Kata
Chapter 7 of 19
Fairfield"I thought about my father, who had become involved with my mother."
ReviewedChapter 7: 30 September 8:00 AM -- 20 October 5:00 PM Kata
The phrase at Durmstrang was Hackenschneiden. It was never said aloud or in public. It sent a chill down most people's spines. It certainly sent a chill down mine. To stay in certain circles, I had to go on one. I knew that if my parents ever discovered what I did, I would be taken out of Durmstrang, permanently. I went anyway.
I remember my hands were sweaty enough that I could barely ride my broom. I remember screaming and slicing a vampire into small pieces ... out of sheer terror. My fellow dueling club team mates were impressed. They said I looked like a windmill with blades. They were afraid to help. They were afraid to come close. That's me: a danger to friend and foe alike, the most feared sword in all Germany.
After graduation, I would face a year of compulsory service with the German Wizard Assault Teams. Their weapon of choice is an automatic rifle. German wizards, being a romantic lot, insist on the Kalishnikov. The vampires don't have a chance. With the combination of wood, silver, compound, and explosive bullets that they use, neither do werewolves, giants, wizards or anything else they've met. The teams practice the combined-arms of defensive spells, hurled curses, and suppressive fire. The purpose of an official vampire hunt is an exercise in field operations: intelligence, communications, and coordination of units. The teams recently learned how to stun vampires, and they can include prisoner-of-war training in the exercises. I've heard that prisoner-of-war training with a bunch of vampires is harder than one might think. Durmstrang students believe the War Department secretly releases the vampires after the exercises.
Returning to the topic at hand, I needed a room at Hogwarts in which to perform kata. I dared not go back to Durmstrang completely out of practice. In Salem, students could join a kendo club. There were tangential thoughts about other All-American delights: pizza, General Tso's chicken, and tacos. I searched until I found what appeared to be a suitable room. It was almost hidden. I didn't care to be public about this. I unpacked my bokken, my wooden samurai sword, thinking there was no reason to wave around a lot of sharp steel. I practiced a simple kata with a bokken until I was no longer completely clumsy. Then I practiced with my katana, my long, steel samurai sword that I had used on the vampire. I sought out Professor Flitwick for his advice. When I performed for Professor Flitwick, I used my katana. I might as well let Flitwick and the room know what I was about. I think the Brit expression is 'Full Monty.'
"Beautiful. Deadly," said Flitwick.
"You have chosen well. This room is an armory where the castle guard used to practice. They believed that gaining proficiency at arms improved a person's character. This room believes that, and it welcomes you."
"Who knows? You might believe it too," he added, giving me an amused look. "The room doesn't have a door. Do you want one?" he asked.
"No," I said. "At Hogwarts, doors take on lives of their own."
Flitwick nodded in agreement.
The room was in an out-of-the-way location; hence, I was not likely to be discovered. To keep people out while I practiced, I used one of Durmstrang's students' favorite souvenirs from Salem. It was bright yellow tape with black lettering that said, "CRIME SCENE DO NOT CROSS."
I tried to keep a balanced physical program, alternating days of kata with days of calisthenics and jogging. It was not fun. Mien Gott, I hate pushups. Various martial arts have exercises where the practitioner begins in a relaxed position, often sitting, and moves quickly into block and counter. Most attacks occur when we're unready, when we think we're safe. These exercises are exhausting. I was finishing a sequence of them when I saw the bushy haired whatsit staring at me from the door. Well, that was just ducky. I had confirmed her opinion of me that I was someone who would suddenly attack for no reason.
Two days later, I was halfway through a kata when I realized there were several people watching me from the doorway. I finished the kata, did my bow of appreciation to the room, turned and bowed to the group at the door, and noticed they were leaving. I stood there for a while, disappointed that they did not stay to return my greeting. I could hear voices as they left.
"What's he waving that stick around for?" said a male voice.
"It's a sword," said a female voice. "Did you see the way he moved? He would be across the room slicing your arm off before you could say 'Expelliarmus.'"
"All I saw was a bloody stick," said the male voice.
From the tone of the voices, it sounded, to me, like another argument between a smart girl and her dumb boyfriend. A selfish inner voice said, "Hey, I'm not stupid. I like smart girls." A more reasonable voice replied that there might be a lot of affection and passion between them.
I performed the last kata that I had planned to practice that session. Halfway through, I noticed that someone had returned and was watching. When I finished the kata, I bowed and said, "Hello, Miss Lovegood." By now I had learned the name of the abstracted girl at the sorting feast.
"Hi, Hermann," replied Miss Lovegood. "Can I do that with you?"
"It's called a kata," I said. "It's a fixed sequence of moves practiced to acquire grace and balance, although it embeds real combat techniques."
"I can see that, Hermann," Miss Lovegood told me.
Of course she could. Miss Lovegood stepped into the room, paused to absorb its ambience, and bowed. I gave her my bokken to examine. Miss Lovegood cradled my bokken and hummed to it. She went to the window and examined the trees in a small copse nearby, paying particular attention to an oak tree. She cradled my bokken again, hummed to herself some more, and then swung my bokken around. Miss Lovegood went to the window and pointed her wand at the oak tree. There was a snap, and a dead branch floated over to the window. Quick movements of her wand had the branch stripped, debarked, and trimmed at both ends. Miss Lovegood levitated the core of the branch into the room. She cradled the branch, hummed to it, and then set it on a table beside my bokken. Careful movements of her wand planed and shaped the branch. When she finished, she had a bokken that was slightly slimmer, but five centimeters longer, than mine.
I watched Miss Lovegood as she swung her bokken and copied some of the moves she had seen me make. I groaned inwardly. Here came another lesson in humility. In Potions, I had to keep up with Draco. In Charms and Transfiguration, Miss Patil was not speaking to me, but was outperforming me with great glee. In Arithmancy, I had to compete against every smart kid in school. For kata, I had someone with both natural grace and a killer instinct.
"Has anyone ever told you that you're deadly?" I asked Miss Lovegood.
"No," she said.
We started on the first kata. A few days later, padded uniforms and equipment arrived from Germany, which meant Miss Lovegood and I could whack away at each other. It was ever so much fun. Why wasn't Miss Lovegood a boy? Why did I have to have a bonding experience with a girl? Another heartbreak on the horizon. To whom do I complain about this? It would have been okay if I had considered her just another boy, but I didn't. I couldn't. Among other things, she took really good care of me after she whacked the holy crap out of me. From Samurai to Nightingale, all purpose Luna. I cringed when I saw the bruises I gave her. "Witch beater," my mind screamed at me. Despite all the fuss we made, it was only small bruises. If Miss Lovegood had been a boy, neither of us would have noticed anything.
Luckily, she was in a different year, in different classes, and I could spend a lot of time away from her. Unluckily, I ruined the opportunity to keep her distant by inviting her to study with Draco and me. What was I thinking? Draco was helping Barbara and Shelly prepare for their OWLs. The first several study sessions with Miss Lovegood were awkward, but after they adjusted, Barbara and Shelly discovered that Miss Lovegood was as gifted academically as she was athletically.
I had heard the comments about 'Loony Luna,' but she didn't make that type of impression on me. She did have some strange habits in dress and behavior, although nothing like some of the wilder students at Durmstrang. I was certain that some of them were half feral. I thought the same about some of the Durmstrang professors. It must be that Northern isolation that gets to us. Perhaps Miss Lovegood was stranger when younger and more isolated. She and Barbara and Shelly had become friends and study partners. Hence, Draco was her friend. Draco, as an aristocrat, had a tolerance of unusual behavior, and he had a calming effect since he radiated ability and confidence. Then there were the martial arts. The healing power of its discipline, the healing power of its outlet for anger and aggression, is often underrated.
Miss Lovegood's father edited a newspaper that presented an alternate point of view. She was happy to discover that I was skeptical about the official version of events. In fact, I couldn't understand the acceptance of it at Hogwarts. History at Hogwarts was taught by a ghost who believed he was teaching facts. Miss Lovegood, however, was disappointed to learn I was also skeptical about unofficial versions of events.
"Just what do you believe?" she asked, completely annoyed with me.
"Not much," I replied. "I'm lost in a sea of misinformation."
Our most ferocious squabbles, the ones that left Miss Lovegood absolutely enraged, were the discussions about the existence of certain animals. I readily admitted that new animals were being discovered all the time, but these animals were microbes, or insects, or animals in the ocean depths. I admitted it possible, but declared it unlikely, that large animals were living undiscovered in the plains and forests of Sweden. We finally agreed that I wasn't making fun of her or her father. I was just skeptical.
"Okay," said Miss Lovegood, "you don't want to lie to me about what you believe."
"Well," I said, "you don't want to lie to me about what you believe."
That didn't stop the squabbling, but the arguments weren't going to drive us apart. Later, it dawned on me how much that meant to me. She also told me she preferred 'Luna' to 'Miss Lovegood.'
One week after Luna started kata, I was sitting in the Ravenclaw common room after lunch.
"Um, Hermann?" I heard a female voice say.
It was the girl with oriental features at the sorting feast. I knew her name was Shan Li. Miss Li had learned that Miss Lovegood and I were practicing martial arts, and Miss Li wanted to join us.
"Where's Miss Lovegood?" I asked.
"Luna's in class all afternoon," said Miss Li, "but I'm free."
I went to my room to get my bokken. When I returned to the common room, she was looking at a poster on our bulletin board. The first frame of the poster showed a student standing before the Transfiguration prof, with the student waving his wand as if he were conducting the William Tell Overture in five seconds. The second frame showed an exhausted student, while the prof had turned into a voluptuous babe. The caption was, "Horatio Ravenclaw gets his 'O' in Transfiguration."
"Horatio is a legend, even amongst us Ravenclaws," I informed her.
"I can see that," said Miss Li.
Miss Lovegood had told Miss Li that a bokken was easy to make.
"It was easy for Miss Lovegood," I said.
Miss Li nodded appreciatively.
"Do you really call her 'Miss Lovegood'?" asked Miss Li.
I admitted that I called her 'Luna.'
"Then you can call me 'Shan,'" said Miss Li.
Her school uniform told me Shan was a Hufflepuff Prefect. Shan told me she was seventh year and the sister of Su Li, a sixth year Ravenclaw. I did wonder why a clannish Hufflepuff spent a lot of time with Ravenclaws, but decided Shan would tell me if and when she felt like it. I didn't automatically assume Shan spent time with the Ravenclaws because of her sister, since sisters are often glad to be in different Houses.
In the practice room, I showed Shan the basic grips, the basic moves, and the first part of a kata. It was as I feared. Shan was at least as graceful as Luna. Now I faced two tigresses. Later that evening, Luna took Shan to the copse of trees, and Shan made her bokken. It was a little shorter and a little straighter than mine. Luna later told me that making a bokken was easy for Shan. I put on a brave face and told Luna that was great. Yes, two tigresses.
It's a short step from beating seven shades of shit out of each other to studying together. Shan was going for a NEWT in Charms, and she needed a study partner. Shan wondered if I would be willing to make the sacrifice. I wondered why the Hufflepuff boys were not lined up for this opportunity. Perhaps they thought it would be difficult to study with Shan Li. Hogwarts Charms versus Shan's charms was no contest. Study? What study? I agreed to study with her because there was no graceful way to refuse. I discovered that Shan's brilliance more than made up for my immature lapses of attention.
Shan told me about her NEWT goals. I was impressed. She wanted to know why a Durmstrang student was not in Defense against the Dark Arts. I had to admit that I had tested out of those Hogwarts courses at the end of last summer. She was impressed that I was going for NEWTs in Charms and Potions even though I was only a sixth year. I tried to tell Shan about different curriculums, and I tried to tell her that I wasn't doing much else. Shan wouldn't listen. Shan got it into her head that I was like her. Well, actually I was similar, except in the beauty department. Shan talked about being totally focused on academics. We acknowledged the price for that dedication. We talked about the pressure, about the cost in friends and relationships, and about the unbalanced life. We even touched on the backlash, the times we acted like silly little kids.
This wasn't doing me any good at all. It was bad enough that I was finding Shan attractive. Now I was admiring Shan as a person.
Being Shan's partner in Charms did give us an opportunity to play an aggressive point-gathering game. Flitwick assumed our fencing competition had spilled over into the classroom. There's nothing personal about this, I reminded myself, as Shan scooped me twice in a row. I was too chagrined to appreciate how attractive she was with her winning smile and bright, predatory eyes.
Luna and Shan had learned the first kata and wanted to start on the second. I shuddered. The first kata was simple, with the katana held in what most people regarded as the normal way to hold a sword. 'Yang' was the term used at Durmstrang. 'Yin' was the term we used for the second kata. The katana was held like a dagger with the edge facing out. At first, Durmstang students thought it looked ineffective, but then we learned what a skilled 'yin' swordsman could do. The 'yin' practitioners became the most formidable opponents. Now I was about to demonstrate all this to Luna and Shan, who, quite frankly, scared me.
The fencing was crazy. The three of us went at each other like berserkers, and then we went, "Oh no, I didn't mean to hurt you. Oh, I'm so sorry."
Martial arts practice was okay. Studying and talking together was okay. The amount of time I spent fantasizing about Luna was not okay. I even had the occasional fantasy about Shan.
Why did I have to contend with classy women, whom I could not get out of my mind? I thought about my father, who had become involved with my mother. Was involvement with classy women a family curse passed down through the male Busch line? I would corner my father the next time I saw him. Not warning me about this was parental negligence.
Raving about fantasizing was fun, and raving about a family curse was fun, but I knew deep down that thinking about Luna and Shan kept me from thinking about Padma, which was painful.
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Latest 25 Reviews for The Hermann Chronicles
58 Reviews | 9.28/10 Average
Mmm... lovely and interesting observations being made by Hermann... His perceptions and genteel warmth seem to have affected his hosts--He seems to have evoked a considerate and much appreciated empathy (and perhaps more) within and from Narcissa, in particular... and from within himself for the lady of the Manor. Love the cultural background snippets revealed throughout-- the esoteric Death Eaters' social circle has been infiltrated by a unique 'voice'!
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
Appreciate the comments. The story does try to portray a character with a different point of view.One possibility is that the Malfoys and Durmstrang have been misrepresented in canon. This is the Malfoys at home. And it is the Malfoys without Lucius. After all, Draco is a better scholar than Harry and a better athlete than Hermione. His father is disappointed in him, but his mother supports him. Is Hermann an aristocrat, an artificial personality?
Intriguing, fresh, and unique! A rare gem of a male original character dropped into canon and on his way to Hogwarts--brilliant! "(...) You don't have a House called 'Gottverflucht' do you?"--lol! But poor dear... the day is starting out a bit shakey for him and he is so very critical of himself... Hermann Busch has definitely a tale to tell--looking forward to his chronicles of his life and times at Hogwarts/Great Britain!
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
Hope you enjoy the tale. It is the first story I wrote, and for some reason, I decided to break all the rules: no first person narrative, non-chronological chapters, no transfer students at Hogwarts, no one is as smart as Hermione. Our character is a stranger in a strange land.
It seemed to me that he has asperger's syndrome. I do not regard Hermann as a Casanova. but was hoping he would manage to sleep with more girls. particularly If You could manage an ffmf. loved your first half writing more than the second half no idea why is there a difference but still excellenmy done.
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
Mild autism or cultural differences or socially awkward scientist or forty-year-old women versus sixteen-year-old girls?
ffmf? He keeps thinking the fmf is going to get him killed.
Don't know if there is a difference in writing styles or not since I am too close to the material. The first half has more varied interactions with the girls although I remember the second-half scenes with Pansy and Li Shan.
lol. excellent characterisation. notaAllboring....
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
Thanks. Yes, the first chapter tries to present some of his character and dilemma while at Hogwarts.
My days as a lonely wizard were over.She said, "Do you know Theo Nott?" LOL, this entire story is too good! i love your writing style... it conveys emotion without actually telling you... it's so clever =)
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
Thanks. I tried for a zen no-style, but I don't think I accomplished it.
Response from LoveFenrir (Reviewer)
Are you kidding? You are undoubtedly the master of this style =)
i love your writing style =Dthe first sentence had me literally LOL-ing! my plan was to review every chapter but i'm just getting so carried away with the plotthis hermann guy is such a sexy yet naive player <3 how is this possible? O.O
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
Thanks. This was the second story I wrote, and I tried pushing the boundaries by breaking all the rules and conventions, which makes it difficult to read. For various reasons, Hermann is an outsider and morally conflicted.
Response from LoveFenrir (Reviewer)
Once you get past the confronting writing style, you really start to love it! I'm surprised more readers aren't obsessed with your work =)
I have really enjoyed reading this fic. I particularly loved the good bye to all his friends at the end, it was well written and beautiful.
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
Glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for the kind comments.
Arguing with the sorting hat! How cool!As before, I wonder why you've changed to Padma's POV in the second last paragraph, but otherwise, I like this chapter a lot!
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
Thank you for reviewing. Hermann does not take Hogwarts at face value. The change in point of view was probably not necessary, since most readers could guess what she was thinking, but I’m preparing the reader for some really jarring changes that occur later.
Ooh, I like the romance unfolding between Herman and Narcissa.
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
Thank you for a perceptive review. I tried to write a subtle, growing relationship that neither was consciously aware of.
I think you did a fantastic job of portraying a character with English as his second language. His speech seemed very believable to me, and I think the insertion of the German words lent credibility to it. My only nitpick about this chapter is the three lines where it changes from his point of view. After Hermann and the others had left, Ginny rounded on Hermione, "You could have been a little more unfriendly if you had worked at it.""Ginny," Hermione said quietly, "that shy little boy is probably a Death Eater.""I'm going to board the 'nice looking train,'" said Ginny, walking off in a huff.That doesn't seem to fit to me. Since the story is written as his narritive it seems out of place to mention an exchange he didn't hear. Otherwise, I really enjoyed it. I'm totally intrigued that he knows Draco, Crabbe and Goyle, and I found the opening paragraph very intriguing, particularly the part in which you say a twelve-month period in which I betrayed everyone who came into my life. I'm off to read the next chapter!
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
I appreciate your remarks about the stilted conversation, and I’m glad you found the prologue and first scene intriguing. Thanks for the review. Regarding point of view, I originally had one point of view, but initial readers wanted the views of other characters in some scenes. I resisted at first, but then decided to approach the changing points of view as a writing challenge. The site editors questioned me about it, but decided to allow it since I knew I was doing it and regarded it as a writing challenge. I realize that, no matter how well it is done, it will bother some readers. In chapter 1, I could have used the artifice of Hermann overhearing the conversation, but I decided to ease the reader into the fact that the story was going to do this. In some later scenes, the abrupt change creates an effect would be impossible to achieve by other means. If it helps, I regard fan fiction as an experimental arena. If I’m successful, you will find things in ‘Hermann’ that you will not find anywhere else.
There were many amusing bits in this chapter. I wish there were more ... but I'm not bitter about it.
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
Okay, the chapter kept you anchored and you rode it through to the bitter end. Thanks for the review
What I find interesting is that no matter how much Hermann offends others, he intrrigues them so much that they just can't leave him alone.
I don't find Hermann offensive necessarily, though the way he speaks can oftentimes offend. He is a complex character -- and he is so intriguing as to be addictive. Sort of like my morning coffee, I need a little Hermann.
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
Or … we can invert it and say that the canon character, remaining in canon, can approach him only through his flaws.
Response from notsosaintly (Reviewer)
And, I must add that I am in awe at how thoroughly you have thought through JKR's story, your story and its character. I have to admit, it's more than many do, including myself.
great new chapter! yay for TS Eliot. i'm looking forward to more.
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
Thanks — continued interest by an accomplished writer means a lot. If you like Eliot, there is a parody of ‘Wasteland’ near the end of chapter 8. Part of it is the chapter summary. I hope it’s not carrying on too much to say that there’s one of e. e. cummings (Buffalo Bill) with Luna at self-defense practice in the desolate field.
I just read this story all in one sitting, and I really enjoyed it. The language reminds me of this book I read a few years ago called 'Everything is Illuminated' It's sexy and interesting seeing Hogwarts from an outsider's perspective. continue please!
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
Thank you very much for a great review. I hope you find the rest of the story as interesting.
... And the girl in the library reading this wonderful story shouted rounds of "Bravo!" as their souls were equally satisfied and another excellent chapter came to a close.
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
Glad to be entertaining. The next several chapters are calmer. The plot requires the introduction of a major canon character, and it requires this character remains strictly canon.
All I can say is I think Luna is channeling me. Shan definitely is not. I would never request a sonnet. (I like punishment, but not THAT much punishment.)
Darn it ... now what was that dismembering charm?
Okay. So that wasn't a very mature review, was it? I have an excuse, though ... the vacation has left me in need of a vacation. But this chapter had so many little gems in it. It was either that or I could have sung a stanza of:
Im Hogwarts der ist kein bier.
(Which I understood perfectly of course, being originally from Wisconsin.)
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
The review fits the chapter — Ravenclaws at play. It’s quite funny you consider writing a sonnet crueler than dismemberment.
Oh, that was so funny ... ripping a chapter out of the Malfoy book to say he they had a wider range of acceptable behavior!
Hermann's escapades were well written. I particularly enjoyed the verbal part of the stimulation. While he still has many things to learn, he is certainly learning a few things quite well.
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
I thought I had written the raunchiest scene this side of consensual. The site editor snickered over it, and you found it titillating. Tough crowd.
I love the introduction of the kata and the two girls going through the routines and fencing with him. It gives Hermann something more to think about, doesn't it?
I wonder if I've said this before in another review... I think the episodic approach is what keeps this story interesting. Every chapter there is something new. And I really like that.
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
I almost prefaced the chapter with Tyger, Tyger, burning bright In the forests of the night Hermann is not wrong about those two. I still remember blocking out the vignettes as they occurred to me, arranging and rearranging them on the timeline, and working at getting them to come together.
I must say that Hermann is quite in touch with his feelings. I suppose in more ways than one. (I was specificially talking about how he is so in tune with his anger, but I see that it could be interpreted another way as well.) I think Hermann is wise to take advantage of an opportunity when he's presented with one, but the poor boy certainly needs a witch with more ... verve.
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
I appreciate your continued interest. Yes, you have summed up the points of the chapter: his dealing with his raging emotions, his moral quandary, and his feelings of inadequacy.
Well, it seems that Hermann is getting used to conversing with girls. Honestly, he was mis-housed. He is a true Slytherin. But, I do agree that he has the intelligence to rival the most-intelligent Ravenclaw.
I have become addicted to this story, I hope you are aware.
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
Yes, that Slytherin-Ravenclaw mix is the main point of the chapter. It's not much of a spoiler to say that it's important for the story.Hermann is marginally better with the girls.I notice you can review without giving away the contents. Very clever. Is that a Slytherin trait?
Response from notsosaintly (Reviewer)
Every time I put on that darn hat, it tosses me into Slytherin. I'm not disappointed. *wink*
There are many readers who read reviews first, which can be like reading the last page of a novel first if reviewers aren't careful. I intentionally try not to give away any spoilers.
I was happy to see a longer chapter. Not only does it give us more insight into the Malfoy family relationship, it gives us more insight into Hermann. Your style of writing also lends a hand to the character development. The more I read, the more I like this story, Fairfield! Keep up the excellent work!
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
I’m glad you liked the chapter, and I thank you for the encouragement. Later sections, however, may disappoint you. If I recall correctly, the order of importance for the ancient Greeks was (1) plot, (2) ideas, (3) character, and (4) diction. I tried a mix. [Yes. I read Aristotle’s ‘Poetics,’ became inspired, and wrote a fanfic.]
Response from notsosaintly (Reviewer)
I am rarely disappointed. I understand that some chapters may develop plot while others develop character or other things. I am a patient girl.
I believe you are the only person I've met who got inspired to write fanfic after reading Aristotle. My goodness. Maybe it's what makes your writing so interesting to me. It could be what gives it that unique flavor.
I kinda hate to see it end. This was really a fun story to read. You gave Hermann such interesting adventures/encounters with Hogwarts as a backdrop. It was nice to see a different perspective--even if it was from an adolescent who was somewhat a Casanova.
And even though Hermann was made up completely, the other "normal" characters were fairly believable. (I hate it when someone writes a story about Harry--or one of the trio--and makes it look like a 16-year old is directing adults and that the adults are just meekly doing what he says.) In short, I think you've done a fine job of writing.
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
Thank you for the perceptive review and kind comments.
The story is finished, and everyone who is going to read it has read it. No reason to worry about spoilers.
Please, tell your friends about the story. Lucius is available. Narcissa does not regard setting a large snake on a student body containing her son as good parenting.
Adult Brit wizard society appears weak in the novels—probably to emphasize Harry’s heroism. Hermann, however, observes Brit wizard society is weak, reasons that Harry is not a social reformer and cannot act beyond society, concludes that Harry will be ineffective or detrimental, and decides to take independent action.
Canon Hermione spouts canon. Since Hermann believes canon is nonsense, he thinks she’s a nutter, and Hermione is left a lonely swot.
Such a beautiful good-bye to all his friends. I felt sort of sad that he was so alone in the end ... but all good things must come to an end, mustn't they?
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
My regards to The Petulant Poetess, the only fan fiction site with the courage and tolerance to publish ‘The Hermann Chronicles.’
Response from notsosaintly (Reviewer)
And you are more than welcome here. I enjoyed the uniqueness of this story and the uniqueness of your style. Thank you, Fairfield, for posting!!
I've been reading this story and find it really funny--and often hot.
There are stories where some of the characters are out of character, but the author won't recognize it. You've done a wonderful job of creating out-of-canon situations and characters--and acknowledging it. Thanks for providing such fun!
I should probably have reviewed more often, but I smile every time I read your work.
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
Thank you for a perceptive and sympathetic review. Most of the characters are original or minor (who may as well be original). I tried a transformation of Draco. Instead of reacting to Harry, I gave him an independent existence with a supportive mother, a peer as a friend, Quidditch, Potions, and girlfriends. I tried to keep Hermione in canon. Her interactions with Hermann are a clash of personalities and cultures.
Response from janis (Reviewer)
I noticed your transformation of Draco. I have a friend who would have been angry at your sympathetic portrayal of Narcissa--mostly because she fancies Lucius--but it was quite nice to see more about Draco and less about Harry for once. Don't get me wrong, Harry is still the hero in my eyes, but since JKR's stories are basically told from Harry's perspective, it's refreshing to have Draco as a more complex character.
I think you did a good job of keeping Hermione in canon. You made her a swot, had a little competition going (completely believable) and also showed her as being quite logical.
I'm sorry to see the story end, but you're probably right to conclude it the way you have with the next chapter.
--Janis
A magical little interlude ... leaves me wondering where they teach Medieval sex charms. Those are quite useful.
Response from Fairfield (Author of The Hermann Chronicles)
They are quite useful if you’re as capable as Janice Nott … of course you are … just mentioning it. Thanks for the review.