Chapter Thirteen - Animagi Study/Ginny's Birthday
Chapter 13 of 18
jmlane57The couple discusses taking advanced Transfiguration classes in order to become Animagi; shortly thereafter, Ginny's 16th birthday is held.
ReviewedIt turned out that even the so-called simplified version was just as much over their heads as it was for himself and Hermione, but Harry and Hermione did their best to explain the things they did understand.
But even that much knowledge could only help them at this juncture, especially since Harry had finally gotten a communique from the Ministry (specifically, the Department of Magical Law Enforcement), which told him that the rape trial for Draco had been set for the middle of the following month, August, shortly after Ginny's birthday, in fact, which would make fourteen months since Ginny's attack.
It had taken over a year to reach this point, but Harry and company considered themselves lucky. Most likely the main reason for it was because of all the evidence on their side, but whatever the case, what mattered was that they were finally going to see Draco get what had been coming to him for a long time ... and that day couldn't come soon enough for Harry.
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After this, the couple discussed the possibility of taking the extra courses, which would enable them to become Animagi ... and Ginny found herself agreeable to becoming virtually any animal Harry might choose as long as it meant being with him. She had even heard that hawks mated for life, so if she and Harry had to live in the wild in animal form at some point, she believed that that might be the best choice for the two of them.
Especially the fact that they would be able to fly together...and wouldn't need brooms! However, if what McGonagall, an Animagus herself, had said in her last owl post was true, it would be necessary for them to learn how to feel comfortable in animal form before they could even attempt to live in the wild. That would take time, weeks if not months, so the pair could only hope that nothing would happen in the next few months or even the next year which would necessitate their going into hiding for any length of time.
They would also need to give their family and friends some way to identify them if they had to find them in animal form; Harry made a mental note to ask McGonagall about that in his next owl post. For the time being, however, he simply wrote and told her to sign them both up for the Advanced Transfiguration class specialising in Animagi transformations into birds and other avian species, at the same time asking her about how to develop distinctive markings or colours which would identify an individual Animagi while in their animal form.
Maybe Harry could be a black hawk and keep his green eyes, and Ginny a red one and keep her brown eyes. They'd have to see about that when the time came. Again, they could take the class via home study and even practice the transformations at home, but the final official registry would have to be done at the Ministry through the Improper Use of Magic Office, which covered Animagi and the registry of same.
Only a relative handful of witches and wizards had managed to master the advanced techniques necessary to become Animagi, but Harry figured if his father and Sirius could do it, so could himself and Ginny. In fact, it would almost have to be tougher to be able to change into a dog or a stag than a bird, so the latter change would be unlikely to be too difficult, as opposed to the former.
In the meantime, however, plans were being made to celebrate Ginny's 16th birthday; Harry was considering several things as potential gifts for her, including a beefcake photo of himself similar to the one she had given him for his birthday. If he chose that, he would certainly admonish her to keep it hidden, as she had done for the one he had given her, for such things are meant for the eyes of lovers only.
When the day rolled around, this time Harry was the one recruited to keep Ginny busy so she didn't learn what was going on downstairs until the proper time. He still recalled vividly what she had done to keep him busy and vowed to follow her example to the letter. He had pretty much mastered Legilimency by this time and could sense if she even considered trying to listen at the door for any stray sounds, so he made sure to divert her with passionate snogs whenever her thoughts happened to stray in that direction. Even as enjoyable as such interludes were, she soon gained a new understanding of the frustration Harry must have experienced in the same situation when she had so pleasantly (albeit irritatingly) diverted him so many times.
Even at that, Ginny would never forget the way Harry had awakened her on the morning of her birthday with a lingering kiss and tender smile, crooning, "Happy birthday, my so very sweet sixteen." She wasn't aware of it at the time, but he had even discovered a recording of a song with a similar name by a Muggle singer named Neil Sedaka and planned to have it played at some point during the party, maybe even dance with her while it was playing and sing along. Meanwhile, he had his hands full, so to speak, trying to keep her busy until they were called to come down for the party.
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It was nearly time for the party when Ginny got restless again and Harry again attempted to divert her via snogging; however, this time, she waved him off. "Don't touch me! I'm sick of waiting!"
"But it's nearly time. You can wait a few more minutes, can't you?"
"As long as it's no more than a 'few more minutes,' " she warned. "Any more, I'm leaving this room, and I'll hex you if you try to stop me!"
Fortunately for Harry, a knock came on the door a short time later; they looked up and found Hermione standing there. "It's time. Come on down."
"Thank Merlin," Ginny groused. On the way down, she told Hermione what she'd threatened to do to Harry if he tried to stop her from leaving her room even one more time ... and the older young woman laughed, prompting a dirty look from Harry in her direction even as he retained hold of Ginny's hand on the way downstairs.
As on Harry's birthday, it was almost too quiet, and he suspected that everyone was hiding in the kitchen, just waiting to yell "Surprise" when they opened the door ... and he was right. Molly almost smothered her youngest child in a tight hug and a sound kiss on the cheek; then her brothers who were present basically did the same, even Fred and George. But all the oldest male present, Arthur, did was place a simple kiss on her cheek and give a tender smile in his only daughter's direction. "Happy birthday, baby."
"Thank you, Daddy ... but I must remind you, I'm not a baby any more."
"I'll second that," Harry concurred, slipping a possessive arm around her and squeezing her. "Which reminds me ..." He caught Fred's eye, and the latter moved over to the nearby Muggle turntable to place the tone arm needle at the beginning of the 45 rpm disc and turn up the volume so all could hear. Soon the strains of Neil Sedaka's famous 1960s tune filled the room, and those present with "significant others" pulled them onto the floor, Harry being the first.
After he had drawn Ginny into his arms and rested his forehead on hers, looking down into her soft brown eyes, his own green eyes soft with love, he began to softly sing. He was no Sinatra, certainly, although he could carry a tune...even at that, the sentiment was what mattered, especially to Ginny. She literally forgot that anyone else was in the world except herself and Harry as they moved and swayed together.
Tonight's the night I've waited for
Because you're not a baby anymore
You've turned into the prettiest girl I've ever seen
Happy birthday, sweet sixteen
What happened to that funny face
My little tomboy now wears satin and lace
I can't believe my eyes, you're just a teenage dream
Happy birthday, sweet sixteen
When you were only six, you played with your big brother
Then when you were ten, you didn't like each other
When you were thirteen, you were my funny valentine
But since you've grown up, your future is sewn up
From now on you're gonna be mine
So if I should smile with sweet surprise
It's just that you've grown up before my very eyes
You've turned into the prettiest girl I've ever seen
Happy birthday, sweet sixteen
Once the song ended, Harry lifted her face to his and crooned, "I love you, sweet sixteen," then kissed her even as everyone else present cheered and applauded. It took Molly's voice rising over the rest to bring them down to earth, even as Ginny blushed with a mixture of pleasure and embarrassment.
"Come on, you lot! Supper's ready! George, get out of that...that's your sister's birthday cake!...Out, I say, before I hex you!" She pointed her wand threateningly in her nineteen-year-old son's direction. George gave her a mock hurt look, but moved away from the cake and toward the table, where everyone else was going, including his twin, Fred. Soon everyone was seated at their designated spot, and Molly levitated the cake over to the table, setting it down in the centre just as neat as you please.
The one large candle in the centre of the gold, oblong-shaped cake decorated with red roses said, "Sweet Sixteen," and its two wicks, one on each end, were lit by the end of Molly's wand. "Happy Birthday, Ginny" was at the foot of the candle in red icing.
"Come on, Mum, I'm hungry," George groused.
"Quiet, George!" Molly scolded. "You'll get some cake soon enough. Just give your sister a chance to blow out her candles, then cut it." George gave a pleading look in Ginny's direction; Molly glared at him and he reluctantly subsided. A moment later she leaned forward and blew out the two flames; everyone smiled and applauded after singing, "Happy Birthday."
Upon removing the large candle, Ginny cut the cake with a regular cake knife since Molly had definitively vetoed her first choice, using her wand. Wands were too expensive to use so casually; even looking pleadingly at Harry was no help.
"Sorry, luv, I have to agree with your Mum," he returned with an apologetic smile. "At least for the moment. Once we're married, though, I'll get you a new one. Fair enough?"
Ginny gave him a sour look, but said, "I suppose so."
"Come on, luv, smile. It's your birthday!"
"Cut it out, Harry," she scolded, but ended up smiling anyway. Once the cake was cut and everyone was chowing down (that is, after the regular birthday meal had been consumed and the table cleared), especially George...who was currently on his third slice...Harry told the rest of the Weasleys that the rape trial for Draco was scheduled in just a few more days.
"Why didn't you mention it earlier?" Molly groused.
"Didn't want to spoil the party," came the apologetic reply.
"Don't apologise, Harry. It's the best news we've heard in ages. It's just that we'd have liked to have been able to celebrate it along with Ginny's birthday. Have you decided what you're going to say when you're on the stand?"
"For a while, I'll simply let the evidence speak for me ... then I'll take the Veritaserum and testify as to what happened the day of her abduction."
"Can imagine how old Lucius is going to react to that," Arthur commented with a derisive laugh.
"I intend to challenge him to take some himself," Harry declared. "It'll be worth whatever happens just to see the look on his face when I say it in front of the entire courtroom! The best part of the whole thing, though, is that Draco is going to be made to take it. I'm going to love every minute of that, that's for sure. Not to mention seeing him chained to a chair!"
"Who else did you plan to have testify?" Arthur put in.
"Ginny's counselor has said that she's willing to testify, not to mention the Healer who took care of her at St. Mungo's and the one who did the DNA sample analyses, as well as the Muggle doctor. Copies of their reports will also be admitted as evidence for our side."
"Well, you know that most any of us would be willing to serve as character witnesses," Molly assured him.
"I know, but there's a limit to how many can testify," Harry reminded them. "Five at the most, I think."
"But we can still come as observers, can't we?" she persisted.
"I think so; you'll just have to sit in the observers' section."
"When are we supposed to be at the courtroom?" was her next question.
"Nine o'clock Wednesday morning, the 16th. I was thinking we could all Apparate over there to save time."
"Fine. But now let's get back to the party," Ginny suggested. "Remember, it's still my birthday!"
With that, her birthday presents were given to her...but Fred and George's was the most memorable, something they said she could use to please Harry ... and they gave her the same warning they had given him, not to open it until she intended to use it. Harry still hadn't been able to bring himself to open his present from them, for that matter, although he pretended he had and told them that Ginny had enjoyed it so as not to hurt their feelings.
Ginny was just as aware of their quirky (not to mention bawdy) senses of humour, so she was just as apprehensive as to what it might be. The rest were more innocuous, all in keeping with Ginny's tastes but still within the limited family budget. Except for Harry's, that is; he had already told her that it wasn't something that could be opened in mixed company any more than hers to him could have been. She would have to wait to open it until they got back upstairs to their room.
Again, it was around ten by the time the party broke up and all couples headed for their respective rooms; Ginny couldn't help but wonder what Harry could have gotten her that couldn't be shown in mixed company; wouldn't it be something if it was similar to what she'd gotten for him? That would be great, but she couldn't count on it; she'd just have to wait and see.
They walked into their room and closed the door behind them; behind Ginny's back, Harry sent a nonverbal spell via a pointing of his wand toward the door, effectively locking it ... then moved over to the bedside table, used another nonverbal (and this time wandless) spell to remove the Invisibility Charm he had placed on her present, then picked it up and hid it behind his back before turning around to face her.
"All right, where's my present, Mister? The one you said you couldn't show me in mixed company?"
"Right here," he said, moving one arm to indicate the hidden present. "You just need to hold out your hands and close your eyes."
Ginny sighed in affectionate exasperation, but followed instructions. She felt him place something in her hands; then he directed, "Okay, open your eyes."
As it was with Harry, neither could Ginny believe her eyes. "Oh, my gods ..."
"Do you like it?"
"As someone I love very much once said, 'Like it? It's incredible!' "
It was along the same lines as the cheesecake thing she had given Harry, only this one showed him in very form-fitting clothes and giving her a come-hither look over his glasses, along with a provocative smile. His sky-blue shirt was half-undone and the black hip-hugger jeans clung to his slender, well-built body like a second skin. Dear gods, he positively sizzled!
"When did you have this done?"
"I made an appointment for about a week ago. I had awakened early, and you said the night before that you intended to sleep late, so I took a chance and flew off to Hogsmeade to get it done. It was kind of ... embarrassing to have to tell them what I wanted, but it was easier to do when I pretended that you were there smiling at me."
"It's wonderful. I love it. These 'cheesecake' pictures will help a lot whenever we can't be together ... not that either of us plan on that happening any more than absolutely necessary, of course."
"Especially not for the foreseeable future, anyway," he concurred. "Just the same, I'm glad you liked it. Oh, yes, something else I've been meaning to ask you ... you do still want to go through with the classes so we can eventually Transfigure into hawks, don't you?"
"Of course I do," she assured him. "If I'd changed my mind, I'd have told you long before this. Anything else?"
"Just thinking of something to do to close out your birthday," he returned with a sly smile. "How about what we did on my birthday?"
"Are you sure you're up to it? You know it's not for the faint of heart ... or those without a very strong sex drive," she pointed out.
"I wouldn't suggest it if I didn't think I was up to it. The question is, will you be up to it?"
Ginny gave him a suspicious look. "Is that a challenge, Mister?"
"Take it as you will," he threw back.
"All right, you're on. Come here, you!" She laughed and held out her arms; Harry couldn't move into them fast enough ... and with that first kiss, a very exhausting (but at the same time, extremely pleasurable) night awaited them.
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25 Reviews | 7.6/10 Average
What a fitting and lovely ending! Wonderful job. Sorry I was such a critical reviewer; I'm sure you got tired of seeing my comments after awhile. Anyway, great job!! ~Jen
Okay, so there were a lot of moments in this chapter I liked such as the Harry/Ginny interactions, and a lot of moments I didn't think were very plausible and didn't really do anything for the story like the judge not interrupting once during Harry and Petunia's verbal shout match and the argument in the first place. Overall the chapter wasn't bad, but I thought you'd already established that Harry felt no more connection to his relatives in the last chapter. Good job, nonetheless.~Jen
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
I look at the argument and the judge's not stopping it this way: I put myself in Harry's shoes and considered what I would do in his position. Harry had the chance to tell his nasty relatives just what he thought of them for abusing him all his life -- and the judge sensed this, so she didn't try to stop him. He needed to be able to vent his spleen without fear of punishment, such as starvation or being beaten. She would, of course, have put a stop to it if it got out of hand. In this way he achieved closure once and for all. I don't know what other parts you were unsure of, plausibility-wise; all I can say about them is the fact that that is how the story happened to flow as I wrote it. What matters is that you liked the story overall, whatever your reservations.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
I look at the argument and the judge's not stopping it this way: I put myself in Harry's shoes and considered what I would do in his position. Harry had the chance to tell his nasty relatives just what he thought of them for abusing him all his life -- and the judge sensed this, so she didn't try to stop him. He needed to be able to vent his spleen without fear of punishment, such as starvation or being beaten. She would, of course, have put a stop to it if it got out of hand. In this way he achieved closure once and for all. I don't know what other parts you were unsure of, plausibility-wise; all I can say about them is the fact that that is how the story happened to flow as I wrote it. What matters is that you liked the story overall, whatever your reservations.
Nice chapter! I think I liked this trial content more than Draco's, not that Draco's was bad. Great job!!~Jen
I didn't really like how Harry's outburst came about in this chapter, but overall it wasn't bad. His outburst was justified, of course, but the wording seemed a bit awkward. Great job though.~Jen
Great chapter! I thought all the testimony was very well-written...good job!~Jen
Great chapter! I loved Ginny's gift...Harry's reaction was great. I liked the part about Hermione doing something similar for Ron later...fun idea! Wonderful job!~Jen
I'm glad Ginny was able to take this new development well. I really liked the emotions displayed in this chapter. Great job! ~Jen
Poor Ginny! I hope she won't relapse too badly. I think your writing is getting better, too. I don't feel there's anything missing from these most recent chapter. Keep it up!~Jen
Great chapter!! I especially liked the ending with the different sayings and the deeper meaning of love you wrote about. Wonderful job!~Jen
Aww...another cute, adorable chapter! I really like the chapters you write with all the Harry/Ginny fluff time. Wonderful job!!~Jen
Awww...this was a truly lovely and adorable chapter. So romantic and perfect...terrific job!! I absolutely loved this chapter! Amazing work!~Jen
Good chapter. I still can't quite put my finger on the missing aspect of the writing, but it's still a good plot nonetheless. I think the one thing that truly puzzles me is that in order for rape to be, you know, rape the woman has to report and testify to that fact. So if Ginny thinks Harry assaulted her...how can Harry possibly stand to file charges if she doesn't know that Draco and Dudley actually did it to her? I may be looking way too deeply into this, but I feel it would probably help me feel less confused.~Jen
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
Believe me, rape is rape, whether or not the woman reports and testifies about it--but don't worry, Ginny WILL eventually find out and testify about it. I'm sure I put in something where Harry is advised that she must testify about it in order for there to be a good chance of those responsible being convicted. That and his promise to her to tell her what happened are what mainly what prompts him to finally give her the whole story. He didn't intend to tell her until absolutely necessary in an attempt to spare her any further trauma. As it is, she's going to to go through nightmares, which will require counseling. Also, Harry can stand to file charges because he knows he's not responsible for her rape experience and relishes the idea of going after Draco and his lowlife cousin...in the end, for himself as well as Ginny.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
Believe me, rape is rape, whether or not the woman reports and testifies about it--but don't worry, Ginny WILL eventually find out and testify about it. I'm sure I put in something where Harry is advised that she must testify about it in order for there to be a good chance of those responsible being convicted. That and his promise to her to tell her what happened are what mainly what prompts him to finally give her the whole story. He didn't intend to tell her until absolutely necessary in an attempt to spare her any further trauma. As it is, she's going to to go through nightmares, which will require counseling. Also, Harry can stand to file charges because he knows he's not responsible for her rape experience and relishes the idea of going after Draco and his lowlife cousin...in the end, for himself as well as Ginny.
Sorry I didn't review the last chapter, but I wanted to keep reading. Anyway, I really like this storyline, but there's something just a little off--I don't really know what exactly it is though. I'm a bit confused about Ginny's perception of the whole thing...I mean does she know Draco and Dudley raped her or does she still believe Harry was just a little rough with her? Other than that, it's not bad so far. ~Jen
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
No, Ginny doesn't really know that Draco and Dudley raped her. Draco has blindfolded her, given her some love potion and an hypnotic suggestion that it's Harry doing these things to her. He wants her to think it's Harry assaulting her in an attempt to sabotage the Harry/Ginny relationship...but continue reading and you'll learn how things eventually play out.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
No, Ginny doesn't really know that Draco and Dudley raped her. Draco has blindfolded her, given her some love potion and an hypnotic suggestion that it's Harry doing these things to her. He wants her to think it's Harry assaulting her in an attempt to sabotage the Harry/Ginny relationship...but continue reading and you'll learn how things eventually play out.
I'm not sure whether they could have realistically discovered who took Ginny that quickly, but I'm glad they did. Great job. Harry's cooling down happened faster than I thought it would when he faced Draco, but otherwise the characters were written well. ~Jen
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
The reason Harry knew who took Ginny so soon was because Neville had witnessed her abduction and came to tell him as fast as he could. I'm sure I mentioned that in the story. Oh, Harry was furious when he realised at had happened, but once he calmed down a bit, he knew it wasn't worth getting in trouble by going after Draco and Dudley as he originally intended to.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
The reason Harry knew who took Ginny so soon was because Neville had witnessed her abduction and came to tell him as fast as he could. I'm sure I mentioned that in the story. Oh, Harry was furious when he realised at had happened, but once he calmed down a bit, he knew it wasn't worth getting in trouble by going after Draco and Dudley as he originally intended to.
I feel so bad for Ginny, she's going to think Harry's doing everything!! I hope she not too scarred by that later. Can't wait to read on.~Jen
It is one the best written stories on this site, and beyond. I feel satisfaction that Harry has won, and sadness that Ginny had to endure the torture of Draco and Dudley.The plot is twisted and worriedly disturbing. Yet, it is a story you want and need to read right the way through.Many Best wishes for sharing such a wonderful story.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
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Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
Thank you most kindly! (blush) Too many more reviews like this and I'll get a swelled head ... hehe!! But so glad you enjoyed it. Makes an author feel their time was well- spent writing a story to get such praise. Thanx again!!
jmlane57
Mmm... Nice shakespeare quote thrown in there.
I've been trying to follow this story, but it's really hard to envision Ginny as being so absolutely docile. It's completely out of character for her.
I also find it incredibly difficult to accept that Arthur and Molly would allow Ginny and Harry to share a bed in their home when Molly is rather strict with her children. After all, Ginny is still underage. I could imagine Harry and Ginny having a sexual relationship that was hidden, but not one that is so obviously open.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
It may have seemed docile, but if you read the sequence where Harry and Ginny argue over her needing counseling, you should know that she did not just blithely accept his declaration. He had to all but threaten her with Stunning to get her to agree to it...and even then, it was reluctant.
Also, did you read the entire sequence of events from the time Harry officially renewed his relationship with Ginny that day at Diagon Alley (Chapter 4)? If so, you should know that they are keeping their relationship on the Q.T., have since the day by the pond (Chapter 6).
If Molly’s figured out what’s going on, it’s because of her mother’s intuition, not because the couple is being too open and obvious about it … because they both know how she would react if they were. [Because your reaction was what it was, I can’t help getting the impression that you haven’t.] In addition, at least officially, they have separate bedrooms. Ginny has hers, and Harry is staying in Fred and George’s old room. BTW, Harry is seventeen (Chapter 11) and Ginny will be sixteen not long after that (Chapter 13). Even if they were slightly underage when their intimacy began, things like that can happen in the wizarding world, sooner than in ours, if only slightly.
The only ones who really know of said intimacy are Ginny’s counselor, who’s sworn to secrecy anyway, as are Ron and Hermione. Besides, they are acting responsibly, using contraception and all that, so I don’t think there’s too much to worry about. I see nothing wrong with it as long as that’s the case.
Great beginning. I do wonder why Dudley, whose fear and hatred of wizards, has been pushed to the side. Perhaps the promise of sex is greater than his fer of wizards ... could be. Looks like his second (lower) brain has taken over.
oooohhh. wow. i wonder how dudley is so stupid to not know that Draco is a wizard. lol. poor poor ginny.at least she gets to think its Harry. so sad, so sad. but keep going! please? *puppy eyes*
It was a very beautiful and heart warming story, of a Lover fighting for his or her beloved.A wonderful piece of writing. Best wishes,
???the story is ok, but it's written a lot different than i'm used to. and you repeat a lot of statements. (you said the part about dudley becoming a serial rapist twice -- once w/harry, ron, and hermione, and once w/harry and ginny. just letting you know.) i expected there to be a bit more action (of the butt-kicking variety), but i do like the story.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
I intended it to be different, mainly since it's darker than the kind of fics I usually write. As for repeating the thing about Dudley, the first time Harry is telling his friends about it, the second, he's telling Ginny.As you may note, completely different people. If he was telling them all at once, I could understand your objection...but he wasn't.Neither Ron nor Hermione told Ginny anything about what happened to her before this because Harry thought it best...and besides, he'd promised Ginny that he would do it at the proper time--and at this point in the story is that time. They're only with him here because he needs their help and strength to be able to tell Ginny everything she needs to know.As for butt-kicking, Harry may not have been able to do it literally (although he was certainly tempted--but it would likely have landed him in prison and he has better things to do in his life). However, don't worry too much--he's going to get the chance to do plenty of verbal butt-kicking very soon, in both Draco and Dudley's trials!
YAY for Harry! I love it when theres a happy ending. Serves Draco and Dummy right.
Response from togspled (Reviewer)
ok. i misspoke...this isnt a happy ending..yet...but it seems to be leading to one. so im happy.
I find myself a little lost in the beginning ... there seems to be an issue with time frame. I'm assuming Ginny would have been arriving early for the game since she was playing in it. Now, when Neville approaches Harry, it is well into the game. Why didn't Neville find Harry immediately? He certainly knew where to find him.
The other point is that Ron and Hermione are half an hour behind Harry, who no doubt raced at lightning speed to get to Ginny. But I don't feel more than 5 minutes pass in the conversation between Harry and Draco.
Also, I don't quite understand why Harry didn't force his way into the room to save Ginny when Draco told him that his cousin "is in there right now, taking his pleasure with her." Instead he uncharacteristically waits. And then Ron and Hermione arrive and they all un-Gryffindorishly demand that Draco "hand her over" and ... just wait.
Of course, none of this affects my desire to read more of this story. I just wanted to point out a few things that my mind was questioning.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
Harry's wondering where Ginny is, naturally, but is fully expecting her to show up any minute with an explanation. Also, Neville didn't tell Harry immediately because he was witnessing the abduction and wanted to make sure to get all the details of same so Harry would know what to do to rescue her after he told him. Then after Draco and Dudley left with her, it took him a few minutes to get to the Quidditch pitch to tell Harry what had happened, which would also take some time.
It also took Neville a few minutes to tell Hermione and Ron what he had told Harry, then a few minutes for them to fetch their own brooms and take off after Harry, so as I said, they were indeed just a half hour behind him.
Harry was quite upset, and if he had forced his way in and hexed Dudley as he wanted to, that hex might have hit Ginny too, and she was being hurt enough as it was.
Besides, Draco had already assaulted her, so what would have been the point to Harry's forcing his way in? As he told his friends, the damage had already been done, no matter what they did. That was the main reason none of them just burst in--not that they didn't want to!
Hope this clears up at least some of your questions--and even so, I'm glad you like the story in spite of them.
I've been meaning to read this, as I keep seeing it on the update list, and now that I have I'm quite curious as to what's going to happen next. I found some of this hard to follow because of the way the story is told. Sometimes it seems like it's from Draco's point of view, others at Dudley's, and then most of the time it feels like an unseen narrator is telling us the story from his point of view. Many times I was confused as to who "he" was, having to stop and backtrack or skip forward to know if it was Draco or Dudley.The plot is different than any I've read, so I'm going to carry on. See you when I'm able to review the next chapter. Cheers.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
Didn't mean to make it difficult to follow; it was just the way the story happened to come out as I wrote it. But even at that, what matters is that you were intrigued enough to want to read it. There are seven chapters up now, one of which is rather ... racy, if you get my drift ... although I hope you review at least one of these at your earliest convenience.
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