Chapter Two - Harry Learns What Happened
Chapter 2 of 18
jmlane57In the midst of a Quidditch game, Harry learns of Ginny's abduction and suspects he knows who did it even as he takes off to find her, vowing vengeance every step of the way.
ReviewedHarry was becoming concerned. Where was Ginny? She had never been late for Quidditch practice; in fact, she was usually there before he himself was. He asked if anyone had seen her; everyone shook their heads. Fortunately, enough qualified people had shown up that he could replace her, at least as Chaser. But he was unsure how much good he would do as Seeker if he was worrying about her, so he disqualified himself, simply acting as Captain and made one of the others act as Seeker.
As the game wore on, he was becoming more and more concerned. No, call it by its right name...he was worried. Worried sick. What could have happened to her? If it hadn't been for the game and the necessity of his presence, if only as Captain, he would have chucked it all and went looking for her. He could only hope he would see her again, whole and healthy...and when he did, that she would have a satisfactory explanation for missing their long-scheduled practice.
After a time he couldn't concentrate on the game; he was too busy picturing a thousand things happening to her, each worse than the last. He had never wished so much for a Quidditch game to be over in his life! Just then, Neville Longbottom came running onto the pitch, making a beeline for Harry upon spotting him sitting on the sidelines, seemingly immersed in his own thoughts and not watching the game at all, as he usually did if he didn't play.
"Harry! Harry!" he called out, skidding to a stop in front of the object of his search.
"What is it, Neville?" Harry was both grateful and annoyed for being jolted out of his thoughts of Ginny.
"Ginny's been kidnapped!"
"What? What are you talking about? When?" he demanded.
"She was on her way here; I was coming to watch the game and saw her approaching around a quarter past three...then saw two blokes Apparate in not far from where she was. I hid where they couldn't see me and watched them; it looked like one of them did something to render her unconscious, then tied her up with ropes. Finally he seemed to murmur something under his breath, then stuff something in his pocket. Lastly, he picked her up and the three of them Disapparated. That was when I thought I'd better come here and tell you."
For a moment Harry's eyes closed in pain at the thought of Ginny's being gone; then he forced it aside and faced Neville squarely. "Did you see what they looked like?"
"One looked tall and thin...and blond; the other was heavy-set with lank brown hair. That was all I could see from the distance between them and me."
That was when Harry's pain was replaced with anger. Malfoy! He should have known he was behind Gin's disappearance. But who was his accomplice? Sounded a lot like his lowlife cousin Dudley ... but how could that be? How could they possibly have met? Could Draco have actually gone to Privet Drive and run into him somehow? It was the only explanation that made any sense.
But if Draco and Dudley had kidnapped Ginny, where could they have taken her? It was a cinch that Draco had to be the brains of the outfit; it seemed that all Dudley's limited brain power was confined to the mechanics of eating, bullying and moving his whale-like body around. All at once Harry knew what he had to do. He visibly pulled himself together and got to his feet.
"Nev, tell whoever comes down first where I've gone. I've got to go look for Ginny. There's no time to lose. Let me know how the game went when I get back." He added in his mind, And I'll be back with Ginny...or else I'm not coming back!
Harry grabbed his Firebolt, then mounted it and took off, moving so fast that he was only a red-gold streak, having only a vague hunch of where his beloved might have been taken, but deciding to follow up on said hunch nonetheless. He pushed the broom as fast as it would go, on the way developing a murderous anger at Malfoy, which only seemed to grow in intensity with every passing moment.
The damn bloody bastard! This had to be his idea...and Dudley would naturally be both nasty and stupid (not to mention horny) enough to go along with it, especially if Draco had promised him he could have a go at Ginny if he helped him kidnap her. If he managed to get his hands on them, he swore with every ounce of hatred in him that he would kill them...and what's more, enjoy doing it ... and be damned to the consequences! They deserved whatever they got for going after Ginny like this. I'm coming, luv, he told the image in his heart's eye. I hope and pray you're all right. If you're not, I'll take it out of both Malfoy's and Dudley's stinking hides for both of us!
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A half hour later Ron and Hermione sought out Neville to find out what had happened. They had been too far away to have heard what he said to Harry. All they could be sure of was that Harry had been worried sick about Ginny at first; then after Neville had told him whatever it was, his worry had been replaced with murderous anger. He had then mounted his broom and kicked off into the air, accelerating so fast that he seemed little more than a red-gold blur. He hadn't even taken off his Quidditch robes! Only something serious involving Ginny could have made Harry act like that, and they were determined to find out what.
Upon reaching him, they demanded an explanation for both Harry's actions and Ginny's disappearance; Neville repeated the story he had given Harry. It could only have been Malfoy behind it, from the description...but who had the other been? Harry had once described his whale-like, nasty, bullying cousin; they could have sworn it sounded like him...but how could Draco possibly have met him? All they could think of was Draco's having gone there disguised as a Muggle and offering him something he couldn't refuse ... perhaps even a go at Ginny, if only to get revenge on Harry.
They knew what kind of temper Harry had once it was aroused, and it was most easily aroused these days by any threat to Ginny, either emotional or physical; they had to stop him if they could before he did something that would land him in even more serious trouble than ever before. Upon reaching the adjoining locker rooms, they each ducked into them to retrieve their brooms, then took off literally like blue streaks just as Harry had, hoping every step of the way that they could catch up to him in time to prevent him from putting his head in a noose.
They could understand his being upset, not to mention his desire for revenge, but neither Draco nor Dudley was worth a lifetime stint in Azkaban ... much less serving time in a Muggle prison for murder. Their brooms weren't as fast as Harry's, naturally, but they pushed them for everything they had, going on Hermione's hunch that Harry had headed straight for Malfoy Manor, convinced that he must be holding Ginny captive there, at the same time hoping against hope that Ginny would both come out safe and sound and Harry keep his freedom. If he insisted on venging himself on the two perpetrators, of course, they would help him do it...but in a manner that would leave them alive, just thoroughly punished within an inch of their near-worthless lives.
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Meanwhile, at Malfoy Manor, Draco had sealed the door of the spare room, temporarily imprisoning himself, Dudley and Ginny in it. At the moment, Draco was having his fun with her while Dudley watched, becoming more and more aroused with every passing moment, wishing so much that it was himself that he could almost literally taste it.
If his worthless cousin hadn't already taken her, it would serve him right ... because once he and Draco were through with him, she would think he had and act accordingly because of Draco's administering both the love potion and planting the illusion in her mind that the one doing all the sexy things to her was Harry, the one she loved. By this time, even Dudley had surmised that Draco could not have done the things he'd done without being a wizard...but this one seemed at least tolerable, even considering his threat to destroy him if he went against him in any way.
He looked at his watch in between bouts of wanking off, noting that it was roughly six o'clock; Draco had been going at it for at least the last hour and a half, literally doing everything sexual he could think of, everything he had ever wanted to do to a girl, however kinky. But with his temper, Dudley hesitated to interrupt him. Just the same, if Draco didn't let him in on the fun soon, he would have to take a chance. He couldn't stand just watching for much longer ... he wanted to be doing. Just the same, if Harry ever learned of this, he would surely go ballistic and come after them with both barrels...to put it mildly!
Just when Dudley was sure he couldn't stand it any longer, Draco finally got off Ginny and beckoned to Dudley before gesturing to the still-trussed-up and naked girl. "She's yours, mate. Enjoy her." Dudley couldn't move fast enough; within moments he had replaced Draco and began to indulge his own fantasies.
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However, by this time Harry, by now seething with righteous, albeit murderous, anger, was nearing Malfoy Manor...and heading straight to where he knew Draco's room was, prepared to counter any charm or enchantment Malfoy might have placed on his area of the house to prevent intruders. Harry's determination was such that he would not allow anything to stop him, whatever he had to do.
As he neared the sliding glass doors which faced a large balcony, he saw the tall, thin figure that he recognised as Draco emerge from the room. "Well, so you finally got here, Potter. Well, it's too late. I've already had my way with your sweet little bed-bunny, and your cousin is in there right now, taking his pleasure with her."
Harry didn't think he could ever have thought such hateful, murderous thoughts as he was doing now. "You ... effing bloody bastard...this was your idea! Dudley wouldn't have had the brains to come up with it! I swear, you've reached a new low, even for you!"
"Guess what else, Potter. I've put an illusion in her mind that it's you doing these things to her, so if she blames anyone, it'll be you! It's a cinch that she'll never accept you sexually now, not after what we've done ... so if you've not had brains enough to take her by now, it's best that you accept the fact that you never will!"
"You know, I'd come here all ready to take you both apart, but now I realize that neither of you are worth either life in Azkaban or time in a Muggle prison. Just the same, don't think you're going to get away with this, Malfoy...not you nor my scumbag cousin!"
"Oh, really? We'll see about that. My father ..." Malfoy began.
"Bugger your father! I've got money and connections that neither of you has any inkling of...and you may be assured that I'll sue you for every Knut you've got! I'll also instigate proceedings for felonious sexual assault against Dudley ... and you'd better warn him that if I ever lay eyes upon his fat, ugly face again, I will kill him, my uncle and aunt be damned! I vow this with every ounce of blood in my body!"
"You're too soft to enjoy killing or inflicting pain, Potter," Draco scoffed.
"Then you better hope that I never get closer to enjoying killing or inflicting pain than I am right now!"
By this time, even Draco realised that Harry was serious about what he intended to do to avenge Ginny, so he knew he'd better take steps to minimise the damage to either his or his family's reputation if this became widely known. As for Dursley, he deserved whatever he got, either from Harry or the penal system for being stupid enough not to have seen through him at the start, allowing himself to be sucked into this criminal act.
It was at this point that Hermione and Ron neared the spot; as far as they could tell, Malfoy and Harry seemed to simply be talking, so the latter must have realised the futility of committing such a criminal act as murder, even if the potential recipient of same deserved it. Just the same, they had never heard such hatred and contempt in Harry's voice as they did now ... and they were truly thankful they were not Dudley Dursley, because they sensed that he would not be long for this world if Harry ever got him alone long enough.
"All right, Malfoy, hand over my sister now, you damnable bloody bastard!" Ron demanded angrily, pointing his wand threateningly at the white-blond Slytherin.
"Weasel King ... so you're here too, are you? What will you do if I don't?" Malfoy taunted.
"I'll do what Harry's too good to do!" Ron shot back.
By this time Harry had noticed his friends' presence. "No, Ron. He's not worth it. Neither of them are worth it. Besides, the damage has already been done. All we can do is repair it as best we can."
"What do you mean, 'the damage has already been done'?" Ron almost spat.
"They've ... already ... raped Ginny. And what's more, they've planted a suggestion in her mind that I ... did it, so if she blames anyone, it'll be me."
"Rubbish! You could never do anything like that," Hermione declared, her first contribution to the conversation.
"That's beside the point. Ginny is going to think I did ... and I frankly doubt that anything I say is going to change her mind on that score," Harry returned morosely. "And who could blame her, after what I've put her through?"
"You don't know what she's thinking right now, mate. No sense conclusion-jumping until she's out of here and we can get help for her," Ron tried to soothe his friend.
"Help for her body, maybe. What about her heart and mind? In that sense, will she ever be the same again, after what Draco and my ... cousin have done? Will there even be a point to punishing them if we end up not being able to help her?"
"Harry, don't talk like that. Of course we can help her!" Hermione shot back. "There's got to be a way! Which reminds me ..." She turned to Malfoy, holding her wand out threateningly. "Hand over my friend now, scumbag, or I hex you into the middle of the next century!"
Draco seemed to take no notice of Hermione's threatening tone, simply turned around and headed for the sliding glass door, as calm as a glass of milk. "If you'll give me a moment, I'll see if Dudley's through yet. If he is, you can have her back."
Draco went through the door; the three outside bobbed up and down in the air on their brooms as they waited. Inside, he noted that Dudley was lying half across Ginny, exhausted yet smiling. It took virtually every ounce of strength Draco possessed to move him off her, even with his wand, and when he did, Dudley grumbled sleepily and reached for Ginny, not wanting to leave her. Draco couldn't blame him, but there were people waiting for her, and if he didn't get a move on, they'd likely come in and fetch her bodily, going through both him and Dudley if necessary. He curtly instructed Dudley to dress and get ready to leave, for he was taking him back home.
Draco only knew about undressing girls, not dressing them, so after releasing her, he simply wrapped her in a blanket and carried her out, deciding to put one more dig into Harry by handing her to him. He blushed furiously upon realising she was naked under the blanket. He had had many erotic dreams about such in the course of their romance, and they had always left him painfully aroused, but he had never actually seen her that way, nor had he ever gone beyond some tentative caresses, usually consisting of tracing her body through her clothing during their snogging sessions, even as much as he wanted to.
And after this trauma, would she ever want him to touch her again? Especially if she thought he'd already had his way with her? Surely she would know better than to think he would ever assault her as she had been today, but how could he ever be sure, especially if she went through a phase where she was unwilling to even see him, much less talk to him about what had happened?
Just the same, he'd better enjoy holding her while he could; there could come a point where she wouldn't want him near her, much less touching her, after what had happened. Tears misted Harry's eyes as he buried his face in her fragrant hair.
Gin, I'm so sorry this has happened to you ... so sorry that I was unable to prevent it ... but I swear to you on my life, I will see that both Draco and my cousin pay dearly for what they've done to you! I also intend to do everything in my power to make you realise that it was not I who did such horrendous things to you. I would sooner hurt myself than you, sweet Ginny ...
"What's wrong, Harry?" Hermione asked when she noted his actions.
"Ginny ... she's ..." He was unable to speak further before once again burying his burning face in his beloved's hair, pressing her tightly to him and fighting back tears of both anger and despair.
"She ... has ... no clothes on?" she accurately guessed. She moved to glare at Draco. "Bring us her clothes now, you lowlife bastard, or I'll go fetch them myself and hex anyone who gets in my way, including you and your partner in crime!"
"One moment," he returned calmly, going back inside and returning shortly afterward, his arms full of Ginny's clothes, including her Quidditch robes. Hermione snatched them away from him and turned to leave, never at any time detecting even a trace of regret or remorse on Draco's part for what he and Dudley had done to Ginny and hating them all the more for it...particularly for what it was surely going to do to Harry in the process of Ginny's healing. And just wait until her parents (and other five brothers) found out what had happened!
"Come on, Harry, Ron. We have better things to do than to continue to waste our time here." Her voice was laced with more hatred and contempt than either of her companions had ever imagined her capable of. But they didn't argue with her, simply turned away and left Malfoy Manor and its hateful residents behind.
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25 Reviews | 7.6/10 Average
What a fitting and lovely ending! Wonderful job. Sorry I was such a critical reviewer; I'm sure you got tired of seeing my comments after awhile. Anyway, great job!! ~Jen
Okay, so there were a lot of moments in this chapter I liked such as the Harry/Ginny interactions, and a lot of moments I didn't think were very plausible and didn't really do anything for the story like the judge not interrupting once during Harry and Petunia's verbal shout match and the argument in the first place. Overall the chapter wasn't bad, but I thought you'd already established that Harry felt no more connection to his relatives in the last chapter. Good job, nonetheless.~Jen
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
I look at the argument and the judge's not stopping it this way: I put myself in Harry's shoes and considered what I would do in his position. Harry had the chance to tell his nasty relatives just what he thought of them for abusing him all his life -- and the judge sensed this, so she didn't try to stop him. He needed to be able to vent his spleen without fear of punishment, such as starvation or being beaten. She would, of course, have put a stop to it if it got out of hand. In this way he achieved closure once and for all. I don't know what other parts you were unsure of, plausibility-wise; all I can say about them is the fact that that is how the story happened to flow as I wrote it. What matters is that you liked the story overall, whatever your reservations.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
I look at the argument and the judge's not stopping it this way: I put myself in Harry's shoes and considered what I would do in his position. Harry had the chance to tell his nasty relatives just what he thought of them for abusing him all his life -- and the judge sensed this, so she didn't try to stop him. He needed to be able to vent his spleen without fear of punishment, such as starvation or being beaten. She would, of course, have put a stop to it if it got out of hand. In this way he achieved closure once and for all. I don't know what other parts you were unsure of, plausibility-wise; all I can say about them is the fact that that is how the story happened to flow as I wrote it. What matters is that you liked the story overall, whatever your reservations.
Nice chapter! I think I liked this trial content more than Draco's, not that Draco's was bad. Great job!!~Jen
I didn't really like how Harry's outburst came about in this chapter, but overall it wasn't bad. His outburst was justified, of course, but the wording seemed a bit awkward. Great job though.~Jen
Great chapter! I thought all the testimony was very well-written...good job!~Jen
Great chapter! I loved Ginny's gift...Harry's reaction was great. I liked the part about Hermione doing something similar for Ron later...fun idea! Wonderful job!~Jen
I'm glad Ginny was able to take this new development well. I really liked the emotions displayed in this chapter. Great job! ~Jen
Poor Ginny! I hope she won't relapse too badly. I think your writing is getting better, too. I don't feel there's anything missing from these most recent chapter. Keep it up!~Jen
Great chapter!! I especially liked the ending with the different sayings and the deeper meaning of love you wrote about. Wonderful job!~Jen
Aww...another cute, adorable chapter! I really like the chapters you write with all the Harry/Ginny fluff time. Wonderful job!!~Jen
Awww...this was a truly lovely and adorable chapter. So romantic and perfect...terrific job!! I absolutely loved this chapter! Amazing work!~Jen
Good chapter. I still can't quite put my finger on the missing aspect of the writing, but it's still a good plot nonetheless. I think the one thing that truly puzzles me is that in order for rape to be, you know, rape the woman has to report and testify to that fact. So if Ginny thinks Harry assaulted her...how can Harry possibly stand to file charges if she doesn't know that Draco and Dudley actually did it to her? I may be looking way too deeply into this, but I feel it would probably help me feel less confused.~Jen
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
Believe me, rape is rape, whether or not the woman reports and testifies about it--but don't worry, Ginny WILL eventually find out and testify about it. I'm sure I put in something where Harry is advised that she must testify about it in order for there to be a good chance of those responsible being convicted. That and his promise to her to tell her what happened are what mainly what prompts him to finally give her the whole story. He didn't intend to tell her until absolutely necessary in an attempt to spare her any further trauma. As it is, she's going to to go through nightmares, which will require counseling. Also, Harry can stand to file charges because he knows he's not responsible for her rape experience and relishes the idea of going after Draco and his lowlife cousin...in the end, for himself as well as Ginny.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
Believe me, rape is rape, whether or not the woman reports and testifies about it--but don't worry, Ginny WILL eventually find out and testify about it. I'm sure I put in something where Harry is advised that she must testify about it in order for there to be a good chance of those responsible being convicted. That and his promise to her to tell her what happened are what mainly what prompts him to finally give her the whole story. He didn't intend to tell her until absolutely necessary in an attempt to spare her any further trauma. As it is, she's going to to go through nightmares, which will require counseling. Also, Harry can stand to file charges because he knows he's not responsible for her rape experience and relishes the idea of going after Draco and his lowlife cousin...in the end, for himself as well as Ginny.
Sorry I didn't review the last chapter, but I wanted to keep reading. Anyway, I really like this storyline, but there's something just a little off--I don't really know what exactly it is though. I'm a bit confused about Ginny's perception of the whole thing...I mean does she know Draco and Dudley raped her or does she still believe Harry was just a little rough with her? Other than that, it's not bad so far. ~Jen
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
No, Ginny doesn't really know that Draco and Dudley raped her. Draco has blindfolded her, given her some love potion and an hypnotic suggestion that it's Harry doing these things to her. He wants her to think it's Harry assaulting her in an attempt to sabotage the Harry/Ginny relationship...but continue reading and you'll learn how things eventually play out.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
No, Ginny doesn't really know that Draco and Dudley raped her. Draco has blindfolded her, given her some love potion and an hypnotic suggestion that it's Harry doing these things to her. He wants her to think it's Harry assaulting her in an attempt to sabotage the Harry/Ginny relationship...but continue reading and you'll learn how things eventually play out.
I'm not sure whether they could have realistically discovered who took Ginny that quickly, but I'm glad they did. Great job. Harry's cooling down happened faster than I thought it would when he faced Draco, but otherwise the characters were written well. ~Jen
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
The reason Harry knew who took Ginny so soon was because Neville had witnessed her abduction and came to tell him as fast as he could. I'm sure I mentioned that in the story. Oh, Harry was furious when he realised at had happened, but once he calmed down a bit, he knew it wasn't worth getting in trouble by going after Draco and Dudley as he originally intended to.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
The reason Harry knew who took Ginny so soon was because Neville had witnessed her abduction and came to tell him as fast as he could. I'm sure I mentioned that in the story. Oh, Harry was furious when he realised at had happened, but once he calmed down a bit, he knew it wasn't worth getting in trouble by going after Draco and Dudley as he originally intended to.
I feel so bad for Ginny, she's going to think Harry's doing everything!! I hope she not too scarred by that later. Can't wait to read on.~Jen
It is one the best written stories on this site, and beyond. I feel satisfaction that Harry has won, and sadness that Ginny had to endure the torture of Draco and Dudley.The plot is twisted and worriedly disturbing. Yet, it is a story you want and need to read right the way through.Many Best wishes for sharing such a wonderful story.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
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Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
Thank you most kindly! (blush) Too many more reviews like this and I'll get a swelled head ... hehe!! But so glad you enjoyed it. Makes an author feel their time was well- spent writing a story to get such praise. Thanx again!!
jmlane57
Mmm... Nice shakespeare quote thrown in there.
I've been trying to follow this story, but it's really hard to envision Ginny as being so absolutely docile. It's completely out of character for her.
I also find it incredibly difficult to accept that Arthur and Molly would allow Ginny and Harry to share a bed in their home when Molly is rather strict with her children. After all, Ginny is still underage. I could imagine Harry and Ginny having a sexual relationship that was hidden, but not one that is so obviously open.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
It may have seemed docile, but if you read the sequence where Harry and Ginny argue over her needing counseling, you should know that she did not just blithely accept his declaration. He had to all but threaten her with Stunning to get her to agree to it...and even then, it was reluctant.
Also, did you read the entire sequence of events from the time Harry officially renewed his relationship with Ginny that day at Diagon Alley (Chapter 4)? If so, you should know that they are keeping their relationship on the Q.T., have since the day by the pond (Chapter 6).
If Molly’s figured out what’s going on, it’s because of her mother’s intuition, not because the couple is being too open and obvious about it … because they both know how she would react if they were. [Because your reaction was what it was, I can’t help getting the impression that you haven’t.] In addition, at least officially, they have separate bedrooms. Ginny has hers, and Harry is staying in Fred and George’s old room. BTW, Harry is seventeen (Chapter 11) and Ginny will be sixteen not long after that (Chapter 13). Even if they were slightly underage when their intimacy began, things like that can happen in the wizarding world, sooner than in ours, if only slightly.
The only ones who really know of said intimacy are Ginny’s counselor, who’s sworn to secrecy anyway, as are Ron and Hermione. Besides, they are acting responsibly, using contraception and all that, so I don’t think there’s too much to worry about. I see nothing wrong with it as long as that’s the case.
Great beginning. I do wonder why Dudley, whose fear and hatred of wizards, has been pushed to the side. Perhaps the promise of sex is greater than his fer of wizards ... could be. Looks like his second (lower) brain has taken over.
oooohhh. wow. i wonder how dudley is so stupid to not know that Draco is a wizard. lol. poor poor ginny.at least she gets to think its Harry. so sad, so sad. but keep going! please? *puppy eyes*
It was a very beautiful and heart warming story, of a Lover fighting for his or her beloved.A wonderful piece of writing. Best wishes,
???the story is ok, but it's written a lot different than i'm used to. and you repeat a lot of statements. (you said the part about dudley becoming a serial rapist twice -- once w/harry, ron, and hermione, and once w/harry and ginny. just letting you know.) i expected there to be a bit more action (of the butt-kicking variety), but i do like the story.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
I intended it to be different, mainly since it's darker than the kind of fics I usually write. As for repeating the thing about Dudley, the first time Harry is telling his friends about it, the second, he's telling Ginny.As you may note, completely different people. If he was telling them all at once, I could understand your objection...but he wasn't.Neither Ron nor Hermione told Ginny anything about what happened to her before this because Harry thought it best...and besides, he'd promised Ginny that he would do it at the proper time--and at this point in the story is that time. They're only with him here because he needs their help and strength to be able to tell Ginny everything she needs to know.As for butt-kicking, Harry may not have been able to do it literally (although he was certainly tempted--but it would likely have landed him in prison and he has better things to do in his life). However, don't worry too much--he's going to get the chance to do plenty of verbal butt-kicking very soon, in both Draco and Dudley's trials!
YAY for Harry! I love it when theres a happy ending. Serves Draco and Dummy right.
Response from togspled (Reviewer)
ok. i misspoke...this isnt a happy ending..yet...but it seems to be leading to one. so im happy.
I find myself a little lost in the beginning ... there seems to be an issue with time frame. I'm assuming Ginny would have been arriving early for the game since she was playing in it. Now, when Neville approaches Harry, it is well into the game. Why didn't Neville find Harry immediately? He certainly knew where to find him.
The other point is that Ron and Hermione are half an hour behind Harry, who no doubt raced at lightning speed to get to Ginny. But I don't feel more than 5 minutes pass in the conversation between Harry and Draco.
Also, I don't quite understand why Harry didn't force his way into the room to save Ginny when Draco told him that his cousin "is in there right now, taking his pleasure with her." Instead he uncharacteristically waits. And then Ron and Hermione arrive and they all un-Gryffindorishly demand that Draco "hand her over" and ... just wait.
Of course, none of this affects my desire to read more of this story. I just wanted to point out a few things that my mind was questioning.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
Harry's wondering where Ginny is, naturally, but is fully expecting her to show up any minute with an explanation. Also, Neville didn't tell Harry immediately because he was witnessing the abduction and wanted to make sure to get all the details of same so Harry would know what to do to rescue her after he told him. Then after Draco and Dudley left with her, it took him a few minutes to get to the Quidditch pitch to tell Harry what had happened, which would also take some time.
It also took Neville a few minutes to tell Hermione and Ron what he had told Harry, then a few minutes for them to fetch their own brooms and take off after Harry, so as I said, they were indeed just a half hour behind him.
Harry was quite upset, and if he had forced his way in and hexed Dudley as he wanted to, that hex might have hit Ginny too, and she was being hurt enough as it was.
Besides, Draco had already assaulted her, so what would have been the point to Harry's forcing his way in? As he told his friends, the damage had already been done, no matter what they did. That was the main reason none of them just burst in--not that they didn't want to!
Hope this clears up at least some of your questions--and even so, I'm glad you like the story in spite of them.
I've been meaning to read this, as I keep seeing it on the update list, and now that I have I'm quite curious as to what's going to happen next. I found some of this hard to follow because of the way the story is told. Sometimes it seems like it's from Draco's point of view, others at Dudley's, and then most of the time it feels like an unseen narrator is telling us the story from his point of view. Many times I was confused as to who "he" was, having to stop and backtrack or skip forward to know if it was Draco or Dudley.The plot is different than any I've read, so I'm going to carry on. See you when I'm able to review the next chapter. Cheers.
Response from jmlane57 (Author of Vendetta)
Didn't mean to make it difficult to follow; it was just the way the story happened to come out as I wrote it. But even at that, what matters is that you were intrigued enough to want to read it. There are seven chapters up now, one of which is rather ... racy, if you get my drift ... although I hope you review at least one of these at your earliest convenience.
jmlane57