And So It Begins
Chapter 17 of 20
Dusty RoseThe war everyone had been dreading for seventeen years approaches . . .
ReviewedChapter Seventeen
And So It Begins
Snape found her sitting by the lake, staring out across the surface to something unseen on the other side. He quietly approached her, hoping this wasn’t one of those rare times she desperately needed her solitude. He didn’t wish to intrude, but he sat down on the rock next to her, content to share her silence.
She turned to him, smiling. Leaning over, she came into his arms and raised her lips for a kiss. He was still at a loss to comprehend her. Why she always seemed so glad for his company, when she could choose any of the men (and boys) who looked longingly her way. He often wondered if he could withstand the pain he’d feel when she decided she needed someone more cheerful and outgoing in her young life; someone who could walk her through her ages without being so far down the road already.
But, being human, and having recently forced himself to admit that, he was too selfish to chase her away toward someone who could make her happier. Someone like Potter.
He felt a grudging respect for the boy (hardly a boy, anymore, he reminded himself) because he’d proven to be as worried for her safety as Snape was. Potter had stayed by her side until Dumbledore literally dragged him out, muttering something about sustenance. Snape had been relieved; he had been getting closer and closer to some sort of emotional breakdown in Tanya’s absence, and he would open his veins in hot water before he’d allow Potter to see this unprecedented behavior from him.
At length, Tanya stood up, pulling Severus with her, and arm in arm, they began wending their way through the forest, Severus knowing that the otherwise harmful creatures lurking thereabouts would not bother them; they loved her, sought out her attention. Even the normally shy unicorns, having no reason in this world to be within a mile of Snape, came forward to nudge them both, asking mutely for an affectionate pat on the nose.
Tanya stopped nearer to the road suddenly. Following her gaze, he saw a rat, feebly wriggling, apparently at death’s door. She frowned, crouching closer, and carefully lifting its paw for a closer look. She looked up at Severus.
“It’s Wormtail,” she said in surprise. “What do you suppose he’s doing here?” She stood up, moving her hand in the air over the rat. As they watched, the rat transfigured back into the wretched Peter Pettigrew that she’d met in her London travels.
He lay there, gasping, obviously in pain. She narrowed her eyes, waiting to see if he’d speak; if he could speak. Snape knelt down, forcing himself to put a hand against the pulse of Pettigrew’s neck. It was reedy, slightly fast, but steady nonetheless. “Speak up, Pettigrew,” he growled.
Pettigrew opened his eyes, clearly not comfortable. Snape stood up, one hand moving toward where his wand was concealed in his cloak. Pettigrew saw the move and whimpered. “Please, don’t,” he said, “I can’t take any more of it.”
Tanya glanced quickly at Severus, her eyes questioning. He looked down on Pettigrew again. “Do you require medical assistance?” He had no intention of examining this man personally. Poppy Pomfrey chose the life of a mediwitch; let her deal with him.
He levitated the unfortunate creature to the hospital wing, after checking to see he hadn’t a wand secreted about his person. They waited until Poppy finished her examination and ministrations. They took seats on each side of his bed, and Snape conveyed silently to Tanya that she should take the lead.
Tanya acknowledged his unspoken message and turned to Pettigrew. “Do you know where you are, Pettigrew?”
“I was headed for Hogwarts,” he said shakily. “I don’t know how close I made it.”
“You’re there,” she said, “in the hospital wing. Can you tell us how you’ve come to be injured?”
“I’m there?” he said, wonderingly. “What are you doing here, then?”
Tanya glanced at Snape, then back at Pettigrew. “I was a student here.”
Pettigrew looked at her, narrowing his eyes. “You’ve been spying on me, then, haven’t you?” She tried a few more questions, but he clammed right up. Snape gestured to her, and she followed him out of the ward.
“We have Veritaserum,” he said, “but I have to clear it with Professor Dumbledore before I can administer it to him.”
“Quickly, Severus,” she said, “he’s wearing out. I don’t know for sure whether or not he has enough survival instinct in him to tough it out much longer. It was a Cruciatus, wasn’t it?”
“I fear so,” he confirmed. “He must have fallen out of Voldemort’s good graces.”
He left to find the headmaster while Tanya returned to Pettigrew’s bedside.
With Dumbledore’s blessing and attendance, their continued probing into Pettigrew’s secrets gave them a pretty good picture of what was going through Voldemort’s mind lately.
Voldemort, according to Pettigrew’s forced report, had planned to send an owl to Potter at school, delivering a package anonymously that would contain a Portkey, disguised as a Remembral. It would have been delivered as if from the Weasleys' Burrow, so the chances of Potter’s being suspicious of it would be lessened.
But Pettigrew, probably for the first time in his worthless life, felt guilty at the thought of Potter actually being killed. He knew it would happen as soon as Harry touched the Remembral and was transported to where Voldemort would be waiting for him.
He watched for the owl, and as soon as he spotted it, he used magic to kill it, catching the package as it fell. He opened it, making sure it was the package he sought, but as he opened it, it fell against his hand, transporting Pettigrew to Voldemort instead. Voldemort at once realized what had happened, and dispatched Pettigrew with extreme Crucio, leaving him to die. Pettigrew had drawn upon the last of his strength to Apparate to Hogwarts, his intention to warn Potter of what had almost transpired.
By virtue of the Veritaserum, they were forced to believe him, and Dumbledore sent for Potter at once. They apprised him of the situation, knowing the time had come at last. Voldemort’s attempt on Potter’s life signaled the official start of the war the entire wizarding world had been fearing for the last several years. It was time to prepare to meet the enemy.
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Latest 25 Reviews for The Gypsy
22 Reviews | 7.68/10 Average
nice - spent the las few evenings reading your story. I appreciated your OC. Keep up your writing.
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
Thanks!
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
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That was really neat. I was hitting the random story link in search of something new and came across your story. I got a real gem this time.
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
Thank you, I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
I had a really tough time with the change-over from HP/OC to SS/OC. If the beginning had been told more from Tanya's POV rather than Harry's, it would have helped clarify the angle of the story, and would have made it flow easier, I think.Still, interesting tale, and of course, I'm always happy when Severus gets to have some happiness in his life.EM
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
Yes, so sorry about that HP/OC-SS/OC switch. I had intended it to be all about HP and Tanya, but as it progressed, I realized the characters weren't all that compatible, so I began to lose my belief. Instead of going back and rewriting the story (which I should probably have done), I just let it continue to unfold.Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Hi, wishing to tell you that I'm reading your story. You've created a great turn of events, congratulations! Corrupted Auror trainees? Of course Malfoy finds out a flaw if he can use money to exploit it. You deserve more reviews but OCs tend not to get the same attention as canon characters even if bent to be unrecognisable. Me for one, I then prefer a new person. You're, however, close to creating a Mary Sue but maybe her exhaustion and some other drawbacks compensate for her power .. and beauty? Gypsis are outcasts in both worlds, that's so tragic, but I think Tanya is right in that the wish for it as well. Face it, out world isn't oo great thateveryone must embrace it. I will be reading on, I promise, but not today.
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
Thank you!
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
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I have never liked Cho. Tanya is too much woman for Harry, seems more like Severus' type. Tamara
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
Something she and Snape soon discover for themselves...
This chapter is very good. It had all kinds of emotions in it. Tamara
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
Thank you.
Tanya reminds me of Hermione somewhat. Tamara
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
Well, they are both carbon-based forms of life, I suppose...
What I don't understand is why more people haven't reveiwed this story. Tamara
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
*smiles*
It's amazing how detailed your story is. I'm enjoying very much. Tamara
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
Thank you!
Happy Birthday Harry! sorry you didn't get what you really wanted lol Tamara
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
He got as much as he could handle... hee hee
This story keeps getting more and more intriguing. Tamara
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
*grins*
I believe this is going to be a very interesting story. Great first chapter Tamara
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
Thanks!
Very beutiful story. It has met my expectations in almost every way. The fact that this could have been a book also impressed me. The drama and the suspence between the relationship between Harry, Tanya, and Snape seems to have been the most "encapturing" of the story. Though the ending of the feared wizard Voldemort could have gone better, I believed that the irony of his death being a knife seems off balance. Still Good Story.
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The story is keeping my interest. Tanya seems too mature and knowing for sixteen, but perhaps it's her gypsy heritage. Would part of her heritage be an inclination to hide her skill, or does she trust everyone at Grim Old Place?There was a crossover story of Buffy and Harry where Xander took out the portrait with a chain saw.
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
Her wanting to hide her skills is part of her wish to blend into the background, never having been comfortable with other people's attention. And she will never completely trust everyone...
Okay, you got Harry out of the Dursleys without subjecting him to a lot of misery. That's good. It's a bit dull to me because the characters are acting predictably, but we have to balance this against introducing the new characters and the story line in a clear manner. Molly's reaction to Gypsies was a good touch. My suggestion would be to have Snape make Harry nervous by being nice to Harry.
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
Snape's going to be too busy to bother Harry...
I have had this planted firmly on my favorites list for a long time, and I finally got the time to read it fully. Had to go back and re-read a few chapters to remember where I was, but I have finally finnished! And wow, what a story! I can't figure out if Tanya is a Mary-Sue or just a really good original character. The fact that she ends up with Snape supports the MS theory, but all the Gypsy history and its relation to the magical world makes me think Tanya was created to segway Gypsy magic into Harry-Land. If so they kudos to you. I was totally taken in by the new and interesting magical lore Tanya could wield. I also loved that you had her originally involved with Harry. The best stories always have some sort of love interest/antagonist to f#@$ up the works. I was kind of pissed that you didn't go further down that road before clearing the way for Snape. But hey, it all works! Excellent story - I am so glad I finally got the time to read this in its entirety. It must have taken a mammoth effort to get it right! Can't wait for the next story you put out as your writing style is really beautiful. lol
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
Thank you,
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
! This story was written before I found a group that has helped me with my writing, but for a first effort, I'm still rather pleased I actually managed to finish it. When I wrote it, I had no concept of what a MS character was. I think I have a pretty good grip on things now, and am learning more all the time.
I have to admit that in the beginning I had such a pervy crush on young Harry, that I had fully intended this story to be a OC/HP pairing, but somewhere along the lines, I discovered Snape, and was completely swept off my feet. Just as well, because I don't normally find myself attracted to anyone younger than 40. Now I feel a little less perverted.
I headed Tanya away from HP, mainly because things had been getting too hot for them, and didn't want to cross any underage sex policy lines. It was going to be difficult enough to rationalize Snape's interest in so young a woman later.
Thank you again for taking the time to read the story, and also for taking the trouble to send a review. It is truly appreciated!
Response from Brizywitch (Reviewer)
I will confess the same dilemma - a pervy crush on boy wonder got me into this fan girl mess, and finding Snape hooked me like cigarettes (very hard to give up). Thanks for your rationalisation - knowing where authors are (brain-space-wise) when they are writing has always interested me. Being able to find, and hold the same wavelength while writing a novel length fic is a mission in itself. I am in awe of anyone who can. I also didn't know who, or what, a MS was for the longest time - then I spotted someone being bitch slapped for it on a Buffy site, and caught on pretty quick. The fact that you made Tanya so believable and flawed, makes up for the fact that she is an AU character. Again, fantastic story - keep up the great writing.
Worthy of J. K. rowling herself!
The characters seemed alive. As an author myself I can say that Dusty Rose has a better grasp of characterization than I do.
Her storyline flowed smooth as silk. No gaps, inconsistancies or errors that I could spot.
All in all this is the best piece of fanfic that I have ever had the pleasure of reading!
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
Thank you! You are too kind!
Harry isn't as anxious as I am to see why she wants to see him alone in her room. ;) Excellent, excellent story. I am enthralled with Tanya.
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
Thanks! Remember, Harry is just learning about things like romance. In future chapters, you'll see that they're not really all that compatible, because of events which will unfold . . .
notsosaintly's response: I am looking forward to it., even if Harry loses another girl (poor thing). I have my own suspicions (pushes Mrs. Weasley aside) ... I'll just have to wait and see, I guess. (updateupdateupdate *snicker*)
What a great story! Thank you so much!PS I was a little disappointed when the Harry/OC stuff didn't happen.Well, we cant have everything in life....Anyway, whatagreatstory!
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
Thank you so much!
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Response from Dusty Rose (Author of The Gypsy)
Thank you so much!