Yes, Galland is atrocious.  The characters are gathering, forming into groups, and squaring off.

Thanks.  While writing this I kept thinking the Biff-editor vehicle had no life left in it, and it is true that the original 'Story with No Plot' is wilder, but we will see what happens.

While writing this chapter, the main concern was that no reader would be interested in this pairs' insecurities, false starts, and clumsy connecting even though there seemed to be no other way of depicting this couple.  Acquaintances also remark that this style is demanding of the reader.  Hence, your comments are very welcome.There are hints even in canon that, despite appearances, these two have strong feelings looking for the proper channel.

Imho, it is exactly 'this pairs insecurities, false starts, and clumsy connecting' that caused me to have a kinesthetic experience as a reader, fully engaged and experiencing them/the writing-- like a lighting bolt, kept me zapped in, moment to moment--I guess in my long-winded way, I'm trying to say this is what has brought them to life in such a profound way to me as a reader--their insecurities and false starts are so very *real* and universal, and because it is Luna and Draco, who are rarely ever written in this light, it is all the more profound... and wonderful. Truly wonderful reading experience. Again, for me, this style keeps me on my toes, edge of my seat, as a reader--which I personally appreciate and enjoy that you as a writer can evoke such a reaction--*demanding* can be a good thing--lol! --in the sense that I feel it's in human nature to be challenged and stimulated, especially in the arts, thus, again, your artistic writing style. Absolutely agree about your observations in canon about these two. Again, from the peanut gallery, I'm looking forward to more of your *demanding* style if you so wish to create/write it that way... or any other way!

Glad you like the chapter.  A dainty haiku from Miss Lotus Blossom.  After a fling (aka PWP), Pansy may be reverting to type.  Theo is thinking, "Omigod!  She's adorable.  Omigod!"  Hermione has never been one to clamp down on her anger.  The raids - stealing money the government wants to confiscate - moral ambiguity reaches a new plateau. 

Thanks for all the comments.  The Adolf-Hermione thing appears to be sneaking up on both of them.  What will being in a class of her own, her isolation, cause her to do?  Draco and Luna are constantly overcoming obstacles.

Somethinjg ferocious, that's for sure.  Is Luna the infallible outsider she once was?

The raid will uncover a suprise.  Heartbreak for Hermione may not be from romance.

We will have to see if it eats the plot - whatever that might be after Biff and the editor make their contributions. 

The god of short sentences may be an over-worked, minor deity.  We'll see if Pansy can both stay in character and be a character reader's can identify with. 

If I understand the review, you are asking if different groups will go after the entity and get in each others way.  Biff and the editor have written such stories.  Will they do it again or try something new?

The editor, no doubt, is a budding fan-fiction site administrator.  It's hard to say how much of Pansy's musings are wishful thinking.

A budding fan-fiction administrator--absolutely! Poor dear--lol! Looking forward to whichever way Pansy's musings go... or not!