapter, I am enjoying this tale, it's very original.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
I've always been galvanized by the idea of underage magic. Anything can happen!
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
I've always been galvanized by the idea of underage magic. Anything can happen!
That was some serious accidental magic.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Yep, big things come in small packages. Like baby Harry... and Darla. All generated by love.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Yep, big things come in small packages. Like baby Harry... and Darla. All generated by love.
Oh, that poor Darla. Anyway, that was a smart plan of Hermione's. This story takes quite a few twists, doesn't it?
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
A new one almost every chapter. Hope it doesn't tire you out!
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
A new one almost every chapter. Hope it doesn't tire you out!
I am really enjoying ths clever tale! Thank you for writing it!
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
You're most welcome! I really enjoyed writing it too.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
You're most welcome! I really enjoyed writing it too.
Oh! the plot thickens! And I love Sirius's clever use of his limitations, he senses or spots a dead owl, but it turns out the aurors are there already. Really a neat little chapter! thanks for the update.-- Wahoo
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Sirius is soooo much fun to write. I bless JKR every day for making his character, but I bless even more all the writers who have elaborated on it.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Sirius is soooo much fun to write. I bless JKR every day for making his character, but I bless even more all the writers who have elaborated on it.
That was wonderful, and funny all at once.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Yeh, I'm a big fan of comic relief.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Yeh, I'm a big fan of comic relief.
Sirius is a hoot! I like your little Muggleborn witches and their families. HOW is Hermione going to convince them they are in danger? Looking forward to another amusing chapter soon!
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Thanks,
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
(that sure is a mouthful). I do enjoy putting Sirius into embarrassing situations. I figure his aplomb and sheer brass will get him out of most of them. (And there are lots more to come.)
Don't know how I missed this chapter but here it is! good chapter and I am on to the next. Thanks for this so-funny, so bizarre story.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Thanks, W&W, it will get bizarrer still, I assure you. (Well, um, I hope it will.)
Interesting chapter. Nice segue.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
Thanks, ma'am. This came out of a series of short sketches, loosely tied together by another writer's plot line that I had to give up on to create the book, so 'nice segue' is good, very good.
This keeps getting better and better. Poets have their own death, and RATS of all things?! Wonderful & imaginative.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
This sorta kinda came out of Terry Pratchett's Discworld. I think there's a Death of Rats in that one, but Reginald is my own idea.
This story is delightfully bizarre. I'm really enjoying the descriptions of death's place.
Response from spiderwort (Author of The Ransom of Albus Dumbledore)
I have to credit Terry Pratchett with most of that, so if you want more bizarre, try his Discworld series.